I like that the tournament has a lot of WWE type drama fueling it. The negativity would just get countered by the audience hype for the matches. Stuff that probably would have occurred repeatedly over the past 39 tournaments, but never became a huge problem. It has a lot of potential to be manipulated to exploit Grimm.
You've really made a quite strategist out of Jaune. The Pyrrha V Arslan was the highlight of this part and the focus on her rivalry with Pyrrha was quite the treat to watch.
I kinda like how team ABRN was handled in this. Especially with how Arslan's was given a lot more development and personality in this. And that little scene with her at the end, I thought was brilliant done with how believable it was. Lookin' forward to more!
Couple notes for Episode 1/4: 1> You’ve done it. You’ve finally gave the Vital Festival Tournament an actual reward that wasn’t just “Because it’s fun.” The tournament would absolutely bring the kingdom that hosts it more money, and Ozpin’s opening speech makes it very clear that they are doing this for unification, not whatever he said in the original. Also, loved the little “Keep moving forward, together.” Subtle nod to Monty, may he rest in piece. Didn’t expect you to switch Team ABRN for Team BRNZ, but the parallels between RWBY and BRNZ during the fight better show the 4 core’s growth as a team. 2> Character beats hit well, context is better implemented, and SSSN vs NDGO is just better in general. Changing the terrain from mountains to sandy dunes put both teams on equal footing (also making Team SSSN lose gets them out of the way for the tournament so you don’t have to really be bothered by them while also better showcasing how fierce the competition is). Also, the little things like the “Knockout Threshold” go long way in streamlining the tournament. 3> Glad to see the tournament getting small, somewhat vocal criticism. Makes the world feel more alive. The tweaks on Arslan and adding social prejudice beyond “Humans v. Faunus” are great changes that again makes the world feel more like a world than a shallow reflection of one. Also, Cinder wearing glasses... that is all. 4> The JNPR vs ABRN fight has better stakes, structure, and is more engaging. No dumb breaks during the fight that interrupt the flow (I’m all for breaks in fight scenes, but use them in such a way that doesn’t interrupt the flow), and Jaune using his brains more than his brawn shows his growth as a competent fighter and strategist. Hope my notes weren’t a chore to read. Looking forward to to next installment.
I really like what you did with arslan here, she always had an interesting design but she wasn't like most rwby characters much more than that. So this makes me not only find her interesting but care for her character. I wonder how she's feel if pyrrha's death is kept intact. You breathed alot of life into these characters, which is the reason why I love the fixing rwby series.
I am basically in love with this series now. From the strategical and tension high fight scenes to amazig exchanges between neo and torchwick. *chef’s kiss
Finally. I have mixed feelings about this volume. While the last half makes it my favorite, I almost completely lost interest in watching the series because so many of the tournament fights were uninteresting. You did a great job fixing the first round fights. The ABRN vs JNPR rivalry was great and added some much needed depth to the earlier rounds (with a side of world building), and I'm glad that Neptune didn't give his team a win after being so thoroughly obnoxious during the fight with NDGO.
Maybe you could add some advertisement companies into the festival. Like to build on the worldbuilding element, to show some competition of dust companies and other services
@@CelticPhoenix Yeah, I mean, as a background story element for later volumes. When Flynt Coal talks to Weiss about his family shop closing down due to her Schnee Dust Company. I feel like it show the connection to the audience about the market competition in Remmant. You could use some of those advertisement companies as a reccuring factor for SDC to deal with (like later in Volume 4). I kinda see Jacques Schnee similar to Twyinn Lannister in GOT. You could show how cutthroat and how effective Jacques is at affecting the market and economy. Maybe, show the opposition between a dust corporate and a small dust business. I believe this will be another driving force for Weiss to trying to reform the company in ethical and financial sense. If you get what I mean...
I can’t wait to see how you handle volume 7-8. If I can suggest something have the atlas montage take a whole episode or two and have the teams work together more. This will be funny have Yang with Nora cheering/teasing Jaune with those moms.
Great start to the tournament. Never really thought about having someone like Arslan be an old rival of Pyrrha. I do wonder, what gave you the idea of having SSSN lose?
its probably because SSSN is the only major team who didnt have their doubles fight shown or make it to the finals. i know they had to cut out the sun/neptune vs pyrrha/nora fight but team SSSN didnt have much of a presence throughout the show anyway so it doesnt matter if they won or not. plus they won by pure luck anyway in the actual show
You know why I like the original X-Men movie, even after all these flashier superhero movies? Because Magneto had a plan: he was going to force some of the most powerful people on Earth to become mutants. And he didn't want to sacrifice himself to do it, so he kidnapped Rogue, to copy his powers. Considering their actual comic history, Rogue COULD have been written as a loyal follower who thought it was an honor to give her life for the cause, but I can see how American movie producers would see that as too dark and pussied out to writing her as a stranger to be kidnapped instead. I say all of this to say... that Adam and Blake could have a wonderfully grim relationship as leader and follower, and it would help if the writers actually gave the White Fang a PLAN. How does Adam think? What does he think would stop the Schnee Dust Company once and for all? Does he want to turn Atlas against SDC? Does he want to dismantle the company? Does he want to take it for then faunus as reparations? ... Did he want Blake to meet Weiss? Or, would he use Blake knowing Weiss against her? HOW was he manipulating Blake and to do what? I wants it. I want an actual story.... And I don't think they have to kiss for that to happen. XD
Adam Taurus He works with what he has and will most likely follow canon due to this series being a reconstruction of RWBY, not really an AU with drastic changes, at most you’ll definitely get a better and more consistent arc but that’s really all you can realistically hope for.
this is my favorite vol to just listen to in the background. You finally catch your stride in showing fights, humor, and plot, and it's conveyed in a better manner compared to vols 1 and 2! While this is my favorite volume you've done I still think volume 5 is your best written one, but that one is way too emotionally draining to have a fun chill time watching.
For what its worth, this has easily become one of my favorite video series to listen to. I do love the core of RWBY, but I have felt like the show itself has really not taken advantage of its core concepts like you have. Keep up the good work!!!!
Finally, it's here :) We finally see the reason Weiss and Yang made the doubles round. Nice touch adding not-Cinder the Journalist into the story, makes a lot of sense. Fight scenes we're good, too. Some questions, though: Is Jaune supposed to be from Vale? What about Ren looks barbarianish? Why/how did Pyrrha, Nora, and Ren get to Beacon?
My only critique is that ABRN could probably have even more character development to make them inevitably break into crying all the more tragic. But it still works
Looks great so far. The tournament energy is way up from the original, and we're getting a lot of character and world building through it. I reached out to you about two weeks or so ago to let you know I'm working on my own rewrite in novel form. Like Unicorn of War, I started with a lot of your ideas in Volume 1, but the project has since grown based on my priorities. I feel like your and UoW's rewrites do a good job of fixing the character arcs, overall plot, and lore elements. Taking all of that goodness as a base, I also put my mind to fixing the romantic arcs and depictions of racism. Romance may seem like a frivolous thing to focus on, but I was kinda sick of 1) it being a wedge in the community, and 2) romance being treated like some sort of trophy quest. I really liked ExtraCredit's analysis of romance in video games (and I'm applying it here) where they said that romantic choices should be about choosing what type of person you want to be and what sort of life you want to lead, not just who looks good together. So I'm taking that seriously, and the relationship between Blake and Yang is now being used to explore who they are and who they want to become. Specifically, I've revamped Blake the most to make her start her arc much closer to Adam as she literally just left the White Fang. While she doesn't believe indiscriminate killing is the way to go, she isn't beyond using force. This also let me make Velvet an actual foil to Blake because, god dammit, a bad explanation of nonviolent direct action is actually worse than no explanation at all, so that needed to be fixed. Finally, Bumbleby shippers are always on about what Yang (and Sun if you're Blacksun) does for Blake, but no one can really say what Blake brings to the table. So now I'm making Blake way more active and less of the damsel in constant need of saving from her own emotions, which gives Yang room to actually express a range of emotions and fall down sometimes. As for racism, I don't think I need to argue that its depiction in the show is shallow. But I also realized that there was a lot of missed potential since racist societies are riven with strife and unhappiness. In a world where those things attract grimm, and the big bad's main power is destabilizing communities, racism should be a main pain point. So I'm bringing Blake's often non-connected racism plots and interweaving them with the actual plot. As part of that, I'm making sure that all the wonderful types of racism are on display, both the personal racism (people-to-people) that usually comes to mind, as well as systemic that people tend to be bad at conceptualizing. I really respect the work you do and the team of writers you have around you to offer feedback. I would love to get your thoughts on the rewrite so far and/or thoughts about how to form a supportive writing community.
This is a very good rework I feel that you did a really good job making the story more cohesive and sensical. come to think of it you should collaborate with Meinos Kaen, I would pay to see the work the two of you could make, especially since he is working on a RWBY related project right now. Any way regardless of the headaches this is a job well done keep up the good work and stay frosty!
I think the system of a different kingdom each Vital festival works just fine, if the student from one school wins the tournament decides who gets to host next time then it might be years before the Vital festival location is changed if say a student from Vale wins more often then students from the other schools. Plus it also fits the seasons/weather if say Atlas host during the summer, Vacuo hosts during the winter, Vale hosting fall, and Mistral in spring. I reversed Atlas and Vacuo because it makes sense since Vacuo is a desert and Atlas is in the frozen north. Though I still agree the winner/top 3 or 4 could get medals and cash prizes.
i really like the discussion on the "mistral pride" thing going on and also the talk about the backgrounds of ren nora and pyrrha. i always kind of confused that mistral was established as the "vaguely asian" country but nora and pyrrha dont follow the aesthetics at all so for them to be from other heritages that were absorbed by mistral makes a lot more sense and creates a more interesting tension/prejudice than just "faunus vs humans" honestly ive always thought that pyrrha was originally from argus since its mentioned that its a mix of people from mistral and atlas (which could explain her more westernized look) and only moved to mistral for huntsmen training. plus her statue is at argus and of course her hometown would be the first to create a statue in her honor instead of it just conveniently being there so jaune can get more character development
I do really love these videos, you particularly did a great job explaining the fights as they all sound so damn awesome, i personally would have only fought to make the fights cooler, and wouldnt have fought as far as to change the matchups or outcomes as you did. the additional scenes were all really good particularly the villain ones like Roman and Neo and Cinder manipulating that girl. I have to ask a question on why you didn't feel the need to explain who the other members of the team Em and Merc fought with were, with Cinder posing as a teacher this seems like a potential plot hole they are trying to hide and likely would have been pointed out in the FCBT reactions Also is Areslen a fannus in this? or is Lionheart NOT a fannus?
Ash Autumns, Totally not Cinder. Do admit her posing as a newspaper critic works much better in this setting. Additionally, I really like how Cinder is less cringy dominatrix and more cunning manipulator in this.
I'm not a fan of the whole parts thing, I wish it was the whole rewrite I know people don't like long videos, but I don't see making it into parts is practical, a long video is better because even if you don't have time to watch all of it, you can watch a part of the video and can continue the rest of it all you like without waiting for other parts it's a win win for all but those are just my thoughts tbh
Great video. Although I want to see Team coffee versus Team Juniper oh, I can see why you kept the original team in and gave them a much better background story and higher stakes in the match On another note, there are two things I want to see in this volume. One I want to see Adam and the White Fang break away from Cinders group and become their own entity. I know it can be considered a very drastic change but frankly the white thing being so closely tied to Cinder stunted their development. Furthermore Adam was stunted the most. Now I know this may be asking for much but it's just something I would like you guys to consider if not in this volume then the next. Lastly, I want Jean to have a much better semblance than what he has currently. He comes off more like a big battery more than anyting and it completely conflicts with his fighting style. I like how you guys used him in a more strategic role to where he didn't rush in to fight his opponent but basically just stalled her. However I just feel like I don't want his character to fade into the background because there's so much you can do with him.
So I just rewatched your Volume 2 rewrite, and I'm wondering if you ever address the kids' mental/emotional states post breach in this Volume 3 rewrite? That fight seems pretty bloody/traumatic, yet all the kids seem to have shrugged that off (?) by the time the festival rolls around. Was there a time skip? Were they not seriously affected? Also, (this is a minor note for 5-8) Snowbird? I mean...Qrow is at least in his 40's and Winter in her young 20's. Assuming similar dating age norms as are common in our own society...ew? (Those norms can be flouted or be different for this world, but then that seems like putting too much work into a minor romantic element).
I know you mentioned the “three years gap to help understand what will happen”. But I remember you mentioning Blake leaving her parents for the White Fang back in Volume 2. Of course, RT just pulls her parents out of a magical hat and apparently her father was the leader of the whole group at one time. So I have to ask, will her parents still be the same when you eventually get to them, or is there something special planned for that part? As an add on, I appreciate that fighting is actually seen as a sport among the youth, like how wrestling or any other fighting sport is for high schoolers. Team AUTM maybe in their last year competing as a sport and as a whole the group is distraught. They were always that one great team that everyone at home rooted for, but there was always someone better and they always ended up just short.
If I'd fix volume 4 I'd address the one major point in it being the times. Esentually I'd keep the character arcs as is but ignore the time skip, leting time flow normally by simply keeping the character arcs coheisive. We start with Weiss's arrival in Atlas as it would start imediately after the fall of Beacon. Once her story is finished she can be in training mode untill the end of the volume. next is Blake who spent all of Wiess's arc on the boat and we then let her arc play out as normal. We then move into Yang who we can assume to be dealing with her ptsd throughout the season so far. We then cap the volume with Ruby's journey. This would be the overall balance of my volume 4. While the volume is weighted evenly to the four characters we can include cut aways to the others in each of the quarters so long as we keep focus on one of them, so as to give a sense of overall structure. Oscar's plot can be sprinkled throughout so long as at the final episode of the volume he's on a train, Yang's on her bike and Ruby arrives at Haven.
(Possible Part 5: Fixing Rwby spoilers for perceptive people) Hey man, sorry but I kinda went ahead and watched the whole video already 😝 (To prove it, you added a Phyra/Nora Dynamic that I won't get into due to spoilers but really helps build Nora's character given the info we have about her and helps give Pyhra more shit to be stressed about.) I couldn't help it, Celtic. I've been waiting for this for a year and you're a damn good writer, my man. Just want to say great video my man. It was better than I thought it'd be 😁. I'd point out my favorite change but I don't want to spoil any of the changes you made for everyone else so I'll just say switching a certain scene from the beginning to the end *wink grave timelapse wink*. I do want to mention the only thing I didn't agree with it how you kept or changed (No spoilers for everyone remember lol) the Velvet /Weiss Summon scene. I think that scene deserved to stay/be changed. Keep up the great work and get some rest before jumping into Volume 4, you earned it 😃.
i had an idea for aura that i also commented from your fixing rwby lore video but i doubted you saw it so here it is I would like to think of aura as a whole number while characters separate to how characters use it. There are two different categories of aura health aura (ha) and semblance aura (sa) with this let’s say a character like yang has an aura of 100 but her heath aura is going to be 80 while her semblance aura is 20 making her entire aura 100. With Weiss her aura is 100 (for example) and her semblance aura is 90 and her health is 10. This makes sense since she was able to use her semblance during the white trailer even though she had a physical wound it’s because her health aura was shattered but not her semblance aura. When character do things like attack harder it’s takes from there health aura, this is how I like too think of it.
I can think of a few reasons. Firstly, it makes more sense and is consistent with the show. You'd expect the team that has one of its members that has a phobia that breaks off from the pack leaving a 3 v 4 situation to have a major disadvantage. Like RWBY won because they were well oiled machine of a team, SSSN Wasn't. Secondly, it subverts audience expectations as they would have expected major characters to win
Probably because he wants to eliminate Vaccuo from the tournament (part of Cinder's plan). Also so he'd have a team for Nora to go berserk on in the second round (she's be less likely to do that on people she knows, like SSSN).
I know I'm literally years late but wouldn't Arslan's 'real Mistralians' comment aimed at Pyrrha also piss off Reese? Chloris is a Greek name so would she be from Psarudakis as well?
I was tempted to go into it, but it killed the flow of the script. She's a non-displaying half-faunus, meaning she's TECHNICALLY a faunus, but has no outward traits that mark her as such. It may come up in the future, but that's a possibility, genetically.
I'm loving the Volume 3 rewrite thus far, especially with how you handled Arslan. When I saw her with Cinder, I thought for a moment she might be joining Cinder's faction but that might be too much. I look forward to the rest of Volume 3
Too bad you dropped Sun and his team, there could have been an interesting fight between them and JNPR. Neptune fights with electricity, and Sun's staff isn't metal, so a match against Pyrrha and Nora would have been interesting. By watching the matches to gather information, Pyrrha would know that she can't control Sun's weapon, and Neptune would know that he shouldn't go anywhere close to Nora. It doesn't matter how they pair up, one of the teams would try to shift it. Just imagine the following: Neptune wants to electrocute Pyrrha, but Nora jumps in front of her, and in the end Sun blocks the attack.
13:11 - Jesus Christ this screen is getting crowded. Why does EVERY member of each team have to be there? This is getting a little fan-ficy where the author feels the need to put everyone in the scene even if they don't have any interesting to contribute.
You don't notice it because of how it's spaced out in the actual show with different camera angles, but several scenes in the actual show are stuffed to the brim with characters. I can't quite 1-to-1 recreate that.
@@CelticPhoenix I think it's more about unnecessary clutter. Not physical, but narratively. Like, what is important to get across in this scene that every member of Team Season and Coffee HAVE to be there to witness it firsthand? Could you not have combined roles that serve the same narrative function? It might make certain characters more memorable if only a few of them are present. Nobody wants a character who's joined at the hip with another. Otherwise, you get a situation where the audience is told they can't have fan-favorite Sun in a scene without Neptune, Sage, and Scarlet trailing behind him at all times like his personal entourage. "They're a package deal, it's in their contracts. They can't be seen apart."
@Celtic Phoenix Productions What's the rationale for having Neptune remain obnoxious as his canon self and have him cost the team victory as opposed to having Neptune be a little more mature and slowly grow by having him win fights?
I have to point out that idk why you thought that you wouldn't be pulling from Gundom in a RWBY rewrite. I thought it was common knowledge that RWBY has a lot of influences from shows that that.
Two thoughts on the jnpr vs abrn fight. One I feel it's harder to fully grasp Nora's semblance if she just starts sparking after getting hit by ricocheted bullets rather than lightning, and takes away from Ruby's tactics in the Tyrion fight since we've already seen it. Meanwhile jaune is suppose to be the smart one yet he's in range to attack Nadir with his sword but uses the wrong end. Like sure it's to trip him up but why not just slash his ankles while he's obviously not looking?
>Weird to me that there was nothing done to address the fact that several first years are fighting fourth years. >The oneshot was kinda corny and makes BRNZ look like a joke as opposed to the intended effect of making RWBY look amazing. >Weiss suggests that Yang partner with Blake. Hahahahaha fucking kill me. >I noticed you're only just now setting up that summoning is a thing that Schnees can do, I guess we both forgot that M&K randomly gave her that in V3. >Now I'm curious as to how Nora got to Vale, this isn't a complaint at all but just me looking forward to S4. >Little girl huh? I guess the farm theory really got to you. >Were you the one who was going to go with the dynamic of Ruby using being a leader to give herself the boost to get the finishing blow while Jaune coordinates so that all his team can shine? Or was that another channel? Cause if so then their fights completely go against this idea, with Yang being the one to get the boost while everyone in JNPR 1v1s.
> Meritocracy, though I did kinda brush over how they got picked to be in the fights. > I mean, it's supposed to be a lighthearted opening, so that's not entirely unintentional. > ...Why? I mean, as far as my Fixing goes, I thought I've built their dynamic pretty well? > It wasn't super relevant earlier, as Weiss has adapted to fighting without it (one of my key complaints with post V4 Weiss who seems super dependent on it for some reason). Still, being left without a trump card makes her uneasy to dip out of her comfort zone. > Might have to wait till V5 for that. Nora and Ren's backstory is pretty focused on a specific point in time in V4. V5 gives more breathing room for exploring the meanwhile. > Mayyybeeee.... > I don't think I said that in my fixing series. I do recall discussing it at some point, but it's not a strict rule so much as it's a general guideline for the start of their careers.
@@CelticPhoenix >A meritocracy would be fine, the only problem is that then any team that qualifies to participate is the best of the best so a continued education, after that year, would be a waste of time. That means you'll have to come up with a new reason as to why SSSN and others didn't stick around since them going back to school wouldn't make sense. >Again these are the best of the best. One of the best teams currently attending an Academy is a joke. >I mean I imagined everyone on Remnant knows about the Schnee's and by proxy their genetic Semblances so it's a little hard to imagine no one ever bringing it up. I get that it wasn't relevant in S1/2 but it'd still make sense for someone to bring it up. >You've built their friendship up just fine, unfortunately due to the nature of the rewrite just being a skeleton script that means there's no official dialogue so I don't see their relationship as a complex dynamic. I see it as an obvious friendship. Much like with RWBY proper I'm stuck with them as JelloApocalypse put it "not talking their way into a relationship". >*S4! RWBY proper is V4, your rewrite is S4. Oh yeah, you did say S4 onward would have some deviations. >Thanks for the confirmation, I'll keep it on the low. >So much like in RWBY proper it was unintentional and dropped in the third installment.
DanThe Man He most likely will, this series is a reconstruction of RWBY, not an alternate universe with drastic changes, important beats will still happen.
Let's think about it. Even if he doesn't kill Roman, what then? What can Raymond do with Roman & his character for the rest of this series? If Roman was alive, what would he do?
That last match was mostly for Cinder. A match with stakes that are public knowledge? Whoever one, Cinder would've used it to push the rigged matches agenda. Arslan having a mental breakdown in defeat was probably not intended, but quite welcome. And that's how a mastermind works: no matter what happens, they get something out of it.
Ah this volume I still remember binging it one night and I still have fond memories of it but this is also the volume where the Hateful,Malignant curse originated and proceeded to seemingly infect almost all other assets of western media and continues to poison to this day. It’s gonna take something of a Renaissance to break this curse born of fates scorn..... but that’s for young folks like I and others to break but for now let’s keep going I could use some advice for the worldbuilding in my story
I think it would've been better if the winning team advanced & had to split up in pairs for the next round. That way we could see Blake & Yang building their relationship, as well as Ruby & Weiss. With less characters to animate, CRWBY could concentrate on better developing the new ones. That way we'd get to see more semblances revealed & characters' personalities displayed.
Hey hey, lets be fair here, unlike Blake, Weiss wasn't trying to pull her bowl closer to herself so he's no racist for preemptively securing the merch. Switching BRNZ with ABRN is fine, it has plot relevance but was there any point to altering the fight between INDG and SSSN? If anything you're making it less plausable on why SSSN would be at the stadium when shit hit the fan (in the original Sun was in the finals so of course his team would be there to support him. If they didn't reach the finals in your version there's less reason for all of them to be there, plus you'd have to add INDG to the roster as well. Also you're portraying Neptune as a bit too incompetent. Even in the original fight he provided support fire before the finisher.
OH! when cinder gets silver eyed, would the other members of wtch fake her teacher persona’s death? That might effect arlsan depending on how close they are
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I like that the tournament has a lot of WWE type drama fueling it. The negativity would just get countered by the audience hype for the matches. Stuff that probably would have occurred repeatedly over the past 39 tournaments, but never became a huge problem. It has a lot of potential to be manipulated to exploit Grimm.
You've really made a quite strategist out of Jaune. The Pyrrha V Arslan was the highlight of this part and the focus on her rivalry with Pyrrha was quite the treat to watch.
I kinda like how team ABRN was handled in this. Especially with how Arslan's was given a lot more development and personality in this. And that little scene with her at the end, I thought was brilliant done with how believable it was. Lookin' forward to more!
Couple notes for Episode 1/4:
1> You’ve done it. You’ve finally gave the Vital Festival Tournament an actual reward that wasn’t just “Because it’s fun.” The tournament would absolutely bring the kingdom that hosts it more money, and Ozpin’s opening speech makes it very clear that they are doing this for unification, not whatever he said in the original. Also, loved the little “Keep moving forward, together.” Subtle nod to Monty, may he rest in piece. Didn’t expect you to switch Team ABRN for Team BRNZ, but the parallels between RWBY and BRNZ during the fight better show the 4 core’s growth as a team.
2> Character beats hit well, context is better implemented, and SSSN vs NDGO is just better in general. Changing the terrain from mountains to sandy dunes put both teams on equal footing (also making Team SSSN lose gets them out of the way for the tournament so you don’t have to really be bothered by them while also better showcasing how fierce the competition is). Also, the little things like the “Knockout Threshold” go long way in streamlining the tournament.
3> Glad to see the tournament getting small, somewhat vocal criticism. Makes the world feel more alive. The tweaks on Arslan and adding social prejudice beyond “Humans v. Faunus” are great changes that again makes the world feel more like a world than a shallow reflection of one. Also, Cinder wearing glasses... that is all.
4> The JNPR vs ABRN fight has better stakes, structure, and is more engaging. No dumb breaks during the fight that interrupt the flow (I’m all for breaks in fight scenes, but use them in such a way that doesn’t interrupt the flow), and Jaune using his brains more than his brawn shows his growth as a competent fighter and strategist.
Hope my notes weren’t a chore to read. Looking forward to to next installment.
21:45 *Shadiversity and Skallagrim shout incoherently about ending him rightly in the distance*
man of culture as well
he didn't use the pommel
@@ryanweidman6338 Well, oof. Guess I saw the half-swording and jumped the gun on referencing it to them.
@@darthfenrir4892 well I enjoyed the reference anyway so it's fine
It seems unnecessary when Aura already makes the blade about as sharp as a hammer when used against another human.
I really like what you did with arslan here, she always had an interesting design but she wasn't like most rwby characters much more than that.
So this makes me not only find her interesting but care for her character. I wonder how she's feel if pyrrha's death is kept intact.
You breathed alot of life into these characters, which is the reason why I love the fixing rwby series.
I am basically in love with this series now.
From the strategical and tension high fight scenes to amazig exchanges between neo and torchwick. *chef’s kiss
Finally. I have mixed feelings about this volume. While the last half makes it my favorite, I almost completely lost interest in watching the series because so many of the tournament fights were uninteresting.
You did a great job fixing the first round fights. The ABRN vs JNPR rivalry was great and added some much needed depth to the earlier rounds (with a side of world building), and I'm glad that Neptune didn't give his team a win after being so thoroughly obnoxious during the fight with NDGO.
Big Fs to Sun’s team. I also love The Prodigy reference. So far I’m loving how V3 is panning out.
My idea of 'fixing' RWBY involves oil and matches, but I'm looking forward to what you thought of.
Maybe you could add some advertisement companies into the festival. Like to build on the worldbuilding element, to show some competition of dust companies and other services
Not a bad idea at all, which I had thought of it, though it's still relegated to a background detail with the direction I'm taking this volume.
@@CelticPhoenix Yeah, I mean, as a background story element for later volumes. When Flynt Coal talks to Weiss about his family shop closing down due to her Schnee Dust Company. I feel like it show the connection to the audience about the market competition in Remmant. You could use some of those advertisement companies as a reccuring factor for SDC to deal with (like later in Volume 4). I kinda see Jacques Schnee similar to Twyinn Lannister in GOT. You could show how cutthroat and how effective Jacques is at affecting the market and economy. Maybe, show the opposition between a dust corporate and a small dust business. I believe this will be another driving force for Weiss to trying to reform the company in ethical and financial sense. If you get what I mean...
Finally a good suggestion
"The Vytal Tournament!, Sponsored by HETAP! Because C'mon, you've fought for less ;)" ...
I can’t wait to see how you handle volume 7-8. If I can suggest something have the atlas montage take a whole episode or two and have the teams work together more. This will be funny have Yang with Nora cheering/teasing Jaune with those moms.
Great start to the tournament. Never really thought about having someone like Arslan be an old rival of Pyrrha.
I do wonder, what gave you the idea of having SSSN lose?
mediaocrity4 sssn lost bc the power of the lesbians was too strong
its probably because SSSN is the only major team who didnt have their doubles fight shown or make it to the finals. i know they had to cut out the sun/neptune vs pyrrha/nora fight but team SSSN didnt have much of a presence throughout the show anyway so it doesnt matter if they won or not.
plus they won by pure luck anyway in the actual show
@@deano8894 And to show that having aquaphobia or any other phobia is NOT a good thing.
@@deano8894 This. I was super pissed that the only reason SSSN won was because 3 opponents were all in the water at the same time.
Sonic the Hedgehog watches this and says:" good luck I've been running from a crazy girl with a hammer for years!"
I beg you good sir, make me Blake's mentor only.
You know why I like the original X-Men movie, even after all these flashier superhero movies? Because Magneto had a plan: he was going to force some of the most powerful people on Earth to become mutants. And he didn't want to sacrifice himself to do it, so he kidnapped Rogue, to copy his powers. Considering their actual comic history, Rogue COULD have been written as a loyal follower who thought it was an honor to give her life for the cause, but I can see how American movie producers would see that as too dark and pussied out to writing her as a stranger to be kidnapped instead.
I say all of this to say... that Adam and Blake could have a wonderfully grim relationship as leader and follower, and it would help if the writers actually gave the White Fang a PLAN. How does Adam think? What does he think would stop the Schnee Dust Company once and for all? Does he want to turn Atlas against SDC? Does he want to dismantle the company? Does he want to take it for then faunus as reparations? ... Did he want Blake to meet Weiss? Or, would he use Blake knowing Weiss against her? HOW was he manipulating Blake and to do what?
I wants it. I want an actual story.... And I don't think they have to kiss for that to happen. XD
@@Cityweaver Ok
What the... how did you get in hear?! *Grabs spray bottle* Bad, bad Adam!
Adam Taurus He works with what he has and will most likely follow canon due to this series being a reconstruction of RWBY, not really an AU with drastic changes, at most you’ll definitely get a better and more consistent arc but that’s really all you can realistically hope for.
No
Make me!
Finally, i've been waiting for this a anxiously, what a time to be alive!!!! This series is amazing 🤩
this is my favorite vol to just listen to in the background. You finally catch your stride in showing fights, humor, and plot, and it's conveyed in a better manner compared to vols 1 and 2! While this is my favorite volume you've done I still think volume 5 is your best written one, but that one is way too emotionally draining to have a fun chill time watching.
15:59 they also love pancakes
Cause ruby chibi is brilliant
Currently binging this and it's quite enjoyable hopefully Adam lives longer
Question: Will we see the Semblances of the Vytal Festival contestants?
Not anything really beyond what the original show demonstrated. I don't like inventing semblances unless absolutely necessary.
Ah Tournament Arcs. A Series Rewriter’s Worse Nightmare.
For what its worth, this has easily become one of my favorite video series to listen to. I do love the core of RWBY, but I have felt like the show itself has really not taken advantage of its core concepts like you have. Keep up the good work!!!!
Finally, it's here :)
We finally see the reason Weiss and Yang made the doubles round. Nice touch adding not-Cinder the Journalist into the story, makes a lot of sense. Fight scenes we're good, too.
Some questions, though:
Is Jaune supposed to be from Vale?
What about Ren looks barbarianish?
Why/how did Pyrrha, Nora, and Ren get to Beacon?
I think Ren is the colony baby
Ah, my mistake, I thought the Vikings were assimilated into Mistral. But still then, what marks Ren as a colonist?
@@Phreakyphobic44 in volume 4, he mentions that he was part of a group of people who left the kingdom to found their own city.
But how does Arslan know that? Does he have the "colonist look" or something?
@@Phreakyphobic44 Im assuming he does, since most of the people in his town had an asian style
My only critique is that ABRN could probably have even more character development to make them inevitably break into crying all the more tragic. But it still works
I've been waiting for this...
I'm gonna have to wait awhile for my art huh?
Yep
Looks great so far. The tournament energy is way up from the original, and we're getting a lot of character and world building through it.
I reached out to you about two weeks or so ago to let you know I'm working on my own rewrite in novel form. Like Unicorn of War, I started with a lot of your ideas in Volume 1, but the project has since grown based on my priorities. I feel like your and UoW's rewrites do a good job of fixing the character arcs, overall plot, and lore elements. Taking all of that goodness as a base, I also put my mind to fixing the romantic arcs and depictions of racism.
Romance may seem like a frivolous thing to focus on, but I was kinda sick of 1) it being a wedge in the community, and 2) romance being treated like some sort of trophy quest. I really liked ExtraCredit's analysis of romance in video games (and I'm applying it here) where they said that romantic choices should be about choosing what type of person you want to be and what sort of life you want to lead, not just who looks good together. So I'm taking that seriously, and the relationship between Blake and Yang is now being used to explore who they are and who they want to become. Specifically, I've revamped Blake the most to make her start her arc much closer to Adam as she literally just left the White Fang. While she doesn't believe indiscriminate killing is the way to go, she isn't beyond using force. This also let me make Velvet an actual foil to Blake because, god dammit, a bad explanation of nonviolent direct action is actually worse than no explanation at all, so that needed to be fixed. Finally, Bumbleby shippers are always on about what Yang (and Sun if you're Blacksun) does for Blake, but no one can really say what Blake brings to the table. So now I'm making Blake way more active and less of the damsel in constant need of saving from her own emotions, which gives Yang room to actually express a range of emotions and fall down sometimes.
As for racism, I don't think I need to argue that its depiction in the show is shallow. But I also realized that there was a lot of missed potential since racist societies are riven with strife and unhappiness. In a world where those things attract grimm, and the big bad's main power is destabilizing communities, racism should be a main pain point. So I'm bringing Blake's often non-connected racism plots and interweaving them with the actual plot. As part of that, I'm making sure that all the wonderful types of racism are on display, both the personal racism (people-to-people) that usually comes to mind, as well as systemic that people tend to be bad at conceptualizing.
I really respect the work you do and the team of writers you have around you to offer feedback. I would love to get your thoughts on the rewrite so far and/or thoughts about how to form a supportive writing community.
I enjoy the new fixing content I couldn't keep rewatching the old ones
This is sooooo good! Love your rewrites Raymond!
I FINALLY CAUGHT BACK UP TO VOLUME 2!!!! AND NOW I CAN WATCH THIS MASTERPIECE!!!!
This is a very good rework I feel that you did a really good job making the story more cohesive and sensical. come to think of it you should collaborate with Meinos Kaen, I would pay to see the work the two of you could make, especially since he is working on a RWBY related project right now. Any way regardless of the headaches this is a job well done keep up the good work and stay frosty!
This was very good start I kind of felt like the arguing between the two teams may of went on for a bit to long but that it for the part.
I think the system of a different kingdom each Vital festival works just fine, if the student from one school wins the tournament decides who gets to host next time then it might be years before the Vital festival location is changed if say a student from Vale wins more often then students from the other schools. Plus it also fits the seasons/weather if say Atlas host during the summer, Vacuo hosts during the winter, Vale hosting fall, and Mistral in spring. I reversed Atlas and Vacuo because it makes sense since Vacuo is a desert and Atlas is in the frozen north. Though I still agree the winner/top 3 or 4 could get medals and cash prizes.
i really like the discussion on the "mistral pride" thing going on and also the talk about the backgrounds of ren nora and pyrrha. i always kind of confused that mistral was established as the "vaguely asian" country but nora and pyrrha dont follow the aesthetics at all so for them to be from other heritages that were absorbed by mistral makes a lot more sense and creates a more interesting tension/prejudice than just "faunus vs humans"
honestly ive always thought that pyrrha was originally from argus since its mentioned that its a mix of people from mistral and atlas (which could explain her more westernized look) and only moved to mistral for huntsmen training. plus her statue is at argus and of course her hometown would be the first to create a statue in her honor instead of it just conveniently being there so jaune can get more character development
19:38 Riveting action sequences!
*God Choir Intensifies*
Next time, you'll see Jaune expand on his half-swording technique and end his opponent rightly by unscrewing his sword's pommel and throwing it.
I do really love these videos, you particularly did a great job explaining the fights as they all sound so damn awesome, i personally would have only fought to make the fights cooler, and wouldnt have fought as far as to change the matchups or outcomes as you did.
the additional scenes were all really good particularly the villain ones like Roman and Neo and Cinder manipulating that girl.
I have to ask a question on why you didn't feel the need to explain who the other members of the team Em and Merc fought with were, with Cinder posing as a teacher this seems like a potential plot hole they are trying to hide and likely would have been pointed out in the FCBT reactions
Also is Areslen a fannus in this? or is Lionheart NOT a fannus?
Ash Autumns, Totally not Cinder. Do admit her posing as a newspaper critic works much better in this setting.
Additionally, I really like how Cinder is less cringy dominatrix and more cunning manipulator in this.
I'm not a fan of the whole parts thing, I wish it was the whole rewrite
I know people don't like long videos, but I don't see making it into parts is practical, a long video is better because even if you don't have time to watch all of it, you can watch a part of the video and can continue the rest of it all you like without waiting for other parts
it's a win win for all
but those are just my thoughts tbh
Great video. Although I want to see Team coffee versus Team Juniper oh, I can see why you kept the original team in and gave them a much better background story and higher stakes in the match
On another note, there are two things I want to see in this volume. One I want to see Adam and the White Fang break away from Cinders group and become their own entity. I know it can be considered a very drastic change but frankly the white thing being so closely tied to Cinder stunted their development. Furthermore Adam was stunted the most. Now I know this may be asking for much but it's just something I would like you guys to consider if not in this volume then the next.
Lastly, I want Jean to have a much better semblance than what he has currently. He comes off more like a big battery more than anyting and it completely conflicts with his fighting style. I like how you guys used him in a more strategic role to where he didn't rush in to fight his opponent but basically just stalled her. However I just feel like I don't want his character to fade into the background because there's so much you can do with him.
ya know what i do like the torny combat changes
And now we wait....
finally someone continues the breaking of legs.
i like the updated intro lol
Thank you for giving these well designed characters some actual development. Oh, they were such wasted potential before.
The next team that should had been introduced should have Electsmen, Bombsmen, Icesmen, Firesmen, Cutsmen, and Gutsmens.
So I just rewatched your Volume 2 rewrite, and I'm wondering if you ever address the kids' mental/emotional states post breach in this Volume 3 rewrite? That fight seems pretty bloody/traumatic, yet all the kids seem to have shrugged that off (?) by the time the festival rolls around. Was there a time skip? Were they not seriously affected?
Also, (this is a minor note for 5-8) Snowbird? I mean...Qrow is at least in his 40's and Winter in her young 20's. Assuming similar dating age norms as are common in our own society...ew? (Those norms can be flouted or be different for this world, but then that seems like putting too much work into a minor romantic element).
I know you mentioned the “three years gap to help understand what will happen”. But I remember you mentioning Blake leaving her parents for the White Fang back in Volume 2. Of course, RT just pulls her parents out of a magical hat and apparently her father was the leader of the whole group at one time. So I have to ask, will her parents still be the same when you eventually get to them, or is there something special planned for that part?
As an add on, I appreciate that fighting is actually seen as a sport among the youth, like how wrestling or any other fighting sport is for high schoolers. Team AUTM maybe in their last year competing as a sport and as a whole the group is distraught. They were always that one great team that everyone at home rooted for, but there was always someone better and they always ended up just short.
If I'd fix volume 4 I'd address the one major point in it being the times. Esentually I'd keep the character arcs as is but ignore the time skip, leting time flow normally by simply keeping the character arcs coheisive. We start with Weiss's arrival in Atlas as it would start imediately after the fall of Beacon. Once her story is finished she can be in training mode untill the end of the volume. next is Blake who spent all of Wiess's arc on the boat and we then let her arc play out as normal. We then move into Yang who we can assume to be dealing with her ptsd throughout the season so far. We then cap the volume with Ruby's journey.
This would be the overall balance of my volume 4. While the volume is weighted evenly to the four characters we can include cut aways to the others in each of the quarters so long as we keep focus on one of them, so as to give a sense of overall structure. Oscar's plot can be sprinkled throughout so long as at the final episode of the volume he's on a train, Yang's on her bike and Ruby arrives at Haven.
Will Yang kill a guy with a Shining or a God finger?
Please Don't kill off torchwick PLEASE
wait, there's a volume 6?
I legit thought the show just ended at volume 5.
(bad advertising is bad)
(Possible Part 5: Fixing Rwby spoilers for perceptive people)
Hey man, sorry but I kinda went ahead and watched the whole video already 😝 (To prove it, you added a Phyra/Nora Dynamic that I won't get into due to spoilers but really helps build Nora's character given the info we have about her and helps give Pyhra more shit to be stressed about.)
I couldn't help it, Celtic. I've been waiting for this for a year and you're a damn good writer, my man.
Just want to say great video my man. It was better than I thought it'd be 😁. I'd point out my favorite change but I don't want to spoil any of the changes you made for everyone else so I'll just say switching a certain scene from the beginning to the end *wink grave timelapse wink*. I do want to mention the only thing I didn't agree with it how you kept or changed (No spoilers for everyone remember lol) the Velvet /Weiss Summon scene. I think that scene deserved to stay/be changed.
Keep up the great work and get some rest before jumping into Volume 4, you earned it 😃.
And just so this is out there, I kind-of lucked into watching it Celtic, I downloaded it while you still had it available, so pls don't hate me.
Ok how did you watch it early
@@mnoypoiuyt65r4w8 Celtic accidently had it unlisted instead of privated. Found it under his playlist for Fixing Rwby
He privated it now so no one else can do what I did lol
@@Yojack872 Well played you magnifesant bastard
Good job with concept art. Really helps add more to the scenes.
Celtic, Please do a fan novelization of all this at some point.
Please
i had an idea for aura that i also commented from your fixing rwby lore video but i doubted you saw it so here it is
I would like to think of aura as a whole number while characters separate to how characters use it. There are two different categories of aura health aura (ha) and semblance aura (sa) with this let’s say a character like yang has an aura of 100 but her heath aura is going to be 80 while her semblance aura is 20 making her entire aura 100. With Weiss her aura is 100 (for example) and her semblance aura is 90 and her health is 10. This makes sense since she was able to use her semblance during the white trailer even though she had a physical wound it’s because her health aura was shattered but not her semblance aura. When character do things like attack harder it’s takes from there health aura, this is how I like too think of it.
High. Live stream. Also celtic can I turn these fixing rwby videos into animatics?
Who would ever say no to that offer?
I’m just curious why team SSSN loses this time
I can think of a few reasons.
Firstly, it makes more sense and is consistent with the show. You'd expect the team that has one of its members that has a phobia that breaks off from the pack leaving a 3 v 4 situation to have a major disadvantage. Like RWBY won because they were well oiled machine of a team, SSSN Wasn't.
Secondly, it subverts audience expectations as they would have expected major characters to win
Probably because he wants to eliminate Vaccuo from the tournament (part of Cinder's plan). Also so he'd have a team for Nora to go berserk on in the second round (she's be less likely to do that on people she knows, like SSSN).
I know I'm literally years late but wouldn't Arslan's 'real Mistralians' comment aimed at Pyrrha also piss off Reese? Chloris is a Greek name so would she be from Psarudakis as well?
Nah, she cool. Arslan gave her that Team ABRN Mistral pass.
Lol cooperation :uses. Image of two little witch academia characters kissing
Hey Raymond, is one of Arslan's parents a faunus since Leo is her uncle if so is she hiding her animal part or did the traits skip a generation?
I was tempted to go into it, but it killed the flow of the script. She's a non-displaying half-faunus, meaning she's TECHNICALLY a faunus, but has no outward traits that mark her as such. It may come up in the future, but that's a possibility, genetically.
I just got ash autumns
... I just got Bionicle vibes. I mean really, Duty, Destiny, Unity? Geez
I'm loving the Volume 3 rewrite thus far, especially with how you handled Arslan. When I saw her with Cinder, I thought for a moment she might be joining Cinder's faction but that might be too much. I look forward to the rest of Volume 3
Too bad you dropped Sun and his team, there could have been an interesting fight between them and JNPR.
Neptune fights with electricity, and Sun's staff isn't metal, so a match against Pyrrha and Nora would have been interesting. By watching the matches to gather information, Pyrrha would know that she can't control Sun's weapon, and Neptune would know that he shouldn't go anywhere close to Nora. It doesn't matter how they pair up, one of the teams would try to shift it.
Just imagine the following: Neptune wants to electrocute Pyrrha, but Nora jumps in front of her, and in the end Sun blocks the attack.
13:11 - Jesus Christ this screen is getting crowded. Why does EVERY member of each team have to be there? This is getting a little fan-ficy where the author feels the need to put everyone in the scene even if they don't have any interesting to contribute.
You don't notice it because of how it's spaced out in the actual show with different camera angles, but several scenes in the actual show are stuffed to the brim with characters. I can't quite 1-to-1 recreate that.
@@CelticPhoenix I think it's more about unnecessary clutter. Not physical, but narratively. Like, what is important to get across in this scene that every member of Team Season and Coffee HAVE to be there to witness it firsthand? Could you not have combined roles that serve the same narrative function? It might make certain characters more memorable if only a few of them are present. Nobody wants a character who's joined at the hip with another.
Otherwise, you get a situation where the audience is told they can't have fan-favorite Sun in a scene without Neptune, Sage, and Scarlet trailing behind him at all times like his personal entourage. "They're a package deal, it's in their contracts. They can't be seen apart."
is it just me, or does this version of Cinder seem a lot more like medusa from soul eater?
Wow i.... Really don't like the winners hosting the festival next. It kinda kills the unity feel.
INCOHERENT AUSTRALIAN squeeing take all of my fan love. to quote captain America from avengers end game. some people move on, but not us.
PLEASE DON'T KILL PYRRHA! PLEASE!
Did... did you watch my V2 fix?
@Celtic Phoenix Productions What's the rationale for having Neptune remain obnoxious as his canon self and have him cost the team victory as opposed to having Neptune be a little more mature and slowly grow by having him win fights?
Is it me, or is Pirrha nerfed?...
I have to point out that idk why you thought that you wouldn't be pulling from Gundom in a RWBY rewrite. I thought it was common knowledge that RWBY has a lot of influences from shows that that.
Two thoughts on the jnpr vs abrn fight. One I feel it's harder to fully grasp Nora's semblance if she just starts sparking after getting hit by ricocheted bullets rather than lightning, and takes away from Ruby's tactics in the Tyrion fight since we've already seen it.
Meanwhile jaune is suppose to be the smart one yet he's in range to attack Nadir with his sword but uses the wrong end. Like sure it's to trip him up but why not just slash his ankles while he's obviously not looking?
WHENS THE NEXT PART I CANT WAIT
HALO 2 ANNIVERSARY-ROCK ANTHEM TO SAVE THE WORLD!!!!
How fitting
Its here! After a not that long arg involveing binary code.
>Weird to me that there was nothing done to address the fact that several first years are fighting fourth years.
>The oneshot was kinda corny and makes BRNZ look like a joke as opposed to the intended effect of making RWBY look amazing.
>Weiss suggests that Yang partner with Blake. Hahahahaha fucking kill me.
>I noticed you're only just now setting up that summoning is a thing that Schnees can do, I guess we both forgot that M&K randomly gave her that in V3.
>Now I'm curious as to how Nora got to Vale, this isn't a complaint at all but just me looking forward to S4.
>Little girl huh? I guess the farm theory really got to you.
>Were you the one who was going to go with the dynamic of Ruby using being a leader to give herself the boost to get the finishing blow while Jaune coordinates so that all his team can shine? Or was that another channel? Cause if so then their fights completely go against this idea, with Yang being the one to get the boost while everyone in JNPR 1v1s.
> Meritocracy, though I did kinda brush over how they got picked to be in the fights.
> I mean, it's supposed to be a lighthearted opening, so that's not entirely unintentional.
> ...Why? I mean, as far as my Fixing goes, I thought I've built their dynamic pretty well?
> It wasn't super relevant earlier, as Weiss has adapted to fighting without it (one of my key complaints with post V4 Weiss who seems super dependent on it for some reason). Still, being left without a trump card makes her uneasy to dip out of her comfort zone.
> Might have to wait till V5 for that. Nora and Ren's backstory is pretty focused on a specific point in time in V4. V5 gives more breathing room for exploring the meanwhile.
> Mayyybeeee....
> I don't think I said that in my fixing series. I do recall discussing it at some point, but it's not a strict rule so much as it's a general guideline for the start of their careers.
@@CelticPhoenix
>A meritocracy would be fine, the only problem is that then any team that qualifies to participate is the best of the best so a continued education, after that year, would be a waste of time. That means you'll have to come up with a new reason as to why SSSN and others didn't stick around since them going back to school wouldn't make sense.
>Again these are the best of the best. One of the best teams currently attending an Academy is a joke.
>I mean I imagined everyone on Remnant knows about the Schnee's and by proxy their genetic Semblances so it's a little hard to imagine no one ever bringing it up. I get that it wasn't relevant in S1/2 but it'd still make sense for someone to bring it up.
>You've built their friendship up just fine, unfortunately due to the nature of the rewrite just being a skeleton script that means there's no official dialogue so I don't see their relationship as a complex dynamic. I see it as an obvious friendship. Much like with RWBY proper I'm stuck with them as JelloApocalypse put it "not talking their way into a relationship".
>*S4! RWBY proper is V4, your rewrite is S4. Oh yeah, you did say S4 onward would have some deviations.
>Thanks for the confirmation, I'll keep it on the low.
>So much like in RWBY proper it was unintentional and dropped in the third installment.
AWESOME!!!❤️
Please don’t kill Roman
It's fine if he kills Roman. He just has to make sure that it impacts Ruby in any sort of way.
@@MasterPoppers Nah, Roman is my boy
DanThe Man He most likely will, this series is a reconstruction of RWBY, not an alternate universe with drastic changes, important beats will still happen.
Fate is a cruel mistress.
Let's think about it. Even if he doesn't kill Roman, what then? What can Raymond do with Roman & his character for the rest of this series?
If Roman was alive, what would he do?
That last match was mostly for Cinder. A match with stakes that are public knowledge? Whoever one, Cinder would've used it to push the rigged matches agenda. Arslan having a mental breakdown in defeat was probably not intended, but quite welcome. And that's how a mastermind works: no matter what happens, they get something out of it.
Ah this volume I still remember binging it one night and I still have fond memories of it but this is also the volume where the Hateful,Malignant curse originated and proceeded to seemingly infect almost all other assets of western media and continues to poison to this day. It’s gonna take something of a Renaissance to break this curse born of fates scorn..... but that’s for young folks like I and others to break but for now let’s keep going I could use some advice for the worldbuilding in my story
I beg of you please make adam good-from lulu
@miki Jones Like luluchan92 from twitter?
I think it would've been better if the winning team advanced & had to split up in pairs for the next round. That way we could see Blake & Yang building their relationship, as well as Ruby & Weiss. With less characters to animate, CRWBY could concentrate on better developing the new ones. That way we'd get to see more semblances revealed & characters' personalities displayed.
what woud happen if yang and blake meet winter too?
Fuck yeah!
Sweet
Diakko forever hehehe...
Hey hey, lets be fair here, unlike Blake, Weiss wasn't trying to pull her bowl closer to herself so he's no racist for preemptively securing the merch.
Switching BRNZ with ABRN is fine, it has plot relevance but was there any point to altering the fight between INDG and SSSN? If anything you're making it less plausable on why SSSN would be at the stadium when shit hit the fan (in the original Sun was in the finals so of course his team would be there to support him. If they didn't reach the finals in your version there's less reason for all of them to be there, plus you'd have to add INDG to the roster as well. Also you're portraying Neptune as a bit too incompetent. Even in the original fight he provided support fire before the finisher.
Ah shit here we go again
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_mistral battle lesbians enemies to friends to lovers 100k slowburn_
Why the term colony baby for ren? What’s arlsan have against colonists?
Kinda abandoned Mistral to form their own Kingdom... I could see Kingdom Purists having a beef with that.
Oh really? I was under the guise that they were expanding the kingdom, or did you change that in your earlier videos?
OH! when cinder gets silver eyed, would the other members of wtch fake her teacher persona’s death? That might effect arlsan depending on how close they are