This game is not fair

i had to get absolutely stacked for the thumbnail
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[@chancelamontagne4717]

w intro scene
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[@themagmagamer6632]

I love this game and how unfair it is

[@ryanshark6]

so true

[@kszyrzfot]

Hi. let me just start:
1.The Intro:
The idea for a funny scene at the start is really solid and I think you choose a decent clip but it needs some editing even something small like zooming in first on the guy then you typing then you shooting yourself (in game) and then the ouch. That shows that the video is not just an unedited vod and is entertaining and engaging.
Here is how I would do it:
Starts with some energetic music, zoomed on the guy then on you typing (with added sound effects) then on you shooting yourself (in game) then zoomed in on the guy saying ouch (in this moment a sad womp sound effect plays and the music stops) Then you say your line (that was toxic) while intro music starts quickly rising then a cut and you introduce the game while playing it. Please don’t start videos on pause screens just explain while playing the game.
2.The Editing:
The editing in this is confusing for me, you seem to be very focused on including your commentary. You included scenes where you choose the cards, the rounds start and end. What I see is the round starting then a cut and someone dies. The focus seems to be not on the action in the rounds but on showing the weapons which in my opinion doesn’t fit this game. Don’t be afraid to include clips of just action and not commentary.
Hope the feedback helps, thanks for the videos and as always
Have an amazing day/night

[@ryanshark6]

Thanks for the feedback as always. I'm always still working on my editing so I'll try to make videos easier to follow next time with more action clips like you said. And with the intro clip I think I'm trying to go for a different type of thing than what your talking about, I'll probably still keep it lower energy but I'd be happy to change some things about it. I also do do want to start more videos with gameplay like you said, but with this specific video and the type of intro clip I'm doing, I do like to have some dialogue between the clip and the actual gameplay. But hopefully someday I'll be able to make it more interesting than just a title screen. Again thanks for all the feedback :)