Reading my Law School Personal Statement | Accepted with Full Ride Scholarships
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- Опубликовано: 21 июл 2024
- Hi everyone! In today’s video, I am reading & reacting to the personal statement I submitted to law schools. This statement got me accepted to law schools with big scholarships. I give you a little bit of insight into how I crafted it. Your stats aren’t everything, so make sure to have great statements as well! Please leave any questions in the comments. Like and subscribe for more!
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0:00 - Intro
1:26 - Opening Paragraph
2:49 - Build up Paragraph
3:56 - “Why law” Paragraph
5:57 - Resume Paragraph
7:14 - School Specifics Paragraph
8:23 - Conclusion Paragraph
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CONGRATULATIONS! Beautifully written. I am completing my application for Fall 2024 and this was extremely helpful.
Thank you!! Good luck, you got this!
You are a strong writer! I was hanging on to every word.
Thank you so much!
CONGRATS!!! No lie I almost got teared hearing the first part, thank you!
Oh wow, thank you so much!
I seldom comment on RUclips videos, and yet I wanted to echo what others have said regarding your video. It’s so much of a lifesaver. Thank you for the time, effort, and resources expended to ensure such rich content.
This is so kind, thank you! I’m glad it was helpful!!
Congratulations on your new journey! This video was sooo very helpful! Thank you! You’re going to be a GREAT lawyer!
Thank you so much!! 😭
Hey Vanessa! I love your video. I am a 3L, and I can't wait to see how your legal journey progresses. It is so vulnerable and amazing that you shared this with everyone. I wish you the best of luck, and I hope you keep us updated.
Aww thank you so much! Congrats on making it to the end!
U GO AHEAD AND DO THE DARN THANG!!!🎉❤ Congratulations and wishing you much success in this new journey!!!
Aww thank you soo much ❤️
This was a great essay and was really helpful in figuring out how to construct my own personal statement. Thanks for sharing it and congratulations!
Thank you, I’m glad it was helpful!
Your inspirational!! You give me hope for our future generations.
Aww thank you so much!
Very well said!! You are a good writer!!
Thank you so much!!
You are an amazing writer!!!
Thank you!!
Thank you so much for posting this video. I found it extremely helpful. But please change the batteries on that smoke alarm.
Congratulations! 🎉 I loved every part of this!
Thank you so much!!
@@LegallyNess you’re welcome! ☺️
So inspiring, thank you!
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Can you do a video on resume / and soft and hard skills? Great video by the way, it is really insightful!
Great suggestion! Thank you, glad it was helpful!
Congratulations I am applying to law school for fall 2024! This was very helpful thank you so much!
Thank you! Glad it was helpful, you got this!
Love this!
Thank you!
I loved your personal statement. Well written, and clearly you deserved to be accepted to all those schools. You gooooo grrrlll!!! May I ask your score on the LSAT? Or do you have a video on it. I looked but could not find.
Thank you so much! I have a video with my resume and all my stats for more context.
please keep making videos!!
Please change the battery to your smoke alarm!!!
lol I thought it was mine
❤a gem!
Great video! Did you write the personal statement before admission cycles opened up or after you saw the application prompts?
Thank you! I started writing before the prompts and tailored it if the prompt required it. However, for the most part the prompts are pretty general. Some are as simple as “write a personal statement.”
First, thank you! Such a great essay!! Would you mind telling us what the prompt was?
Hi thank you so much! I can’t remember the prompt exactly but it was very general. Some of them were as simple as “please write a personal statement.”
First, Fix the alarm battery!
Secondly, Who did you work with to edit the personal statement? I’m looking to hire someone because I’m a bit further in my career and have so much to talk about. The spark is a little more complex since I’ve already had some success in business.
Hahaha I legit came to the comments to see if anyone else mentioned the alarm. I wasn’t sure if it was coming from my upstairs or the screen XD
Thanks for the confirmation
I’m trying to apply for jd law but I’m really struggling with essays.
I have little achievements outside of academics…and I’m interested in so many things so I do bits of everything. Yes, I’m not really passionate about anything tbh 😭 Although I can say that a lot of my activities correlate with law ?
For context, I have 2 ba degrees in law from 2 different schools. and another ba in IR in another school. I got all these in 4 years so I basically spent all my time studying.
Thus, I basically have no extracurricular outside of model un for 2 years :( I do some sports but that’s just for fun and I’m not in any club too 😭 (I wanna add that my sophomore and junior years were all online cuz of covid so no clubs available…)
oh i also only have a 3 month legal internship. Thats it 🧍♀️now im trying to apply for jd in law…but idk what to do with essays :(
Hi! My advice is to talk about one of the activities you mentioned or something that fascinates you which makes you want to pursue the law. Based on what you’ve said, you’ve got a lot of good things to talk about and achievements, don’t count yourself out. Good luck!
Hi Ness, I am also a first generation law student. I would like to know are you able to review my personal statement? I don’t have anyone trustworthy to review it.
Sure, send me an email at legallyness@gmail.com!
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Awww 🫶🏾 thank you for all the support!
Being a fellow first- generation student, I would love if you could provide me with any feedback on my personal statement. I could from a low income household, so I am not able to have someone look over it except for my mother. I would greatly appreciate it if you could look over mine because I loved your personal statement. I also speak about adversity in my PS.
Sure, I wouldn’t mind! You can email me at legallyness@gmail.com
How many pages was this?
2 pages!
It's a great essay but a little repetitive re: your purpose and could really use some edits for conciseness. i.e. "I have gained experiences that have helped me to" becomes "my experiences helped me". A lot of this comes from using the passive voice! This is just my attorney brain thinking, though, so maybe my perspective is skewed as someone forced to write so succinctly in practice!
Also would advise against using phrases like "second-generation African American" and "first-generation attorney". Most people are "first generation attorneys", for instance, because well, most people's relatives don't choose to be attorneys. It's really a phrase that should only be used to describe first-generation children of immigrants, because it's a unique obstacle that most people in 2023 don't face. I feel admissions admissions officers may dislike this misuse of a buzzword and interpret it as attempt for you to imply something like being the first attorney in your family is a similar hardship to being a first-gen child of immigrants (though I am sure this is not your intent).
Otherwise, I think the strength of this essay is your clear purpose and well-articulated path to finding it. You have such a unique, compelling story and genuine passion that really shines in your writing.
Change your fire alarm you're living up to the stereotype.
😂😂