GRADE 9 Student ESSAY on Hyde (what EXAMINERS want)
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- Опубликовано: 9 июл 2024
- 0:00 What you will learn in the video
0:20 Title of the Essay
0:35 How to PLAN
1:45 THESIS STATEMENT (3 Parts)
3:15 Grade 9 CONTEXT "damned juggernaut'
4:35 How to ANALYSE language and LINK QUOTES
6:20 How many QUOTES for Grade 6?
8:00 CONTEXT on HOMOSEXUALITY
9:50 How to write about EXISTENTIALISM
11:20 What is DETERMINISTIC PHILOSOPHY?
13:20 Why NOT to START WITH THE EXTRACT!
15:40 How to write about SEMANTIC FIELDS
17:35 How to write about THE FULL TASK
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I genuinely have no clue why I keep returning back to Mr Salles’ GCSE videos. This man saved my exams, and although I wish he also made videos for A-levels, I understand how hard it must be to construct the time for it.
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This is true. My writing is relatively similar to this - and I received a grade 9 in English. It’s key to make sure that your writing “flows” well / reads well. You can tell if your writing reads well by literally just reading it back to yourself.
Although I’ve already done my A-levels, I think I might just buy his revision guide as a token of gratitude for everything he’s done for my grades. I might even gift it to my cousin who is currently in year 10.
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I watched your video for the same question - frightening outsider and I got a 27/30 - thank you so much
How do you know if you have written enough or if you need to start a new paragraph? Sorry if this is vague, but i have always been taught to do three paragraphs (not including intro and conclusion), but i am seeing now that many of the highest marked essays seem to follow no structure, and I would like to write similarly. Great video !
Aren't there still just over 52 minutes for each section on paper 1? If I'm not mistaken we have 1hr 45 and can spend the time equally on Shakespeare and on Jekyll and Hyde
Hi sir,
Could u use stevenson arguing against christian prejudices, through philosophical standings of existentialism, and connoting the duplicity in all of us in your thesis statement, for any question asked about hyde?
7:22
Isn’t Hyde supposed to be extremely unattractive? Or would that be interpreted as a reason for homosexual attraction in the Christian context?
hi sir I’ve watched quite a few of your videos and there is a few things I am struggling with. I’m in year 11 right now and my mocks are in a month. I am predicted a 7 for English and 8’s and 9’s in everything else and I really want to get my mark up. I’ve noticed with all of these analyses that the students use context that I have no idea how they came across. I think I saw something about contextual features to achieve the highest levels in these essays. could you please point out somewhere where I can find these contextual points so that I can improve my essays?
If you just watch the videos on essays you’ll get what you need, or the video linked at the end of this one, or buy my guide. Good luck.
Physics and Maths tutor has some pretty good notes on context
Hi Mr Salles. When you say to plan the themes and vocabulary no matter the question are you suggesting that these themes and vocab can be linked to any question that comes up in the exam, or that we should plan specific things for different questions that could come up. I wish to plan with more complex ideas to get higher marks but i don’t quite understand what you mean. Thanks!
Option 1 does option 2
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish Maybe im just slow but sorry i still dont really understand. Would a 'plan' using themes and devices listed in this video be applicable to any question in Jekyll and Hyde, or are some questions not going to be covered by the plan? In essence im asking whether i can just apply this same plan to any Jekyll and Hyde question or will some just not work well? Like if a question came up specifically asking about Utterson presentation would there be enough content around homosexual repression to use that same plan for it?
@@rurzee the things that people getting 9s are doing are already having your essay, the quotations and context. The skill is to be able to twist it into anything that you're asked, to manipulate the essay you've already made but essentially write it the same.
Mr salles i beg u do analysis on mr hyde i really need some on him thank you
hello sir, can i send you my essay? it got a grade 6 and I don't know how to improve, as I based my ideas off of your channel... do you have an email that I can send it to?
i dont understand... how does it show Hyde as a mysterious character???
Find any words which could replace mysterious in the essay
in the thesis statement it saids stevenson argues against christian prejudice which is wrong because stevenson would agree and support christian prejudice wouldn’t he?
No, he came from a very religious family and became a committed atheist.
How do students manage to write so much so well in the exam? Is it due to preparation of paragraphs before and then memorisation?
I have to plan essays for homework and everything is mostly fine with the plans, but when I have to write it in exam conditions, I seem to forget absolutely everything and write nonsense. When reading my own essays back, I can't believe how terrible they are. On top of that, I'm really slow at writing and can only write about two A4 pages per essay which I don't feel helps. Do you have any tips? Thanks so much!! :)
Same, even if I write 2 pages or more I end up getting 17/30 because of the same thing
@@ximenaaguirre5143 still a good score
This essay doesnt really seem to answer the question and i was wondering how it still manages to get top marks despite seemingly shoehorning another essay into one about Hyde's mysterious nature.
I barely see any references at all to Hyde's mystery at all it all is about themes of duality
Us, the examiner has accepted duality as an aspect of his mysterious character
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish so does the link not have to be explicitly stated?
@@t1hunna429 Be explicit. But examiners know that, under exam conditions, sh*t happens, so they will be kind
I literally copied half of this for my gcse yesterday, thank you!
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In my essays, I often start with a thesis such as this one:
"In the eponymous tragedy of Macbeth, masculinity is presented in such a way that it may be interpreted in two ways. On the one hand there is the masculinity exhibited chiefly by Macbeth and espoused by Lady Macbeth; it consists chiefly in violence and courage, and is extremely reductive in nature, arguably making Macbeth more of a beast than a man. The second paradigm of manhood is exhibited by Macduff, Banquo, and arguably Macbeth at the beginning of the play; it consists also of fortitude, readiness to perform valiant deeds, but unlike the other type of manhood, men with this type of virility are not ashamed to show humane feelings when required, and are aware of their moral responsibility to the King and therefore to God."
I do this for most of my essays, since there are usually two interpretations for each idea in the texts. I then go on to examine each version of the idea in the rest of my essay. My question to you, Mr Salles, is this: do examiners like this? Will it get top marks? How could I improve? Thank you
Yes, this is brilliantly written, but very long. I doubt you will have enough time in the exam to write so extensively in your thesis.
The alternative is to write a shorter thesis, but prove all these points in your essay with examples from the text. You certainly have a grade 9 understanding of what Shakespeare is up to, and the only question will be whether you can write enough to get all the marks. Try some essays under exam conditions to see what happens, and give them to your teacher to Mark.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish Thank you very much. Your videos on English language have been invaluable to me: no waffle, straight to the point, made according to the mark scheme. My teacher can get carried away sometimes in her love of literature and neglect language.
Hi sir. Would it be possible for you to mark this essay? We have read about half of the book and I did this as a practice and my teacher said it was good but wouldn't get the top, top marks due to limited language analysis. Do you think an examiner would agree? Explore how Hyde is presented in the text as a whole and the extract
In Stevenson’s novella, the motif of animal imagery is used to depict Mr Hyde as the bestial
side of human nature which is present in all humans (even those who are well respected).
This could be done to highlight the evil of Victorian society which unjustly vilified natural
human desires present in Mr Hyde and restricted Dr Jekyll’s freedom making him create an
alternate being. Also, Mr Hyde is used as a contrast to Dr Jekyll to emphasise the theme of
duality of human nature which means “Man is not truly one but truly two”.
Hyde is described with animal imagery throughout the text such as when he is “Hissing” and
this suggests that he is like an animal rather than a human. We see in the extract that he is
described as “troglodytic” which has connotations to a caveman or human ancestor.
Perhaps, Stevenson is showing the reader that Mr Hyde is a symbol of the bestial nature
present in all humans. This may be a view that Stevenson held due to the theory of evolution
which had recently emerged and possibly caused Stevenson to question whether humans
were actually superior to their animal ancestors. When Hyde's “ape-like fury” is presented,
this could be seen as an allusion to the theory of evolution due to the reference to the ape.
One interpretation is that by constructing Dr Jekyll as a typical, well respected Victorian
gentleman, Stevenson is sending a message to the contemporary readers that everyone has
this bestial side and they should be careful to subdue their evil desires so they do not
become uncontrollable such as in the character of Mr Hyde who seems to have no morals.
Alternatively, Stevenson may be subtly hinting throughout the novella that society is to blame
for the creation of Mr Hyde because the Victorians viewed natural desires as evil and their
restrictive society limited Dr Jekyll’s freedom and made him want to create Mr Hyde to
experience what he couldn’t. When Jekyll describes the “Innocent freedom” of Hyde,
Stevenson influences the reader to feel sympathy for Hyde who, rather than being a
completely evil character, may just be someone who frees himself from society’s restrictions.
Mr Utterson could be constructed as a contrast to Mr Hyde to show the detrimental effects of
repressing your desires. This is because Mr Utterson is a typical reserved Victorian
gentleman who feels “Envy” towards those with less moral restrictions such as Mr Hyde. It
could be argued that Stevenson constructs a juxtaposition between Hyde, an outcast who is
looked down upon, and Utterson, a typical symbol of a Victorian man to demonstrate that
repressing your desires fully can lead to jealousy and therefore, society’s attitudes towards
what is evil should change to become more accepting of people fulfilling their natural
desires.
A superficial interpretation is that Mr Hyde is presented as a deeply evil and unnatural
character with no morals. This is seen in the extract where the religious imagery with the
reference to “Satan” addresses the religious Victorian readers and suggests that Mr Hyde is
a morally horrific character. Also, at the start of the novella, the typical Victorian gentleman
Enfield expresses his anger towards this man who remorselessly “Trampled ” over an
innocent girl and this creates a sense in the readers that Mr Hyde must be completely evil.
However, the novella can be interpreted as a lesson about prejudice because the hatred of
Hyde (which is a motif in the text as a whole) may simply be a product of Victorians’
prejudice towards a character who is shunned by society. When Mr Hyde is described as a
“Damned juggernaut” the biblical allusion indicates the view held by the deeply religious society that Mr Hyde is destined to go to hell. Therefore, Stevenson may be criticising the
judgemental Christian attitude held by many. It could be that Stevenson establishes the
location of Mr Hyde’s house in Soho to hint at the fact that there was a heavy prejudice
against working class people living in poorer parts of London just like Mr Hyde. Therefore, by
using present-day London as the setting of his text, Stevenson may be highlighting the
reality of society’s prejudice which the reader should be aware of. The “Hatred” of Hyde
among many people in chapter 1 could indicate that Mr Hyde is actually a victim of society’s
prejudice. Therefore, Stevenson might be commenting that the Victorians, just like the
characters in the novella, are too judgemental and hold prejudices against people who don’t
conform to their conventions just like Mr Hyde.
Stevenson might emphasise that, rather than being completely evil, Mr Hyde is a victim of
society’s problems through the depiction of Utterson’s reasonable acceptance of Mr Hyde at
the start of the novella. Utterson is portrayed as a rational, inquisitive Victorian gentleman
who perhaps should be admired by the reader due to his high status. He is presented as
Non judgemental due to his willingness to work with criminals and investigate more about Mr
Hyde. Therefore, Stevenson might contrast Utterson’s tolerant attitudes with the prejudiced
views held by the other characters to emphasise that Mr Hyde is a victim of what others think
of him and the reader should possibly aim to be like Mr Utterson in order for society to
become more tolerant and less restrictive. It could be that the reason that people
immediately hate Mr Hyde throughout the text is that they want to distance themselves from
the animalistic characteristics (reflected by Mr Hyde) which are present in themselves.
Therefore, we could see Stevenson’s novella as a message that Mr Hyde is not innately evil
but instead, the Victorian society around him places evil restrictions on Dr Jekyll and is
prejudiced against an outcast in society.
Mr Hyde is juxtaposed to Dr Jekyll so that when it is revealed that they are actually the same
person, the duality of human nature is emphasised. In the extract, the “Deformity” of Hyde
can be seen as a physical manifestation of his perceived evil nature as well as a symbol of
how he is ostracised from society because he is seen as an unnatural character. In contrast,
Dr Jekyll is surrounded by “Intelligent, reputable” people which establishes him as a
character who is respected by the Victorian upper classes. The dichotomy in setting is used
to emphasise the theme of duality because the “Pleasant” house of Dr Jekyll and the “Well
polished” Victorian homes juxtapose Mr Hyde’s house which is described as a gothic
building through the imagery of decay. Therefore, Stevenson deliberately emphasises the
stark contrast between Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde (who are actually one person) to indicate his
main message that “Man is not truly one but truly two”.
The theme of duality is also established by showing contrasting aspects within the character
of Mr Hyde. In the extract, the word “Mixture” connotes science. This could foreshadow that
Mr Hyde is an artificial creation of Dr Jekyll. On the other hand, we also see religious
imagery when there is a reference to Satan. Therefore, the opposing lexical fields may be
used by Stevenson to demonstrate the duality of Mr Hyde. One reason for this is that the
writer could be showing that even though Mr Hyde is seen as fully evil, there are still some
positive characteristics of his personality because he has dual characteristics. The oxymoron
of “Timidity and boldness” also emphasises the duality of Mr Hyde which is established at
the start of the novella with the oxymoron “Trampled calmly”. Therefore, the contrast within
the character of Mr Hyde as well as how he juxtaposes other characters could be used by Stevenson to construct the theme of duality and show the readers that all people have
conflicting good natures and evil natures.
The uncanny gothic character Mr Hyde may also be used to show the dangers of scientific
advancements taken out of control because Dr Jekyll creates a character who is seen to
have “Deformity” in the extract. Perhaps, Stevenson constructs Mr Hyde to show the hubris
of scientists like Dr Jekyll who carry out experiments beyond human control. It could be that
the more reserved science of Dr Lanyon is seen as more suitable. Therefore, despite
showing that Victorians should not be completely repressive like the characters that have
prejudice against Hyde, Stevenson may also be indicating that some restrictions such as in
science are necessary and society should find a middleground to avoid being too restrictive
like Victorian gentlemen as well as too careless like Jekyll.
In conclusion, animal imagery establishes the bestial nature of Mr Hyde which Stevenson
indicates is present in all humans and possibly should be subdues. It could be said that
Hyde is constructed as an evil, unnatural character to show the dangers of hubristic science
and a lack of control. However, these are simplistic interpretations. In reality, it is probable
that Stevenson depicted the prejudice that other characters hold against Hyde to show that
Mr Hyde, just like real people in poor areas of London like Soho, is a victim of society. The
novella is a message about avoiding the repressive nature of Victorians established by
gentlemen like Utterson. Also, Hyde is used to establish the central theme of duality of human nature.
I've marked your essay for you here: mrsalles.substack.com/p/explore-how-hyde-is-presented-in?sd=pf
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