For a future story idea might I suggest an idea for a pony who is a monster that evil may fear the nesscary evil of the world one that is the evil to undo evil a dark protector willing to do whatever it takes to protect the world even at the cost of their own happiness their own light if all should hate them just to be happy with less truer evil that is a price they will be willing to pay the willingness to darken their own soul for the sake of all
I mean, to be fair, in the show, he was always generally depicted as a fairly patient, generally pleasant guy who tries to help out where he can. When other ponies turn up their noses at “common” ponies, even if it comes off as a little condescending, he always has something nice to say, and he was very eager to help Twilight learn to delegate her tasks, and still came off as being quite pleasant when his requests for special privileges were refused. Also, everybody follows his lead. We’ve already seen ponies being embarrassed by that. They say something rude, and he shoots that notion down by at least attempting to show kindness, which causes other ponies to verbally agree with him due to his influence. I’m sure that would rub certain people up the wrong way, especially if they were inadvertently humiliated.
Could be that RD zodiac is an aries. The sign thats commonly to die in most situations. Or her carelessness and people think she deserved it from other episodes.
_What I Believe Fleur Saw:_ I believe Mr. Hoof (the servant) stepped away from the bathroom, leaving Fleur by herself. After Fleur left the bathroom, she tried making her way back to Fancy and Blueblood. Since Fleur wasn't familiar with Blueblood's castle, she ended up getting lost and began to wander about. She then stumbled upon the cellar doors, noticing a cellar door was open, she peered inside. She saw a lifeless pony on the floor. This is where I believe Mr. Hoof appeared. He appeared behind Fleur (more than likely ready to attack her). Filled with fear, Fleur picked up a wine bottle from the rack, and smashed it on top of Mr. Hoof's head.
At 45:36 I like to think the sandwiches at the cafe are actually fine, and Fancy Pants was trying to avoid any risk of triggering Octavia's flashbacks. Perhaps I'm reading into things too much.
Plus it gives you more suspense to work with than any physical abuse. The character is only given a very few certainties (untold time, gradual diminish of hope, and if you really wanna mess with the character? have them be denied food and water.) and the rest is allllll emotional response. This is actually a pretty good method of brainwashing without needing to use too much physical force. The sheer simplicity in this is just...oof
I actually really like this one. Normally grimdarks focus on what created trauma but this one focusing on the phycological after effects is refreshing- I've always preferred psychological horror to gore or jump scares. The fic does a great job of portraying ptsd and the frustration of recovery- Octavia being frustrated that something as "minor" as a tapping hoof was enough to instantly trigger her mental state is too relatable. The part where Blueblood speaks about training "dogs" was chilling. On a lighter note, Fleur is such a sweetheart!
Why can Octavia never get a break? She's always having Celestia knows what happen to her and/or Vinyl. Also, I have never hated Blue Blood so much until now. And have I ever loved Fancy Pants until now.
I think the voice acting was my favorite part. The story felt a little lackluster. But it was nice to see all of the community working together to make a story, artists, narrators and writers.
I have... many thoughts. Firstly, I like psychological thrillers, so this was right up my alley. Secondly, though well written, it seemed too quick. The story rather lost a bit of weight for it. As deplorable as it may sound, we did not suffer with Octavia long enough to impress her misery upon us. I recommend a double narrative, following both Octavia and Fancy Pants, with Vinyl coming to fancy for help. Alternate between the two stories, with Fancy's becoming ever more desperate and determined, while Octavia's slips further into despair. For a dose of dramatic tension, don't tell the readers about the raid on Blue Blood's castle before it happens. Let them despair with Octavia, if only for a short time. That really is my only critique, for I greatly enjoyed everything else. I especially like the ending. (SPOILERS) I like that you did not close the curtain on a submissive, beaten Blue Blood, subjected to the horrible fate of a prison harlot. A villain he remains, undaunted and unrepentant. Sociopathy is so frightening when left unfettered. Congratulations for ending this tale on a deliciously foreboding note. Well written, well read, and well done. Edit: I just realized that my sole critique of this story is that there isn't enough of it. Let that be high praise.
The original story “Play for Me” was made for a oneshot October. Then the author made two other parts, as separate stories, “Blueblood’s pets” and “Aftermath” This video is a combination of three separate one-offs.
Very well done to Scribbler and all others involved. At least Octavia is on the road to recovery and Vinyl will always be by her side. I find dark stories like these to be best when there's a small bit of hope at the end of it.
Here is an interisting idea a story about the nesscary evil a pony that pays the ultimate price to ensure all will be happy to darken their own soul to protect the world from all other evils by any means nesscary
@@godofevil9468 how indeed most merely adopt the idea for me I grew up with it over the course of constant wrongs being done to me from doctors suggesting to my mother to give me up to a mental home from first diagnosis to teachers making my life in school a living hell on account of not wanting to give me a chance to teachers yet again singling me out as a bad person on account of pointing out their own faults and flaws in their methods of teaching many hell people tried to kill me and I ended up getting arrested for a crime I did not commit upon a bad cops own way prejudice
@@godofevil9468 how I know the character so well is having a darkness in my own heart like a caged animal with a rage as intense as the fires of hell yet having the moral code strong enough to contain it
@@derekdumas4556 huh.........well as for me personally. Mother and Father disowned me before i was 16. I've spent all my inheritance running from them. My Brother hates me with every fiber of his being and wants to kill me. and I'm living in the never really had any love. And my best friend committed suicide 5 years ago.
Shadow did really good as blueblood. Compelety change my perspective on that character Like wow. I also liked visual role as the judge and neighs role as the prisoner. Everyone involed in this project did awesome really! I was hooked to this story like a dog on a leash! ... *Wait*
Wait, they need a victims testimony? They found her and many others locked up in his hiden chambers! Their testimony would not be needed for a conviction.
Also, Octavia bolted out of the courtroom not even halfway through giving her testimony because Blue Blood was using his psychological conditioning to keep her from talking, I think that was more than enough evidence for a conviction
*gets threw the beginning* how did blueblood even know where Octavia lives??? *at **23:01* Well that s nice of him to-... Wait...is this before or after Octavia got kidnapped... *Realizeation* ooooooh.....
Wait was it fleur that discovered the captured ponies? Because she looks really shocked after coming back from the toilet and she was with Mr. hoofs or whatever his name was??
Yeah I think so. I also think at that point, Fancy and Fleur were trying to figure out where Octavia was. As evidenced by the broken bottle and blood on the the floor by the secret door, I'm guessing that Mr. Hoof was trying to take Fleur to the goddamn torture rooms, but Fleur retaliated by smashing a bottle on his head and running away. That's my interpretation, at least
@@darkcreeperanimations3543 honestly if she did, she did a damn good job on keeping her cool once she came back and only freak out once she was fully safe. 13164 IQ cus people would normally freak out
How many did he kill and will never be found? How many families did he destroy and leave not even caring that their lived one was gone? I love how well writen this is to make me think so much.
The art, the voice acting, and the sound effects were all INCREDIBLE! The writing of course was exquisite! I thought I had survived the worst of it during the actual imprisonment but the RECOVERY was by far the most heart wrenching and terrifying! Bravo!
The writing (and especially the voice acting) was spectacular. Even if this wasn't written with characters I already had a liking for this would work so well as a stand alone story and I'd love to see this adapted to a full movie
"I thought I was getting better" That really hit me. As someone that has apparently been abused, and now has depression and such, I've had to say that to myself. I've had so many panic attacks because I thought I was doing better, but still had the panic.
Blue blood is conditioning her into playing the instrument through reinforcement. It reminds me of Pavlov’s Operant condition through punishment or perhaps it’s Skinner’s classical conditioning. Can’t put my finger on it right now. He’s conditioned her To respond to sound like Skinner’s classical conditioning experiment on top of post traumatic stress disorder (PTSD). Poor Octi 💔💜
I gotta say, when this fic started I was really worried I might have to tap out. I can handle a lot, but kidnapping/captive stories that focus heavily on the abuse of their captives (especially when it's a male kidnapper and female captive) tend to unnerve me the most. This story however balances things out very well, giving us enough information to understand how traumatizing what Octavia and the others went through was while also giving us the pieces of the plot that led to everything that happened. When Blue Blood offered to put Vinyl in touch with a realtor, I found myself thinking "Well, that's awfully nice of him, considering what I know he does to Octavia", only for the realization to hit a few seconds later and have a "Oh. Oh, no" moment. Very good dark fic, only wish we'd gotten to see Blue Blood suffer a little in prison
What scene did you draw? There's some epic art and some average art in this video; I simply must know what type you drew. Though I am not trying to offend anyone's hard work, as everyone's art style IS unique, there are some amateur mistakes that stick out like a sore thumb.
the voiceacting and sounds where really well done, it made it so easy to listen to, it felt natural and real. If the voiceacting or sounds are stale or repetitive like it usualy is in creepypastavideos it will be hard to keep my concentration thru the entire story so most of the times I can only listen to half a story.
Imagine Rarity reads the newspaper and finds out that the guy she went on a date with was a serial killer that kidnapped creatures and psychologically tortured them. How do you think she'd react?
Poor Octavia Being kidnapped and forced to play For That monster i hope he stay in prison for a long time anyway love story are you guys voice the characters was awesome can't wait to here the next Halloween story Prince Blueblood but something happens to him evil laugh:Maha hahahahaha! and happy Halloween/ happy Nightmare Night
You know when you may think about it: Crystal Empire story as well seeing Origins of Sombra, King Sombra was the first Dark story/Grimdark before Pinkie Cupcakes. The main difference between the two is Sombra's dark story was both personally deep and had an effect on a grand scale from his kingdom to rest of the Equestria as well as his tragedy being Canon; not to mention he's the first villain/character in MLP to be killed, (or in a better phrase) shattered. Let's see how far you can push the story after his death. Have an Unhappy Halloween, Nyeh heh heh!
This is what bothers me. Why doesn't the prison have anything to stop unicorns from using their magic? The reading was amazing and had me in tears. Vinyl and Octavia are my favorite ponies in the series, it hurts to see so much psychological damage done to Octavia..
...I wrote this story years ago. It's nice to see what you did with it. I don't know if you tried to reach out to me, but if you had this would have been when I sort of fell of the earth. My sister and I used to write fanfiction together. When she passed away it hurt too much to do it without her. A warm thank you to you and everyone who helped put this together. It's a wonderful project, better than my little horror story deserved, and it brought back many sweet memories of my sister.
Excellent story to cap off the month Scribbler, although I still have a lot of content to cover for the next few nights. Thank you and all who have collaborated to this year's MoM content. Looking forward to next October too.
Chilling stuff. *Taps hoof* Really awful. *Taps again* It's like he couldn't manage to keep his own house in order...a shame. Perhaps he'll have more luck in the big house. *Tap tap tap tap* Very well done. The voices were good, the mood fitting, and the accompanying art spectacular. It was well put together, and a triumph to see. I shall look forward to more of your works my dear. *Tap tap tap~*
Spoilers Can you imagine how awful vinyl must feel for giving the address to fancy? I'm sure octy would have been kidnapped eventually but that in its own would be enough to make me hurt myself. If I saw the one I loved broken and abused like that...... I couldn't handle it.
And then a strange stallion who ate someone’s liver with fava beans became Bluebloods new roomie and didn’t take kindly to his crimes against musicians
As a pony, I hate blueblood. But as a character, he was so well written in this!! I wanted to know what happend next with him and what he did was genuinely so interested, although horrible. It really does make you wanna hate him doesn’t it? That’s what makes this such a good piece. The sheer emotion
Was I the only one constantly waiting for Fancy to do something?Fleur reminds me of the servants with Blue Blood thou her silence might have somethinh else to do. Haven't listened to the end yet. Edit: Tad bit dissapointed it I was wrong about Fancy but I still loved the story!
This fic hurts cuz I have trauma from rape and other stuff like that.. good fic tho. Usually I don’t cry in movies or anything but this almost had me multiple times
I know this is concerned an "old" story now but it still gets me like it did the first time I listened to it... Not to the extreme Octie was put into but.. When I was a teen I also was put in a position where I was a victim... I still have trouble speaking out and standing up for myself.. I've gotten better over the years but I have had to do this myself I still can't bring myself to talk to my friends in person... I'm glad vinyl is there for her in this it is easier when you have someone there..
I'm really glad you've gone better over the years.It's really brave of you for coming on a coment section to speak at least a little bit about it.This storie also got me on a personal level,especially on the part of the recovery.I'm really sorry you had to go through what happened and I wish the best for you. Btw sorry if my english is bad,it's not my first language
Damn, poor Octavia suffered so much trauma in this one. I gotta wonder though, was the armor really in their apartment and only she could see it move? Because I don't really know if I buy that she threw herself onto the glass coffee table. Unless she thought she saw it and was trying to get away. Leaves this kind of up to interpretation... Awesome story.
Ha ha ha... ehhhhh I like how it started with the beginning of Octavia’s kidnapping and we are sitting there like “what happened? Why is this happening?” And THEN we later understand what happened. It’s super satisfying, while if we started by explaining what happened it would probably be less effective. Although it may be easier to understand if it was set up that way. Eh. (P.s. I love these stories, but I despise Rainbow factory because the first time I watched/ read it I was SUPER little, so now whenever I hear the song or heck even just the title I either have a panic attack, anxiety, hyperventilate, or start crying... so many regrets... 😅 This story was amazing, thank you :)
I'm going to be honest right now. This story has helped me fall asleep multiple times. I hope this doesn't means that something is wrong with me. But it is a good story. Anyway, good night.
Scribbler this was awesome but im still concerned with octavia blueblood will pay for this atrocity Oh and by the way Happy Nightmare Night Everypony Even though its past that 😅😅
This has an amazing story and great style I love this it was made so well and adds a concept of horror that's not easy to get right, but you got it phenomenally
Is there a sequel to this? I’d love to know what happens after if there is one (if not it’s still an amazing ending). I love psychological horror it’s so effective. Also I feel sorry for Octi, Vy and Dash when it comes to these grimdark stories...my god.
*me, thinking* What if he captured me? Oh, wait, I'd forget all my music and be useless, so I guess there's nothing to worry about.. *muffled grunt as the world goes black*
supercj the fox 50 years have passed, yet I do not age. Aku’s grasp chokes the past, present and future. Hope is lost. Yet the suffering continues. Gotta get back, back to the past. Samurai Jack.
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Happy Nightmare Night, everypony...
Scribbler Productions Happy Nightmare Night deary!!!
Scribbler Productions happy nightmare night
Nightmare night what a fright give me something sweet to bite
Trick or Treat
you too
For a future story idea might I suggest an idea for a pony who is a monster that evil may fear the nesscary evil of the world one that is the evil to undo evil a dark protector willing to do whatever it takes to protect the world even at the cost of their own happiness their own light if all should hate them just to be happy with less truer evil that is a price they will be willing to pay the willingness to darken their own soul for the sake of all
I love how in basically every fanfic whenever fancy pants is involved he's always the best guy and all of the rich people hate him he's a based dude
You mean besides fleur
Was honestly surprised to find two in in close timeframe when he is either villain or not fully based.
I mean, to be fair, in the show, he was always generally depicted as a fairly patient, generally pleasant guy who tries to help out where he can. When other ponies turn up their noses at “common” ponies, even if it comes off as a little condescending, he always has something nice to say, and he was very eager to help Twilight learn to delegate her tasks, and still came off as being quite pleasant when his requests for special privileges were refused. Also, everybody follows his lead. We’ve already seen ponies being embarrassed by that. They say something rude, and he shoots that notion down by at least attempting to show kindness, which causes other ponies to verbally agree with him due to his influence. I’m sure that would rub certain people up the wrong way, especially if they were inadvertently humiliated.
Ah, Rusty Armor. Shining Armor's long time rival.
Shining armor: My long lost evil twin
Me: wait thats a bit much
Lol
Evil twin
XD
Lol
I swear if rainbow dash dies the most in grimdark, Octavia suffers the most.
Could be that RD zodiac is an aries. The sign thats commonly to die in most situations. Or her carelessness and people think she deserved it from other episodes.
Elemental 206411 so your saying that an Aries like me...is going to fucking die?
Ponygirl AJ
We’ll all die eventually
@@grlsjustwannahavefunnnn Yeah. No lie, every situtation I see the Aries dies first.
But Octavia is innocent to
_What I Believe Fleur Saw:_
I believe Mr. Hoof (the servant) stepped away from the bathroom, leaving Fleur by herself. After Fleur left the bathroom, she tried making her way back to Fancy and Blueblood. Since Fleur wasn't familiar with Blueblood's castle, she ended up getting lost and began to wander about. She then stumbled upon the cellar doors, noticing a cellar door was open, she peered inside. She saw a lifeless pony on the floor. This is where I believe Mr. Hoof appeared. He appeared behind Fleur (more than likely ready to attack her). Filled with fear, Fleur picked up a wine bottle from the rack, and smashed it on top of Mr. Hoof's head.
That would explain why she said she "felt sick" and how Blue Blood was caught
And likely confirmed what vinyl and fancy suspected. Poor girl, along with the many victims, probably needed a LOT of therapy after that
This fic does a great job at portraying ptsd, i can really feel for Octavia, and am quite proud of the portrayal of her recovery
At 45:36 I like to think the sandwiches at the cafe are actually fine, and Fancy Pants was trying to avoid any risk of triggering Octavia's flashbacks. Perhaps I'm reading into things too much.
That actually makes sense
But howd he know
@@shaheenazaffar1650 He probably heard about it
Poor Octavia forced to play the cello again this reminds me of a puppet to her fame all over again poor poor pony nice voice acting Scribbler
Ikr
@Daniel Howard Octavia Philaharmonica didn't deserve to be caged like that. Prince Blueblood is an evil mastermind.
yeah definately
Right?! And it's almost always a unicorn who torments her.
God I love the psychological horror it's so different from most other grimdarks and in some way even more terrifying. this is so well made good job
Plus it gives you more suspense to work with than any physical abuse. The character is only given a very few certainties (untold time, gradual diminish of hope, and if you really wanna mess with the character? have them be denied food and water.) and the rest is allllll emotional response. This is actually a pretty good method of brainwashing without needing to use too much physical force. The sheer simplicity in this is just...oof
I actually really like this one. Normally grimdarks focus on what created trauma but this one focusing on the phycological after effects is refreshing- I've always preferred psychological horror to gore or jump scares. The fic does a great job of portraying ptsd and the frustration of recovery- Octavia being frustrated that something as "minor" as a tapping hoof was enough to instantly trigger her mental state is too relatable. The part where Blueblood speaks about training "dogs" was chilling.
On a lighter note, Fleur is such a sweetheart!
Why can Octavia never get a break? She's always having Celestia knows what happen to her and/or Vinyl.
Also, I have never hated Blue Blood so much until now. And have I ever loved Fancy Pants until now.
Agreed
I always hated Blueblood. But this made me wanna kill him. Kinda!
God I loathe Blueblood!
@@queenkaterose With all the other villains in MLP you love to hate them but with BlueBlood you just straight up hate him.
@@revaslatts8011 same
Wow fancy pants gives gifts not loans, what a great stallion. I love this story, makes me hate blue blood even more now.
whats a word which means "HOLY SWEET CHOCOLATE COVERED CELESTIA THIS IS HORRIFYING!!!"
and "This is interestingly fascinatingly awesome."
I believe the word you're looking for is *AAAAAAAHHHHH*
The words you're looking for is "Frigging Brutal"!!!
HSCCCTIH TIIFA ? Hehe?
Mmm. Chocolate.
or evil Shadowofcygnus.....end of story... :3
I think the voice acting was my favorite part. The story felt a little lackluster. But it was nice to see all of the community working together to make a story, artists, narrators and writers.
I have... many thoughts. Firstly, I like psychological thrillers, so this was right up my alley. Secondly, though well written, it seemed too quick. The story rather lost a bit of weight for it. As deplorable as it may sound, we did not suffer with Octavia long enough to impress her misery upon us. I recommend a double narrative, following both Octavia and Fancy Pants, with Vinyl coming to fancy for help. Alternate between the two stories, with Fancy's becoming ever more desperate and determined, while Octavia's slips further into despair. For a dose of dramatic tension, don't tell the readers about the raid on Blue Blood's castle before it happens. Let them despair with Octavia, if only for a short time. That really is my only critique, for I greatly enjoyed everything else. I especially like the ending. (SPOILERS) I like that you did not close the curtain on a submissive, beaten Blue Blood, subjected to the horrible fate of a prison harlot. A villain he remains, undaunted and unrepentant. Sociopathy is so frightening when left unfettered. Congratulations for ending this tale on a deliciously foreboding note. Well written, well read, and well done.
Edit: I just realized that my sole critique of this story is that there isn't enough of it. Let that be high praise.
Imagine what happens when they make a sequel. He could escape and try again after turning the other prisoners into pets. (Shudders)
The original story “Play for Me” was made for a oneshot October. Then the author made two other parts, as separate stories, “Blueblood’s pets” and “Aftermath”
This video is a combination of three separate one-offs.
cool idea, thinking of mashing some fanfics together, gonna use this
@@DoctorTex Oh..
Octavia: "It's just standing there.. Menacingly!!"
GET OUTTA THERE VINYL!!!
Nailed that Octavia voice!
Very well done to Scribbler and all others involved. At least Octavia is on the road to recovery and Vinyl will always be by her side. I find dark stories like these to be best when there's a small bit of hope at the end of it.
Here is an interisting idea a story about the nesscary evil a pony that pays the ultimate price to ensure all will be happy to darken their own soul to protect the world from all other evils by any means nesscary
@@derekdumas4556 how'd you know my OC story i haven't even released it yet.
@@godofevil9468 how indeed most merely adopt the idea for me I grew up with it over the course of constant wrongs being done to me from doctors suggesting to my mother to give me up to a mental home from first diagnosis to teachers making my life in school a living hell on account of not wanting to give me a chance to teachers yet again singling me out as a bad person on account of pointing out their own faults and flaws in their methods of teaching many hell people tried to kill me and I ended up getting arrested for a crime I did not commit upon a bad cops own way prejudice
@@godofevil9468 how I know the character so well is having a darkness in my own heart like a caged animal with a rage as intense as the fires of hell yet having the moral code strong enough to contain it
@@derekdumas4556 huh.........well as for me personally. Mother and Father disowned me before i was 16. I've spent all my inheritance running from them. My Brother hates me with every fiber of his being and wants to kill me. and I'm living in the never really had any love. And my best friend committed suicide 5 years ago.
Shadow did really good as blueblood. Compelety change my perspective on that character Like wow.
I also liked visual role as the judge and neighs role as the prisoner. Everyone involed in this project did awesome really! I was hooked to this story like a dog on a leash! ...
*Wait*
*click click*
TOO LATE!
poor octavia this month, vapmpires then this? xD she needs a whole lotta vynl in February
#angrylesbiansex
@@ScribblerProductions101 oh lala~ x'D thanks scribbler!
@@ScribblerProductions101 Prince Blueblood is evil. Poor Octy. What will Vinyl do?
Scribbler Productions I’M LAUGHING SO HARD AT THIS H E L P
@@ScribblerProductions101 Omg LMFAO
Wait, they need a victims testimony? They found her and many others locked up in his hiden chambers! Their testimony would not be needed for a conviction.
Yeah, in a real trial they wouldnt have had the victims stand trial based on their mental abuse. They would of had a separate hearing for them
Also, Octavia bolted out of the courtroom not even halfway through giving her testimony because Blue Blood was using his psychological conditioning to keep her from talking, I think that was more than enough evidence for a conviction
*gets threw the beginning* how did blueblood even know where Octavia lives???
*at **23:01*
Well that s nice of him to-...
Wait...is this before or after Octavia got kidnapped...
*Realizeation* ooooooh.....
39:12 Hearing these two VAs talking, especially one of them being Vinyl, immediately brings my thoughts to Vampolescence (or however it’s spelt) XD
Soon as Octavia agreed to speak at the trial I was like "this dude gonna tap his hoof swear"
Dang that poor Cellist is getting attacked from all sides.
Poor Octavia she needs a vacation
my Hate-For-BlueBlood™ levels just rose like 99%
99% of infinity is still infinity
Real
I would hope that what blueblood did to Octavia toward the end would have marked him as immediately guilty
Wait was it fleur that discovered the captured ponies? Because she looks really shocked after coming back from the toilet and she was with Mr. hoofs or whatever his name was??
Yeah I think so. I also think at that point, Fancy and Fleur were trying to figure out where Octavia was. As evidenced by the broken bottle and blood on the the floor by the secret door, I'm guessing that Mr. Hoof was trying to take Fleur to the goddamn torture rooms, but Fleur retaliated by smashing a bottle on his head and running away. That's my interpretation, at least
@@darkcreeperanimations3543 honestly if she did, she did a damn good job on keeping her cool once she came back and only freak out once she was fully safe. 13164 IQ cus people would normally freak out
She must've heard something coming from the cellar and tried to investigate when Mr. Hoof tried to kill her
How many did he kill and will never be found? How many families did he destroy and leave not even caring that their lived one was gone? I love how well writen this is to make me think so much.
The art, the voice acting, and the sound effects were all INCREDIBLE! The writing of course was exquisite! I thought I had survived the worst of it during the actual imprisonment but the RECOVERY was by far the most heart wrenching and terrifying!
Bravo!
Some of the art is... eh...
They didn't really know how to shade
The writing (and especially the voice acting) was spectacular. Even if this wasn't written with characters I already had a liking for this would work so well as a stand alone story and I'd love to see this adapted to a full movie
"I thought I was getting better"
That really hit me. As someone that has apparently been abused, and now has depression and such, I've had to say that to myself.
I've had so many panic attacks because I thought I was doing better, but still had the panic.
@@cranberry420 Sympathies friend.
When I heard that breathing from the darkness at the start at the video, I thought that *something else* was going down.
me too, not gonna lie.
I panicked and turned my phone off cause my volume was up lmao
Making art for this was a fantastic opportunity. Happy Halloween everyone!
Blue blood is conditioning her into playing the instrument through reinforcement. It reminds me of Pavlov’s Operant condition through punishment or perhaps it’s Skinner’s classical conditioning. Can’t put my finger on it right now. He’s conditioned her To respond to sound like Skinner’s classical conditioning experiment on top of post traumatic stress disorder (PTSD). Poor Octi 💔💜
I gotta say, when this fic started I was really worried I might have to tap out. I can handle a lot, but kidnapping/captive stories that focus heavily on the abuse of their captives (especially when it's a male kidnapper and female captive) tend to unnerve me the most. This story however balances things out very well, giving us enough information to understand how traumatizing what Octavia and the others went through was while also giving us the pieces of the plot that led to everything that happened. When Blue Blood offered to put Vinyl in touch with a realtor, I found myself thinking "Well, that's awfully nice of him, considering what I know he does to Octavia", only for the realization to hit a few seconds later and have a "Oh. Oh, no" moment.
Very good dark fic, only wish we'd gotten to see Blue Blood suffer a little in prison
SAME
This really turned out well Scribbler! It was fun and a honour working on the art for this ^-^
Thank you, hun!
What scene did you draw? There's some epic art and some average art in this video; I simply must know what type you drew.
Though I am not trying to offend anyone's hard work, as everyone's art style IS unique, there are some amateur mistakes that stick out like a sore thumb.
@@nojaybay I drew the first one
@@ScribblerProductions101 I hope you'll make a sequel to this.
the voiceacting and sounds where really well done, it made it so easy to listen to, it felt natural and real. If the voiceacting or sounds are stale or repetitive like it usualy is in creepypastavideos it will be hard to keep my concentration thru the entire story so most of the times I can only listen to half a story.
just saying, BlueBlood *SHOULD* have had life without parole for a sentence, but otherwise its amazing!
Or chip his head off
When I hear the name blueblood I think of Detroit become human .-_-.
Of course
TWENTY EIGHT STAB WOUNDS!
I've only seen the memes and I'm surprised I understood
Imagine Rarity reads the newspaper and finds out that the guy she went on a date with was a serial killer that kidnapped creatures and psychologically tortured them. How do you think she'd react?
She’ll probably be really pissed off and is glad that she isn’t dating him
That she dodged the bullet.
Poor Octavia Being kidnapped and forced to play For That monster i hope he stay in prison for a long time anyway love story are you guys voice the characters was awesome can't wait to here the next Halloween story Prince Blueblood but something happens to him evil laugh:Maha hahahahaha! and happy Halloween/ happy Nightmare Night
bro, slow down
I hope he drops the soap
This is amazing...and Happy Halloween,Scribbler.
You know when you may think about it: Crystal Empire story as well seeing Origins of Sombra, King Sombra was the first Dark story/Grimdark before Pinkie Cupcakes. The main difference between the two is Sombra's dark story was both personally deep and had an effect on a grand scale from his kingdom to rest of the Equestria as well as his tragedy being Canon; not to mention he's the first villain/character in MLP to be killed, (or in a better phrase) shattered. Let's see how far you can push the story after his death. Have an Unhappy Halloween, Nyeh heh heh!
Scribbler you look awfully nice as a Batpony
Yes! This is everything. Thank you again for having me be a part of this!
This is what bothers me. Why doesn't the prison have anything to stop unicorns from using their magic?
The reading was amazing and had me in tears. Vinyl and Octavia are my favorite ponies in the series, it hurts to see so much psychological damage done to Octavia..
I agree, I was disappointed at the fact there was no disabling spell, I wanted Blue Blood to find out what it was like to become the pet
I know right? They can cancel unicorn magic for a sports event, but not their prisons? Also, teleportation spells. Enough said
I love this story and holy CELESTIA'S SUN that is like um I don't have words on this
Twinkling Twilight, such a disturbed and evil pony. This is where ponies like him need ponies like Rampage to dispense a little...mercy.
...I wrote this story years ago. It's nice to see what you did with it. I don't know if you tried to reach out to me, but if you had this would have been when I sort of fell of the earth.
My sister and I used to write fanfiction together. When she passed away it hurt too much to do it without her. A warm thank you to you and everyone who helped put this together. It's a wonderful project, better than my little horror story deserved, and it brought back many sweet memories of my sister.
Excellent story to cap off the month Scribbler, although I still have a lot of content to cover for the next few nights. Thank you and all who have collaborated to this year's MoM content. Looking forward to next October too.
Jesus, that is one hell of a way to bring on Halloween.
Listening to one of Scribbler's other stories when this showed up!!!! XD
*Dislikability points for Bluebood have maxed out. Likability points for Fancy Pants are maxed out*
Chilling stuff. *Taps hoof* Really awful. *Taps again* It's like he couldn't manage to keep his own house in order...a shame. Perhaps he'll have more luck in the big house. *Tap tap tap tap*
Very well done. The voices were good, the mood fitting, and the accompanying art spectacular. It was well put together, and a triumph to see. I shall look forward to more of your works my dear. *Tap tap tap~*
Spoilers
Can you imagine how awful vinyl must feel for giving the address to fancy? I'm sure octy would have been kidnapped eventually but that in its own would be enough to make me hurt myself. If I saw the one I loved broken and abused like that...... I couldn't handle it.
Bella Chan I know it’s sad how evil people cloud be including ponies
Damn
He gave the address to blueblood.
Confrontati0n he?
Happy Nightmare Night everyone! And what a better way to celebrate with some Grimdarkness~?
And Moral of the Story: NEVER trust Blueblood,
HA
Happy Nightmare Night everypony and Scribbler that was amazing reading
Listening to one of scribblers other stories when this showed up xD
Damn...hearing octavia break like that makes me wonder just how bad people are irl..
And then a strange stallion who ate someone’s liver with fava beans became Bluebloods new roomie and didn’t take kindly to his crimes against musicians
This was brilliant, I feel that it represents real trauma, even if it isnt my own type of trauma. I applaud the VA's and the author.
That mental breakdown at 16:32 made me realize that I enjoy hearing fictional characters suffer. I think I have a problem.
Well I mean, I find Blueblood hot in this fanfic soooo.... you and I both have problems
That’s why we watch these grim dark fanfics
@@bunnie9202 a-b-ah-wh-u-b-wha?
You what 😭
@@bunnie9202 ….you what now?
I like how Izzy dizzy tried to recreate nowacking's performance. Good performance from everyone as always. Good scare for halloween/ Nightmare Night.
As a pony, I hate blueblood. But as a character, he was so well written in this!! I wanted to know what happend next with him and what he did was genuinely so interested, although horrible. It really does make you wanna hate him doesn’t it? That’s what makes this such a good piece. The sheer emotion
44:20
Octavia apologizing and starting to beat herself up like that hit close to home as someone with anxiety
Edit: It might be C-PTSD too.
Was I the only one constantly waiting for Fancy to do something?Fleur reminds me of the servants with Blue Blood thou her silence might have somethinh else to do. Haven't listened to the end yet.
Edit: Tad bit dissapointed it I was wrong about Fancy but I still loved the story!
Fancy is so sweet in this story.. idk why that is the most noticeable thing in it.
Octavia just can't catch a break
bro yes, my favorite ship and there are no happy ones
This fic hurts cuz I have trauma from rape and other stuff like that.. good fic tho. Usually I don’t cry in movies or anything but this almost had me multiple times
I love how they are together and I love the word ‘Love’ vinyl is adorable, looking after her ‘love’!
55:16 That’s a… questionable position
Also, if this guy could do that then god help them all if he breaks out of prison
Really amazing voice acting in this! This was quality!
One of the only stories that hasn't made me actually scared yet still one of the greatest I've ever heard
I know this is concerned an "old" story now but it still gets me like it did the first time I listened to it... Not to the extreme Octie was put into but.. When I was a teen I also was put in a position where I was a victim... I still have trouble speaking out and standing up for myself.. I've gotten better over the years but I have had to do this myself I still can't bring myself to talk to my friends in person... I'm glad vinyl is there for her in this it is easier when you have someone there..
I'm really glad you've gone better over the years.It's really brave of you for coming on a coment section to speak at least a little bit about it.This storie also got me on a personal level,especially on the part of the recovery.I'm really sorry you had to go through what happened and I wish the best for you.
Btw sorry if my english is bad,it's not my first language
Damn, poor Octavia suffered so much trauma in this one. I gotta wonder though, was the armor really in their apartment and only she could see it move? Because I don't really know if I buy that she threw herself onto the glass coffee table. Unless she thought she saw it and was trying to get away. Leaves this kind of up to interpretation...
Awesome story.
I personally think that she only *thought* it was there and panicked, but it's magic so I guess it could go either way.
Ha ha ha... ehhhhh
I like how it started with the beginning of Octavia’s kidnapping and we are sitting there like “what happened? Why is this happening?” And THEN we later understand what happened. It’s super satisfying, while if we started by explaining what happened it would probably be less effective.
Although it may be easier to understand if it was set up that way. Eh.
(P.s. I love these stories, but I despise Rainbow factory because the first time I watched/ read it I was SUPER little, so now whenever I hear the song or heck even just the title I either have a panic attack, anxiety, hyperventilate, or start crying... so many regrets... 😅
This story was amazing, thank you :)
Fancy Pants is a total bro in this story!
This is an amazing story horrifying in the way it shows powerlessness and terror!! Honestly I wish more stories were like this it’s awesome
I'm going to be honest right now. This story has helped me fall asleep multiple times. I hope this doesn't means that something is wrong with me. But it is a good story. Anyway, good night.
Scribbler this was awesome
but im still concerned with octavia
blueblood will pay for this atrocity
Oh and by the way Happy Nightmare Night
Everypony
Even though its past that 😅😅
This has an amazing story and great style I love this it was made so well and adds a concept of horror that's not easy to get right, but you got it phenomenally
To be completely honest, blueblood needs to take a cello to the head.
I’m obsessed with fancy pants in this
man, these grimdark stories make the actual villains of the show look harmless
She's so traumatized with what happened to her.I feel so sorry I just want to hug her!!😭😭😰😓
Me too
Is there a sequel to this? I’d love to know what happens after if there is one (if not it’s still an amazing ending). I love psychological horror it’s so effective.
Also I feel sorry for Octi, Vy and Dash when it comes to these grimdark stories...my god.
I swear they always get the short end of the stick!
This turned out really awesome Scribbler :)
27:10. HOLY HECKIDY HECK!! That lunatic!
I knew imprisonment was to good for him! he'd might as well been on parol 😠
When I need inspiration for my creepy pasta fanfics, I always listen to your month of the macabre stories ✌🏻😁
My brain be like:
Blue blood: Blue random person
Purple blood: Purple random person
me: ITS BEEN SO LON-
Wait, an empty suit of armor powered by magic/alchemy, Al, is that you?
Well, hopefully nothing happens to the dog.
I used to think of Blueblood as a childish, snobby, wimpy rich pony before. Now he seems so much more cold and sinister
*me, thinking* What if he captured me? Oh, wait, I'd forget all my music and be useless, so I guess there's nothing to worry about..
*muffled grunt as the world goes black*
*wakes up and yells* I'm not good enough for you, darn it!
I need to get back to the past before something like that happens.
Samurai JackOff
Aku: Too late!😈 *knocks you out*
supercj the fox
Um what?
supercj the fox
50 years have passed, yet I do not age. Aku’s grasp chokes the past, present and future. Hope is lost. Yet the suffering continues. Gotta get back, back to the past. Samurai Jack.
VINYL
YOU HAD ONE JOB!!!
He's just standing there. MENACINGLY!!!
Why do I want a part 2?!?!?! Who agrees that there should be a part 2?
The way you draw your ponies is amazing
Scribbler got people to draw for this.