HECK YEAH, this is amazing. I love that you were inspired by Jorge's EPIC and The Epic of Gilgamesh to create your own musical! Can't wait to hear more about it and hear more of it!
Very cool! I personally think it's nice to see something under construction being posted. A work of art is never finished, just released to the world, and it's nice to see something 'raw' :) Loved the personality of the character so far, in just one song!
this is really well done so far. you need to continue this. imagine how much better it would be with some big production value behind it. it feels like a disney song, and i love it.
LOVE LOVE LOVE. So excited, you’re amazing! 😍 Can’t wait to hear more! ✨ The fact that you were inspired to create a musical after Jay‘s EPIC is incredible too! ❤ I can’t wait for this new generation to create all these new historical/mythical musicals. ❤️🥰 It’s a new wave and you’re one of the first. 🤩 Well done!
Oooooooo the voice, the music itself... this is beautiful. Hehe and I like the lightness added in after clearing the throat. Serious, but also not taking it TOO seriously either. Well done!!! I can't wait to see more!
This is fantastic! I mean i do wish Gilly had a deeper voice, musical theatre is really lacking male main leads that are Baritone or Bass. But the detail you've and passion put into this, I'm already a fan.
@@chisasukelover1 Thanks! I'm gonna need it lol, I can't draw to save my life but I feel the images inside my head are too good to just let it disappear into my mind
@@DJKDavid that's my problem as well. I actually just got a skillshare trial to try some of their digital art and animation courses (i'm attempting to dust off 13y of neglect on my drawing skills)
Pretty cool so far. Maybe a bit more polish is needed, like making the voices a tad bit louder, but otherwise I'm excited to see what this will look like moving forward
@@TheUnamedOne832 The voices will be fully redone with the added voices of others who audition. I kept them a bit low so the high parts didn’t stick out :) I’m no alto haha
@@FlippMusic , it's alright. Everyone has room to grow and succeed. My friend and I are looking forward to seeing any progress you make with this. There is some real potential here. Just don't stop improving and everything will be alright
I love the tune, over all you did a great job! Although the some lyrics just dont fit very well and stand out weird. Like the melody and smooth and quick but the lyrics are rushed in places where the syllables dont match up or the note youre actively singing sounds sour compared to the backtrack. It makes certain sections and words stand out awkwardly. For example: mesopotamian lands, fertility, mistreats women. Also some sections the changes are very abrupt and jarring, specifically in the middle. Like "I built the walls of the city so tall and i look at them every day, they remind me of how incredible I am" that part doesnt flow very well. Its probably because the rhyme structure is a little off. You have the rhyme for day as they. But its the first word if the next line and there is no emphasis on it so it blends in with day. I know youre probably not looking for constructive criticism, but i thought id leave this comment anyways. Because i think you are making something really cool and its really good, but i want it to be the best it can be, and i think you do too. And its hard to critique our own works sometimes as artists and most people here are just going to give you plain old positive feedback- where this isnt a hate comment by any means, youre doing a great job overall and i think youre incredibly talented, i just think it has room for improvement to take it from being a good song to a great song.
Where id take out mesopotamian completely, I know you're trying to world build with story telling in the song, but too much content at once can be overwhelming. You've already mentioned that they're between the tigress euphraties in ancient times in the city of Uruk, putting them in ancient mesopotamia. The word is just taking up awkward space
I think fertility sounds off because of the following rhyme "the noble part of me", which sounds a little garbled and not quite clear. It's also not the strongest rhyme and the amount of syllables dont match between the lines, hence the pause between the noble part of me and the line before that. Where id change it to something like "the kind of king I long to be" or "but now his lands belong to me" or something along those lines
With the walls bit I would actually change the tune a little bit and go up instead of down, repeating the "they remind me" tune with the second to last note one note higher and leaving an open beat afterward the verse. And then I'd actually rhyme with that "me" and go like "they remind me" and then something like "of how people should enshrine me"
@@JB.Junebug interesting feedback!! I’ll comment for this one because you’ve left a lot of feedback related comments! I see what you’re feeling and you are very critical! Some may even be things I can change later on, but do also know this isn’t finished. Some of the vocals are jarring in timing and expression and some of what you pointed out can be cleaned up with that (fertility and how incredible as examples) Thanks for your feedback! I appreciate you taking the time to explore possible options too!!
HECK YEAH, this is amazing. I love that you were inspired by Jorge's EPIC and The Epic of Gilgamesh to create your own musical! Can't wait to hear more about it and hear more of it!
Love the concept I don’t know what parts you’d be making into song but I think Enkidu vs Gilgamesh rap battle or face off song would be amazing
Very cool! I personally think it's nice to see something under construction being posted. A work of art is never finished, just released to the world, and it's nice to see something 'raw' :)
Loved the personality of the character so far, in just one song!
oh yo wtf?????? this genuinely slaps like this fucking rocks
I LOVE how you used the cuneiform symbol for god on the cover that is SO cool!
@@buggymah
Very intriguing as a concept
As an Iraqi who's super into Mesopotamian mythology and mythology in general THIS IS AMAZING!!!
this is really well done so far. you need to continue this. imagine how much better it would be with some big production value behind it. it feels like a disney song, and i love it.
LOVE LOVE LOVE. So excited, you’re amazing! 😍 Can’t wait to hear more! ✨ The fact that you were inspired to create a musical after Jay‘s EPIC is incredible too! ❤ I can’t wait for this new generation to create all these new historical/mythical musicals. ❤️🥰 It’s a new wave and you’re one of the first. 🤩 Well done!
This is so cool and sounds so good! I'm looking forwards to the rest of this project
Happy Birthday Nick! As I see from another comment that’s its ur bday! Also can’t wait for the next raw release !
@@Terminator01159 Thank you!! The next one will be the full Saga in the RAW. I’m working on the last song now :)
@@FlippMusic Sounds Awesome!
THIS GOTTA BE ON SPOTIFY🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Oooooooo the voice, the music itself... this is beautiful. Hehe and I like the lightness added in after clearing the throat. Serious, but also not taking it TOO seriously either.
Well done!!! I can't wait to see more!
This is a fantastic start, I love this!
This is fantastic! I mean i do wish Gilly had a deeper voice, musical theatre is really lacking male main leads that are Baritone or Bass. But the detail you've and passion put into this, I'm already a fan.
@@lucasstokes503 I’m a baritone, but this song gets up there for sure!!
Massive props to you man, you've got a great voice. Can't wait for the future instalments
It's crazy because I just learned and studied Gilgamesh in my college literature class last semester !!!
Ok now, who's going to be the first to make an animatic for this 🤔
Hopefully me (: , I'm trying to plan the storyboard for all of the visuals as we speak
@@DJKDavid I look forward to it then. I love watching animatics. Good luck 😁
@@chisasukelover1 Thanks! I'm gonna need it lol, I can't draw to save my life but I feel the images inside my head are too good to just let it disappear into my mind
@@DJKDavid that's my problem as well. I actually just got a skillshare trial to try some of their digital art and animation courses (i'm attempting to dust off 13y of neglect on my drawing skills)
Happy Birthday Nick
@@anthonypalmieri7202 Thanks Tony what a comment!!
This is really promising! Can’t wait to hear more!
This is amazing Flipp!! Can’t wait to see it develop more!
Pretty cool so far. Maybe a bit more polish is needed, like making the voices a tad bit louder, but otherwise I'm excited to see what this will look like moving forward
@@TheUnamedOne832 The voices will be fully redone with the added voices of others who audition. I kept them a bit low so the high parts didn’t stick out :) I’m no alto haha
@@FlippMusic , it's alright. Everyone has room to grow and succeed. My friend and I are looking forward to seeing any progress you make with this. There is some real potential here. Just don't stop improving and everything will be alright
I NEEDED THIS
YOOOO CANT WAIT
Yooo, so cool!
Nice! Listening to this the third time already. Interesting concept, I hope you continue with this!
YES YES YESSS This sounds so cool so far, I’m definitely subscribing to keep up with the progress. I can’t wait to hear more! Good luck :D
Awesome!
This is so cool! I really love this as someone who loves ancient history and mythology. I was wondering how many songs will be in this musical?
Sad:( I have to wait 11hours:(((
Aladdin vibes frfr
I love the tune, over all you did a great job!
Although the some lyrics just dont fit very well and stand out weird. Like the melody and smooth and quick but the lyrics are rushed in places where the syllables dont match up or the note youre actively singing sounds sour compared to the backtrack. It makes certain sections and words stand out awkwardly. For example: mesopotamian lands, fertility, mistreats women.
Also some sections the changes are very abrupt and jarring, specifically in the middle. Like "I built the walls of the city so tall and i look at them every day, they remind me of how incredible I am" that part doesnt flow very well. Its probably because the rhyme structure is a little off. You have the rhyme for day as they. But its the first word if the next line and there is no emphasis on it so it blends in with day.
I know youre probably not looking for constructive criticism, but i thought id leave this comment anyways. Because i think you are making something really cool and its really good, but i want it to be the best it can be, and i think you do too. And its hard to critique our own works sometimes as artists and most people here are just going to give you plain old positive feedback- where this isnt a hate comment by any means, youre doing a great job overall and i think youre incredibly talented, i just think it has room for improvement to take it from being a good song to a great song.
Where id take out mesopotamian completely, I know you're trying to world build with story telling in the song, but too much content at once can be overwhelming. You've already mentioned that they're between the tigress euphraties in ancient times in the city of Uruk, putting them in ancient mesopotamia. The word is just taking up awkward space
I think fertility sounds off because of the following rhyme "the noble part of me", which sounds a little garbled and not quite clear. It's also not the strongest rhyme and the amount of syllables dont match between the lines, hence the pause between the noble part of me and the line before that. Where id change it to something like "the kind of king I long to be" or "but now his lands belong to me" or something along those lines
I'd replace mistreats with abuses, the "s" sound is softer that the harsh "t"'s in mistreats and it will flow better
With the walls bit I would actually change the tune a little bit and go up instead of down, repeating the "they remind me" tune with the second to last note one note higher and leaving an open beat afterward the verse. And then I'd actually rhyme with that "me" and go like "they remind me" and then something like "of how people should enshrine me"
@@JB.Junebug interesting feedback!! I’ll comment for this one because you’ve left a lot of feedback related comments!
I see what you’re feeling and you are very critical! Some may even be things I can change later on, but do also know this isn’t finished. Some of the vocals are jarring in timing and expression and some of what you pointed out can be cleaned up with that (fertility and how incredible as examples)
Thanks for your feedback! I appreciate you taking the time to explore possible options too!!
OMG esto es tan bueno 🤯