How to Show, Not Tell: The Complete Writing Guide
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- Опубликовано: 15 май 2024
- “Don’t tell me the moon is shining. Show me the glint of light on broken glass.” - Anton Chekov
Writers often have different definitions of “showing” and “telling.” I define “telling” as any time in the story when an important moment lacks depth in terms of detail or narrative voice. However, telling can also be an excellent tool for controlling the story’s pacing and delivering important information.
In this video, I’ll explore the origins of this advice and why “showing” appeals to audiences on an emotional level. Using examples from popular works and advice from published authors, I’ll outline six strategies you can employ to produce stronger writing:
1. Use evidence to support your claims.
2. Replace the abstract with the concrete.
3. Substitute vague descriptions with specific sensory details.
4. Avoid relying too much on body language.
5. Show emotion through dialogue.
6. Filter observations through the narrative voice.
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SOURCES
“The clues to a great story” TED Talk by Andrew Stanton:
www.ted.com/talks/andrew_stan...
“Creative Writing and the New Humanities” by Paul Dawson:
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“The Craft of Fiction” by Percy Lubbock:
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“Nuts and Bolts: ‘Thought’ Verbs” by Chuck Palahniuk:
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Novel Writing Help blog by Harvey Chapman:
www.novel-writing-help.com/pr...
“How Fiction Writers Can Show Emotions in Their Characters in Effective Ways” by Robin Patchen:
www.livewritethrive.com/2015/0...
“Show, Don’t Tell: What You Need to Know” by Jerry Jenkins:
jerryjenkins.com/show-dont-tell/
Gail Carson Levine’s blog:
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Delilah Dawson’s Twitter feed:
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Stewie Writes:
www.stewiewrites.com
More great literary examples on Reedsy:
blog.reedsy.com/show-dont-tell/
“Understanding Show, Don't Tell: (And Really Getting It)” by Janice Hardy:
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“The Emotion Thesaurus: A Writer's Guide to Character Expression” by Becca Puglisi and Angela Ackerman:
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Introduction (0:00)
The Origins of "Show, Don't Tell" (3:53)
1. Use Evidence to Support Your Claims (5:38)
2. Replace the Abstract with the Concrete (7:20)
3. Substitute Vague Descriptions with Details (10:09)
4. Avoid Relying Too Much on Body Language (12:09)
5. Show Emotion Through Dialogue (15:32)
6. Filter Observations Through the Narrative Voice (17:51)
Summary (21:51)
Writing Exercise (26:00)
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With a heavy sigh that sounded like the first shift of snow before an avalanche, he clicked out of RUclips and without a word, made his way noiselessly to his writing room. He shut the door and set about a serious edit of his first draft...
After watching what he could only describe as RUclips’s most inspirational treatise on writing, the young man leapt from the sofa and raced to is room. He felt little guilt for spilling his soda or waking Lily, his mom’s Pomeranian. After all, his masterpiece awaited editing.
@@c.9231 As he began to review his draft, he dreaded the work that was to be done. Now, anything and everything looked like errors. His inner psyche screamed, letting the last of his frustration out, as he finally put his fingers to work.
@@emmanuelo2941 And with the sight of inspiration written in his eyes, his fingers move dashingly as he typed. A multitude of ideas started to flood into his mind. The sound of clacking could be heard throughout the whole entire house, until suddenly it stopped. . .
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She didn't care that there was only a couple hours before the assignment was due, she had to watch more videos about how to write good
90% of wattpad aspiring writers need to watch this
Hi, I'm planning to write, is there any writing platform aside from wattpad and dreame?
I am an Wattpad writer. Or at least an wannabe writer...
@@amysmithy3771 Saying you're a wannabe author is already putting more effort into self critique than your average stereotypical wattpad writer, lol. I mean that's a step in a good direction, I suppose.
@@skyler9254 scrivener for apple or windows...whichever you use
@@amysmithy3771 either you are or you are not, if you write you are a writer if you want to be, if not you just aren't. Don't push yourself back by saying wannabe, just say you are. Advice from a spanish writter learning english (saying the last if there're any grammar issues with my comment)
I just wanted to make a list sooo
●you gotta show when it's about emotions, opinions and sensations
●use evidence to show:don't just say this character is kind, what prove that this character is kind?
●don't use verbs like (thinks-knows-understands-realizes-believes-wants-remembers-imagines)
●don't say the character feelings directly, describe it so the reader feel it to
●read about body language of different emotions, but don't rely too much on it
●try engaging different and unique senses
●show emotions through dialogue
●don't use too much adverbs
●sometimes it's better to just tell(if it's not that important of a scene)
|writing exercise|
take a paragraph or a scene and try rewrite all the telling to showing
“Showing dramatizes and telling summarizes” is the smartest thing I’ve heard about writing. 💀🔥
“The forest hummed of the cries of children long dead.” Okay, maybe too eerie.
fr my first thought was, “that was dark.”
Yeah but it was really good
If it sounds like it's too much then try to get rid of the purple prose.
Just a little
❤
this made me open up a word document, then realize after staring at the blank page for a while that i still can't write
Just go for it! Write first, edit later. Don't overthink it. Pretend that it's something you'll never show to anybody except for yourself. And keep writing. :)
LOL, you can write comedy!
Ok to be fair this comment was quite funny. You got a chuckle out of me
Live in your imagination and write something that you would want to read yourself.
Sounds like a great opener 😉
The hardest thing, imho, is to not overthink it. Too much showing can toss me out of the story when there are way too many fluffy words for describing simple objects. But thousand readers = thousand flavours I guess :)
Great and inspiring video btw, thank you for it
I absolutely agree! Thank you so much for your kind words. Keep writing. :)
Like blanus what is this? Yeah they just faff about with words to sound good and clever
Omg yeah. We should just BURN all the books, apart from science books.
If i was rich, i would buy millions of copies of Greta Thornburgs books, and burn them all in a big fire just to annoy her
HAHAHAHAHA HAHAHAHAHA 😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣😂🤣
Honestly same, too much description of one scene tends to make my mind wander, which is probably the reason why most stories are a mix of showing and telling in the first place. However, almost every English teacher that I’ve met, eats up those Romanticism/Shakespeare plays like candy. An audience for everything it seems.
I'm currently ten years old and aspire to be an authour. This video has helped me to really understand show not tell or whatever you want to call it. I truly believe in my dreams and have been told countless times that my talent is incredible or unbelievable but honestly I think I could improve by miles. This video was my first step towards making my dreams become a reality.
I started writing really young too. The seeds were planted in my head from a young age, maybe around 3 or so. I vividly remember watching my sister write, and I was obsessed with books, video games, and anime. But reading your comment made me smile and remember when I started writing. At first, my writing was super bad, but it's gotten better over time. I'm 22 now, and although I cringe at my old writing, even when I was 16, it's still a great indicator of how much I've grown over the years just by trying and listening to people(like this video, for example). Remember that your writing style will likely adapt and grow with you as you age. Just never give up and understand that there is always learning to be done. Also, write because YOU love it. If you write with the intention of fame and money, you will likely give up along the way. But if you write because you love it, even if others "cringe," then you're fulfilling what's in your soul and heart and will become an unstoppable force. That's just my opinion. Either way, I think you'll do fine. Good luck! I hope your dream comes true.❤
obviously you need to improve. people only tell you your writing is fantastic and priceless because you are 10 years old
@@tonyisnotdead Not true. Leave the kid alone and go pick on someone your own age. You're acting odd and freaky. Stop it. This kid is doing better than you. Look at your comment's grammar, punctuation and spelling then look at theirs. They're doing just fine and will continue to grow and so will you. I'm 22, come at me, loser. Not at a child. What is wrong with you? That's a rhetorical question...
They're on this video to learn, you're on this video to hate. You are NOT on their level.
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@@tonyisnotdead what the fuck??
Damn you’re really giving all this gold away for free
That's one of the ways she gets her blessings.
Brandon Sanderson has been doing it for years. He's even getting more into it this year than before, probably because of the pandemic but still giving all his knowledge away for free on the internet. Unless you go to BYU. Then you have to pay for his class. But you can still watch it on RUclips for free after the fact.
I suggest buying her a coffee or two!
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It’s so sweet! Most ppl make you pay 🥺
Everyone: here to write a novel.
Me: mmmm fanfiction
MMMMM
Or dumb short stories for school.
Tbh, I WISH more fanfic writers did this kind of research.
@@JuliaFerreira-zr7pq Agreed! I know there are some really really good fanfictions out there though. People sometimes start out really badly, but they get better.
@@winterrain1947 For sure! It's just sad to see such good ideas not have the tools to become great stories. Not to mention how tiring it can be, as a reader, to go through so many bad ones to find the hidden gems.
I believe that using the telling method in a conveyable way is a skill. These days, I've read a lot of work online where writers believe that being metaphoric or philosophical and describing every emotion too specifically makes their writing look mature. I too believed that earlier. And tbh I've read a few works which were absolutely amazing with this method. Because the plot suited it. Not every plot needs the same writing method. If JK Rowling used that specific method, I wonder how long Harry Potter would have been.
I agree. Gabriel García Márquez relies almost completely on telling and his books are superb.
One should always take any writing advice with a grain of salt, and also keep in mind that writing is also subject to trends and fashion.
I like describing characters emotions straight up somtimes. Especially if it's serious. It's hard to try and show what's going on inside someone's head without directly hearing the raw emotion.
Totally agree. As I commented, It should be "Show AND tell"
Well the first two harry potter books are children's books so...no. I don't believe that would suit it well.
HARRY POTTER IS WACK 🤣
Funny enough, when I first started writing, I did a lot of the things that were said. I cut my teeth in the fanfiction world, practicing showing concepts and not telling, based upon the books I grew up with and loved (and would lose myself to). I wanted to become a writer that my childhood self would have loved.
Then I got to college creative writing classes in my community college and my professor slammed me for "purple prose" and being "too melodramatic" and that I had to "condense my thoughts"... that showing too much leads to disinterest from readers (he then cited Stephen King as the worst offender of said "overdescriptiveness"). Had another professor in my university days get on my case for using specific adjectives/verbs that had specific connotations saying nobody wanted to read a "SAT Hit Parade piece" and that simple and straightforward is better. Seeing this video is bittersweet, because it tells me... that writing is an art. My writing, nowadays, has become very technical and dry, devoid of emotion... and tells like a narration rather than a story. It makes me want to go back... but it also makes me feel sad that I gave up writing back then, because I felt I didn't have the talent or the skillset for it.
Wish I could go back ten years and tell my younger self to not feel discouraged and want to quit being a writer just because two professors said so. Instead, find a style, craft it, hone it, stick with it, trim the fat, and develop. Wish I could take those ten years back.
I hope you've been able to move forward with your writing and make up for that lost time by writing stories that feel true to you. ❤️
For sure. I'm working on my debut novel right now. I have rewritten my first chapter a ton of time. This was all positive steps forward because I was very rusty.
But, I remember thinking I wanted to write a novel when I was about 17. I had one professor give me nothing but compliments and an English college professor express that they hated the exact lines that the previous person loved.
Same lines, polar opposite opinions.
There are a few hard lines in writing. There is some obvious slop out there; however, in many cases rules should be broken sparingly.
That’s okay! Dont be to hard on yourself, you were just a kid! We are super susceptible to what teachers say when we’re that age. I have a similar story to you and I’m 24 and just now learning to be my own writer.
This is so hard. Growing up I also experienced how one teacher would reprimand me for what another praised me for. How we write should never be judged. What matters is whether our writing is a true and authentic representation of who we are at that moment in time. This is what truly matters. As I wrote this, I fixed syntax and grammar so many times. Were I truly genuine, you would see the messy, disheveled comment of someone who’s too tired from work. But alas, writing is always an illusion.
Best of luck to you on your journey. I wish you well.
I'm afraid of overdoing it, or doing it so wrong that it would be boring
Me too
For me the best way to "check" whether it's bad or good (or passable because I'm a perfectionist at heart and never contented with my own writing) is to re-read what's written and if I start skipping some parts, then meybe it's better to delete them. If YOU of all people get bored, then change this part. After all, you're the person you're writing for first and foremost.
@@527398 great advice! thanks
@@alisonargayosa7729 exactly and ideas it's so hard to make it new and unique it's take months to show it than i think that's not enough
@@alisonargayosa7729 that's what beta readers are for
"You don't always need to show"
*Tolkien:* Hold my pipe.
I agree. Only showing...makes for too much flowery prose. Ugh. There must be some telling...and some showing...and finding that mix is what makes for a successful read. It's up to the author to figure out where showing or telling works best...or together. Generally, if it sounds good...creates a picture in the reader's mind...then it's acceptable. I think some readers are just fine with telling...and are plenty satisfied on the minimalist side of showing...while others are not.
hahah hilarious
LOL!
Well, of course.
But he was Tolkien.
I don't plan on emulating him.
I mean, its not always to do showing. Telling was also important too! So try to balance it
this is a criminally underrated channel. Listened to you when writing my first fiction book. Now contracted to be a TV series. So thanks for making these.
Yay.
The issue with a lot of advice when it comes to creative mediums is that it’s all so vague. “Show don’t tell” has always been one of the infamous ones. But this video is perfect. It narrows down what exactly that means, gives examples, and some phrases/hacks for writing it ❤
Amen.
The simplest way (for me at least) is to read through what I wrote and imagine I'm watching a movie and ask myself: am I seeing/feeling these images myself or there's a voice over/narrator explaining what is happening in the scene. Then my telling will turn to showing
I'm not a writer but this totally make sense!
@@LuisHernandez-sk3dm It really does! I've given myself some experience in screenplay, and this links with me.
I try to do it that way too. Makes the transition to showing much easier.
Thats actually really good advice!
Don't ALWAYS show.
I didn't know why my writing was sounding too melodramatic, until this video show me that I was relying too much on body language. A new window opened to me after this. Thank you so much!
For real. This got me too.
The most extreme disagreements have zero body language.
Preach! This hit me hard too. I don't know I am a person that tends to observe the expressions and bodylanguage of others very closely. Maybe that's why? Others may not observe this directly and just unconsciously. So writing it down like we observe it feels over the top for most people.
@@carsanovadidrifto800 Why would you reply this? It has nothing to do with the video or the original comment, plus not everyone is Christian or Catholic
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This is the most respectful description/guide to "show, don't tell" I've ever seen. It's something I've always struggled with, because nobody could ever explain it to me in a way that 'clicked', yet everyone INSISTS on show over tell. The fact that you even give examples of telling used well is such a relief to me. Instinctually I've known that it's not always necessary to 'show', but I needed an expert to finally confirm it. Thank you!
The great 19th century novelists (English, French, Russian, American) did alot of "telling". Their works are timeless masterpieces.
Correct. The above is how English teachers and "writing teachers" make a living.
People don't always want to re-read and "solve a puzzle". I prefer writing to be powerful, creating an impression as you go along. Yes layering is a skill but "show, don't tell" is a highly overused mantra, and regularly misapplied. The work students discuss in English Lit classes is NOT generally the greatest work.
factss
This video is basically just nearly half an hour of me being told why my story is shit and that is just wonderful! Tons of great teaching here.
I can promise you, if you stick to the rules of this video, you'll never be a success. Never.
But also because you're as bad at analogies as an I don't know what.
@@protorhinocerator142 this comment doesn't even contain any analogies. The hell are you talking about?
@@brendanm6921 That was the point.
Earth humor.
@@RepublicConstitution Then what, in your view, is the correct methodology? It's one thing to criticize, it's another to show a better path.
I once read this advice somewhere: When you're done with your work, count the number of times you have used "was". Edit your work to reduce that number by half.
What if the count is an odd number? OH GOD WHAT IF IT'S AN ODD NUMBERR!?
@@Brindlebrother
Find a sentence like this in your draft, and do this to it:
BEFORE: What hit me *was* feeling that I'd never get over her.
AFTER: What hit me, *a* feeling that I'd never get over her?
Now you can eliminate half of the rest!
One more thing, read through and everytime you see the word "thing", write a new way to say it excluding the word.
@@Brindlebrother i hope you’re not waiting with baited breath!
@@srj34 then edit again to remove the comma splice, I hope?
One thing I love about stories in books is I always visualize the scene in my head and it's stuck. I probably have a clear view on how the coastline looks like, how the hotel rooms are built, how characters feel things, sometimes it's so well written i even deduce things that weren't even talked about. That's when I know a story can be magnetic and engaging to me, I personally love to feel taken hand by hand to the place so I can see it myself
i can't believe this information is online for free right now. this video is a MASTERCLASS. so helpful.
Currently as a book reviewer, in my opinion the 2+2 method also lets the reader make the story partly their own, inserting details based on their own experiences. This draws them deeper into the story. By far one of the best approaches!
Thanks for this. You summed up 'show' perfectly. Now I understand. I'm sure I've read /heard many explanations for its purpose, but yours is the best. Your language is direct and few words used! Excellent! Not deriding Diane - she used her brilliant mind to explain HOW to do it and I am eternally grateful to her for that.
Yes, too many people overexplain things too much. :)
Yes, this is what exactly I do. But i have problems to do it in English since it's not my first langguage. But whenever i write in my native language, it went very smooth and i'm very enjoy my writtings. Well i guess i need to truly learn english again 😅
@@ameliaross854 what's your native language?
@@nadiasanz3779 Malaysia 😁😊
For my style, a mix between telling and showing is the ideal form. I mean, there is a trade-off between clarity, with a straightforward depiction, and enticement, with a decorated description. When you swap "Suzie was blind" for "Suzie felt for the bench with a white cane" the passage becomes more vivid and enigmatic. That is surely good sometimes but it can also get confusing or annoying. It would be tiring for your audience to puzzle out the meaning of every sentence, their attention could diverge from the really meaningful stuff on your story. Thus, only the important events - the ones which develop characters or push the plot - should be communicated with such intensity. Its almost like poetry versus report... one has to know when is best to use each, cause when writing, the points you emphasize influences what people apprehend from the narrative. People wanna know why are you telling them this story. Show what compels you.
That example made me realize how hard it would be to write from a blind persons perspective- the lack of color and relying on other senses etc
AGREED-
@D Frazier I just want to say thank you for this, truly. It reinforces that yes, my writing isn't exactly up to par with others who are more than likely in a league far beyond my own, and that's okay! I'm still learning and growing to create my own style and unique-ness. I've had a few friends give me advice on what to do and how to do it, and honestly all it did was leave me feeling down and out, the fun of what I do not being within me anymore. That is, until recently I decided to say 'screw it!' and do my own thing. Now I'm much happier.
I completely agree with the idea of showing what compels you, as once in an English class we read a novel where one of the central characters was killed, but as the author had showed us in a way that was quite abstract and obscure, at first we did not realise that is what had happened and had to spend a while going over it for it to make sense. I don't think it would've been better if the writer had told us that's what was happening, but the meaning was buried so deep that he lost us as an audience. So I definetely think there's a balance between show and tell, and being careful not to go overboard either way.
THANK YOU
I'm quite tired with books with too much of flowery proses and pages, that describes one particular corner of the world in 5 pages. It feels tiring to read it, as you're working your brains out on realizing whether or not it's already over or the book had moved on to another particular corner
Well, the one thing I learned is that sometimes It's okay to tell, not every character emotion cue has to be delivered with nine hundred paragraphs. Sometimes simplicity is a good thing, especially if you want to create a fast pace. Sometimes showing can get long-winded and is more useful for melodramas as opposed to something more action oriented like what I am writing.
I like this video because it actually has examples and reasoning. So many advice giving youtubers just say things they've heard before. I love that you've obviously done your homework and teach about writing rather than giving some sort of list of tips or some such thing. Awesome video.
I showed the first two pages of my book to a friend, he told me it felt like in a movie. That was the best compliment ever! 😊
@Miles Doyle okay but who asked?
@@carsanovadidrifto800 Who asked?
@ Carsonova etc. 🤣🤣🤣 congrats! You just wrote the biblical themed, RUclips post version of War & Peace. Ever heard of less is more? Didn't think so.
@@carsanovadidrifto800 idk
@@edwwi Ignore them, they’re bots.
I think my biggest issue with writing is falling too much into “default” actions when writing emotion. I’ve decided that journaling my experiences, regardless of the emotion, really helps in creating a reference to use because emotions are so varied and you can cycle through them
Such a good idea. I set out last year to make my readers cry and I've succeeded. I get off on it I think. LOL! It's so much more work, but what's the point of writing if not to move people in whatever way right?
@Neghie Thervil . Hi, that'll be weird I've never done this before. So that's really what I want ...I want my readers to cry or at least feel for my main character but it's kinda hard gor me to do so ... can I ask since I don't have anyone ...what makes a reader feel the "traps" "the never things gonna workout for fl no matter what he does" " bad for her" ... oe at least what to search if you have any ideas pls 🙏
Never underestimate the power of telling a story. If everyone wrote like this it would be a sad world indeed. Not every story is intended to be a screen play. There's theater and then there is storytelling. Not everyone likes theater.
You're taking it too literally.
Good storytelling IS theatre, because it's a very similar art.
What they’re saying here is to have a blend of the two! I bet your stories suck
That "writers are usually in a hurry" is actually my problem, I'm so glad I watched this video. I've been trying to "slow it down" but I have no idea how to and I didn't understand why it felt so rushed.
"Whatever you do, keep writing."
Thank you so much, that part really helped
5:53 Use evidence
7:21 Concrete no Abstract
10:13 Specific sensory
12:15 Thought and verbs better than Body language.
15:32 Dialog
17:52 Narrator voice
24:03 When you can tell
Concrete no abstract justu!!
@@mariared1670 Lmao
Dude bless you
thank you, i have adhd and no patience
Maybe it's the lack of sleep but I felt like every "bad" examples shown in this video did a better job of conveying the story..
I'm learning Chinese and I found a Chinese book series aimed at learners. Each story tells an incredible emotional story or a mystery, yet using only the first 300 words they teach you.
I wondered how she was able to bring these huge stories alive. How can someone write more emotionally engaging stories with only 300 words than some of the adult fiction I've read in English?
This video helped me understand that she's describing the situations, and part of what makes it so interesting is you figure out for yourself what's happening underneath the surface.
Excellent video, thank you!
That's genius. I never thought of writing being so interesting. Really made me realise why I didn't like some novels and loved others.
sometimes I prefer telling, especially when the author's showing is WAY too exaggerated, to the point that it almost looks like purple prose
Me too, telling doesn't sound bad all the time. I think balance is good, not just one or the other all the time.
I would say if you think there's been too much showing, it's probably just information that does not need to be conveyed to the reader, rather than a section where it would have been better to tell.
Yes, showing can be too detailed, long and tiresome
Some writers do convey a good story by telling. For example J.K Rowling and Jane Austen are famous tellers. It really depends on the story and the reader.
I've felt for some time we've given way to visual purple prose.
As a novice writer what I like to do is pay attention to what the characters would. We usually don't notice some things but focus on the others, so I like to show what the characters are seeing
Hmmm ... such a very good point. Otherwise, we're just writing what we see. Thank you for this comment.
@@anniefh7399 you're welcome
I thinking the same thing
That's good advice. A strong instance of this is in Gekkan Shoujo Nozaki-kun. It's a romantic comedy where every 4 panels of the manga contain some sort of punchline from some sort of misunderstanding that the characters frequently have, but gekkan shoujo actually makes these misunderstandings hilarious because we're seeing it all but the innocent character is confused as they see only a part of it, a tool of dramatic irony. For example, main character talks about an idea for their comic with his neighbour but a side character crushing on that neighbour overhears, and thought their boss was a normal manager by day but a stripper working in a gay bar by night. They weren't even talking about bars or strippers.
@@aureliaavalon this is why I love the writing community. Nobody is trying to keep things to themselves, when we have ideas we share and discuss them
I so needed this! (Telling?). I stifled the hundredth yawn as I struggled to understand how to decipher which path my writing had taken. Was I telling or showing? Exhaustion threatened as I poured over unfulfilling sources to find the elusive answer. “Could I trust this post? Would it leave me hungry for more?” It did not! I devoured every example, repeating them over and over. I blinked. My quest had ended. Leaning back into the comforting cushions of my armchair, a small tear formed at the corner of one of my reddened eyes. It sidled its way halfway down my cheek before I wiped at it with the back of my painful key pushing hand. (showing?) Wow, just writing this silly comment proved to me how much work I need to do! Thanks for this video!
In simple words describe emotion like
"Tears were rolling down his cheek". You simply just have to show an emotion but not say what your character is feeling
The best writing channel by far. Every video is a special event.
100% I always come here and suggest these videos to my friends
I just came across this channel for the first time. I agree with you. Hands down, this is the best writing channel on the web!!!
Every writing channel I follow is filled with comments of people saying: "The best writing channel on RUclips...", and stuff like that.
@@gabrielp9646 obviously it can only be true about this one...
@@gabrielp9646Yiz. But this channel is the best.
showing someone is friendly : oh hi Mark.
ah yes...someone quoting the room in the comment section of a video essay on writing. Perfection.
This video alone helped me more than a semester did back in my school. Your job is flawless. Thank you so much for your help, and know it makes a huge impact in my writing and scenes development.
This is one of the best videos explaining show vs tell out there. I find myself returning to visit time and again when I feel a little rusty.
My book has too many raised eyebrows and 'their heart beat faster'. I need more ways of showing XD
Instead of a raised eyebrow:
Delia snorted in disbelief. Literally snorted. She was glad her mama wasn't around to hear, but she couldn't help herself. Jackson's story grew more far-fetched every time he told it.
Instead of a fast beating heart:
" He came right up to me! "
"No! What'd you do?"
"I broke out in a sweat, of course. We're talking major waterworks. I had to keep my arms at my side the whole time! Why did I have to wear white silk today of all days? "
"Oh, Sue. "
There's a book called the emotion thesarus. It's basically a thesarus of different stuff your character can do when irriated, scared, angery and more. Maybe that could help give some variation.
@@c.9231 you make it kinda funny to imagine. It's like that "She near inhaled the soup" but for everything
Try raising the heart and having the eyebrows beat faster
Me too!!!
"Chuck Pumpernickle" busted my chops unexpectedly
i laughed so hard at that
I paused it and came to the comments to see if anyone noticed. I’ll continue now. 😂
I'm trying to figure out if she was being serious.... like.... really?!
I have watched this video at least a dozen times. It is one of the definitive videos on RUclips on showing not telling. Simple yet profound with plenty of examples. Its changing my writing one paragraph at a time
This is the first of all these writing tip videos that is ACTUALLY helpful. The given examples and your pace of explaining really helps me understanding. I can really improve my writing from this, you've earned yourself a sub
My favourite writing tip is learn the rules before you break them. You can't subvert expectations unless you know what's expected
I thought I knew the differences between showing and telling. While I did know some of comparisons that you discuss, I learned more and even better how to use the distinctions in my writing. I also really liked that you explained the “why” behind showing vs telling. Why not give out the info straightforward and simple? Because that takes the fun out of the game of reading. Thanks!
Really this whole video demonstrates that from inception this advice could have been narrowed down to "Don't just tell me, tell me why."
The number of sources and examples is incredible! Very well researched.
Three years later, the info in your video still rings true. Thank you, I needed this! ❤
The struggle with me regarding “Show, don’t tell” is that I live using auditory sensory input. I’m totally blind, so I struggle with showing characters’ face expressions and body language a lot. I tend to not use a lot of visuals in my writing for that reason.
The tone of the dialogue or the rhythm of the prose can say a lot without needing any visuals at all! I once wrote a story where all smells were described in terms of tactile sensations, and that made the sensory details more vivid, in a way.
Here is some better advice then: tune in to weird fiction. Get someone to help you find Horrorbabble on RUclips and then you can listen to hundreds of great stories that destroy this "show, don't tell" nonsense.
Great! Use what you know of using your other senses to understand people and situations. Your narrative voice will be original.
I do this too
Mane if you blind how tf did you type this?
"Sometimes authors present information like a dictionary definition, rather than an in-world reference that fits naturally into the story" That's super helpful thank you so much!!
I have spent three years on three courses and this half an hour video has done the best job of bringing home the meaning of 'Show, don't Tell' - a truly excellent job. And so timely as I am going through an edit of my first novel. I think I have a better chance of getting out what is in my head. Thank you so much.
Thank you for this. I take notes on your RUclips videos to make myself a better writer and I've already seen loads of improvement. YOU ROCK!
I record the audio from ALL of Diane's videos, then listen to them during my 16-18 weekly work commute hours. She reminds me that even I can improve my writing, and it's not absurd to believe that others will enjoy and benefit from the story when I finally present it to the world. Another home run, Diane. Thank you for the obvious extra effort.
Let the character’s emotions Color the way they see the world ✨
First, thank you for putting this together. As a beginner writer, videos such as this are invaluable to have some spot in that huge sea of ideas on writing. You can easily get swept away moving from one topic to another. It can be very confusing, but over time, like other learning, starts to make sense. This video covers a lot, but is arranged so that with time and practice, will become second nature. I will start that goal by completing your writing assignment and see how it goes. Again, thank you for sharing your knowledge.
this is the best, most comprehensive, concretely applicable writing advice video I've seen
You have given some crumbs, some slices and some the whole loaf here. We all took something away from this. Bravo and Thank you!
Jesus!, with these techniques, you can make narrating "how the grass grows" entertaining
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Abundant rain this year meant the grass on this particular African plain was tall and thick. It swayed in the warm night breeze as we sat around the fire drinking "the good stuff" and listening to Frank's ribald jokes. It was when he froze mid-punchline, eyes fixated on the perimeter, that we realized something more than the wind moved through that grass.
@@c.9231 , said David Attenborough.
FR LMAO
@@c.9231 that sounds great. You should definitely make a book.
This has been the most interesting explanation of show don’t tell that I have come across. I learned more watching this than I have gotten from many other sources.
THANK YOU, I've been trying my best to figure out how to tell something without giving too much and this video gave me just what I needed.
There's so much to take from this.
I always send my drafts to the people who read the most out of my friends and family. One of them being my mother who’s extremely critical when it comes to me and my writing or dancing. The other person being my best friend, probably my biggest fan, who’s not only immensely good with wording and handling emotional topics but also knows that I can accept and love to hear criticism. I’m very thankful for her. She’s not judging me for spending most of our time talking about my story and my characters and my favourite story lines and how I create families and their crests and how their powers work and how they perceive love and affection. And, of course, how I love to make them suffer. I don’t know why I just wrote all this down. It has nothing to do with the video but I just had the urge to write this down. Thank you for your attention.
Laura: There is no substitute to effective critiquing than a first/second draft GREAT editor. I know of 2.
Laura: Get a job. You will never be a writer 😂
Haven't finished the entire video yet, but what I feel is the overarching idea, is that as a writer we must imagine how something we want to express should be filmed without voice-over.
We are basically creating a visual picture (and yes, also some sounds, smell, taste, etc.)
For me the main challenge with this is always to remember it, and to keep using it.
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This was actually really helpful. I know I have a tendency to do this, feeling like my world I'm creating is complicated and I have to spell it out for the reader. But really great works of fiction, sci-fi, fantasy, and dystopia have done it so well with so much less info-dumping.
Thanks!
knowing what to avoid and when to avoid it was exactly the advice a video like this needs to have, thank you!
What a magnificent little manual on the ofttimes confusing distinctions between "showing, not telling", Diane! I have never seen it so clearly laid out. "Show, don't tell." is repeated in the writing community about as often as "All writing is re-writing." so much so that it is easy for writers of all levels to get down on themselves for not knowing how to do this thing that is apparently such "common knowledge" that they, (the confused writer) should apparently just know how to do it; when nothing could be further from the truth. Like most things in life, the knowledge of how to "show, not tell" is not innate--it is a skill--which fortunately means that it can be learned. With this video, you have made learning how to do so much more accessible to those of us who struggle with this issue. God bless you for making it, Diane!
"Smooth seas do not make skilled sailors." African proverb
I've been teaching Creative Writing at a high school for ten years, and this video is one of the best instructional videos I've seen. My students really benefited from your examples.
excellent class. Even as a published author I needed to refresh myself with showing not telling. It's helped immensely. thank you.
This is probably the key thing that's felt wrong with my writing, that I wasn't able to pinpoint until now. Thank you for the video!
I am working on a dystopian fantasy where a highly-sheltered girl with an education based on encyclopedias published in the 1980's is forced out into a future world. Telling the story in the first-person allows the reader to discover the world as she does, but many of the details of the how the world works must be told to her by other characters. My early draft has some long dialog passages which I am working to break up to be more natural, but I'm finding it a challenge to show things that ground the action and give understanding of the environment. I'm thinking now it may be better to leave it mysterious. But I'm finding it a particular challenge to write in first-person and convey details of an unfamiliar social structure without a good bit of telling. The narrator would have no way of seeing the scenes that would show many details. In real life, we learn many things by being told, not shown, which is why we have textbooks and classrooms. But I don't think readers want to sit through a history class. And the fun of the story is discovering the world as the character discovers it. I'm working on getting the right balance. I have to rethink how much is really essential for the reader to know.
How much - and when. When keeps readers turning the page is wanting to find out.
One trick some authors use is: shift the narration perspective. In other words, it is ok to have multiple first-person views (each in its own different chapter, of-course).
I'm thinking your story might come out better if it was told in the third person. Because then the narrator could know and tell things that your main character wouldn't have to know or even know beforehand. Good luck! 😊
@@winnmiller6012 That's a very good suggestion.
@@winnmiller6012 That is true but he must limit exposition dump despite the narrative style.
This is exactly the video I needed, I'm looking back at my old writing and realizing how much "telling" I did rather than "showing". Ever since following this advice I find it so much easier to immerse myself into what my characters might be thinking or feeling, and it's easier for me to fill out pages. Thank you so much!
This was so helpful, thank you! I’ve been feeling like I’m lacking that intense emotion in my writing. Looking forward to going back through and applying some of these tips.
I have trouble comprehending what i read. Watching this inspires me to read novels. Thank you for the great content!
Each time I come to this topic, the advice lends to the problem that most of us writers must face. We are initially obsessed with putting our very images into the reader's head. The reality is this will never happen. It is the cost of art. The sooner we stop chasing the fantasy, the more evocative our writing naturally becomes.
Telling: "We did not have much rain this year"
Showing: The Clouds were as dry as the Star that kept them warm.
The weather remind me that I haven't bath for months
Being creative: "More of the same this week as we head into record low rainfalls for the fourth straight month," said the weatherman, standing next to a line of sun icons. Matt clicked off the TV and turned the thermostat down another two degrees.
What?
This might be the year that finally breaks them, Jake thought. Their farm had survived reversals before, but now the cracked earth looked like a jigsaw puzzle and corn stalks crunched beneath his boots as he strode across the formally green fields.
I would like to write a book but I'm not good at showing.
Thanks Dianne. I'm very new to this and your kind words at the end are quite heartfelt, "keep writing".
I’ve just clicked into this, as well as a different way of addressing overall storytelling! I usually do the “It happens” but, now it’s like it’s a history or something being retold, which allows me much more freedom and fun I think! I wanted to do a first person perspective but, I’ll wait a bit, and that’s singular and I like working with tons of characters!
Sure, it’s not perfect, but it’s the best I’ve written in awhile! Writing is a bit tough but after a decade and a half of doing so, I love it and hope one day, not for money, not for me, not for my family (though I do want money for my family) that my characters see themselves son shelves, and are seen by at least thousands. They are as children and friends, and no matter what I’ll never stop writing their adventures
I’m a teller who wants to learn the art of showing through well-crafted words. In the past decade, I’ve mostly written academic papers, pleadings, and research. The transition is overwhelming at times, but I know I can get there with persistence and hard work.
Glossary of eminent journals in my shelf, stacked up in twenty’s and five rows. Hardly will you find one without my my name engraved in gold ink. 22 years as the editor academic Journal on abstraction and showing. I exhibit about 120 articles and research works in funky blogs yearly! I’m a teller by trade, i observe, deduce and inform on fact. I tell, but it doesn’t go far. Never really catch on, few eyes know the worth. But kow, I want my audience to see words and read flowing thoughts, I want to be an artist, I want to take them on a journey they can follow. I want to show. I want them to see for them selves.
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I feel the same way coming from academic papers and persuasive writing
"Umm Kevin, where'd you earned to make bombs?"
"The Navy."
That shit made me laugh 😅
Right? 🤣🤣
How Wonderful. Thank you. I struggle, at this writing, with a difficult scene, necessary to further the story; yet filled with emotion for the character who links different settings. This helps.
These are golden essential guidlines for struggling writers like us.
This spoke volumes to me. I really need to read books more that provokes emotions, setting the scene where I escape reality. I seriously put my remote work on hold to listen to this insightful video. Thank you for your tips and helpful advice.
Do you know any books I can read that makes you escape reality? Like feeling the characters emotions, etc?
I just KNOW I'm gonna watch this video a shit ton of times
I really appreciated that this video was not full of adverts made it very easy to follow.
I wasn't even a writer before I watched this now. I love you. Kind of want to start writing
For what it's worth, I think it's perfectly fine to tell. Dickens and Poe told us all kinds of things and they did just fine. . .
I do agree. Nowadays, thought, this type of writing seems to be less popular . Access to e-media is prevalent and, as someone noted above or somewhere, attention spans are shortening. I have a 7month old grandson whose mother put her phone with Pepper Pig playing to soothe him. He was upset and grizzly because he had a fever. I don't object to that, perse, but was shocked that this was actually an option. It has just occurred to me that showing (visualising) might be a way of lengthening the attention span. That'd be a wonderful thing.
She says in the beginning telling is not a negative all on its own, but along with the right amount of showing, you’ll give your readers atrokger and more impactful connections to what’s happening in the story.
At 17, I wrote poetry. Now I write short stories. I'm not good at it, but your video helped me see a better way to write. Thank you for taking the time to make this video. I will edit, rewrite and rewrite again.
Watching again one year later and still amazed. This lesson is packed with actionable tips; thank you Diane.
Thank you so much for your kind words, Leah! Keep writing! :)
A few moments into this video, I decided to watch it till the end, but i did something better, I listened till the very end.
You are truly an expert.
This video is God-sent. I began writing this month. Never checked on how to write yet and still your videos appeared in my recommendations.
Cool!
Dang, this video was extremely clear and easy to understand. As a very novice writer, some writing advice are difficult for me to follow, but this had very specific advice that I can actually implement.
I'm currently 12 years old and would absolutely love to be a writer in the future. I spend most of my time reading and writing stories, or just making up little bits of stories in my head. This video helped me with my writing immensely!! I've already been told on many occasions that I write well, but this video just put the icing on the cake. :) Definitely will be using this in any future books I write.
(Omg, all these sweet replies are making me genuinely tear up ngl- I reread the story I wrote and I kind of don't like it and I would say I've definitely improved in my writing, but if anyone is genuinely interested in my writing I'm working on a psychological horror/crime/mystery/dark story on Wattpad since I like the formatting- I'm planning on making it at least 10k words per chapter and have like, 50 or so chapters! Again, thank you all
You'll give up soon enough kid
@@johnxina7496 how motivating!!! thanks for the encouragement :)
@@xXLesbian_MessXx youre lucky enough you even get time to write. but thats cuz youre a kid ig
@@johnxina7496 what the heck man let the kid have their dream
@@xXLesbian_MessXx don't listen to them I believe you can be a great writer in the future, I've been writing since I was 9 and have done a lot of great things, I know you can do it
I graduated with an AYA - Language Arts degree and taught for a few years. The importance of show don't tell has always made sense in my mind, but this is the first time the concept clicked on how to actually DO it effectively and systematically. Every writer needs to watch this video, and teachers could easily incorporate practices from this video in their instruction.
This is the best, clearest explanation of showing rather than telling that I've ever seen. I finally understand the concept! Thank you, Diane Callahan!
Very informative
Found your channel today through this video. Love your content. Clear, precise, well-referenced, and very insightful.
This video actually gave me a really cool idea! I'm definitely a teller when it comes to writing down, as a consequence of growing up writing some killer essays in school. I'm great at writing down the information that needs to be told at first.
So what I need to do when writing is my first draft needs to be tell-heavy since that's just my nature. Then when it comes to the 2nd draft, I can go through and weave in moments where I show what is going on. To make those emotional scenes in my head actually emotional. My tells from the first draft are just my notes of what needs to be done.