The amount of jealousy in this comment section is pathetic. Stop bringing down others because of your own failures. A college essay doesn't need to be flashy or fun or unique, it needs to be intimate so the counselor can get to know you as a person. I've talked with my admission counselor before, and essays that try too hard to be flamboyant ends up distracting from who you really are. Trust me, this essay is pretty good for an admission essay and exactly what they want. Congrats on your acceptance!
Mind if I read it? I know it's late and you're probably done with the college admissions process but I'd like to see what you ended up with for your main essay.
As an English teacher, I really enjoyed your essay. It was compelling from the beginning (good hook), interesting, had just the right amount of vocabulary for a HS senior and showed your growth as a person. Definitely, will recommend it to my students.
Torterra Plays Mc I think that’s the struggle of college apps, you have so many things to say but so little space; you really have to choose your content and phrasing carefully!
wow man...... 👍 great job! you deserve more subs! when I first looked at you videos I thought you would have at least a couple thousand. but to my surprise you only have 208! (the 208th person is me!) SOMEONE GET THIS MAN A TROPHY!
lol damn that essay is good the problem with mine is that i cant talk abt anything about struggles because i rly dont remember any. tryna go back memories :)
Hi, I hope in tomorrow's video you can include your full high school transcript, what classes you took each year, EC's, and overall stats. Thanks and congrats!
Great video buddy!! Truly help me. I'm from Bolivia, thank you so much!! As international student it's harder to enter a good university in USA. But after your videos is kinda easier to prepare the applications!
Your essay sounds so professional., and congrats on getting accepted into Yale.. i'm still struggling with my college applications and scholarship , which i get really upset when i think about it .
As a counselor, I was looking for an example of an essay to share with my students that show perseverance, vulnerability, diversity, and strength. This is great. Thank you for sharing, and congrats on Yale!
Oh my goodness I'm so glad I watched this! My son had no idea what he was going to write about but now we both have a very good topic because he also had to overcome some adversity in his sport. I love your style of writing as well as while listening to you we could actually empathize with the emotions you were feeling. Thanks so much.. From Trinidad 🇹🇹
It’s a bit cliche yet unique in its own way. For an incoming college student it’s pretty good and it demonstrates character within your personality and also tells a true story. Good work
That was so good. I don't know why you said it wasn't as good as you had remembered. I thought it was amazing with the descriptive details of playing baseball to meeting "Theodore." I recently graduated from college, but you've inspired me to dig up my old Common App Essay and reflect on who I was nearly 5 years ago!!!!
I'm currently digging deep into the college search, because I am a senior this year and I came across your video and realized that we used to be neighbors back on West Blvd in Rapid City!! I'm glad to see you're doing great things and I hope your family is doing well! Great essay :) I just filled out my Common App, but I haven't started the essay quite yet. Definitely inspired me to get it done and write it well seeing that just a few hundred words have brought you so much success!
These American essays seem so cheesy and lack eloquence. Makes me wonder if I cared to or could afford American university whether my writing style and academic rigor would blow them away or if I really lack something these people have. For reference, I am applying to Cambridge and the academic rigor in the application seems so much heavier. However, I do lack diverse extra curricular and I only do three intense A-levels instead of many high school subjects due to being English.
Hey I am currently very stressed about writing my college essays lol and I have a quick question. I feel that my passion for science and learning is probably the most defining part of my character, BUT I don't want my essay to seem broad, cliche, or like I am just trying to impress the college! Do you think if I told the story about the time at a science museum when I realized how excited science made me that this topic would be specific enough? Btw I wrote a full essay this morning about how adopting a positive mindset has changed my life then trashed it bc I know that is too cliche hahha helpppp. This was a very helpful video btw!!
I thought for a split second you said "tempered with diversity". Then I thought awwww there it is! Then I quickly replayed and heard you say "adversity" the answer to some remains aloof, at least in the minds of a few....😂😂😂
Please, please, please leave out the background music. It appears to be all the rage nowadays. It's there blasting away on everything from sporting videos to watercolor painting tutorials to instruction self-help videos were the human voice really needs to be HEARD. Your reading an essay that you wrote for goodness sake, let's hear your VOICE clearly. I don't get it, if I want to hear music I'll select a frickin music video. Thank you.
This really touched my heart that was an amazing story at least now I have some idea of how to tell my own thank you joshua hope to see you in the future
It doesn't make you seem like a desirable person to be around and doesn't say anything about you other than you're a pessimist who will make people feel glum. So I wouldn't recommend it.
Emiliano Salomon but it's a different perspective and approach to common app essays. I think it would be interesting and sets him apart from the others. If he writes it in an analytical, logical way instead of pathological and depressing, it would be a interesting essay to read.
Lauren B different doesn't necessarily mean better. Writing in a very monotonous and logical way can sound like a lawyer's thesis and might actually be a huge turnoff since the writer's voice would be compromised. This is just my opinion, however
That was very profound. So, did you like, get in on a baseball scholarship? I've recently applied to schools, and I've noticed that there is almost always a diversity component now. Makes me wonder if 'Theodore' is real.
I recently moved from New York to Indiana my junior year of high school and am worried the different curriculum could hurt my chances at getting into a good university. What is your opinion on this?
Hello Josh! I'm girl from Kazakhstan, and that's funny u know our country. So do you know how many Kazakhstani students in Yale? Because I want to apply this year to Yale for single-choice resrtictive action. Thanks for ur awesome videos! P.S. The film Burat is fictional, Kazakhstan is the best country to live. We never married to our sisters, cousins or any our relatives, so we have the puriest blood in the world!!!
Applying to college in the US is petrifying for a HS junior like me in, sitting in a small town in India. Coming from a military background myself, I can see why they picked your essay, moving from the capital of the country to a very small town in the East, is not an easy journey for me, especially being in high school. Been two years, I have one friend and one dream, and I'm not letting go of either of the two. Thanks for the video, helps a lot
Lol I thought he was reading my essays, lol I have the similar type of writing stuff, but the only difference is that I wrote a better vergin of his story in grade 9 using my phone as in a tool for vocabulary, and actually a really better one my teacher was amazed, but I eventually forgot about it, and I lost it because it has been two years since I last held it in my hands, and I really feel bad now,but it's ok
Thanks for putting your video out there to inspire kids who are struggling to get the essay ideas going! Agree, about the background music. Your speaking voice is fine without the music.
I'm going into honors English for the second-semester 8th grade, and after high school, I hope to get into a college for my good writing skills! One can only hope.
I'm currently a senior in high school and I'm beginning my college application process. I'm wondering how long did it take you to write and perfect your essay?
You must be fun at parties.
"What's your name?"
"I got into Yale."
"No, but what's your nam-"
"I got into Yale."
Lol
Joseph Torreski wtf bro
Burrito to be fair, that would be me if I got accepted into an Ivy League college.
Burrito LMFAOOOAOAOAO 💀😂
lol
The music in the background is unnecessarily dramatic
stop being a fucken hater
Then don’t watch the video, who’s forcing you...
Lemmino music
and fucking loud
I agree. It's annoying.
The amount of jealousy in this comment section is pathetic. Stop bringing down others because of your own failures. A college essay doesn't need to be flashy or fun or unique, it needs to be intimate so the counselor can get to know you as a person. I've talked with my admission counselor before, and essays that try too hard to be flamboyant ends up distracting from who you really are. Trust me, this essay is pretty good for an admission essay and exactly what they want. Congrats on your acceptance!
Plot twist: "Theodore from Kazakhstan" is actually named Theodore and from Kazakhstan.
the music really brings out the yale-level writing
this is the best youtube comment i have ever read
Clara Winn LOLOLO
Lol
@@anniecreates Ppppppppppppplppllpplpp
Dude my essay is also about failure but mine sounds like a 4th grader's essay
Sameeeeeee
LMFAOO YOOO FACTS
Put some music in it 😂
Mind if I read it? I know it's late and you're probably done with the college admissions process but I'd like to see what you ended up with for your main essay.
I can't even..
I have to spend hours in the dictionary just for one sentence like 😖
As an English teacher, I really enjoyed your essay. It was compelling from the beginning (good hook), interesting, had just the right amount of vocabulary for a HS senior and showed your growth as a person. Definitely, will recommend it to my students.
This seemed so much longer than 650 words! Crazy how you fit so much into a short space.
Thanks! It's crazy how much you can do with 650 words
650 words is the maximum for Common App
Damn, my extension 1 English subject for grade 12 requires me to write by hand 1500 words in 50 minutes, 650 words seems like a breeze
Torterra Plays Mc I think that’s the struggle of college apps, you have so many things to say but so little space; you really have to choose your content and phrasing carefully!
Tigerlily Sanders true, I’d imagine it would be something you’d have to keep refining
Josh, that was such a sweet essay. Yale is lucky to have a guy like you and the world is too!
take out the fucking music
Why you like Ferb from Phineas and Ferb?? 😭😭
I'm so weird but I feel like I can spot a trump supporter. Is this profiling?
Yes, it is.
Lmaoo
Hafso m I'm screaming
Hafso m nahh, Trump Supporters lack the cranial nerve and knowledge to get into Yale
+Roscoe is my dog hillary rotem clinton lost get over it.
This is the cutest shit i ever seen
Omgg, I am literally randomly was recommended to watch this video, and you know what? I'M FROM KAZAKHSTAN!!! Definitely following this channel now
He was just using Kazakhstan as a cover... his friend isn't actually from Kazakhstan
Привет:)
STangFilms yes
Он вообще в оскорбительном порядке представил нашу страну.
Вставляя какого-то мужика под словом «Казахстан»,не считаю это достижением для страны.
Northern VA represent
Nina Perry ha ha I’m from northern VA as well!
Yesss
mood: i am from Kazakhstan, I was shocked when he said "Theodore from Kazakhstan"
Put tears in my eyes as I am reminded how adversity can, alot of times,play a role in greatness!
Thanks for watching guys! The "How I Got Into Yale" video is coming tomorrow so make sure you subscribe and don't miss it!!!
Josh Beasley hey, i I’m just curious but how long do you think it took you to finish your essay?
wow man...... 👍 great job! you deserve more subs! when I first looked at you videos I thought you would have at least a couple thousand. but to my surprise you only have 208! (the 208th person is me!) SOMEONE GET THIS MAN A TROPHY!
Thanks bro!
lol damn that essay is good the problem with mine is that i cant talk abt anything about struggles because i rly dont remember any. tryna go back memories :)
you r inspiring
Thank you so much!
shut up
wow i can't believe this got so many like
i have noticed that Ivy League colleges do accept the students who are both emotional as well as phenomenal. Don't you think guys??
I have no chance XD
Move to South Dakota
Hi, I hope in tomorrow's video you can include your full high school transcript, what classes you took each year, EC's, and overall stats. Thanks and congrats!
I just finished filming it an will include all of that!!! Thanks for your support!
Great video buddy!! Truly help me. I'm from Bolivia, thank you so much!! As international student it's harder to enter a good university in USA. But after your videos is kinda easier to prepare the applications!
I love these videos but I can't help feeling like a failure as a senior right now
lol ik what u mean
I am now working on my common app essay and i think ur video is very inspiring!! Thx!
Your essay sounds so professional., and congrats on getting accepted into Yale.. i'm still struggling with my college applications and scholarship , which i get really upset when i think about it .
I really enjoyed listening to the speech. Very well written.
why that shit recommended
As a counselor, I was looking for an example of an essay to share with my students that show perseverance, vulnerability, diversity, and strength. This is great. Thank you for sharing, and congrats on Yale!
I'm struggling to write my essay but man this is really good, I got chills
Hi, did you complete it??
Oh my goodness I'm so glad I watched this! My son had no idea what he was going to write about but now we both have a very good topic because he also had to overcome some adversity in his sport. I love your style of writing as well as while listening to you we could actually empathize with the emotions you were feeling. Thanks so much.. From Trinidad 🇹🇹
What’s the best way to come up with a topic to write about when nothing extraordinary has happened to me?
The Ubiquitous Viewer I’d say your interests and passions
It’s a bit cliche yet unique in its own way. For an incoming college student it’s pretty good and it demonstrates character within your personality and also tells a true story. Good work
It's so nice to see student share essays with others about to embark on the process.
That was so good. I don't know why you said it wasn't as good as you had remembered. I thought it was amazing with the descriptive details of playing baseball to meeting "Theodore."
I recently graduated from college, but you've inspired me to dig up my old Common App Essay and reflect on who I was nearly 5 years ago!!!!
I love this essay and the sound played in the background
Did you take AP or IB classes in High school?
I would be lying if I said I didn't feel a lump in my throat when listening to this.
Can you do a "day in the life" type of video? I think your parents would love to see those when your off at Yale.
That's a great idea! I should definitely do that.
Oh wow this really is a great essay!
Could I ask what gpa you got and what sat/act score you got to get in?
Thank goodness Theodore got to play soccer, I was nervous for a minute there. Love the video, keep killin it!
I'm currently digging deep into the college search, because I am a senior this year and I came across your video and realized that we used to be neighbors back on West Blvd in Rapid City!! I'm glad to see you're doing great things and I hope your family is doing well! Great essay :) I just filled out my Common App, but I haven't started the essay quite yet. Definitely inspired me to get it done and write it well seeing that just a few hundred words have brought you so much success!
These American essays seem so cheesy and lack eloquence. Makes me wonder if I cared to or could afford American university whether my writing style and academic rigor would blow them away or if I really lack something these people have. For reference, I am applying to Cambridge and the academic rigor in the application seems so much heavier. However, I do lack diverse extra curricular and I only do three intense A-levels instead of many high school subjects due to being English.
Keep living in your imaginary world where Cambridge is better than American schools
Hey I am currently very stressed about writing my college essays lol and I have a quick question. I feel that my passion for science and learning is probably the most defining part of my character, BUT I don't want my essay to seem broad, cliche, or like I am just trying to impress the college! Do you think if I told the story about the time at a science museum when I realized how excited science made me that this topic would be specific enough? Btw I wrote a full essay this morning about how adopting a positive mindset has changed my life then trashed it bc I know that is too cliche hahha helpppp. This was a very helpful video btw!!
Wow but why from KZ? Loool
I thought for a split second you said "tempered with diversity". Then I thought awwww there it is! Then I quickly replayed and heard you say "adversity" the answer to some remains aloof, at least in the minds of a few....😂😂😂
Background music: LEMMiNO - Moon
Very good!! So relatable.
What a role model
You and Arlin Moore gotta collab
I’m from Kazakhstan 😂
Hey just wondering but did you use the same essay for all the colleges you applied to?
Weird that a portion of your essay wasn't even about you. They always say that it shouldn't be about anyone else. But I guess it depends.
I am from Kazakhstan.Have I chance to get into?
Амина Белоснежка No
extremely good essay. you’re vocabulary is outstanding.
A little Arlin Moore intro eh?
ur appealed to my emotions. good job brother now i have a pathway to go with
Hi!It is great essay!I am from Kazakhstan.
It's so basic and boring ..
Valery villarreal Yale didn't think so
J Dawg obviously cause he's white
Valery villarreal Lol I thought schools want diversity
IT's easier to get into a college if you're black,hispanic lmao you moron.
TheBballRewind I wonder how it is getting into colleges if you're asian
Kazakhstan))
not bad bruh.
WOW! What video camera do you use?!!! It looks amazing...:O!!
Thanks, I use the Canon 70D.
This essay really got me
well....I have no chance
I enjoyed listening your essay--it speaks to your character. Looking forward to seeing your other videos! :)
That was a beautiful essay 😊
Please, please, please leave out the background music. It appears to be all the rage nowadays. It's there blasting away on everything from sporting videos to watercolor painting tutorials to instruction self-help videos were the human voice really needs to be HEARD. Your reading an essay that you wrote for goodness sake, let's hear your VOICE clearly. I don't get it, if I want to hear music I'll select a frickin music video. Thank you.
This really touched my heart that was an amazing story at least now I have some idea of how to tell my own thank you joshua hope to see you in the future
A lotta heart but nothing really drove it home for me
Would writing about the meaningless and morbid reality of life be a bad idea?
yo do it, its rly original
It doesn't make you seem like a desirable person to be around and doesn't say anything about you other than you're a pessimist who will make people feel glum. So I wouldn't recommend it.
Emiliano Salomon but it's a different perspective and approach to common app essays. I think it would be interesting and sets him apart from the others. If he writes it in an analytical, logical way instead of pathological and depressing, it would be a interesting essay to read.
Lauren B different doesn't necessarily mean better. Writing in a very monotonous and logical way can sound like a lawyer's thesis and might actually be a huge turnoff since the writer's voice would be compromised. This is just my opinion, however
Emiliano Salomon I see your point, I guess we will leave that decision up to Vitality.aPriori :)
That was very profound. So, did you like, get in on a baseball scholarship? I've recently applied to schools, and I've noticed that there is almost always a diversity component now. Makes me wonder if 'Theodore' is real.
Awesome essay!
Great dude👍🏿
how did you find this
Josh Beasley I'm trying to get into yale
In that case, like and subscribe!!!
Yeah just like and subscribe and u will get into Yale, because u subscribed to a Yale students channel. He will make sure u get in.
Geet Sharma I mean I think that’s how it Work’s
I recently moved from New York to Indiana my junior year of high school and am worried the different curriculum could hurt my chances at getting into a good university. What is your opinion on this?
That was great!!
Hello Josh! I'm girl from Kazakhstan, and that's funny u know our country. So do you know how many Kazakhstani students in Yale? Because I want to apply this year to Yale for single-choice resrtictive action. Thanks for ur awesome videos!
P.S. The film Burat is fictional, Kazakhstan is the best country to live. We never married to our sisters, cousins or any our relatives, so we have the puriest blood in the world!!!
Aruzhan Satynbekova puriest blood? Nice joke lol
Aruzhan Satynbekova jjj
No it's not. I lived in Kz for 2 years and for me England is the best country. P.s. I'm not Kazakh or English. I'm Russian)))
This guy is so nice
This was great.
I’m glad that I found your Chanel btw the comments didn’t pass the vibe check. Your essay is amazing.
Applying to college in the US is petrifying for a HS junior like me in, sitting in a small town in India. Coming from a military background myself, I can see why they picked your essay, moving from the capital of the country to a very small town in the East, is not an easy journey for me, especially being in high school. Been two years, I have one friend and one dream, and I'm not letting go of either of the two. Thanks for the video, helps a lot
CAN TOTALLY RELATE!! I'm a runner and I moved to Japan after my Sophomore year and just lost it completely, barely made D2
Lol I thought he was reading my essays, lol I have the similar type of writing stuff, but the only difference is that I wrote a better vergin of his story in grade 9 using my phone as in a tool for vocabulary, and actually a really better one my teacher was amazed, but I eventually forgot about it, and I lost it because it has been two years since I last held it in my hands, and I really feel bad now,but it's ok
Now my essay looks like trash
where is this college located ?
New Haven, Connecticut.
Thanks for putting your video out there to inspire kids who are struggling to get the essay ideas going! Agree, about the background music. Your speaking voice is fine without the music.
great essay, music is unnecessary
I agree, can't change it now lol
Know yourself and don't accept no if you believe differently You will go far my friends. Keep improving
I didn't even mind the music bro, I was too busy actually paying attention to the thing I clicked the video to hear.
It sucks that people can't recognize a genuine story and instead focus on the music instead of the amazing writing style and topic choice. Well done
Great story. However, this is a book dude. No way is this a 650 word common app essay.
I'm going into honors English for the second-semester 8th grade, and after high school, I hope to get into a college for my good writing skills! One can only hope.
كنم
How are some teenagers even this intelligent in USA; parents in America don't even beat their children
I'm currently a senior in high school and I'm beginning my college application process. I'm wondering how long did it take you to write and perfect your essay?
🙌🏽i’m hoping to get into Columbia
I always heard that using sports as your topic in an essay is bad, but you Incorporated it so well... You had me hooked...
So hope I get better at writing I’m a freshman in highschool so I still have a lot of time to grow
Congrats! I know you did an AP reaction video, so I was wondering how many AP classes did you take in total? Congrats again!
Hey, thanks for the support and kind words! I took 15 AP classes in total.
Josh Beasley 😱 wow 15 AP exams. I'm going to be a junior and I've taken 5 (2 I self studied). But 15 AP exams - WOW
Josh Beasley Holy shit 15. I’ve taken Ap physics, Ap computer science and Ap statistics.