Very good start with very quick and confusing end .......work on it sweetheart turn it into a mini series ...plzzz ...mafia jealousy enmity...this all i need 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
This is a confusing story, i didn't even know who the fiance was, i thought it was jk but then he said " Whatever shit he was spitting isn't the truth " So that means jk is not the fiance. The it's jk who kissed yn but he got shocked by the kiss and he kissed her back just as fiercely. So that's not make sense
@@Tiger_Lilies_ian I'm glad you take my comment as a criticism and not as hate. Because I don't hate the story, just confused over the storyline.. Good luck author-nim
![[Oneshot]"When you overworked in periods and fainted infront of protective Mafia husband" #oneshot](http://i.ytimg.com/vi/wRNYqXpp_nk/mqdefault.jpg)
![[BONUS]"when you were in heated argument with Mafia husband but had to share body heat"#jkfanfiction](http://i.ytimg.com/vi/05GNLHrSk6M/mqdefault.jpg)
![[Oneshot]"When your Overprotective Mafia husband flew back leaving his meeting because you got sick"](/img/1.gif)
Very good start with very quick and confusing end .......work on it sweetheart turn it into a mini series ...plzzz ...mafia jealousy enmity...this all i need 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
Heyyy !! It wass superb likee soo soo good❤❤🤌🏻💯 so now u know author what we want A BONUSS!!! 😁😁
@@Martin-ou8ki i might actually make a 10 minute bonus😚🤫
@@Tiger_Lilies_ian thatss so sweet of you authorr thankyouu so muchh 🤌🏻🤌🏻♥️♥️
This is a confusing story, i didn't even know who the fiance was, i thought it was jk but then he said " Whatever shit he was spitting isn't the truth " So that means jk is not the fiance. The it's jk who kissed yn but he got shocked by the kiss and he kissed her back just as fiercely. So that's not make sense
Iam sorry. I should have reviewed it again before uploading. I just noticed these points.
I apologise.
I will try to improve 🫂🌠
@@Tiger_Lilies_ian I'm glad you take my comment as a criticism and not as hate. Because I don't hate the story, just confused over the storyline..
Good luck author-nim
@@edgloss1299 ofcourse.
Iam grateful for this🌠
Thank you so much🫂
I was about to start study ... But seems like my books have to wait another 20 minutes...i have something important to do ❤❤❤❤😅😅😅😅😅😅
😭😂💐
@@Tiger_Lilies_ian 😜😜😜
I couldn't understand anything at all, at least you must have given her intro, why was she there, who is her fiánce, etc. Try to improve, nice!
I will rewrite it in future, considering this all.
And i will try to improve.
Thank you so much.✨️💐
@@Tiger_Lilies_ian np:)