Three of the Worst Kinds of College Essays

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  • @drewschannel9767
    @drewschannel9767 2 года назад +9323

    Did anyone else just have this burst of nostalgia when he said “line leader”? I don’t know why I completely forgot that they did that in elementary school. I miss those days😂

    • @iforgor5167
      @iforgor5167 2 года назад +70

      Wasn’t there also someone in the back of the line? I forgot their name.

    • @lalaloopsyyay7828
      @lalaloopsyyay7828 2 года назад +46

      @@iforgor5167 the back leader or keeper

    • @mockingwizard
      @mockingwizard 2 года назад +12

      could you tell what it means? I’ve never heard of the term but I feel like it was prolly called something else in my school.

    • @Keecrayton
      @Keecrayton 2 года назад +29

      @@mockingwizard when the teacher tells the students to line up and the “line leader” is whoever in the front guiding the line.

    • @mockingwizard
      @mockingwizard 2 года назад +5

      @@Keecrayton ohh! i thought it’d be something like that, thank you for letting me know. In my school the class leader would by default stand at the front we didn’t have a name for that lol

  • @ohapqity
    @ohapqity 2 года назад +6418

    I mean truthfully a good college essay imo and according to my teachers is to write something random that no one would expect, but it should still somehow relate to you and show *you* as a person (qualities, traits, etc).

    • @joesus3529
      @joesus3529 2 года назад +421

      My sister made hers about how she hit a sign at a fast food joint she got a full scholarship to nyu

    • @yoavtovel
      @yoavtovel 2 года назад +35

      Unrelated but hello genshin guy

    • @koifish4276
      @koifish4276 2 года назад +20

      @@joesus3529 wow

    • @mangaprofilepicture5820
      @mangaprofilepicture5820 2 года назад +63

      @@joesus3529 your sisters a chad

    • @miuiswaifu
      @miuiswaifu 2 года назад +35

      ALRIGHT so If I went to ur college or whatever, I could just write something about how my cat gave birth 4 times in 1 year and she's old now with her old child

  • @sxfa6550
    @sxfa6550 2 года назад +1902

    "Idk im just so different, im very different" gahaha-

    • @menthol1234
      @menthol1234 2 года назад +37

      You don’t understand. I’m literally so DeFerrNtè

    • @belph1ie
      @belph1ie 2 года назад +2

      quirky

    • @randomperson1weekago295
      @randomperson1weekago295 2 года назад +11

      @@belph1ie Quirky omg! UwU anime waifu/husbando body pillow, ur gay and I cant relate! #Cool #Asthetic #Cant_relate #Snorting_my_dead_ancestors_ashes
      Edit: "Ur gay" isn't meant to be an insult thanks! :)

    • @belph1ie
      @belph1ie 2 года назад +1

      @@randomperson1weekago295 lmao

    • @wizard838kk
      @wizard838kk 2 года назад +7

      @@randomperson1weekago295 you forgot the ✋😭🥱💅✋😭🥱

  • @shadysunflower2099
    @shadysunflower2099 2 года назад +314

    My English teacher literally spoke to me about my essay, saying that I should shorten the story I told and add more current news because I didn’t want colleges to think I peaked in the 4th grade 😳 this was an eye opening vid

    • @Sscc.
      @Sscc. 4 месяца назад

      Think about blinking

  • @scarlettmauner475
    @scarlettmauner475 2 года назад +749

    my college essay was completely a made up story LMFAO and i got accepted. but i mean they didn’t have any way of knowing i was lying so

    • @blen4321
      @blen4321 2 года назад +16

      What was it about?

    • @irene-bz2yq
      @irene-bz2yq 2 года назад +74

      Wish I could be this creative but I know they'd be able to see through it cause I'm bad at lying lol.

    • @ervaggarwal2153
      @ervaggarwal2153 2 года назад +136

      @@irene-bz2yq be creative I believe in you. My essay which got me into my school was about being a shitty cross country runner, which was true, and it was essentially a story about how much I sucked and didn’t really do anything to change it

    • @jamesrosewell9081
      @jamesrosewell9081 2 года назад

      Oh? Any tips?

    • @giornogiovanna3139
      @giornogiovanna3139 2 года назад +52

      You can lie as much as you want. As long as you dont lie about the work you did because usually they want references.

  • @Mysteriomayhem
    @Mysteriomayhem 2 года назад +174

    When he called nessa barrett out i almost died laughing

  • @MyNamelsName
    @MyNamelsName 2 года назад +639

    My essay finna be like “I just wanna be accepted, also I’m a adopted” since apparently colleges eat that adopted shit up

    • @joesus3529
      @joesus3529 2 года назад +104

      Best essay trans gay adopted black/Asian woman

    • @katieb1049
      @katieb1049 2 года назад +63

      @@joesus3529 Yup! The experiences from being a minority is unique from person-to-person, and is heavily tied to identity. Colleges love that shit, although it can get repetitive

    • @joesus3529
      @joesus3529 2 года назад +10

      @@katieb1049 idk my sister said Hispanic because my grandpa is from the Dominican republic but she’s really white because my dads a massive Jewish person and his genes are only German snd Jewish.

    • @luisaramos6862
      @luisaramos6862 2 года назад +2

      Hopefully you write acepted and not excepted tho. Because excepted means to be left out while acepted means to be let in. Juts FYI

    • @joesus3529
      @joesus3529 2 года назад +3

      @@luisaramos6862 juts not a word fyi

  • @mayomeow
    @mayomeow 2 года назад +245

    Ngl The worst kind of Essays series is hilarious 😂

  • @MatchaJazmin
    @MatchaJazmin 2 года назад +97

    I got a full scholarship by writing about sidewalks. I wanted to transfer to a school in DC because the school I went to was in the mountains. I wrote about how badly I wanted to go; that even the opportunity to be around sidewalks and not dirt trails was exciting. I still included my credentials of course. Anyways, just make it personal but professional.

  • @muskaanarora3070
    @muskaanarora3070 2 года назад +60

    For my college essay I actually wrote how I absolutely detested the subject and what made it change over time and why I now feel passionate about it

  • @CatPawLover
    @CatPawLover 2 года назад +40

    Is my essay a 'pick me'? For my personal essay i've written about how my childhood has played into my responsibility skills as a young adult today; particularly abuse, and the eventual abandonment in the family which led to me having to grow up and learn many vital life skills pretty early on in life- again, specifically responsibility.

    • @thebusybeanhomecafe4035
      @thebusybeanhomecafe4035 2 года назад +34

      It's only a pick-me if it sounds like you are trying to make them feel sorry for you.

    • @NutellaDotNet
      @NutellaDotNet 2 года назад +28

      @@thebusybeanhomecafe4035 agree. It’s sounds more like how your bad experiences allowed you to mature and grow as a person. While you didn’t have the best childhood there was some good that came out of it. It’s sounds way better than “my childhood sucked plz let me in the school” lol

    • @SolomonUcko
      @SolomonUcko Год назад +4

      You explained how you grew from the experience, which is good AFAIK

  • @jagriti7232
    @jagriti7232 2 года назад +59

    Not the Nessa Barrett 😭😭😭

  • @sebastianlajos866
    @sebastianlajos866 2 года назад +6

    When I wrote my essay I took into consideration that if it were me I wouldn't waste my time reading something that I didn't find interesting.

  • @thirsty1629
    @thirsty1629 2 года назад +37

    Me, who has written all three types of college essays before: 🙃

  • @LemurG
    @LemurG 2 года назад +19

    My parents made me write a resume rehash essay. I hated it but I got into the college I wanted (ASU) so it could be worse.

  • @badgerdestroyerinc.6066
    @badgerdestroyerinc.6066 2 года назад +7

    Most painful are the ones that start with Webster definitions

  • @munshaathchowdhury3944
    @munshaathchowdhury3944 2 года назад +54

    Wasn’t having the best day but this definitely made me laugh lol 😂

  • @paradoxzee6834
    @paradoxzee6834 2 года назад +170

    I remerber writing once an essay in hightschool and for some reason we needed to write about friendship, at the age of 16!
    Anyway I write it that way I asked than criticize what people consider friendship to be.
    Next class my teacher hand me my essay with the line "What you wrote was great, I loved it. But I don't think you have friends so a 4", in my country a 4 is like a B in USA.

  • @hitoromi4363
    @hitoromi4363 2 года назад +8

    When I was at 5th grade, I used "the one who peaked in middle school" type on my first essay.

  • @_chocolatte_
    @_chocolatte_ Год назад +4

    the third one sounded like ✨gilderoy lockhart✨

  • @ninarain9422
    @ninarain9422 2 года назад +4

    My college essay was just submitted an essay of the following or an essay that you had previously written. I did a previously written essay.

  • @nuvthyy
    @nuvthyy 2 года назад +22

    "Idk i just think i'm a very broken person trying to live life" ✨NESSA VIBES✨

  • @thecourtjester1931
    @thecourtjester1931 Год назад +2

    The fact that the last one was so bad, he didn’t even continue it

  • @ltzmlpnhhs1808
    @ltzmlpnhhs1808 2 года назад +6

    Can you post a video of what a good college essay looks like? Your videos are very helpful.

  • @cactus8738
    @cactus8738 Год назад +2

    “Your mum would even reject you” got me dying😂😂😂

  • @AnExtravagantMan
    @AnExtravagantMan Год назад +2

    "Been-" last words of some dude-

  • @oop5488
    @oop5488 2 года назад +6

    If I have to put a time that I was a leader in a college essay, bro I’m screwed. I hated being a leader and was more of a follower. I hated attention and was scared to voice my opinions.

    • @JeddieMPB
      @JeddieMPB 2 года назад +2

      but this trait could let you talk about how you’re a team player who can take direction and work well with others

  • @greetings702
    @greetings702 2 года назад +2

    I donno, a lot of the guys I know that peaked in middle school did better in College than the guys that peaked in high school

  • @yyinyan
    @yyinyan Год назад +2

    ‘… even your mom would reject you’
    My guy it don’t matter how good it is my mom would still reject me

    • @jee2736
      @jee2736 6 месяцев назад

      Are u asian?

  • @Amy-bb9ie
    @Amy-bb9ie 2 года назад +1

    The clubs in question..

  • @dimitra8569
    @dimitra8569 2 года назад +2

    my mom who would reject a decent one even for the college: dont you say?

  • @cyrpxcgamzr735
    @cyrpxcgamzr735 Год назад +2

    So we got the Cry baby essay, the Line cutter essay, and then the guy who was the leader of all the origami clubs and gamer clubs

  • @liviu445
    @liviu445 2 года назад +3

    'If I put In my essay, I put in the hours of work and observance to be become a polymath'
    Will they even consider me?.

  • @isabelladgriff
    @isabelladgriff 2 года назад +1

    NOT THE NESSA BARRETT 😭😭🤚

  • @chappjack
    @chappjack Год назад +1

    My mom already did.

  • @marrassek
    @marrassek Год назад +2

    thank god i never did those

  • @aidenified
    @aidenified 2 года назад +1

    The line leader one got me laughing

  • @krishnachoc4278
    @krishnachoc4278 2 года назад +1

    I hate that I peaked in 4th grade :(

  • @blacklight683
    @blacklight683 2 года назад +2

    I think I would be the 3rd type just to the point

  • @howtorandomoff
    @howtorandomoff Год назад +1

    "I've won four honors, been in 5 clubs, been president of 2, been vice-president of 3, been-"
    Yeah, "Been a homeless person to see what it feels like, been food for the poor, been the principle, and been a good student."

  • @lieutenantdan6709
    @lieutenantdan6709 2 года назад +1

    Ngl that peaked in middle one hit me, I would of been like I was high homer roll all of 8th grade

  • @MrFishyCC
    @MrFishyCC Год назад +1

    Legend says his still typing til this day

  • @kiarakovacic156
    @kiarakovacic156 2 года назад +8

    He really called Nessa out. 😂

  • @ataliaseavey1723
    @ataliaseavey1723 2 года назад +1

    The cut off I’m done 💀

  • @kigkag573
    @kigkag573 2 года назад +1

    Here I am watching about college essays after I finish one.

  • @itsst
    @itsst Год назад +1

    Chad thundercock
    Peaked in Middle school

  • @lattae-v8237
    @lattae-v8237 Год назад +2

    The Nessa Barrett quote 😭😭

  • @delighyt
    @delighyt Год назад

    The last one was so painful that even the video couldn’t continue reading it.

  • @thesudarsanmitra
    @thesudarsanmitra 5 месяцев назад

    Imagine writing about peaking in elementary school

  • @editor7280
    @editor7280 Год назад

    The first one had so many ellipsis

  • @THEYLUVADDIEEE
    @THEYLUVADDIEEE 2 года назад +1

    You may comment something that you will forget in a few minutes but this RUclipsr may remember your words forever so use words kind

  • @Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiimannoying
    @Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiimannoying Год назад

    I like the last one, and the second one was kind of funny line leader

  • @shahanaahmed3441
    @shahanaahmed3441 Год назад +1

    The third one is exactly the same as my brother. He keeps bragging that I haven't done anything to the society and am useless to the economy. So much to say, but I won't now.

  • @ajtheaj8266
    @ajtheaj8266 2 года назад +1

    The first one was my friend during the low part of his relationship, HE WOULDNT STOP VENTING TO ME, HIM AND HIS GIRLFRIEND BOTH VENTED TO ME. They broke up no long ago and have been pretty quit, knowing them they’re one of them is yelling about squid games and the other is playing Roblox. Bro your like 10 years above the average Roblox players age.

  • @fredgaldamez666
    @fredgaldamez666 2 года назад +1

    I don’t know why but writing about myself is just difficult for me.

  • @realCyng
    @realCyng Год назад +55

    My college essay gonna be "I'm black, female, trans, gay, mexican, and autistic". Guaranteed full ride to Harvard babyyy

    • @Infamous_Kitty
      @Infamous_Kitty Год назад +5

      They gonna reject you 💀

    • @mindlessryan7435
      @mindlessryan7435 Год назад +12

      Actually being black, gay, and autistic are LITERAL college essay gold. Put any of those things the right way in ur essay its basically guarenteed any school.

    • @Infamous_Kitty
      @Infamous_Kitty Год назад +7

      @@mindlessryan7435 yes but if thats just your entire essay and thats it then you wont get accepted

    • @realCyng
      @realCyng Год назад +5

      @@Infamous_Kitty nah they'd prolly be like "omg so postmodern, this is art, you're in"

    • @Infamous_Kitty
      @Infamous_Kitty Год назад +2

      @@realCyng 💀

  • @stock.wheel.shawty
    @stock.wheel.shawty 2 года назад +1

    gigantic run-on sentences. i'm mainly talking about youtube comments, but still notable nonetheless.

  • @Syltrian_Drawz
    @Syltrian_Drawz Год назад

    I'd probably start with
    Throughout my life, it's been a sketchbook, folded pages, messed up sketches, and much more.

  • @monsoongum8690
    @monsoongum8690 Год назад +1

    Bro the last one 💀 been. beenbeenbeenbeenbeenbeenbeenbeenbeenbeen

  • @judah.violette
    @judah.violette 2 года назад +1

    Last time I had line leader was in like 3rd grade, also theres no lines in 6th grade

  • @KEYYYYYY.
    @KEYYYYYY. Год назад

    The second is fire

  • @Blissxful_Madii
    @Blissxful_Madii Год назад

    That last one would be me with some adding of personality and spice

  • @kyliemoser6254
    @kyliemoser6254 Год назад

    The way the video just cuts off at the right time in the end 😂😂

  • @depressedrat7804
    @depressedrat7804 2 года назад

    Why am I getting these recommended now 😩 I just turned in my application form last week! These could have helped me a lot

  • @miyokokiyo
    @miyokokiyo Год назад

    i muted the sound,and when i made the sound bigger he said "youre mom would even reject you"

  • @DinoTaken
    @DinoTaken 8 месяцев назад

    Moral of the story: dont be sassy, don't act perfect, and dont make plain jokes.

  • @shrek8769
    @shrek8769 2 года назад +1

    Nessa barret wrote the first one 😫😫

  • @OnTourWithPattiSmith
    @OnTourWithPattiSmith 2 года назад +5

    First line of my college essay ...
    .. My mother is in a psychiatric hospital every day an my father makes faces and gets paid to do that.
    Two people from the admissions committee hunted me down to tell me, “the first line in your essay MADE me want to read your essay.”

  • @khushbooprasad6519
    @khushbooprasad6519 Год назад +1

    The first one... do people actually do that?

  • @vl.u2657
    @vl.u2657 3 месяца назад

    the last one is just yapping💀

  • @cat9134
    @cat9134 2 года назад

    nessas broken line i am sobbing

  • @kayramomentt
    @kayramomentt Год назад

    Been the president of 2, been vice president of 3 and been 3 kinds of collage essays that are...

  • @NameForTheChannel_
    @NameForTheChannel_ 8 месяцев назад

    The third one just flexes his leaderships in life

  • @ifritfirelord254
    @ifritfirelord254 2 года назад

    Any essays starting with
    "Killed a bird once..."

  • @balor2622
    @balor2622 2 года назад +4

    Kay bestie how tf are we supposed to write it then?! Are we supposed to write a creative essay about our interesting life and be ✨quirky✨? As an Asian, education is so strict and competitive we worked our butts off, took up commitments we aren't interested in, just to achieve the perfect "resume rehasher"

    • @luisaramos6862
      @luisaramos6862 2 года назад +2

      Well, i've been acepted to some of the best universities in the UK for a masters degree where the application is not through an exam but through an essay.
      1. Think about your course and answer: why am I a good fit for this course?
      2. Think about your history and answer: why do I wanna study this course?
      3. Think about what you wanna do in your future and answer: how will this course help me in that future?
      4. Think about your university options and answer: why is this university the university that will give me what I need?
      And fill out the rest with examples of your leadership (hopefully recent), your networking abilities, your interests, your hopes and dreams.
      Stay away from pity parties or the opposite, false confidence. Just be truthful, honest and review your life plan and add how is this going to help you with that plan.
      Hope it helps.

    • @balor2622
      @balor2622 2 года назад

      @@luisaramos6862 Thank you so much for the advice 🥺 college and uni applications always stress me out. I wish u all the best in your studies/work ✨❤️

  • @Cllementine_
    @Cllementine_ 2 месяца назад +1

    I’m gonna try the 2nd one wish me luck

  • @birdythings4260
    @birdythings4260 Год назад +1

    This is the 1st time that I’ve ever seen it say 100k usually it’s more or less but for u I think it should be like 500k - likes

  • @poopylol1624
    @poopylol1624 Год назад +1

    not gohar shading nessa Barrett 😭😭😭😭😭😭

  • @GloomyWinter
    @GloomyWinter Год назад

    Wait you had line leaders in middle school I would just run out of the door like everyone else

  • @pricefieldx
    @pricefieldx 2 года назад

    You forgot me the robot with nothing interesting and just pure monotone

  • @w3llthen
    @w3llthen 2 года назад

    Put “I can throw a ball far”

  • @Astragenix
    @Astragenix Год назад

    Jokes on you, I don’t need essays to get rejected…

  • @gastergiovanna9793
    @gastergiovanna9793 Год назад

    My essay would be "dawg i don't know how i got here lol"

  • @EJW1928
    @EJW1928 2 месяца назад

    I feel like I would do the last one

  • @Moonteadreamzz
    @Moonteadreamzz Год назад +1

    The last one my SIXTH GRADE HONORS TEACHER-but he says OH YEAH I DID THIS IN COLLEGE INFINITE LEVEL HONORS BUT YALL CAN DO IT UR SIXTH GRADERS 🥰🥰🥰
    LIKE HUN NOOOO 😊

  • @jellymuk5352
    @jellymuk5352 2 года назад +1

    Last one probably me

  • @starstruckskies6739
    @starstruckskies6739 2 года назад

    The fact that you cut the last one out- 😭😭

  • @PaintmanBrush
    @PaintmanBrush Год назад

    Legend says the last guy kept typing

  • @ninja-we6ev
    @ninja-we6ev Год назад

    legend says he's still talking about what he's done

  • @hehe-vu9rj
    @hehe-vu9rj Год назад

    And you didn’t have to cut me off-

  • @9thharbingerofthefatui
    @9thharbingerofthefatui Год назад

    Been part of five clubs, been president in 2, been vice president in 3, been- Three kinds of college essays

  • @jcfrvr23
    @jcfrvr23 2 года назад

    You need to make videos about middle school topics like this, cause I'm in middle school and need tips.

  • @EJW1928
    @EJW1928 2 месяца назад

    I feel like I would do the last one only it would be very short

  • @Beani3_H
    @Beani3_H 2 года назад

    "I WaS tHe LInE lEadER"
    IDC YOU GONNA MAKE ME LUAHG YOU PUT THIS IN ANYTHING YOU WRITE

  • @UmarSaudKhan
    @UmarSaudKhan 3 месяца назад

    So what should an essay be like

  • @plseditmynamealready6537
    @plseditmynamealready6537 2 года назад +6

    I swear to god I'd believe that most gen z that are applying for college uses the pick me essays, they're just that miserable

  • @be-om-gyu6127
    @be-om-gyu6127 Год назад +1

    The first one would work in America

  • @realteamwall
    @realteamwall Год назад

    i would apply to a college just to tell them that im too good for them with no intention of ever going to any college ever

  • @Hyper_TheOne
    @Hyper_TheOne Год назад

    I think my writing skills aren’t up there but thankfully it’s not down there either

  • @Cobra-yo7fx
    @Cobra-yo7fx 2 года назад

    Nice video!