I havent seen the video yet but it the newest so... WE NEED A COMPILATION OF THE KRILL STORY LINE. At least a playlist of all the stories with the insect like alien krill, I beg of you
Great story. I’m hoping there is a part 2 through however many to explore what happened to humans and why we went back to a single world losing the technology.
2:50 - 3:10 while it might at first glance seem to be some fluff to the story, it is in fact the answer to your question: the "creators" are future humans that went back in time and influence every known habitable planet's prospective future in a stable time loop, and deliberately avoid Earth to not change their own history.
@@jugatsumikka or its a tale as old as time of humans... the ones with the biggest technology and evolved society end up being eaten by their own creations/catastrophes, and those living in peace with nature- the untouched by the population at large- survive. Earth could have been a sanctuary planet for humans to keep no tech or evolved ways. Overlooked by an enemy hell-bent on their destruction. Eventually re-evolving into the greater galaxy.
@@jugatsumikka plus if there was a threat that made a flagship emergency land on a planet, if i know that im in the past i would make sure humanity would not struggle so i make other races to help in the fight.
Sadly there almost never is a second part as it is partially made by AI writer possibly and they forget about it after narrating they say it's a human writer at starbound but looking how fast they create and narrate they must be using AI or have more than 20 writers
I've said it before, but I'm happy to say it again. This particular narrator is very good. I have no complaints with the others, but her voice is a cut above. Have a great day everyone 👍
If you like this channel you may also be interested in agro squirrel, netnarrator, grey voice and galactic imaginatium (not sure I spelled that right). I have a playlist of over 500 hfy narrations, mostly from these 5 channels. It's public if you want to use it as a means to find more.
@@Gh05tk3y its not fair for us to suggest others we gotta let them find it after they run outta stories here.. even though im a fan of a large part of the list you made
@@Gh05tk3y I agree, ASN [ Agro Squirrel Narrates] is my number 2, and Galactic Imaginarium is #3. This site is by far the best, though ASN is a close second.❕❕❕
I haven't heard very many people who can do a good AI or computer voice. Your interpretation of the struggling translators is awesome. For a moment, I forgot that this channel refuses to use AI for reading the stories. Good work. 👍
It's pretty easy to figure out. You can make it better with a hand on your Adams apple. Chop/bump your voice for compound words or in-between longer ones. It was my party trick to sound like Alexa but male.
@@FeedMeSaltOh I can do the voice, but it's an unusual skill. It's like singing or beatboxing. More than half of people can if they put in the practice, but most people don't.
Heh, let's keep it going: The revelation hung heavy in the air, a palpable weight pressing down on the stunned group of humans. Captain Isaac, his military training kicking in, was the first to recover. "So, let me get this straight," he said, addressing the engineer. "You're saying that we - humans - are your creators? That we built this ship and all the other ruins scattered across the galaxy?" The engineer's monotone voice replied, "Affirmative. Homo sapiens constructed Behemoth and its sister vessels. You seeded worlds, uplifted species, and shaped the galaxy." Dr. Barnes, her scientific mind racing, interjected, "But that's impossible. We've only just achieved interstellar travel. How could we have done all this 300,000 years ago?" The engineer tilted its head, an oddly human gesture. "Time is not linear for the Progenitors. You mastered temporal mechanics, bending causality to your will." A hushed silence fell over the group as the implications sank in. Humanity hadn't just joined the galactic stage; they had set it millennia ago. Vasquez, still reeling from his outburst, whispered, "Dios mío, we're the Ancient Aliens?" Roger, the alien guide, had finally regained some composure. "This... this changes everything," he stammered. "The entire foundation of galactic society, our understanding of history... it's all wrong." Captain Isaac, ever practical, focused on immediate concerns. "What about the 'unknown threat' you mentioned? The one that damaged this ship?" The engineer's response was chilling. "Data corrupted. Threat classification: extinction-level. Last known status: imminent." Dr. Barnes' eyes widened. "Are you saying that whatever destroyed this ship, whatever wiped out our... future selves, is still out there?" "Probability high," the engineer confirmed. "Cyclical nature of time suggests threat may resurface." The implications were staggering. Humanity hadn't just stumbled upon their legacy; they had uncovered a warning from their future selves. "We need to report this," Captain Isaac declared. "The UFF needs to know. The entire galaxy needs to know." Dr. Jacobson, one of the other scientists, spoke up. "But should we? Think about it. If we reveal this, it could destabilize the entire galactic political structure. We'd go from newcomers to... well, gods in the eyes of some species." "Not to mention," Riaru added, "it might attract the attention of whatever this 'unknown threat' is." Captain Isaac weighed their words carefully. "You're right, but we can't just sit on this information. There's a threat out there, one our future selves couldn't handle. We need to prepare." Dr. Barnes nodded in agreement. "We'll need to study everything here. Every piece of technology, every scrap of data. It might be our only chance to prevent whatever catastrophe befell our future selves." The engineer, silent until now, spoke again. "Protocols dictate full cooperation with Progenitor directives. How may we assist?" Captain Isaac straightened, feeling the weight of responsibility settling on his shoulders. "First, we need to secure this area. No one else can know about this until we decide how to proceed. Then, we start learning. Everything you can tell us about our future selves, about this ship, about the threat - we need to know it all." As the team began to organize, each member grappling with their new reality, Vasquez approached the engineer. "Hey, uh... sorry about earlier. The punching and all." The engineer's reply was as impassive as ever. "No apology necessary. We exist to serve." Vasquez winced. "Yeah, about that. Maybe we can work on the whole 'master' thing. Partners sounds better, don't you think?" As the humans settled into their new roles as both explorers and rediscoverers of their own legacy, none of them could shake the feeling that they had stumbled upon something far greater - and far more dangerous - than they could have ever imagined. The echoes of their forgotten future resonated through time, carrying with them both the promise of unimaginable knowledge and the threat of annihilation. In the depths of the ancient ship, surrounded by the ghosts of their own potential, the small group of humans stood at a crossroads of cosmic significance. The choices they would make in the coming days would not just shape their own future, but the future of the entire galaxy - past, present, and future.
I love how the story is kinda explained on the beginning when mentioning time travel. Humans from the future went back in time and energy up leaving those things around everywhere but earth to avoid messing with their own history
As soon as I would have encountered an Engineer I would have approached and attempted communication. Then I'd have attempted to scan when it went back to work on the panel. That's what scientists and engineer folks do. We are insanely curious and will be all up on the questioning and can very easily become intrusive due to our extreme need to learn about new shit. That character flaw in the exploratory team bothers me. Not enough questions.
'Special Forces', or'special needs forces'? No way those aholes would have been on such a critical diplomatic mission plus top operators, especially for a mission like that, are usually non threatening, non aggressive and the last ones standing if the other guy isnt'
Just kind of reminds me of the Halo franchise story of how humans were the Forerunners. But a lot more interesting due to the shear mystery & a lot less death up to the point of discovering that they were the creators.
I liked the story. My only complaint is labeling the soldiers "veteran special forces" and then having them act like a bunch of 18 year old privates fresh outta boot. It just doesn't make sense. Pretty minor thing, really. Otherwise, it's a good story. And great narration.
I know it's petty, but it was the character descriptions that got me. "He had no accent." Yes, he did. It was an American accent; saying this as an American. Also black people can be British, crazy! /s it just felt like a ton of stereotypes in a way that was a tiny bit distracting lol. Otherwise, good story.
It got so good at the end, I hope there's one day a part 2. Surely there should be a Playlist if you (as in the channel and all who write/voice these stories) ever decide to take up that idea. No doubt many would be VERY interested in the idea
omg, this been out for 2 weeks and no part 2 yet !!!!!!! i listen to a LOT of these storys and few deserve a part 2, this needs like a 10 part story !!!! PLEASE !!!!
Indeed. No one will be able to make it into any kind of special force detail, that alone pass through the training, if they don't have a higher than normal control of themself, especially their temper. He would be a liability in any military unit.
It would’ve been funny if the humans made a Dyson swarm (actually possible version of a Dyson sphere) by disassembling mercury before going interstellar
I liked this story allot. Well written and narrated. It would be a travesty if there was no part 2 or more. It has the capacity for a brilliant full book. Please part 2 !!!!
Please, do a part 2-??? This is a good story and I would love to see it to its conclusion! As a writer myself, I rarely get hooked on an AI story. If this is what it is. However, I have indeed found myself on the chairs edge wanting to know more. Oh, please, Great AI God, finish it! You've captured my imagination!
You have got some very good narrators, would love to see them narrate a story together. The story was very good but I'm not sure it needs a part 2, some of the best stories leave it up to the listener to wonder and guess what happens next.
Just want you guys to know the ONLY, the SOLE reason I watch this channel's video is because they're narrated by people, no janky AI bullshit. Apart from the AI generated visuals, which kinda' screws thing up a bit in my head if I look at it.
I thought this was a very good story and liked it. I hope there are more parts to this. Although I would decrease the amount of anger and frankly BS from the soldiers, they are supposed to be professionals/commandoes but act more like school children. Roger seems like a cool person.
It's mostly just Vasquez who's a bit of a hothead- he and the captain is the only one who really has more than 1 or 2 lines. Vasquez is inspired by a favorite character of mine from an old video game, and he was also had some anger issues. The demeanour of the entire squad, really, is loosely similar to that game (Clive Barker's Jericho). The captain is a hardass with a distinct dislike for what he perceives as an "escort" mission- he doesn't like having to be a babysitter for both his own men and a team of scientists on an alien world known for being a hive of scum and villainy where they could be attacked at any time and had been dreading/expecting something to go tits up despite the Dr. Barns' placations. In any case, I'm glad you liked the story despite your misgivings! I'm always happy to hear criticism, as it can help me to improve my own writing. There's definitely a bit of pressure to try and speed up the pacing of these stories since there's no guarantee I'll get to write followups or part 2s (though I do write open-ended just in case, and partly to drive support for it because I greatly enjoy writing longer-form serializations as opposed to one-off short stories).
@@dicerson9976 Thank you for your reply. I have read several stories on youtube that are several parts, 20 or more parts and still going. I still find Vasquez over the top. They can be mouthy but they seem well over the top.
@@dicerson9976It was a little over the top, but it does serve to characterise them a bit more than having them be more the faceless professional, so I understand why you had it that way. Still, I do hope for a follow up to this story, as there is interesting foreshadowing, and the setting seems entertaining. Although, I do prefer to read stories compared to listening to audio, so is there another place where you post your writings?
@@whitehawk4099 Currently there is not, every story is written as an original for the channel. I do not actually manage the channel myself, so ultimately it is not up to me to decide if text-versions of the stories are posted anywhere (or if a part 2 is in fact made! Currently the channel's manager is reluctant to begin making serialized stories since on youtube especially series tend not to perform well with al gore's rythmn. But I have been pushing for it!)
yeah...about that.. 99.9998% . a drift of 2ppm is too low. Generally the difference between two random current humans usually is 0.4% of the total genome. 2ppm difference is somewhere in the region of incest-offspring between full siblings or offspring from double-first-cousins and almost at the level of identical-twins.
Oh my garsh you are beautiful. Your voice is very nice too. NOT trying to get to know you, just a distant observation. Thanks for the story, it was nice.
Very well narrated, but the writing leaves a bit to be desired. They take a shot at the stupid scientists in Prometheus early on with the not taking off their helmets and looking in unknown openings, but then the guy acts like a hormonal teenager throwing a tantrum
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I havent seen the video yet but it the newest so...
WE NEED A COMPILATION OF THE KRILL STORY LINE. At least a playlist of all the stories with the insect like alien krill, I beg of you
Great story. I’m hoping there is a part 2 through however many to explore what happened to humans and why we went back to a single world losing the technology.
2:50 - 3:10 while it might at first glance seem to be some fluff to the story, it is in fact the answer to your question: the "creators" are future humans that went back in time and influence every known habitable planet's prospective future in a stable time loop, and deliberately avoid Earth to not change their own history.
@@jugatsumikka or its a tale as old as time of humans... the ones with the biggest technology and evolved society end up being eaten by their own creations/catastrophes, and those living in peace with nature- the untouched by the population at large- survive. Earth could have been a sanctuary planet for humans to keep no tech or evolved ways. Overlooked by an enemy hell-bent on their destruction. Eventually re-evolving into the greater galaxy.
@@jugatsumikka plus if there was a threat that made a flagship emergency land on a planet, if i know that im in the past i would make sure humanity would not struggle so i make other races to help in the fight.
@@jugatsumikkanow the real question is what was the great disaster and unknown weapon that destroyed them?
Sadly there almost never is a second part as it is partially made by AI writer possibly and they forget about it after narrating they say it's a human writer at starbound but looking how fast they create and narrate they must be using AI or have more than 20 writers
I've said it before, but I'm happy to say it again. This particular narrator is very good. I have no complaints with the others, but her voice is a cut above.
Have a great day everyone 👍
So you bring someone with a notoriously short temper into a place that you know doesn't allow violence.
We all have a short temper .. given the right circumstance.
@@HellStr82 Key word is "notoriously "
my thoughts too,
Yeah, that guy ain't passing his psych eval
If you said that in Russia, you might "accidentally" fall out of a window and/or become radioactive.
Its rare to see story dedicated channels, good work, keep it up!
If you like this channel you may also be interested in agro squirrel, netnarrator, grey voice and galactic imaginatium (not sure I spelled that right). I have a playlist of over 500 hfy narrations, mostly from these 5 channels. It's public if you want to use it as a means to find more.
@@Gh05tk3y its not fair for us to suggest others we gotta let them find it after they run outta stories here.. even though im a fan of a large part of the list you made
@@Gh05tk3y I agree, ASN [ Agro Squirrel Narrates] is my number 2, and Galactic Imaginarium is #3. This site is by far the best, though ASN is a close second.❕❕❕
I haven't heard very many people who can do a good AI or computer voice. Your interpretation of the struggling translators is awesome. For a moment, I forgot that this channel refuses to use AI for reading the stories. Good work. 👍
It's pretty easy to figure out. You can make it better with a hand on your Adams apple. Chop/bump your voice for compound words or in-between longer ones.
It was my party trick to sound like Alexa but male.
@@FeedMeSaltOh I can do the voice, but it's an unusual skill. It's like singing or beatboxing. More than half of people can if they put in the practice, but most people don't.
Heh, let's keep it going: The revelation hung heavy in the air, a palpable weight pressing down on the stunned group of humans. Captain Isaac, his military training kicking in, was the first to recover.
"So, let me get this straight," he said, addressing the engineer. "You're saying that we - humans - are your creators? That we built this ship and all the other ruins scattered across the galaxy?"
The engineer's monotone voice replied, "Affirmative. Homo sapiens constructed Behemoth and its sister vessels. You seeded worlds, uplifted species, and shaped the galaxy."
Dr. Barnes, her scientific mind racing, interjected, "But that's impossible. We've only just achieved interstellar travel. How could we have done all this 300,000 years ago?"
The engineer tilted its head, an oddly human gesture. "Time is not linear for the Progenitors. You mastered temporal mechanics, bending causality to your will."
A hushed silence fell over the group as the implications sank in. Humanity hadn't just joined the galactic stage; they had set it millennia ago.
Vasquez, still reeling from his outburst, whispered, "Dios mío, we're the Ancient Aliens?"
Roger, the alien guide, had finally regained some composure. "This... this changes everything," he stammered. "The entire foundation of galactic society, our understanding of history... it's all wrong."
Captain Isaac, ever practical, focused on immediate concerns. "What about the 'unknown threat' you mentioned? The one that damaged this ship?"
The engineer's response was chilling. "Data corrupted. Threat classification: extinction-level. Last known status: imminent."
Dr. Barnes' eyes widened. "Are you saying that whatever destroyed this ship, whatever wiped out our... future selves, is still out there?"
"Probability high," the engineer confirmed. "Cyclical nature of time suggests threat may resurface."
The implications were staggering. Humanity hadn't just stumbled upon their legacy; they had uncovered a warning from their future selves.
"We need to report this," Captain Isaac declared. "The UFF needs to know. The entire galaxy needs to know."
Dr. Jacobson, one of the other scientists, spoke up. "But should we? Think about it. If we reveal this, it could destabilize the entire galactic political structure. We'd go from newcomers to... well, gods in the eyes of some species."
"Not to mention," Riaru added, "it might attract the attention of whatever this 'unknown threat' is."
Captain Isaac weighed their words carefully. "You're right, but we can't just sit on this information. There's a threat out there, one our future selves couldn't handle. We need to prepare."
Dr. Barnes nodded in agreement. "We'll need to study everything here. Every piece of technology, every scrap of data. It might be our only chance to prevent whatever catastrophe befell our future selves."
The engineer, silent until now, spoke again. "Protocols dictate full cooperation with Progenitor directives. How may we assist?"
Captain Isaac straightened, feeling the weight of responsibility settling on his shoulders. "First, we need to secure this area. No one else can know about this until we decide how to proceed. Then, we start learning. Everything you can tell us about our future selves, about this ship, about the threat - we need to know it all."
As the team began to organize, each member grappling with their new reality, Vasquez approached the engineer. "Hey, uh... sorry about earlier. The punching and all."
The engineer's reply was as impassive as ever. "No apology necessary. We exist to serve."
Vasquez winced. "Yeah, about that. Maybe we can work on the whole 'master' thing. Partners sounds better, don't you think?"
As the humans settled into their new roles as both explorers and rediscoverers of their own legacy, none of them could shake the feeling that they had stumbled upon something far greater - and far more dangerous - than they could have ever imagined. The echoes of their forgotten future resonated through time, carrying with them both the promise of unimaginable knowledge and the threat of annihilation.
In the depths of the ancient ship, surrounded by the ghosts of their own potential, the small group of humans stood at a crossroads of cosmic significance. The choices they would make in the coming days would not just shape their own future, but the future of the entire galaxy - past, present, and future.
What a great job. I hope the this can be expanded.
I love how the story is kinda explained on the beginning when mentioning time travel.
Humans from the future went back in time and energy up leaving those things around everywhere but earth to avoid messing with their own history
I cant wait for part two, this is such a cliffhanger
Hell yeah that cliffhanger is wild.
Is no part 2
As soon as I would have encountered an Engineer I would have approached and attempted communication. Then I'd have attempted to scan when it went back to work on the panel. That's what scientists and engineer folks do. We are insanely curious and will be all up on the questioning and can very easily become intrusive due to our extreme need to learn about new shit. That character flaw in the exploratory team bothers me. Not enough questions.
Maybe the "culprit" was misled by h.s. counselors away from his true calling, engineering!
I like the voice of the nararator. Keep up the good work maam.
....bloody marvelous......and the narrator is brilliant!!!
'Special Forces', or'special needs forces'? No way those aholes would have been on such a critical diplomatic mission plus top operators, especially for a mission like that, are usually non threatening, non aggressive and the last ones standing if the other guy isnt'
Just kind of reminds me of the Halo franchise story of how humans were the Forerunners. But a lot more interesting due to the shear mystery & a lot less death up to the point of discovering that they were the creators.
Aight we gonna need a part 2 of that one, will stay tuned for it
I liked the story. My only complaint is labeling the soldiers "veteran special forces" and then having them act like a bunch of 18 year old privates fresh outta boot. It just doesn't make sense. Pretty minor thing, really. Otherwise, it's a good story. And great narration.
I totally agree, I have Hiapanic friends and they'd be very offended to be depicted as being such immature punks.
I know it's petty, but it was the character descriptions that got me. "He had no accent." Yes, he did. It was an American accent; saying this as an American. Also black people can be British, crazy! /s it just felt like a ton of stereotypes in a way that was a tiny bit distracting lol. Otherwise, good story.
It got so good at the end, I hope there's one day a part 2. Surely there should be a Playlist if you (as in the channel and all who write/voice these stories) ever decide to take up that idea. No doubt many would be VERY interested in the idea
omg, this been out for 2 weeks and no part 2 yet !!!!!!! i listen to a LOT of these storys and few deserve a part 2, this needs like a 10 part story !!!! PLEASE !!!!
For real the guard you would think would have more self control that a child. Good story though.
Indeed. No one will be able to make it into any kind of special force detail, that alone pass through the training, if they don't have a higher than normal control of themself, especially their temper.
He would be a liability in any military unit.
Loved the story. Great narration. Hope there is a part 2 and more. Thank you.
It would’ve been funny if the humans made a Dyson swarm (actually possible version of a Dyson sphere) by disassembling mercury before going interstellar
raptor jesus in space first time for everthing
We need the 2. Part ASAP and give us even more. Make it whole book. This one is realy great
Thqt southern rage portrayel was amazing 😂
I liked this story allot. Well written and narrated. It would be a travesty if there was no part 2 or more. It has the capacity for a brilliant full book. Please part 2 !!!!
I need a part 2 of this.
would like a part two of them getting rid of all the pirates ;)
Please, do a part 2-??? This is a good story and I would love to see it to its conclusion! As a writer myself, I rarely get hooked on an AI story. If this is what it is. However, I have indeed found myself on the chairs edge wanting to know more. Oh, please, Great AI God, finish it! You've captured my imagination!
Yes write a part 2. it would be good
She's great too, this was a good find
This has been a great story, wonderfully performed.
I'd love to hear a 2nd part of this if there is any to be had!
I really like your voice and naration - the best I have heard so far.
Please continue this story!
This was a very good story. I can't wait for part 2. Description says if they hit 1K likes part two is coming. It's at 1.4K😁
An excellent, if predictable, story narrated by a talented young lady.
Heck, this is the best one yet, i love it, please do part 2!
lol, I really like this storyline and wouldn’t mind if it continued! Great job 👏
Wish there was more. That was a massive cliffhanger
Well, that was anti-climactic since the title summed up the entire thing for us. If there's a part 2 it would be saved lol
I’d love to see a part 2 to this.
a sequel would be appreciated :)
this is really interesting
good story, hope there is a follow up one
A beautiful read. Thank you for that.
this one was good. need a follow up!
Great story telling!!! Thank you!!!
Not a huge fan of the reversing loop animations, but Larissa is freaking amazing.
Edit: I'ma be so very very sad if this isn't continued.
MOAR!
Outstanding, if predictable. Great narrator! More!
well this needs a part 2
You have got some very good narrators, would love to see them narrate a story together. The story was very good but I'm not sure it needs a part 2, some of the best stories leave it up to the listener to wonder and guess what happens next.
You can't just leave it at that when's part 2 coming
This one the ending makes me want more of this one
great story and narration i hope there's more
my only complaint is that someone so obviously undisciplined as vasquez wouldn't be on the mission
well that makes sense lol good story guys keep up the good work
Now for part 2 ... we're waiting..... but I don't think we can wait another 300 millenia...
Well done, about time no ai talking, finally human is talking, yeeah.
Thanks!
Lovely voice, very nice to Listen very easy.Hiya from across the UK 🇬🇧
more pleaaaase
God I hope for a part 2
Part 2 please😊
Dont mind us Audio book nerds...... But is there maybe more of this story it got a really good start... also i'm Glad to have more different voices
Loved this story if y’all find part two please tell me
That was q great story i could see it being the plot of a syfi mini series
so need to finish this story off
Yes, we are the creators, now please bring me a ship.
I would like to take this opportunity to catcall respectfully
Baby you look like youve already solved today's Wordle
Think.
About it this way, just how many times have we conquered the Galaxy? Just to only end up conquering ourselves and starting over again.
... something tells me its frigging humans that went back in time using warp drive abuse that became the creators....... gonna watch it. XD
well I be damned, close but no dice, now I want the rest of the story, the 1k have already surpassed, CHOP CHOP!... or I cry :T
Why would someone with a temper like Vasquez be allowed on a mission like this?
Only as a shortcut plot development device. Truly an annoying character and would not realistically be there.
Just want you guys to know the ONLY, the SOLE reason I watch this channel's video is because they're narrated by people, no janky AI bullshit.
Apart from the AI generated visuals, which kinda' screws thing up a bit in my head if I look at it.
Wow .. that was killer... thank you ❤
I hope that they come up with part 2 i hate when they just leave a story hanging.
Part 2 please please please please please 🥺🙏🥺🙏🥺🙏🥺🙏🥺🙏
Well ... if this does not deserve a part 2 i don`t know what is
1000 likes time to start writing part 2
1:15
Is that a reference to a Dyson Sphere?
Aliens are very different from one another species wise.Alarians war against the alpha draconians
I thought this was a very good story and liked it. I hope there are more parts to this. Although I would decrease the amount of anger and frankly BS from the soldiers, they are supposed to be professionals/commandoes but act more like school children. Roger seems like a cool person.
It's mostly just Vasquez who's a bit of a hothead- he and the captain is the only one who really has more than 1 or 2 lines. Vasquez is inspired by a favorite character of mine from an old video game, and he was also had some anger issues. The demeanour of the entire squad, really, is loosely similar to that game (Clive Barker's Jericho). The captain is a hardass with a distinct dislike for what he perceives as an "escort" mission- he doesn't like having to be a babysitter for both his own men and a team of scientists on an alien world known for being a hive of scum and villainy where they could be attacked at any time and had been dreading/expecting something to go tits up despite the Dr. Barns' placations.
In any case, I'm glad you liked the story despite your misgivings! I'm always happy to hear criticism, as it can help me to improve my own writing. There's definitely a bit of pressure to try and speed up the pacing of these stories since there's no guarantee I'll get to write followups or part 2s (though I do write open-ended just in case, and partly to drive support for it because I greatly enjoy writing longer-form serializations as opposed to one-off short stories).
@@dicerson9976 Thank you for your reply. I have read several stories on youtube that are several parts, 20 or more parts and still going. I still find Vasquez over the top. They can be mouthy but they seem well over the top.
@@dicerson9976It was a little over the top, but it does serve to characterise them a bit more than having them be more the faceless professional, so I understand why you had it that way. Still, I do hope for a follow up to this story, as there is interesting foreshadowing, and the setting seems entertaining.
Although, I do prefer to read stories compared to listening to audio, so is there another place where you post your writings?
@@whitehawk4099 Currently there is not, every story is written as an original for the channel. I do not actually manage the channel myself, so ultimately it is not up to me to decide if text-versions of the stories are posted anywhere (or if a part 2 is in fact made! Currently the channel's manager is reluctant to begin making serialized stories since on youtube especially series tend not to perform well with al gore's rythmn. But I have been pushing for it!)
A PREGNANT SILENCE
That's it? Wast that the end? Part 2 maybe?
yeah...about that.. 99.9998% . a drift of 2ppm is too low. Generally the difference between two random current humans usually is 0.4% of the total genome. 2ppm difference is somewhere in the region of incest-offspring between full siblings or offspring from double-first-cousins and almost at the level of identical-twins.
👏👏👏👏👏
Kinda reminds me of bungie halo, as far as the plot is concerned
Almost a 1000 likes for the second video story to come out
When is the second one coming out?
Time travel.
this story has legs
you cut off there ? really? get back on that story asap!
Ok.... so... back story... what caused humans to loose tech... ?
hit that like button
Oh my garsh you are beautiful. Your voice is very nice too. NOT trying to get to know you, just a distant observation.
Thanks for the story, it was nice.
A psychotic, unhinged, heavy armed soldier sent to explore a foreign ship and its technology! It's really annoying! Bye-bye!
is there are a part 2 ?
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As a Filipino tf is that name?!
praise raptor jesus on his cross of rock
Brother 1 k likes ho gai hai aab to 2nd part daal do yaar
Wait that’s it? Where is the rest?
Very well narrated, but the writing leaves a bit to be desired. They take a shot at the stupid scientists in Prometheus early on with the not taking off their helmets and looking in unknown openings, but then the guy acts like a hormonal teenager throwing a tantrum