Good vid, but id suggest trying not to use language like "could fight very good" or "some terrible happened". It comes off a lazy or uninformed about the subject for the listener, even if thats not the case. Even simple adjustments like "noticed his particular prowess for combat" instead of "could fight very good" make a big difference in keeping the listener engaged (and up your word count also). Liked the vid though, cheers
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Slade sounds like Big Boss.
Good vid, but id suggest trying not to use language like "could fight very good" or "some terrible happened". It comes off a lazy or uninformed about the subject for the listener, even if thats not the case. Even simple adjustments like "noticed his particular prowess for combat" instead of "could fight very good" make a big difference in keeping the listener engaged (and up your word count also).
Liked the vid though, cheers
I understand,thanks for the feedback 👍