I don’t usually post my lyrics in comments cuz I find it a little corny, but I’m genuinely proud of this song, so I’d appreciate any feedback from anyone willing to give some. - I think I’m falling in love, I’m not one to feel this way, but I can’t get enough of spending time with her, especially when we’re on her roof dancing to her tunes, who knew we’d bluff our way into each other’s lives, I’ll make her feel loved just as I have been feeling this entire time, I can see me dying by her side, and I’m not one to write a song about a bitch, ‘cause most of ‘em get me sick, but this one’s different, and sure, she smokes a bit, but at this point, what kid in this day in age doesn’t, it’s a sin, I know, my parents would kick me out to the road if they knew the things that me and her do when they’re gone, she’s the only one keeping this town my home, I could probably spit this shit off the dome, but I’m carefully putting it together, ‘cause I know better, I’ll send her a letter of appreciation, fuck it, I’ll pedal all the way to her house, even though the weather isn’t looking the greatest, okay, it’s a plan, I’ve met her plenty of times, but every time feels like the first, I’m the worst, she brings out the best in me, even the flirt that’s hidden deep inside because he can’t cry anymore, he can’t take another heartbreak, though I’m sure me and her will thrive, and finally, I’ve arrived to her place, got the letter in my backpack, I climb up the wall on the side of her house, something’s not right, her mom is laying on her bed, and she’s crying, I don’t know wether I should knock or let her be, but she sees my shadow, she has a look of grief painted on her face, she makes her way over to me, she opens the window, she can’t even speak, there’s a moment of silence, but I break it, I say “tell me what happened, is she okay?” and she falls on her knees, I’ve never felt so heavy, I climb in the room, I feel a grenade in my chest waiting to blow up, I say “is everything okay?” her dad walks in the room, he says “listen, no way you’ll get anything out of her, she’s in great pain, our daughter has finally learned to fly away” - I’m pretty proud of the story, some flaws I can think of is the pacing around the reveal of the girl’s death isn’t great, it feels like “her mom is crying, btw she’s dead lol”, but at the same time, maybe it’d feel like that in real life 🤷♂️
@@bc8715 I just re-read this, definitely not my best work lmao. I think I recorded this one and I was able to make all the syllables work just fine, but I don’t really remember
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I like it a lot, kinda sounds like a minion singing soulfully though lol
😂😂😂😂
Damn this is great, ima start writing
Lesgoooo
chill on the sidechain
Wouldnt be an Earl type beat without the agressive mixing 🤷🏽♂️
That ain’t Earl Sweatshirt that’s Grey Hoodie 💀
All jokes aside this beat is great, love the sample
😂 thank u bro 🫡
I don’t usually post my lyrics in comments cuz I find it a little corny, but I’m genuinely proud of this song, so I’d appreciate any feedback from anyone willing to give some.
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I think I’m falling in love,
I’m not one to feel this way, but I can’t get enough
of spending time with her, especially when we’re on
her roof dancing to her tunes, who knew we’d bluff
our way into each other’s lives,
I’ll make her feel loved just as I
have been feeling this entire time,
I can see me dying by her side,
and I’m not one to write a song about a bitch,
‘cause most of ‘em get me sick, but this one’s different,
and sure, she smokes a bit, but at this point, what kid
in this day in age doesn’t, it’s a sin,
I know, my parents would kick me out to the road
if they knew the things that me and her do when they’re gone,
she’s the only one keeping this town my home,
I could probably spit this shit off the dome,
but I’m carefully putting it together, ‘cause I know better,
I’ll send her a letter of appreciation, fuck it, I’ll pedal
all the way to her house, even though the weather
isn’t looking the greatest, okay, it’s a plan, I’ve met her
plenty of times, but every time feels like the first,
I’m the worst, she brings out the best in me, even the flirt
that’s hidden deep inside because he can’t cry anymore,
he can’t take another heartbreak, though I’m sure
me and her will thrive, and finally, I’ve arrived
to her place, got the letter in my backpack, I climb
up the wall on the side of her house, something’s not right,
her mom is laying on her bed, and she’s crying,
I don’t know wether I should knock or let her be,
but she sees my shadow, she has a look of grief
painted on her face, she makes her way over to me,
she opens the window, she can’t even speak,
there’s a moment of silence, but I break it,
I say “tell me what happened, is she okay?” and
she falls on her knees, I’ve never felt so heavy,
I climb in the room, I feel a grenade in
my chest waiting to blow up, I say “is everything okay?”
her dad walks in the room, he says “listen, no way
you’ll get anything out of her, she’s in great pain,
our daughter has finally learned to fly away”
-
I’m pretty proud of the story, some flaws I can think of is the pacing around the reveal of the girl’s death isn’t great, it feels like “her mom is crying, btw she’s dead lol”, but at the same time, maybe it’d feel like that in real life 🤷♂️
Little too wordy bro the amount of syllables are clashing
@@bc8715 I just re-read this, definitely not my best work lmao. I think I recorded this one and I was able to make all the syllables work just fine, but I don’t really remember
Idk if this sweatshirt
That man would tear this up no questionnn