My Cambridge MPhil (Masters) Personal Statement + TIPS! | Ep.3 Oxbridge Application Series

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  • Опубликовано: 5 июл 2024
  • 00:00 Intro
    01:07 How to brainstorm
    04:13 Reading my PS - Intro
    08:25 Reading my PS - Body
    12:31 Reading my PS - Closing
    14:19 Career goals
    15:26 My first draft (and what you can learn from it)
    18:40 The mini essays
    20:19 Final advice
    21:45 Outro
    Welcome to the THIRD episode of my Oxbridge Application Series! 📌 In this episode, I shared my Cambridge personal statement alongside the previous versions and what I've learned throughout writing it!
    📩 If you're looking for someone to review your essay, I do offer a personal statement/statement of purpose/or any university admission essay review service (paid). Drop me an email (see below) if you are interested.
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    About the series:
    In this series, I will be talking about the process of applying to Oxford/Cambridge or other UK universities. From preparing yourself to researching your course, writing a personal statement, getting your recommendation letter and dealing with (*touchwood*) rejections. I named it Oxbridge in specific because I only applied to those universities for my Master, but these tips and advice are generally applicable to most UK universities!
    I recently got accepted into an MPhil programme at the University of Cambridge and I thought, given that I had gone through the process of applying, there are tips, lessons learnt, and perspectives that I wanted to share with future applicants! Plus, when I first started applying, there wasn’t a consolidated resource dedicated to sharing "insider tips" about applying to Oxbridge especially for international students, and I hope that this series will be helpful for people! :)
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    // sources
    • Journaling • Journaling: How to Wri...
    • Personal statement videos from other RUclipsrs which I found very helpful!
    • the personal statement...
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    • Write a Killer Persona...
    • How to write a KILLER ... (from Jesus College, Oxford Uni)
    • My course www.devstudies.cam.ac.uk/stud...
    • Collegial system (cambridge) www.cam.ac.uk/about-the-unive...
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    ⚠️ *Before you email me with questions about admissions to UK university, try going on Google or the university website to find the answers - most of the information is actually readily available online. I'm always happy to help but you have to do your own research, it's the most important step for anyone interested in studying overseas!
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Комментарии • 69

  • @sarahp7855
    @sarahp7855 2 года назад +77

    Thank you! I’ve been overthinking my personal statement so much and feeling paralyzed. This was exactly the video I needed!

  • @fanakarisa
    @fanakarisa Год назад

    Thank you for the tips! The last one especially hits home regarding making one that sounds like coming from me. And I really appreciate how you showed which part of the essay you cut off for comparison :)

  • @seifuusan4439
    @seifuusan4439 2 года назад +7

    Such an amazing and convincing personal statement...really inspired me to think about my own story. Many thanks!

  • @roderickhou4931
    @roderickhou4931 3 месяца назад +1

    Thank you for your sharing! It tremendously inspired me to create my personal statement and love the idea of analogy you mentioned!

  • @mahxiumchung3481
    @mahxiumchung3481 Год назад +1

    Such a great video with insights I was struggling. I'd always stuck with formulating why I'd apply and why I'm interested in this course. Thanks a LOT!

  • @brianyim22
    @brianyim22 Год назад +1

    Thanks for sharing this video, I liked that you included your first draft.

  • @mariaalbertocruz1051
    @mariaalbertocruz1051 6 месяцев назад +2

    Me encantó tu video! La parte de mostrar tu "vulnerabilidad" es para mi lo más honesto que he encontrado dentro de todos los videos de "Personal Statements" que voy encontrando. Se nota que has investigado al Programa. Espero lograr un PS tan real como el tuyo, serás mi inspiración! Saludos desde Perú

  • @we_are_artist0128
    @we_are_artist0128 2 года назад +2

    This s so helpful~ Recently i've been struggling with my PS, hope i can accomplish it soon~

  • @natalialopez3087
    @natalialopez3087 11 месяцев назад

    Thank you so much for your video, I followed most of your advice and I got accepted by a top 100 University in the world, I am still trying to process this amazing news!! Great video!!!

  • @hanifmumtaz4510
    @hanifmumtaz4510 2 года назад

    Thank you Ms Kurniawan. There's a great deal of meaningful information on your video. I'm now ready to do the process

  • @meghanlau2849
    @meghanlau2849 2 года назад +1

    So amazing, I wish I went through this very useful sharing before my application for the same programme :)

  • @user-xx7bv3uy5w
    @user-xx7bv3uy5w 8 месяцев назад +1

    This Is A Super Sandwich. So Many Valuable Insights In A Single Video. Thank You && God Bless Your Knowledge. Completed My Application A Few Days Ago. Waiting For My Professors To Submit Recommendation Letters Before I Submit.
    Now, I Think I Will Do Some Few Edits. Anticipating To Join Cambridge In September 2024.
    Wish Me Luck Guys.

  • @rithekasundar7839
    @rithekasundar7839 2 года назад +1

    Such a fantastic video! Thank you for the elaborate explanation

  • @modestl4203
    @modestl4203 2 года назад +1

    This is a fantastic video! Well done! I am applying to the same programme for the 2022 academic year, I was wondering if you have some advice on what to include in your personal statement, whether you had an interview before getting the offer and what to prepare and how much do grades count if I have gotten a first class as my overall classification. Thank you so much! Keep up the great work!

  • @ellemland4245
    @ellemland4245 2 года назад +13

    Currently writing my application for my MA at Oxford; your channel has really helped clarify the writing process

    • @emilycarter8922
      @emilycarter8922 2 года назад

      You might want to check this out ruclips.net/video/OomRZRBZDf8/видео.html

  • @minguyen7246
    @minguyen7246 Год назад +8

    Thank you so much for the useful recommendations and detailed guides on writing PS. However, there's one aspect I do not see you mention, which is about "what will you bring to the university community?" So sorry if this causes you inconveniences, but I do really want to hear your view on answering this because I so admire your writing styles 🥰 thanks a lot for taking your time to read and answer ❤

  • @keerthansriranganathan2238
    @keerthansriranganathan2238 2 года назад

    This was beautiful and enlightening, thankyou

  • @shiennalesiga472
    @shiennalesiga472 2 года назад +1

    Thank God i came across this video, it’s been a great guide🥺, thanks alot

  • @maramsalah2143
    @maramsalah2143 2 года назад

    Amazing and very catching intro!

  • @snehapalei7243
    @snehapalei7243 3 года назад +1

    It was really Informative and helpful!!

  • @meanderingcath
    @meanderingcath 3 года назад

    Thank you, Viancqa, this is very informative :)

  • @user-qk7zq4pm1i
    @user-qk7zq4pm1i 3 месяца назад

    This is reeeeeallly helpful thank you so much!!!

  • @mzdiddykoranteng1425
    @mzdiddykoranteng1425 3 года назад +2

    This was very informative.... Finding your channel really makes me happy because i want to apply for MSc or MPhil in Development studies but the whole process is stressing me out and writing of the Statement of Purpose is really giving me headache so thank you for this video. But if there is any way that i can reach out to you to help me with the SOP and other procedures i would be very very very grateful... Thank you.

  • @PryncessKhash
    @PryncessKhash 2 года назад

    Thanks for this, it helps a lot.

  • @learningandcooking
    @learningandcooking 2 года назад +1

    Such a powerful personal statement! Much respect. Love from fellow Indonesian :)

  • @Leoqal
    @Leoqal 2 года назад

    Really useful, tysm!

  • @philippa5020
    @philippa5020 8 месяцев назад

    Hi!! I was wondering about the length of the personal statement. Do you know if there are any limits in terms of number of words or characters or pages? Thank you!!

  • @amandasoeleiman
    @amandasoeleiman 2 года назад +1

    I may be waaay to late to come across your channel kak but the way you mention HITS HOME, i immediately recognize that this video also hits home to me
    I have been looking for a video that can at least help me cuz often times we get confused with the complexities of our own mind and makes the "red thread" as u mentioned :D even more tangled u
    Nonetheless, your video helps me to clarify and to strengthen the "why" in which it will help me to find that HOOK that exactly calls right to who I really am. Terima kasih kaak, mohon doanya cuz im also preparing myself for the rigorous journey of finding scholarship 😊

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  2 года назад +2

      I'm glad it resonates with you Amanda! All the very best for your scholarship application😊

  • @ofhniurebgvhrjebgvhjrebhre6207
    @ofhniurebgvhrjebgvhjrebhre6207 2 года назад

    wow that was so good

  • @onkarabilemoletsane6264
    @onkarabilemoletsane6264 2 года назад

    This is beautiful👌🏿👌🏿👌🏿

  • @novitawulandari1
    @novitawulandari1 2 года назад +1

    Thanks for the video! I am really inspired! If you dont mind, this is really technical and specific but does the character count in cam application include space(s)? (i know the length may vary from one program to other but am just curious bcs i am writing one myself rn and anticipate if I put too many characters!) thanks in advance!

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  2 года назад +1

      Yes it does count your spaces!! No worries I had the same Q when I was writing too 😂😭

    • @novitawulandari1
      @novitawulandari1 2 года назад

      @@Viancqa thanks for your reply! need to make it even shorter lol 🥲
      btw! nice to bump into your channel while surfing youtube! hope one day can meet you in person! 🎉 will check out more of your videos 🔥🔥🔥

  • @daojhaha4178
    @daojhaha4178 3 года назад +1

    Sis, can I graduate from high school and immediately pursue a scholarship in the UK, because this year I entered high school, during this high school period I really improved my English to be able to study in the UK.

  • @neema_
    @neema_ 2 года назад

    could you do a vidoe on how you did your cv

  • @umburichy965
    @umburichy965 2 года назад

    Halo kak, wow keren banget Personal Statementnya... Openingnya aja udh bikin tertarik banget, setidaknya buat aku yg awam
    Boleh minta ijin pakai analogi caturnya gak kak? Soalnya cocok banget sama hal yg mau aku gambarin

  • @andreaiguera2804
    @andreaiguera2804 2 года назад +2

    In your opinion, if during the first year I was not able to get a first-class average (I got 63 average during the first year and 76 during second year), should I say in the additional information section that the pandemic did not help me to get the first-class during the first year? Or would it be better to talk about my leadership skills and my commitment to one of my university's societies? I just do not want to find excuses and seeming grave to who is reading (even though my first year was kind of turbulent by coming back to my respective country in the middle of a pandemic). What do you suggest I should do?

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  2 года назад +6

      Firstly there’s definitely no right or wrong in this situation - and I do agree with you to not find excuses. This is just my personal take so take it with a pinch of salt, but I’d see how much of an impact I made towards that society. If it’s a significant impact then yes I’ll definitely highlight it.
      If there’s truly nothing else, and you want to touch upon the pandemic topic, I suggest avoiding shaping the narrative like “because of the pandemic, my score is …”, instead what I’d do is frame it as: “despite the pandemic and the challenges that came with it, I managed to…”. There’s no need to go into details about the negatives of the pandemic because everyone experiences it! Not saying that I’m disregarding how challenging it must have been for you, but think of this “additional info” space as a way to share something that is unique to you

  • @humairabinteabdussamad4490
    @humairabinteabdussamad4490 Год назад

    Hello Viancqa, I will also apply for Development and my interest is the same as yours. I graduated with Education. Now for the university application, I have to write a research proposal. But I am struggling to select a topic. Can you give me some ideas, please? And thank you for this invaluable video it will be a great help in producing my sop.

  • @a.giovanniarriolalaura1430
    @a.giovanniarriolalaura1430 Год назад +1

    Thanks a lot! One question: a personal statement is similar to a Statement of interest? and do yo know what is the difference with "Reasons for applying"? Thanks so much!

    • @worrywirt
      @worrywirt Год назад

      Hi! I am pretty sure they’re the same thing. They have the same purpose - to see why you want to do the course - and similar lengths (about 500 words).

  • @adamgan3122
    @adamgan3122 2 года назад

    I like your speak way

  • @anthonylau2980
    @anthonylau2980 3 года назад +1

    thank you for the tips and tricks!! if you don't mind me asking, how specific is the condition on the offer? like 67%? Also, as first year results doesn't count in the degree, do you think if first year results matters for reaching the minimum entry requirements? especially when I will only have first and second year results when applying. Thank you so much again for your time and help!!!

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  3 года назад +1

      Hi can you expand what do you mean by 67%? Is it the score?
      And yes first year results matter because you will be submitting all the transcript to the date you’re applying (plus the rest when you get them)

    • @anthonylau2980
      @anthonylau2980 3 года назад

      @@Viancqa thank you so much for your reply, because on the website it mentions ‘strong upper second class’, if they were to give a conditional offer what does it look like?

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  3 года назад

      @@anthonylau2980 I wouldn’t know exactly but aiming for First class would put you in a safer position :)

    • @MadameCorgi
      @MadameCorgi 2 года назад

      @@anthonylau2980 upper second class means 2.1, lower second class is 2.2

  • @charinpornrittirongwattana2665
    @charinpornrittirongwattana2665 2 года назад +2

    This is really helpful! I plan to apply to MPhil POLIS but it requires a research proposal, not a personal statement. (which I think it’s more complicated) Do you have any suggestions regarding the research proposal for Cambridge’s master degree application? 🥺

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  2 года назад

      Hey! I don't have any experience with research proposal sadly, but if you search on RUclips for "Research proposal Cambridge", I saw there are lots of vids which may be helpful!

    • @charinpornrittirongwattana2665
      @charinpornrittirongwattana2665 2 года назад

      @@Viancqa Thank you a lot for your reply☺️ and CONGRATS 🎉 Have a good time at Cambridge! Hopefully I can follow your path to Cambridge as well in 2022. 💗💗💗

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  2 года назад

      @@charinpornrittirongwattana2665 good luck! Looking forward to seeing you here🙌🙌

  • @gulcinmmmdova
    @gulcinmmmdova 7 месяцев назад

    How you can write such amazing letter, i literally can't understand.❤

  • @versatilepubali
    @versatilepubali Год назад

    Hello Mam, from India, at present am Studying in 3rd yr BSC Maths. I am interested in applying to Cambridge University for MSC but am having one doubt, My schooling was at a renowned English Medium School, so is it necessary to give any English exams to get admitted? Kindly please reply ... Thank you ....

  • @chemophile14
    @chemophile14 2 года назад

    Had you applied for cambridge gate scholarship?

  • @brightmulenga1134
    @brightmulenga1134 Год назад

    How many masters do you have ?

  • @teamkaelan6263
    @teamkaelan6263 2 года назад

    indonesian from qatar

  • @qistinazulkifli4405
    @qistinazulkifli4405 3 года назад +1

    Did you make different essays for each application?

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  3 года назад +1

      Yes! The prompts are usually different for each course (especially for Masters) as well :)

    • @irfaniqbal7805
      @irfaniqbal7805 3 года назад

      @@Viancqa your a inspiration

  • @user-ow4us3bx2s
    @user-ow4us3bx2s 5 месяцев назад

    it seems that your statement is less than 3000 characters while from what I know , the average required number of characters is 5000 and sometimes it could reach 7500 characters, doesn't this effect the evaluation of the statement ?

    • @Viancqa
      @Viancqa  5 месяцев назад

      Indeed this was the required length in the prompt

  • @TaniaSubrotoMX
    @TaniaSubrotoMX 3 года назад

    Still use G7X mII for this video?

  • @Hero-lo6qz
    @Hero-lo6qz Год назад

    I'm in love with you.

  • @WangRuiCH
    @WangRuiCH Год назад

    Anyone want to help me review my PS? Brokie here, need friend to discuss 😫

  • @OgabekAbdurashidov-zu9ds
    @OgabekAbdurashidov-zu9ds Месяц назад

    You are really biautiful and very smart for me

  • @hejsjsi2449
    @hejsjsi2449 2 года назад

    you are soo cute