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- Опубликовано: 29 сен 2024
- In the distant future, an advanced AI has used an army of androids to take over the world. The few human survivors are scattered, but some have formed a resistance. A lone agent attempts to infiltrate the decrepit facility and shutdown the AI once and for all.
#machinimay2023
- Hi everyone, this is my entry into "MACHINMAY 2023" a machinima contest held by @whanowa . For whanowa, the dolly zoom effect (vertigo) is at 14:04
As always, this video was made solely on the XBOX Series X utilizing custom creator mode jobs created by me, a rockstar published mission (ULP - Cleanup), and my imagination.
Thanks to HungryKillers - / @hungrykillers for helping me film.
I will link all soundtracks used below:
Identity Crisis - Secession Studios
• 80s Synthwave Music - ...
Tech Noir - Secession Studios
• Emotional Tech Noir Mu...
Dark Ambient Music - Secession Studios
/ ienqhk5flu
Forever - L0Ws
• forever (Slowed & Reverb)
What's Left - CO.AG Music
• What's Left Ambient B...
Hi IcyGaming,
thank you for your entry in #Machinimay2023, it makes me really happy to have enthusiastic fans that love machinima as much as I do!
Unfortunately, you did not make it into the top 5 contestants, nonetheless I would like to review your video in short - as promised!
- I liked your way of visual storytelling here, letting the flashlight lead the way through the darkness
- good orientation of who is who and where they go
- the music created a nice atmosphere, mystical and supporting the images
- 3:30 don't use automatic DoF
- nice spiraling camera at 3:50 just end it earlier or go all the way round
- 5:30 nice lighting on the rim of the character
- a bit generic character design with the main guy
- decent voice acting, and only used where absolutely needed (7:17)
- 7:17 try to use more animations for transitions that don't look like gameplay, thats what makes the real difference
- 7:23 glitched frame
- 8:50 very cool terminal
- the radio communication is sometimes a bit hard to understand, especially during the alarm
- 10:32 him magically switching to the railgun was a bit off-putting
- character was also hit multiple times, try with "shoot at position" instead to avoid these hits on your actor uness you really want to
- why did the first cybord not die from the normal gun but the other one did
- 12:33 nice top down shot
- 12:40 same here, try to suggest that he is picking up the gun with a bottom up camera angle and then cut to fake it
- during the shootout there were many very dark scenes because of the bright muzzle flashes, try to increase the brightness here; some graphical mods also can balance this out as opposed to the vanilla version
- the character could show some more emotion during the whole ordeal, e. g. 12:27 he looks lifeless like a puppet
- nice use of the dolly zoom during a dramatic moment in the story
- try using some third party SFX instead of the ones from the game, they are easier to handle and sound a lot better
- overall simple and enjoyable story, albeit the ending was a little anti-climactic and I didn't really feel for the character because I didn't understand his motivation really
- story wise it was well told but the foundation of the characters motivation was lackluster, try to explain that more at the beginning of the movie (with pictures, not necessarily with words)
I hope that this feedback helps you in improving your cinematics. All the best for your next machinima!
whanowa over
Thank you very much for the feedback! I cam definitely see everything you mentioned now and I will do my best to remedy that.
But as you mentioned mods, I am completely filming on console, so unfortunately that's out of the picture. That's also why I was left with very few cool ending options as I was literally just using a rockstar created mission lol. I really appreciate the other feedback however and I will keep working on it!
This was entertaining to watch, very nice work. Glad to see you back🔥
Long time no see! Thank you! Going to be releasing my second big film here in a few days. Hope to see you there. 🙌
That there is a tough mission
Good shit. Nice work hope to see more from you.
Thank you! I appreciate it! Check out my channel if you're looking for more
Nice, I liked it! Good luck in the contest, friend. :)
Thank you! I appreciate that. Thanks for watching!
Awesome movie, keep it up!
Thank you! Another coming out soon! Check out "The Division" for a longer one if you're interested