I feel so validated knowing I'm not the only one stopping to go, "Wait, why wouldn't he remember his wife's unpredictable cooking? And he has such a crush on Carlisle.😍" 😂
When I read this in 6th grade, I guess I didn't realize how boringggg this shit was. Why did Stephanie Meyer think describing Bella's typical school day in such intense detail was a good idea? Oh yeah, because there's no plot until the last section of the book. I get that the vampires are just a backdrop for the romance, but can we get to the good stuff? Or at least describe it interestingly?
It KILLS me that the side characters are so much more interesting than the mains. The leads are literally the dullest people in the story. I Want An Alice Spin-Off.
@@HannahLeeKidder The rest of the Cullens have such interesting backstories. Especially Alice and Rosalie. Rosalie's a badass. Where are their books, Stephanie?
@@nabilamiah3814 The Cullen wanted to end Bella's pregnancy to save her life and she called Rosalie to help her because she knew Rosalie always wanted to be a mother and would put the child's life* over Bella's. *I'm calling it a child and not a fetus because that thing developed 6 months in like a week lmao.
Charlie gets mad and the southern accent slips out. Even though he's never been out of Forks, Seattle a day in his life. I love it. Also I'm not a streamer but I hang in a lot of friend's streams, so if there's something I can help with I'll try!
xD I love how you get into a southern drawl when reading Charlie's dialogue. Especially since he's supposed to be living in the pacific northwest. Yet it fits.
But is she still finished?! This is a whole new paragraph, Bella might have discovered something left unfinished in the intervening whitespace. How are we gonna know this stuff if she doesn't tell us again?
mourning all the twitch streams i'm not gonna attend cause ~timezones~ // hope we still get some editing content. i feel like i am taking in editing tips through osmosis and my writing is wayyy less clunkier.
before watching these edits I had never realised how MEAN Bella is, but the way she dismisses anything her classmates do or say and immediately gives them judgemental nicknames seems so disrespectful to me. I know it's because she'll find her true community with the Cullens but still, do we need to be so mean to the characters who are kind and welcoming to her in her new school?
"Who wants to read Wuthering Heights more than once" THANK YOU because same. Makes sense that the main character I can't stand anymore loves to read the book with the main characters I can't stand. I should've seen the signs 12 years ago when I decided to read the twilight series.
Are people who weren't able to go to the live-stream going to be able to see the additional edits you made to Twilight? I'm enjoying these videos immensely.
Looks like Charlie went to those (totally real) guy money management classes where they tell you to put all your money in jars labeled for specific activities. It's 3d excel. Smart.
I'm thinking Stephanie Meyer did/does visit TVTropes.org, as that's where I first saw the word 'natter', specifically, admins requesting contributors not to include natter in trope entries or their discussions.
Hi, I love this series. It’s really helping me become a better writer. Also, I have read Wuthering Heights more than once and will read again. I do not apologize.
Aa far as twitch goes, if you have access to them (I'm not exactly sure how they work), use the channel points. They're fun for viewers and encourage more active watching and engagement
You should do a rewrite of the Mortal Instruments. If you don’t want to, I might have to, because City of Bones is just asking to be darker and better.
I ll tell you what I know I used to stream on Twitch. If you can have every alert ready as soon as possible (new followers, subscribers, donations and hosts) followers alerts should be short cause you could get a lot of followers at the same time. Whenever you have 85+ followers, 3 average viewers in the last 30 days and some number of hours streaming that i dont remember, you will be able to start getting subscribers and bits donations(bits are an alternative currency on twitch) and also your viewers will have the option to change the quality of the image on your stream. When you have Subs they can use your emoticons if you have them, try to start woriking on those. There are 3 tiers of subscriptions on twitch and each tier can have a different emoticon. You will unlock more emoticons as you go, I was only able to unlock the basic 3 tiers when I stop streaming. That's what I know I would say good luck, but I am sure you will do it great.
If you think Twilight is hard to get through, you should do Fifty Shades of Grey next (maybe not the sexy parts if you want to keep it PG). I’m trying to read it to study successful author’s writing and I have a strong inkling that she drafted this and sent it off to be published :)
I don't know if to be offended by Charlie's accent or not. We don't talk that way in Washington for the most part. But how Meyer wrote it, it works perfectly. Keep up the voices and you might just bring some life to this story. Also, setting any tone and description is an improvement
So at 11:35, when you read, "just a few streets south, off the highway," I decided to look up Forks in OpenStreetMaps out of bored curiosity to confirm a suspicion. Meyer should have written, "..., off US 101" or "the 101" or "Highway 101", haha
Who wants to read Wuthering Heights more than once? ME, Hannah. Pssht. But in fairness that's only because the first time I read the translation and haven't gotten the full experience and I won't be reading so much as listening to an audiobook.
I read the twilight series when I was around 12. I liked the storyline, even rereading it shortly after. But I find it really amusing I did so. Looking back on it I remember the entire time I was reading I would be thinking how I could rewrite so much of it in a clearer and more interesting manner. I liked the storyline and the idea, always having been found of stories relating to supernatural beings, but didn't like the way it was written. Bella was too boring and straight (I strongly shipped her with Alice at the time), Edward too controlling. The descriptions of what was occurring were often strangely worded, and Edward and Bella hardly spent any time with one another before before they were infatuated with one another, which is common in teen romance books, but never ceases to irritate me. I'm 15 now and love watching you criticize the same things I did. And as a baby-writer myself, viewing your editing process is extremely helpful, so thank you for sharing!
You look like you aren't supposed to graduate high school for another two years. Like, you look like a 10th/11th grader. Like...what? ❤️ I could hardly believe the thing that says you're a teacher. Like W H A T? ❤️❤️❤️
Not to toot my own horn, but I knew that you dislike Wuthering Heights 😂 Bascially all description and windy dialogue with lots and lots of semicolons. Not your style :)
{smh} You're being generous in your edit. The book has far too much telling and very little showing. I am amazed by the poor quality of the original editing and writing.
![Accidentally in Love - [Charlie Swan/Carlisle Cullen]](http://i.ytimg.com/vi/EYcYBFfZ6Uk/mqdefault.jpg)
Want to read the edited chapters? view.flodesk.com/pages/60a6b2262c1a4117de4b7602
"Oh, we're adding something gayer." Lmao!
rubbing my grimy little paws together
"Is Emmett in booty shorts or no?" The most valid question in this video
i personally think he should be in booty shorts at all times
Headcannon accepted. Emmitt is in booty shorts at all times unless otherwise specified.
@@milissaellan6805 yes!
Lordy lordy we all want the answer to this question. Hannah is hilarious 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣
We all thought Charlie didn't want Bella to marry Edward bc teen marriages are bad, but turns out, he just wanted to marry Carlisle himself.
“A lot of the nurses at the hospital have a hard time concentrating on their work with him around”
How... how does Charlie have this information?
"it's me, I'm nurses"
I would totally read your Twilight fanfic where Charlie has a romance with Dr. Cullen lol
I thought that was just regular twilight, lol. Like, Charlie’s really obvious.
@@aileencrain6558 yes he said to Bella. That she should see the doctor. It means he's attracted to him haha
There is an amazing Fanfic on Ao3, I loved it.
The name is „Conversations“ written by Smittenwithdaydreams
"Charlie has the hots for Carlisle" is one of my favorite things to come out of the Twilight renaissance.
I love your excitement at "I didn't write that!". Great video!
That was the most exciting part of my week
the audacity of you to say that you're having a bad hair day i--
i'm just--it was just--
Love that you're just removing words and making it gay 💕
you just summarized my editing style
I did not see that Charlie twist comming. Boy this is fun
I feel so validated knowing I'm not the only one stopping to go, "Wait, why wouldn't he remember his wife's unpredictable cooking? And he has such a crush on Carlisle.😍" 😂
thanks for giving jessica rights it means a lot to me as an anna kendrick stan
she deserves it all
Her prose feels so ...chewy? Like I feel tired reading all those words that give me so little. I don't know how else to describe it.
that's a great description. you have to work So Hard for no payoff.
Meyer was trying to do purple prose, but it turned out off-colour.
"Nattering: talk casually especially about unimportant matters." Finally, a word to describe Twilight!
When I read this in 6th grade, I guess I didn't realize how boringggg this shit was. Why did Stephanie Meyer think describing Bella's typical school day in such intense detail was a good idea? Oh yeah, because there's no plot until the last section of the book. I get that the vampires are just a backdrop for the romance, but can we get to the good stuff? Or at least describe it interestingly?
It KILLS me that the side characters are so much more interesting than the mains. The leads are literally the dullest people in the story. I Want An Alice Spin-Off.
@@HannahLeeKidder The rest of the Cullens have such interesting backstories. Especially Alice and Rosalie. Rosalie's a badass. Where are their books, Stephanie?
@@nabilamiah3814 It makes me sad that the only time Bella decided to make friends with Rosalie was when she needed something from her.
@@riley8385 I don't remember that. What was the situation again?
@@nabilamiah3814 The Cullen wanted to end Bella's pregnancy to save her life and she called Rosalie to help her because she knew Rosalie always wanted to be a mother and would put the child's life* over Bella's.
*I'm calling it a child and not a fetus because that thing developed 6 months in like a week lmao.
Charlie gets mad and the southern accent slips out. Even though he's never been out of Forks, Seattle a day in his life. I love it.
Also I'm not a streamer but I hang in a lot of friend's streams, so if there's something I can help with I'll try!
I love when Hannah goes southern.
"Who wants to read Wuthering Heights more than once?" GIRL. PREACH!
I’ve never been a Twilight fan, but I gotta admit I’m enjoying the rewrite videos
happy to help
Hannah Lee Kidder - Writer I appreciate it
Charlie went country af!
he's a passionate man
If it was originally edited by you, it would have saved me so much time reading
twilight: the novella
xD I love how you get into a southern drawl when reading Charlie's dialogue. Especially since he's supposed to be living in the pacific northwest. Yet it fits.
Also, how does Bella have no reaction to her father being gay?
came here for the twilight roast, ended up learning a ton about editing! "went"?! "suddenly"?? i dont know them!
The sudden south country accent was so good!!
it comes out when Charlie's passionate
Hannah speaks wise words, and I'm not just saying that because she called me funny.
Hanna: "I'm having a bad hair day"
Me who haven't had a haircut in 8 months: "It be like that some times."
Wuthering Heights is about unhealthy relationships. It may have been a meta commentary from Meyer about Bella and Edward (although I doubt it).
I'm so glad I stumbled on this! "Bella, are you 90?" "Is Emmett in booty shorts or no?" lmbo
I did a spit take when you said "chapter 2". It already feels like it's been so long! :P
But is she still finished?! This is a whole new paragraph, Bella might have discovered something left unfinished in the intervening whitespace. How are we gonna know this stuff if she doesn't tell us again?
The way she thoroughly and repeatedly explains things we didn't care about to begin with is rly something
Charlisle!!!!! I ship it!!!
mourning all the twitch streams i'm not gonna attend cause ~timezones~ // hope we still get some editing content. i feel like i am taking in editing tips through osmosis and my writing is wayyy less clunkier.
i'll do different timesssss
honestly this whole series is just a sneaky writing lesson--don't tell anyone. they think it's about twilight.
Please don’t write Twilight on Twitch! I don’t have one and I love the rewrite videos!
I'd post them here too, but you don't have to have a twitch to watch ☺️
Carlisle x Charlie x Billy - BEAUTIFUL VERSION OF TWILIGHT I WOULD 100% WATCH AND APPROVE
before watching these edits I had never realised how MEAN Bella is, but the way she dismisses anything her classmates do or say and immediately gives them judgemental nicknames seems so disrespectful to me. I know it's because she'll find her true community with the Cullens but still, do we need to be so mean to the characters who are kind and welcoming to her in her new school?
"Bella, are you 90? Be honest." xD Dying.
"Who wants to read Wuthering Heights more than once"
THANK YOU because same.
Makes sense that the main character I can't stand anymore loves to read the book with the main characters I can't stand. I should've seen the signs 12 years ago when I decided to read the twilight series.
I totally agree about your _Wuthering Heights_ opinion. Anything by a Bronte sister is a one and done, if that. I personally prefer Jane Austen.
Are people who weren't able to go to the live-stream going to be able to see the additional edits you made to Twilight? I'm enjoying these videos immensely.
Looks like Charlie went to those (totally real) guy money management classes where they tell you to put all your money in jars labeled for specific activities. It's 3d excel. Smart.
So that's why the marriage didn't work out
New sub. I'm enjoying these Twilight edits, thank you 😂
"Is Emmett in booty-shorts or no?" x'D
I'm thinking Stephanie Meyer did/does visit TVTropes.org, as that's where I first saw the word 'natter', specifically, admins requesting contributors not to include natter in trope entries or their discussions.
Hi, I love this series. It’s really helping me become a better writer. Also, I have read Wuthering Heights more than once and will read again. I do not apologize.
i'm so glad im not alone in shipping charlie and carlisle like,,, dying for gay content over here
Thank you for being nice to the mailman
Aa far as twitch goes, if you have access to them (I'm not exactly sure how they work), use the channel points. They're fun for viewers and encourage more active watching and engagement
She may have to make affiliate first?
@@itsmekatiep yeah, I wasn't sure. Twitch likes their tiered access to features, unfortunately
@@maia_gaia I just learned...so many terms
@@HannahLeeKidder lmao yeah. Twitch is a lot, but it's super fun if you get into it!
I keep getting "But I'm a Cheerleader!" recommended to me by RUclips when I watch your Twilight videos
You should do a rewrite of the Mortal Instruments. If you don’t want to, I might have to, because City of Bones is just asking to be darker and better.
I ll tell you what I know I used to stream on Twitch. If you can have every alert ready as soon as possible (new followers, subscribers, donations and hosts) followers alerts should be short cause you could get a lot of followers at the same time. Whenever you have 85+ followers, 3 average viewers in the last 30 days and some number of hours streaming that i dont remember, you will be able to start getting subscribers and bits donations(bits are an alternative currency on twitch) and also your viewers will have the option to change the quality of the image on your stream. When you have Subs they can use your emoticons if you have them, try to start woriking on those. There are 3 tiers of subscriptions on twitch and each tier can have a different emoticon. You will unlock more emoticons as you go, I was only able to unlock the basic 3 tiers when I stop streaming. That's what I know I would say good luck, but I am sure you will do it great.
If you think Twilight is hard to get through, you should do Fifty Shades of Grey next (maybe not the sexy parts if you want to keep it PG). I’m trying to read it to study successful author’s writing and I have a strong inkling that she drafted this and sent it off to be published :)
I don't know if to be offended by Charlie's accent or not. We don't talk that way in Washington for the most part. But how Meyer wrote it, it works perfectly. Keep up the voices and you might just bring some life to this story.
Also, setting any tone and description is an improvement
Charlie definetly have some strong feelings for carlisle
So at 11:35, when you read, "just a few streets south, off the highway," I decided to look up Forks in OpenStreetMaps out of bored curiosity to confirm a suspicion. Meyer should have written, "..., off US 101" or "the 101" or "Highway 101", haha
Hannah really be out here speaking for the gays
I'm honestly bugging at how gay all her characters are right beneath the surface. if you simply Wipe Off The Mormon Lens,
@@HannahLeeKidder god fucking damnit "the mormon lense" XD you're so right though Stephanie girl do you have something to tell us
@@8bitgardengaming weird how all of the het relationships end up unhealthy except for Rosalie (bi) and Emmett (himbo, which is gay adjacent) HMMM?
@@HannahLeeKidder very suspicious
Who wants to read Wuthering Heights more than once? ME, Hannah. Pssht. But in fairness that's only because the first time I read the translation and haven't gotten the full experience and I won't be reading so much as listening to an audiobook.
Love the dog
why does meyer have to write every little thing that happens
Suggestion: go back to a month ago and let me know you started streaming on Twitch!
I want to read Wuthering Heights more than once. It's my favourite book lol. #CalledOut
Any chance you’ll upload the twitch streams to RUclips afterwards? :)
*Thomas Sanders voice* Could be gayer
I read the twilight series when I was around 12. I liked the storyline, even rereading it shortly after. But I find it really amusing I did so. Looking back on it I remember the entire time I was reading I would be thinking how I could rewrite so much of it in a clearer and more interesting manner. I liked the storyline and the idea, always having been found of stories relating to supernatural beings, but didn't like the way it was written. Bella was too boring and straight (I strongly shipped her with Alice at the time), Edward too controlling. The descriptions of what was occurring were often strangely worded, and Edward and Bella hardly spent any time with one another before before they were infatuated with one another, which is common in teen romance books, but never ceases to irritate me.
I'm 15 now and love watching you criticize the same things I did. And as a baby-writer myself, viewing your editing process is extremely helpful, so thank you for sharing!
You look like you aren't supposed to graduate high school for another two years. Like, you look like a 10th/11th grader. Like...what? ❤️ I could hardly believe the thing that says you're a teacher. Like W H A T? ❤️❤️❤️
I thought his siblings were not siblings?
When you see people through the window, do you wave first? Or do you always wave back?
I wave first lol
Actually, that wasn't nattering...
Its 'flattering' if you read the book.
It was mistyped as nattering, I guess
👍
👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾👏🏾😂
Bruh this made me realise her writing was worse than I thought
Not to toot my own horn, but I knew that you dislike Wuthering Heights 😂 Bascially all description and windy dialogue with lots and lots of semicolons. Not your style :)
{smh} You're being generous in your edit. The book has far too much telling and very little showing. I am amazed by the poor quality of the original editing and writing.
you didn't need to go there, but you did, and for that, i thank you