He rewrites other movies too, he is honestly awesome! Prewrites too. It is just him saying what the movies would be if he was told to write them. My favorite of all his videos is him pre-writing the MCU Spider-Man Collage Trilogy.
Agreed. It all seems to work really well...maybe finding palpatines light Sabre felt a bit contrived but beside that it was excellent. There is an extended version that deals with Rose and the droids so you cant really critique that and if it was real it could be fixed in rewrites but the core story is there and its solid
Here's a minor nitpick: The Tantive IV should not be in this movie. It's a canon fact that it was destroyed by the Empire as soon as it was seized. EDIT: Also, the "No, that's your sister!" moment was brilliant.
@@joelmole3157 The class of ship is Corellian Corvette. It was a rather common ship type that was sold because it was very modular. It is basically everywhere across the galaxy, which was why the Rebellion had so many of them. They literally had fleets of them, some equipped for anti-fighter and some equipped with turbolasers to harass capital ships.
“You’re not FN-2198 anymore, you need a name.” “Call me Clark.” In all seriousness this is fucking amazing, this is canon. Turning Hux into a facist starscream, giving Finn an arc, giving a good damn reason for Luke to try kill Ben, LETTING FINN AND POE BE HAPPY GAY BOYS. Like how did you do this, HOW THE FUCK?!
Put it to the morons who don't care for Star Wars. Hell someone on RUclips made a fanfic that Finn is true protagonist in the sequel trilogy and Ray is the twin sister of Kylo Ren. That would've been a different trilogy in another universe
Writing an actual difference between the stormtroopers and sith troopers. Excellent. Imagine if Temuera Morrison played them but he had some sort of Lobot style implants all over his head and eyes
The way you made Rey Skywalker work and called back to Luke's one in a million shot was amazing. Fucking. Fantastic. You needed to write this. ......also, #letfinnandpoekiss
I think that Rey and Kylo represent change. Rey, rushing to the future because she had no past. Kylo, unsure of the future because he was conflicted by his past.
I really love the change to the C-3PO scene, him getting his memory back after all that time just feels nice. I think it would be funny if he blurted out “NO THATS NOT TRUE, THATS IMPOSSIBLE!” as a little joke to the fact that Darth Vader is also C-3PO technical dad.
The Modern Trilogy is much like the current Sonic Games, to me anyways: An entertaining experience at all times, never dull or boring, but it has some deep flaws for when your looking for something more that just break the whole thing
When you say recent I'm assuming you mean like 2010 onwards, those games aren't even glitchy anymore they've just got so shallow and lacking in personality that they're boring, looking at you Sonic Forces.
I agree with most of these decisions, I think this is a really good rewrite. I always liked the idea of if Ben was going to be redeemed he exiled himself to Tattoine and stayed at Luke's old home (basically the end scene of TROS but with Ben instead of Rey)
I love that Darth Sidious is only a dark side essence, it keeps Anikans sacrifice intact while also allowing Rey to complete the story once and for all. Anikan killed Darth Sidious physically, Rey kills him spiritually. A double punch which feels purposeful. Great video dude, I wish they made this version!
If Star Wars is going to kill of Luke Skywalker in the remake of the last Jedi then can ankin Skywalker at least return to destroy palpateen as a force ghost using some old Star Wars footage at least have ankin destroy the lord of the sith again so that emperor palpateen is at least destroyed by a main true Skywalker that we knew was capable of profiling the Jedi chosen one propercy onece before Rey destroying palpateen makes no sence because she is not a Skywalker she’s more of a. Kenobi. More than she is a Skywalker there for ankin should be the one to destroy palpateen onece in for all
Sith can't be immortal. Filoni wanted to put Revan in the Clone Wars but Lucas said no Sith can beat death. They can put some of their spirt in objects tho
*Darth Sidious:* _"Your journey ends here, Jedi!"_ *Rey:* _"I am no Jedi. I am..._ *_a Skywalker."_* (Also, I like how you used HISHE's "Jedi Force Ghost Cavalry" idea here)
Great rewrite man! I still think my main issue with the movie that you somewhat addressed in this video is the mistreatment of Anakin who is arguably the "main" character of the franchise or at least the saga movies. I'm always confused on if Kylo/Ben knew that Anakin actually turned back to the light in the end. Why would he be worshipping someone who ended up going against the dark side? Does nobody ever tell him? Is it not common knowledge in the galaxy? While the Han scene in this movie is by far the best part I would much rather have it be Anakin talking to Ben. The man he has literally worshipped his entire life finally tells him that he is not on the right path and to learn from his mistakes. This could be explained by saying, like you said, Palpatine had "control" over Kylo cutting off Anakin from ever reaching out to Ben. Leia's "sacrifice" could then be her cutting off Palps from Ben's head and finally allowing Anakin to see his grandson. In a perfect world this entire movie would be different but if I had to fix one thing it would be that. I feel as if it ties the Saga together nicely.
While I don't agree with everything in this video I can say it was a good attempt in fixing this dumpster fire I still like Star Wars but I'm not so excited for future Movies, the Disney+ stuff and animated things look really cool Also I'd recommend reading the Darth Plageius novel, you can learn about Mediclorians, Darth Maul's purpose, and most importantly about the Tragedy of Datth Plageius the Wise!
This is what I was wanted and hoped for, Ben Solo to live. As much I wanted Reylo to happen I didn't think Disney would go for it, but I didn't think they kill Ben. If I had to chose between Reylo or Ben Solo living, I pick Ben.
Sidious' essence survivng is so brilliant -- An equivalent of force ghosts being prevalent in the dark side is so inspired and truly hlelps the inconsistency shown in the original movie and ALSO provides a far more reasonable explanation for his survival. I also really like how Luke questions the jedi force as it shows hsi developement from his past moments of gullibility and misjudgement, into soemone who questiosn the authority of which he works under; captian america had very simialr developement and I think MARVEl did it well and coudl serve an exaple for how to achieve this sort of developjment again. good video would video again :thumbd_up:
A couple things I would change: 1. Obviously the pacing 2. When Han shows up to see his son and the same dialogue happens, but Han grabs the hand Kylo is holding the lightsaber with. When Kylo says "Dad...I-" and Han says "I know" and Han switches on the lightsaber as the fiery red blade pierces Han's torso and he fades away, Kylo looks up to the sky to see two glimmering stars that remind him of his mother's eyes and his fiery red lightsaber blade gently changes to a soft white blade. This is Ben's redemption and his own attempt at reversing the bleeding of his Kyber Crystal, an obvious call back to Ahsoka. 3. The ending should drastically change in my opinion and this is how I'd do it: Although I would like to change the fight I'm not gonna, but let's change it from there. So Rey dies and Ben crawls up to hold her, he tries to resurrect her, but Ben can't so he gently touches his forehead to hers and cries. He then carries her out of the pyramid while Finn, Poe, and Chewie gather to stop him, Ben hands Rey's lifeless body to Finn and says "I tried to help her." While Finn sets her down and tries to give her CPR Ben hands Finn the Skywalker saber and says "It's okay to let the past die, but it's better to let the future thrive." And walks away to presumably go into exile. We then switch to the next scene of Rey and Leia's death ceremony as they fade away together. Finn boards the Falcon with the Skywalker saber in hand to place it on a shrine involving Rey's staff, Leia's saber, Han/Chewie's medal, and Han's dice. Finn enters the cockpit to meet Poe and Chewie ready to take off as Poe asks "So where is it Leia told you to go?" And Finn replies "...Dantooine." Next scene we see the Falcon land and Finn hops aboard a speeder bike and says "Wish me luck I'm back by night." We pan to a montage of Finn on the speeder reflecting back to the moment Rey was on hers. After that Finn stops next to a cave and enters. We switch back to Poe and Chewie yelling at each other while playing Dejarik as R2 and BB-8 snicker at C-3PO's attempt at translating Chewie's growling. Finn enters the Falcon as Poe asks "You find what you were looking for?" And Finn replies "yes." A montage of Finn working on something starts and as he finishes he picks up a hunk of metal resembling a shorter version of Rey's staff, Finn flips a switch on it igniting an Amethyst glow as we get a close up on his eyes. We pan back to see an Amethyst blade being emitted and awed by the crew as Poe asks "What now?" and Finn replies "We need to find Ben." And it cuts to the credits. I think Finn should be related to Mace Windu in someway. I know it might make the universe feel smaller than it is, but I think it would be cool! Especially when you learn Mace is John Boyega's favorite character.
I like everything except for the whole Mace Windu relation to Finn thing. I feel as if that’s a) on the nose and b) him, Finn, and Lando are like the only important poc in the series so doing that is like “seriously?”
You had me till part 3. That is waaaaaay too much to pack into a denouement of a very packed movie Also... black people don't all know each other. Cmon
I fucking love this. I especially like how you kind of explained how Luke decided to kill Ben bc of Palpatine. Also giving him a white lightsaber was fucking awesome. Amazing video, man!
Hey thanks for making this. I like your vision and that both Rey and Ben survive. I think using Palpatine's lightsaber to a greater degree to draw Rey towards darkness would be interesting. Maybe the Skywalker lightsaber actively decays and she is forced to use Palps saber at some point. I dunno, everybody could nitpick small details like crazy. That's why making movies is such a long process.
Imagine that, combined in the fight on the Death Star where potentially her anger gets ahold of her and we even see the blue Kyber Crystal bleed out. (Maybe not red, but like orange potentially). Would be such an awesome detail and could even give Kylo more reason for his redemption. Plus it could tie into Reys Dark Side vision in TLJ
Really cool! Personally I have my ideas, but they always end up including a partial of total rewrite of the whole trilogy. The fact that TFA and TLJ are so completely disconnected from one another is always there preventing Ep IX from being truly good. Because a good final chapter can’t be so without solid and coherent foundations.
Wow man this is amazing. I'm studying to be a film maker but I'm struggling with getting ideas and watching this brings my confidence down 😂. Honestly this is what the movie have should been
An idea for the knights of REN. Maybe, to draw parallels with fin, the nights of den are trainees of Luke like Ben that he convinced to turn to the dark
Another great video man, I really enjoy your rewrites and you’ve been a huge inspiration in me doing my own as a fun writing exercise. Keep up the great work!
Since you're stuck on an opening crawl, may I suggest this (I'm also changing the title because for it to work, Rey has to call herself Skywalker which is dumb in so many ways): Episode IX - The Will of the Force The rebellion is reborn! Luke Skywalker's heroic sacrifice has sparked an uprising against the First Order and is restoring hope to the dwindling Resistance. To quell the fires of rebellion, the First Order double down on their attacks and soon, the war reaches a stalemate which no side can break. Seeking a way to destroy the Resistance, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren travels to Mustafar to find a new weapon that can turn the tides of battle once and for all...
Actually, I have an idea on how to make 'The Rise of Skywalker' work. When Rey visits the prison, it turns out the prison is now in the Jedi Temple on Coruscant where Rey is leading a new order of Force Users called 'Skywalkers', those who use a more balanced side of the Force.
Wouldve been cool if Palpatine wasnt alive but was using a sith technique called Dark Phantom. Essentially the ability allows the force user performing it to make an object influence people, whether it is emotionally or physically. Similar to the hocruxes in Harry Potter
I cannot thank you ENOUGH for cutting the Rey-Kylo kiss. Not only did it have no build up and it was purely fan service, but canonically, KYLO IS REY'S NEPHEW
One minor thing I would change is with C3PO knowing about Exegol, instead of him just having a direct message from Palpatine stored on him, practically confessing to something shady, have it be a little more vague at first. Like, they ask him if he knows anything about a planet called Exegol, and he goes "Well, of course, after all, as a protocol droid, I contain a database of information on all known planets in the galaxy. Exegol is-" and then he cuts off with the red eyes, and goes into a different voice; "The information you are attempting to access has been classified to level 10 clearance, by special order of Supreme Chancellor Palpatine. This incident will be reported to the nearest Republic Security Officer. Remain in your current location. Clone Troopers will arrive shortly to bring you in for questioning." This keeps the same plot beat, of C3PO having something hidden in his memory from his time in the Republic, but it isn't Palpatine having his plans just lying around in any old droid. He would've actually orchestrated things such that anyone who learns of, or starts asking about Exegol gets dealt with. The flaw he didn't account for was his own death; and the fact that eventually the Empire would collapse and anyone who tries to ask about Exegol would just get a blatant obvious warning sign that it's something Palpatine wanted hidden. Then, when his memory unlocks, suddenly he gets back a lot of his CW-era memories, but also that more restricted information. Exegol, yes, but there's also a bunch of other stuff hidden behind the same encryption. All the times Palpatine needed a translator when making some back-alley deals, and wiped their memory of it right after.
This is brilliant and I can not fathom how amazing it is that you managed to explain LUKE SKYWALKER trying to KILL his NEPHEW. That was great. The on negative thing would be that if Rey truly is a nobody, how is she so gifted and powerful without ANY training? I know this is mainly TFA and TLJ fault but considering this is the last movie it would be nice to have it answered. Still so much better than what we got.
“You’re afraid of being ashes. You’re afraid of being forgotten. And you will be forgotten, Sidious. Because of ME. I am vengeance. I am the night. I AM REY SKYWALKER!” I cracked up at Eddie Brock being garbage
Great video, the only thing I disagree with is I would skip Rey using force lightning at all, since in lore it is stated that force lightning is an ability that requires years of training in the dark side, so it really doesn’t make sense that Rey can just accidentally use it just because she had some vision.
Hey Troyboyo17, I hope you can fix more movies such as Spider-Man 3, TASM 2 and 3, X-Men 3, X-Men: Origins Wolverine, X-Men: Apocalypse, X-Men: Dark Phoenix, Fantastic Four, etc.
Wow. Ive been doing my own rewrite of this film (and subsequently, the sequel trilogy) but, in the best and most complimentary way possible, this video really puts me off. This is so good and genuinely is a more engaging and enjoyable story than what we got. Ive been a subscriber for a long time and im so glad i found your work my dude! Fantastic job!
I honestly feel like Anakin Skywalker should’ve had a bigger role. In the Clone Wars series, it was indicated in season 3 that he was indeed the chosen one, which is carried on in episode 6 when he saves Luke from palpatine and ultimately kills him. Anakin should’ve had a bigger role in this. Maybe he motivates rey or redeems Kylo ren, but either way, not only would it be faithful to the prequels and anakin skywalker, it would just be cool in general.
Instead of Nate, call him Gary and let him be played by Keegan Michael Key. The Robot Chicken joke will finally come full circle. Also I don't know if I'd have Rey say the "I'm a Skywalker!" Line, like I love it, but I think personally it should come from Ben. Because Ben wanted to be a Vader, but he finally realizes that his tru place is to be a Skywalker. Idk that's how I read the situation.
i remember distinctly, when i watched RoS with my fiancee in theaters, because of our humor at the time we laughed our asses off at the bass-boosted force lightning that palpatine shot into the sky. the film really had a way of bringing people together
I know a lot of people had problems with the force Skype thing in TRoS, mainly how the rules work with someone interacting with the others environment if they can’t even see it, but I like to think that it’s caused by their sabers, an extension of themselves, comes in contact with each other and while they’re still touching they come in contact with something in the others environment, such as when they clash blades and fight against the binded sabers and they crash their blades into the Vader pedestal, causing for it to maybe come in contact with Kylo’s blade before hitting the ground in front of Kylo because his lightsaber touched the helmet last. Same with the back of berries going from Kijimi to the Star Destroyer. I used that theory with my TRoS Upgrade where I took the existing story and improved on it rather than rewrite it entirely (mostly using the novel for extra info that would’ve been nice to get in the movie, which results in a script for TRoS that would probably be 3 hours or longer if it was real) and what I did was something really cool, where I had Kylo fighting the knights of Ren, and I mean an actual fight not a beat down before another beat down after Kylo gains the upper hand, but basically after Rey takes out the Sith Trooper Guard dudes, she senses that Kylo is in danger and turns behind her, shouting out Ben’s name and thrusting the saber through the air at seemingly nothing (a lot like her training throw from earlier) and Kylo, in the long vast entrance hallway about 60 feet away with a dozen walls in between the throne room and him, turns to see the saber flying out of Rey’s hand towards him. The knights of Ren obviously can’t see Rey or the Saber because they can’t see the Skype, they prepare to attack Ben but he just ducks down, reaches towards Leia’s lightsaber (I gave Rey her yellow lightsaber for the whole movie rather than just the ending, but I think I’d like it if it was a brighter blue color with an unstable blade to reflect Kylo’s, also because the crystal broke. No force healing crystals, unless Rey And the crystal are a Dyad which is what I used to have Rey able to heal Kylo and vise versa. Also instead of healing the serpent Rey just used the force to connect with it, you know, like Ezra did, without needing an ability that breaks all of Star Wars as a whole. Anyways, Kylo reaches out to his mothers saber and just barely taps the bottom of the hilt, causing it to appear in front of Vicrul Ren the second Ben’s finger stops touching it, impaling right through the Knight’s chest. Boom. Then Ben forces It back to his hand and the fight commences as Rey rushes to join him and we get a reflection of the Snoke’s Throne Room seen only now Ben and Rey are fighting with the same end goal.
To be honest i can tolerate almost everithing in a star wars movie, jar jar binks, the sand pick up line no problem, i loved han solo, i did not like the last jedi but i did not hated it. But the reylo thing that did make me abandon this three movies, in a awful teenager romance movie that i will never see its ok, but in star wars no.
@Casanova Frankenstein I would've preferred rey and finn but not because of "diversity" but because it makes more sense for her to fall for him instead of a mass murdering eradic manchild. And she is a Mary Sue
I'm with you for most of this, the whole thing until relationship thing never really clicked with me I just think they're friends and that's fine because people need friends, but a lot of remarks in this movie give me the impression you might be a bit of a movie Bob fan
I feel like it would've been cool for Kylo to live and Rey to die because he would have to live with the pain of everything he did, he feels responsible for her death and he has to rebuild the jedi order. Mind you I'm saying this about the actual movie not this rewrite.
Great Rewrite of the Rise of Skywalker, although one thing does bother me: Rey’s new lightsaber. It just looks weird to me. Why not have the saber more like Cal Kestus’s lightsaber he builds on Ilum? It would look more simpler and cooler in my mind.
This is off topic but what are your thoughts on the Justice League Snyder Cut? Will it replace the theatrical version? And will start back up the original plans for the DC movies?
Great video, the film should have been called The Rise of the Skywalkers as the Skywalker Order is the new group of force users that replace the flawed Jedi Order.
This is a great script! The only things I would change are making Ben’s lightsaber color Purple. While technically purging the evil from a bled crystal would be white, I thought it would be be a nice touch for with their connection Rey and Ben’s lightsaber crystal to be complement colors, to symbolize their rare connection in the force.
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They rewrite now? THEY REWRITE NOW?!
*THEY REWRITE NOW!*
I wish to God they would redo the sequel. It was so so so bad.
He rewrites other movies too, he is honestly awesome! Prewrites too. It is just him saying what the movies would be if he was told to write them. My favorite of all his videos is him pre-writing the MCU Spider-Man Collage Trilogy.
This guy actually fixed hux, the knights of Ren and the sith troopers and most importantly Finn! They actually did things!
Agreed. It all seems to work really well...maybe finding palpatines light Sabre felt a bit contrived but beside that it was excellent. There is an extended version that deals with Rose and the droids so you cant really critique that and if it was real it could be fixed in rewrites but the core story is there and its solid
I think I did it too without even changing the story of the movie
Star Wars Episode 9: The Rise of Skywalker is the most disappointing thing since my son. But this video wasn't!
Matt Draper wait what!?!
We're you a writer to this story. Was this script "your" baby?😯
Mike Val It’s a Plinkett reference
I hope you are not serious
Luka Donadze I wasn’t.
Here's a minor nitpick: The Tantive IV should not be in this movie. It's a canon fact that it was destroyed by the Empire as soon as it was seized.
EDIT: Also, the "No, that's your sister!" moment was brilliant.
What was the Tantive IV?
Leia’s flagship from the beginning of Episode IV. It somehow inexplicably returned (like something else in the movie) in Episode IX for some reason.
@@elijahdoesstuff4600 Maybe it wasn't the only Tantive class ship in the rebellion. There were others in Return of the Jedi
I agree. That "No, that's your sister moment" was genius.
@@joelmole3157 The class of ship is Corellian Corvette. It was a rather common ship type that was sold because it was very modular. It is basically everywhere across the galaxy, which was why the Rebellion had so many of them. They literally had fleets of them, some equipped for anti-fighter and some equipped with turbolasers to harass capital ships.
Troyo: what's the point of it all?
Disney: MONEY
Also the Big D: You're hired.....only for you to do it in Video Game form.
A Fanboy: Okaaaayyyyyyyy?
Me: Lemme do it, again.
Greedy bastards
Me: Do I got the Money to pull a Flashpoint/Convergence '15, but better?
bruh the video didn’t even premiere and there’s already a dislike wtf
Probably people who think TROS was perfect
Sam Rafkin it’s not perfect and it’s not good but it’s ok
they probably did it because their impatient
People are very strange these days
It’s a bot. Hopefully
“You’re not FN-2198 anymore, you need a name.”
“Call me Clark.”
In all seriousness this is fucking amazing, this is canon. Turning Hux into a facist starscream, giving Finn an arc, giving a good damn reason for Luke to try kill Ben, LETTING FINN AND POE BE HAPPY GAY BOYS. Like how did you do this, HOW THE FUCK?!
The real question is
HOW DID YOU NOT DO THIS DISNEY, HOW THE FUCK?
@@littleredruri they’re pandering to china
Put it to the morons who don't care for Star Wars. Hell someone on RUclips made a fanfic that Finn is true protagonist in the sequel trilogy and Ray is the twin sister of Kylo Ren. That would've been a different trilogy in another universe
Writing an actual difference between the stormtroopers and sith troopers. Excellent. Imagine if Temuera Morrison played them but he had some sort of Lobot style implants all over his head and eyes
Like Echo from the bad batch?
Don’t you do that to me. How dare you put that image in my head.
The way you made Rey Skywalker work and called back to Luke's one in a million shot was amazing.
Fucking. Fantastic.
You needed to write this.
......also, #letfinnandpoekiss
Palpatine's force ghost should glow red since the Jedi force ghosts glow blue. That'd be super spoooky.
Can’t wait mate, u, hitop films and the closer look are such a big inspiration to me, thx
I think that Rey and Kylo represent change. Rey, rushing to the future because she had no past. Kylo, unsure of the future because he was conflicted by his past.
I really love the change to the C-3PO scene, him getting his memory back after all that time just feels nice. I think it would be funny if he blurted out “NO THATS NOT TRUE, THATS IMPOSSIBLE!” as a little joke to the fact that Darth Vader is also C-3PO technical dad.
The Modern Trilogy is much like the current Sonic Games, to me anyways:
An entertaining experience at all times, never dull or boring, but it has some deep flaws for when your looking for something more that just break the whole thing
When you say recent I'm assuming you mean like 2010 onwards, those games aren't even glitchy anymore they've just got so shallow and lacking in personality that they're boring, looking at you Sonic Forces.
So this was the big project you were talking about, well it's definitely big and I am really excited for it
I agree with most of these decisions, I think this is a really good rewrite. I always liked the idea of if Ben was going to be redeemed he exiled himself to Tattoine and stayed at Luke's old home (basically the end scene of TROS but with Ben instead of Rey)
I love that Darth Sidious is only a dark side essence, it keeps Anikans sacrifice intact while also allowing Rey to complete the story once and for all.
Anikan killed Darth Sidious physically, Rey kills him spiritually. A double punch which feels purposeful.
Great video dude, I wish they made this version!
If Star Wars is going to kill of Luke Skywalker in the remake of the last Jedi then can ankin Skywalker at least return to destroy palpateen as a force ghost using some old Star Wars footage at least have ankin destroy the lord of the sith again so that emperor palpateen is at least destroyed by a main true Skywalker that we knew was capable of profiling the Jedi chosen one propercy onece before Rey destroying palpateen makes no sence because she is not a Skywalker she’s more of a. Kenobi. More than she is a Skywalker there for ankin should be the one to destroy palpateen onece in for all
Sith can't be immortal. Filoni wanted to put Revan in the Clone Wars but Lucas said no Sith can beat death. They can put some of their spirt in objects tho
What about revan bitch slapping death later
*Darth Sidious:* _"Your journey ends here, Jedi!"_
*Rey:* _"I am no Jedi. I am..._ *_a Skywalker."_*
(Also, I like how you used HISHE's "Jedi Force Ghost Cavalry" idea here)
Great rewrite man! I still think my main issue with the movie that you somewhat addressed in this video is the mistreatment of Anakin who is arguably the "main" character of the franchise or at least the saga movies. I'm always confused on if Kylo/Ben knew that Anakin actually turned back to the light in the end. Why would he be worshipping someone who ended up going against the dark side? Does nobody ever tell him? Is it not common knowledge in the galaxy? While the Han scene in this movie is by far the best part I would much rather have it be Anakin talking to Ben. The man he has literally worshipped his entire life finally tells him that he is not on the right path and to learn from his mistakes. This could be explained by saying, like you said, Palpatine had "control" over Kylo cutting off Anakin from ever reaching out to Ben. Leia's "sacrifice" could then be her cutting off Palps from Ben's head and finally allowing Anakin to see his grandson. In a perfect world this entire movie would be different but if I had to fix one thing it would be that. I feel as if it ties the Saga together nicely.
While I don't agree with everything in this video I can say it was a good attempt in fixing this dumpster fire
I still like Star Wars but I'm not so excited for future Movies, the Disney+ stuff and animated things look really cool
Also I'd recommend reading the Darth Plageius novel, you can learn about Mediclorians, Darth Maul's purpose, and most importantly about the Tragedy of Datth Plageius the Wise!
This is what I was wanted and hoped for, Ben Solo to live. As much I wanted Reylo to happen I didn't think Disney would go for it, but I didn't think they kill Ben. If I had to chose between Reylo or Ben Solo living, I pick Ben.
Sidious' essence survivng is so brilliant -- An equivalent of force ghosts being prevalent in the dark side is so inspired and truly hlelps the inconsistency shown in the original movie and ALSO provides a far more reasonable explanation for his survival. I also really like how Luke questions the jedi force as it shows hsi developement from his past moments of gullibility and misjudgement, into soemone who questiosn the authority of which he works under; captian america had very simialr developement and I think MARVEl did it well and coudl serve an exaple for how to achieve this sort of developjment again. good video would video again :thumbd_up:
A couple things I would change:
1. Obviously the pacing
2. When Han shows up to see his son and the same dialogue happens, but Han grabs the hand Kylo is holding the lightsaber with. When Kylo says "Dad...I-" and Han says "I know" and Han switches on the lightsaber as the fiery red blade pierces Han's torso and he fades away, Kylo looks up to the sky to see two glimmering stars that remind him of his mother's eyes and his fiery red lightsaber blade gently changes to a soft white blade. This is Ben's redemption and his own attempt at reversing the bleeding of his Kyber Crystal, an obvious call back to Ahsoka.
3. The ending should drastically change in my opinion and this is how I'd do it: Although I would like to change the fight I'm not gonna, but let's change it from there. So Rey dies and Ben crawls up to hold her, he tries to resurrect her, but Ben can't so he gently touches his forehead to hers and cries. He then carries her out of the pyramid while Finn, Poe, and Chewie gather to stop him, Ben hands Rey's lifeless body to Finn and says "I tried to help her." While Finn sets her down and tries to give her CPR Ben hands Finn the Skywalker saber and says "It's okay to let the past die, but it's better to let the future thrive." And walks away to presumably go into exile.
We then switch to the next scene of Rey and Leia's death ceremony as they fade away together. Finn boards the Falcon with the Skywalker saber in hand to place it on a shrine involving Rey's staff, Leia's saber, Han/Chewie's medal, and Han's dice. Finn enters the cockpit to meet Poe and Chewie ready to take off as Poe asks "So where is it Leia told you to go?" And Finn replies "...Dantooine."
Next scene we see the Falcon land and Finn hops aboard a speeder bike and says "Wish me luck I'm back by night." We pan to a montage of Finn on the speeder reflecting back to the moment Rey was on hers. After that Finn stops next to a cave and enters. We switch back to Poe and Chewie yelling at each other while playing Dejarik as R2 and BB-8 snicker at C-3PO's attempt at translating Chewie's growling. Finn enters the Falcon as Poe asks "You find what you were looking for?" And Finn replies "yes." A montage of Finn working on something starts and as he finishes he picks up a hunk of metal resembling a shorter version of Rey's staff, Finn flips a switch on it igniting an Amethyst glow as we get a close up on his eyes. We pan back to see an Amethyst blade being emitted and awed by the crew as Poe asks "What now?" and Finn replies "We need to find Ben." And it cuts to the credits.
I think Finn should be related to Mace Windu in someway. I know it might make the universe feel smaller than it is, but I think it would be cool! Especially when you learn Mace is John Boyega's favorite character.
This. I like this.
I like everything except for the whole Mace Windu relation to Finn thing. I feel as if that’s a) on the nose and b) him, Finn, and Lando are like the only important poc in the series so doing that is like “seriously?”
You had me till part 3. That is waaaaaay too much to pack into a denouement of a very packed movie
Also... black people don't all know each other. Cmon
Honestly I don’t hate any Star Wars movies I just like some preferred to others
Shloomy Sloms the only really bad ones for me is Rouge One, Phantom Menace, and Attack of the Clones
The Fat Piranha Plant rouge one was bland
this rewrite is so good and satisfying, I want to punch JJ for not giving us this awesome finn
I fucking love this. I especially like how you kind of explained how Luke decided to kill Ben bc of Palpatine. Also giving him a white lightsaber was fucking awesome. Amazing video, man!
Hey thanks for making this. I like your vision and that both Rey and Ben survive. I think using Palpatine's lightsaber to a greater degree to draw Rey towards darkness would be interesting. Maybe the Skywalker lightsaber actively decays and she is forced to use Palps saber at some point. I dunno, everybody could nitpick small details like crazy. That's why making movies is such a long process.
Imagine that, combined in the fight on the Death Star where potentially her anger gets ahold of her and we even see the blue Kyber Crystal bleed out. (Maybe not red, but like orange potentially). Would be such an awesome detail and could even give Kylo more reason for his redemption. Plus it could tie into Reys Dark Side vision in TLJ
31:38 That’s such an amazing way to show Ben’s inner conflict!
I don’t know how you do it, but each of these rewrites improves the movie in almost every way, your writing talent is truly untapped.
Huge fan of the channel, I can't wait for this. Keep working hard man
"Finn and Poe are gay for each other and it would piss off all the right people"
YOU SIR, ARE MY NEW HERO!
Wow this is very nice even the "revival" of palpatine was wonderfully done
Really cool! Personally I have my ideas, but they always end up including a partial of total rewrite of the whole trilogy. The fact that TFA and TLJ are so completely disconnected from one another is always there preventing Ep IX from being truly good. Because a good final chapter can’t be so without solid and coherent foundations.
Any rewrite with Ben Solo living is perfect 👌🏾 Well done.
Wow man this is amazing. I'm studying to be a film maker but I'm struggling with getting ideas and watching this brings my confidence down 😂. Honestly this is what the movie have should been
this rewrite is amazing and would have been a great way to continue from episode 8 and end the story. great job.
14:50 😂😂You were really doing it Palpatine impression... Should have continued!
Still waiting for TASM 2 🙄🤷🏼♂️
He said if this does well, he’ll start it
What is that?
@@mr.mcweasel6257 the amazing Spider-Man 2 i guess
The rise of skywalker, more like bore ragnarok
Tros is fun to watch. But damn does it have problems
It looks nice but thats about it
elven prince Honestly Last Jedi looked way better the cinematography wasn‘t that good in RoS
This was such a perfect finale! Incredible job, man. I was going to try this myself and got intimidated 😅
My goodness. Keeping Palpatine in the movie already feels like trying to attempt this re-write on hard mode, and you made it work. Brilliantly.
Personally if your gonna make Poe and Fin gay I would do it from the start in The force awakens but otherwise great video 👍🏻
Did you have a problem with them making Rey and Kylo straight without doing it from the start in The Force Awakens?
@@alexbennet4195 dude stfu
@@louisbolger4239 no u
@@alexbennet4195 got me there
I think I just got my dad into this channel 😂
I think Rey should go to Illum for a crystal, not just having a cave in Ach-to
An idea for the knights of REN.
Maybe, to draw parallels with fin, the nights of den are trainees of Luke like Ben that he convinced to turn to the dark
I personally like the idea of kylo having a white lightsaber, but maybe he could have a purple one, or both...
Idk
I'm so surprised actually that no one said that the "Star Wars" are over in the movie
Another great video man, I really enjoy your rewrites and you’ve been a huge inspiration in me doing my own as a fun writing exercise. Keep up the great work!
Since you're stuck on an opening crawl, may I suggest this (I'm also changing the title because for it to work, Rey has to call herself Skywalker which is dumb in so many ways):
Episode IX - The Will of the Force
The rebellion is reborn! Luke Skywalker's heroic sacrifice has sparked an uprising against the First Order and is restoring hope to the dwindling Resistance.
To quell the fires of rebellion, the First Order double down on their attacks and soon, the war reaches a stalemate which no side can break.
Seeking a way to destroy the Resistance, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren travels to Mustafar to find a new weapon that can turn the tides of battle once and for all...
Actually, I have an idea on how to make 'The Rise of Skywalker' work. When Rey visits the prison, it turns out the prison is now in the Jedi Temple on Coruscant where Rey is leading a new order of Force Users called 'Skywalkers', those who use a more balanced side of the Force.
@@joelmole3157 Bit late, but I think that’s what Troyo was implying with the ‘I’m a Skywalker’ line in the fight with Sidious.
46:52 ok now that’s adorable
IKR
Ben surviving also technically reopens most of Star Wars Legends because the Skywalkers don’t all die
Wouldve been cool if Palpatine wasnt alive but was using a sith technique called Dark Phantom. Essentially the ability allows the force user performing it to make an object influence people, whether it is emotionally or physically. Similar to the hocruxes in Harry Potter
I cannot thank you ENOUGH for cutting the Rey-Kylo kiss. Not only did it have no build up and it was purely fan service, but canonically, KYLO IS REY'S NEPHEW
Wait what
@@monsoon1303 due to a canon comic palpatine is confirmed to be anakins father, making Rey kylos aunt
One minor thing I would change is with C3PO knowing about Exegol, instead of him just having a direct message from Palpatine stored on him, practically confessing to something shady, have it be a little more vague at first. Like, they ask him if he knows anything about a planet called Exegol, and he goes "Well, of course, after all, as a protocol droid, I contain a database of information on all known planets in the galaxy. Exegol is-" and then he cuts off with the red eyes, and goes into a different voice; "The information you are attempting to access has been classified to level 10 clearance, by special order of Supreme Chancellor Palpatine. This incident will be reported to the nearest Republic Security Officer. Remain in your current location. Clone Troopers will arrive shortly to bring you in for questioning."
This keeps the same plot beat, of C3PO having something hidden in his memory from his time in the Republic, but it isn't Palpatine having his plans just lying around in any old droid. He would've actually orchestrated things such that anyone who learns of, or starts asking about Exegol gets dealt with. The flaw he didn't account for was his own death; and the fact that eventually the Empire would collapse and anyone who tries to ask about Exegol would just get a blatant obvious warning sign that it's something Palpatine wanted hidden.
Then, when his memory unlocks, suddenly he gets back a lot of his CW-era memories, but also that more restricted information. Exegol, yes, but there's also a bunch of other stuff hidden behind the same encryption. All the times Palpatine needed a translator when making some back-alley deals, and wiped their memory of it right after.
I would've just left kylo as a villain.
Rey with no heritage.
No leia.
Fin and rose resolution.
Poe new general.
No palpatine.
Thank you for this, it's so much better and actually made me nostalgic and it had heart to it. 🙏
Man, this rewrite is way better than the rewrite I was attempting to do. Good job, man. Good job.
Damn this was the best rewrite for this movie I've ever heard. Only problem is Ben's redemption was a little rushed to me
Can’t wait to see what your opinion is you have very good points and valid story arcs in your rewrites
The kylo white saber lowkey gave me chills
"We Dont Fuck with Bitches"- Troyoboyo17 (Fanboy Rewrites "Star Wars: The Rise Of Skywalker")
This is brilliant and I can not fathom how amazing it is that you managed to explain LUKE SKYWALKER trying to KILL his NEPHEW. That was great. The on negative thing would be that if Rey truly is a nobody, how is she so gifted and powerful without ANY training? I know this is mainly TFA and TLJ fault but considering this is the last movie it would be nice to have it answered. Still so much better than what we got.
“You’re afraid of being ashes. You’re afraid of being forgotten. And you will be forgotten, Sidious. Because of ME. I am vengeance. I am the night. I AM REY SKYWALKER!”
I cracked up at Eddie Brock being garbage
Great video, the only thing I disagree with is I would skip Rey using force lightning at all, since in lore it is stated that force lightning is an ability that requires years of training in the dark side, so it really doesn’t make sense that Rey can just accidentally use it just because she had some vision.
the rewrite side of the force is a power many would consider to be... UNATURAL
Hey Troyboyo17, I hope you can fix more movies such as Spider-Man 3, TASM 2 and 3, X-Men 3, X-Men: Origins Wolverine, X-Men: Apocalypse, X-Men: Dark Phoenix, Fantastic Four, etc.
Amazing Spider-Man 3 never came out
Movieman Studios I know
Wow. Ive been doing my own rewrite of this film (and subsequently, the sequel trilogy) but, in the best and most complimentary way possible, this video really puts me off. This is so good and genuinely is a more engaging and enjoyable story than what we got. Ive been a subscriber for a long time and im so glad i found your work my dude! Fantastic job!
I honestly feel like Anakin Skywalker should’ve had a bigger role. In the Clone Wars series, it was indicated in season 3 that he was indeed the chosen one, which is carried on in episode 6 when he saves Luke from palpatine and ultimately kills him. Anakin should’ve had a bigger role in this. Maybe he motivates rey or redeems Kylo ren, but either way, not only would it be faithful to the prequels and anakin skywalker, it would just be cool in general.
Instead of Nate, call him Gary and let him be played by Keegan Michael Key. The Robot Chicken joke will finally come full circle.
Also I don't know if I'd have Rey say the "I'm a Skywalker!" Line, like I love it, but I think personally it should come from Ben. Because Ben wanted to be a Vader, but he finally realizes that his tru place is to be a Skywalker. Idk that's how I read the situation.
i remember distinctly, when i watched RoS with my fiancee in theaters, because of our humor at the time we laughed our asses off at the bass-boosted force lightning that palpatine shot into the sky. the film really had a way of bringing people together
33:09 Dude that’s clever!!! A white crystal is a cured red crystal!!! Brilliant!!
it would be better if they let adam driver say the fuck word
This should be the rise of Skywalker version of the Zack Snyder cut.
I like how the Final order takes inspiration from the Thrawn Trilogy with clones and a secret fleet
I died when I heard the ringtone at 21:43
I know a lot of people had problems with the force Skype thing in TRoS, mainly how the rules work with someone interacting with the others environment if they can’t even see it, but I like to think that it’s caused by their sabers, an extension of themselves, comes in contact with each other and while they’re still touching they come in contact with something in the others environment, such as when they clash blades and fight against the binded sabers and they crash their blades into the Vader pedestal, causing for it to maybe come in contact with Kylo’s blade before hitting the ground in front of Kylo because his lightsaber touched the helmet last. Same with the back of berries going from Kijimi to the Star Destroyer. I used that theory with my TRoS Upgrade where I took the existing story and improved on it rather than rewrite it entirely (mostly using the novel for extra info that would’ve been nice to get in the movie, which results in a script for TRoS that would probably be 3 hours or longer if it was real) and what I did was something really cool, where I had Kylo fighting the knights of Ren, and I mean an actual fight not a beat down before another beat down after Kylo gains the upper hand, but basically after Rey takes out the Sith Trooper Guard dudes, she senses that Kylo is in danger and turns behind her, shouting out Ben’s name and thrusting the saber through the air at seemingly nothing (a lot like her training throw from earlier) and Kylo, in the long vast entrance hallway about 60 feet away with a dozen walls in between the throne room and him, turns to see the saber flying out of Rey’s hand towards him. The knights of Ren obviously can’t see Rey or the Saber because they can’t see the Skype, they prepare to attack Ben but he just ducks down, reaches towards Leia’s lightsaber (I gave Rey her yellow lightsaber for the whole movie rather than just the ending, but I think I’d like it if it was a brighter blue color with an unstable blade to reflect Kylo’s, also because the crystal broke. No force healing crystals, unless Rey And the crystal are a Dyad which is what I used to have Rey able to heal Kylo and vise versa. Also instead of healing the serpent Rey just used the force to connect with it, you know, like Ezra did, without needing an ability that breaks all of Star Wars as a whole. Anyways, Kylo reaches out to his mothers saber and just barely taps the bottom of the hilt, causing it to appear in front of Vicrul Ren the second Ben’s finger stops touching it, impaling right through the Knight’s chest. Boom. Then Ben forces
It back to his hand and the fight commences as Rey rushes to join him and we get a reflection of the Snoke’s Throne Room seen only now Ben and Rey are fighting with the same end goal.
I’d love to see you prewrite Kang Dynasty and Secret Wars and even Indiana Jones 5
To be honest i can tolerate almost everithing in a star wars movie, jar jar binks, the sand pick up line no problem, i loved han solo, i did not like the last jedi but i did not hated it. But the reylo thing that did make me abandon this three movies, in a awful teenager romance movie that i will never see its ok, but in star wars no.
@Casanova Frankenstein I would've preferred rey and finn but not because of "diversity" but because it makes more sense for her to fall for him instead of a mass murdering eradic manchild. And she is a Mary Sue
I actually got chills when Ben turned on his white lightsaber
You can't just do one good deed and die a hero
Anakin: am I a joke to you
This is basically where it looked like the canon material *was* setting up and I love it
I'm with you for most of this, the whole thing until relationship thing never really clicked with me I just think they're friends and that's fine because people need friends, but a lot of remarks in this movie give me the impression you might be a bit of a movie Bob fan
I really really really liked this version and the messages you created.
If only time travel exists today. When I watch the Star Wars marathon I'm gonna watch your video instead of the movie.
Imma do the exact same thing
I feel like it would've been cool for Kylo to live and Rey to die because he would have to live with the pain of everything he did, he feels responsible for her death and he has to rebuild the jedi order. Mind you I'm saying this about the actual movie not this rewrite.
Great Rewrite of the Rise of Skywalker, although one thing does bother me: Rey’s new lightsaber. It just looks weird to me. Why not have the saber more like Cal Kestus’s lightsaber he builds on Ilum? It would look more simpler and cooler in my mind.
Why would palpatines skull still be in tact? He was incinerated
The E P I C N E S S of Ben and Rey fighting with the ghosts of the Jedi past. GAAH.
You should do commentary tracks for the Sam Raimi Spider-Man movies. I love your ones for Into the Spider-Verse and The Spectacular Spider-Man.
I mean as much as i like The Rise Of Skywalker i still want them to re-do the movie.
"it's easier to fix something rather than create something from scratch"
- White Raven
also I love how you kept the redemption with how the world and this universe would treat kylo after the redemption
I really don’t like this rewrite but I love the amount of effort you put into this. I can tell you’re super passionate about this. So good job
This is off topic but what are your thoughts on the Justice League Snyder Cut? Will it replace the theatrical version? And will start back up the original plans for the DC movies?
Great video, the film should have been called The Rise of the Skywalkers as the Skywalker Order is the new group of force users that replace the flawed Jedi Order.
I got chills when you said I am a Skywalker
This is a great script! The only things I would change are making Ben’s lightsaber color Purple. While technically purging the evil from a bled crystal would be white, I thought it would be be a nice touch for with their connection Rey and Ben’s lightsaber crystal to be complement colors, to symbolize their rare connection in the force.