Hi! I was wondering if you included the English translations of the Hawaiian words in your essay? Say-in italics right after..or perhaps in footnotes? I need some clarification to guide me on my essay writing soon :)
*omg i just finished ur vid and im writing rn and JUST restarted my FOURTH FULL essay (the one im actually using) the friend thing was super helpful (applying ED to Brown.... hehe why idk) so we will see
That’s awesome! Yeah, I totally understand your struggle. It’s so frustrating to have a finished essay and then start all over again because you don’t like how it sounds, but it’s honestly so rewarding when you’re able to write something you’re proud of and happy with! I’m wishing you the best of luck!!
Could you submit ur common app with different languages? I've heard mixed things. I'm including my abuelo in my story and idk if i should change his name to just 'grnadfather'. thoughts?
I used some Hawaiian words in my essays, but they were only sprinkled here and there, and I always remembered to put the English translation in parentheses immediately after the Hawaiian word. I would probably not write entirely in another language (because I think the translation would also be included in the word count, and there’s already such limited space to write), but if you would like to include some words, I don’t think that would hurt your essay - as long as you include the translation! 😊
Although I can’t make any guarantees in regards to college admissions, I believe that depending on how well you write it, anything could be a great essay topic! One of my friends wrote about his childhood experiences with caterpillars, and now he’s headed off to Harvard. As long as you’re able to share who you truly are throughout your essay and are able to make it engaging/interesting, I think you’ll have a very successful essay :)
Yeah! Here's the list of schools I was accepted to: Amherst College Arizona State University Boston University Brown University Case Western Reserve Creighton Drexel University Franklin & Marshall College Pacific University Southern Methodist University UC Davis UCLA UCSD University of Oregon University of Washington I was waitlisted at Dartmouth and Notre Dame, and sadly, I was not accepted to USC, UPenn, or UC Berkeley.
Hi! My friends and I actually started a little college advising group where we read people’s essays. It’s called Lanakila Advising! You can check it out on Instagram @LanakilaAdvising if you’re interested 😊
Hiilei Sanchez so it’s this really well-known common app essay (and i haven’t read it actually) but i believe the writer used costco - which is a super big wholesale company in certain parts of the world - as an extended metaphor and she was accepted into a lot of top colleges. you can read more about it here!: www.businessinsider.com/high-school-senior-who-got-into-5-ivy-league-schools-shares-her-admissions-essay-2016-4 To Carmen, there are so many ideas/sentences that have been “plagiarized” and Hiilei obviously was unaware of the existence of the Costco essay, therefore she could not have plagiarized it. I just read the ending of the Costco essay, and there’s literally no resemblance between that and Hiilei’s ending. Edit: I should’ve also mentioned this, but congratulations on your acceptances!! Your essay was AMAZING
Cyn thank you so much! I just read through the “Costco Essay,” and I can see where our essays may seem similar in some ways. But I agree with you, I would find it very difficult to accuse someone of plagiarizing an essay they have never read 😂. Thank you for your support!!
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This is one of the few essays I was able to focus on the entire time. Thank you for sharing!! I'm starting to write mine.
Yay!!!
This essay was so sincere and heartwarming! So glad I found your video :)) This inspired me to get started on mine asap haha
this was gorgeous. so genuine and wonderstruck.
this essay was beautiful and heartwarming!!
That was such a good essay omg
Thank you so much!
Woah! I liked yours the most so far!
OMG！！！I love your essay so much! So brilliant! Very helpful!!
Hey Hiilei! Great video, thanks! I'm applying to college this year! Just subscribed to you!
That essay was so good
That was an EPIC Story!
Thank you for sharing! Haha I resonate with your process so much
Hi! I was wondering if you included the English translations of the Hawaiian words in your essay? Say-in italics right after..or perhaps in footnotes? I need some clarification to guide me on my essay writing soon :)
@@hotteok10 Hi! Yes, I included English translations in parentheses after the Hawaiian words. Thanks for asking! 😊
tysm for sharing! This is so helpful! ; )
this made me think of moana
Thanks for the video! Did you submit the optional video portfolio when applying to brown?
Yup! I submitted the video portfolio!
*omg i just finished ur vid and im writing rn and JUST restarted my FOURTH FULL essay (the one im actually using) the friend thing was super helpful (applying ED to Brown.... hehe why idk) so we will see
That’s awesome! Yeah, I totally understand your struggle. It’s so frustrating to have a finished essay and then start all over again because you don’t like how it sounds, but it’s honestly so rewarding when you’re able to write something you’re proud of and happy with! I’m wishing you the best of luck!!
can we talk about how pretty you are though 🥺
Aww thank you!! 🥺💛💛
watching this on November 1st
Me who is watching this on December, one month prior to the deadlines of most schools: Sobbing inside
great video! a totally unrelated question- did you submit a video portfolio for Brown university?
Yashvi Jain yup I did! I’ll be posting a video that talks a bit about that and how I approached it!
Could you submit ur common app with different languages? I've heard mixed things. I'm including my abuelo in my story and idk if i should change his name to just 'grnadfather'. thoughts?
I used some Hawaiian words in my essays, but they were only sprinkled here and there, and I always remembered to put the English translation in parentheses immediately after the Hawaiian word. I would probably not write entirely in another language (because I think the translation would also be included in the word count, and there’s already such limited space to write), but if you would like to include some words, I don’t think that would hurt your essay - as long as you include the translation! 😊
@@hiisanchez5437 awesome thank u yeah im just ysing one word abuelo. If u used a hawaian words 2x did u still clarify it each time? thank u!!
This is amazing!!! Do you think I could write a good essay out of a simple object like a paper bag??
Although I can’t make any guarantees in regards to college admissions, I believe that depending on how well you write it, anything could be a great essay topic! One of my friends wrote about his childhood experiences with caterpillars, and now he’s headed off to Harvard. As long as you’re able to share who you truly are throughout your essay and are able to make it engaging/interesting, I think you’ll have a very successful essay :)
Hiilei Sanchez okay thank you!! I was thinking of using an anecdote when I was asked to fill a bag with objects that represented who I am! Thank you!
Thanks for sharing :D
I'm going to apply but I've sone questions.Can I contact you,please?
You used this essay to apply to all those colleges or did you write different ones ?
Yup! This was my common application essay, so this essay was sent to all the schools who accept the common app 😊
Stats and ec essay?
No worries! My stats video is on it's way 😊
This is very helpful!! Also, if you don't mind me asking, what other colleges did you apply to?
Yeah! Here's the list of schools I was accepted to:
Amherst College
Arizona State University
Boston University
Brown University
Case Western Reserve
Creighton
Drexel University
Franklin & Marshall College
Pacific University
Southern Methodist University
UC Davis
UCLA
UCSD
University of Oregon
University of Washington
I was waitlisted at Dartmouth and Notre Dame, and sadly, I was not accepted to USC, UPenn, or UC Berkeley.
Hiilei Sanchez did you get into SMU? it’s my dream school haha
@@wafabhayani7815 Oh yeah! I Early Actioned to SMU and was accepted (sorry, I forgot to add that to my list above)!
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Hey this is great, would you like to read my essay i’m applying this year
Heeey....I loved ur essay can you take a look at my Brown essay?
Hi! My friends and I actually started a little college advising group where we read people’s essays. It’s called Lanakila Advising! You can check it out on Instagram @LanakilaAdvising if you’re interested 😊
GOD you are so goddam CUTE
The ending was literally plagiarized from the Costco Essay LOL
Sorry, could you explain what a Costco Essay is?
Hiilei Sanchez so it’s this really well-known common app essay (and i haven’t read it actually) but i believe the writer used costco - which is a super big wholesale company in certain parts of the world - as an extended metaphor and she was accepted into a lot of top colleges. you can read more about it here!: www.businessinsider.com/high-school-senior-who-got-into-5-ivy-league-schools-shares-her-admissions-essay-2016-4
To Carmen, there are so many ideas/sentences that have been “plagiarized” and Hiilei obviously was unaware of the existence of the Costco essay, therefore she could not have plagiarized it. I just read the ending of the Costco essay, and there’s literally no resemblance between that and Hiilei’s ending.
Edit: I should’ve also mentioned this, but congratulations on your acceptances!! Your essay was AMAZING
Cyn thank you so much! I just read through the “Costco Essay,” and I can see where our essays may seem similar in some ways. But I agree with you, I would find it very difficult to accuse someone of plagiarizing an essay they have never read 😂. Thank you for your support!!
@@hiisanchez5437 Of course!