The Rise of Skywalker Backstabbed me, so I Reworked the Whole Sequel Trilogy - Star Wars
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Why is the video a year old and this comment 3 hours
i honestly thought when phasma got the saber she ws going to use it on herself
Bruh, you're a better director than the Disney ones
There's still some bad writing in this version, the things you left in specifically.
The lightspeed ram is absolutely a plot hole.
It will always frustrate me how so many genuine fans can write better plots *IN THEIR SPARE TIME* than the people who are paid *MILLIONS* for this shit.
ruclips.net/video/fe-SZ_FPZew/видео.html from 16:20 actually has a decent explanation for this.
@@Pikrioling thanks for linking that video, I'm glad I made it down here. Definitely an interesting watch!
It’s easy to rewrite a movie but none of us could ever write a good movie.
Ever hear the phrase "hindsight is 20/20"? That's what's happening here. It's a lot easier to take an existing piece of media and make it better than to make an entirely new piece of media from scratch.
@@PlayerZeroStart That and maybe not switching director in the middle of a trilogy and then kicking one of your protagonists to the curb.
"Finn has learned mainly through theory and improvisation"
Finn is a jazz Jedi
*(Jizz music starts)*
*Cantina music Plays with Jazz Overtones*
ruclips.net/video/K9OFa_Od-78/видео.html
Jazzy Jedi
Ya like jazz?
Thats actually kinda cool since African Americans Created jazz as a new wave kinda music and finn in this version would be the new wave of jedi.
I like how in this version Finn cares for storm troopers rather than yelling “WOOOOOOO” whilst killing many storm troopers
Yeah. He looks so traumatized when the storm trooper died on his arms on his first appearance that I thought it would be an interesting character arc revolving around perspective of war (kinda like what the video explores). Too bad they did him dirty
@@VValunt disney had one good idea/twist in the sequels but even that they destroyed. The sequels are a war between 2 directors wanting to do their version. So they kinda sabotage each other
"Oh, hey Gary. Remember all of our poker games, how good friends we were? So anyway..."
*starts blasting*
Seriously. 😢
“This is like fanfiction. But making the movie just better in general”
I literally only clicked onto this video bc I had to say that that’s what a “fix-it-fic” is called.
Exactly. Its fucking 2023 guys. Are we still playing the "NO, my thing-that-is-derived-from-an-existing-creative-property can't be _fanfiction._ That would make me a _loser._ " game? People really have no idea what fanfic - the GOOD shit - can be.
I don't think it was anti fanfic in fact the opposite. It was saying I'm not doing enough for this to be fanfic because I'm just fixing the movie not writing my own stuff.
@@MEG4nerd You know that some people write fanfics and headcanons in bullet points right? It’s still fanfic
@@primroseprom I'm well aware. I'm not saying I agree. I'm just saying the statement wasn't anti fic. It sounded like he didn't see his work at the level of what he considers fanfiction.
@@MEG4nerd I never said nor implied that the comment itself was anti fanfic. Just that it *is* fanfiction
It helps me sleep at night knowing that this is star wars canon in a parallel universe.
Only thing I didn't like is that star wars has never had in-movie-narration. So it was weird.
@@cynical-bastard5463 It could probably be worked around in some way
The cool thing is, is that it’s good, and fans can do what if’s; like: what would happen if Phasma killed the last Jedi?
@@cynical-bastard5463 Could be fixed just by cutting to Rey alone in her hovel talking to a droid she put together or something.
Liam Dysart I agree that it’s disorganized. But everyone except George and Dave; are fans making movies lol. Sequels should have been organized.
This whole video is just, "Fine, I will do it myself."
“They called me a madman” -Uniquenameosaurus
a small price to pay for salvation
Disney: makes a bad trilogy
Uniquenameosaurus: Reality can be whatever I want
"What did it cost?"
@@jakemunoze7430 Zachary's thing
Bit late, but making Rey a force plague is genius. Her subconscious actively fighting her is such a cool idea
Bit late, but I appreciate your comment.
@@pixelprincess9 embarrassingly fast reply, thanks
She's definitely a plague.
Rey thinking she's Luke's daughter is *such* a good change. And her actively chasing her family is a great change! This is more realistic as adopted children even those who get adopted by great families can still feel that curiosity and pull towards seeing why their origional families gave them up
I LOVE how Finn is an actual character in this one.
Matthew Housham they waisted John Boyega. He is an excellent actor and could’ve been a great character
They did Boyega dirty.
you mean yelling "REEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEY!!!" for 3 films isnt a character trait?
I love how everyone is actually a character in this one.
There was a scene in The Last Jedi where Finn was an actual good character, but of course the cut it. Because reasons.
Last Jedi: Rey is a nobody.
Rise Of Skywalker: JK, she’s a Palpatine.
Also Rise Of Skywalker: That doesn’t matter though.
Last Jedi: Anyone can be a powerful Jedi
Rise of Skywalker: Only the descendants of force-users be powerful jedi
Also Rise of Skywalker: But you still gotta call yourself a Skywalker
Leia: Rey. Never be afraid of who you are.
*Rey finds out she's a Palpatine*
Old Lady: There’s been no one for so long. Who are you?
Rey: I’m Rey.
Old Lady: Rey who?
Rey: Rey Skywalker.
Notice a trend?
It wasnt jj abrams fault tho. He wanted rey to be someone else. Its just that rian johnson fucked it up
@@adamw5397 Rise of Skywalker: a super powerful evil force user can be created from a clone vat
The reveal that Luke has been dead this whole time is BRILLIANT and explains everything of his absence.
Would’ve loved to see Finn as a turned storm trooper who was still very deadly and tactical minded, but slowly sheds those attributes through the the trilogy. Like yes, he turns after not obeying orders in TFA, but he still keeps his hardened exterior until he learns to relax and have a good time with his friends. You could’ve had a lot of content with Finn if they kept his character grounded in that reality. How he doesn’t quite mesh with the civilian world but he’s trying to cope with not being in a strict regime anymore. He slowly relaxes and makes jokes, but still retains his ability to snap into action like he was trained. He would not be a bumbling idiot. Just simple things like that could’ve given him depth and uniqueness
I'm picking up what you're putting down. I still really like what was done with him in this rewrite though.
That's exactly what I thought we would have as soon as I saw him take off his helmet in the trailer. Instead, they wrote him like he never received any combat training at all. I think he drops his firearm three times in _The Force Awakens_, and each time he needs it a few moments later.
I'm not a soldier, I won't pretend to know what it's like to be one. However, I do know that boot camp has a lot of drills on weapon maintenance, probably to instill in the recruit a sense of care around the weapon. To use a Star Wars quote: This weapon is your life.
A perfect character to reflect the ww2 theming of Star Wars, covering the effect warfare has on people who participate in the regimes, or even more specifically how the Wehrmacht soldiers had to deal with knowing their entire worldview crumbled in front of them, and their horrific acts made obvious.
If the first movie was set as to show the rise of the first order (not just a 5 min scene of blowing up the new republic) then we could see Finn break away and have to deal with the acts the first order we’re doing to enslave worlds
Idk man most stormtroopers in star wars seem pretty laid back and chill but also dumb lol
@@lolpancakecat thats other media making them dumb, even though in the OT they were actually equal to marines
The plot twist of Luke being dead would be unreal in cinemas.
The reaction would probably be equivalent to “I am your father”
honestly i think that was one of my favourite additions lmao
Especially that speech he gives Kylo. Aaaahh
That twist literally gave me more chills than all of the sequels
Also it makes f*cking sense.
“No, you’re The Last Jedi.”
It didn’t think it could be done, but you just made that scene good. I proudly present to you the Star Wars medal of honor.
That part in this version gave me the chills. Maaan, this star wars I would have enjoyed so much
A Male i agree
Lmao when I saw the movie in the theater my mother she actually said that "you are" the last jedi when kylo said he will have killed the last jedi
This comment reminds me of a Rimjob Steve. Heartfelt messages from questionable sources
No, I’m your last Jedi.
No, you’re the last Jedi.
"I come from a matched set of millions, but I'm still here... aren't I" is such a great line and would have been an amazing piece of characterization for Finn in the actual trilogy. He doesn't care about his upbringing, he just cares about being better and making his own decisions
Having finn be the main character of the trilogy is a fantastic choice
Especially since he is the best actor of the three noobs.
@@mfaure420 excuse me? adam driver begs to differ
@@xanderkai6353 Kylo isn’t one of the three main characters though
@@matt8258 If u dont count Adam Driver, Oscar Issac is still better than Daisy Ridley or John Boyega
@@bror1645Daisy has potential. I think she was too new for the garbage direction given by the two boobs that ran the sequel trilogy
Snoke: You fool! I have 70 alternative accounts!
I'VE COME TO MAKE AN ANNOUNCEMENT: KYLO REN PISSED ON MY WIFE
Reminds me of Dorkness Rising. Relevant scene: ruclips.net/video/2Ohk5Swy-04/видео.html
WHO LEAKED MY CLONES ON KAMINO DOT COM??
XD YOU WILL NEVER KNOW MY MAIN
@@ShadowDuck7892 AND HE SAID HIS DICK WAS _this big_ AND I SAID, "That's disgusting!"
Rey: "What do you want to be?"
Kylo: "I...I want to be a radar technician-"
Named Matt
I haven’t had my muffin yet, Matt!
time to jam him!
A buddy of mine saw Kylo Ren in the showers. He said Kylo Ren had an 8 pack. That Kylo Ren was shredded.
@@arkhamjamesv you guys wanna see kylo ren’s lightsaber
Finn being a stormtrooper advocate makes him 50x more likeable.
The way Finn constantly goes "ok, I'm cool with this" is honestly very endearing
“Because Snoke gave me a choice” is honestly such a better reason for him to turn than just “oh he told me the dark side was better”
I still think it's a poor reason for him to kill the other students and Luke. Overall, I like it a lot, but I think if it were subject to adaptation, it would have to go through a lot of revision.
@@jairiske Maybe have Snokes “choice” be an empty promise. Snoke brings Kylo to the dark and then Snoke pries information about the Jedi Temple and Order out of Kylo and eventually destroys the Order himself. Then Kylo is mad since he didn’t actually want the Jedi Order to be destroyed as he still cared about them to a degree. This leads to him becoming more dark and powerful and this was Snokes plan.
Also it fits as a reference to the prequels because one of the biggest moral issues of the original Jedi was basically regular kidnappings for their recruitment.
I always thought it would have been better if he had fallen because of entitlement. He was taught from birth that being a Skywalker made him the main character of the universe and that everyone will make concessions for him because of what he is. He's so fascinated by Darth Vader because Vader is proof that a Skywalker can do whatever he wants and still be forgiven in the end. The mask and the name change could have been something forced on him by Snoke as part of the traditional Sith training method of taking away whatever the apprentice cares about most (in this case, his family name and a face that people recognize and defer to.) That would make him a living critique of Rey, who also defines herself entirely by what she is rather than what she does.
@@billvolk4236 That sound great, I love this
You wanna know what would’ve made Rise of Skywalker better?
If Palpatine told Rey the Tragedy of Darth Plagueis the Wise…
yes man that is great
Ahh my granddaughter, did Skywalker ever tell you the Tragedy of Darth Plagueis the Wise?
@Brock Liddicoat Yeah if they did that then for the entire sequel trilogy you would know that Palpatine was out there somewhere more than likely pulling the strings
strike me down and take your rightful place among the Sith!
never!
*dew it*
....I will not surrender to the Dark Side.
did you ever hear the tragedy of Darth Plagueis the Wi-
GIMME DAT FOLDING LIGHTSABER
I was gonna say a script is what the movie needed
AHA! You left the ending up to interpretation! You know that that means!!!
Finn: "What is your name?"
Rey:
*"JOHN CENA"*
*trumpet sounds*
I love how Finn wants to SAVE his former brothers in arms instead of just DESTROY those who hurt him.
What I love about this:
-Finn and Rey taking divergent paths. Rey is the naturally gifted one who feels she doesn't need training so she's unfocused while Finn doesn't have her knack for it but is far more disciplined so he becomes a Jedi first.
-On top of that, they sort of diverge on the paths of the Jedi, almost becoming the old video game split between Jedi Consular and Jedi Guardian. Rey the one with more raw power in the Force but not as impressive fighting techniques while Finn becoming the more physical, lightsaber duelist but with a weaker connection to the Force. At least at first for both of them.
-Finn being more reluctant to kill and having more visible sympathy for the Stormtroopers. Really makes him stand out as a character and makes him an even better candidate to be a Jedi.
-That Force Plague thing is a BRILLIANT way to head off the "Rey's a Mary Sue" bullshit by basically saying that she totally is but justifying how wrong and out of place it feels in-universe. That's devious!
-This version of Rose is so much more likable. And I didn't even hate her to start, but making her a kind of cool near human cyborg who's all book smarts but little practical experience who becomes an officer is a brilliant re-working of the character.
-Luke being dead . . . that just solves SO MUCH! (And again, I didn't hate his self-imposed exile as it was.)
-Phasma's "I fight for the strongest" mentality lends a lot of depth to her character and her redemption is almost as cool as Ben's.
-Kaminoan Snoke. Oh, that is so good. It's a great way to tie the entire franchise together instead of the new movies pretending the prequels didn't exist. Overall, Snoke is a much-improved version where he's kind of like Sidious but not exactly. Simply willing to martyr himself for his belief already makes him a far different antagonist.
-Giant Snoke final boss. I was so disappointed to find out he wasn't as big as advertised and the idea of fighting a giant with a lightsaber could lead to so many possibilities.
. . . Yeah, this was pretty much exactly what I wanted from the new trilogy.
I agree with all of this
It is fantastic, but giant clone snoke is a bit far
For the second paragraph, when you said Finn being the more physical, lightsaber duelist but with a weaker connection to the force. I couldn't help but think of Finn being some sort of Black Obi-wan, due to Obi-Wan not being as adept with the force as most Jedi yet it was his other qualities that made him a powerful Jedi.
It also keeps the Anakin's legacy of killing Sidious in tact and bringing balance to the force.
yeah the force plague thing is brilliant, i agree
I like the ending as her smiling and saying "Its Rey. Just Rey."
Kylo rey HUhEJUHEHUFE
Reyd shadow legends
Me too. It also would have contrasted the earlier scene in the film when that one villager asked her for her name and gave her the necklace.
I was hoping she said “just Rey.” In the end but nope
MikeydactylGaming, exactly! And that would show how she's grown. She's no longer desperate to belong to something larger than herself (like a family) but is instead happy to discover who Rey can now become.
I think this firmly shows, that almost anyone can write the Sequel Trilogy better than Disney can
For the most part it's just this guy and a handfull of others. Most of the "re-writes" done by famous youtubers are arguably just as bad as the actual sequels.
@@waywardjoker6061Yeah, it's usually them wanting to add the Yusha val or something (the bio tech invaders) or some shadow sith Lord that turns Rey into a daughter or something.
@@waywardjoker6061Yeah, it's usually them wanting to add the Yusha val or something (the bio tech invaders) or some shadow sith Lord that turns Rey into a daughter or something.
@@supersani21 it's Yuuzhan Vong, but yeah
The Force Plague is an utterly terrifying concept, and Kylo describing her as an anomaly that shouldn't exist actually frightened me. (Though it was probably the VHS glitches are made me jump-I've been watching too much analogue horror.)
I'm sorry, I'm just stuck imagining Daisy Ridley in a Kylo Ren costume trying to impersonate the 6'2 hulk that is Adam Driver.
so doesnt need to impersonate him well with her force fuckery
De evil and mini me 😂
I’m just imagining daisy Ridley in the kylo suit walking in on Ben swollow
I'm imagining how badass a female Kylo Ren suit would look, and how how badass Daisy would be in it.
@@mattgolka6266 also he has been shown to be unstable so it's not like the strom troopers will comment on it.
"The emperor has no clothes" sorta thing.
I'm impressed, you made Rose actually a character worth caring about.
Yep i actually liked this Rose alot more
He.... deleted rose completely and made a new character with the same name....
@@SirKotok That's like deleting three lines of dialogue and a sentence of description that just reads: "she likes resistance and hate rich people" so I don't think there was much to delete
"I know thousands of ways to kill you"
They said it couldn’t be done
I like the idea of Rey having a more force-heavy fighting style, with Kylo’s being more brutal. What if Rey had a technique where she made a lightsaber float and fight on its own alongside her, like Kylo Ren’s sword?
it'd be awesome if her style was like darth trayas from kotor 2
This is an actual style of lightsaber fighting, it was mostly used by a jedi of the same race as Yoda, he also used a saber that the blade was basically invisible, its crazy, look it up
Like Jedi fallen order
Just like Kreia
I guess you could say she would like, Kreia Skywalker
I didn’t like the fact that multiple clones of Snoke showed up at the same time, but other than that, this is masterful. I think you accomplished your goal. Also, that tiny gripe could probably be fixed just by making them all visually distinct. Extra limbs, extra noses, different heights or stances, whatever. Absolutely bang-up job, sir!
The cloning area was already shown producing imperfect clones, and Snoke having a nose and fucked up body would lean into that. I'd assume his real body, the giant, probably looks closer to an actual Kaminoan
I thought the final battle seemed bad? Like 3 people against a group of knights and clones? Seems really chaotic. I think they should beat the knights and then they each have to fight a clone. I think this scene should happen at the same time as Phasma killing Snoke and finishing her arc. THEN after they kill the clones AND the knights, there will be a real version of snoke that they each have to fight. I like the idea of them fighting each other while this is happening, but it seems chaotic.
I also like the idea of Finn being a Jedi Master and Rey being the padiwan. And Kylo Ren putting storm troopers through rehabilitation and helping them not get brain washed like he did is PERFECT. This would of been 100 X better
@@dylansuperti214Yeah Uniquenameosaurus said he was just having fun with the last part (along with the giant Snoke lol). Probably also because he's mentally tired rewriting all of the sewuel. But hey, that's the reason why we need more than 1 writer (not to change the script completely like what Ryan and JJ did)
*SOMEBODY NEEDS TO ANIMATE THIS! WE'LL START A GO GO-FUND ME*
Yes please
Please for the sake of anything and everything
If someone reads this and makes it an animation please add rogue squadron with t70 x wings pleasseeeeee
problem is, is that even this script would also need a rewrite too. individual dialogue, gestures etc.
Maybe we can all pitch in? I have never led a project (and I can't with how poor my internet connection is) but I am willing to contribute in any way to those who are reading this. I can animate and/or make music.
"According to the archives, you are basically a jedi"
"IMPOSSIBLE! Perhaps the archives are incomplete!"
if an item doesnt appear in our records irt does not exist!
"if its not in our records, it does not exist"
So what you are saying is that the improved ST has more meme potential? Considering the lack of memes from the actual movies and the straight up better plot (that with the exception of character personality and lore changes works with what we got as a basis) I’m fairly certain that this was the trilogy in a likely far better then our own alternate universe. But then again that universe might not have Mando so...
Cole Dewey if parallel universes are a thing, which they probably are, then you’re most likely correct
Prequels always found its way to be memable. George is an absolute madlad.
kylo calling rey an anomaly literally gave me goosebumps despite there being no auditory buildup to it/ considering i didnt get goosebumps watching any of the sequels, this shows this is a significant improvement
2 changes I'd make:
Finn has a white saber, canonically they are kyber crystals that were purified from the dark side, metaphor for him turning Ben and Rey to the light.
Rose is not force sensitive but has a yellow saber once used by Temple Guards, since she is the closest thing to one so Rose teaches Finn additional/advanced forms of saber combat that she had stored in from Cin Drallig's notes (nice little name drop)
I’d also like to make a change. I would like to make Poe and Chewbacca go on a separate mission in hopes of finding Lando. Finding Lando is how they learn about Snoke having clones and how to defeat them. They then go to find Finn, Rey, and Kylo to warn them. I hope that they gun the Giant version of Snoke down in the final battle in the Falcon but idk. I also hope to see more scenes with BB8.
this rewright makes the black man the hero, so disney would never allow it.
@@coreyander286 Either that or he's saying a black hero would not sell in china and disney is made of greedy snakes. Which is factually true.
@@coreyander286 Disney is absolutely not woke. They are "fake woke" like jk Rowling or your average wine mom.
Not that it matters because most "woke" people hate black men too. Why do you think they never complain about prison rates or the war on drugs? They want victims, and black men don't read as victimized
@Napo ski and the only black Male romantic lead spent the whole film as a frog.
@@marvalice3455 REY! REEEEEEEY!!
They would do it if he was gay😂
I like how Uniquenameosaurus came out of nowhere after 6 months
and just dropped us his 2nd longest video made yet
Hasn't he been streaming every week? I distinctly remember seeing his streams pretty often. Maybe I imagined that...
Imean he was in the Nux Taku video
Now that's an artists dedication right there.
I'm just glad he's back.
Well, he might have been working on this video for a while
I really like the subversion of Luke being dead the whole time. Totally explains everything AND made me gasp with surprise and awe. Beautiful
It feels even better than him just force projecting, he became powerful enough to be a force ghost that effortlessly passed for a living Jedi
@@harbour2118 Yes!
I think that having the junk trader be the same species as watto could be a good idea because that could be a good way to explain why her “charms” won’t work on him just like how the Jedi mind trick qui-gon used didn’t work on watto
Watto's resistance to the Force wasn't a unique thing. The more different a person's mind is from the one influencing them, the harder it is to do. That's why Geonosians were considered effectively immune to mind tricks. This was also a learnable skill, as seen with Cad Bane requiring 3 Jedi (and quite a bit of mental anguish) to crack.
I'm not saying he couldn't be a Toydarian, but it wouldn't be a requirement.
Rey: "what do you want to be?"
Kylo: "I...I want to be a chef-"
shokugeki no kylo, otherwise known as starfood wars
you go chef kylo
Gordon Ramsay (Star wars addition):”YOUR COOKING SUCKS AND YOUR TERRIBLE AT EVERYTHING YOU F***ING MORON! WHERES THE BLUE MILK”
@@silvertheelf WHERE'S THE BANTHA SAUCE?
@@euandunbar8050 oh no that's too cursed please no
"You shouldn't go alone!"
Fin: "I won't, I'll have Ben and Rey."
I love how FREAKEN cheeky Fin is in this version, SO ADORABLE.
This is basically "Adventure Time" Finn.
Finn and rey but make it finn and jake
that would have been such an amazing line
Already liked this comment. But I needed a way to double like it. So..... I present all the thumbs up. I am a huge fan of characters that act cocky and cheeky but are still humble and good natured
this is just perfect for john boyega! i wish he'd gotten this version of the role
I like how this rewrite didn’t really CHANGE the sequels but just took a different approach on generally the same plot, which almost frustrates me because it just shows that the plot was there and in good taste and makes me wish even more that I could see the sequel story executed correctly
I'll be honest I think Rey saying "Nobody" at the end of the last scene would be a nice and neat way to wrap up her character arc
Well the cool thing is, since it cuts that would be an equally valid interpretation. I could see MANY internet debates sparking up as to whether she would say “Rey” or “nobody” in the last scene
Uniquenameosaurus: *"Force Plague"*
Everybody liked that
Thats why hes the unique name o saurus
Reminds me of The spell plague from dnd
*420 likes*
Force Plagueis
Viljami Puumala Hell yeah
Rey being an anomaly (but not the Dyad in the Force bullshit, a straight up, horrifying anomaly with powers nobody should have) is great, Finn being rewriten to show actual empathy towards the troopers and being the real Last Jedi is amazing (and boy, you managed to make Rose relevant AND to make her sacrifice actually meaniningful, I'm impressed) but Luke being a Force Ghost the whole time is freaking perfect. It makes so much more sense.
Absolutely agreed! His script is fantastic. Especially comparing to what we actually have. Now my soul has found peace as this puts everything in its places and I consider this rewriting my personal canon.
@@OneNamelessHero Same! I squealed giddily at that scene when Finn is proclaimed the "last Jedi" by Rose.
Not to mention having Luke already be dead would leave the fans dying to know how he... well... died. Nothing like spin-off series satiate Disney's sales fix.
@@nix8666 he says that in this version Luke died during the Kylo Ren attack on the temple
@@OneNamelessHero same
Rose in this version really be like, “I’m fluent in over 3 million ways of kicking your ass.”
Ok but what if Leia is the one to do the hyperspace ram, thus immortalizing her as a war hero willing to make the ultimate sacrifice to save the cause
👌
Perfect
You'd need to switch around some of the setup to make the scene between her and Luke still work but yeah on paper that would be brilliant.
@@goldenhorde6944 she could come back as a force ghost
@@pogstache No, please. Leia force ghost makes literally zero sense.
@@godspeedhero3671 why? She is force sensitive and can learn that from Luke.
This is like fanfiction. But making the movie just better in general
A fanfiction of a fanfiction.
What do you think the purpose of fanfiction is?
@@MxPokirby Parings basically lol
@@7DeadlyJinxs Bad Fanfiction yes, Good Fanfiction no. Good Fanfiction is basically just a good/interesting alternative Story with thought and effort behind it using preestablished assets. Story Kitbashing if you will^^
yeaaah it’s a video form fix-it fic
Luke actually being a ghost the whole time was more emotionally impactful and surprising than anything in the Disney Trilogy. Making a new threat while using stuff we know about already was great. You undid the "Rey is a mary-sue" problem in an amazing way. Great job.
Literally all it took was a proper character flaw. In this case, she's involuntarily toxic to those around her.
This rewrite actually made Finn (which already was my fave character in the sequals) into an ACTUAL character, WHILE keeping the protag role.
Also this probably would've given the actor for Finn some respect.
I would like to point out that what you've designed is a story that is pushed by its characters rather than its writers. By making the characters in the story real characters and causes the story to go in a different direction. The original sequel trilogy was pushed entirely by the writers and therefore sucked because it was supposed to happen and not because the characters caused it to happen. Your version feels very character driven which makes it satisfying also I feel like it breaks way less of the established rules of the Star wars franchise.
Sadly the hyper space ram seems here to stay, but I can think of a few ways to make it work. In particular when it is pulled out of hyperspace by the mass shadow of the ship it hits we see it physically tear through the ship it hits, the reactors exploding all over the place and shrapnel tearing through the other ships at near light speed
"Why does that have to be a named character?"
This is Star Wars. *Everyone* is a named character. That lizard thing from Empire Strikes Back? Named character. The droid that blows up when Luke and his uncle buy R2? Named character. That one stormtrooper who says "Look sir, droids!" in the first movie? Named character.
It's pointless and dumb, but it's just what Star Wars is.
For those of you who think this is fake or something, look up Leeland Chi. He can literally name and place the backstory of just about every background character. I will say I personally enjoy it, though.
and then, there’s gonk droid
The guy who tries to sell deathsticks to Obi Wan has an entire backstory on how he redeemed himself and joined the rebellion once the empire rose
Yeah it's part of the fun. Looking up who these obscure characters are and figuring out their intricate backstories is great, really makes the universe feel alive.
@@kislayparashar thats all cuz obiwan made him go home to rethink his life.
Okay, here's a quick question: If Rey being a force plague makes everyone love her, why was she kicked out of the city? If you don't have an answer, here's how I think it would work: The force plague effects aren't permanent. If she stays with a person for long enough, it wears off, and that person has an opinion of her based on their own thoughts. My evidence for this is the alien salesman from the first movie. IIRC, he said "Your charms don't work on me anymore," implying they once did, but stopped. So what happened with Rey's rich adoptive parents was they were disgusted by her at first, and then her force plague abilities made them love her, but after a while, it wore off, and they were disgusted by her again, even moreso than before since she manipulated them and got everything dirty, so they, like Ben said, threw her out like trash. There's another level to this: Since the other characters still like her after the time the force plague effects would ware off, it proves that she is capable of making people genuinely like her without the force, and she's not just a manipulator.
That's a good idea, the fun thing about the force is you can use it to cover pretty much any plot hole. I have a few ideas on how that would work:
-Rey was just inexperienced and conflicted so the power wouldn't work forever
-Rey had some of the dark side in her the whole time, so her force connection to them would eventually give some of the dark side to them and make them hate her, which would explain why her parents stopped loving her even though they raised her and they should've grown to love her anyway
-Everyone has the force in them, so over time the force in them would try and resist the pull. But if she only has the light side or whatever was similar to them then the person would reach back at her in the same way. This would explain why her and Kylo had a connection (they were both conflicted) and why Kylo wanted to stay and rule with her without knowing her at all, and why Rey in turn wanted the same
Bruh how long did it take you to write this
@@agostinanapoletano3124 Enough time
I think they already explained it in the video that someone force sensitive enough eventually showed up and just called them out on it, causing everyone to realize they've been duped
There is still weight behind it working that way, because even after Finn gains resistance and Kylo just resists it outright, they still believe in Rey and she has genuine friendships
He alwaid did when Rey has flaceback she rember the junk traider saying your charm doesn’t work on me anymore
Rey being able to use the force from the beginning makes perfect sense as it establishes she has some experience with the fundamentals and makes her instant proficiency with mind tricks and force pushes less ridiculous.
I loved this so much.The only thing I would have changed was giving Poe more screen time but that's just because Poe is my comfort character and I love Oscar Isaac.
I love the concept of Zen Finn, he's so likeable and intriguing rather then a regular dude that screams "Rey!!!"
He sounded really cool, someone in between Qui Gonn and late clone wars Obi wan
Yeah seeing Finn just being chill about thinks when the situation is tense was pretty great.
Phasma: “I’m stronger than you and I’ll kill you”
Finn: “Alright, that’s ok”
Simon Dobrev yes!
The concept of Zen Finn does sound cool, but I just wanted to say I hate that everyone keep saying all he does is yell "Rey". He did it once in the first movie and I think twice in the last one. In those cases she was in danger and he was calling out for her so it made sense. Then again because the sequel trilogy really dropped the ball with his character after TFA that's all people remember him for and that's a shame.
@Alex Fiet I meant yelling her name when in danger. Not mentioning and or referring to her. This is a two minute compilation. Finn had way more screen time than that. And I mean his laser focus makes sense when you consider what's happening in those scenes and their friendship. I just think it sucks that because Finn got the short end of the stick in the last two films this is all anyone takes away from his character. I guess that was my main point. He does more than just that but this is all anyone remembers.
A New Hope:
"That's not a moon, it's a space station."
The Force Awakens:
"Thats' not a planet, it's a space station."
The Rise of Skywalker:
"That's not a fleet, *it's a fleet* "
The rise of Skywalker; "that's not a fleet, it's the Spanish armada. But in space"!
“Hmm, yes. The floor here is made out of floor.”
SuperStarDustElite425876 Floor equipped with Death Star lasers!
@@stardust27274 This made me lmao at 3am. What am I doing.....
@Alex Bibby No one expects the Spanish fleet!
The Poe and Chewie dynamic is fantastic, there's a level in skywalker saga where this plays out and I loved it.
Just dope, loved everything about this. Finn upgrade to an actual significant interesting hero, Rey having a legit dark side turn, reconnect to the Prequels (since this is a saga finisher) and just greatness all around. Thank you.
Ben: There was no one in second command.
Hux: *Well I'll just go and not be apart of the movie anymore, don't mind me*
I love the kylux presence in this comment section
@Ella Nolan #GingerLivesMatter
In concept art he killed him self with a purple blade...
I love how you turned the whole "Rey is a Mary Sue!" thing into an actual thing in the Force.
Remember how the Force is whatever the plot needs it to be? Well if Rey is a Mary Sue, explain it through the Force.
Fuck it sue through the roof if it gets good plot points
@@JakeSmith-mq5dc honestly a force plague is actually a unique method to create a dark side mind trick variant because it requires strong emotions to function and it might be forgotten like how sith lightning was forgotten to have a Jedi variant in universe
I never really saw Rey as a Mary Sue
@@catothatidiot5243 ?????????
The Rey force plague plot twist was amazing but it kinda fell apart in the third movie.
No joke that would have been amazing to see in the movies. Crazy how you made the whole Rey is a Mary Sue thing into an actual part of the story lmao.
All you would need to do is make the non-force sensitive clone/stormtroopers and Knights of Ren in the third movie completely useless against Rey and enable Rey to turn them from Snoke's side to her's in the 3-way battle going on.
There is a premise for "Force Plague" in Star Wars.
In KOTOR 2, Meetra Surik (the main character) can easily form Force Bonds with others which allows her, at an subconscious level, to manipulate them to fight for her regardless of their own choices. She takes this to the extreme with her mentor, Kreia, who can telepathically communicate with her and they can even feel each other's physical sensations (such as losing the other's hand).
@@JamesSamson487 and it woulda been ten times cooler if that gamde had good writing. Alas, we received a buggy, convoluted mess.
@@godspeedhero3671 It had great writing. What are you talking about?
@@JamesSamson487 He probably meant good gameplay.
I love how this makes Finn *and* Rey relevant in their own ways (not to mention sets them up as contrasting protagonists) instead of tossing one off to the side.
> im gonna be making Rey stronger
Me: wtf
> but gives her some really nice character development
Me: hm oook I dig it!!!
Brandon Willis of course you dig it, it is the way of right storytelling.
When he said Force Plague I was like HHHHHMMMM?
He also made kylo actually strong and finn aswell
When you said Finn is the last jedi, I got chills.
Spoiler lmao
@@_R_R_R Why are you in the comment section then.
Omg I did too! I never got that feeling from any of the sequel films, which proves how lazy and uninspired they were.
I do like the actual use of Finn being a jedi in this, I felt it was a wasted opportunity with what they showed him doing in force awakens
"Luke being a hermit IS unexpected, but it hurts his character investment."
That's actually a problem with The Force Awakens, not The Last Jedi. The entire plot of The Force Awakens is finding a map to find Luke. Based solely on what we know from TFA, SOMETHING caused Luke to withdraw from galactic society. SOMETHING caused him to do it in such a way that'd make him hard to find. SOMETHING caused him to turn his back on his friends. No matter what TLJ did, resolving those SOMETHINGs in a logical manner would piss off a lot of people.
The thing is, we didn’t know Luke was hiding and in Exile until TLJ, was Luke solving the misterios of the force? Was he finding a way to defeat the Darkness and make sure his fathers legacy lived for ever? Was he meditating on how to safe Ben? Or was he simply hiding from his problems? We didn’t know anything, TLJ showed his reasons to be there.
Yeah, the original plans for the trilogy always sounded more interesting for me. From what I recall, it takes place with Luke focusing on his new jedi order so he walks away from the lime light with the sequels focusing on Leia and her children. It would be a more political-centered movie with the new republic vs remnants of the empire vs Maul and his entire crime syndicate. I believe there's a star wars theory that goes into more detail.
@@Kendrone
There were no original plans for the trilogy. They went into it knowing they didn't have a concrete direction.
damn that’s SOMETHING
@@GlacialScion there was an original plan for the sequel trilogy, George Lucas wrote it when he sold star wars but it was basically ignored/immediately trashed
Dude this is what Finn should have been man. I always thought that Finn should have been a Jedi because him having been a storm trooper is such an interesting origin for a Jedi! But because I'm black, whenever I said this to anybody they just assumed I wanted a black Jedi, and not that like, you know, I want a better story lol
@Rtkts That's interesting cause I think it's the exact opposite. I feel like you still get that anyone can right their wrongs story with Finn, considering he's been a storm trooper since he was stolen as a child. He's for sure committed attrocities across the galaxy while being under the First Order. So the force could be a path to redemption for him. And in a film like star wars, shouldn't the ability to use the force not make or break a character? Half the people in the series are force sensitive, but that's usually not what fans like about the character. Most people I talk to thought that Rey was super boring and uninteresting, despite her being a force user, only finding interest in her backstory and origin. Finn has a great backstory, with moderate charisma when he's not just screaming "REY" at the top of his lungs lol. I think him being force sensitive can only enhance his character based on his past. Also I'm not like, saying you're wrong or that your opinion is unfounded, I'm just sharing my thoughts 🎷
@stockart whiteman While I agree with you, the scene with Finn on Takodana was so ruefully EPIC. it showed us what could've been. Finn being a jedi, or maybe Finn being a warrior with a lightsaber (my favorite lightsaber), withOUT the force, would both be cool, and obviously better. Finn being the second black jedi wouldve been a major point, and a stepping stone for more mature (as in, more developed, empathy wise). Rey could've been another jedi, or more of a wondering jedi, not by any code, while Finn is a true jedi or a warrior without the force
You either get an interesting diversity card from Disney or an interesting feminism card from Disney. In this case we got a main character with no soul, and finn and Ben having SO MUCH potential but they're ruined by bad writing and a horrible story. I thought fin was way more interesting.
Facts we only got Mace Windu
I think anyone that can admit this Trilogy is flawed (unlike those simping for this Trilogy, and calling anyone who disagreed a racist/misogynist/whatever) flawed but had potentially recognizes that Finn A) was the character with the most wasted potential, and by extension the most disappointing and B) should have had an arc involving the Force and at least been put on the path to becoming a Jedi.
Now this video has him opposing Rey, which is fine....but I think it would have worked with Rey not going fully to the Dark side, but just being more tempted by Kylo and Finn taking a more traditional light side path, which inspires Rey to come back and they team up or something
“No, you’re the last Jedi” chills literal chills
You’re*. I’m so sorry
ToonskieYT Ya boii it’s fine thank you for telling me, I’ll fix it ☺️
And, roll credits
Same here. I was like, "Ooooohhhh! That's good!"
Captain Bruh ploopy?🤣🤣
Snoke is very similar to funny valentine with being willing to dispose himself for his "greater good" in the same way that funny valentine died himself multiple times without having his conciousness transfered.
Snoke: I activate my stand [imperial march]
It's also very similar to the villain of DC legends season 6. Clones were previously established in a different season so they made the guy who invented the clones into a master manipulator who started out good and used cloning to prolong his life but isolation+ centuries of time passing made him all crazy. He also welcomes death and has many of them in that season because he believes all the clones made after his death to be the exact same as him
one of D4C's abilities was to transfer the consciousness of the other dead Valentine once the stand is passed over. Like for example when he was going through infinite rotation
@@tinygreencreature5167 CW Zoom in Season 2 be like
I just want to say, the "Luke was a force ghost all along" really got me. I don't know why, but I almost shed a tear at that part for some reason. Probably because it reminded me of the movie Sixth Sense. I honestly wasn't expecting it, and it was pretty damn cool.
That rose threatening Finn over a book scene made me love her while the actual movie made me hate her
I had the same problem with Rose as I did with Anakin. It's not the actor, it's the damn script.
Yeah I don’t get why they freed the animals, but not a bunch of child slaves.
@@pyroshayniac1090 This is the dumbest criticism of the movie. They’re trying to escape the police do you really think they have time to save some children while they’re at it? The animals help them escape the police and the children would hold them up. It’s not a case of “let’s save these animals and not these kids”.
@@pyroshayniac1090 freeing kids is much harder than freeing animals. The animals you can just release them into the wild and they'll be fine on their own, but the kids you'd have to take them somewhere else to prevent them from being caught.
Finn should of became a Jedi, imagine that. Former stormtrooper turn Jedi, absolutely perfect.
Absolutely.
@@BlueSkyBirdies blame fans (racist fans) and China for that
Have not of
They had possibly the _best_ character concept in Star Wars history, yet they threw it away. I’m glad Uniquenamosaurus was able to make use of it.
You know what really annoys me? They DO do this, but only in the spinoff material that happens AFTER RoS.
I love your backstory for Snoke, and how the First Order never dies. It makes sense and it's definitely Star Wars level weird.
I also love how you actually made Finn's past as a stormtrooper actually part of his identity! And how you made that grieving scene with Po and Chewie.. it's touching.
I really wish I had seen THIS version of the trilogy.
Or that it existed, but this is likely much harder to make than a typical fan edit.
Damn -Finn isn’t only a character, he’s the character that has some authority, AND is the one to change other characters. I LOVE that. And how Rey becomes this anti-hero character, too. You got my vote
Holy Crap. That twist with Rey genuinely gave me the chills, and I'm usually the type of person who HATES extreme twists in movies! IT would make tons of sense, and totally sounds like something that could happen with the force.
It is or well it was.
Spoilers for Kotor 2
That's exactly what the Main Character for Kotor 2 was
@@cyberninjazero5659 Yeah, which actually makes me LOVE that twist, I realized what it was (The fact she established a connection and got the person to obey when they reasonably shouldn't) means she's got what the Exile did.
And that would be fan service to those that played Kotor 2 while also being a cool "new" power for the normies just watching the movie without insulting their intelligence.
You made the thumbnail
Nightmare fuel, here I come!
That was fire mate
Holy shit, the storytelling in this was so good
I’m not gon’lie I didn’t agree with everything, but damn, this felt more right than the actual trilogy, where the OT characters were MORE present
“Force Plague” dude that shit actually had me scared (lol) because of how well that works
Snoke being a Kaminoan?
...it’s insane how much that would make sense (at least when we first saw him)
I have to admit I went into this skeptical that anything could make me like these characters but you did it, there was a couple of things that I didn't like but they were really just nitpicks, this was great, good job man
30:56 instead of wanting to destroy his past, Kylo should have said "I want to be nobody. I want to leave all this retched conformity behind. I want to be free."
This would've provided the necessary foil to Rey as they are born in exact opposite scenarios while having exact opposite motivations. That philosophical conflict would have been epic!
omg perfect
That's what I thought he was gonna say! It would have been the perfect line for that moment
"There's gonna be no lightspeed tracker this time"
[everyone liked that]
That and maybe have the shields fail due to BB-8 or Rose doing shenanigans to explain the light speed ramming doesn't work because shields allow the jump to hyperspace to not interact with the jumping ship in transition.
That fixes the universe breaking move (while visual masturbation [I despise Last Jedi]) that makes every previous space battle be begged the question.
Ok I love this video a lot and have watched it a dozen times at this point, and I thought of a little something to add in that I think would be great. Someone else suggested that there could be a scene where Finn is looking for Luke and he finds the hut Luke’s been staying in, and in this hut he discovers Vader’s lightsaber. He then sees Luke at the door and they have a discussion about how Vader was his father and Kylo and all that. What I want to add is that in Ep9 we see Finn wielding what is clearly Vader’s lightsaber, but maybe modified a bit to better suit him and for marketing purposes, and most importantly the blade is white.
For those of you who don’t know what this means let me explain. Basically all lightsabers are powered by these special force sensitive crystals called Kyber crystals, and Jedi make their lightsabers by connecting with one first then making the actual saber. Sith meanwhile will use the Dark Side to corrupt the crystal before making a saber which is why they always have a red blade. And finally, a white blade is made when someone finds a corrupted crystal and “heals” it through the Force.
Since redemption is a big part of this rewrite’s plot and Finn’s character I thought this would be a fitting addition.
Your version of Snoke is my favorite part of this. I love that he has no sense of self preservation and that you tied the clone thing in.
*YOU CAME BACK AT AN INTRIGUING TIME. YOU MAY WISH TO DISAPPEAR AGAIN FOR ANOTHER 6 MONTHS.*
He only came back because he probably had nothing else to do 😂
nice like count my dude
It wasn’t chewy just walking away, it was leia ignoring him even though he just saw his life long best friend die in-front of him.
Scarface1769 _ the whole force plague thing was amazing.
@@bogustoast22none25 kotor 2 the exile has a similar ability where they influence those around them without realizing and siphoning power from those bonds that were made. Slight differences here but im assuming thats where the inspiration came from.
If kotor 2 is ever made canon, it makes reys force plague even more credible since there is already precedent in the universe
Scarface1769 _ bruh wasn’t chewy like 150+ yrs olds?
Eric Finnigan yeah at this point he is tired of sky walkers fucking up the galaxy
How the hell did you make Rey COOL? You integrated one aspect of the world with another to create something magical, something more powerful than before!! That’s so creative!
Along with this, you actually dedicated to the Dark Side thing instead of teasing the audience with it, both as respect to your audience but also making Rey a sort of “dark reflection” of Luke
Just a couple of points from the start of the video: I don’t think Luke being a hermit makes you less invested - you become invested in him regaining his heroism, and it’s incredibly satisfying by the end. Snoke’s death is also an amazing moment for spectacle, it’s an amazing plot twist and everyone in the cinema gasped. Great moment.
Okay, force plague is honestly the best idea I've heard for star wars in a long time. Take my money please, and go make your own full movies
Well they had similar stuff in the old kotor games. And I'm sure there is really weird junk in the books.
@@zubbworks oh for sure, I'm just not super well versed in a lot of expanded universe stuff aside from the TV shows, so it's a new idea to me. It sounded cool
zubbworks they should just make trilogies from those kotor games. They’re gold mines.
I dunno, even being a force plague is still better than being no one in some way. Rey wants desperately to belong somewhere so I her being no one is the best fit. Even as a force plague she still gets to have a loving family that gave her up for a good reason.
YES GOD THAT WAS SUCH A GREAT ADDITION HNGGN
Petition to make this trilogy canon and have the other exiled to legends/fanfic territory.
You have my signature
Woah woah dont do legends that like, sequel aren't worthy to be in legends
You have my vote
Yeah!
Where can I sign this?
I found Rey turning to the dark side a bit weird but the rest seems more fun and more normal for a trilogy than the sequels we know
I actually really like Rey being a nobody. We aren’t defined by our bloodline, we make our own deeds.
Personally, Disney not hiring you to rewrite their scripts is just them throwing out money.
Sawyer Anderson even if he did I’m pretty sure all the actors are just done enough with Star Wars that they wouldn’t come bac
You know, while you were going over everything, I just imagined Finn wearing a white and black colored Clone Wars era Jedi armor that’s reminiscent of a Storm Trooper.
Bruh, that would be awesome!
Holly shit thats cool
Hey, thats kind of like Obi Wan's outfit in the first few seasons of the Clone Wars. Good idea, I like it!
Force Plague. That is a terrifying concept, and is such an awesome one at the same time.
I'd also suggest making Finn's use of the lightsaber even more clumsy and amateurish than in the original at first. These blades require a great knowledge of the force after all.
There isn't anything inherently special about a lightsaber. However, using one would still be VERY weird, even to someone who might have actual close combat training. Compared to a similar weapon like a vibrosword, lightsabers are HORRIBLY balanced. The blade quite literally weighs nothing so all the force has to be levered through the grip. That's probably why most lightsaber deaths are from slashes rather than being cut in half.
God I'm a sucker for consistent themes telling an overarching message/moral lesson that ties up so much of what everyone has been up to in different ways
Definitely my proudest fap
@@670HP-Package-NOW **spews water out of mouth and starts dying of laughter**
One of the biggest problems with TLJ is that Rian intentionally wrote it to undermine the entire good vs. evil narrative present in all the other Star Wars movies (he admitted to this). It destroyed the cohesion between all the films and made the previous ones seems pointless, which is one of the worst things you can do as a writer. I’m all for moral complexity in a universe that’s literally black and white, but not in a way that craps on the overarching message.
You mean...like...a good story? Something the new films failed to deliver.
_"Waves of Snokes"_
That is a cursed phrase of ever I've heard one...
w🅰️ves o Sn🅾️kes
I'VE HAD IT WITH THOSE M*****F****'ng SNOKES ON THIS M*****F****'ng PLANET!!!!!
@@alexs5814 what if they got Finn to say that line
@@goon5665 does him being black count as having a card from S.L.J. to say this line?^^
to be honest seeing a bunch of crazy malformed old republic clone troopers would be pretty cool especially just to see how the resistance and first order fair against what would normally be the Apex of a soldier like some big 3 way fire fight at least once would be pretty awesome.
Over all this is pretty damn good.