It's good, it is..I like what you did here. Constructive criticism, thumbs down me if you don't agree I'm being honest too! Trade the bassline for 808 dark and with the lyrics (like I said no offense I like it) there are times it sounds you're reading off a prompt... what really helps is have a video of a similar scenario as to which you're conveying play as you're spittin it, get in the role! It's something like a bit "trebley" for this old 90s punk. But you're definitely on to something, this jawn is trig for sure. You're doing great!
@@yayster88 really though y'all are killing it, it's your own prerogative but like Kurt said, we all interpret the music as we hear it, not even as it was intended, that's what makes music music
@@javwavv how about:" there's a dim glow reminiscent retro, come up in my lab and watch me leak my f'n testrone, you wanna clown on me, I'll do you opp, but I gotta wrap it up cause your b!tch likely got the hiv, call it hereditary, I'm the mannnnn you 35 in your mommas basement eating tucan Sam, there's no wait on the front line, I'm in a foxhole, you you at lunchtime, I'm not your meal ticket, my rhymes pay so jump on my digit"
Yo this is hard, who’s this benzene guy? I think he’s really popular or something, been hearing about him a lot
It's good, it is..I like what you did here. Constructive criticism, thumbs down me if you don't agree I'm being honest too! Trade the bassline for 808 dark and with the lyrics (like I said no offense I like it) there are times it sounds you're reading off a prompt... what really helps is have a video of a similar scenario as to which you're conveying play as you're spittin it, get in the role! It's something like a bit "trebley" for this old 90s punk. But you're definitely on to something, this jawn is trig for sure. You're doing great!
ay thanks for the feedback bro we appreciate it
@@yayster88 thank you for accepting it, I'm still sending you out, I gotta big fam and wanna blow y'all up... send me the remix please!!
@@yayster88 really though y'all are killing it, it's your own prerogative but like Kurt said, we all interpret the music as we hear it, not even as it was intended, that's what makes music music
i’ll keep this in mind for the next one thank you man i appreciate it
@@javwavv how about:" there's a dim glow reminiscent retro, come up in my lab and watch me leak my f'n testrone, you wanna clown on me, I'll do you opp, but I gotta wrap it up cause your b!tch likely got the hiv, call it hereditary, I'm the mannnnn you 35 in your mommas basement eating tucan Sam, there's no wait on the front line, I'm in a foxhole, you you at lunchtime, I'm not your meal ticket, my rhymes pay so jump on my digit"
Yo, Hmu i got beats if u need sum💫💫💫
Yo, Hmu i got beats if u need sum💫💫