Walk This Way (Aerosmith) verse riff: The REAL way! Weekend Wankshop lesson 140

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  • Опубликовано: 24 ноя 2024

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  • @Ian85percent
    @Ian85percent 7 лет назад +71

    This guy does such a good job of teaching. Very thorough. Love the disclaimer that there are slight variations throughout the song. I would love to see a video of the three people who actually gave thumbs down, trying to play this riff. I mean the guy goes into picking, groove, fingering, muting... good teacher and player.

    • @BenEller
      @BenEller  7 лет назад +24

      thanks my man! and somewhere in there i think i mention that it has a couple variations... basically just have about 3 beers and 3 shots, play this riff as many times as they do in this song, and you'll accidentally play all the variations they do! hahaha

    • @aylbdrmadison1051
      @aylbdrmadison1051 7 лет назад +5

      Sadly you need a disclaimer for most anything on youtube because it's filled with experts who have no experience in every field you can think of.

    • @davidjasonbruno1756
      @davidjasonbruno1756 5 лет назад

      Absolutely!

    • @davidmayguitarsolotutorial4366
      @davidmayguitarsolotutorial4366 2 года назад

      Great Ben. Ever since the first time I heard this one it has been a mystery.

  • @espanolnucleus
    @espanolnucleus 3 года назад +19

    Great tutorial! I have a suggestion for people who have trouble playing the second part of the riff cleanly at tempo. Instead of flattening your ring finger to hit the D string, try using your middle finger to fret the A string at the 10th fret and your ring finger to fret the D string at the 10th fret. Your index finger will still be on the E at the 8th fret. For many this is a more comfortable position to hold for an extended period, and if you're a fan of the Police, you will recognize it as the hand position Andy Summers uses for the long stretches on Every Breath You Take.

    • @JTroskaTV
      @JTroskaTV 2 года назад

      Yep. That’s how I do it. I had an accident as a baby where the tip of my ring finger was cut off and reattached but a little crooked. So I can’t get the correct angle if I try to fret my pinky three frets above it. So I use my index and middle fingers for the root and fifth. And use my pinky for the 6th and minor7th.

    • @maverikk521
      @maverikk521 Год назад

      Wow that makes it so much easier for me! doesnt feel like im ripping my wrist out

    • @AaronAubreyPhoto
      @AaronAubreyPhoto Год назад +1

      still is too much a of a stretch for my tiny hands haha.I can barely reach the 13th fret w my pinky!!

    • @teddmented
      @teddmented Год назад

      I feel like a beginner again with that finger stretch

  • @oedipian
    @oedipian 3 года назад +9

    I've been watching tons and tons of guitar videos, yours included. I've come to the conclusion that you're probably the best on tutorials (and one of the best on playing as well, you make it look so easy ! ), because you master what you teach, you always play the exact versions and not some approximative shit (I have no problem with guitarist showing their covers of solos or riffs, but few of 'em have the credibility to teach, myself included). Great job man. !! Thanks a lot.

  • @AbComp870
    @AbComp870 11 месяцев назад +2

    Pointing out that swing feel really helped!! Nailed it.

  • @dagwood4669
    @dagwood4669 4 месяца назад

    Uncle Ben has the best damn guitar tutorials on the internet.
    Every lesson should start off showing the riff that's going to be taught being played at proper speed.
    He is one of the very few people that actually do this

  • @jtgaebe9281
    @jtgaebe9281 7 лет назад +4

    Dude, from Megadeth to Aerosmith... in one week I just relived the majority of my childhood. Thanks man!

  • @skeeterbodeen8326
    @skeeterbodeen8326 Год назад

    Thanks Uncle Ben, I learned this by ear 40yrs ago, wrong of course, so it's taking me forever to break that old habit for this...

  • @efa666
    @efa666 4 года назад +5

    I've always played it at the 3rd fret, also using the open G with pulloffs.

  • @probono9341
    @probono9341 5 лет назад +1

    Appears to be an outstanding teacher, very detailed-oriented.

  • @TrumpetsInMy4x12
    @TrumpetsInMy4x12 5 лет назад +50

    Two things:
    1. Thanks for the excellent breakdown of this riff.
    2. There is no way that 70's Aerosmith played this remotely good in any concert setting with all the chemicals they ingested.

    • @pappyodanial
      @pappyodanial 5 лет назад +9

      Yeah my buddy who saw them said they were falling over they were so high on heroin.

    • @Kinopio710
      @Kinopio710 4 года назад

      Well maybe with them spending the majority of their time playing those songs and those only it can become like a reflex, but yeah I wouldn’t doubt that backing tracks were involved

    • @absea7918
      @absea7918 4 года назад +4

      This was a Brad part, and he kept it together, while Joe and Steven were out of it.

    • @justinhren3431
      @justinhren3431 3 года назад +5

      I've seen Aerosmith live 3 times and although it wasn't in the 70s. They are incredible.

    • @tomflynn2912
      @tomflynn2912 3 года назад +2

      The key to enjoying Aero in the 70's was to injest the same amt of drugs that they did. Oh yeah!

  • @maxscardanelli6185
    @maxscardanelli6185 7 лет назад +6

    When it's 5AM and you can't sleep there's always guitar. Gotta love the time zone differences between U.K (where I am) and the U.S.

  • @horowizard
    @horowizard 7 лет назад

    Great channel. I'm not a guitarist but I can appreciate any tutorial that demonstrates correct execution of popular cover songs. Especially when, as you say, so many people do it wrong.

  • @MIDI3301
    @MIDI3301 Год назад

    Perfect! I'm learning this song now and my instructor mentioned that I need to do this. Your video is extremely helpful. Thanks!

  • @JohnHWelch63
    @JohnHWelch63 5 лет назад

    I always loved the funk sound of that riff. It's got a great groove to it.

  • @philmarlow5751
    @philmarlow5751 Год назад

    Just ran across you. Pro saxophonist and hack guitarist for years. Also taught. You do a great job breaking it down. I am able to LEARN A LOT FROM YOU IN A MINUTE AND DO IT A SHORT TIME LATER. GREAT WORK MR ELLER.sorry for the caps.

  • @jrussell4711
    @jrussell4711 2 года назад

    My life is comple: 44 years latercI have been enlightened! You the Man!

  • @loveguitars
    @loveguitars 7 лет назад +9

    Awesome Ben!!
    How about some more Vito Bratta.
    White Lion - Let's get crazy
    Thanks!!

  • @RTmusicLtd2020
    @RTmusicLtd2020 4 года назад +2

    Great lesson, Ben. Very useful and helped me make a short cover of this track. The opening riff may also be worthy of a short lesson by someone, as well as the second solo. I see too many people struggle with that using online tabs that I think are too awkward to play consistently. I've made my own discoveries on these but it's interesting to see other people's take on it.

  • @artiet5982
    @artiet5982 7 лет назад +1

    Also, I've tried to learn this riff since I started playing in 1999! This Aerosmith verse riff so thank you!

  • @SGobuck
    @SGobuck Год назад

    I threw in a pinky slide on the freted E instead of letting the fretted A linger around because my timing seems better on the whole riff. Maybe too much, but it fits and the timing is there. 🤷‍♂️
    This IS the best tutorial out there on how to pull this off and without it I'd still be lost.

  • @skummtoons6686
    @skummtoons6686 6 лет назад

    Great! Love this guy's lessons. Makes you feel like you're one on one in the same room with him 👍👍

  • @mattolenn
    @mattolenn 18 дней назад

    The pick (holding) detail at the end there was a game changer.

  • @ziggy8757
    @ziggy8757 6 лет назад +1

    best guitar teacher on youtube hands down

  • @guitagious9464
    @guitagious9464 6 лет назад

    THANK YOU for clearing up this long time mystery/debate!!! I think you are spot on with this version.

  • @robertwieser822
    @robertwieser822 6 месяцев назад

    Couldn’t ask for a better guitar tutorial!!! Thanks Ben

  • @napesdrk1174
    @napesdrk1174 2 года назад

    Just about to start tracking this tune and I figured I would stop and see how uncle Ben does it!

  • @mrmustard4478
    @mrmustard4478 7 лет назад +4

    Thank you, Ben!! Please show us that crazy main riff in Poison Was the Cure, or those note-y bridge riffs in Raining Blood and Angel of Death. All of those have been incorrectly tabbed out since the dawn of time!

  • @ErizotDread
    @ErizotDread 6 лет назад

    Dude, you are a phenomenal teacher! Very well explained, for all levels of player!

  • @philipbraid2948
    @philipbraid2948 5 лет назад +1

    Thanks Ben,been try to get this down for ages ,just found you got it now ,great lesson

  • @jefferylord3068
    @jefferylord3068 6 лет назад +1

    i have struggled through this lick for years kind of wanking about randomly in the c pentatonic position there! thx for thr lesson!

  • @Geotubest
    @Geotubest 7 лет назад +1

    Hi Ben, Just stumbled across your channel as I was surfing on Aerosmith vids. Your instruction is brilliant. Really...the level of detail and pacing is perfect. Keep up the great work. Subscribed.

  • @guitarfreak585
    @guitarfreak585 7 лет назад +2

    That's always how I played it. Tough to keep the swing going if you're singing at the same time though.

  • @TheGuitarRoom
    @TheGuitarRoom 4 года назад

    Something to consider when playing this Joe Perry rhythm. Joe is not the technically based strong instrumentalist that Ben is. What Joe has is an incredibly grounded and seasoned wholistic sense of rhythm. He feels his rhythms feels different parts of the rhythm with “both hands”. Something that is often not stressed or consider with guitarists. Generally the idea is to be rhythmic with your dominant hand and mechanical with your non dominant hand. People who are holistic rhythmically feel rhythm with their whole body and both hands. Joe is also left handed And his predominant rhythmic hand is his fretting hand. Finally, and Ben addresses this, it’s how Joe holds his pick, his pick angle and wether or not he rakes through the strings or slaps them. Raking is like pushing someone and slapping is like slapping them. The effects are also similar. Raking moves the string but without a lot of sharp affect as a contact point. Slapping stings and has a sharp effect at the contact point and subsequently a brighter and more pronounced sound. The walk this way riff has a fuller tone. And it was done on a Les Paul. When you combine all of this, you get the real Joe Perry feel. Good job Ben

  • @dannywinters2905
    @dannywinters2905 11 месяцев назад

    This was helpful thanks, the thing that was elusive for me was right after the 1st section octave down, then octave up and the double on the the 5th. I've seen transcripts in guitar magazines that didn't get this right, good job!

  • @ThomasJMusic86
    @ThomasJMusic86 10 месяцев назад

    I had it closer than I thought, but I had one little part off! Dang. Lol. Thanks for this lesson.

  • @guitarstarz2688
    @guitarstarz2688 3 года назад

    Thx brushing up on that one for a gig! You're right on the money.

  • @johnnyroastbeef84
    @johnnyroastbeef84 7 лет назад +2

    Uncle Ben has all the choice geetars! Nice work Ben! great vid

  • @kyled348
    @kyled348 5 лет назад

    Great video! I've never seen any videos by you before but I think I know who I'll go to when I have confusion on playing other riffs!

  • @jeremymcnutt3979
    @jeremymcnutt3979 5 лет назад

    Another outstanding video. Nice work Uncle Ben!

  • @artiet5982
    @artiet5982 7 лет назад +1

    Oh, and it sounds spot on! Awesome work mang

  • @Glissmann
    @Glissmann 5 лет назад

    i always struggled without verse but thanks to your lesson I can manage now

  • @samsancheziii
    @samsancheziii 2 года назад

    This is just what I’ve been looking for. I knew I wasn’t crazy.

  • @ademh3745
    @ademh3745 7 лет назад

    Hi Ben. First I wanted to say I think your lessons are probably the best out on the Internet due to the sheer amount of detail, kudos for going to the lengths of learning exactly how a song is played.
    The second thing I wanted to ask is to see if you could do a lesson on one of my all time favourite guitar songs. Like Walk This Way it's one that everyone seems to have a different way of playing but nobody can agree exactly the way the song was originally played. The song is "Do You Feel Like We Do" by "Peter Frampton", specifically the live version off of "Frampton Comes Alive"

  • @toddknaster9731
    @toddknaster9731 2 года назад

    Great lesson and best breakdown of this riff! It has taken me a long time to get really close but you finally helped me mail it.
    I know JP plays it in the 8th position on the low E string but I just saw a video of Slash playing it at the 3rd position on the A string. You play the C on the 3rd fret of A string, then the G on the 5th fret of the D string, then the A on the 7th fret of the D string then the C on the 5th fret G string, G on the 5 th fret D string, A sharp then A on 8&7th frets D string. Still pick it like Ben showed.
    I know that might be hard to follow, but figure out the notes the way Ben teaches it and then find them starting with the C note on the 3rd fret A string. It is a good exercise for learning the notes on the fretboard . I still prefer to play it at the 8th position but it is easier as far as stretching your pinky playing it at the 3rd fret. One other tip. Play it with the neck of the guitar angled up and the stretch is very easy. All of your favorite guitar players don’t just do it to look cool!!

  • @MrTortureneverstops1
    @MrTortureneverstops1 7 лет назад +1

    Hi from France. Good lesson, I'm gonna try it !
    I saw a moustached behind you. I saw him somewhere but where ?...
    What about some Zappa solos ?

  • @jamesball5743
    @jamesball5743 11 месяцев назад

    Dude great lesson, tricky one to teach and this is excellent!!

  • @DouglasChristian
    @DouglasChristian 5 лет назад

    Thanks. There are so many details here that I couldn't get anywhere else.

  • @gabriel77196
    @gabriel77196 7 лет назад +6

    Can you do Dire straits - money for nothing?
    Thanks for the awesome work!

  • @stolz_ar
    @stolz_ar 7 лет назад +3

    You're amazing Ben. I'm trying to start learning how to play guitar, although I'm failing miserably. You make it seem so simple. Maybe I need to get my shit together and get personal lessons instead of trying to figure it out on my own with online shit.
    Anyway, keep up with the great work. This is one of the best channels to learn about how to play guitar. Nobody else comes even close.

    • @skummtoons6686
      @skummtoons6686 6 лет назад +1

      Keep doing what you are doing. Your learning from it. Put it down for a minute if you get frustrated, then go back to it. You will Conquer!!

  • @lewys5902
    @lewys5902 3 года назад

    Thanks for this, really helpful. Never been very good at the swing thing, so this helped alot 👍

  • @Tennis_Fan2022
    @Tennis_Fan2022 2 года назад

    Smashed the like button. This is one of the best no bs dead on walk throughs of a guitar part I've found. Thank you!

  • @zenatty1
    @zenatty1 7 лет назад +2

    excellent lesson- as always

  • @davidjasonbruno1756
    @davidjasonbruno1756 5 лет назад

    Ben Eller is a cool dude who can play the HEYACK out of the guitar and is an excellent teacher. I learned how to play the intro to Drop Dead Legs from him (one of his videos) and I would have never figured that out alone. Plus Ben Eller is hilarious especially at "step dad speed." Thanks Mr. Eller

  • @arnarne
    @arnarne 2 года назад

    You are the best Ben. Thank you!

  • @TreatzTMA
    @TreatzTMA 6 лет назад

    Another great video. So glad I came across your channel

  • @rictube11
    @rictube11 7 лет назад

    Nice lookin' Paul...! Thanks for the lesson

  • @Lakestir
    @Lakestir Год назад

    It is a tricky little part and nobody plays it right except Joe Perry (and who is their rhythm player). But you figured it out. Now I can it play it!

    • @johntate5050
      @johntate5050 Год назад

      I am a vert hairy man. People say I smell terrible. They say my house is pungent. I like pickled mussels.

  • @artanddesign8561
    @artanddesign8561 3 года назад

    Killer lesson freaking perfect! Thank you so much for cracking the code!!!

  • @joebutler3608
    @joebutler3608 2 года назад

    I used to play this with a guy who did a part similar, but simplified, to what you're doing but I'd play a 1st position C chord with no 3rd and bounce between the low C to the higher C on the B string first fret and then do pull offs on the G string, so the chord alteration part is like (string/fret) 4/O, 4/3, 4/2, 4/O. This is a basic guide, not meant to be accurate to the note, but if you mess with it you'll see how freeing this is. In this way the barre guitar doesnt have to do that much but add the chicka chika while the 1st position guitar does something like a country lick over a funky beat. In order to play this part you gotta be good at muting unplayed strings! The 2 together make for a complex sounding part. My old school tab is a guide,

  • @SMart7751
    @SMart7751 8 месяцев назад

    This is a really good lesson!! 👍

  • @Roscoe1279
    @Roscoe1279 2 года назад

    Thanks for clarification. I played that C riff slightly different on many a gig. 👍

  • @condocows7635
    @condocows7635 5 лет назад

    Thanks Uncle Ben. Good lesson.

  • @Nukeboy93
    @Nukeboy93 7 лет назад +1

    Sounds great! And accurate!

  • @barrypwalkerable
    @barrypwalkerable 5 лет назад

    Great lesson. Thanks for posting 👍👍👍

  • @proctorul
    @proctorul 7 лет назад +1

    Man, I wasn't even looking for this but I took the guitar and learnt the hell out of it. Thanks, a fucking lot!!!

  • @JorgeRodriguez-sg2si
    @JorgeRodriguez-sg2si 2 года назад

    Good job teacher!
    Thank you very much

  • @MarkPritchardGuitar
    @MarkPritchardGuitar 5 лет назад

    Broken down very well Ben, awesome lesson!

  • @avielkharrat5788
    @avielkharrat5788 7 лет назад

    Hey guys,
    For those of you who have small hands, like me, there is an alternate patern for the left hand: instead of streaching your pinky to get that B flat, you might want to reach for the D string, pretty much like playing the C7 chord. You can still apply that nice alternate swing picking that Ben shows.

  • @RussCoffinmusic
    @RussCoffinmusic 5 лет назад

    I've just scrolled through the comments and read a couple from people who said this is too hard for them to do. This is a standard rock & roll rhythm move, sometimes referred to as the 'Chuck Berry Move' (google it), and there was a time where if you played in a band, odds are most of the songs you played required you to do this move.

  • @kenlelon369
    @kenlelon369 7 лет назад +1

    That was very good, Ben. That was a lot more interesting than some stranger telling me why I suck at guitar. lol

  • @mrtylerlarson
    @mrtylerlarson 7 лет назад

    Fantastic tutorial, Ben! Def a riff that I've worked on and dropped over the years over and over. I think I've got it now, though! Cheers, man! :-D

  • @Sminkionato
    @Sminkionato 4 года назад

    Grazi, il miglior tutorial su questo pezzo!

  • @jaxcharvel
    @jaxcharvel 7 лет назад +5

    Dude, please do the main riff of Extreme's He-Man Woman Hater. That riff has plagued me since I started playing guitar 20 years ago. I can play it all except the super fast, surgically tight descending 3's lick. It sounds like all alternate picking, but watching Nuno it's pick, pull off, pick, pick pull off pick. How does he make a pull off sound exactly like a picked note?

    • @MehYam2112
      @MehYam2112 7 лет назад

      I think it's all legato. I managed to get it up to speed cleanly all picked, then I saw a vid of him demonstrating it slowly - it's nearly all hammers and pulloffs, heavily muted.
      I have an old Washburn N2 tuned to Eb with 9-42's like Nuno (I think). When you legato that rhythm part and hit/pull the notes hard with your fret hand, it sounds better than picked.

  • @naderzein2435
    @naderzein2435 7 лет назад +1

    Leavin a comment to support ya uncle ben!

  • @guitardavepdx
    @guitardavepdx 7 лет назад +2

    I truly believe the art of the groove is being lost. Very few guys out there have any funk left in them. You should do a lead lesson from Journeys Lovin', song

  • @badmotorcycle1415
    @badmotorcycle1415 7 лет назад

    Great lesson!! I'd like to see more on the solos. Thanks. Sad about this type of playing being a dying art. Rock & Roll ain't what it used to be.

  • @jamesdickinson4186
    @jamesdickinson4186 6 лет назад

    Great lesson, love the detail to the lesson. I wonder if you could do Day of the Eagle by Robbin Trower. It’s another one of those great classic rock songs that sounds easier then what it really is. Thank you

  • @JTroskaTV
    @JTroskaTV 2 года назад

    Doctor Feel Good is another song that seems to work better when this technique is applied. I don’t know how Motley Crue plays it. But I could never get that song to swing quite right until I used this technique. Now I use this technique pretty much anywhere unless I absolutely have to economy pick for speed.

  • @ClassicJukeboxBand
    @ClassicJukeboxBand 2 года назад

    Thanks brother, sounds exact!

  • @fibonachos4039
    @fibonachos4039 6 лет назад

    Great teacher

  • @truthiz7873
    @truthiz7873 5 лет назад

    His set at the Holiday Inn on Thursday's during happy hour is good if you take advantage of the half price shots

  • @JimRobinson-colors
    @JimRobinson-colors 2 года назад

    I remember learning this when it came out in the late seventies. As far as my recollection is that I played the first part as you showed, but the second part I played with my first finger moving to the barred position from the A string and playing the second part like you would play Rock n Roll from Zeppelin to make that stretch with the pinky to the 6th and 7th. Because the C bass not doesn't actually ring out as you mentioned, I don't think that variation that I remember playing would sound any different. We of course didn't have the luxury of just googling a video and seeing how Joe Perry played it. But if you have smaller hands, I think that audibly nobody would be able to tell the difference. Especially with two guitarists playing.

    • @johntate5050
      @johntate5050 Год назад

      I am vert hairy man. People say I smell terrible. I like pickled mussels. Hello. *

  • @leeguitarmcr
    @leeguitarmcr 4 года назад

    Great Video showing this riff! My main problem is that my index finger wants to keep moving down from the 8th fret to the 9th. The rest I can play bang on!

  • @TheRicokilla
    @TheRicokilla 6 лет назад

    Dude , ur voice is soothing....

  • @Guitarpima
    @Guitarpima 3 года назад

    You are closer than most I have seen. Hold the C chord with fingers 1 3 and four. The fourth finger will move between the C note and the a note. You play the B-flat with your index finger barred. The picking pattern is more involved as well.

  • @lestanderjason
    @lestanderjason 7 лет назад +1

    I've been struggling for so long with how you actually play Evil Dead by Death, I've seen so many different versions of tablature for it and none of them seem spot on. It would be so helpful in you could clarify how it goes in a video.

  • @ArthurESnyder44
    @ArthurESnyder44 3 года назад +1

    Nice job as always, Uncle Ben!! Beautiful Les Paul!! How many guitars own bro . . . Jesus!! I'm green!! 😂😂

  • @bobboitt3126
    @bobboitt3126 7 лет назад +1

    Sweet Les Paul!

  • @josearalat
    @josearalat 5 лет назад +14

    This riff has made me stop playing this song for years. Very frustrating.

    • @Larrymh07
      @Larrymh07 5 месяцев назад

      Same here.

    • @clivegilmore9598
      @clivegilmore9598 5 месяцев назад

      @@Larrymh07 thumb placement is key

    • @Larrymh07
      @Larrymh07 5 месяцев назад +1

      @@clivegilmore9598 I'm definitely going to revisit the song. Thank you for the tip and encouragement!

  • @anthonygonzalez5840
    @anthonygonzalez5840 4 года назад

    Yup you got it. That’s the way I do it to or try anyway. Lol your doin it well,better than me.

  • @jaredtaylor2732
    @jaredtaylor2732 7 лет назад +2

    The beginning solo to The Stage by A7x is very tricky dicky but everyone who plays it, just doesn't sound right. Prove them wrong Uncle Ben!

  • @GLYDR
    @GLYDR 6 лет назад

    Thanks Uncle Ben

  • @6stringsbrainfingers
    @6stringsbrainfingers 2 года назад

    Fuckin awesome Ben! Been playing it slightly wrong for 40 years. Just got the right way under my fingers and sounds much better, and even more fun to play.

  • @grunge6909
    @grunge6909 Год назад

    Awesome dude so many ppl get riffs wrong

  • @finlaycowan3681
    @finlaycowan3681 9 месяцев назад

    Excellent. Thanks.

  • @danielwatson7540
    @danielwatson7540 7 лет назад

    Have you ever had a request for "Play with me"?
    Pretty sure I have it nailed down at slow, but I can't play it at full tilt, so it would be good to get a professional opinion.

  • @jackv9755
    @jackv9755 2 года назад

    Please Ben , I would aprecciate a lot if you could break down the live versión of WTW from the Live récord LIttle South of Sanity, thanks.

  • @markhorton1718
    @markhorton1718 5 месяцев назад

    I love this riff!! But I just can't get the 13th fret well enough to make it work. I have a short pinky finger.

  • @avielkharrat5788
    @avielkharrat5788 7 лет назад

    Loved it!

  • @stormriderkaos
    @stormriderkaos 5 месяцев назад

    That's it! Except you add a couple grace notes that aren't in the original, as evidenced by the isolated tracks on RUclips. The original takes a rest on the first A note without the following G. The timing is correct though. Same with the second part.... there are rests where you have notes.