i’m in 8th grade and i’m for some reason already stressing over college and college essays and all . idk why . help 😭 but that’s not the point . my 8th grade language arts teacher literally repeats the phrase “ show , don’t tell “ like a broken record istg . that’s all .
needyforari in case you don’t know this was said by a famous novelist so it’s the keystone of creative writing, not all writing! Most of your essays in college will probably be academic. That said, the best way to get better at show don’t tell is practice! So write a ton of stories and fanfics whatever and you’ll get it!
-meaningless metaphors: make it a significant part of the essay and integrate it throughout, not cliche/generic, bring a new fresh perspective that is personal and resonates with how you feel or felt -direct statements: show through words, actions and personal experiences to get the point across, make the essay more personal, descriptive and specific, don't make blank statements, incorporate personal experiences -lack of catalyst: include cause of personal transformation and the focus should be 'you' and 'you' being the source of change, include the personal process from the initial point to the final point -make the focus 'you' -don't use excessive descriptions and adverbs, don't force descriptiveness, don't use filler words -too much repitition: repeating the same idea over and over again
Bruh freal and the last English teacher I had that focused on essay writing was in 8th grade. Like my history teacher gave better criticism to a paragraph I turned in last year then my English teacher ever has 😭😭😭
Summary: - elaborate on your metaphors / don’t add a meaningless metaphor just for the sake of adding a metaphor + make sure it’s not cliché - don’t make direct statements. show, don’t tell. - explain what caused a change if you choose to follow that narrative / don’t just say “I changed...” explain how you went from point A to point B. explain the process - don’t make the focus not on you! the essay should be about YOU, not other people. - don’t use descriptions and adverbs excessively. be descriptive about your background/something specific to you, not something meaningless - don’t repeat the same idea over and over. every sentence should bring something new to your essay and be essential. don’t repeat the last sentence of the previous paragraph as a transition.
Me, realizing that 3 years of honors/AP English classes have taught me almost nothing about how to write a college essay: >:( But hey at least I know how to emulate the over descriptive writing style of Charles Dickens and how to write in iambic pentameter 😔
I'm sorry that my writing skills are so elementary. I've only written 2 essays each school year and was not given ANY constructive criticism. Thank you to all my english teachers
South African public schools😑...you literally only realize how basic your writing skills are once you're in senior year, I swear🤞...teachers who actually force their students to enhance their writing skills from lower grades>>>>>>>>>
i think verbs are another good thing to keep in mind. like, you were talking about using too many adverbs, and you can easily shorten your sentences by choosing powerful verbs. no more “said earnestly,” make it “assert.” no more “rudely made fun of,” make it “mocked.”
My mistake is being a perfectionist. It took me three months to brainstorm and the writing is taking forever! I may, if not satisfied, send you my essay before I submit on Nov. 1. :)
i stopped editing essays because too many people sent me theres but im trying to figure something out. i would check out my video that im posting today though :o i mighttttt have something to help
Another tip that seems obvious but is often overlooked is portraying yourself in a good light- focus on aspects or stories that do so. If you do something wrong, keep the word count about that topic short and focus on how you became a better person. ALSO PLEASE DO NOT WRITE ABOUT CORONA VIRUS, COLLEGE ADMISSIONS PEOPLE (HOPEFULLY) KNOW WHAT IT'S LIKE TO BE IN QUARANTINE. YOU DON'T NEED TO WRITE A BORING ESSAY ABOUT NOT BEING ABLE TO GO ON SUMMER HOLIDAY!
Russian Bot that essay is optional, don’t stress yourself out i don’t know if anybody could really come up with an original story about how quarantine affected them
If corona virus didn’t significantly affect you, then don’t write a long essay about your experience with it. You can write something short saying how you’re appreciative of the good situation you’re in.
"I don't want to know about your dry sourdough bread" I just started laughing I'm a very lost rising senior in South Korea and I just wanted to let you know how much your videos make me happyyyy I will take all of these into account! Thank you SO MUCH
Can u make a video on how to do short answer essays (50-300 words)? Because I love all these tips but some of them cant work in the word limit, like elaborating on metaphors or giving lots of details
I'm so tired of generic tips like knowing your instructions and shit like have a strong introduction. This is the only one that gave some helpful advice. Thank 🙇
As I listened to this, I could clearly see a narrative form in my head. It's like the fog in my brain regarding what stuff to write about just dissipated. Thanks a lot!
Omg Im applying this fall and I wrote literally 2-3 essays throughout these past 3 years of high school and never got any help just grades. I honestly don’t know what to do.
HELLO I watched this yesterday but I am back to tell you that your metaphor advice was so helpful and crucial in my essay,,, I had a metaphor idea but because of this video I made sure to integrate into my whole essay instead of just mentioning it in the beginning and end and omg it did so much to make my essay better 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺💖 thank you so much!!!!! I am visiting UPenn today so I can finally see what the hype is about !!
omg im applying to college this fall and found your videos, i LOVE ur channel!!! ur definitely one of the funniest and most helpful college youtubers, please make more videos/vlogs hehe
Tellling us what should we avoid instead of the "be yourself" phrase, thank you so much this really helps alot!! For your next video your perspective about teachers recommendations
This is so helpful, I’m so glad I found your channel! I’m a rising senior and I’m feeling very stressed and overwhelmed because I am behind in this process. You helped relieve a lot of my anxiety and helped me realize I can do this. Thank you so much, and I hope you have a great rest of your week! ❤️❤️❤️❤️
I think they shifted their pov to the outside perspective because in high school they don't teach how to write in first person or for college application at all, maybe once or twice every school year for a paragraph long piece. They only teach how to argue, be objective or analyze piece of paper. Especially AP Eng/Comp I took during junior year.
This was 3 months ago so idk if I’m late but if its something personal to you then I think it’s fine if it’s overused, as long as you provide a story on how it’s personal to YOU and make it important in your story in a unique way then I think it’s okay.
This was so helpful. I’m an international student so you can imagine what a struggle this is for me! 😂 I really hope I’ll write a good essay now, since I didn’t start yet hehe
Wow this advice is so helpful! Most of the time my counselors r just like: “be authentic” or “show don’t tell” and those tend to lead to a lot of the mistakes you were talking about. Thanks so much! This was super helpful!
This video is stupid, is what some people may say opening this video. But I think she did a really good job, I watched the entire video. Every statement was very well described. I don't know what it is she does but she made crucial points after crucial point. Your pronunciation and speech adds to the mental picture you were creating, in my mind.
imo, i think the "writing level" should be as high as possible but the "reading level" should be middle school or high school. like i think a middle schooler should be able to comprehend your essays which i don't think is a issue most people go through unless they purposefully try to use big words and complicate the sentence structure
As a rising sophomore, I assure you that this path is one you want to avoid if you prefer to live without crippling stress and anxiety - it’s too late for me but you still have a chance to save yourself
Tickle Dad you have a LOT of time. obviously i don’t know your personal circumstances but I’m a senior and the best advice to listen to is to at the very least use your underclass years to figure YOURSELF out. figure out your passions and talents, take the time to try and figure out your “angle” on apps even (your most important extra curriculars, how they relate to your best grades in class and your interests, etc) but don’t stress yourself out. there is no need for ‘crippling’ anxiety, especially for someone who just finished their freshman year. i was exactly like you as a freshman, it’s okay to trust yourself and live in the present. you don’t want to look back at your four years in high school and realize you never took the time to breathe. stressing over this at such a young age is more likely how you end up with anxiety !! it’s good to think ahead and important to, but in the right way :)
I often help edit essays and although I feel that your tips are very helpful, I slightly disagree with the direct statements. Although of course it is always best for you to be as descriptive as possible and not just have a simple formula of “I feel=this” sometimes direct statements help cut back on the building up to whatever you may have actually learned or felt about that situation. Of course too much of anything can be bad, but using a direct statement and then following up with examples is a good way to cut down on what could be several sentences about what you “feel.” Especially if what you are discussing had many different layers and events.
These are all creative writing tricks that we are not afforded the time to teach because we are so focused on academic writing, not personal. Love this video. I suggest you keep going with this.
wow the first one made me so glad i chose to use something that is very personal to me as a metaphor. i used a fountain pen that i wrote with everyday when i lived in Vietnam, and i wanted the pen to represent my experience living in Vietnam. i then use a pencil in contrast to the pen. the pencil represents my new life here in America. idk i kind of wanted to show the differences i saw from living in both countries and tell the readers how i adjusted to a new country and how that experience molded me into who i am...? if that makes sense
and i used a pencil because when i lived in vietnam, my school required everyone to write everything with a fountain pen. so when i came to america and learned that most students here write with pencil, that was very new and different for me
Thank you so much for this! I just finished my freshman year, and I’m applying for certain scholarships that require essays. I’m new to this and these tips really gave me a good idea what I should and shouldn’t now and in the future for when I am going to be applying for colleges.
No hate this is really good advice that ill use myself as well but i just feel that the essay part of the application is overvalued. I feel that the whole thing is fake deep, and idk if this is just me but i dont live my life always looking for some underlying metaphor or meaning. It seems that when it comes to the essay there are so many things not to do that it seems like theres nothing to write abt at all.
through your personal experiences! if you say “i was happy when i did an internship”, it doesn’t mean much to me unless you explain the context of why it made you happy, why you even decided to do an internship... etc.
well maybe hyping isn't the best word to describe it. when i said that, i meant making sure the focus of the essay is you and talking about your experiences that highlight you rather than talking about something where someone else sounds like the main character. also, i think you can hype yourself up without sounding cocky by talking about your experiences and accomplishments in a story structure where your telling what happened rather than saying direct statements
thank you, thank you, thank you! being the oldest child in my family and going into junior year, this is super helpful advice for when i start my essays!
omg this vid popped up in my recommended and i immediately clicked once i saw how recent it was. thank you. this honestly has helped me so much and i’m so happy to have found ur channel! i’m gonna binge on all of ur college content!
well even if thats the prompt i would state "i learned this from that" because thats not really engaging and impersonal. i think you can weave the things youve learned into the essay. ex. if you talk about gaining confidence in front of a crowd you can talk about an experience were really nervous about it. then say something like - while being under spotlight was a daunting task, throughout the process, i discovered a certain excitement to it. to hold the captivation of a crowd gave me a sense of great meaning in the moment and i knew i would have to do it again. not the best example but it gets the point across. you can talk about the progression of your thoughts through an experience and i think that makes the whole "i learned" thing more natural and engaging to the reader
"Don't make metaphors" my essay prompt: *Explain how you play a role of a bridge in your daily life* Yeah, sooo--- sprinkle in a bit of those metaphors now shall we?
me crying cus all these college essay videos are being recommended to me NOW and i just graduated high school 💔 anyway i know this will be so helpful for all of u applying to college
every point you mentioned made me reflect on my essay and made me realize that all of what you are saying is so true 😭😭 thanks so much this advice is really helpful 🙏🙏
thank you to my FBI agent who saw me struggling on how to do my college essays
hahaaa
Facts, my FBI agent saw me crying last night about my essay and understand grad school is not a joke :')
Me
Ah same
Same lol,They were actually serious this time cuz I truly am having a hard time then usual
“Show, don’t tell.” 👌🏼
i’m in 8th grade and i’m for some reason already stressing over college and college essays and all . idk why . help 😭 but that’s not the point . my 8th grade language arts teacher literally repeats the phrase “ show , don’t tell “ like a broken record istg . that’s all .
needyforari in case you don’t know this was said by a famous novelist so it’s the keystone of creative writing, not all writing! Most of your essays in college will probably be academic. That said, the best way to get better at show don’t tell is practice! So write a ton of stories and fanfics whatever and you’ll get it!
Time to redo my essay😂
im sure its not that bad haha
It's been really helpful. Thank
you're welcome!!
funny how im watching this after i've finished my essay and submitted apps to like 3 schools alr
this lecture is better than any of my past and current english teachers
They all make sense. That is what I feld with reading my son’s essay. Would you help ?
this was really helpful! thank you :)
yay :)
-meaningless metaphors: make it a significant part of the essay and integrate it throughout, not cliche/generic, bring a new fresh perspective that is personal and resonates with how you feel or felt
-direct statements: show through words, actions and personal experiences to get the point across, make the essay more personal, descriptive and specific, don't make blank statements, incorporate personal experiences
-lack of catalyst: include cause of personal transformation and the focus should be 'you' and 'you' being the source of change, include the personal process from the initial point to the final point
-make the focus 'you'
-don't use excessive descriptions and adverbs, don't force descriptiveness, don't use filler words
-too much repitition: repeating the same idea over and over again
thank you very much!
This is so so helpful thank you!!!!
you’re welcome😉
I just hope you would still edit essays😭
i’m sorry:(
RUclips is calling me out that my essays sock
This is the BEST advice ever! Everyone always repeats the things we know “be specific” “re-read” like okay I know that, but can YOU be specific? Lmao
lolllll facts. honestly the best comment i can get
Soooo true hahahahah
Damn ruthless
LMAOOOO.
Me after watching this video: *DELETES MY WHOLE ESSAY*
Oof lmao
haha noooo
Okay because this was me also
is ur last name Tae..? omg hi Tae!! It's first time to see other Tae...im also Tae lol
@@sunnytae7204 its a nickname for taehyung from bts lol
POV: you’ve had 20 panic attacks over not learning how to write an essay cause of miss rona
Bianca guilty
Bruh freal and the last English teacher I had that focused on essay writing was in 8th grade. Like my history teacher gave better criticism to a paragraph I turned in last year then my English teacher ever has 😭😭😭
Wow . I knew what I was lacking in my essay but I didn’t know how to approach it. This helped so much!!
SHOUTOUT TO MY RISING SENIORS
aw thanks! glad it helped
class of 2021 lets get it !!
YESSIR
WOOO CLASS OF 2021 BABY
YEAH!
me, a dad who wrote his essay 28 years ago: fml i need to rewrite my metaphors
hahaha
Summary:
- elaborate on your metaphors / don’t add a meaningless metaphor just for the sake of adding a metaphor + make sure it’s not cliché
- don’t make direct statements. show, don’t tell.
- explain what caused a change if you choose to follow that narrative / don’t just say “I changed...” explain how you went from point A to point B. explain the process
- don’t make the focus not on you! the essay should be about YOU, not other people.
- don’t use descriptions and adverbs excessively. be descriptive about your background/something specific to you, not something meaningless
- don’t repeat the same idea over and over. every sentence should bring something new to your essay and be essential. don’t repeat the last sentence of the previous paragraph as a transition.
thank you so much!!
Thank you so much.
You are an angel
Me, realizing that 3 years of honors/AP English classes have taught me almost nothing about how to write a college essay: >:(
But hey at least I know how to emulate the over descriptive writing style of Charles Dickens and how to write in iambic pentameter 😔
lmao getting a 5 on my AP lang test is deadass giving me 0 help here
Miles Kessler same 😤😔
damn so true taught me nothing of how to write
NO LITERALLY
Omg, tell me about. 😅
I'm sorry that my writing skills are so elementary. I've only written 2 essays each school year and was not given ANY constructive criticism. Thank you to all my english teachers
loll rip
^same bc of that I dread writing essays😓💀
It eez what it eez
Same 😭😭
South African public schools😑...you literally only realize how basic your writing skills are once you're in senior year, I swear🤞...teachers who actually force their students to enhance their writing skills from lower grades>>>>>>>>>
i think verbs are another good thing to keep in mind. like, you were talking about using too many adverbs, and you can easily shorten your sentences by choosing powerful verbs. no more “said earnestly,” make it “assert.” no more “rudely made fun of,” make it “mocked.”
^this!!!!
this is so helpful thank you oh my gosh
this was like the first actually helpful essay video i’ve watched 🥺🥺 thanks girl!
aw yay thanks!!
I just graduated from college so this is very relevant
lolll
How was it
My mistake is being a perfectionist. It took me three months to brainstorm and the writing is taking forever! I may, if not satisfied, send you my essay before I submit on Nov. 1. :)
i stopped editing essays because too many people sent me theres but im trying to figure something out. i would check out my video that im posting today though :o i mighttttt have something to help
Just chill out Man U spent all that time I’m sure it’s good
Another tip that seems obvious but is often overlooked is portraying yourself in a good light- focus on aspects or stories that do so. If you do something wrong, keep the word count about that topic short and focus on how you became a better person. ALSO PLEASE DO NOT WRITE ABOUT CORONA VIRUS, COLLEGE ADMISSIONS PEOPLE (HOPEFULLY) KNOW WHAT IT'S LIKE TO BE IN QUARANTINE. YOU DON'T NEED TO WRITE A BORING ESSAY ABOUT NOT BEING ABLE TO GO ON SUMMER HOLIDAY!
one of the supplements is about rona sooo
Russian Bot that essay is optional, don’t stress yourself out i don’t know if anybody could really come up with an original story about how quarantine affected them
If corona virus didn’t significantly affect you, then don’t write a long essay about your experience with it. You can write something short saying how you’re appreciative of the good situation you’re in.
the way the university I’m applying to literally ask for that 😭
Watching this after submitting my essay like 👁👄👁
oops :o
aha same rip
same here I literally made most of these mistakes😬
"I don't want to know about your dry sourdough bread" I just started laughing
I'm a very lost rising senior in South Korea and I just wanted to let you know how much your videos make me happyyyy
I will take all of these into account! Thank you SO MUCH
aw thank you so much :’)) makes me so happy that it made you laugh haha. good luck on everything!!
Can u make a video on how to do short answer essays (50-300 words)? Because I love all these tips but some of them cant work in the word limit, like elaborating on metaphors or giving lots of details
i’ll try to think of some tips and make a video!
Omg yess this will be soo helpful for me too :((
me, a rising sophomore, taking notes👁👄👁
hahaaa
Same
Rising freshman here😬
Ha ha so prepared. I’m a senior 😂💀
me, a rising senior, with common apps due in less then 6 months 👁 👄 👁
bold italics no cap helvetica neue on pastel background is an aesthetic mood
lol i see you know your shit
am i just tripping or does she look like the asian version of brooke hyland from dance moms....... these tips were so good tho
lol never been told that before
Omg I thought that too
I'm so tired of generic tips like knowing your instructions and shit like have a strong introduction. This is the only one that gave some helpful advice. Thank 🙇
ahh youre welcome
LADY. this is actually one of the most CONCISE and USEFUL videos i have ever watched. THANK. YOU.
haha THANK YOU
As I listened to this, I could clearly see a narrative form in my head. It's like the fog in my brain regarding what stuff to write about just dissipated. Thanks a lot!
aw yay do glad!
@@haleykang8156 dude.....did you just reply to my comment! What?
Omg Im applying this fall and I wrote literally 2-3 essays throughout these past 3 years of high school and never got any help just grades. I honestly don’t know what to do.
hope my tips help then lol
you need to practice more. writing some narrative pieces from your perspective will make your skills better
I am a college sophomore. Why am I so intrigued...
lolll
HELLO I watched this yesterday but I am back to tell you that your metaphor advice was so helpful and crucial in my essay,,, I had a metaphor idea but because of this video I made sure to integrate into my whole essay instead of just mentioning it in the beginning and end and omg it did so much to make my essay better 🥺🥺🥺🥺🥺💖 thank you so much!!!!! I am visiting UPenn today so I can finally see what the hype is about !!
ahhhh thank you so much!!!
honestly one of the best ''essay mistakes'' videos ever!!
thanks so much!!!
omg im applying to college this fall and found your videos, i LOVE ur channel!!! ur definitely one of the funniest and most helpful college youtubers, please make more videos/vlogs hehe
ahh thank you so much :'))) reading this makes me so happy
I blame MLA.
Tellling us what should we avoid instead of the "be yourself" phrase, thank you so much this really helps alot!! For your next video your perspective about teachers recommendations
Me: So...
Common App: *C A P*
😭
WHY IS THE COMING INTO MY RECCOMENDED AFTER I SUBMITTED MY APP
lollll oh no :(((
Benefits of procrastination.
This is so helpful, I’m so glad I found your channel! I’m a rising senior and I’m feeling very stressed and overwhelmed because I am behind in this process. You helped relieve a lot of my anxiety and helped me realize I can do this. Thank you so much, and I hope you have a great rest of your week! ❤️❤️❤️❤️
:’) aw thanks sm. it means so much to hear. good luck with everything
I think they shifted their pov to the outside perspective because in high school they don't teach how to write in first person or for college application at all, maybe once or twice every school year for a paragraph long piece. They only teach how to argue, be objective or analyze piece of paper. Especially AP Eng/Comp I took during junior year.
applying to schools next week but now panicking at 1 AM because I need to change my entire essay
im sure it was greattt
do you think it’s too late to write a good essay in like a week
Probably not. I’m on the same boat as you
Me too, but I think you'll be okay
This boosted my confidence in writing while also articulating why some things don't work, making me feel prepared
ah so glad :)))
how do you know if a metaphor is too cliche? it's something that's special to me but I don't know if it's overused :/
This was 3 months ago so idk if I’m late but if its something personal to you then I think it’s fine if it’s overused, as long as you provide a story on how it’s personal to YOU and make it important in your story in a unique way then I think it’s okay.
In today's episode of taking writing advice that I should've learned in school but didn't from a stranger:
hahaaaa glad it helped
i’m a rising senior and i’m applying to harvard! please pray i get in i’m trying to watch as much as i can
i will! good luck!
This was so helpful. I’m an international student so you can imagine what a struggle this is for me! 😂
I really hope I’ll write a good essay now, since I didn’t start yet hehe
good luck!
where do people find space within the word limit to be this descriptive??
I'm a very confused rising senior and this video helped me so much. Thank you for giving specific tips and helping so many others
You're so welcome!
This was so boring i feel asleep at 9 minutes in and had sleep paralysis with demons not cool
Wow this advice is so helpful! Most of the time my counselors r just like: “be authentic” or “show don’t tell” and those tend to lead to a lot of the mistakes you were talking about. Thanks so much! This was super helpful!
This video is stupid, is what some people may say opening this video. But I think she did a really good job, I watched the entire video. Every statement was very well described. I don't know what it is she does but she made crucial points after crucial point. Your pronunciation and speech adds to the mental picture you were creating, in my mind.
so u rlly like the phrase "at the end of the day"
lol oops :o
in your opinion, what "reading level" should the essays be at (i.e. eighth grade level, elementary, smartass level)
imo, i think the "writing level" should be as high as possible but the "reading level" should be middle school or high school. like i think a middle schooler should be able to comprehend your essays which i don't think is a issue most people go through unless they purposefully try to use big words and complicate the sentence structure
@@haleykang8156 got it thanks for the help
Whoa we have the same last name
@@matthew1992woah ur crazy
the problem is I don't have anything that makes me stand out so I have no clue what to put in my essay asjhbedjwbdwjhbjw
currently using this advice to write my essay 4 days before the deadline
lolll good luckkk
Why am I going into 8th grade and figuring out my life and how im going to write my college app essay
loll
As a rising sophomore, I assure you that this path is one you want to avoid if you prefer to live without crippling stress and anxiety - it’s too late for me but you still have a chance to save yourself
@@tommysmyth1210 as a rising senior who just started working on his essay, don't worry about it
Tickle Dad you have a LOT of time. obviously i don’t know your personal circumstances but I’m a senior and the best advice to listen to is to at the very least use your underclass years to figure YOURSELF out. figure out your passions and talents, take the time to try and figure out your “angle” on apps even (your most important extra curriculars, how they relate to your best grades in class and your interests, etc) but don’t stress yourself out. there is no need for ‘crippling’ anxiety, especially for someone who just finished their freshman year. i was exactly like you as a freshman, it’s okay to trust yourself and live in the present. you don’t want to look back at your four years in high school and realize you never took the time to breathe. stressing over this at such a young age is more likely how you end up with anxiety !! it’s good to think ahead and important to, but in the right way :)
I often help edit essays and although I feel that your tips are very helpful, I slightly disagree with the direct statements. Although of course it is always best for you to be as descriptive as possible and not just have a simple formula of “I feel=this” sometimes direct statements help cut back on the building up to whatever you may have actually learned or felt about that situation. Of course too much of anything can be bad, but using a direct statement and then following up with examples is a good way to cut down on what could be several sentences about what you “feel.” Especially if what you are discussing had many different layers and events.
me, who wrote my common app essay about my love for Company (1970) through an academic lens: 👁👄👁
Even you haven't read my essay I feel that you are shading me😂I am going to delete my essay NOW
My brother said that my essay sounded like it was written by AI 😭 (it wasn’t)
Hi! Great tips! I’m an English teacher of high school (20 years). Clicked on this out of curiosity. Yes - Good work!
These are all creative writing tricks that we are not afforded the time to teach because we are so focused on academic writing, not personal. Love this video. I suggest you keep going with this.
I'm 13 and barely starting high school why am I here
wow the first one made me so glad i chose to use something that is very personal to me as a metaphor. i used a fountain pen that i wrote with everyday when i lived in Vietnam, and i wanted the pen to represent my experience living in Vietnam. i then use a pencil in contrast to the pen. the pencil represents my new life here in America. idk i kind of wanted to show the differences i saw from living in both countries and tell the readers how i adjusted to a new country and how that experience molded me into who i am...? if that makes sense
and i used a pencil because when i lived in vietnam, my school required everyone to write everything with a fountain pen. so when i came to america and learned that most students here write with pencil, that was very new and different for me
Thank you so much for this! I just finished my freshman year, and I’m applying for certain scholarships that require essays. I’m new to this and these tips really gave me a good idea what I should and shouldn’t now and in the future for when I am going to be applying for colleges.
yayyy glad it helped
So i have 650 words to hype myself up and make me look awesome? Cool
No hate this is really good advice that ill use myself as well but i just feel that the essay part of the application is overvalued. I feel that the whole thing is fake deep, and idk if this is just me but i dont live my life always looking for some underlying metaphor or meaning. It seems that when it comes to the essay there are so many things not to do that it seems like theres nothing to write abt at all.
I’m a freshman in high school and I finished my college essay... uh
How is it possible to find more ways to describe your feeling/direct statements?
through your personal experiences! if you say “i was happy when i did an internship”, it doesn’t mean much to me unless you explain the context of why it made you happy, why you even decided to do an internship... etc.
this was so helpful!! when i’m talking about myself, how do I avoid sounding cocky if i want to “hype myself up” 😄
well maybe hyping isn't the best word to describe it. when i said that, i meant making sure the focus of the essay is you and talking about your experiences that highlight you rather than talking about something where someone else sounds like the main character. also, i think you can hype yourself up without sounding cocky by talking about your experiences and accomplishments in a story structure where your telling what happened rather than saying direct statements
thank you, thank you, thank you! being the oldest child in my family and going into junior year, this is super helpful advice for when i start my essays!
glad it helped :’) good luck!
Nobody:
Literally Nobody:
Me, a college student watching this at 1am instead of doing my college homework because im already in coLLege: hm
hahaaa that’s a mood
Me LOL
omg this vid popped up in my recommended and i immediately clicked once i saw how recent it was.
thank you. this honestly has helped me so much and i’m so happy to have found ur channel! i’m gonna binge on all of ur college content!
:')))))) ahhhh that means so much to me thank you!!!
So with the direct statements it ask me what I learned so what would write instead of I’ve learned... from this experience
well even if thats the prompt i would state "i learned this from that" because thats not really engaging and impersonal. i think you can weave the things youve learned into the essay.
ex. if you talk about gaining confidence in front of a crowd you can talk about an experience were really nervous about it. then say something like - while being under spotlight was a daunting task, throughout the process, i discovered a certain excitement to it. to hold the captivation of a crowd gave me a sense of great meaning in the moment and i knew i would have to do it again.
not the best example but it gets the point across. you can talk about the progression of your thoughts through an experience and i think that makes the whole "i learned" thing more natural and engaging to the reader
haley,
you have yet again come through with a very helpful and insightful video.
Thanks a ton for your points and tips!
aw youre welcome :))
"Don't make metaphors"
my essay prompt: *Explain how you play a role of a bridge in your daily life*
Yeah, sooo--- sprinkle in a bit of those metaphors now shall we?
Hearing about what shouldn’t be in essays and me not having to fix anything makes me so happy 🥴
yayyyy :)
what the shit do I even write about …like my brain is empty
Not me watching this literally 2 days before I need to have my essay finished
same
thank you sooooooooo much! the common app just opened today and I've really been thinking about what to write and how to write it.
yay! :)
I’ve already submitted my applications and I’m leaving for college in like a week but I’m still watching this like 👁👄👁
ahh thanksss
Can someone please give me an example for the metaphor point, cause I am a little confused. This is a great video though!
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can u read my essay 🥺👉🏼👈🏼
Why am I watching this I already graduated lol
loll
Oh man after watching this video, it's time to R E S T A R T everything!!!
hahaaa
Can you reply with a metaphor, like what you meant in this video
hey haley can you please edit my essay for me
Yo why this pop up on my recommended as my English professor is explaining to us our midterm on zoom rn😳😳
rip
Grape video!🦗🦟🦗🦟🦗🦟🦗🦟🦗
this was one of the best college essay advices videos i’ve watched! thank you so much :)
:o thank you so much!!!
me crying cus all these college essay videos are being recommended to me NOW and i just graduated high school 💔 anyway i know this will be so helpful for all of u applying to college
:(((
You Americans have to write an essay to get in college? Hahaha
yeah we suck
every point you mentioned made me reflect on my essay and made me realize that all of what you are saying is so true 😭😭 thanks so much this advice is really helpful 🙏🙏