No, the doggy comet MUST happen, that is not negotiable. Maybe they can take out a paladin or two before they notice the 1st barrier being broken. You can have Roman insinuate that he's worked with the Schnee company before. Nora already has the grenade launcher, giving her a weapon like that now will diminish the revelation of her semblance later.
>Replacing Velvet's Hologram Camera cloning weapon with a generic grenade launcher with Not Dust Ammo Eeeh Like I get the point of the series is trying to "make it work" and we've really been dialing back how powerful the characters are to make the Grimm a real threat, but skewering the rule of cool anime stuff that was actually foreshadowed during the volume itself to try and give Velvet what little characterization they even deigned her in the actual series with the quirk about photographing people- implying both a hobby in photography and weapon nerdery she could have potentially lead to her getting along even more with Ruby, for something "More effective" in the form of BIG GUN seems kinda...bland.
If it was still a hologram type weapon I'd be like that would be cool or at least have it so she switches weapons a lot because she's very talented at multi tasking and learning how to use more weapons etc etc
Not gonna lie, not a fan of Yang punching the lieutenant into his certain death instead of back into the ground which would very likely shatter his aura after everything that's happened to him. It feels very out of character for Yang to just...purposefully kill a guy, even if she's pissed off. And the idea of changing Velvet's weapon to a grenade launcher feels real redundant since we have Nora already. If not for Velvet straight up copying other character's animations, then her weapon could've had a lot more potential, like comboing with the original user while using her own style of combat with the weapon, or even using weapons from people from other teams to combo with them. Say, if she copied Qrow's weird scythe and found a way to make it work while comboed with Ruby or Yang. Honestly I guess I just don't like the idea of her weapon being a grenade launcher.
Velvet's weapon should never ever change, it's too good. if it changes, i want her to create stuff from any kind of dust, such as Simon's jacket from Mark Zhang's Team SLVR trailer(s)
Must say I was very happy seeing you giving attention to characters with smaller rolls especially Cardin since I was been interested him personally. It really shows you want to use the full cast to its full potential! 👍
14:02 For me it's more like Archer's/Shirou's Trace-On, from the Fate Series. In fact, when that scene happened on RWBY proper, i just said "Trace-On" to myself.
I can't wait for how you handle vol 3. Honestly, I get kinda bored by tournament arcs, but hopefully you'll be able to keep it interesting. Best of luck!
I actually quite like the darker themes you're adding in early on. Personally I've always found it a mistake on Rooster Teeth's end that they didn't introduce the darker elements till the very end of Volume 3-as 3 real world years had passed with very little hints of anything till then. I personally like darker stories but to go so long with everyone thinking it was a lighter story was rather irresponsible-little kids, less dark-story inclined viewers, casual watchers-to get invested in a story only for it to suddenly change so drastically can off-put a lot of people. I find it especially worse since Rooster Teeth's notice that the show was no longer PG was done in a 'Sorry! It't actually dark :P ' kind of way- it was as if they didn't care that some people felt deceived. If a darker story was the goal they had to introduce those elements from the start or at the very least early on, no glossing things over till the Fall of Becan. You and Fatman's rewrite of the story has fixed a ton of those issues however, as well as plot-points and characters I initially disliked. Keep up the great work!
that scooby doo joke art was nice. Edit: if i had a nickel for everytime a female character has a grenade launcher i would have 2 nickels, which isnt a lot but its weird it happened twice
12:53 I personally find it ridiculous how the lieutenant could be strong enough to not only take on, but overpower multiple Adult huntsmen backed up by several powerful students at once.
18>I'm a little torn as to Ruby being the one to tell the team that they have to leave Yang behind. I'd personally prefer it to be Blake so that Ruby can actually show that she cares for her sister by worrying for her and to show that Blake still cares about taking down the White Fang. 19-20>I'm pretty sure you meant to say 40 minute super episode, not 20. Then again I'm not sure how well 40 minutes of fighting would be paced and how much it might drag. 19-20>You could always just keep Neptune around for S4/5, there's no reason you have to remove him. The only reason only Sun stayed around for V4/5 was because of shipping and I was under the impression that you were going to keep there relationship as platonic. 19-20>I like what you did with CRDL and SSSN not getting along and sort of wanting to one up each other, ironically enough this inspired me to make them sparing partners which turned them into friends. 19-20>*Through tears* "Come at me you dirty animals". 19-20>I was under the impression for a while that the Liutenant went rouge from the White Fang because he went from terrorism to straight up trying to kill a whole city. Why exactly is Adam trying to kill one of the four safest cities on the planet?
it makes more sense for ruby to do so cause ruby knows what yang's capable of. It's the same vein as when she calmed them down and explained her semblabce , I mean raymond expresses here that none of them want to but if anyone knows how strong yang is it's her sister.
@@sokumotanaka9271 Ruby would know most accurately what Yang's capable of but none of them know what Neo is fully capable of, hell Yang even loses the fight. They only fought her once before and it was a 2v4 (2 who were exhausted) that ended in the 2 running away because of Penny. Emotionally speaking it'd make the most sense for Ruby and Blake to be the most worried since they're her sister and partner respectively so if anything Weiss would be the most likely to pull them away. I chose Blake over Weiss however because if Weiss were to edge them forward she'd look cold and it'd be more interesting to see the one who'd be most worried about Yang also be the one to tell them to leave her.
@@abezevlag7337 I disagree, before vol 5 it wasn't expressed that blake had romantic feelings for her, it's literally in vol 3 where she's skeptical of yang "I want to believe you." but then she recounts how similar is is to adam. The problem is as a sereis and a story this fix gives way more characterization and it makes sense while blake and weiss are trying to crack the door open worried; While ruby the naive optimist plays her role and her age would make this more apparent (especially if you keep up with the rewrite) that while not knowing neo (none of them do you're right which is why they leave with *visually uncomfortable looks* ) Ruby would be the one who would recount that her sister knows how to handle herself moreso than anyone else and would despite being wrong believe that her sister if anyone would be able to handle it. This is what we call a character flaw and it makes more sense with her than someone else. the rewrite is fine and it's better than the nothing we got in canon.
@@sokumotanaka9271 You misunderstand, I fucking hate Yellowjacket. When I said "partner" I didn't mean it romantically, I meant it in the sense that on the team they're partners so would know each other better. This is literally the last episode of the rewrite and I've commented on every rerelease of this series, how would I not be caught up? Ruby would be the most accurate at gauging how good Yang is at fighting but that doesn't mean she'd be the most likely one to speak first. A bigger character flaw would be for Ruby to not bring it up (or bringing it up after someone else makes them leave), this would both show that she's not a perfect leader and that Weiss or Blake also have the leadership quality of pushing the team forward. Yeah I know the rewrite is better than the show, I've said multiple times on this channel that it's the best rewrite of the show I've seen. Nothing I said implied I thought it was a worse product. If Blake edges them forward it also gives her the character flaw of prioritizing taking down the Lieutenant over helping Yang. This reflects Blake's earlier decision to prioritize taking down the White Fang over living her life. The reason it's a character flaw is because it can be seen as character regression and it has the consequence of Yang getting the snot kicked out of her. If Ruby were to do it then she'd of just been wrong which isn't really a character flaw but just a part of being human.
I can't wait for volume three. I must greatly applaud you actually bringing up actions of the SDC that affect other characters. I mean for almost the entire show we hear about how bad the company is but we never see it nor do any other characters besides Blake talk about the company once. It's nice to know or I highly recommend that in future rewrites, you focus on this to further develop Weiss's character
Interesting… if you could do me a favor and check the original release of Fixing Volume 2….. and then check when they released the information concerning Velvet’s semblance… I’d be very appreciative.
I actually enjoy the darker elements you added. Something I feel like V3 doesn't get enough credit for is the two character deaths. They're huntsmen, all of them. Their line of work is not safe and people WILL die. If someone as talented, goodhearted, and prominent (as in being a main character) as Pyrrha isn't immune to the consequences of being a huntress, then what about our main characters? A problem with shows like this is that the main characters are effectively untouchable and this ruins the stakes because "they wouldn't kill her. She's a main character!" Having Pyrrha die meant that any one of the cast could die too. Theeeen V5 happened and ruined that whole idea completely by establishing that plot armor only works on RWBY.
Wait wait you are telling me The lieutenant can fend off 5-6 people two of which are trained huntsman gets beaten by four teenage girls and a ribbon ? All of which are tired from combat ?
I just remembered that the end of V2, when we see Raven, is never brought up, mentioned, or even relevant again. So it could easily be written that Yang meeting Raven at the end of V2 was just a dream. Yang probably saw Qrow's picture of STRQ at one point and remembered Raven had black hair and red eyes but couldn't remember much else. As a result, her dream recreated Raven in her own image. This explanation also works well with the mirror symbolism.
I just realized that Yang got knocked out (all her Aura was depleted) and that she then went on to survive the train crashing as well as having enough aura in her to land the finishing blow on the Lieutenant. You also said she's awfully bruised which might imply she fought against the Grimm. How quickly does Aura regenerate?
Uh.... Uh... Hey, look over there! Ruby is hugging Penny! *Flees into the distance* No, but for real, that is an oversight on my side, but the crash wouldn't necessarily kill someone outright. She'd probably be pretty banged up during the following fight though and have to take a back seat to everything going down. But yeah, that's something I did not catch, sorry about that.
@@CelticPhoenix I’ll admit that comment was before I saw you mention it in the volume 3 response video and while I understand your choice more, I still prefer the holo copy weapon more as it shows velvet isn’t “a dumb Faunus” as the holo weapon would take far more intelligence to build and program than the mortar cross bow. Plus you could alter to holo weapon to be able to use other dust types besides just hard light
@@CelticPhoenix her weapons is the first to utilize hard light dust in the manner its used and matches up with her semblance which makes her a super-powered version of comic taskmaster.
I think that removing fun moments and style stuff in favor of making the Grimm overall isn't really the best way to go about this. I think the Grimm just need to have a more defined ranking system. An example of how it could be done: Level 1: Newborn Grimm like the Beowulfs Ruby fights in her trailer. Strong enough that ordinary humans cannot do anything about them but someone with an unlocked aura could deal with one or two and someone talented or well trained like Ruby could fight a larger number. These exclusively travel in packs. They can only really threaten a real Huntsman through overwhelming with truly massive numbers or delaying them until something bigger shows up. Still these are arguably the most dangerous to humanity overall since they will be drawn to hunt down those who run from the attacks of older, more solitary Grimm. If not constantly dealt with, these are the Grimm that make settlements disappear over night. Level 2: Older and stronger Grimm like the Ursa Minor. These are Grimm that are a challenge for huntsman students individually and a nightmare if they are the kind that still move in packs. It is an impressive showing for a single student like Yang to take on 2-3 such Grimm alone, but in any larger numbers and even entire teams of huntsman students or a lone adult Huntsman, would need to focus on opening up a tactical retreat rather than trying to fight them all without a strategy. Level 3: Boss Grimm like the Nevermore and Ursa Major. These Grimm are each individually as dangerous as an entire pack of of Level 2 Grimm, with even proffessional huntsmen needing to aproach them strategically or in a group to ensure victory and students needing to do both to have a chance. Thankfully all Grimm at this level act alone and under normal conditions you would never have to deal with more than 1. Level 4: These are incredibly old and powerful Grimm that require an entire team of expirienced huntsmen acting strategically to have a chance. Thankfully these tend not to be as interested in humans, though every couple of years one does become a threat. This is the reason that the academies emphasize teaching teamwork and are considered the ultimate challenge that a huntsman might normally expect to face. Level 5+: These are truly ancient and powerful entities capable of threatening entire nations. The Huntsmen teams through history that have managed to deal with such threats have become immortalized as legends. Honestly there should be figures from such teams mentioned in the show. We don't need to explain all of this immediately, but the show and your rewrite provide plently of examples where people just mentioning the level of the Grimm would give the audience a general feel of the levels. Then we get to keep our cake and eat it too, as the existence of level 3-5 Grimm is an ominous presence that shows that the Grimm are a force to be feared, while also having level 1 and 2 Grimm that can be styled on to keep the really fun moments of combat.
NGL been really enjoying this “fix-it” but the random lieutenant just overpowering like 6 people (two of which are grown huntsmen) feels a little over the top. Like when you run into a mini boss who is stronger than the boss
I’m not sure if this version really fixed Volume 2. There were some times where it was better, and sometimes where it was worse, so it kind of evens out to just being as good as the original, not better. I like how you teased Roman’s backstory that I’m assuming we get next volume considering he dies in the original Volume 3. I also liked how you removed the original after credits scene because it completely got forgotten by the writers. I also loved how Cinder’s try-hard attitude was toned down. I didn’t like how you changed Velvet’s weapon to be a boring version of Nora’s. This is small, but I wish you included Jaune getting excited over Team SSSN becoming Junior Detectives. I also found it a bit jarring that Yang basically killed the Lieutenant. Not sure if you’re including the scene of Yang and Blake killing Adam, but Yang and Blake killing Adam feels more heavy in the original show because that is their first kill. I feel like Yang punching him into the ground would’ve been enough to immobilize him and arrest him. I am excited for Volume 3 though!
??? Yang are just okey with killing a man like that? Not even a look of sorrow? That it had to come to this or something like that from team rwby? Then they just got the lieutenant killed? I don’t imagen them beting used to sending people to their deaths even though it may seamed like it was the only way to defeat him ( he could had been just slamed into the ground and get arrested?right? Or am I mässing something?) don’t get me wrong I really liked how y handled the writhing of all of this, (I actually really love your rewrites on rwby and I really like your content☺️💕) but that just feelt velart qrong to me, but maybe I missed something or it Will come up later Idk, bye have a great day 😊👋🏽
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Wholesome Weiss GF 😊
I've always hated Ooblek's weapon for 1 reason - it doesn't take advantage of his insane speed the way a blade or chain would.
Should be a glaive on one end, spear on the other to make use of the different uses of his speed.
No, the doggy comet MUST happen, that is not negotiable. Maybe they can take out a paladin or two before they notice the 1st barrier being broken.
You can have Roman insinuate that he's worked with the Schnee company before.
Nora already has the grenade launcher, giving her a weapon like that now will diminish the revelation of her semblance later.
>Replacing Velvet's Hologram Camera cloning weapon with a generic grenade launcher with Not Dust Ammo
Eeeh
Like I get the point of the series is trying to "make it work" and we've really been dialing back how powerful the characters are to make the Grimm a real threat, but skewering the rule of cool anime stuff that was actually foreshadowed during the volume itself to try and give Velvet what little characterization they even deigned her in the actual series with the quirk about photographing people- implying both a hobby in photography and weapon nerdery she could have potentially lead to her getting along even more with Ruby, for something "More effective" in the form of BIG GUN seems kinda...bland.
If it was still a hologram type weapon I'd be like that would be cool or at least have it so she switches weapons a lot because she's very talented at multi tasking and learning how to use more weapons etc etc
Yeah, i thought so too. Switching up her Ctrl C with a War Machine from CoD was kinda lame.
Not gonna lie, not a fan of Yang punching the lieutenant into his certain death instead of back into the ground which would very likely shatter his aura after everything that's happened to him. It feels very out of character for Yang to just...purposefully kill a guy, even if she's pissed off.
And the idea of changing Velvet's weapon to a grenade launcher feels real redundant since we have Nora already. If not for Velvet straight up copying other character's animations, then her weapon could've had a lot more potential, like comboing with the original user while using her own style of combat with the weapon, or even using weapons from people from other teams to combo with them. Say, if she copied Qrow's weird scythe and found a way to make it work while comboed with Ruby or Yang.
Honestly I guess I just don't like the idea of her weapon being a grenade launcher.
Velvet's weapon should never ever change, it's too good. if it changes, i want her to create stuff from any kind of dust, such as Simon's jacket from Mark Zhang's Team SLVR trailer(s)
Must say I was very happy seeing you giving attention to characters with smaller rolls especially Cardin since I was been interested him personally.
It really shows you want to use the full cast to its full potential! 👍
14:02
For me it's more like Archer's/Shirou's Trace-On, from the Fate Series. In fact, when that scene happened on RWBY proper, i just said "Trace-On" to myself.
I can't wait for how you handle vol 3. Honestly, I get kinda bored by tournament arcs, but hopefully you'll be able to keep it interesting. Best of luck!
I actually quite like the darker themes you're adding in early on. Personally I've always found it a mistake on Rooster Teeth's end that they didn't introduce the darker elements till the very end of Volume 3-as 3 real world years had passed with very little hints of anything till then. I personally like darker stories but to go so long with everyone thinking it was a lighter story was rather irresponsible-little kids, less dark-story inclined viewers, casual watchers-to get invested in a story only for it to suddenly change so drastically can off-put a lot of people. I find it especially worse since Rooster Teeth's notice that the show was no longer PG was done in a 'Sorry! It't actually dark :P ' kind of way- it was as if they didn't care that some people felt deceived. If a darker story was the goal they had to introduce those elements from the start or at the very least early on, no glossing things over till the Fall of Becan.
You and Fatman's rewrite of the story has fixed a ton of those issues however, as well as plot-points and characters I initially disliked. Keep up the great work!
that scooby doo joke art was nice.
Edit: if i had a nickel for everytime a female character has a grenade launcher i would have 2 nickels, which isnt a lot but its weird it happened twice
12:53 I personally find it ridiculous how the lieutenant could be strong enough to not only take on, but overpower multiple Adult huntsmen backed up by several powerful students at once.
18>I'm a little torn as to Ruby being the one to tell the team that they have to leave Yang behind. I'd personally prefer it to be Blake so that Ruby can actually show that she cares for her sister by worrying for her and to show that Blake still cares about taking down the White Fang.
19-20>I'm pretty sure you meant to say 40 minute super episode, not 20. Then again I'm not sure how well 40 minutes of fighting would be paced and how much it might drag.
19-20>You could always just keep Neptune around for S4/5, there's no reason you have to remove him. The only reason only Sun stayed around for V4/5 was because of shipping and I was under the impression that you were going to keep there relationship as platonic.
19-20>I like what you did with CRDL and SSSN not getting along and sort of wanting to one up each other, ironically enough this inspired me to make them sparing partners which turned them into friends.
19-20>*Through tears* "Come at me you dirty animals".
19-20>I was under the impression for a while that the Liutenant went rouge from the White Fang because he went from terrorism to straight up trying to kill a whole city. Why exactly is Adam trying to kill one of the four safest cities on the planet?
it makes more sense for ruby to do so cause ruby knows what yang's capable of.
It's the same vein as when she calmed them down and explained her semblabce , I mean raymond expresses here that none of them want to but if anyone knows how strong yang is it's her sister.
@@sokumotanaka9271 Ruby would know most accurately what Yang's capable of but none of them know what Neo is fully capable of, hell Yang even loses the fight. They only fought her once before and it was a 2v4 (2 who were exhausted) that ended in the 2 running away because of Penny. Emotionally speaking it'd make the most sense for Ruby and Blake to be the most worried since they're her sister and partner respectively so if anything Weiss would be the most likely to pull them away. I chose Blake over Weiss however because if Weiss were to edge them forward she'd look cold and it'd be more interesting to see the one who'd be most worried about Yang also be the one to tell them to leave her.
@@abezevlag7337 I disagree, before vol 5 it wasn't expressed that blake had romantic feelings for her, it's literally in vol 3 where she's skeptical of yang "I want to believe you." but then she recounts how similar is is to adam.
The problem is as a sereis and a story this fix gives way more characterization and it makes sense while blake and weiss are trying to crack the door open worried; While ruby the naive optimist plays her role and her age would make this more apparent (especially if you keep up with the rewrite) that while not knowing neo (none of them do you're right which is why they leave with *visually uncomfortable looks* ) Ruby would be the one who would recount that her sister knows how to handle herself moreso than anyone else and would despite being wrong believe that her sister if anyone would be able to handle it. This is what we call a character flaw and it makes more sense with her than someone else.
the rewrite is fine and it's better than the nothing we got in canon.
Yeah it makes more sense for ruby to say it now that I think about it.
@@sokumotanaka9271 You misunderstand, I fucking hate Yellowjacket. When I said "partner" I didn't mean it romantically, I meant it in the sense that on the team they're partners so would know each other better.
This is literally the last episode of the rewrite and I've commented on every rerelease of this series, how would I not be caught up?
Ruby would be the most accurate at gauging how good Yang is at fighting but that doesn't mean she'd be the most likely one to speak first. A bigger character flaw would be for Ruby to not bring it up (or bringing it up after someone else makes them leave), this would both show that she's not a perfect leader and that Weiss or Blake also have the leadership quality of pushing the team forward.
Yeah I know the rewrite is better than the show, I've said multiple times on this channel that it's the best rewrite of the show I've seen. Nothing I said implied I thought it was a worse product.
If Blake edges them forward it also gives her the character flaw of prioritizing taking down the Lieutenant over helping Yang. This reflects Blake's earlier decision to prioritize taking down the White Fang over living her life. The reason it's a character flaw is because it can be seen as character regression and it has the consequence of Yang getting the snot kicked out of her. If Ruby were to do it then she'd of just been wrong which isn't really a character flaw but just a part of being human.
I can't wait for volume three. I must greatly applaud you actually bringing up actions of the SDC that affect other characters. I mean for almost the entire show we hear about how bad the company is but we never see it nor do any other characters besides Blake talk about the company once. It's nice to know or I highly recommend that in future rewrites, you focus on this to further develop Weiss's character
Velvet's weapon makes perfect use of her semblance. Frankly, your replacement couldn't be any less creative.
Interesting… if you could do me a favor and check the original release of Fixing Volume 2….. and then check when they released the information concerning Velvet’s semblance… I’d be very appreciative.
@@CelticPhoenix Can't find the info's release date, sorry. Also, I would've used grim imitating robots for the Beacon initiation instead of animals.
I actually enjoy the darker elements you added. Something I feel like V3 doesn't get enough credit for is the two character deaths. They're huntsmen, all of them. Their line of work is not safe and people WILL die. If someone as talented, goodhearted, and prominent (as in being a main character) as Pyrrha isn't immune to the consequences of being a huntress, then what about our main characters? A problem with shows like this is that the main characters are effectively untouchable and this ruins the stakes because "they wouldn't kill her. She's a main character!" Having Pyrrha die meant that any one of the cast could die too.
Theeeen V5 happened and ruined that whole idea completely by establishing that plot armor only works on RWBY.
glad to say your labour definatley paid off, ilove watching this seireis
Wait wait you are telling me The lieutenant can fend off 5-6 people two of which are trained huntsman gets beaten by four teenage girls and a ribbon ? All of which are tired from combat ?
When can we expect the Volume 3 Rewrite to be uploaded?
Volume 3. The hype is real.
18:50 ...He knows too much...
I just remembered that the end of V2, when we see Raven, is never brought up, mentioned, or even relevant again. So it could easily be written that Yang meeting Raven at the end of V2 was just a dream. Yang probably saw Qrow's picture of STRQ at one point and remembered Raven had black hair and red eyes but couldn't remember much else. As a result, her dream recreated Raven in her own image. This explanation also works well with the mirror symbolism.
I just realized that Yang got knocked out (all her Aura was depleted) and that she then went on to survive the train crashing as well as having enough aura in her to land the finishing blow on the Lieutenant. You also said she's awfully bruised which might imply she fought against the Grimm. How quickly does Aura regenerate?
Uh.... Uh... Hey, look over there! Ruby is hugging Penny!
*Flees into the distance*
No, but for real, that is an oversight on my side, but the crash wouldn't necessarily kill someone outright. She'd probably be pretty banged up during the following fight though and have to take a back seat to everything going down. But yeah, that's something I did not catch, sorry about that.
@@CelticPhoenix You accidently made Part 5 public in the [Long Form] playlist D:
Yeah, I'm glad one of my twitter followers said that, because I didn't get any alerts about it. Why are unlisted videos available in playlists?!
I cant unimagine Sun driving warthog while Neptune is an a gunner place
Very bad idea to change velvets weapon to a basic grenade launcher
Why?
@@CelticPhoenix I’ll admit that comment was before I saw you mention it in the volume 3 response video and while I understand your choice more, I still prefer the holo copy weapon more as it shows velvet isn’t “a dumb Faunus” as the holo weapon would take far more intelligence to build and program than the mortar cross bow. Plus you could alter to holo weapon to be able to use other dust types besides just hard light
@@CelticPhoenix her weapons is the first to utilize hard light dust in the manner its used and matches up with her semblance which makes her a super-powered version of comic taskmaster.
NGL "being Charade" was cooler. I liked that it interacted with photography. A sad loss
I think that removing fun moments and style stuff in favor of making the Grimm overall isn't really the best way to go about this. I think the Grimm just need to have a more defined ranking system. An example of how it could be done:
Level 1: Newborn Grimm like the Beowulfs Ruby fights in her trailer. Strong enough that ordinary humans cannot do anything about them but someone with an unlocked aura could deal with one or two and someone talented or well trained like Ruby could fight a larger number. These exclusively travel in packs. They can only really threaten a real Huntsman through overwhelming with truly massive numbers or delaying them until something bigger shows up. Still these are arguably the most dangerous to humanity overall since they will be drawn to hunt down those who run from the attacks of older, more solitary Grimm. If not constantly dealt with, these are the Grimm that make settlements disappear over night.
Level 2: Older and stronger Grimm like the Ursa Minor. These are Grimm that are a challenge for huntsman students individually and a nightmare if they are the kind that still move in packs. It is an impressive showing for a single student like Yang to take on 2-3 such Grimm alone, but in any larger numbers and even entire teams of huntsman students or a lone adult Huntsman, would need to focus on opening up a tactical retreat rather than trying to fight them all without a strategy.
Level 3: Boss Grimm like the Nevermore and Ursa Major. These Grimm are each individually as dangerous as an entire pack of of Level 2 Grimm, with even proffessional huntsmen needing to aproach them strategically or in a group to ensure victory and students needing to do both to have a chance. Thankfully all Grimm at this level act alone and under normal conditions you would never have to deal with more than 1.
Level 4: These are incredibly old and powerful Grimm that require an entire team of expirienced huntsmen acting strategically to have a chance. Thankfully these tend not to be as interested in humans, though every couple of years one does become a threat. This is the reason that the academies emphasize teaching teamwork and are considered the ultimate challenge that a huntsman might normally expect to face.
Level 5+: These are truly ancient and powerful entities capable of threatening entire nations. The Huntsmen teams through history that have managed to deal with such threats have become immortalized as legends. Honestly there should be figures from such teams mentioned in the show.
We don't need to explain all of this immediately, but the show and your rewrite provide plently of examples where people just mentioning the level of the Grimm would give the audience a general feel of the levels. Then we get to keep our cake and eat it too, as the existence of level 3-5 Grimm is an ominous presence that shows that the Grimm are a force to be feared, while also having level 1 and 2 Grimm that can be styled on to keep the really fun moments of combat.
NGL been really enjoying this “fix-it” but the random lieutenant just overpowering like 6 people (two of which are grown huntsmen) feels a little over the top.
Like when you run into a mini boss who is stronger than the boss
I’m not sure if this version really fixed Volume 2. There were some times where it was better, and sometimes where it was worse, so it kind of evens out to just being as good as the original, not better.
I like how you teased Roman’s backstory that I’m assuming we get next volume considering he dies in the original Volume 3. I also liked how you removed the original after credits scene because it completely got forgotten by the writers. I also loved how Cinder’s try-hard attitude was toned down.
I didn’t like how you changed Velvet’s weapon to be a boring version of Nora’s. This is small, but I wish you included Jaune getting excited over Team SSSN becoming Junior Detectives. I also found it a bit jarring that Yang basically killed the Lieutenant. Not sure if you’re including the scene of Yang and Blake killing Adam, but Yang and Blake killing Adam feels more heavy in the original show because that is their first kill. I feel like Yang punching him into the ground would’ve been enough to immobilize him and arrest him.
I am excited for Volume 3 though!
LOL. That hesitancy about giving more characterization to characters you know are going to be tossed aside soon.
The bartering ram compartment is the Buster Sword from FF7? Lol
Celtic Phoenix
Are you going to fix volumes 6 , 7 and 8
Why no doggy cannon? It doesn't break anything in the setting or lore and is so fun.
Well she has a glock so it's not exactly impressive to have a spare mag lying around.
Thank you for letting zwei be funny and do something useful without the dog punt - I dunno I think it’s funnier when it’s not an adult punting a dog
Is that the halo theme
Velvet weapon is lame, give her the Control C back!
??? Yang are just okey with killing a man like that? Not even a look of sorrow? That it had to come to this or something like that from team rwby? Then they just got the lieutenant killed? I don’t imagen them beting used to sending people to their deaths even though it may seamed like it was the only way to defeat him ( he could had been just slamed into the ground and get arrested?right? Or am I mässing something?) don’t get me wrong I really liked how y handled the writhing of all of this, (I actually really love your rewrites on rwby and I really like your content☺️💕) but that just feelt velart qrong to me, but maybe I missed something or it Will come up later Idk, bye have a great day 😊👋🏽
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Just one question. WHERE'S THE RAVEN SCENE?!?!?