Future year 11's always listen to your teacher's, today in 2023 we got a question based on life of pi, in my class i literally done this as a practice question, and it came up, whether if its paper 1 or 2 listen to your teachers!
In 6:40 she says that you shouldn't re-cycle points made in previous questions. However I heard that examiners often mark one particular question (such as a bunch of question 4's) instead of entire papers, meaning you could get away with just re-using old points. Is this a false claim?
Yeah, you can use the same point in different questions since they’re unrelated regardless of who is marking it although what you’re saying definitely helps.
With question 5 (story) how strict do you have to be with the prompt. For example can you mention it right at the begining or end and write the rest with your pre prepared goodness or does it have to significantly contribute to the plot??
My teacher told me that recycling points from questions 2 and 3 into question 4 is allowed, as they're unlikely to be marked by the same person. However, in the video it says to avoid recycling points. Which is correct and what would your advice be regarding this?
My teacher says the same, I’m pretty sure an examiner gets a bulk of certain questions (like just Q3s)so it’s unlikely the same examiner will mark the whole of your paper :)
Hey everyone finish 1-4 in an hour then do the creation . Keep practicing and you will be okay. I’m not sure why they are together now ? Why not month ago?
Bro was looking at her batty when she turned around bro was looking at what hes dealing with damm bro was trying to rizz her up the whole vid bro was stairing into her eyes everytime damm bro hasthr dictionary rizz Haha
I have returned in order to help you with your English! Language paper 1 Q2-5 overview Q2- Marks: 8 Aim (for passing grade): 5-6 marks Quotes: A3 Language analysis question Comment on writer 3 terms Q3- Marks: 8 Aim for: 4-5 Structure: 3 mini what how whys Structure question Do not analyse Language. Use these terms: Beginning, Middle, end, focus, shift, zoom, topic sentence, ect. Quotes: 3 Q4- Marks: 20 Aim: More than 10 Structure: 3 what how whys OR 1 large WHW mini essay style. Length: Aim for a page and a half (varies on handwriting) Language analysis question 3-4 Quotes and terms Writers intentions Preferably don't disagree (But you can consider other view points for more Marks) Q5- Creative writing question 40 Marks Length: Two/Two and a half pages Focus: Descriptions, punctuation and skills Structure: Paragraphing (at least 2 paragraphs per page) Aim: More than 20 Marks. Descriptive writing > Story (easier to focus on the question)
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish Oh OK. I thought 1 & 2 would count as two explanations as they are making two different points. Could you maybe give us an example of two explanations about the same quote? Or should we really need to use separate quotes for each explanation?
Maybe for literature but I dont think you would need that in language because those methods are more for how the writer illustrates their bigger idea and when you get presented with a new extract you can't know the writer's bigger message and you're not expected to talk about it. By the way I might be wrong I'm just guessing.
Hi Mr Salles and the experienced tutor I've had my mock paper 1 exam today at college. I did two depth paragraphs for the language question and three beefy paragraphs for the structure question using beginning, middle and end instead of following the five story arc method. For the evaluation question, I just did two massive paragraphs instead of 4. I don't see the point for doing four when your only advised to do two for paper 2, question 4. My tutor recommends us student to do two big and massive paragraphs for question 4. For question 5, I did a descriptive story ,which I filled to the end with 6 additional paragraphs including dialouges. I'm only aiming for a grade 4/5 to get to University the following year alongside my Access course.
This is some work for 1 of the paragraphs I've done for question 3 I've done from a past paper if someone wouldn't mind giving feedback, From the very first sentence, the writer builds references to this "stranger child" hooking the audience in as it adds to the mysterious and supernatural vibe especially starting off with an enigma build around this girls character as we don't know this girl or how she got in the garden, this is seen in lines 11-13 where the focus is shifted from Rosie suddenly onto the girl as "another child was there" and as this was the "first day at the house" this further builds mystery, intriguing the reader. At the end of the extract when the girl suddenly disappears this completes the circular structure of the mysterious plot.
im not a teacher im just a student but one thing id say is that you havent labelled any structural features apart from the change in focus so it would be good if you included (sentence forms/structures as an example) to show the examiner you have a clear understanding
i am just a student but I just think you can extend your analysis and zoom into a quote and explain again and what Mr Salles said you need more changes of focus throughout the question. However good attempt
Sir, how sure are you of the 8 points for Q3 and 20 points for Q4. It seems beyond the prospect of imagination to write 20 points for the Q4 and, for both questions, the mark schemes example descriptors don’t include that many points at all.
Sir, I know your techniques for language question 2, 3, and 4 are meant to force the examiner into giving you marks, but how successful actually is it? Do markers actually pick up on the fact that, for example, using "could" and "might" shows evaluation and perception, or do the methods you use go right over their heads because they're quite unorthodox? Thanks.
Yes, they do pick up on it. If you want to see examples in action, type Mr Salles Substack into Google, and look for examples of essays, which I have posted there
@@SonicBlueberry-k4e sorry, I don’t understand what you mean by numbered lists. He has a separate video for each question though, like Paper 1 Question 3
dont quote me on this but my teacher has always told me that no matter what the theme is you can link it to your pre planned story. for example if its a guy sitting on a boat in a lake you could say what he is thinking of, or an oasis in the desert and you turn around and see something that links to your story
FOR Q 5 SAY ITS J A PIC OF A PERSON, CAN YOU TALK ABOUT THE ENVIRONMENT. Also, if the picture is one of misery, can you start off with a positive description and develop it into a negative one (regarding to the pic) THANKS
Personally I think that’s alright as long as you mention the prompt now and again instead of writing an entirely different story. The thing you said about the tone going from happy to miserable would be good for structure as well so good idea. It’s a prompt so the writing can be loosely based of it x
Do you have to mention the sentence structure/ form for the Question 2? (I don’t think it makes sense to add in that one of them is a declarative if it isn’t and without the effects)
Hi sir, could you mark my Q5 response? Something wasn’t right. Everything stopped in motion. The streetlights began to flicker aggressively, emitting an intolerable din. Transfixed, a crowd began to accumulate, in search for an answer. The commoners looked around for the big, whimsical reveal, hoping this was all a prank. But no... They remained overwhelmed by prodigious bewilderment and apprehension. What caused the Earth’s exultant communities to quiver in fear? The whistle of the wind carried the repugnant odour of death, forewarning a prophecy that every helpless human, animal, and plant were soon going to face utter destruction. Its continuous howl reverberated within all, feeding on the fear of the innocent. The admonition was short-lived, as the vigorous storm wasted no time; it bellowed with ferocity, causing a myriad of raindrops to pelt down, spitting unto its defenceless subjects below. Rolling in like boulders, the merciless monsoon flooded the iniquitous town, belligerently destroying everything with towering waves. Pure undiluted terror wrapped around the convulsing bodies of God’s creation; He was insatiable for blood Dusk quickly permeated the sky with murk, engulfing any remnant of sunlight it could devour. Soon, darkness shrouded the Earth. The feeble strands of grass that once danced with innocence soon regretted the gift of life. The prideful, nonchalant personalities that roamed the streets exuding confidence had now begged for the cessation of their plight. None could mitigate this cataclysmic attack, for this was the Judgement of God.
Nicely written, and I'm not an examiner by any means but I can offer you some points for improvement if it helps. 1. Perhaps this is a bit too short. You want characters and this is a bit too heavy on scene setting and not enough characterisation. 2. A few punctuation errors here and there, which could cost you marks. 3. You have great vocabulary, but be careful not to shove unnecessary fancy vocab. Some vocab here looks out of place, e.g. 'prodigous bewilderment'. You want vocabulary that fits the tone of the writing, but still, some excellent words here. Maybe use them more in moderation though. Once again, this is just my take as an English enthusiast (NOT an examiner). Hope this helps bro, good luck for paper 1.
Mr Salles has mentioned this before in his previous videos - As long as you introduce the aspect of the question focus into your writing (maybe a bit at the beginning), you will be able to deviate later - he calls it 'breaking the vase' . You need to buy/introduce the vase before you break it.
Sir i have one request if possible since you collabrated with two calves Can't you guys like do a triple collab and would be the best for us because 3 is better than 2 of like a full paper 1 and 2 advice all in one video it will really make an impact in everyone even me :) so basically 10 times 2 20 min vid :) If it is not possible maybe do a zoom call or something or have 3 vid of them separately and collate into one :)))
For q2 and 4, I use What How Why - identify the feature/evidence, state HOW it creates a feeling and if you're doing well for time, add a WHY the writer has done that. And repeat this. For question 3, I usually follow the focus as if it is a camera recording a film. Why does the focus change? How does it affect pacing, scene-setting, exposition (if it is from the beginning of a novel), etc.?
I recommend description because you get more ideas by looking at the picture and zoom into the settings, background and add a guy. Also you can compare it to the story task since the theme for both will most likely be the same of every year's exam hope this comment helps :)
Hello Mr Salles, I posted this comment on one of the Shorts, but I don't think it worked. I tried out your 6-Cam Method for descriptive writing for the first time. I'll say it felt difficult, but the method is amazing and the experience was nonetheless enjoyable, especially when I started using allusion. Could you give me some feedback: Zoom Out - Weather --------------------------------- Outside the winds seemed to hurl like an oncoming army. Winds would whip the western skies; clouds sodden with spite unleash heinous precipitation. Precipitation that felt as though it could be distilled in time, and still drench out the good times. Also notice the tempestuous storm general, marching with black jackboots. Stricken gusts of wind align in flanks. A general, undoubtedly filled with rage, ferociously screamed at his men, bending the elements to his will. Motif - Pen ------------------- In the back seat, Simon’s hand clutched the seatbelt whilst just managing to cling to his new pen. He was an intelligent boy, and travelling to a new school, to study amongst his equals at last. The pen was a departure present from his younger brother Theodore, and a symbol that the two would never fall out of touch. His eyes swivelled to the window pane, with hands covering the pitiful display as storms thrash the natural order outside. At first sight it didn’t seem expected, and for a second he couldn’t feel the pen’s weight. Zoom in - Dave’s face ------------------------------------ Dave cruised out at front, but in his usual gloom. Crusty eyes, unkept brown hair, tired of endless congestion after congestion, tow-truck after tow-truck, experienced it first, like the captain of all this ominous aura. Something just didn’t feel right. This wasn’t just a storm. There was some dark omen at play for sure. Motif - Paper ---------------------- All of a sudden, a loose paper sheet flung in through the car window, heavy enough to catch Dave by surprise, flurry through the car and tap the radio controls. Nobody … nothing silences the Beatles. Right there and then, Simon acknowledges the moment for what it was. Right then and there, he realised the purpose of the pen, the connection between the occurrences: the pen was a symbol of the silence, the concealment, the missed opportunity. Zoom out - Solar system? -------------------------------------------- Who was there to wonder, awe-struck at the scene? Dave peered to the skies above, his eyes (but just for a moment) shut. He could sense it too, and had done so on occasions before, cognizant of the dangers that would ensue, praying for some guidance. Dave also feared this trip would go wrong. Not even the clouds stopped to pity as they raced ahead. Simon, his (at least partial) smile faded, his head wracked into a slump, felt it. Soft, the clouds appeared, yet sinister. Unfamiliar. Nonetheless engendering a trinket of fear. Motif - Pen -------------------- In seconds the boarding school showed face. The exhaust sighed with exhaustion and resent or fear - difficult to decipher. Yet, a bulky white mass edged closer, came nearer, chanted twisted hymns even louds than the previous whisper. Who says it couldn’t be a coincidence the paper and building were crafted with an equally threatening palette of whites? Simon had picked up the pen from his pocket and clicked it for the very first time
for the 8 mark language question, when you say 8 explanations for each 8 quotes, or 2 explanations for 4 quotes. Do you mean 8 language devices when you say explanations, like pick out 8 language devices??
if they give you 2 description prompts, can you just write a narrative? my teacher told us to not differentiate between a description and narrative - write the same thing for both
Hello We are moving to AQA from OCR for our English provision. I have queries concerning papers 1 and 2 for 8700 English Language. Some of the online 'support' and guidance varies massively in determining AQA's expectations for the questions, hence my post today. I understand that the quality of answers overrides quantity and that perceptive answers outscore the more obvious. Having said that - in the region of how many observations should students be making for each question? For example, Paper 1 Qu 2 - language observations - 3, 4, 5? Qu 3 - structure - 3, 4, 5? And for Qu 4 - how many structure observations might be expected alongside the language ones? Paper 2 - Qu 2 - how many similarities / differences? 3, 4, 5? How many points might you expect for Qu 3 and 4?
Why would you switch to an exam board that offers you so little clarity on what the questions actually require? The reason there is so much conflicting advice is that the exam and mark schemes are very hard to interpret, even for examiners. This makes little sense. Please look at Edexcel 2.0 to see a much, much better English exam. I sat it myself this month, and it was a joyful experience. I have published a guide to each language question, with numerous example answers at ever grade, so you can see for yourself what is required. In a nutshell, you need the same number of explanations as there are marks in the question. This is a much more effective and concrete way of judging the difference between quality and quantity. You can get them all for free by signing up to Kindle Unlimited for 30 days. If you use the link in the description to any of my videos, Amazon pays me 3 pounds, or you can sign up without my link - both ways are totally free to you, but in the latter, Amazon will pay me only for the pages you actually read.
you know you can submit your story in the comments too he will read he may have inf emails of student's work so yea if not just give it to your teacher
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I think this is pretty accurate hope this helps
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Omgg im so nervous but this helped a lot. Im praying for us guys. let's get those 7, 8 and 9s
@@Bandlabreaper yes we do!
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@@o1_certiz675 I got an 8 (≧▽≦)
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Future year 11's always listen to your teacher's, today in 2023 we got a question based on life of pi, in my class i literally done this as a practice question, and it came up, whether if its paper 1 or 2 listen to your teachers!
why am i picking up tension between these two 😶😶
Rivalry.
Why mr salles cappin he always says to do question 1 last
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Hes down baddd
Yeah, I think we can see why🌚
Bro says do q5 then q1 last and here he says otherwise 😂. Simp guy ahahaha
She was loving it
man like mr salles
I have English exams coming one this thursday and the next on june 6th thanks for this video it's helped a great deal :-)
For questions 2-4 to get onto the top band don’t you need to make sure to make a perceptive point? That’s what we’ve been taught.
yes, they told me too look for detais hiden in the text :)
Perceptive, or developed which can be easier
In 6:40 she says that you shouldn't re-cycle points made in previous questions. However I heard that examiners often mark one particular question (such as a bunch of question 4's) instead of entire papers, meaning you could get away with just re-using old points. Is this a false claim?
Yeah, you can use the same point in different questions since they’re unrelated regardless of who is marking it although what you’re saying definitely helps.
yes but they give you a different part of the extract so if you recycle old points you're ignoring the question
@@livelaughluce You can link almost anything if you are good enough
With question 5 (story) how strict do you have to be with the prompt. For example can you mention it right at the begining or end and write the rest with your pre prepared goodness or does it have to significantly contribute to the plot??
A good trick is to do that with a circular structure so you come back to the image in some way at the end
USE BIG WORDS I PROMISE U 40/40
You don't need to use the photo you can use your own setting
I usually skip this part
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@@sidcritch7724she was staring hard at him and making him laugh lol
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you all are downright sus and that's what people do when people are making a suggestion you just stare at their mouth lol
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so when's the marriage coming along?
stop being a sussy baka
Brufther chill
I would’ve folded
She did
Who else is watching this on the bus going into this exam without any revision other than a Metaphor is something that is something 💀💀💀💀💀
I kinda feel like there's chemistry between them like you know what I'm saying romantic love and shit
My teacher told me that recycling points from questions 2 and 3 into question 4 is allowed, as they're unlikely to be marked by the same person. However, in the video it says to avoid recycling points. Which is correct and what would your advice be regarding this?
Not sure
My teacher says the same, I’m pretty sure an examiner gets a bulk of certain questions (like just Q3s)so it’s unlikely the same examiner will mark the whole of your paper :)
recylcing the points its good, thats what im doing
Yh I've heard it's all marked by a different person. And anyway recycling points as long as it fits shouldn't be an issue
best advie, listen to your teacher
A pen... not that one! or that one! 😂😂😂. I love how light hearted this is at a stressful time, thank you 💕 🎉
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@@bennyjj1469 respect
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Hey everyone finish 1-4 in an hour then do the creation . Keep practicing and you will be okay.
I’m not sure why they are together now ? Why not month ago?
Bro was looking at her batty when she turned around bro was looking at what hes dealing with damm bro was trying to rizz her up the whole vid bro was stairing into her eyes everytime damm bro hasthr dictionary rizz Haha
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I have returned in order to help you with your English!
Language paper 1 Q2-5 overview
Q2-
Marks: 8
Aim (for passing grade): 5-6 marks
Quotes: A3
Language analysis question
Comment on writer
3 terms
Q3-
Marks: 8
Aim for: 4-5
Structure: 3 mini what how whys
Structure question
Do not analyse Language.
Use these terms: Beginning, Middle, end, focus, shift, zoom, topic sentence, ect.
Quotes: 3
Q4-
Marks: 20
Aim: More than 10
Structure: 3 what how whys OR 1 large WHW mini essay style.
Length: Aim for a page and a half (varies on handwriting)
Language analysis question
3-4 Quotes and terms
Writers intentions
Preferably don't disagree (But you can consider other view points for more Marks)
Q5-
Creative writing question
40 Marks
Length: Two/Two and a half pages
Focus: Descriptions, punctuation and skills
Structure: Paragraphing (at least 2 paragraphs per page)
Aim: More than 20 Marks.
Descriptive writing > Story (easier to focus on the question)
life saver!!
3:27 so with each quote, point and explanation made i can set it out like 8 separate “paragraphs” ?
side note: i love this friendship, your humour is really contagious 🤣
@@coco20165 Yes, and thank you.
So, could you set it out like this ? -
1. “QUOTE” - Here, the author uses a metaphor to XYZ.
2. The emotive verb ‘quote’ makes the reader feel X.
@@mic9970 you can, but 1 and 2 together make 1 explanation, so I would write them together. Then 7 more. Don’t stress if you don’t know the method
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish Oh OK. I thought 1 & 2 would count as two explanations as they are making two different points. Could you maybe give us an example of two explanations about the same quote? Or should we really need to use separate quotes for each explanation?
wouldn't symbolism and semantic field be best to write about?
Maybe for literature but I dont think you would need that in language because those methods are more for how the writer illustrates their bigger idea and when you get presented with a new extract you can't know the writer's bigger message and you're not expected to talk about it. By the way I might be wrong I'm just guessing.
@@rorevishion618 they rarely come up if you spot one in the exam why not
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Hi Mr Salles and the experienced tutor I've had my mock paper 1 exam today at college.
I did two depth paragraphs for the language question and three beefy paragraphs for the structure question using beginning, middle and end instead of following the five story arc method. For the evaluation question, I just did two massive paragraphs instead of 4. I don't see the point for doing four when your only advised to do two for paper 2, question 4. My tutor recommends us student to do two big and massive paragraphs for question 4.
For question 5, I did a descriptive story ,which I filled to the end with 6 additional paragraphs including dialouges.
I'm only aiming for a grade 4/5 to get to University the following year alongside my Access course.
i’ve been told so many times to never do ‘i woke up and it was all a dream’ so now i’m so tempted to do that.
Noooooooo
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish update: i did not do that
@@lxuis3 what did you get and what'd you do instead
This is some work for 1 of the paragraphs I've done for question 3 I've done from a past paper if someone wouldn't mind giving feedback,
From the very first sentence, the writer builds references to this "stranger child" hooking the audience in as it adds to the mysterious and supernatural vibe especially starting off with an enigma build around this girls character as we don't know this girl or how she got in the garden, this is seen in lines 11-13 where the focus is shifted from Rosie suddenly onto the girl as "another child was there" and as this was the "first day at the house" this further builds mystery, intriguing the reader. At the end of the extract when the girl suddenly disappears this completes the circular structure of the mysterious plot.
im not a teacher im just a student but one thing id say is that you havent labelled any structural features apart from the change in focus so it would be good if you included (sentence forms/structures as an example) to show the examiner you have a clear understanding
You need 8 changes of focus. You have 3 so far. Don’t get to the ending until you’ve done all the changes of focus you can.
i am just a student but I just think you can extend your analysis and zoom into a quote and explain again and what Mr Salles said you need more changes of focus throughout the question. However good attempt
slightly irrelevant but maybe don't use the word 'vibe' in an english essay, perhaps instead use 'atmosphere'
10:32 what happened to Mr Salles?
first rare tutors died from Mr salles's cancer or HIV IMAO
@@thanansayanbalachandran6081 did she actually die
he deffo hit that
Sir, how sure are you of the 8 points for Q3 and 20 points for Q4. It seems beyond the prospect of imagination to write 20 points for the Q4 and, for both questions, the mark schemes example descriptors don’t include that many points at all.
Do what you are used to. I am 100% certain
Sir, I know your techniques for language question 2, 3, and 4 are meant to force the examiner into giving you marks, but how successful actually is it? Do markers actually pick up on the fact that, for example, using "could" and "might" shows evaluation and perception, or do the methods you use go right over their heads because they're quite unorthodox? Thanks.
Yes, they do pick up on it. If you want to see examples in action, type Mr Salles Substack into Google, and look for examples of essays, which I have posted there
You should watch his videos on how to answer each question, the tips there have helped me a lot
@@JohnJohnson-zt3bv Did you use his method involving numbered lists?
@@SonicBlueberry-k4e sorry, I don’t understand what you mean by numbered lists. He has a separate video for each question though, like Paper 1 Question 3
@@JohnJohnson-zt3bv Oh, I meant the lists Mr Salles talks about in a more recent video: ruclips.net/video/ph0je4SFwC4/видео.html
This really helped thank you
Yo are a legend mate, u just saved me
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@@thanansayanbalachandran6081 not funny
thank you son much I'm gonna be using those techniques to get some marks 👍🙂
How do you write 2 explanations for 1 quote? Do you have to pick a quote with 2 language devices in it ?
Write one explanation then try bring forth an alternative or converse outlook on the quote
for the alternative explanation, try thinking about how else the writer must have did ( this/that), to make the reader feel a certain way
@pabloescobar-rh6ec bro, once English language is done, I'm letting my illiterate side come out.
@@daquaviousbingletoniousdin3259 ong same right now i just need to sound nimble-witted😭
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please can you do a video all about descriptive writing
How can you pre-plan for question 5?
im not sure what genre to go for in my story and how i'd have to alter it to the given description or statement.
dont quote me on this but my teacher has always told me that no matter what the theme is you can link it to your pre planned story. for example if its a guy sitting on a boat in a lake you could say what he is thinking of, or an oasis in the desert and you turn around and see something that links to your story
I'm writing a few good sentences for different tones and memorising them, as well as planning out some good vocabulary and semantic fields to use.
@@otobricks2657 thank you I might try that
@@amelia1507 thank you im currently doing this too.
I'm so used to doing "i woke up as it was all a dream "😂
who else is here cramming everything might b4 the exam because u spent the whole half term to worried to revise lol
lmaooo same ill probs be up till like 3 or 4
FOR Q 5 SAY ITS J A PIC OF A PERSON, CAN YOU TALK ABOUT THE ENVIRONMENT. Also, if the picture is one of misery, can you start off with a positive description and develop it into a negative one (regarding to the pic) THANKS
Personally I think that’s alright as long as you mention the prompt now and again instead of writing an entirely different story. The thing you said about the tone going from happy to miserable would be good for structure as well so good idea. It’s a prompt so the writing can be loosely based of it x
@@cow1603 thankss, gl with exams
@@oscar9832 Thank you!
@@oscar9832 You too x
this was hilarious and so useful thank you
Happy to amuse!
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how do you choose points for your two paragraphs in question 2
choose 2 contrasting emotions
Do you have to mention the sentence structure/ form for the Question 2? (I don’t think it makes sense to add in that one of them is a declarative if it isn’t and without the effects)
No, dont
Hi sir, could you mark my Q5 response?
Something wasn’t right. Everything stopped in motion. The streetlights began to flicker aggressively, emitting an intolerable din. Transfixed, a crowd began to accumulate, in search for an answer. The commoners looked around for the big, whimsical reveal, hoping this was all a prank.
But no...
They remained overwhelmed by prodigious bewilderment and apprehension. What caused the Earth’s exultant communities to quiver in fear?
The whistle of the wind carried the repugnant odour of death, forewarning a prophecy that every helpless human, animal, and plant were soon going to face utter destruction. Its continuous howl reverberated within all, feeding on the fear of the innocent. The admonition was short-lived, as the vigorous storm wasted no time; it bellowed with ferocity, causing a myriad of raindrops to pelt down, spitting unto its defenceless subjects below. Rolling in like boulders, the merciless monsoon flooded the iniquitous town, belligerently destroying everything with towering waves. Pure undiluted terror wrapped around the convulsing bodies of God’s creation; He was insatiable for blood
Dusk quickly permeated the sky with murk, engulfing any remnant of sunlight it could devour. Soon, darkness shrouded the Earth. The feeble strands of grass that once danced with innocence soon regretted the gift of life. The prideful, nonchalant personalities that roamed the streets exuding confidence had now begged for the cessation of their plight.
None could mitigate this cataclysmic attack, for this was the Judgement of God.
its alright nothing special. I'd give it 17/40
Nicely written, and I'm not an examiner by any means but I can offer you some points for improvement if it helps.
1. Perhaps this is a bit too short. You want characters and this is a bit too heavy on scene setting and not enough characterisation.
2. A few punctuation errors here and there, which could cost you marks.
3. You have great vocabulary, but be careful not to shove unnecessary fancy vocab. Some vocab here looks out of place, e.g. 'prodigous bewilderment'. You want vocabulary that fits the tone of the writing, but still, some excellent words here. Maybe use them more in moderation though.
Once again, this is just my take as an English enthusiast (NOT an examiner). Hope this helps bro, good luck for paper 1.
Looks like a good start but you need it to be longer
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@@thanansayanbalachandran6081 why are u getting offended for them 💀💀
I got an grade 2 hopefully this videos help me
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for question 5, if you don't follow the prompt or only do it really vaguely, will it be rubrik infringement?
Mr Salles has mentioned this before in his previous videos - As long as you introduce the aspect of the question focus into your writing (maybe a bit at the beginning), you will be able to deviate later - he calls it 'breaking the vase' .
You need to buy/introduce the vase before you break it.
@@pratyasha279 ok thank you!
Sir i have one request if possible since you collabrated with two calves Can't you guys like do a triple collab and would be the best for us because 3 is better than 2 of like a full paper 1 and 2 advice all in one video it will really make an impact in everyone even me :) so basically 10 times 2 20 min vid :) If it is not possible maybe do a zoom call or something or have 3 vid of them separately and collate into one :)))
In the nicest way possible, please tell me you use more punctuation when you write with pen and paper
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Sir do you have any tip on how to make good inferences
Is the Q5 photo in colour in the exam?
Generally not
mr salles got me a grade 9 in lit and lang i was predicted a 6
during question 5 which question is easier to pick up most marks
I would say it’s down to what you are most confident with. There isn’t really much difference tbh you can get full marks in both so it’s down to you.
can I use chatgpt to make my story?
You can try
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What structures would you use for q2,3,4?
petal,peel but add more detail to so each dont make it strictly PETAL. make sure to add the effect on reader.
@@pink3408 what is petal?
@@KickzThe1st point,evidence,technique,analysis & link. its all the same thing
@@pink3408 thanks
For q2 and 4, I use What How Why - identify the feature/evidence, state HOW it creates a feeling and if you're doing well for time, add a WHY the writer has done that. And repeat this.
For question 3, I usually follow the focus as if it is a camera recording a film. Why does the focus change? How does it affect pacing, scene-setting, exposition (if it is from the beginning of a novel), etc.?
Got a mock tomorrow I’m so cooked😔
yo howd ur mock go
sexual tension is crazy
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can we combine the narrative with the description?
Yes
is a story or description easier?
Depends on which you prefer!
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish my teacher says not to go for a story because it will sound childish but i strugle to write such a long description
I recommend description because you get more ideas by looking at the picture and zoom into the settings, background and add a guy. Also you can compare it to the story task since the theme for both will most likely be the same of every year's exam hope this comment helps :)
@@thanansayanbalachandran6081 thanks that does help but wdym by comapring it to the story task
Hello Mr Salles,
I posted this comment on one of the Shorts, but I don't think it worked.
I tried out your 6-Cam Method for descriptive writing for the first time. I'll say it felt difficult, but the method is amazing and the experience was nonetheless enjoyable, especially when I started using allusion. Could you give me some feedback:
Zoom Out - Weather
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Outside the winds seemed to hurl like an oncoming army. Winds would whip the western skies; clouds sodden with spite unleash heinous precipitation. Precipitation that felt as though it could be distilled in time, and still drench out the good times. Also notice the tempestuous storm general, marching with black jackboots. Stricken gusts of wind align in flanks. A general, undoubtedly filled with rage, ferociously screamed at his men, bending the elements to his will.
Motif - Pen
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In the back seat, Simon’s hand clutched the seatbelt whilst just managing to cling to his new pen. He was an intelligent boy, and travelling to a new school, to study amongst his equals at last. The pen was a departure present from his younger brother Theodore, and a symbol that the two would never fall out of touch. His eyes swivelled to the window pane, with hands covering the pitiful display as storms thrash the natural order outside. At first sight it didn’t seem expected, and for a second he couldn’t feel the pen’s weight.
Zoom in - Dave’s face
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Dave cruised out at front, but in his usual gloom. Crusty eyes, unkept brown hair, tired of endless congestion after congestion, tow-truck after tow-truck, experienced it first, like the captain of all this ominous aura. Something just didn’t feel right. This wasn’t just a storm. There was some dark omen at play for sure.
Motif - Paper
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All of a sudden, a loose paper sheet flung in through the car window, heavy enough to catch Dave by surprise, flurry through the car and tap the radio controls. Nobody … nothing silences the Beatles. Right there and then, Simon acknowledges the moment for what it was. Right then and there, he realised the purpose of the pen, the connection between the occurrences: the pen was a symbol of the silence, the concealment, the missed opportunity.
Zoom out - Solar system?
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Who was there to wonder, awe-struck at the scene? Dave peered to the skies above, his eyes (but just for a moment) shut. He could sense it too, and had done so on occasions before, cognizant of the dangers that would ensue, praying for some guidance. Dave also feared this trip would go wrong.
Not even the clouds stopped to pity as they raced ahead. Simon, his (at least partial) smile faded, his head wracked into a slump, felt it. Soft, the clouds appeared, yet sinister. Unfamiliar. Nonetheless engendering a trinket of fear.
Motif - Pen
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In seconds the boarding school showed face. The exhaust sighed with exhaustion and resent or fear - difficult to decipher. Yet, a bulky white mass edged closer, came nearer, chanted twisted hymns even louds than the previous whisper.
Who says it couldn’t be a coincidence the paper and building were crafted with an equally threatening palette of whites? Simon had picked up the pen from his pocket and clicked it for the very first time
Can u just lay it out in bullet points for q1?
Can you make a vid on edexcel paper 1 pls?
the video are especially all exam tiers even ocr whatsoever
for the 8 mark language question, when you say 8 explanations for each 8 quotes, or 2 explanations for 4 quotes. Do you mean 8 language devices when you say explanations, like pick out 8 language devices??
You don’t need a language device in every explanation
sir do you think this year we will have an option between story and description?
you get this option every year, no exceptions
@@tortistortis yes you get it every year plus it will always be similar what so ever so yea :)
@@tortistortis not every year, no. Some years are two stories
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we say inshallah
@@AhmedNur-bu9bk what doe that mean , is it like if Allah wants. it or smth just curious ?
@@AhmedNur-bu9bk similar to Mashallah
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@@jebel-me5dw it means "god willing"
@@jebel-me5dw mashallah is used when smth good happens, like god willed for it to happen
how long should a point be thats whats confusing me by a point do you mean 2-3 sentences?
And one explanation need only be one sentence long.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish thanks so much wish i had checked back earlier i think I did so bad on this exam 😭
why you'se both giving each other hornny looks
he might be gay did the same to Mr EE
@@thanansayanbalachandran6081 haha i know 😆
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Sir you look so awkward in the introduction lmaoooo
if they give you 2 description prompts, can you just write a narrative? my teacher told us to not differentiate between a description and narrative - write the same thing for both
Yes, but make sure the narrative takes place over 10 minutes- few events
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish okay, thank you!! would i get marked down for writing the description as a narrative (with few events)?
@@aesthetic_disney_1239 no
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Hello
We are moving to AQA from OCR for our English provision. I have queries concerning papers 1 and 2 for 8700 English Language.
Some of the online 'support' and guidance varies massively in determining AQA's expectations for the questions, hence my post today.
I understand that the quality of answers overrides quantity and that perceptive answers outscore the more obvious. Having said that -
in the region of how many observations should students be making for each question? For example, Paper 1 Qu 2 - language observations - 3, 4, 5?
Qu 3 - structure - 3, 4, 5? And for Qu 4 - how many structure observations might be expected alongside the language ones?
Paper 2 - Qu 2 - how many similarities / differences? 3, 4, 5? How many points might you expect for Qu 3 and 4?
Why would you switch to an exam board that offers you so little clarity on what the questions actually require? The reason there is so much conflicting advice is that the exam and mark schemes are very hard to interpret, even for examiners. This makes little sense. Please look at Edexcel 2.0 to see a much, much better English exam. I sat it myself this month, and it was a joyful experience.
I have published a guide to each language question, with numerous example answers at ever grade, so you can see for yourself what is required. In a nutshell, you need the same number of explanations as there are marks in the question. This is a much more effective and concrete way of judging the difference between quality and quantity. You can get them all for free by signing up to Kindle Unlimited for 30 days. If you use the link in the description to any of my videos, Amazon pays me 3 pounds, or you can sign up without my link - both ways are totally free to you, but in the latter, Amazon will pay me only for the pages you actually read.
i now see what you guys meant in this comments...
so its not required to write in paragraphs for question 2 and 3?
it is you need 2 points minimum otherwise the examiner would think you only wrote one point and the max you can get is half so 4/8
Hi sir, can you still get a grade 8/9 from doing the description question? Why do you recommend doing the story?
You can
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish yay ended up with two 9s thanks sir x
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Can any1 say why firstratetutors wears the same top every video on mr salles channel man :(
allow it 🙄🙄
Probably filmed everything in the same day and then posted later
@@tisatisa8178 then why does mr salles shirt change duhhhh so unhygienic she is
@@rayhaan7860 focus on revising english😆
@@t.7821 focus on being hygienic anyways im revising maths rn tryna get a 9
your information is great and all but can you guys please get some better microphones i cant sleep in this
Why u lyin for
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why him it shoulda been me
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leaving this comment to wait for someone to ask what grade i got and ill reply happily
Go on then. What grade?
what grade did u get?
liar
Hi sir, is it possible to look at your email regarding a story i have wrote, and give feedback on it? Thanks
nah
you know you can submit your story in the comments too he will read he may have inf emails of student's work so yea if not just give it to your teacher
i woulda folded
so leng
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