The writing on this was the perfect blend of "what the fuck was that", "where did that even come from" and "what do they mean" and I love this video for that. The whole gang is so funny.
I think you have promise, as a writer you stand to improve your writing as I believe if you were to take some time and develop a funny plot you could have a decent start to a story. But as a writer myself I would like to say that I feel no true connection to the characters that can be improved maybe share something about there existence or create a unique world for them to live in. Well the idea is sort of funny and managed to get a small smile out of me which is quite an achievement I didn't quite get the jokes you were shooting for. If you can set up a plot and story I believe you could create something really good, your audio could use some work but as this is a hobby for you I am not going to judge on that to much after all audio can be a pain at the best of times. I believe you have potential and hope that if you decide to do this as more then a hobby that you can create a world all your own for you creations to inhabit and live in.
It was written in one sitting by 6 people, it's chaotic for a reason Also I don't think the connection to the characters needs to be that strong yet, it's a stupid comedy
As I said I know it was supposed to be funny I just believe you can improve if you were to continue the story in the future as I said you have potential and if you were wanting to make a proper storyline then I believe you could expand on these characters. But it is not fair for me to say much more as as I spend hours upon hours writing as a hobby myself I am hyper critical of myself and by extension I am very difficult to please. But I did get that it wasn't taking itself to seriously.
Alright then I am the wrong person to help there everything I write follows some sort of storyline or plot. You have a different sort of style of writing and I can respect that, so I will settle on wishing you luck with any future episodes.
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The writing on this was the perfect blend of "what the fuck was that", "where did that even come from" and "what do they mean" and I love this video for that. The whole gang is so funny.
this is my fav comment
Savi!?!
Never expected you here
@@multifandomfangirl9664 just going around supporting my friends' content :D
This feels like an old newgrounds cartoon. I love it. ❤️
What on god's green earth are you talking about?
This is so fast paced it tickles my brain I love this.
THIS is a certified CALICO classic
This is like Scott the Woz, nobody knows how to interact, it's like they've seen 5 words in a book on human interaction.
Hillarious.
this pilot produces smiles on my face
like this -> :)
Dude the animation is supreme! Very good job!
So awesome and epic and swag 😎 very funny and well made!
Dude this is awesome bahaha i really like the style!!!
This is awesome
I. Love. This.
The last 4:51 seconds I just spent watching this was very enjoyable
I really dig the surrealism of this, I hope you make more and I really hope you get more views
What on gods green earth are you talking about
REG WON'T LEAVE ME ALONE
I think you have promise, as a writer you stand to improve your writing as I believe if you were to take some time and develop a funny plot you could have a decent start to a story. But as a writer myself I would like to say that I feel no true connection to the characters that can be improved maybe share something about there existence or create a unique world for them to live in. Well the idea is sort of funny and managed to get a small smile out of me which is quite an achievement I didn't quite get the jokes you were shooting for. If you can set up a plot and story I believe you could create something really good, your audio could use some work but as this is a hobby for you I am not going to judge on that to much after all audio can be a pain at the best of times. I believe you have potential and hope that if you decide to do this as more then a hobby that you can create a world all your own for you creations to inhabit and live in.
It was written in one sitting by 6 people, it's chaotic for a reason
Also I don't think the connection to the characters needs to be that strong yet, it's a stupid comedy
As I said I know it was supposed to be funny I just believe you can improve if you were to continue the story in the future as I said you have potential and if you were wanting to make a proper storyline then I believe you could expand on these characters. But it is not fair for me to say much more as as I spend hours upon hours writing as a hobby myself I am hyper critical of myself and by extension I am very difficult to please. But I did get that it wasn't taking itself to seriously.
@@CyberWolfGaming2020 actually my number one rule for this show is to not have a storyline lol. Strictly episodic.
Alright then I am the wrong person to help there everything I write follows some sort of storyline or plot. You have a different sort of style of writing and I can respect that, so I will settle on wishing you luck with any future episodes.
@@CyberWolfGaming2020was the first episode better
Omg this is awesome, I’d watch 1000 of these
that was epic
Love this
this is amazing and perfect
2:47 not the SpongeBob close up😭
OMG I FOUND UR COMMENT 😝
oooo can't wait
i love this
omg woa, cool video!
not my type of humor but this seems like it was super fun to make so congrats
Can’t listen with audio rn (in school and no headphones) but still seems super cool also very inspirational since I’m working on a pilot rn
Mexican people be like “What on god’s yellow earth are you talking about?”
I fucking love this.
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So cool so awesome :)))))
Dis is nice 👌
This is so cool and awesome that psidaimon reference was actually insnae (there was none)
This reminds me of gumball ngl 🩷🩷🩷🩷
I don't know how to describe this but I really like it and I hope you make more because I really like it and I really like it and
What on gods green earth are you talking about?
I laughed, I cried, but most importantly, i uhh... i i forgord
real
so this gets a few thousand views but a singing head in a toilet gets billions
What's a Mexico?