LLC you’re doing a commendable job with up loading the stories. Yes, there are things that can be fine tuned, but all in all they’re good. You can’t please everyone. Hell, sometimes I wish the stories were shorter. With that said, I’m the one who was just complimenting you on a couple of 4hr ones. As long as they’re intriguing put them out. Even the sci-fi ones are good and people find away to complain about those. They’re meant to suspend disbelief. Fine tune yourself and keep grinding!!!
I think that a woman feels a certain relaxation that makes it more possible for her to get pregnant with her familiar mate . At least that is how it happened with me . She came over one time after we broke up and we had sex one time and I couldn't believe the child ended up being mine . Last time we ever got back together in a sexual way . LoL !!
Its too much nitty gritty details thats not necessary in the story. Its distracting to the story. Maybe someone can start posting a shortened version. Ill subscribe.
I finished my beer, but not quite all of it, there was still some amber elixir in the bottom of the bottle, not quite an ounce but more than half, and some suds, which some civilizations call foam, and he realized intuitively that the foam would bubble dow to more of the amber ambrosia, although the exact volume was a mystery, perhaps it would, all said and done, amount to a full ounce, or just shy of it
The edit is botched. The scene with Mona at the funeral got cut then the cops showed up out of nowhere... then the cut went back to Mona and the rest of the funeral... Makes the story choppy.
Ending is bull, they already revieled the paternity earlier in the story and what happened to the sister of the woman that got killed. The story ends at the middle.
The tests showed that Malcolm was not the father, then genetic material from Ian was checked and possibly showed that both of Jessica's children were not Ian's either. He told Jessica that he wanted to have him to father her children, but Jessica fooled around with someone else. That was why he's pissed off! :D
It’s so funny that is Wife have cheated on him throughout the whole relationship and as soon as he find out, he went down to the Black neighborhood and take his aggression out on three black men wow
Dude, great story 👏 i listened to the final. This chick got nerve 😤 i was so sad for the guy.i'm happy it ended how it was ment.yes, it's long, but ooh, oh, omg oh entertainingly 😊. The karma in this 🕺 💃
Good story. Illustrates secveral points. 1. Your greatest strength can become your greatest liability. 2. Do not even pursue the woman that all the guys ogle, do not waste a minute, they are just background noise, and will betray you, 3. You cannot trust the cops 4. The law of the land is corruot to the core.
Why the loud music towards the last 5-10 minutes towards the end. Its too loud and hard to hear Because your stories does not have any subtitlrs to read, so to listen to against the loud music is pointless. Why add the music. There was never any music before this
What kind of looney tune cops arrest and threaten the victims? Did the son have a weapon? Could they not tell who shot the mother and how? They can tell all of that by measuring the crime scene. You can tell where the main character shot from coming in entrance to protect. This should have been settled fast..😅😂😂
A four hour story that could have been told nicely in about one. OK, so what happened to the corrupt cops, what happened to his lawsuit with Police, what what what happened, too many lose ends.
Old LLC was a lot better and straight to the point. 40 minutes at most for old stories. Better writing, straight to the point, and no product placement like old radio stories.
I'm so sorry if I seem harsh LLC but nearly 4 hours of a story that's so jumbled and all over the place its hard to follow. Also once again a very rushed and seemingly unfinished ending makes the entire time of the story seem very much wasted so I'm sorry but I'm very disapointed.
Thanks for another stem winder, LLC 👍👍 ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️...I agree with the other commenters about the music. It's unnecessary and distracting. Not really a fan of the sound effects either. Hope you're not offended by my unsolicited critiques. Just please keep bringing us these detailed, top-notch extended stories. Thoroughly enjoying them.
I always look forward to your comments everyday. Adding music was an experiment and it failed. It's a learning. There will be more experiments, some will pass some will fail. There will be praises there will be criticism. As for you, i would be more than happy to take your criticism in a positive manner.
I’d say it was pretty good…especially given what I paid; yall stop complaining. The husband was never in any danger though; Ian’s story would never stand up. I assume he would admit he owned the revolver and police would see they were unarmed; witnesses would testify how far apart the shots were, he’d need to explain why 2 invited guests with no criminal history suddenly attacked him with deadly force and how it happened that he had a revolver ready to respond, how he didn’t even have a bruise, and most importantly, how would Ian explain why he needed to shoot a woman lying on the ground in the back of the head. All that with the eventual testimony of the son, Ian was always going to jail.
Went too fast at the end .... what a twist ... Oh.... And all the impatient listeners the devil is in the details ..I wouldn't care if the story went on for 7 hours describing the color of their socks worn on such a day as any if it held pertinent information Ian was a shit from the first 5 minutes to 30 years down the road when the bow was tied and package delivered 😊
It would've been ok then and that's it. The next day I would've hired a private investigator to follow her around and gather evidence because her attitude changed much too quickly. Also I would've stopped talking to her and moved into the guest room. Closed all joint accounts, credit cards etc just for the disrespect.
Actually I do not recall the story ever saying where the male DNA came from. It very clearly said where the kids and the mother's came from but never said he used his. The report only stated the sample sent was not the father. So was it his or the other guy's DNA that he sent in ?
Op had his own DNA, his wife's, his daughter's, and his son's DNA. Once he discovered that he was their father nothing else was needed. Another man's DNA would only have been needed if Op was not the father. Think about it!!!
those poor kids his or not....lol draydel... be done.... dont start what you cant finish,,,LOL....and the kids aren;t his....what a sluoar... and her sister was the trigger woman..... ta-dow
What is going on LLC ? I have supported y'all for detail oriented stories but, dang, this is mind numbing. Just the encounter in the bedroom early on was so far over the top. There wasn't a reason for describing each look from the days from being in school. Seriously we are smart enough to understand a one word description of a look or action. You do not have to go back to their younger days when she remembered seeing that same look. Ok, rant off. This one, as with some others of late, have been frustrating to set through. It's not about the length of the story, its about content.
He was either the dumbest man on earth or his 304 wife was the sneakiest stab in the back snake 304 on the planet . How is it even possible ???
Best unplanned AI Double Entendre: "I faked every organism."
I do enjoy a brain-dead AI
Considering the kids were not his, she did fake every organism.
LLC you’re doing a commendable job with up loading the stories. Yes, there are things that can be fine tuned, but all in all they’re good. You can’t please everyone. Hell, sometimes I wish the stories were shorter. With that said, I’m the one who was just complimenting you on a couple of 4hr ones. As long as they’re intriguing put them out. Even the sci-fi ones are good and people find away to complain about those. They’re meant to suspend disbelief. Fine tune yourself and keep grinding!!!
Thanks a ton. I just love to read the comments, if they are bad, I try to improve, if they are good, I smile.
And I LOVE how they were his kids all along
I think that a woman feels a certain relaxation that makes it more possible for her to get pregnant with her familiar mate . At least that is how it happened with me . She came over one time after we broke up and we had sex one time and I couldn't believe the child ended up being mine . Last time we ever got back together in a sexual way . LoL !!
The story is nice so many shades of people and one of the best story this story told once a cheater always a cheater..
Should never taken her back and moved on
Worst cheater ever ...
Its too much nitty gritty details thats not necessary in the story. Its distracting to the story. Maybe someone can start posting a shortened version. Ill subscribe.
Yeah, a lot of blah, blah, blah😅
The old LLC was more streamlined with better writing.
Yeah there were flashbacks that's flashbacked, in the flashback. It was too much details
Keep scrolling
I finished my beer, but not quite all of it, there was still some amber elixir in the bottom of the bottle, not quite an ounce but more than half, and some suds, which some civilizations call foam, and he realized intuitively that the foam would bubble dow to more of the amber ambrosia, although the exact volume was a mystery, perhaps it would, all said and done, amount to a full ounce, or just shy of it
Damn crazy stories 😮 crazy twist 🤯🤯🤯 304 always be 304
One thing: Skip the music and other sound effects that last more than three seconds. It detracts from the hearing of the narrator.
The edit is botched. The scene with Mona at the funeral got cut then the cops showed up out of nowhere... then the cut went back to Mona and the rest of the funeral... Makes the story choppy.
You said it, I was thinking it 😊
Ending is bull, they already revieled the paternity earlier in the story and what happened to the sister of the woman that got killed. The story ends at the middle.
The tests showed that Malcolm was not the father, then genetic material from Ian was checked and possibly showed that both of Jessica's children were not Ian's either. He told Jessica that he wanted to have him to father her children, but Jessica fooled around with someone else.
That was why he's pissed off!
:D
Cheating woman even was cheating on the lover she was cheating with...fucking hilarious.
Way way to many details. Damn Malcom thinks like a 12 yr old boy
that music at the end almost drowned the entire video out
This one should have been a multi-part story
Why are Omelets the best breakfast choice in all these stories ?? LoL !!!
Very entertaining story thank you. 👍👍
It’s so funny that is Wife have cheated on him throughout the whole relationship and as soon as he find out, he went down to the Black neighborhood and take his aggression out on three black men wow
Them blokes knocked on his window with guns in their hands.
Dude, great story 👏 i listened to the final. This chick got nerve 😤 i was so sad for the guy.i'm happy it ended how it was ment.yes, it's long, but ooh, oh, omg oh entertainingly 😊. The karma in this 🕺 💃
Good story. Illustrates secveral points. 1. Your greatest strength can become your greatest liability. 2. Do not even pursue the woman that all the guys ogle, do not waste a minute, they are just background noise, and will betray you, 3. You cannot trust the cops 4. The law of the land is corruot to the core.
So...
NEITHER of them are the father!
He didn't get it and now is penniless and marked for death!
Another long upload! It was great! Thank you for it!👍👍👍
The music needs to go away, and so do the sound effects. Way to distracting.
She went out to easy, sucks.
Why the loud music towards the last 5-10 minutes towards the end. Its too loud and hard to hear
Because your stories does not have any subtitlrs to read, so to listen to against the loud music is pointless. Why add the music. There was never any music before this
Click on the subtitle icon at the right hand corner on your phone screen.
Just trying to experiment with music
Keep tinkering, this is your channel
I love the details
Yea so y the hell did u put that music at the end nearly drowning out the story
What kind of looney tune cops arrest and threaten the victims? Did the son have a weapon? Could they not tell who shot the mother and how? They can tell all of that by measuring the crime scene. You can tell where the main character shot from coming in entrance to protect. This should have been settled fast..😅😂😂
A four hour story that could have been told nicely in about one. OK, so what happened to the corrupt cops, what happened to his lawsuit with Police, what what what happened, too many lose ends.
Y'all don't have to describe every little detail in the story.
Llc's got to get that retention time😂
I know right, a little too much unimportant banter.😅
😂 there is back story and then there is LLC 30 minutes of back story.
Old LLC was a lot better and straight to the point. 40 minutes at most for old stories. Better writing, straight to the point, and no product placement like old radio stories.
Some writers try to paint a picture with their story.
I'm so sorry if I seem harsh LLC but nearly 4 hours of a story that's so jumbled and all over the place its hard to follow. Also once again a very rushed and seemingly unfinished ending makes the entire time of the story seem very much wasted so I'm sorry but I'm very disapointed.
this definitely needs a reupload with audio fixed and definitely no music or a lot quieter
That loud music is absolutely unnecessary
Thanks for another stem winder, LLC 👍👍 ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️...I agree with the other commenters about the music. It's unnecessary and distracting. Not really a fan of the sound effects either. Hope you're not offended by my unsolicited critiques. Just please keep bringing us these detailed, top-notch extended stories. Thoroughly enjoying them.
I always look forward to your comments everyday. Adding music was an experiment and it failed. It's a learning. There will be more experiments, some will pass some will fail. There will be praises there will be criticism. As for you, i would be more than happy to take your criticism in a positive manner.
I’d say it was pretty good…especially given what I paid; yall stop complaining. The husband was never in any danger though; Ian’s story would never stand up. I assume he would admit he owned the revolver and police would see they were unarmed; witnesses would testify how far apart the shots were, he’d need to explain why 2 invited guests with no criminal history suddenly attacked him with deadly force and how it happened that he had a revolver ready to respond, how he didn’t even have a bruise, and most importantly, how would Ian explain why he needed to shoot a woman lying on the ground in the back of the head. All that with the eventual testimony of the son, Ian was always going to jail.
Great story. Good lazy Sunday afternoon drama.
The sound effects and the "Saw" ending music were annoying. Just tell the story. So many unanswered unfinished parts.
Wow! This would make a great movie! Sooooo good!👍👍
The intense music at the end, is distracting and not necessary.
I like the details. Sue me 🤷♀️
Went too fast at the end .... what a twist ... Oh.... And all the impatient listeners the devil is in the details ..I wouldn't care if the story went on for 7 hours describing the color of their socks worn on such a day as any if it held pertinent information Ian was a shit from the first 5 minutes to 30 years down the road when the bow was tied and package delivered 😊
Sorry to many commercials to finish the story.
Time to pay RUclips subscription, not these guys faults
It would've been ok then and that's it. The next day I would've hired a private investigator to follow her around and gather evidence because her attitude changed much too quickly. Also I would've stopped talking to her and moved into the guest room. Closed all joint accounts, credit cards etc just for the disrespect.
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When’s the last time you read a book? I’m sure it’s to detailed and time consuming.
Edit the damn story, skipping bits continuity sucks. Stupid music at end.
the music at the end almost ruined it
Im lost this sounds like the story was chopped up and I don’t know what’s going on
Were you trying to drown out the narration with that asinine music at the end ???
So is he the father or not
Actually I do not recall the story ever saying where the male DNA came from. It very clearly said where the kids and the mother's came from but never said he used his. The report only stated the sample sent was not the father. So was it his or the other guy's DNA that he sent in ?
Op had his own DNA, his wife's, his daughter's, and his son's DNA. Once he discovered that he was their father nothing else was needed. Another man's DNA would only have been needed if Op was not the father. Think about it!!!
It was his. That is why he had his son find the paper work.
those poor kids his or not....lol draydel... be done.... dont start what you cant finish,,,LOL....and the kids aren;t his....what a sluoar... and her sister was the trigger woman..... ta-dow
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You aren’t listening I told you to shorten the stories
Some of us like the longer formats.
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What is going on LLC ?
I have supported y'all for detail oriented stories but, dang, this is mind numbing. Just the encounter in the bedroom early on was so far over the top. There wasn't a reason for describing each look from the days from being in school. Seriously we are smart enough to understand a one word description of a look or action. You do not have to go back to their younger days when she remembered seeing that same look.
Ok, rant off. This one, as with some others of late, have been frustrating to set through. It's not about the length of the story, its about content.
Sorry, not our best one. Will get better content.
Was the kids Ian's or Malcolm? He got the DNA results but never really said either or
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I like the sounds in this story
So the wife was also committing adultery with another guy or guys!
So no one knows who the father or fathers were!
They are Ian's
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3rd 🎉
This story has so much twists and knots it's a little hard to really enjoy it🫤