This is just a very tiny snippet of my story. I’ve been gate-keeping this for years, but I want to do my best to help all of you❤ P.S. Watch until the end to learn how to access my FULL guide on How To Get Into Your Dream School for FREE! 😊✅
Here is the personal statement for the people who couldn’t load it: My most valuable possession is my pile of paper scraps. No, not scraps made from fancy floral cardstock, but scraps ripped from simple blank pieces of copy paper. Products of quixotic brainstorms and treasures of endless pen ink enclosed in nothing more than a flimsy Whole Foods paper bag sitting under my whiteboard of messy doodles and chemistry equations. Utilizing the boundless potential of their blank space, I would scribble my mind, which was constantly punctured by endless streams of ideas I knew would escape if not written down. Although seemingly useless at first glance, these scraps served as my infinite supply of precious notes, eventually transforming into fragments that, while fascinating on their own, created a beautiful mosaic bursting with inspiration. Unfortunately, however, my scraps were not always intriguing; in fact, they were the result of a permanent fracture that left them ruthlessly scattered. it happened without warning. Gently caressing my mother's hand with my 9-year-old fingers, I watched her eyelids softly rest. In just two months, thick coats of dust replaced the laughter that brimmed our home. I became familiar with my father's frequent midnight travels and waking up to yet another bottle of alcohol and my younger sister who was once again late to school. I tried to fit the parts together, but the once radiant paper of my life had been brutally ripped to pieces. What made everything go wrong? Cancer: defined by Oxford Dictionary as "an uncontrolled division of abnormal cells." But I finally understood its true meaning through sleepless nights of wiping my sister's muffled tears as she sat outside Dad's bedroom, waiting for a door to open that never would. With Mom gone and Dad withdrawn from family affairs, my sister desperately lacked a parent. To ensure she developed into an inquisitive child, I deliberately adopted this role, checking her homework, preparing rice for our empty stomachs, and teaching her how to express gratitude for little things like sunlight. After three years of maintaining optimism, I not only learned how to mend my sister's tears but also my own - eventually recognizing tne posental of my broken scraps. Through single-handedly raising my sister, I realized that a perfect life does not exist: I have the responsibility to find hope within my scars. And so, as I began to navigate the world, I crafted my own paper, searching for the beauty within my scraps despite their external deformities. Some hosted doodles and sketches, while others detailed procedures of crazy science projects (although creating recycled paper using soaked pistachio shells wasn't going to win a Nobel prize anytime soon). My opinions on United Nations' policies, tips on practicing mindful Buddhism, and shopping lists to replicate Masterchef dishes found their place on my vacant canvases. While initially a sign of my vulnerability, these scraps became my 3 A.M. notebooks of aspiration when dreams of landscapes to draw or strategies for testing the anticancer effects of Erigeron philadelphicus stirred me from my sleep. As each blank remnant transformed into an array of words and pigments, they slowly fit together, shrinking the space of parental absence and creating my personalized masterpiece. I may not be the perfect paper, but I will mend my tears and find value in each unique fragment. My father's family presence has since grown, but I thank his former absence for challenging me to find the silver lining in me and my sister's mended papers. With Mom smiling over me, I am ready to fully uncover the potential of my scraps and help others like my sister do the same, and I will not let my loss of childhood hinder my desire to explore, learn, and create. As their bare surfaces transform into vibrant galleries of brainstorms, I am reminded that true strength does not come from having a perfect paper but rather the ability to see the future possibilities that each scrap holds.
Thanks a lot i lost my dad too in freshman... life was too hard for me after that... I had to earn for my younger brother and my mom..had to look after them.. but I balanced my academics and ecs...became valedictorian as high achiever in a levels and won many awards. I though I wont apply to ivy at first but I now decided to make a shot.
I have been incredibly lucky to have found you and your channel. This video gave me the much needed assurance that, with a good essay, it CAN be possible to get into my dream college. Thanks a million for this video!💕
Thank you so much for this, I’ve been struggling trying to figure out how to structure my essay, I graduate this year and this has been so helpful ☹️❤️
To me, as a German, the idea of sharing aspects of my personal life as part of a university application seems rather strange. When I successfully applied to Heidelberg university, one of Germany's finest, I didn't share any personal insights. In my opinion, only academic achievements and qualifications should be taken into account. Perhaps this comes down to cultural differences, I don't know.
the competition at top 20 U.S. Universities is really tight and academic qualifications are not enough to set you apart. Most of the students that apply to these top schools only miss 0-5 questions on the SAT, and their GPA's lie in the same range. Everyone in the U.S. is able to take college courses in highschool so everyone at these top universities has already taken multiple college courses already - so everyone's gpa is also in a similar range. top universities then look at your personal statement and activities to choose who to admit. Most students who get into top universities like UCLA, Brown, Harvard, Yale, Cornell, Princeton, etc. have done countless internships, started non profit organizations and done many extracurriculars. it's more of a "trying to stand out from the rest of the crowd" competition. at smaller schools or less selective state universities, the colleges mostly just look at your grades and activities though
You’re right, but there’s THOUSANDS of valedictorians, people with great academic qualifications or have done cool internships etc etc applying to Harvard every year. Just looking at academic achievements simply doesn’t suffice, because then you’d literally have accept thousands of students per year and thats not possible. You have to stand out in order to get accepted. German universities just aren’t that competitive therefore there’s no need for such theatrics.
I really loved your content Thanks for sharing your experience with us, you're so kind The best guide I found on the internet is you. thank you so much for this elise
@@kaaviyaminumoorthi if you look it up, it’s pretty much a list of morals/valies of yourself that you want admissions officers to know. So, what I saw people do and what I’m doing now, is underlining the one that fit w m the most and that I want them to see about me, without mentioning them ofc
@@BPrashantMehto for example, let’s say a value of yours is independence. Instead of saying you’re independent, tell a story of how you gained that value (ex: moved out at 17). If it’s vourage (job a firefighter, how you’ve faced your introvert personality and tried to overcome it). Maybe it’s community and family (you work with your family, starting working to help them, your job involves working directly with your neighbours). Things like that
What? What is meant by "Sell your soul to Academia"? I need to understand this thing. What are you talking about? If you don't reply back I will keep commenting again and again.
2:52 thank u. This video was really helpful. I'm going to do exactly what's on that list😅 If universities were made to stop complaining and avoid controversial topics, i would stay home and talk to my neighbour
Can someone please review this essay, please? After a weary day, writing a diary is one of the major reasons to get back to my room. Not the one which holds the budget of the month, but rather a journal, which has held all the accounts and important events of my whole existence. My most prized possession is my journal. Kept at the most tight-lipped place, containing all my little secrets, breakdowns and gossip with a little touch of feelings-like happiness, jealousy, sadness, anger, mood swings and millions of other emotions. It is a perfect recipe of medicine to cure all the exhaustion that a day has to offer and a life that has to thrive through. Carrying an endless amount of brainstorms and treasures of multicoloured ink, it is kept safely in an old vintage box, in the most secretive corner of my attic-flooding with clothes. Utilising the blank pages of it, I would write my mind and heart into it, sometimes with the most artistic handwriting and doodles. A few pages of it being ripped is the depiction of the times when I have faced difficulty surviving. Although this journal may seem futile at first instance, it has served as a saviour during the sturdy times of my life, eventually taking the shape of a beautiful scrapbook that ignites motivation and inspiration to never stop trying. However, my journal was not always this fascinating; it is the eminence of loneliness, longing for love and rejections that I have ever faced in my life. Being a single child is not easy, definitely not when you do not love yourself. You tend to lose trust in yourself when there is constant bullying about your looks, your physique and your skin shade. Entering into adolescence, I realised that I was an introvert and discomfited in initiating a conversation, this made me an easy target for people to pass comments. My face scars, acne and thin body added fuel to the bullying. In one year of my teen life, I began losing confidence and started shooting questions about my existence. Self-love was vanished from my body cells, just like fragrance dissipating into thin air. I always yearned for people to help me through this, hence not receiving any support I accepted bullying, harsh remarks and verbal abuse of people with heads hung low. I received nothing, but rejections and longings from my closest ones further pushing me into the depth of depression and self-hatred.My life, once so radiant and joyful, now was nothing more than a dartboard for people to throw arrows of unwelcomed remarks at. What made everything go wrong? Lack of self-love: the only rebut to this question. It was not just people who made my life miserable, it was me, I should have had faith in myself. I should have loved myself no matter how much loneliness I had in my life. I should have been the ray of light to end the darkness around me. I understood the pure meaning of self-love after struggling with sleepless nights and endless failures. To ensure that I receive the best in the world, I started with little effort each day like teaching myself how to express gratitude, accepting myself with all my flaws, connecting to new people and keeping myself as the priority in every situation. After four years of maintaining optimism, I not only learned to mend terms with my heart but also painted a beautiful canvas of myself, full of self esteem and confidence which in turn made me convivial to the surroundings. Just like charity begins at home: love, acceptance and respect for you start from you. Coming out of this phase of self-hatred, I realised that a perfect world doesn’t exist: I have the responsibility to love myself, even if the whole world is against me. As I began to navigate the world on my terms, I started finding happiness and beauty in my scars. Reconnecting back to the world, I realised that I am not the only one who has faced loneliness; many senior citizens have to go through this and thus after healing, I joined an old age home to give care to them and make them feel they are loved and cared for. It helped me learn many core values and develop a keen interest in studying medicine and working for people. With the help of EUMIND, I grew better and more pleasant with connecting to new people and cultures. My internships at a pathology laboratory, surgical hospital and neonatal centre found their place in blank pages of my journal, fulfilling my life with the pleasure of serving people. Practicing meditation and writing journal became my new 6 AM aspiration. While life started getting arduous, my love for myself grew exponentially, discovering unknown facts that were either ignored or unknown. I may not be perfect, no one is, but I have learned to find peace, joy and home in myself. I have learned to value my existence and the way I am made. I am thankful to everyone who had left me lonely and yearning in my difficult time, it made me come out of the darkness I survived in and realise the worth of the most priceless people in my life. With the confidence flowing in each drop of my blood, I am ready to unveil all the challenges that life has to offer me and help others suffering like me. I will not let the bullying and harsh comments hinder my flight in the sky of my dreams. I reminded myself that true strength does not come from what people have to say about you, it arises from you believing in yourself and by creating your journal of life. Thank you.
Hey Vrush; here are a few recommendations for the preceding essay. 1) In various locations, you state that a personal item/s or prospect/s of your life are "eventually taking the shape". Instead of placing the conformity on the item itself, rather emphasize how YOU have been able to modulate them from "futile at first instance" to "a beautiful scrapbook that ignites motivations and inspiration to never stop trying. 2) Omit repetitive statements/vocab (E.g. "ignites motivation and inspiration"; motivation and inspiration are synonyms that exude similar meaning). 3) Don't emphasize what you should've done, however, what you have done to forbear through adversity. 4) Decrease the quantity of ECs you mention; divergent aspects of your application already inform the college application officers of your association with ECs, so instead of mentioning numerous ECs, reference 1-2(MOST) that YOU believe had the greatest impact on your development. I hope this assists and please receive further insight before altering your essay as I am solely a freshman talking without College App experience!
For the future, you may utilize others' essays for analysis and potential ideas, however, I wouldn't recommend entirely plagiarizing the format even in different words (Your essay strongly references Elise Pham's). College admission officers are searching for expressive & creative individuals, so at the end of the day, plagiarizing will only impede you from reaching your full potential as an applicant.
Thankyouuu soo much elise for your this incredible efforts to get this amazing information to us I'm soo thankful to you ....harvard is my dream university and i genuinely want to go there which is nearly a impossible dream to become true from where i belong to but thats okay i believe on myself and my lord nothing is impossible...again thankyouu my girll thankyouu soo much ...😭❤️🌷🧸🎀🙌🏻
girl, I've watched this many times and it really helped me a lot, I was wondering If there is a limit for numbers of words for application. Btw, thanks again>
Wonderful suggestions Elise. I just want to know whether this format will equally work for the PhD programme? or any suggestions you have regarding this?
Hi Elise! Really sorry if this is an intrusive request but would we be able to see some more monthly income transparency vids? The newest ones that you made went down recently!
I absolutely appreciate you and i love watching your videos , but there's a question i would love to get answered that how did u figured it out yourself was it natural that u wrote or do u know something only few poeple know ?
do the very best in your classes, and try to take challenging ones if you can. if your school offers honors/advanced classes, take those! also join extracurriculars (sports, school clubs, some outside of school things like volunteering). overall just take school seriously but have fun too :)
@@nayah.2468 this is not good he wont get in any ivy league if he does this especially in every other high school years. bro listen maintain a 3.5 or higher gpa and start taking practice tests for SAT set good rep with teachers so they can give you high quality recommendation letters. start a business and do research papers and enroll in national level competitions and go varsity in some unique sport and get unique high achievement awards the other years of high school continue these and do more of them and start organizations, get internships with companies, job shadow people in your desired career and make all of these extracurriculars focused on ur desired career like if u want to be a doctor make the internships with medical companies and the organizations in the medical field and the research in medicine, but you probably want to keep a bit of ur extracurriculars in other things to show diversity and be an all rounder in your application. Start early dont make the mistake of procrastination. if you do all these + 3.7 gpa or higher + 1450 sat or higher you definitely getting in an ivy league use this as a manual for success and thank me later in four years after opening your harvard acceptance letter
Hi I hadn't have big achievements in high school for extracurricular activities because my mom didn't let me do anything I was just allowed to go to school so what should I do while applying to harvard because harvard demands high quality achievements from high school and I attended technical school of Tashkent because my mom forced me to she didn't let me apply to any university in my area I passed exam and I got full scholarship and became the one of 3 scholarship owner students in my class despite my 0 interest becoz there wasn't my dream school I might say despite not wanting to study there I tried to learn something from them and my final graduation diploma scores was 92 69 and 86 out 100 and I participated a lot of school related activities in campus becoz my mom didn't let me go otherwise I have a lot of proofs of seminars and events so I'm 21 years old and my passion for study never died down so this is enough I mean I didn't get big achievements in high school becoz of my mom's prohibitions so Can I apply to ivy league universities now?
i am learning to write a personal statement. Your personal statement was beautiful , but how am I supposed to write mine , i have experienced traumatic events but not the ones of your magnitude .
This is just a very tiny snippet of my story. I’ve been gate-keeping this for years, but I want to do my best to help all of you❤
P.S. Watch until the end to learn how to access my FULL guide on How To Get Into Your Dream School for FREE! 😊✅
I love your videos so much and was wondering if you could share your common app application with your classes, extracurriculars, etc.
Girl u are seriously the best love u!!!
What advice would you give to any Central American students trying to get into an Ivy League
I really need your help out
How can I get into ur group sections 😢
From Africa
I wanted to share my essay with you if you don't mind
I read the essay with tears on my face and realized that's what an essay that gets the reader see the situation
Do. Not. Delete. This. Ever.
Nah she needs to delete this before anyone else sees
@@dylandoggett-t why?
@@emiomg_ so we can beat everyone :)
@@user-vi6nq6ic8d faxs ima save this video for when i graduate
@@dylandoggett-t 🤣 I see what you mean
Here is the personal statement for the people who couldn’t load it: My most valuable possession is my pile of paper scraps. No, not scraps made from fancy floral cardstock, but scraps ripped from simple blank pieces of copy paper. Products of quixotic brainstorms and treasures of endless pen ink enclosed in nothing more than a flimsy Whole Foods paper bag sitting under my whiteboard of messy doodles and chemistry equations. Utilizing the boundless potential of their blank space, I would scribble my mind, which was constantly punctured by endless streams of ideas I knew would escape if not written down. Although seemingly useless at first glance, these scraps served as my infinite supply of precious notes, eventually transforming into fragments that, while fascinating on their own, created a beautiful mosaic bursting with inspiration.
Unfortunately, however, my scraps were not always intriguing; in fact, they were the result of a permanent fracture that left them ruthlessly scattered.
it happened without warning. Gently caressing my mother's hand with my 9-year-old fingers, I watched her eyelids softly rest. In just two months, thick coats of dust replaced the laughter that brimmed our home. I became familiar with my father's frequent midnight travels and waking up to yet another bottle of alcohol and my younger sister who was once again late to school. I tried to fit the parts together, but the once radiant paper of my life had been brutally ripped to pieces. What made everything go wrong?
Cancer: defined by Oxford Dictionary as "an uncontrolled division of abnormal cells." But I finally understood its true meaning through sleepless nights of wiping my sister's muffled tears as she sat outside Dad's bedroom, waiting for a door to open that never would. With Mom gone and Dad withdrawn from family affairs, my sister desperately lacked a parent. To ensure she developed into an inquisitive child, I deliberately adopted this role, checking her homework, preparing rice for our empty stomachs, and teaching her how to express gratitude for little things like sunlight. After three years of maintaining optimism, I not only learned how to mend my sister's tears but also my own -
eventually recognizing tne posental of my broken scraps.
Through single-handedly raising my sister, I realized that a perfect life does not exist: I have the responsibility to find hope within my scars. And so, as I began to navigate the world, I crafted my own paper, searching for the beauty within my scraps despite their external deformities. Some hosted doodles and sketches, while others detailed procedures of crazy science projects (although creating recycled paper using soaked pistachio shells wasn't going to win a Nobel prize anytime soon). My opinions on United Nations' policies, tips on practicing mindful Buddhism, and shopping lists to replicate Masterchef dishes found their place on my vacant canvases. While initially a sign of my vulnerability, these scraps became my 3 A.M. notebooks of aspiration when dreams of landscapes to draw or strategies for testing the anticancer effects of Erigeron philadelphicus stirred me from my sleep. As each blank remnant transformed into an array of words and pigments, they slowly fit together, shrinking the space of parental absence and creating my personalized masterpiece.
I may not be the perfect paper, but I will mend my tears and find value in each unique fragment.
My father's family presence has since grown, but I thank his former absence for challenging me to find the silver lining in me and my sister's mended papers. With Mom smiling over me, I am ready to fully uncover the potential of my scraps and help others like my sister do the same, and I will not let my loss of childhood hinder my desire to explore, learn, and create. As their bare surfaces transform into vibrant galleries of brainstorms, I am reminded that true strength does not come from having a perfect paper but rather the ability to see the future possibilities that each scrap holds.
Thank you so much 🙏❤
this is ingenious... omg
you are a saint 😭😭❤️
Thank you
As an Arabic person How in hell will I write as same as this essay
your personal statement was sooo beautiful, i was actually with my mouth open by the time i read the last sentence 😮😮 you're so talented girlll
why do these people all write about their tragedy. "raising her sister when her mom died"
why can't we have NORMAL people?
Your mom would be so proud of you ❤ God bless you for these tips!
Thanks a lot
i lost my dad too in freshman... life was too hard for me after that... I had to earn for my younger brother and my mom..had to look after them..
but I balanced my academics and ecs...became valedictorian as high achiever in a levels and won many awards. I though I wont apply to ivy at first but I now decided to make a shot.
a tear dropped after the last sentence of your personal statement
Omg can't believe you actually posted a video like this, really helpful thanks Elise 😭😭
even though i'd love for her to stay lowkey because i'm not an altruist at all SHE DESERVES SO MUCH MORE AUDIENCE BECAUSE GIRL? you're amazing ❤
*Highlight only the important points*
Me: Highlights everything.
Thank you so much ma'am. It was super explicit. ❤
You are so inspiring! I’m already an undergrad in my home country but hopefully I can apply to an Ivy League college for my masters! Thank you!
I love you advice. You are so underrated, I swear! Your tips actually work
I have been incredibly lucky to have found you and your channel. This video gave me the much needed assurance that, with a good essay, it CAN be possible to get into my dream college. Thanks a million for this video!💕
Could you make a video on your study methods and how realistic we should set our goals based on how much we study?
This was so helpful, especially my upcoming junior year! Thank you! :)
Thanks!
Thank you so much for this, I’ve been struggling trying to figure out how to structure my essay, I graduate this year and this has been so helpful ☹️❤️
Hi Elsie, please do a video about your routine, I admire it and want to learn how you make it work for you, much lovexx ❤
this is such a helpful video thank you so much i will be saving this for when i write my college applications ❤
Bless you! This definitely was of great help
Really a great help. Keep up the good work 👍
Thankyou so much! I was struggling with my college essay but this video helped me alot.
My girl you nailed it ✨
To me, as a German, the idea of sharing aspects of my personal life as part of a university application seems rather strange. When I successfully applied to Heidelberg university, one of Germany's finest, I didn't share any personal insights. In my opinion, only academic achievements and qualifications should be taken into account. Perhaps this comes down to cultural differences, I don't know.
the competition at top 20 U.S. Universities is really tight and academic qualifications are not enough to set you apart. Most of the students that apply to these top schools only miss 0-5 questions on the SAT, and their GPA's lie in the same range. Everyone in the U.S. is able to take college courses in highschool so everyone at these top universities has already taken multiple college courses already - so everyone's gpa is also in a similar range. top universities then look at your personal statement and activities to choose who to admit. Most students who get into top universities like UCLA, Brown, Harvard, Yale, Cornell, Princeton, etc. have done countless internships, started non profit organizations and done many extracurriculars.
it's more of a "trying to stand out from the rest of the crowd" competition. at smaller schools or less selective state universities, the colleges mostly just look at your grades and activities though
You mean they didn’t give bonus points for skin colour? How very strange!
You’re right, but there’s THOUSANDS of valedictorians, people with great academic qualifications or have done cool internships etc etc applying to Harvard every year. Just looking at academic achievements simply doesn’t suffice, because then you’d literally have accept thousands of students per year and thats not possible. You have to stand out in order to get accepted. German universities just aren’t that competitive therefore there’s no need for such theatrics.
@Luvtzuyu.__
Why do you hate Germany so much?
Another privileged American.
Jaa find ich auch sehr eigenartig
thank you so so much for this video, it's so helpful!!!
beautifully crafted, it touched to the core
This video is very helpful, thank you for posting it!!!!
I really loved your content
Thanks for sharing your experience with us, you're so kind
The best guide I found on the internet is you.
thank you so much for this elise
You have helped me out a lot, thank you so much!
i love everything about you man you're an icon 💗
Thank you so much for posting this!! ❤
Elise Pham, i love your personal essay and your way of expressing it
For step one, I really recommend Berne Browns list of values!!
What’s that? Pls Explain!!
@@kaaviyaminumoorthi if you look it up, it’s pretty much a list of morals/valies of yourself that you want admissions officers to know. So, what I saw people do and what I’m doing now, is underlining the one that fit w m the most and that I want them to see about me, without mentioning them ofc
@@emmasophpi ohh kk
tysm!!!
@@emmasophpiI've a doubt. How can I tell about my core values to Admission office, without mentioning them. Any idea?
@@BPrashantMehto for example, let’s say a value of yours is independence. Instead of saying you’re independent, tell a story of how you gained that value (ex: moved out at 17). If it’s vourage (job a firefighter, how you’ve faced your introvert personality and tried to overcome it). Maybe it’s community and family (you work with your family, starting working to help them, your job involves working directly with your neighbours). Things like that
If RUclips had an unlimited like button, I wouldn't be able to stop hitting the button for this video. Thanks for the great video!
im forever thabkful for this. thank you
thank you!!!!! also, you're doing amazing
Superb. Appreciate you share this. May you filled with joy ❤
your story is so touching
I might get into Stanford or Harvard because of you
This is just what I need
Alternate title: How to Commodify Your Personal Values and Sell Your Soul to Academia feat. English Composition
exactly
how exactly is this selling your soul to academia? 🤔
What? What is meant by "Sell your soul to Academia"? I need to understand this thing. What are you talking about? If you don't reply back I will keep commenting again and again.
@ZephyrSterling the modern world is a dystopia. Academia is a huge part of that
@@wakemeup38 Thanks for replying. Can you describe more clearly please?
Wonderful advice!!
Bet that the admission officers cried as much as I did while reading her essay.
I cried as well
she said not to use a sob story, but she did a sob story....
@@r22gamer54 yes, but she also noted how she overcame that situation which is more important
@@r22gamer54 She is one of the strongest women I have ever seen
@@artsymie7231 Exactly
THAT IS WHAT I NEEDED. ✅✅✅
Thanks you so much 💝
you know that you motivate me so much
2:52 thank u. This video was really helpful. I'm going to do exactly what's on that list😅
If universities were made to stop complaining and avoid controversial topics, i would stay home and talk to my neighbour
Thank you!! This helped a lot!
Gosh this video is well made
THANK YOU FOR THIS
Can someone please review this essay, please?
After a weary day, writing a diary is one of the major reasons to get back to my room. Not the one which holds the budget of the month, but rather a journal, which has held all the accounts and important events of my whole existence. My most prized possession is my journal. Kept at the most tight-lipped place, containing all my little secrets, breakdowns and gossip with a little touch of feelings-like happiness, jealousy, sadness, anger, mood swings and millions of other emotions. It is a perfect recipe of medicine to cure all the exhaustion that a day has to offer and a life that has to thrive through. Carrying an endless amount of brainstorms and treasures of multicoloured ink, it is kept safely in an old vintage box, in the most secretive corner of my attic-flooding with clothes. Utilising the blank pages of it, I would write my mind and heart into it, sometimes with the most artistic handwriting and doodles. A few pages of it being ripped is the depiction of the times when I have faced difficulty surviving. Although this journal may seem futile at first instance, it has served as a saviour during the sturdy times of my life, eventually taking the shape of a beautiful scrapbook that ignites motivation and inspiration to never stop trying.
However, my journal was not always this fascinating; it is the eminence of loneliness, longing for love and rejections that I have ever faced in my life.
Being a single child is not easy, definitely not when you do not love yourself. You tend to lose trust in yourself when there is constant bullying about your looks, your physique and your skin shade. Entering into adolescence, I realised that I was an introvert and discomfited in initiating a conversation, this made me an easy target for people to pass comments. My face scars, acne and thin body added fuel to the bullying. In one year of my teen life, I began losing confidence and started shooting questions about my existence. Self-love was vanished from my body cells, just like fragrance dissipating into thin air. I always yearned for people to help me through this, hence not receiving any support I accepted bullying, harsh remarks and verbal abuse of people with heads hung low. I received nothing, but rejections and longings from my closest ones further pushing me into the depth of depression and self-hatred.My life, once so radiant and joyful, now was nothing more than a dartboard for people to throw arrows of unwelcomed remarks at.
What made everything go wrong?
Lack of self-love: the only rebut to this question. It was not just people who made my life miserable, it was me, I should have had faith in myself. I should have loved myself no matter how much loneliness I had in my life. I should have been the ray of light to end the darkness around me. I understood the pure meaning of self-love after struggling with sleepless nights and endless failures. To ensure that I receive the best in the world, I started with little effort each day like teaching myself how to express gratitude, accepting myself with all my flaws, connecting to new people and keeping myself as the priority in every situation. After four years of maintaining optimism, I not only learned to mend terms with my heart but also painted a beautiful canvas of myself, full of self esteem and confidence which in turn made me convivial to the surroundings.
Just like charity begins at home: love, acceptance and respect for you start from you.
Coming out of this phase of self-hatred, I realised that a perfect world doesn’t exist: I have the responsibility to love myself, even if the whole world is against me. As I began to navigate the world on my terms, I started finding happiness and beauty in my scars. Reconnecting back to the world, I realised that I am not the only one who has faced loneliness; many senior citizens have to go through this and thus after healing, I joined an old age home to give care to them and make them feel they are loved and cared for. It helped me learn many core values and develop a keen interest in studying medicine and working for people. With the help of EUMIND, I grew better and more pleasant with connecting to new people and cultures. My internships at a pathology laboratory, surgical hospital and neonatal centre found their place in blank pages of my journal, fulfilling my life with the pleasure of serving people. Practicing meditation and writing journal became my new 6 AM aspiration. While life started getting arduous, my love for myself grew exponentially, discovering unknown facts that were either ignored or unknown.
I may not be perfect, no one is, but I have learned to find peace, joy and home in myself. I have learned to value my existence and the way I am made.
I am thankful to everyone who had left me lonely and yearning in my difficult time, it made me come out of the darkness I survived in and realise the worth of the most priceless people in my life. With the confidence flowing in each drop of my blood, I am ready to unveil all the challenges that life has to offer me and help others suffering like me. I will not let the bullying and harsh comments hinder my flight in the sky of my dreams. I reminded myself that true strength does not come from what people have to say about you, it arises from you believing in yourself and by creating your journal of life.
Thank you.
Hey Vrush; here are a few recommendations for the preceding essay.
1) In various locations, you state that a personal item/s or prospect/s of your life are "eventually taking the shape". Instead of placing the conformity on the item itself, rather emphasize how YOU have been able to modulate them from "futile at first instance" to "a beautiful scrapbook that ignites motivations and inspiration to never stop trying.
2) Omit repetitive statements/vocab (E.g. "ignites motivation and inspiration"; motivation and inspiration are synonyms that exude similar meaning).
3) Don't emphasize what you should've done, however, what you have done to forbear through adversity. 4) Decrease the quantity of ECs you mention; divergent aspects of your application already inform the college application officers of your association with ECs, so instead of mentioning numerous ECs, reference 1-2(MOST) that YOU believe had the greatest impact on your development.
I hope this assists and please receive further insight before altering your essay as I am solely a freshman talking without College App experience!
For the future, you may utilize others' essays for analysis and potential ideas, however, I wouldn't recommend entirely plagiarizing the format even in different words (Your essay strongly references Elise Pham's). College admission officers are searching for expressive & creative individuals, so at the end of the day, plagiarizing will only impede you from reaching your full potential as an applicant.
Usefulll and amazing tips thank you so much u really helped me throughout my ADmission process, super happy and grateful cause I found you🥺🥺🥺🥺
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Question: Could this format be used for scholarship essays?
Thankyouuu soo much elise for your this incredible efforts to get this amazing information to us I'm soo thankful to you ....harvard is my dream university and i genuinely want to go there which is nearly a impossible dream to become true from where i belong to but thats okay i believe on myself and my lord nothing is impossible...again thankyouu my girll thankyouu soo much ...😭❤️🌷🧸🎀🙌🏻
i love your videos!
Thank youu, I love you
1:31, no 5 resembles me. I'm actually writing it. Just a draft, I'll make it a masterpiece!!!!
i bet it’ll be great ❤
@@eersatzz thx
Thank you Queen
Thank you so much ❤
girl, I've watched this many times and it really helped me a lot, I was wondering If there is a limit for numbers of words for application. Btw, thanks again>
650 words is the limit I think
Great video! Was your essay a response to the first question?
"...waving a tapestry of classical compositions..." - ChatGPT
I love ❤️ u for this
Wonderful suggestions Elise. I just want to know whether this format will equally work for the PhD programme? or any suggestions you have regarding this?
Why am I watching this if I’m not a student anymore 😂
this is Golden
Thank you and GOD bless you.
Would calling yourself smart be seen as boastful/arrogant? It's not a main part of my story, just like self discovery of my identity
I loved your SOP. Do you offer editing help for SOP
Please 🙏
Hey, Love your video!
What prompt should I select if I take the chronological approach and discuss multiple life events?
" personally in my personal statement "
hey Elise. this video was extremely helpful. i wanted to ask do you help students for free by providing some guidance
nothing in life defines you, u believe u achieve. write your own and fate decides
Hi Elise! Really sorry if this is an intrusive request but would we be able to see some more monthly income transparency vids? The newest ones that you made went down recently!
hi! i removed them because I want my focus to be more on impacting others rather than personal income
@@ultimateivyleagueguide That makes a lot of sense I understand! Sorry again for the request :)
The personal statement is really blurry so I don't have the opportunity to see it like everyone else in the comments 😥
Screenshot and amplify
Me too even if I amplify the picture 😕
I absolutely appreciate you and i love watching your videos , but there's a question i would love to get answered that how did u figured it out yourself was it natural that u wrote or do u know something only few poeple know ?
I wrote this at 2am while I was in bed. Late night thoughts
Are you on scholarship? Did you take SAT or ACT exams?
Hey Elise I had this question, did you make a club or sort in school before you got accepted into any ivy league? Ex: Art club, baking club.
tips on freshman year of high school??
do the very best in your classes, and try to take challenging ones if you can. if your school offers honors/advanced classes, take those! also join extracurriculars (sports, school clubs, some outside of school things like volunteering). overall just take school seriously but have fun too :)
don't take advice
@@nayah.2468 this is not good he wont get in any ivy league if he does this especially in every other high school years. bro listen maintain a 3.5 or higher gpa and start taking practice tests for SAT set good rep with teachers so they can give you high quality recommendation letters. start a business and do research papers and enroll in national level competitions and go varsity in some unique sport and get unique high achievement awards the other years of high school continue these and do more of them and start organizations, get internships with companies, job shadow people in your desired career and make all of these extracurriculars focused on ur desired career like if u want to be a doctor make the internships with medical companies and the organizations in the medical field and the research in medicine, but you probably want to keep a bit of ur extracurriculars in other things to show diversity and be an all rounder in your application. Start early dont make the mistake of procrastination. if you do all these + 3.7 gpa or higher + 1450 sat or higher you definitely getting in an ivy league use this as a manual for success and thank me later in four years after opening your harvard acceptance letter
Hi I hadn't have big achievements in high school for extracurricular activities because my mom didn't let me do anything I was just allowed to go to school so what should I do while applying to harvard because harvard demands high quality achievements from high school and I attended technical school of Tashkent because my mom forced me to she didn't let me apply to any university in my area I passed exam and I got full scholarship and became the one of 3 scholarship owner students in my class despite my 0 interest becoz there wasn't my dream school I might say despite not wanting to study there I tried to learn something from them and my final graduation diploma scores was 92 69 and 86 out 100 and I participated a lot of school related activities in campus becoz my mom didn't let me go otherwise I have a lot of proofs of seminars and events so I'm 21 years old and my passion for study never died down so this is enough I mean I didn't get big achievements in high school becoz of my mom's prohibitions so Can I apply to ivy league universities now?
i did the survey but i still didn't get the written course
Hi Elise, is it necessary for us to take the most rigorous academic subjects even if some don't align with our passion?
How to write an essay as a renaissance person 😭😭😭plzzzz
Stats reveal pls 😭
i am learning to write a personal statement. Your personal statement was beautiful , but how am I supposed to write mine , i have experienced traumatic events but not the ones of your magnitude .
girl's a organic super computer lmao
Wow ❤❤❤
Is it possible to incorporate 2 metaphors instead of 1?
the personal statement is blurry… so i can’t read it
Literally same idek what to do
Hey, I just discovered you through a YT recommendation. Awesome video. You're also very attractive. Awesome! Hope we meet in irl one day 😎
I sent this png to my email but still haven’t received it. Is there a wait time?
Can you do the English tuition for my boys who are in 8th grade now.
Can I use little bit of Artificial intelligence to write my personal statement, along with changing some phrases and paragraphs by myself?
I checked your essay and put it into an AI detector, and it says is 98.8 % AI content. Why? Should mine be AI content to, so I can be accepted?
Can i share with you my essay please 🤗🤗
What is the prompt for this essay?
hey elise, I filled out the form for your course multiple times but didn't get a response
Elise can you help me an example if my theme is the passing of my grandma and music (ps. She thought me karnitick music