i wanna start branching off and doing stuff other then making YTP but i had more ideas i could have added on to my last ytp that i felt the need to get out
A word about your sentence mixing, the cadence is absolutely on point! The samples you use could be better, though. I think what sticks out most is the "ING" from "I'M TALKING!" It sounds a bit too unnatural and also repetitive. Good sentence mixing and variety go hand in hand. Try branching out to other "ing"s and maybe even some pitch shifting. Hopefully this doesn't come off as too harsh, I think you show incredible potential with your sentence mixing, not to mention your storytelling! I also like that you go to the effort of keying Michael out and putting him in fitting environments for whatever's going on. All in all excellent poop, I'll be subscribing and eagerly awaiting more!
@sirizalot hey! Nah that wasn't too harsh and I'll admit I use that "ING" too much, I appreciate the feedback and I'll definitely be making more in the future, it's something I'm always trying to improve on
I still can't make YTPMV to save my soul
A word about your sentence mixing, the cadence is absolutely on point! The samples you use could be better, though. I think what sticks out most is the "ING" from "I'M TALKING!" It sounds a bit too unnatural and also repetitive. Good sentence mixing and variety go hand in hand. Try branching out to other "ing"s and maybe even some pitch shifting.
Hopefully this doesn't come off as too harsh, I think you show incredible potential with your sentence mixing, not to mention your storytelling! I also like that you go to the effort of keying Michael out and putting him in fitting environments for whatever's going on.
All in all excellent poop, I'll be subscribing and eagerly awaiting more!
@sirizalot hey! Nah that wasn't too harsh and I'll admit I use that "ING" too much, I appreciate the feedback and I'll definitely be making more in the future, it's something I'm always trying to improve on
@@OhF-ckItsDutch also, not sure if you're aware but there are transcripts of all the usual poems used in YTPs, makes sentence mixing a lot easier