''The Girl on the #9 Bus'' by David B. Harrington | BRAND NEW EXCLUSIVE HORROR STORY
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- Опубликовано: 22 сен 2024
- It's a horrible feeling knowing that I haven't been able to give 100% to my lovely peeps, but the realities of traveling abroad for a week and a bit were that I was only able to do my best as far as possible. Well... I'm back now and will be delivering three quality new stories every week; back to my Mon / Wed / Fri schedule.
Tonight's tale is typical of the ones I like best: a real slow burner that doesn't answer all of the questions it poses. I had a lot of fun reading it and hope you all enjoy it as much.
Have a great week everyone; see you again on humpday!
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From an original story by David B. Harrington, kindly shared directly with me for the express purpose of having me exclusively narrate it here for you all - submitted via email [original title: The #9 Bus]
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Good Thursday morning. Having woken at 5 a.m. I chose listening to a few tales rather then trying to go back to sleep. It's a good time for creepy things. I enjoyed this one.
Ah these ambiguous endings; so exasperating yet so entertaining! Plus the added bonus when Dr. Creepen said my name gave me such a thrill!
I'm such a sucker for stories like this, my body was 100% ready for no twist, completely normal ending, lol.
Oh how my life is so delightful to be able to listen to your sultry voice and tantalizing stories. Great job Doc😘
This a fantastic example of what some people call being "dicknapped" when the other head takes your whole damn body hostage.
This story was great... though i'm pretty confident you could read my shopping list and you'd make it interesting Doctor. Cant wait for more stories.
I just started listening to this channel a couple of weeks ago and I love your narrations and I like that the stories aren't the same as every other scary story channel out there. I am somewhat of a connoisseur when it comes to channels like this as I listen to them while I work and in my free time and this one has quickly become one of my favorites.
Very kind of you to say so!
THE DOCTOR ROCKS !!!!
You know Dr. Creepen, I love your stories as they play in the background of my photo editing...
Awesome! Just what the doctor ordered! 😊
Wow, how alluring. Thanks Doctor. Greg
Smilingly thanking you for sharing this story with your talented skin. Love to you and yours. Always watching, waiting and listening
Yay! Time for my check up!
Unnerving and arousing simultaneously. Your voice 😍
I'm glad you enjoyed my story, Jasmine. Dr. Creepen did a fantastic job narrating and capturing the atmosphere.
Big fan, but that one was not good. No mystery just irritation.
Great story Doc but I admit I got a little befuddled toward the end! LOL If I weren't sleepy, I'd go back and listen to the end again! Thanks for choosing this one!! Have a Terrific week!!
Even your so called "not 100%" is wonderful. I really enjoyed this story and video. Keep up the amazing work that you do, Doc!
"With the cunning of serpents..." though your delivery of that beautiful line was perfect, I still had to chuckle. Any snake owner can tell you that serpents are often dumb and clumsy little oafs. Virgil, my pine snake, often scares himself with his own tail, causing him to throw a literal hissy-fit. He has also bitten himself by accident four times while attempting to 'catch' and missing his pre-killed food (two more times than he's ever bitten me); two of these times he latched on so stubbornly that I had to pry his mouth open. Dante, my Central American boa, will believe himself to have a firm grip on my shoulder when he only has looped a coil around himself, leaving him to go rolling off my shoulder and into my lap. Heck, even wild snakes tend to be dirt dumb, as your average garter or ribbon snake will often startle from basking and go crashing quite loudly and obviously through the grass at a person's approach... oh, so stealthy indeed.
Guardian Beast Hahaha😂😂😂
Omg "dumb, clumsy little oafs." That's so funny though, would have never expected that. I really want a little snake 🐍 but don't know what to get.
It's all a clever deception for the day the reptiles overtake the land and eliminate the two-legged inferior beings.
I never realized they were such stupid creatures; biting yourself is never a good sign.
I'm Triggered by Dr Creepen, lol, was biting my finger while listening as i read your comment (i do it sometimes when stressed and thinking, and been very stressed lately)
If I write a creepy pasta about it and with that title, I hope you'll read it, dr :D
CharlieTheUnicorn - Many kinds of snakes make great pets! The biggest factors in figuring out what you might want is how big the species gets and how fast it moves. My number one rule in getting a snake is to only get a snake that has been bred and born in captivity, this helps to make sure you get a snake that's free of parasites and is used to humans and does not encourage stealing snakes from the wild and hurting the wild population.
The younger the snake, the better, as if you socialize the snake, first by introducing it to your scent with a smelly sock in its hiding area, then frequently placing your hand calmly in its enclosure, and finally handling it on a regular basis while its small, it will come to trust you and other humans and see you as just part of its normal environment. I trained Dante, my boa, this way as I planned to use him as a classroom pet. He's a big hit with kindergardeners and young elementary schoolers whenever I bring him along when running a reptile educational outreach show since he's so used to grabby hands and unexpected pats. It's a big help to my vet as he's so easy to treat and do yearly exams on since being man-handled is just a part of daily life. Though snakes aren't social animals, he generally takes interest in my movements during the day and will often come out of his cage and climb up my arm and onto my shoulder when given the opportunity. He also leans into my hand when I rub his back, often shifting himself so that I hit a knotted muscle, and will settle down when stroked under the chin, at very least tolerating the handling if not enjoying it outright.
My personal favorites are Central American Boa Constrictors (their species is Boa constrictor imperator or B.c.i)-- these include Nicaraguan Boas, Blood Boas, Hog Island Boas, Tarahumara Mountain Boas, etc. They stay relatively small, with males averaging 3-5 ft long and females 4-8ft - the males are very similar in size to a corn snake. These snakes are about the size of a cat and don't eat anything larger than one medium-sized rat once per week. Boas tend to be slow (my boa cruising at max speed is still slower than my walking speed) and easy-going since they're ambush predators who spend 90% of their day snoozing, and they're quite hardy. A thing to note is that despite being sufficiently different to be classified as different species or sub species, they're still considered the same species as the Colombian Boa (B.c.i.) and Red-Tail Boa (B.c.c) which can reach lengths up to 16ft, which may make it illegal to own in some areas. The general rule of thumb is if a snake can grow to be larger around than your arm/thigh and longer than 10ft, they can be a danger to children if they're very hungry or scared.
Oooh, a succubus who rides the bus! What fun!
the moral of this story....don't go chasing strange
Absolutely.
Cool story and great narration! Thanks! 😊✌👍
That was awesome! I honestly had no idea where the story was going till the end! I don't know if she was targeting him because he seemed so interested in pretty girls or because she thought he was so different that he stuck out to her like an easy target or maybe she's just always liked him a little too much idk but she was definitely a crazy :P
Thanks for another great story and fantastic narration.
Your 1 in a 1,000,000.
I'll say this dear Doctor. You know, I'm sure, that many have stated they could listen to you read a phone book or something similar and be happy just to hear your magickal voice. So many of the stories you read are as good as your voice. Tonight, however, IMO, I quite enjoyed your reading of a phone book. I rarely give such a critique. However, I am blunt and honest and call it like I hear it. You did a magnificent job Dr. Creepen.
Ive had the pleasure of listening to you for hours. So many i haven't heard yet. Btw i love u trying ur hand at a southern accent❤✌
LOL, your description... School's back in! I think that's when it picks up for narrators! That's when you give 100%, no one will be upset if you sham out during the Summer. So nice, though!
Loved it !💕
I suspect our Billy didn't live an innocent life. This was a case of the predator becoming the prey.
Could have been but the author made the rare choice of lack of depth to entertain the listener
Hey Doc, didn't make it as soon as I got the notification as I was listening to one of your other stories " We Thought You Knew". Good to hear from you, but then you could recite the alphabet and I'd be happy to listen!
Wheels on the bus go round and round....Love You Doc, keep up your amazing work!
Ghost_Junkie will do!
very happy to see the handsome Doc popping up right on schedule, I get all a fluster when you change appointments (a girls gotta know when she's gunna see the Dr. 🤷🏼♀️)
I know.. back to my regular schedule now... I promise ;-)
L.andM.E ASMR
hey girl how are you? i am quite good😊 so happy Dr. Creepens is So Exquisitely Delicious and he voice makes me Melt 😍😍😍 much love Sexy Grandma Darkness✌❤❤
L.andM.E ASMR
Oh he does get our blood to pumping doesn't he?! SMH glorious music to our ears.
Dr. Creepen i'll hold you to it ;)
Sexy Grandma Darkness good evening sexy g-ma! 😇 ah it's certainly a nice way to round off the beginning of the week! 💛
NICE ONE GREAT STORY, FEW MEN COULD RESIST LISTENING THIS, i couldnt, twice
Fantastic narration, Doc. Always a pleasure to tune in.
draconis loves the sound of your voice, a creepy lovin dragon is in zen mode while listenin to you!!!!
Really good story and narration.
I've been waiting for this all day! ❤️
Excellent intro Dr.
Great narration once again Dr. Billy once again let his lust get the better of his judgement in a creepy seductive sort of my. 🖤
What's truely ironic about me listening to this story is that my name is Amanda and I have long brown hair as well as blue eyes... I promise I won't lure anyone into a creepy mansion fire trap though lol!
A proper welcome back home dearest Dr. The last Friday's upload may have had some shall we say unpolished moments but it just made you more endearing.
4:45am. Something to listen to before going to work. 😎
This is a great story! Always love to see you pop up, Doc. ;)
Mother Raven
you are being Naughty 😄😝😄 lol..he does have that effect on us Ladies💝🌹😉 much love Sexy Grandma Darkness✌❤❤
Sexy Grandma Darkness ;)
Mother Raven
He sure does make us all stop & listen closely with little to no effort. Much love to you both.
Happy to pop up!
Oh i love how your voice adds that extra depth thanks doc i needed a good creep
Great to have you back...well deserved vacation!! Return of the best!!
Was introduced to you by a friend yesterday, this marks the second of your videos I have watched/listened to... delightful...
Ohhh lucky lucky, watching The Amityville Horror and Dr. Creepen....ahhhhhhh Mondays
Wonderful listen and narration as always. You always deliver Doc!
Well Doctor Creepen,
That was an awesome story. I like these twisted stories. Makes you wonder who is up to what. I think it any have been someone from his past that was infatuated with him & she came back to get her revenge for a broken heart.
Tiffany Benefield but then he would have recognized her.
CharlieTheUnicorn
Not if she was in another body of someone he never met &/or knew.
Another really good story from Dr Creepens
Well I had to revisit this one..I will never get caugt up this way lol! Thanks Doc! Sweet dreams to you too.😉
This is a pretty awesome and very eerie creepypasta Dr Creepen !
This is a great story
I've been absent for so long and noe om finally able to sit down and listen to your beautiful voice again 👌🏽 I had Creepen Withdrawals 💔
Awesome narration to a fantastic story, you have a knack for selecting the creepy ones Dr 👍🏻🙌
"And thissssss is what she said." I love how you drag out your words. Let them hang on your lips. Sigh.....
Jackie Marcucci You're not the only one ..It's too delicious. 💋
Anne Boelyn 😉
Can picture Doc having just been a snake in front of a microphone all along :D
Well dam Nice story
Very good story
Thank you Scott!
Wonderful!
Very disturbing Dr. Ha ha haaa!!! You did a great job on all of those characters!
wow didn't see that coming. it's ok ppl get busy sweety. I just love the way you talk can listen to you all day. i let my grandkids listen to you on sat their reactions were very funny, they are very bright the one yr old was say wow,the 3 yr old was gasping at certain points and the 5yr old just kept saying I like his voice the 6 yr old was fishing with my daughter, her husband and his parents I thought it was cute to see how they reacted to Baxter baby hands they hid their hands under them lol. keep up the great work luvs to you and yours.
12:34 made me giggle like a very small child. 😊 Thank you, Dr.
Yeah, I freak out when ever a beautiful girl notices me. Feel persecuted and that.
this is my third attempt at listening to this story. your voice is so soothing I keep falling asleep. you'd be great at asmr, good Dr.😊 hope I make it to the end of the story this time.😋 LUV YA!!!😘😗😍😍😍😍
Can you make a patreon please I wanna help support you through this RUclips madness more than I already am
Coming soon!
Yes
Great story!
Amanda is a monster disguised as a femme fatale.
Could have been a little less vague. I like stories that leave a little to the imagination, but this one could have added a little more about the girl or what happened to the boy.
Great stories loved it ! and your voice the way you read them I could listen all night ☺
This story is written superbly and is an excellent modern take on the medieval notion of the "prankster demon", which are slightly more benign than their biblical counterparts and were known to play a whole range of jokes on unsuspecting humans, such as making windows fall and doors refuse to close. If provoked or chased, they can do more malicious things such as make milk curdle or even ruin a harvest and threaten a village with famine. As a matter of fact, one of the very first gun control laws passed in the world, in a town named Lubeck, Germany in the 1500s, was done in order to prevent the attraction of prankster demons to the town. Apparently, Church officials believed that the townspeoples' tradition of long-range target shooting with highly accurate and advanced rifled muskets, with the clouds of fire and sulfur stench upon the guns being shot, were demonic in nature and the fact that the bullets, which were stabilized by the rifled barrels and could hit a target over a mile away, proved that a demon "helped" the bullet in it's flight. Of course, now, we have learned that the true reason for the banning of firearm use in Lubeck, was due to the fact that the ruling chivalric order of knights and feudal lords realized that an armed civilian population with such skill with deadly weapons posed a serious danger to their continued rule over the land, which was enforced by the sword and lance and had the backing of the Church. What they really feared were not demons, prankster or not, but heretics and rebels, especially those with the means to fight back against government oppression.
Expectacular as always 😊😊😉😉!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Always a pleasure listening to you doc3
Love your vids! 👻
Simply Simoleons happy to hear it!
Ah a succubus is always the best kind of monster! Loved this story as usual doctor! Have you ever thought to narrate dark poetry as well? 😊❤️
In case Of rain I have but it's a very difficult skill to master
Dr. Creepen
A succubus in a bus,with rose petals and thorns in her purse,
her indescribable beauty has poets longing for words.
Causing them to stutter, causing a nauseating suffer, timelessly odd, in a pause less game of seduction, leaving even, a seasoned player to buffer.
Jack Dominus wonderful ❤️
In case Of rain Thank you. Have a lovely day.
Dr. Creepen i wouldn't think you'd have a very hard time at all, your reading's are spot on! Especially in term's of situational narratives. Ooh how id love to listen to you read just one of Edgar Allen Poe's Poem's! ❤️🙌🏻☺️ listen to me greedily stroking your ego to persuade you to read one 😝
Love the story thanks
Welcome Home Doc!!!!
just in time for my appointment
Glad you could make it, Paul!
Long spoiler theory: I know that the author has given some clarification, but here's my take anyway. Amanda goes to class and rides the bus, so she is human enough to probably have a tuition bill, college ID etc. But, from the early part of the story when Billy sees the writing on the window, it's possible that he's delusional. The writing seems to appear out of nowhere, Amanda always seems to be disappearing or behaving strangely. From that point, Billy starts acting obsessive and strange. He blows off work, he feels completely freaked out by any interaction with the girl. He starts trying to stalk her, basically. How could Amanda find out not only his name, but his mother's phone number? That doesn't make any sense. But, if these interactions are happening mostly in his head, that does make sense. His mother even mentions that the girl sounds young. That could be his mind trying to tell him that his obsession is wrong. The call he gets sounds distorted, and he reacts to it by getting violent, as he does later in the house. At the mall Amanda says all kinds of flattering things to him that really she would have no way of knowing. But it could be things that Billy thinks about himself. When he opens the letter, he says he knows the area well, and when he gets to the old house, he recognizes the grandfather clock, but it's not enough to throw him off his obsession or tell him that something isn't right. He either is imagining the clock, using a memory from the past, or he is actually in the old house of grandparents (I lean toward the latter). All this adds up to him being totally unstable. Even if Amanda is an actual evil creature, and not just a delusional incarnation of a girl he knows only from the bus, odds are that most of the action is taking place in Billy's head. I think his violent instability caused him to start the fire himself.
My first take of the story was that something was missing, but after analysing it, the ending reminded me of the old 60's and 70's horror flicks that would take place in old gothic estate mansions. There are a few of them that revolve around the question of supernatural events vs. crazy delusions, such as the Haunting and House on Haunted Hill, as well as bunch that I used to watch on UHF channels on Saturday afternoons as a kid, but whose names I've long forgotten. And now I'm just showing my age. ;)
I was considering the possibility of there being an 'unreliable narrator' to the story. Thanks a lot for this great comment, dani.
Very interesting analysis! Also, you say that the author has given some clarification, but I could not find it anywhere... Would you mind explaining what the author said or just provide me a means of finding it? Thanks a lot!
Sorry for the slow reply. if you look at the comment thread lower down by the overlord you will see replies from David B. Harrington, the author.
dani o ,I love your insight,I couldn't put it together til I read your comment,my head was spinning,thank you.
DavidR
Oh, I love you! You just totally redeemed this story for me. I honestly feel the author should rewrite the story with that concept in mind. It's well written, but this reframes the content in a much more interesting way. It's very convincing that she's creepy all throughout, so if it turns out that he's actually creepy too but doesn't know it because his brain is fucking with him, that's a mind-blowing twist. And it makes him more sympathetic, and her too.
Billy Was a bully. Amanda is "a man duh" and billy's cousin. When younger Billy bullied his male cousin for being feminine, he then got a sex change change and turned into Amanda. Trying to live a normal life Amanda encountered billy on the bus and sought revenge.
made it to the end! it was sooo worth it. the mystery made the story so exciting. btw, you do a pretty good "sexy girl" voice. 😋 i loved the ending. fire can really come in handy to get rid of those little annoyances. 😉 LUY YA!!!😏😑😗😍😍😍
Good to see y ou back Dr Creepen
Madi Nina thanks!
Holy ? 😸, Doctor, that laugh at the end of the message! Truly diabolical and twisted. 🐊 Thank you for an especially fun start to a lovely visit. ☕*☕
Sultry creepy night music and a beautiful intro pic. You hit a home run! 👀
How does it feel to be home? 🌿😽
Still burning, what a shame. sometimes nothing changes.🔥
One more thing... the backward doors made me dizzy. I liked the colored ones you did recently as well. Seems I can't stop talking to you tonight, smh lol.💫
Well that ended up better for him than I thought...
Amanda reminds me of Junji Ito's Tomie
So was the girl in the Story a 👻 or Something more Wicked😲 boy Doc you got me Scratching my head? 😏 you did Magnifcent job on the narration as Always 😆 Tina Turner said it You're Simply The Best😄😚😍 keep up the OutStanding work!! much love Sexy Grandma Darkness✌❤❤
ery rtyu she is more of a femme fatale of film noir. She seduces men into doing horrible things, like murder in exchange for love and the victim is often gets into trouble or she disposes of them after the victim does what she wants. Examples include Phylis from Double Indemnity and most of the females in Hitchcock film.
The girl is open to interpretation in this one, I guess!
So many emojis
Your voice is so amazing
I wonder if the writer is from the Pittsburgh, PA area...? "Slippy" is a regional slang for "slippery" there.
No I'm not from Pittsburgh. I am from Connecticut, but I live in York County, PA.
#1 babe!! Thank you Dr. I so enjoy
ur videos...🖤😈🖤👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼❣️
Nice to see you here, Christel.
What? Is there a part 2?
Nice video doctor :)
this has become my favorite creepypasta narrator i am b l e s s e d
Desteroni Da Vinci Any fan of Da Vinci is all good in my book
Hey,I don't get it?
I approve of this girls lifestyle
I hate stories that leave you hanging like that.!
It's like listening to a creeper's pathetic fantasy not a scary story
17 people were so scared they accidentally hit the dislike button
Almost 70k!
Lol nice
That left so many questions, one of the stranger ones being, if she was some kind of spirit, why did she actually go to the English lit class? 😂
Thought it was the story I’ve been looking for for months but no, my search goes on 😢
🌿👀 I could tell you liked it by the way you read it, Doc. Have a fantasy? 😸