reading my emotional college essay that got me into princeton, upenn, duke, and brown
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- Опубликовано: 7 июн 2020
- Finally here. Reading my college essay that got me into ivy league. This one essay can be worth so much, and I honestly believe it was the only reason I was accepted for some of these schools. The one I read in the video is a 800 word version that I used for Questbridge. My common application essay was essentially the same but just shorter.
Also sorry for the erratic upload schedule, I just have no motivation to do anything.
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I’m watching this while I’m sitting in front of a blank google doc.
Me tooooo
samee and im wondering how i can ever write something as good as that
Im a bored 13 year old and I just want to try writing one and I have so many ways to start it but idk how to
Oh my god same haha this like broke me it's so good and like my essay's literally like 'so hear me out: what if you let me in.'
Ari Lessard 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
“We are significant crumbs, worthless until we leave a part of ourselves in someone else’s box”
wow 🥺
insignificant*
reya that’s a good correction!
THIS IS A STRONG MESSAGE!💪🍇
@@PeridotCentichannel WOW GRAPE
@@jonathantilahun642NO ONE WILL HAVE A CARROT 🥕
You’re probably the first genuine stranger I’ve ever seen.
Exactly! Like Jesus I hope I meet people like you in college
Can you review and edit my saqs for college, please (Preferably if your good with essay writing - leave an email please)2
@@edsradio5817 hey sure I can do that but I will give a spare email since I don’t want my personal email to be available to anyone to troll lmao anyway just email me on randomemailforhk@gmail.com and btw it would be beneficial if you provided what you’re applying for like which course in university/college and where you’re applying or if you aware applying for a job
I never thought I would be crying at a college essay based around eraser crumbs at 3am but here we are, but seriously tho that was beautiful
same!
Same. Literally 3:47 am
Same literally 3:13
4:49
Now you have left your crumbs in your viewers. You don't need and shouldn't be embarrassed about this, it's a beautiful essay.
No comment for 11 months
@@wezh6808the fact that this is the only comment even after 3 years Lmfaoo
how am I supposed to get into college with guys like this writing these types of essays. Dude this was amazing.
I know right!
I know right!
FINALLY, A COLLEGE ESSAY THAT DIDN’T BORE ME TO DEATH AND MADE ME FEEL SOMETHING!
It was a amazing
ong i was gripping my seat like I watching a movie
It was SOOO good.
literally came here trying to find a way to keep mine from boring people to death.
2:45 is when he starts reading his essay
Make sure to be kind since this is not what defines this man.
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Tank you
You're one of the strongest, bravest, smartest people I have ever come across on the internet. Thank you for sharing this. My chest was tight with your story, it was NOT pathetic. Thanks for being so genuine, your writing was beautiful.
Thank you so much. I'm feeling a lot better about sharing it, thanks for being so supportive!
Quon Howery hey I’m an incoming UCSD student and I want to transfer to cal tech or MIT in 2 years. I notice in ur essays you used lots of vocabulary and rhetorical devices. Could I write a killer personal essays by just being straight forward? I’m not a literature person so writing never clicks with me. Thank you so much for sharing your essay
@@noddlexxx9161 I think since Adcoms read so many thousands of essays you gotta portray your straight forward ideas in a unique light. The repetition of crumbs was wonderful. Find some object that connects with you and use it as a metaphor to frame your story.
Ps.
You don’t need to be a “good” writer to write a great essay. Read a bunch of accepted essays to get the wordplay and flow in-I feel that most of these great essays have similar structures and themes-you can learn a lot from just reading them.
Who would REJECT this MASTERPIECE?
Harvard and Yale lol
@@ccyu_4657 😂
@@ccyu_4657 they loved the essay, probably other people had fancier stuff in their application.
Thank you guys so much for the kind words, I seriously don't know what to say. Thank you so much.
Thanks for the essay! I will use this word for word for mine XD
I love it ❤️
I can relate to you. I have same abusive father and it at times really takes toll on me. Sometimes all the cuts and bruises hurt at the same time. You're right, we are like clay and we can be molded. All those cracks can be repaired. More power to you♥️. And congratulations!
Beautifully crafted essay! Thank you for sharing with us! 💖
What are your tips for AP language and composition and AP US history and can you make a video about tip on AP language and composition and AP US history.
This isn't any essay, sounds like a legit piece of literature you could find from a really good writer. I dont know who you are, but thats some pretty nice composition.
I cried reading this. Thank you so much for sharing. I was debating writing about somewhat sad stories in my essay and I was scared of making it too depressing, but yours is so meaningful and not just a sob story. It is a story of hope and perseverance.
What I notice in his essay that was different from most is that he wrote like a long poem with lots of word play and vocabulary. I was never a literature kind of person so whenever I wrote my personal statement I was very direct and straight forward. I’m planning to transfer to MIT in 2 years so I’m hoping I can write an essay that’s unique like his.
I wanted to write mine depressing but I had a professional retired Harvard admissions person give tips and they said to not make it depressing ://
Same I was debating it as well especially because my current mindset isn’t depressing I spend more time thinking about why things are how they are and what can be done to provoke change which is what I’m gonna write my essay about
Dang men,
This essay would have directly perished into the heart of admission officers.
While he's reading his beautifully written essay, I'm like looking at the other side of the screen where my google doc is placed. mine is pathetic, lol
lol. im in the same position.
same tho :,)
how's it going everyone :D
Dude this story was seriously deep and moving. Nothing to be embarrassed of. Beautiful essay!
I cried omg, that’s the most creative and emotional essay I’ve ever read I swear I’m learning from this essay. I hope I could make this kind piece of essay too!
thanks man 😊 hope you can make an even better one lol
"please dont think differently of me" Youre amazing and your past does NOT define you.
This wasn’t just a sad essay that got you in good colleges. The experiences that came with it meant a lot to you and it shows. Congrats on all the success you have achieved and will achieve in the future.
what if the entire essay was made up tho? they said they want a writing sample they never said it has to be real life. Mine was about how I fought in the civil war as a confederate soldier, and then I had to face reality of losing the war and but kept dwelling on the war.
@@bbsara0146 nah bruh make it real life
ahhh the fact that you made a video about something so personal, this must've taken SO much bravery!!! we appreciate you so much😭💞 i remember you saying that the only other person who read this essay was one of your teachers, and HERE YOU ARE PUTTING IT ON THE INTERNET SO IT CAN HELP US. we dont deserve you fr
i am genuinely in tears after hearing your essay. it didn't feel like an assignment, it felt like you were simply talking about your life. i have never been so blown away by one essay, and by erasers :) good luck in college
this felt like a verbal painting. i genuinely felt like i was listening to art. beautiful.
good luck with everything, you've been so strong and will do even better ahead!
I never thought I'd cry hearing a college essay written by a stranger from all the way across the country, but here I am. That was mesmerizing and I enjoyed every word.
this essay is so beautifully written, and so compellingly emotional, but even tho it is sad, it also shows so much involvement in your own life and transforming sad or difficult situations into better ones for growth. i am rlly moved and im happy it got u where u are. thank u for shearing
This was a beautiful essay. It's genuine, and moves a reader to tears. I'm truly in awe. You should be so proud of yourself.
Truly one of the most beautiful essays I’ve ever heard.
This shyness that you have is so attractive. You’re so humble and your story is beautiful
This is the best heartfelt essay I have ever heard. And this is not a pathetic essay by any means! You living through these tough experiences and sharing this story shows your true strength and courage.
You earned my respect. I felt like crying when I heard your essay I felt so moved.
One of the best, authentic essays I have read to date. Absolutely speechless.
this actually made me cry. you’re so talented and genuine! thank you for sharing this with us, and congratulations on everything you have accomplished:)
you seem like such a genuine person and someone very beautiful to know. thank you for sharing your refreshing and raw take on a personal essay, and for giving me & so many others motivation to share our «faulty» parts too.
this... this essay was phenomenal. I was waiting so long for this video and I'm so happy that you shared this! it was very brave of you
What a beautiful and heartfelt story. Thank you for being vulnerable and it shows how courageous you are.
thank you so much for sharing something this personal with us. It was so touching and almost moved me to tears. good luck to you and the future that awaits for you! you are a super amazing person and I can see why you were accepted!
thank you so much for being so open and vulnerable with us.
more than views or whatever it might be, you're touching and inspiring literal strangers.
keep doing you, and i hope you continue to collect and use those crumbs wherever you end up going!
This essay was beautiful. It took a lot of courage to post this and that’s incredibly strong and brave, you’re seriously talented, dude.
This essay was actually amazing! Please post more about anything; you’re very intelligent and i feel like you could help guide me through high school and the college application process if that makes sense :)
this was written beautifully - thank you for sharing! honestly, you articulated such a sincere part of yourself... there is not an ounce of being “pathetic” within your words. it’s just your raw and honest story. very refreshing to hear an essay that is so human, especially during this college admissions process that can feel very dehumanizing and calculated. wishing you lots of luck and success in your future endeavors.
This essay was so touching and heartfelt. I cannot imagine why you think this essay would make anyone think less of you. I think it would make people think more of you for your resilience and unwavering dedication to education and rising above hardship.
I can feel your sincerity, vulnerability and courage so well! You're honest, you write beautilfully and you don't shy away from the pain. I think more often than not, for application, it's rather rare to see someone being so invested and genuine, not sugar-coating everything, not hiding behind big words, not trying to impress. It's emotional because it's personal, but the very personal thing that makes you human, and it's why we can resonate. Sending love from the mainland! A Chinese fan
this essay nearly made me sob. your writing is beautiful and touching and i loved it. i've also experienced some of the things you've experienced, so this hit really different. thank you for sharing it.
The way you wrote this essay was so beautiful. How you wrote about your experiences being similar to clay, how you felt the nuanced effects on your character by your situations growing up really shows that you're strong and capable of overcoming things in life. You will do tremendously in college and wherever you decide to go later in life. Thanks so much for sharing this 😊
Watching people’s college essays trying to get into college even though I have a low gpa because of all the things I went through during high school but it wasn’t nearly as hard as what you went through...currently crying you deserved getting into all those colleges and seem like such a nice person❤️
I wish I could write about the pain in my life, but I just can’t do it. You’re a strong guy, bro. You have my respect
wow... this is the first college essay that made me cry. this is phenomenal. ik it takes a lot for u to post something this personal, so thank u for so much for sharing it with us. you have left your crumbs for us viewers.
Im crying. Your story is beautiful, challenging, and inspiring. You are incredible
I’m genuinely crying, this was so so beautiful and inspiring, not at all pathetic in any way. It takes a lot of courage to share your story to not only admission officers, but so many random people on the internet.
This essay is so good it leaves your throat burning, trying to hold back tears. Well written, straight to the point, and meaningful and deep.
we've been waiting so long for this - thank you so much for sharing this
ofc ofc i gotta keep my promise
Bro, this was so beautiful and brave. If your friends think differently of you, it is because they have a new sense of respect for you and gratitude that they get to be a part of your life.
I appreciate your sheer sincerity. Wish the best of luck to the next chapter of your life!
This writing piece is amazing! You are so brave and I love how you were willing to share something so personal with us.
thank you for being so vulnerable! this was the most beautiful college essay i've ever heard, i wish only success for you, keep doing what your doing
You have already accomplished a lot in life based on your realizations as documented in your essay. I got goosebumps while hearing you read your essay. I'm already 27 and I am still learning to forgive and choose to cherish the happy moments from my childhood.
I just wrote mine, and I wrote about something I don’t like to talk about. The first person read it, told me it was touching. It wasn’t my intention, it got super personal.
That was a really good theme for real! How could someone even think of that? You’re amazing, I am so inspired. ❤️❤️You’re amazing I love you so much.
also appreciate how genuine and relatable you are
I want you to know that by telling your story you are helping so many people. Not just with writing essays, but more specifically, the challenge of having to think about things in your life that can take a tole on the mind. I have much respect for u my man. Keep it up
Quan, you are amazing. Love your powerful essays: rich with emotion and description. Your future will yield you great rewards and I predict you will serve humanity in ways that will positively impact the world.
your essay is NOT a pathetic sob story please don’t say that!!! you’re so strong and are such a kind human being, genuinely making the world better. thank you quon for the love you put into th e world (and ur skin looking fire)
I have never met you in my life but I love you man. The way you crafted that essay, I think I can speak for everyone when I say that was the most moving and complex essay I have ever read. We need people like you to make our world better and to brighten our existence. I'm sure you'll suceed in whatever you do in life. Big hug from Portugal.
Was extremely excited about this vid!! It's a beautiful essay, really.
i never comment but i just wanted to say that you are so brave for posting this! thank you so much for sharing it’s incredibly admirable
its been a whole year but, I just wanna say that I find you to be such an inspiration. I first came across your channel from your viral college reaction video, and the more videos I watched, the more and more I look up to you! You've been through so much, things that are a lot harder than what I have experienced. Your success makes me think that I can achieve great things too, that I shouldn't feel hopeless when obstacles confront me. THANKS!!! Best of luck to both of us.
Hey man, I just wanted to say, thank you so much for sharing your beautiful essay. I started crying at how beautiful, genuine, and strong someone can be to endure so much. Thank you!
Thank you soooo much for posting this. It really helped me get a better understanding of a way to go about stylizing an essay as well as making me respect you so much more for sharing your amazing story. Thanks a ton dude.
Man thank you so much for sharing. This really helped me see that montage essays are possible. What an amazing story :) you have lots to be proud of
wow. your essay is a literal masterpiece! you are so strong sharing your story
I’m so inspired and empowered by your essay. You are beyond brave.
It is very personal and I love it. You really poured your experiences in it and had eraser crumbs to talk about which made it- WOW. I feel badly for what you’ve gone through, but you’ve pulled through so well. I can’t wait to hear about what you continue to do with your life
This made me feel so confident; about sharing my painful story in my personal essay too. You wrote your essay with so much vulnerability, making it so impactful. I loved this and I’m so glad that I found this video!
This essay was so good! You should be very proud of it!! Thank you for being genuine and authentic in sharing this
Insanely well written, this was so beautiful, thank you. I was balling 5 minutes in and I am generally not that emotional. We're all very proud of you !!
This is the most moving and heart-shattering essay I have ever been read. You are brave, you are strong, you are powerful. I hope for so many great things in your future.
The images you create in your essay for the reader/listener is just beautiful, and it's like looking into your soul, while you just let us, regardless of permission. 10/10
This essay was extremely beautiful. You are so strong and brave.
I’m laying on my bed with earphones plugged in and IM cRYinG
This is so beautiful, genuinely happy for you!!!
This is very inspiring. You are so strong for being able to step forward and share your story. Thank you
It’s so good !! You literally made me cry omg and I’m so proud of you.Thank you for sharing~
Wow that was amazing. You’re such a genuine person and I’m glad you got into all of those schools.
Thank you for sharing this, by far the most beautiful story I’ve heard. Amazing channel!!!
You have nothing to be ashamed of and I don't think people would change the way they view you just from the essay. You are brave for sharing your story! (This tells me that I need to definitely put more effort into my own!)
really , never thought will cry reading a essay for colleges... this was beautiful and you should really become a writer... one of the best essays i have ever heard...
you are incredibly brave for doing this! this isnt a sob story or a pity story this is your life. thank you for sharing something this personal. I wish you all the best
wow. your essay is phenomenal, moved me to tears. thank you for sharing, i know it is quite difficult. keep going, continue to believe in yourself. best wishes for your future endeavors.
I've had a similar upbringing and I want to thank you for inspiring me :). It's sometimes difficult to be vulnerable especially in front of an audience of strangers and I'm glad you shared it with us. It's comforting
listened to this years ago, stuck with me even though i was in middle school. just came back to it this year as i'm writing my own essays. you've done a phenomenal job
Who’s gonna think different of you over this? This essay was insanely good.
That was beautiful. I religiously watch your videos and am constantly amazed at the wisdom such a young mind can hold. I aspire daily to have your dedication and strength. I greatly admire your raw genuineness and I hope you never change. :) I hope to be in the ivy boat one day soon.
him *finishes reading emotional essay* "yeah so I'm thinking of making a skin care vid"
very powerful and emotional essay - thank you for choosing to share it with us
I’ve never been this moved by a college essay. So awesome dude. Such an amazing writer!
thank you so much for sharing this. i revised my essay in fear that it would be “too personal” as some said it’d be, and i had only just scratched the surface of my abuse. and this just inspired me to change it back to my original essay.
Thank you for being so vulnerable in this video! You definitely deserve to go into Princeton and now I want to go there too just for the sake of meeting people like you!
You're an absolute inspiration! I've never read anything this beautiful and meaningful before.
This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing your story. Your courage is beyond incredible, and I think I can speak for all in saying that our admiration of you has only been deepened.
This was beautiful! It inspired be so much to improve my essay, it was NOT pathetic, it was real and shown in such a creative way!
one of the best essays i’ve heard
I came across this video by chance and was so moved by your essay... Thank you for having the courage to share...You are such a beautiful person and I am confident you will have much happiness and success. Enjoy college and best wishes to you!