When I stepped out onto the old wooden dock, a breathtaking sight, more beautiful than any painting, lay before me. The first rays of the rising sun were shyly peeking out from behind the horizon. The ocean was stagnant, an indigo sheet of glass glittering in the morning light. I inhaled deeply and the salty fragrance of the sea filled me. I would never have been able to experience this back in the city, surrounded by the incessant beep beeping of cars and the unpleasant smell of gasoline floating in the air. I flipped open the letter that had brought me out here. The paper was slightly weathered and beat from the many times that I had read it. It contained a handwritten note from my mother, reminding me to enjoy my time because it would not last forever. It reminded me to take a break from my tedious nine-to-five job in a cubicle, to “stop and smell the roses.” And so, standing in front of a magnificent view with the feeling of gritty sand at my feet, 20,000 miles from my apartment, I drew in another deep breath and vowed to truly live.
Bro u wrote more 🤯🤯🤯🤯 have some🍟🍟🍟🍟🥨🥪🥪🥪🍟🍕🌯🌯🌮🌮🍗🍗🥩🥩🥩🥓🥓🥓🧀🥚🥚🍳🍳🍳🥞🧇🧇🧇🍔🍔🌭🍳🥨🍟🍕🌯🌯🍲🍲🥗🥗🥫🥫🍝🥘🥘🥘🥘🍝🍝🥫🥫🥗🍕🍲🍲🍛🍛🌮🌮🥙🍜🥙🥙🍜🍝🍝🥘🧆🦪🥠🍘🥠🍥🍣🍚🍡🥮🎂🥮🍰🍦🍙🦪🥟🦞🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍣🍛🥘🥣🥟🍘🍮🍧🥮🎂🍭🎂🍭🎂🍭🎂🎂🍭🎂🍭🍭🎂🍰🍬🍰🍫🍫🍰🍫🍰🍩🍰🍩🍰🍩🍰🍩🍘🍨🍨🍘🍨🍘🥟🍣🥟🍣🥟🍣🥟🥟🍣🥟🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍱🍣🥂🍺🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂 eat this all u r tired.😂
This is from my student "A" who is 8 years old. We loved your video. One day I drove with my family to the beach. My cheeks were red with excitement, and I was trembling with happiness. The beach was a calm and peaceful place. As soon as we got there, I tossed on my flippity flippers and jumped into the water. The water was warm, and I felt cozy like I was wearing a jacket of water. I could feel the algae tickling my toes, and it made me smile from ear to ear. I jumped out of the water and wrapped myself in my velvety towel which was as smooth as creamy body butter. I could feel the sand on my toes because my feet and the sand were both wet. The sand gently rubbed against my feet like grains of salt. I could hear the seagulls squawking on the rough rock which was as rough as a brick. As heat from the sun became warmer and warmer, my mom set out cool sugary popsicles. They were as sweet as frosting! The air around us smelled of salt and happiness. As I chomped on my popsicle, I gazed at the swirly cotton candy sky. The blues, pinks, and purples moved together in the air high above me like a beautiful game of musical chairs.
TBH this video was super!!! It helped me a lot for my exams. This is my descriptive text on the picture prompt (Hope its good): The calm soothing waves thrashing back and forth. As the waves lapped across the bridge made of perched wooden planks. Day and night were having a duel against each other. As the Sun was falling back down beautiful birds scurried across the sky. At the end of the pier laid a fisherman's shack drifted around by a wooden fence, lurking towards the center of the gigantic alluring sea. As the soft waves lapped on to the shore the sky manifested a shade of pink fuchsia on the soft in-rolling beach sand. The soft in-rolling waves casted a scent and taste of salt amidst the air. :)
The waves lapped softly against the shore. The rickety, deserted dock groaned in the wind. A lone bird call echoed throughout until it faded into the darkness. A salty sea breeze blew from the sea. The smell of fresh fish caught by the fisherman wafted through the air. The soft sand crumbled beneath a set of shoes. A fish jumped out of the water and landed with a splash. The slightest bit of pink peeked out of the blue-gray clouds as the sun rose. The wind died down, and a curious crab scuttled out of its burrow. Then, all went quiet.
Boom! Lightning streaked down from the sky, followed by the echo of a booming thunder that rang in his ears. The boat shook, trembling strenuously as it drifted along with the frantic waves. Cold, limpid water pounced at him like prey, enveloping his entire body with its wet touch. He coughed uncontrollably, the taste of salty water lingering in his mouth as he released the liquid he accidentally sucked in. He shivered slightly, the cool wind breezing past him as it seeped through his soaked clothing. A sense of panic, fear, and loss rose up from his chest. He needed to get out of here. Now. But..stranded in the middle of a sea of chaos and monsters, where would he go?
@@EasyTeachingNet Thank you, I had to fix the last part though where the guy was cold, because it seemed more like it was the wind that shivered instead of him.
Descriptive writing is one of my weaknesses.But i tried: As I sat at the edge of the wooden bridge, a breathtaking sight enveloped me. Gazing far beyond the tranquil waters, a soft breeze brushes against my face, bringing the familiar scent of salt. It was such a peaceful moment hearing the waves as they thrash back and forth on the beach.
5:32 When I went there it was pure perfection as my shoes scraped across the sand I saw the the blue stunning water with a dock sitting on a shiny steel structure with a wooden bridge leading to the dock house. It was also a cloudy but mild day with Mountains that scrape the clouds. It was truly a pleasant experience. I heard the waves splashing and thrashing all around the shore, I also heard people having fun and light wind flowing on my skin. Times like this remind me that there is a little more hope in the world and took the time to relax on the soft sand. GAT DAYUM I COULDVE NOT BEEN WRITING LIKE THIS AND IM THE 5TH GRADE THIS IS GOOD VIDEO
You’ve done a fantastic job of painting a vivid picture of the scene with your words. I especially like how you use sensory details like the sound of the waves and the feeling of the wind. Keep up the great work!
Here is mine! The multicolored sky blended perfectly with the clouds, amazing you as you look around the quiet beach. The long rickety wooden bridge gently touched the water as the shack perched on top of it all. The air smells salty but you like it. Sinking your feet into the water makes you shiver and smile, this was gonna be the best beach day ever.
@@EasyTeachingNet thank you! we are doing a writing class at my school and I have to submit a descriptive writing thing and I'm still working on mine wish me luck!
@@EasyTeachingNet I just got my paper back! I got a one hundred! oh I forgot to mention that the descriptive writing thing was a contest. and for a grade to the people who were doing it. I got FIRST PLACE!!
Thank you for the video! It was very helpful and simple to follow. This is what I wrote after the prompt: The water laid still. It had the coolness and lifelessness of a morgue. The angular pier stretched out in front of her and curled around the fisherman's shack protectively. The wood moaning and shuddering under her feet, revealing it's age. Pale blue and gray clouds coated the sky and the smell of the sea tickled her nose. The cool damp air matched the clamminess of her palms. She listened as the water rhythmically lapped against the legs of the pier. The breeze danced past her, sending strands of brown hair across her face. She felt the itty bits of sand on her cheeks and she took a deep breath. It was as though she could taste the salt and seaweed in the back of her throat.
Here is my Descriptive writing that I am practicing for school: The golden dim light shone on the pitch black sky. The ferocious trees covered with white dust, waved at the cold wind. The ground which was once covered with grey asphalt, was not protected with a blanket of snow. Windows opened, letting the cold eerie air come into the dull lit houses. The pitch black sky, roared out the beautiful milk white snow, and the wooden cabin, which was once occupied with caucasian figurines was now abandoned and it lay amidst the magnificent nature's call I used personification, description and similies in my writing and my goal is to add more senses to my writing and add some more metaphors. Btw really love your videos. Warm regards, School kid
The purple and blue sky sat just above the edge of the waters, forming a vast rainbow that divided the clouds. The sky was peaceful and beautiful and I felt the gentle breeze of winter on my skin. I imagined running through the railings of the bay and jumping into the vast sea, swimming further and further until I couldn't find a shore to rest on.
Cool ideas! Here was mine : The dominant cool wind blending with the aurora of the horizon tampered the silent wooden bridge leeward to the vast hills with a home-like beach house in sight being prepared for a night-long film sensation.
This is from my student "MG" who is 11 years old. She and I really liked your video! The darkened sky gleamed while the ocean mirrored it. The pink was like coral. The smell of the salty air was like a candle in a house, fresh & enlivening. Smoky clouds caused the sunlight to flicker through the air and dance on the glittering water. Footprints in the sand were sunken like ships that washed away into the sea. The roller coaster of a pier twisted and turned, dipped and rose precariously. Quietly the quay slowed and creaked in movement as the wind chimes rang with a peaceful sound.
Not as great as others but had to have a go: The cool evening breeze swirled around me as the salty scent of the sea tickled my nose. The gentle waves lapped against the sand as the wooden planks on the peer creaked and moaned. I shut my eyes and heard, beyond the sunset, the cries of seagulls swooping through the sky. The tranquillity was blissful!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
I was really enjoy the interesting simple story .you helped a lot for my constitution day which this year 5 October 2022 that it's already past with world teachers day and our teacher asked us in grade (6) to write a story using descriptive words which I really found very had on top of it my teacher always complain me about my lazy stories that I really need someone to help me with my stories .💞💞💞💞💞
I've been struggling in my own stories with descriptions of people, places, and objects. I think your video helped to open my mind. I will definitely be making lists of vivid verbs and precise adjectives when I get stuck in the future! Here's my go at the prompt: I stretch my arms and stare into the darkening grey and blue sky. On this secluded pier, I recount the many times I've walked across the wet sand and heard the crashing waves against the shore. The memories of sandy seashells turned into necklaces, children's laughter as we build castles in the sand, and the soft yellow blanket beneath my body as I experienced my first gentle kiss under the dying sun fill my mind with warmth. This rickety pier has kept me grounded with its fraying wood beneath my tired bones all these years. As I close my eyes and inhale the salty sea, one last tranquil breath, my lips curve into a peaceful smile and I float, further and further, allowing the light breeze and lapping sea to carry me away.
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
The sky hid behind the radiant and vibrant clouds painted by the sun's rays. The light peeped from some openings blessing the lake below. On the lake below was station a cabin of wood with a tiny bridge to the shore. The water rippled and plopped and was swayed by the gentle evening Breeze. The waves crashed against the shore like a loud rumble and receeded calmly to the ocean. The friable and gritty sand rubbed against my toes which calmed me like a dream of peace. The cold winds from the sea brought out the freshness and purity within my soul. The smell of the wet sand mixed with the humidity like two fusing together and creating loamy characteristics smell which hypnotized me to sleep.
The clouds blended with shades of pink, gives us peace and calm. The beauty of nature. A long, narrow, brown, bridge beside the sea and on top of it was a small little house. The sea looks calm and the beach attracting us to come! A great day on a beach
I stepped out on the familiar fine rocks and a sudden scent of salt had rushed towards me. The calming, trashing of the reflected liquid sky against the fine sand. I crouched down with the coolness of the breeze, the warmth of the sand against my skin. I waddled forward in a hurry to admire the scenery consisting of a wooden built pier to my left - with a small wooden shack attached to it at the end - that gave off a fresh fishy and iron stench of blood, but was overpowered by the saltiness surrounding. I then glanced towards the ominous ocean that was far away from ending. It’s ice, blizzard look gave shivers as I shuffled closer. The tints of purple,lilac, hues of blues. Breath taking it was. Thank you, this was fun :)
Here's mine! The long, wooden, rickety bridge stretched out across the calm, blue sea. The faint, peaceful sound of water washing upon the shore, is so calming. The salty smell of the ocean filled the air. The feeling of the soft sand under your feet makes you feel deeply relaxed. Clouds cover the beautiful night sky. It's absolutely gorgeous.
Remember, try to keep your writing to one tense and only use another tense when absolutely necessary. This was kinda confusing to read, but good effort.
A storm simmered in a gloomy, distant sky. The long, weathered wooden Pier hung over a calm, yet eerily lifeless bay. I was instantly chilled and goose bumps creeped up my rigid spine. The hairs on my neck stood full alert to the impending doom that would incur as night crept in.
As soon as I opened my eyes, I saw a golden blanket which was attached to the mirror- like reflected water with a wooden bridge built over it and a heavenly beautiful house. A tranquil , salty scent of sea with a glittering yellow light over the calm waves.
This is mine The sky so blue hallows over the ocean also making it blue . The wooden long bridge stretched out to the ocean and a small and peaceful building sits there . As the wind blew you could almost taste the salty air . The ocean calmly drifts to the land making the sand soft and relaxing . I hope it's good enough 😊
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
This is my piece - The clouds lazily danced across a sea of royal blue and pink in the sky. The cold wind kissed my cheeks and ran its long bony fingers through my hair. I felt the sand grasped my feet , working its way like tentacles through my toes and ankles ; I felt it pulling me down to mark foot prints like sunken ships. The sea only a few inches away was a mirror reflecting the beauty of the sky; the water was like glass smooth and delicate so smooth that I felt like I could walk onto op it. I watch as the tide went in and out as if the water was trying to clasp on to land but always failing. A rush of sea salt filled my nostrils as I took a deep breath in. On my left, there was a wooden dock, its long legs were stabbing through the water as it creaked to the melody of the wind. There was a house, with only one dimly lit light on, which flickered on and off that was near the end of the dock. Everything was tranquil and still. It felt like I was tumbling through a herd of clouds into a sweet dream........
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
The darkening sky was splattered with the deep violet-valvet ink hiding the golden coin in its puffy cotton balls .The rippled seashore sand battering against crash of tidal waves ebbing in and out in its lapping lashes.I could not fathom or ponder or preoccupy my mind with anything other than this bliss of solitude that the happenstance gave me .The plier stretched to a small shack standing as a lighthouse .The scrumptious smoke of our evening dinner from the chimney emanated as a signal from my mother to alight from my sandy boat and bid adieu to the mellowing sun.
This was a great video! It helped me really understand that what I see when I write needs to engage the senses and evoke feelings. Thank you! Here's mine: My toes curl into the damp sand with each step as I follow the purples and indigos dancing along the line of water breaking at the shore. I inhale deeply, sweet briny fresh air fills my lungs as my eyes lift to follow the stark black lines of the jetty along the horizon, painted with the same soft purples and indigo that fade into soft whites of the clouds, hanging low over head and the deep blue of the sunset. A cool evening breeze sweeps over me as I scan the shelter at the end of the jetty. I pull my cardigan tighter against my body, smiling as I remember feeling of the aging timber under my touch from many years ago. My heart swells, I have missed this place.
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
I've been struggling in my own stories with descriptions of people, places, and objects. I think your video helped to open my mind. I will definitely be making lists of vivid verbs and precise adjectives when I get stuck in the future! Here's my go at the prompt:
As I stood on the shore, I looked up at the soft blue sunrise.On my left, the long wooden pier, stretched out into the tranquil salty water.A cold wind blew towards the sandy shore stained with trails of footsteps.
The cloudy sky towered this late evening. Sun rays blocked by the thick clouds, save a few red hues. A lonely wooden shack sat attop the right side of a richety dock. It's structure eroding thanks to nature taking it's course. The sea that was fierce before now as still as the sand to it's left, not a soul interrupting the peace that the fall of the sun provides.
The worn wood of the pier creaked under my bare feet as I stopped to absorb the ethereal sight before me. Soft, silent and still, as though I had walked into a painting where the sky's hues blended into violet and the water blurred into the shoreline. My chest rose as the softly chilled air filled my lungs with tranquility, before my feet resumed their journey across the rickety dock stretched ahead of me. I haven't written anything in 2 years but now need to for a test. Any constructive criticism would be appreciated :)
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
Here's mine: The long deck creaked as I walked across. The sky was dark blue and the clouds drifted gently across the skies.When I reached the shack, it smelled of the stench of fish and alcohol. There was a powerful breeze blowing against the tiny vulnerable shack while the waves were slowly brushing against the shore. After a long day it was time to return to the sweet soft bed like the sand on the beach.
I particularly like the variance in the sentences starting with "When" and "After" --- it breaks up what could be a series of monotonous subject openers. I also like the combination (dynamic duo!) of "tiny" and "vulnerable" in your description of the shack.
When I walked over the long deck, it creaked. The sky was dark blue, and clouds floated over it softly. When I arrived at the shack, it smelled strongly of fish and drink. A strong wind blew against the tiny vulnerable shack, and the waves gently brushed against the beach. It was time to return to the sweet fluffy bed like sand on the beach after a long day. Does it sound better now ?
The lavender sheet of candyfloss floated close above my head. Its distinctly refreshing scent spread around me as the wind whooshed everywhere. The white, pearl-like sun peeked from behind the fluffy cloud adapting the early morning view.
this took me way longer than it should have, this is a short scene out of context that i decided to make up Snaked strands dangled from a rip-ridden cloak as it waved in the rubble and dust, revealing a rusted buckle. Dotting the leather, grains of sand tumbled in the breeze, and resided in the crevices of a severed shirt. Buried beneath rested a grave conclusion - a burning crimson stain, pulsating with unsatisfied vengeance. But it was too late to turn back, as the traveller’s pair of embracing pupils could do nothing except stare into the solemn sunset shades one last time and disseminate their final essence before descending into slumber.
A cloak of clouds covered the sky Over that a plethora of birds were chirping..The sounds of shore's and bird's chirping hits together made a peaceful music.the cool wind blowing hited my face .The veiw calmed me as like I'm setting in heaven.
The beach stretched out for miles and a man stood, his feet buried in the cold sand. He held a hand up above his face so he could see since the sun blinded him. He lived on the beach and the morning light got into his windows. That was why he went outside in the first place. The wind blew gustily as he stared up at the clouds passing, he felt raindrop on his finger and he stared at his finger then pinched it with his thumb on the same hand and felt that it was in fact a drop of rain.
The chill breeze brushed through my skin , as I stood on the glistening sand . The water still and calm , reflecting perfectly the scenery before my eyes , the sun disappearing into the sea , painting the evening sky in a a beautiful tint of pink , orange and yellow .
The beautiful blue endlessly stretched across the sky. Rays of golden-pink sunrise peeked through the clouds. The magnificent clear waters spread across the sea, reflecting the colors of the sky. As i stood on the dark black wooden dock, the wind silently whistled as i felt the salty air blow on my face. The peaceful sound of the waves crashing serenaded me into a calm state. As i rested my arm on the sandy balcony, i stared into the misty distance, enjoying the heavenly view.
Very Good! Great formula that helped me organize all the thoughts. When I want to start a description exercise, I freeze and can't think of where to start. This is a big help. Thanks! The long wooden dock stretched into the ocean leading to a small fisherman’s house. Surrounded by a cloudy grey blue sky, the smell of salt and seaweed floated from a gentle breeze. The mirror like water reflected the same grey blue sentiment above.
I have another descriptive writing {I really like this one} The compelling ceiling of the once occupied castle, caught the attention of tourists visiting the spectacular location. The sandstone walls which were implanted with the most magnificent architecture and designs threw out the spine- chilling secrets of the glorious fortress. Windows splattered out the bashful sun's golden rays onto the dancing statues sandstone bodies. The tiled floors were composed of the different shades of ginger leaves. The sky and the chalky clouds stood still even though the impatient wind moaned against them. Other sorts of beautiful architecture filled the painted scenery and the charming tangerine trees stood with their brown companions. But what kind of appalling secrets could the chalky castle have been hiding?...
The wind whispered softly through my ears, as if hushing me with a lullaby. I stood there, entranced by the soundless sky, its majestic lapis blue dotted with patchy grey clouds. In the distance, a hut-like house perched on the silky ocean, connected by a sturdy, well-built bridge. As I pondered what secrets the solitary hut held, a wave surged through the caramel-soft sand, brushing against my toes. The sand glistened under the sun, and the air was rich with the scent of coconut.
Here's mine As I walk through the enchanted forest, I am greeted with the fresh smell of scented flowers. Their bright colours glow in the sunlight. Chirping birds happily dance around in the sky as the trees waves their arms in excitement. Then I saw a bright blue water and the golden sand. I can smell the fresh air. When I went swimming in their I can taste the salty Water.
Title: A visit at the forest It was a wonderful Sunday. Grandma and Mom decided to take me and my brother John to the Forest. We were excited to hear so, we packed our bags and went on the bus. After a long trip we reached at the forest. I can hear the beautiful sinigning of the birds while walking. We went on and saw a tree with BIG JUICY apples so we picked some and taste. The apples were super sweet. After that we reached to a lake and we felt the water smoothly passing by our hands. And guess what, we saw beautiful deers. For a while we saw a beautiful waterfall, it was so beautiful that we took pictures. It was the last of our tour so went back home. I couldn't wait to tell my friends about the visit to the forest.
Swift wind picked up every strand of hair planted in my head as I walked towards the lonely cabin that sat at the end of the long rickety bridge. With the angry waters so far down and the mist barely making it possible to see, I felt so small. The thunder booming in my ears, a ringing sound lingering in my ears as the my face dampened from the rain.
The soft rays of sunshine shined brightly on our faces , the clear puffy clouds floated in tranquility . The sky was mesmerizing with hints of purple , pink and dark blue . The smell of salt in the air and the sound of flowing water . A long wooden bridge reached upto the secluded rickety guesthouse with tiled roofs and bamboo walls . Faraway , a heap of hills and lush meadows could be seen . It was a perfect place of peace and calm.
The sapphire blue sea howled, almost like it was calling me. My feet buried themselves in the soft, grainy sand as I slowly reached the reflective ocean. The smell of salt consumed my nose and the now disappearing sun made the sea turn an orangey colour. In the distance I heard the menacing creak of the dock swaying. Above the clouds birds squeaked, begging for food. A small crimson crab snapped it hands at me then scurried of back into the yellow sand. That was all I could think of but I think its alot more descriptive then what I normally do so thanks for this video! ♡
7:36 "is easy..." Nah mate, it is quite time consuming. As a non-native English speaker, it is quite challenging to pick the precise and most fitting verbs and adjectives.
"I despise you." The last few words my daughter yelled at me. Occasionally do these words perpetually overwhelm my mind and body. When these words ring through my mind, I calmly embark on a journey to place that holds sentimental value to me... the pier where she last laughed joyously. The moment I arrive, the picturesque view subdues all my negative emotions. The soft sound of the miniscule waves overlapping one another produced by the ocean is enough to dampen the sound of the haunting phrase in my mind. The soft veil of clouds that gently drift above my in the peach sky remind me of the man I used to be. A man who was overflowing with potential but too conceited to recognise what was truly important. My note: Im going to be honest, i kind of gave up because i feel unconfident in my ability to convey theses images. Regardless, this was my attempt. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.
Humongous canopy of dark brown tree branches hung over the tangerine looking swing below it with satisfying greens and raindrops coming from it , looking out towards the beautiful colours of violet, magentas blues merged together creating a enormous colourful landscape, so satisfactory
Here's mine Not great The cool breeze of the evening ruffled my hair. The seagulls were flying elegantly with their white wings spread out like an eagle . The fresh smell of the blue ocean made me ecstatic and as I walked on the coarse sand , I enjoyed the orange sunset.
The lucious blue berry sky reflected upon the grey and blue waters. The rickety,old pier meandered along the tranquil waters stretching to the fisherman's shack. You can taste the salt water in the air. The calm winds brushed through my hair softly. I could hear all the birds singing melodius tunes in the trees. The salt water in the air was most refreshing.
DESCRIBING CHRISTMAS: The fire’s lambent light stole away the velvet-black shadows dancing on the wall.Thyme-filled turkeys sizzled on the oven foil.An angel was perched on top of the tree, glittering with its flash-silver lustre.
A calm and rainbow was almost covered by majority of purplish clouds in which create a blissful and lovely picture on sight. A long, extension of bridge which stretched from the base of the moist, sandy beach to the end of the fisherman's house. Though it was a long extent, it would be a challenge for wanderers walk on the thin, wooden planks with dull colours when they stamble across while they view the lovely mother nature of the atmosphere. A glimpse of fisherman's house could be seen on the reflective pond of water. Through the pond, a light blue sea is seemingly endless that as if it was an illusion.
Diamond lugged her body past the weathered brown door to her home. Her cat, Mr. fuzzy, peaked from under the creaky rocking chair perched in the living room. She mumbled a greeting to her furry companion sighing in exhaustion as she tiredly hung her pink winter coat. After a long day of school she wanted nothing more than to sleep the rest of the day away, lulled by the warmth of her bed. Unfortunately, the heavy book bag resting on her shoulders said otherwise. She dropped her book bag near the front door when the smell of freshly baked chocolate chip cookies wafted through the air. Her eyes fluttered close and she took a deep breath, inhaling the sweet aroma filling the air. “Hey baby. How was school?” Her mother asked rousing her from her daze. “Horrible. But after I eat some cookies I think I’ll feel better.” Diamond answered. Her mom laughed in amusement her brown skin crinkling around her eyes. “Okay miss thang. Let’s get you some cookies to help you feel better, and while you eat you can tell me all about your bad day.” Her mom told her heading back into the kitchen. “Yes!” Diamond cheered following her mom into the kitchen. She already felt much better.
At 2 in the morning I come walking out to the beach I feel the Cool Breeze blowing on my face as water flows towards me it feels so cold I walk deeper into the water as I walk I stop a nice smile towards the Sun as I catch the birds singing I smile and I look back to my house that is 200 away from me
The salty smell of the ocean filled the air. Swishing past the palm leaves, the wind grazed through the sky. A coconut dropped to the ground with a loud clunk. Creaking on its hinges, the dock majestically stood against the bright night. Sand flew in the wind right when a fish with silver scales jumped and turned in the air. A sandcastle was in view far away. The deserted beach lay quietly in the night until the sun peeked its rays from behind the clouds.
I like how your imagination added the palm trees. That was unexpected. I also found the juxtaposition of a dock that creaked on its hinges but standing majestically to be compelling.
I exhaled a deep breath while I laid on my cotton blanket that my grandma knitted for me in the third grade. The crunchy sand felt cool underneath me. The gray and blue skies mirrored my current mood. Why did my boyfriend have to end things with me? My eyes closed and I laid back against the blanket. The seagulls squawked to each other engaged in a conversation that I wish I could understand. The smell of the salt water gave me some relief because I felt the tears form at my eyes. I shouldn't have fallen in love with someone who I wasn't supposed to be with.
Thanks a lot for the video, i really like the way you explained it, i followed your guidelines the day after i watched this for a test, and i got a sweet 5/5 . Really helped, thanks bro
The huge mountains stretched along the straight line as if they were sleeping giants . The smooth flowing river down the valley was glittering as if it was twinkling sapphire . The great and soothing smell of blooming pinkish Lilly created an atmosphere of love and peace . The small droplets coming from the sky touching the wet soil gave out a nice faded smell of soil .
The gray sky filled with clouds moved past quickly as the wind blew them away. The sunset on the horizen was peaceful as the birds retreated to their nests. The lone cottage stood in the water, some distance away from the coast. Connected by a wooden bridge which cracked with each gust of wind. The waves going through the wooden pillars holding the brighe afloat were strong, making the bridge shake with each ram. It seemed as though the whole world was quite except for the ocean and the birds
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me. Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
Jutting from the hushed coastline, a lonely shack balances on glassy water. The air is thick with a briny breeze that pierces the surrounding stillness. Lumbering clouds roll into infinity as the sun raises her sleepy head.
Here's mine: Beneath the puffy clouds, the azure, aquatic, atarxy ocean floated and drifted on the golden, honey-comb sand. A rickety, wooden pier grasped out into the mouth of the sea and reflected in the mirror-like water. The gentle breeze brushed across my face as my feet started to sink into the vast pile of beautiful sand.
Tip: Try not to repeat words too much. For example, "sand". Try and replace the second appearance of "sand" with something like "gleaming grains" or smth
The wooden bridge creaking and moaning whilst you were marching, the sound of your bags and weapons rustling with every step, the weeping of separated children, the smashing of the waves against hard wood and metal, and the way you kissed me for the last time, I can still recall how everything that had happened. Even now, my throat felt hoarse as the salt in the air accumulated and the withdrawn tears trickled, my chest weighed me down and suffocated me while my arms stretched out to grab nothing. I still remember how I felt as I watched you, how i broke down, and how i pleaded, how I watched you leave me, and how you were snatched from me as the boat escaped from my view, leaving only the glass-like indigo waves, the dark looming clouds, and only the breeze to hold me.
I'm years late but still going to put mine in the comments, I'm doing my GCSE's this year so if anyone has any feedback that would be so useful! (in an exam I would write more but for now I just did a short passage). Great, helpful video! :) Beckoning me hypnotically, like the voice of a soft singing siren, the hazy water called out for me. As the sun began to fall further and further from my grasp, colours began to merge. The evening sky whistled in a saccharine, serene tone, strips of ashy grey clouds wrestled with the blotches of soulless purples and blues. Tickling my nose, the cold, crisp air penetrated my senses. Squelches of wet, sludgy, sand squirmed beneath my feet, the bitter wind laughed at my lonesomeness. As I lugged myself along the long, rickety, wooden pier, it were although even the warped wood couldn't bare my company - trembling as if it were going to break. I sat, my feet dangling into the chilling water - at that moment, staring into the mirror- like water, I realised I really was the epitome of lonely. Glacial tears fell from My face as the sinister sky spat as me.
It was a peacefull but gloomy morning, I watched as the gentle waves lapped against the wooden post. The grey and blue clouds slowly drifted across the sky as the calm winds blew. Staring at a wooden log floating across the water, I stretched out my arms as I took in the tranquility of the seaside.
The clouds hovered quietly like a duvet on the salty sea. Leaving colours stripped off from the brittle wooden struts. A shack from the rims of the bay secluded and afloat filled with echoes of despair.
The outstretched clouds cruised across the sky, sailing slowly like boats on a calm sea. Caught in a picture-esque moment, the roaring sea was overcome by a gradual stillness. Under the great blue sky and over the quiet, deep sea, stood an old wooden house with two broken windows and a missing door. The windows creaked slowly as the gentle winter air whispered sweet nothings. The path leading up to the house was missing planks of wood in multiple places. A plank dangling on one end from the path, holding on for dear life, succumbed to a strong gale and was inevitably castaway to the warm embrace of the Pacific with a splash. The tranquility of the moment was finally broken as a single seagull flew by, wailing for it's flock. The squaking of the seagull was immediately followed by a wave that noisily crashed against the sand. The serenity that had momentarily settled over the dock could never last for long. The waves washed away footsteps and initials written with merry fingers as Helios finally dragged his chariot across the sky, leaving nothing but clouds and murkiness behind.
thank you so much for this video! here's mine, didn't really follow the picture dot to dot, that's something I should work on. There’s the beach. The gentle prickling of my skin from the winds thrashing through the sky; solace. The squawking flocks of birds seems lost in silence. The thin clusters of fabrics beneath the ominous void above, is mirrored with the scattered sparkles of whites below; dancing and chanting sirens on the wave. The infinite expanse of azure waters filled with suffocated packs of purple-blue crimson flowers, panting.. grasping…, destined to never resurface on the shore. The warm sand spilled out of the feathered grass embraced in moments. I’m devoured by the embracing womb, my eyes unable to escape the entranced abyss of the echoing Scarlet sun; staring at me. Her muted howls syncing over my pulsing fragile heart; listening, bum.. bum…
He starts to walk across the old wooden planks built throughout the dock and to the pier, the flowing of the cool breeze of the wind blew into his hair, as it flungs to the side covering the face. He looks throughout the clouds above, deeply concealing the beautiful yellow-golden glowing hue of the sun that would’ve illuminated around the vast blue ocean and the grey clouds. Let me know how my sentence is! Thank you
Be careful to not change tense. Most of your writing is in present tense ('starts to walk', 'he looks', etc), but a couple of times you switch to past ('the wind blew', 'as it flung').
There are times when a different tense can be used, but it's generally best to stick to the same tense. To take your example, you're describing a scene from a single time period, but you're using different tenses to do so (present and past). Maintaining consistent tense helps readers follow the timeline of your story.
When I stepped out onto the old wooden dock, a breathtaking sight, more beautiful than any painting, lay before me. The first rays of the rising sun were shyly peeking out from behind the horizon. The ocean was stagnant, an indigo sheet of glass glittering in the morning light. I inhaled deeply and the salty fragrance of the sea filled me. I would never have been able to experience this back in the city, surrounded by the incessant beep beeping of cars and the unpleasant smell of gasoline floating in the air. I flipped open the letter that had brought me out here. The paper was slightly weathered and beat from the many times that I had read it. It contained a handwritten note from my mother, reminding me to enjoy my time because it would not last forever. It reminded me to take a break from my tedious nine-to-five job in a cubicle, to “stop and smell the roses.” And so, standing in front of a magnificent view with the feeling of gritty sand at my feet, 20,000 miles from my apartment, I drew in another deep breath and vowed to truly live.
Great writing and a great message!
Bro u wrote more 🤯🤯🤯🤯 have some🍟🍟🍟🍟🥨🥪🥪🥪🍟🍕🌯🌯🌮🌮🍗🍗🥩🥩🥩🥓🥓🥓🧀🥚🥚🍳🍳🍳🥞🧇🧇🧇🍔🍔🌭🍳🥨🍟🍕🌯🌯🍲🍲🥗🥗🥫🥫🍝🥘🥘🥘🥘🍝🍝🥫🥫🥗🍕🍲🍲🍛🍛🌮🌮🥙🍜🥙🥙🍜🍝🍝🥘🧆🦪🥠🍘🥠🍥🍣🍚🍡🥮🎂🥮🍰🍦🍙🦪🥟🦞🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍣🍛🥘🥣🥟🍘🍮🍧🥮🎂🍭🎂🍭🎂🍭🎂🎂🍭🎂🍭🍭🎂🍰🍬🍰🍫🍫🍰🍫🍰🍩🍰🍩🍰🍩🍰🍩🍘🍨🍨🍘🍨🍘🥟🍣🥟🍣🥟🍣🥟🥟🍣🥟🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍣🍱🍱🍣🥂🍺🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂☕🥂 eat this all u r tired.😂
@@belasharma4470 well thank you for the food ig
@@norawang4432 ,
Ur welcome
THATS SO GOOD :0, as a lil child I have only just felt how much I didnt get to leanr :'(
This is from my student "A" who is 8 years old. We loved your video.
One day I drove with my family to the beach. My cheeks were red with excitement, and I was trembling with happiness. The beach was a calm and peaceful place. As soon as we got there, I tossed on my flippity flippers and jumped into the water. The water was warm, and I felt cozy like I was wearing a jacket of water. I could feel the algae tickling my toes, and it made me smile from ear to ear.
I jumped out of the water and wrapped myself in my velvety towel which was as smooth as creamy body butter. I could feel the sand on my toes because my feet and the sand were both wet. The sand gently rubbed against my feet like grains of salt. I could hear the seagulls squawking on the rough rock which was as rough as a brick. As heat from the sun became warmer and warmer, my mom set out cool sugary popsicles. They were as sweet as frosting! The air around us smelled of salt and happiness. As I chomped on my popsicle, I gazed at the swirly cotton candy sky. The blues, pinks, and purples moved together in the air high above me like a beautiful game of musical chairs.
Please tell "A" that I really enjoyed reading his description!
wow
WOWWWWW awesome 😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀
@@cookie7556 wow
@@cookie7556wow
TBH this video was super!!! It helped me a lot for my exams.
This is my descriptive text on the picture prompt (Hope its good):
The calm soothing waves thrashing back and forth. As the waves lapped across the bridge made of perched wooden planks. Day and night were having a duel against each other. As the Sun was falling back down beautiful birds scurried across the sky. At the end of the pier laid a fisherman's shack drifted around by a wooden fence, lurking towards the center of the gigantic alluring sea. As the soft waves lapped on to the shore the sky manifested a shade of pink fuchsia on the soft in-rolling beach sand. The soft in-rolling waves casted a scent and taste of salt amidst the air. :)
Thanks for sharing. I like your personification of day and night!
The waves lapped softly against the shore. The rickety, deserted dock groaned in the wind. A lone bird call echoed throughout until it faded into the darkness. A salty sea breeze blew from the sea. The smell of fresh fish caught by the fisherman wafted through the air. The soft sand crumbled beneath a set of shoes. A fish jumped out of the water and landed with a splash. The slightest bit of pink peeked out of the blue-gray clouds as the sun rose. The wind died down, and a curious crab scuttled out of its burrow. Then, all went quiet.
oops didn't mean that
This is a great descriptive paragraph!
@@EasyTeachingNet thx
I'm using this
Love this👌
Boom!
Lightning streaked down from the sky, followed by the echo of a booming thunder that rang in his ears. The boat shook, trembling strenuously as it drifted along with the frantic waves.
Cold, limpid water pounced at him like prey, enveloping his entire body with its wet touch. He coughed uncontrollably, the taste of salty water lingering in his mouth as he released the liquid he accidentally sucked in.
He shivered slightly, the cool wind breezing past him as it seeped through his soaked clothing. A sense of panic, fear, and loss rose up from his chest.
He needed to get out of here. Now.
But..stranded in the middle of a sea of chaos and monsters, where would he go?
This is a great passage of descriptive writing. Well done!
@@EasyTeachingNet Thank you, I had to fix the last part though where the guy was cold, because it seemed more like it was the wind that shivered instead of him.
amazing!
@@hia1291 Good catch! Mrs. C
ya
Descriptive writing is one of my weaknesses.But i tried:
As I sat at the edge of the wooden bridge, a breathtaking sight enveloped me. Gazing far beyond the tranquil waters, a soft breeze brushes against my face, bringing the familiar scent of salt. It was such a peaceful moment hearing the waves as they thrash back and forth on the beach.
ew bruh you trash
just kidding :) its amazing :)
You just how to describe the image
the use of 'i' would not work but if you remove the charcter it would be perfect.
5:32 When I went there it was pure perfection as my shoes scraped across the sand I saw the the blue stunning water with a dock sitting on a shiny steel structure with a wooden bridge leading to the dock house. It was also a cloudy but mild day with Mountains that scrape the clouds. It was truly a pleasant experience. I heard the waves splashing and thrashing all around the shore, I also heard people having fun and light wind flowing on my skin. Times like this remind me that there is a little more hope in the world and took the time to relax on the soft sand. GAT DAYUM I COULDVE NOT BEEN WRITING LIKE THIS AND IM THE 5TH GRADE THIS IS GOOD VIDEO
You’ve done a fantastic job of painting a vivid picture of the scene with your words. I especially like how you use sensory details like the sound of the waves and the feeling of the wind. Keep up the great work!
Here is mine! The multicolored sky blended perfectly with the clouds, amazing you as you look around the quiet beach. The long rickety wooden bridge gently touched the water as the shack perched on top of it all. The air smells salty but you like it. Sinking your feet into the water makes you shiver and smile, this was gonna be the best beach day ever.
I enjoyed reading your description. Well done!
@@EasyTeachingNet thank you! we are doing a writing class at my school and I have to submit a descriptive writing thing and I'm still working on mine wish me luck!
Good luck!
@@EasyTeachingNet I just got my paper back! I got a one hundred! oh I forgot to mention that the descriptive writing thing was a contest. and for a grade to the people who were doing it. I got FIRST PLACE!!
Thank you a lot I struggle so much with descriptive writing. Thanks a lot!!!
You deserve more than this, You'd fit best at explaining things
0
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html
Thank you for the video! It was very helpful and simple to follow. This is what I wrote after the prompt: The water laid still. It had the coolness and lifelessness of a morgue. The angular pier stretched out in front of her and curled around the fisherman's shack protectively. The wood moaning and shuddering under her feet, revealing it's age. Pale blue and gray clouds coated the sky and the smell of the sea tickled her nose. The cool damp air matched the clamminess of her palms. She listened as the water rhythmically lapped against the legs of the pier. The breeze danced past her, sending strands of brown hair across her face. She felt the itty bits of sand on her cheeks and she took a deep breath. It was as though she could taste the salt and seaweed in the back of her throat.
I don’t know how can people write this good. Perhaps I’m not good at abstract thinking as I had thought..
@@AliJameel-f3u we are all still learning! Your writing shares your unique view and imagination. Enjoy expressing yourself!
I enjoyed reading your passage and especially liked how you engaged the different senses! Thanks for sharing ⭐
Here is my Descriptive writing that I am practicing for school:
The golden dim light shone on the pitch black sky. The ferocious trees covered with white dust, waved at the cold wind. The ground which was once covered with grey asphalt, was not protected with a blanket of snow. Windows opened, letting the cold eerie air come into the dull lit houses. The pitch black sky, roared out the beautiful milk white snow, and the wooden cabin, which was once occupied with caucasian figurines was now abandoned and it lay amidst the magnificent nature's call
I used personification, description and similies in my writing and my goal is to add more senses to my writing and add some more metaphors.
Btw really love your videos.
Warm regards,
School kid
Thank you so much😀❤
THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! I STRUGGLE WITH DESCRIPTIVE WRITING AND THIS HELPED SO MUCHHHHHHHHHHH
I'm glad it helped!
Hi good night everyone
@@enawilliams6366 ya good night man
Yo! Your 😺 is having a big mouth !
@@madedelplace3253 😂
The purple and blue sky sat just above the edge of the waters, forming a vast rainbow that divided the clouds. The sky was peaceful and beautiful and I felt the gentle breeze of winter on my skin. I imagined running through the railings of the bay and jumping into the vast sea, swimming further and further until I couldn't find a shore to rest on.
I like your description!
Cool ideas!
Here was mine :
The dominant cool wind blending with the aurora of the horizon tampered the silent wooden bridge leeward to the vast hills with a home-like beach house in sight being prepared for a night-long film sensation.
This is from my student "MG" who is 11 years old. She and I really liked your video!
The darkened sky gleamed while the ocean mirrored it. The pink was like coral. The smell of the salty air was like a candle in a house, fresh & enlivening. Smoky clouds caused the sunlight to flicker through the air and dance on the glittering water. Footprints in the sand were sunken like ships that washed away into the sea. The roller coaster of a pier twisted and turned, dipped and rose precariously. Quietly the quay slowed and creaked in movement as the wind chimes rang with a peaceful sound.
What a great vocabulary she has!
She did really good!. "The darkened sky gleamed while the ocean mirrored it".
Just brilliant 👏 👌
she wrote it better than me and i am 15
@@laptopuser5971 thats sad
But you not@@EasyTeachingNet
Not as great as others but had to have a go:
The cool evening breeze swirled around me as the salty scent of the sea tickled my nose. The gentle waves lapped against the sand as the wooden planks on the peer creaked and moaned. I shut my eyes and heard, beyond the sunset, the cries of seagulls swooping through the sky. The tranquillity was blissful!
👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏I love it it's great honestly not exaggerating great job
This is amazing!
nice one
GOOD!!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
I was really enjoy the interesting simple story .you helped a lot for my constitution day which this year 5 October 2022 that it's already past with world teachers day and our teacher asked us in grade (6) to write a story using descriptive words which I really found very had on top of it my teacher always complain me about my lazy stories that I really need someone to help me with my stories .💞💞💞💞💞
I've been struggling in my own stories with descriptions of people, places, and objects. I think your video helped to open my mind. I will definitely be making lists of vivid verbs and precise adjectives when I get stuck in the future!
Here's my go at the prompt:
I stretch my arms and stare into the darkening grey and blue sky. On this secluded pier, I recount the many times I've walked across the wet sand and heard the crashing waves against the shore. The memories of sandy seashells turned into necklaces, children's laughter as we build castles in the sand, and the soft yellow blanket beneath my body as I experienced my first gentle kiss under the dying sun fill my mind with warmth. This rickety pier has kept me grounded with its fraying wood beneath my tired bones all these years. As I close my eyes and inhale the salty sea, one last tranquil breath, my lips curve into a peaceful smile and I float, further and further, allowing the light breeze and lapping sea to carry me away.
Great writing!
Excellent verbs and word choice. This elaboration easily made me imagine the situation. Great job!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
@@yashasreray8428 Thanks for replaying and helping me. I really appreciate it.
@@yashasreray8428 yours was amazing, love it.
The sky hid behind the radiant and vibrant clouds painted by the sun's rays. The light peeped from some openings blessing the lake below. On the lake below was station a cabin of wood with a tiny bridge to the shore. The water rippled and plopped and was swayed by the gentle evening Breeze. The waves crashed against the shore like a loud rumble and receeded calmly to the ocean. The friable and gritty sand rubbed against my toes which calmed me like a dream of peace. The cold winds from the sea brought out the freshness and purity within my soul. The smell of the wet sand mixed with the humidity like two fusing together and creating loamy characteristics smell which hypnotized me to sleep.
The clouds blended with shades of pink, gives us peace and calm. The beauty of nature. A long, narrow, brown, bridge beside the sea and on top of it was a small little house. The sea looks calm and the beach attracting us to come! A great day on a beach
😨 woahhh cool 😎
I stepped out on the familiar fine rocks and a sudden scent of salt had rushed towards me. The calming, trashing of the reflected liquid sky against the fine sand. I crouched down with the coolness of the breeze, the warmth of the sand against my skin. I waddled forward in a hurry to admire the scenery consisting of a wooden built pier to my left - with a small wooden shack attached to it at the end - that gave off a fresh fishy and iron stench of blood, but was overpowered by the saltiness surrounding. I then glanced towards the ominous ocean that was far away from ending. It’s ice, blizzard look gave shivers as I shuffled closer. The tints of purple,lilac, hues of blues. Breath taking it was.
Thank you, this was fun :)
Great effort!
Here's mine!
The long, wooden, rickety bridge stretched out across the calm, blue sea. The faint, peaceful sound of water washing upon the shore, is so calming. The salty smell of the ocean filled the air. The feeling of the soft sand under your feet makes you feel deeply relaxed. Clouds cover the beautiful night sky. It's absolutely gorgeous.
Remember, try to keep your writing to one tense and only use another tense when absolutely necessary. This was kinda confusing to read, but good effort.
@@alextheconfuddled8983 mums
That's good but remember to show not tell
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html
Thank you alot i passed my test big fan❤❤️your the best
Well done!
A storm simmered in a gloomy, distant sky. The long, weathered wooden Pier hung over a calm, yet eerily lifeless bay. I was instantly chilled and goose bumps creeped up my rigid spine. The hairs on my neck stood full alert to the impending doom that would incur as night crept in.
As soon as I opened my eyes, I saw a golden blanket which was attached to the mirror- like reflected water with a wooden bridge built over it and a heavenly beautiful house. A tranquil , salty scent of sea with a glittering yellow light over the calm waves.
This is mine
The sky so blue hallows over the ocean also making it blue . The wooden long bridge stretched out to the ocean and a small and peaceful building sits there . As the wind blew you could almost taste the salty air . The ocean calmly drifts to the land making the sand soft and relaxing .
I hope it's good enough 😊
Great writing!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
This is my piece -
The clouds lazily danced across a sea of royal blue and pink in the sky. The cold wind kissed my cheeks and ran its long bony fingers through my hair. I felt the sand grasped my feet , working its way like tentacles through my toes and ankles ; I felt it pulling me down to mark foot prints like sunken ships. The sea only a few inches away was a mirror reflecting the beauty of the sky; the water was like glass smooth and delicate so smooth that I felt like I could walk onto op it. I watch as the tide went in and out as if the water was trying to clasp on to land but always failing. A rush of sea salt filled my nostrils as I took a deep breath in. On my left, there was a wooden dock, its long legs were stabbing through the water as it creaked to the melody of the wind. There was a house, with only one dimly lit light on, which flickered on and off that was near the end of the dock. Everything was tranquil and still. It felt like I was tumbling through a herd of clouds into a sweet dream........
Great effort! Thanks for sharing.
ruclips.net/video/wzSfp6ljR2E/видео.html
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
I really really enjoyed your description. Well done:)
I loved every minute of this tutorial .Thank you for sharing .
The darkening sky was splattered with the deep violet-valvet ink hiding the golden coin in its puffy cotton balls .The rippled seashore sand battering against crash of tidal waves ebbing in and out in its lapping lashes.I could not fathom or ponder or preoccupy my mind with anything other than this bliss of solitude that the happenstance gave me .The plier stretched to a small shack standing as a lighthouse .The scrumptious smoke of our evening dinner from the chimney emanated as a signal from my mother to alight from my sandy boat and bid adieu to the mellowing sun.
Sir can you please rectify my grammatical errors please please
This was a great video! It helped me really understand that what I see when I write needs to engage the senses and evoke feelings. Thank you!
Here's mine:
My toes curl into the damp sand with each step as I follow the purples and indigos dancing along the line of water breaking at the shore. I inhale deeply, sweet briny fresh air fills my lungs as my eyes lift to follow the stark black lines of the jetty along the horizon, painted with the same soft purples and indigo that fade into soft whites of the clouds, hanging low over head and the deep blue of the sunset. A cool evening breeze sweeps over me as I scan the shelter at the end of the jetty. I pull my cardigan tighter against my body, smiling as I remember feeling of the aging timber under my touch from many years ago. My heart swells, I have missed this place.
Well done!
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
I've been struggling in my own stories with descriptions of people, places, and objects. I think your video helped to open my mind. I will definitely be making lists of vivid verbs and precise adjectives when I get stuck in the future!
Here's my go at the prompt:
As I stood on the shore, I looked up at the soft blue sunrise.On my left, the long wooden pier, stretched out into the tranquil salty water.A cold wind blew towards the sandy shore stained with trails of footsteps.
Well done!
This is awesome!
Wow amazing!
The cloudy sky towered this late evening. Sun rays blocked by the thick clouds, save a few red hues. A lonely wooden shack sat attop the right side of a richety dock. It's structure eroding thanks to nature taking it's course. The sea that was fierce before now as still as the sand to it's left, not a soul interrupting the peace that the fall of the sun provides.
Great! Thanks for sharing 👍
The worn wood of the pier creaked under my bare feet as I stopped to absorb the ethereal sight before me. Soft, silent and still, as though I had walked into a painting where the sky's hues blended into violet and the water blurred into the shoreline. My chest rose as the softly chilled air filled my lungs with tranquility, before my feet resumed their journey across the rickety dock stretched ahead of me.
I haven't written anything in 2 years but now need to for a test. Any constructive criticism would be appreciated :)
Thanks for sharing! I enjoyed reading it and I especially liked your use of alliteration.
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
@@_56trapped32_ The overall description is fine,but you should improve your spelling and grammar :)
@@sergiu_d Thanks
Here's mine:
The long deck creaked as I walked across. The sky was dark blue and the clouds drifted gently across the skies.When I reached the shack, it smelled of the stench of fish and alcohol. There was a powerful breeze blowing against the tiny vulnerable shack while the waves were slowly brushing against the shore. After a long day it was time to return to the sweet soft bed like the sand on the beach.
I particularly like the variance in the sentences starting with "When" and "After" --- it breaks up what could be a series of monotonous subject openers.
I also like the combination (dynamic duo!) of "tiny" and "vulnerable" in your description of the shack.
This is totally amazing
When I walked over the long deck, it creaked. The sky was dark blue, and clouds floated over it softly. When I arrived at the shack, it smelled strongly of fish and drink. A strong wind blew against the tiny vulnerable shack, and the waves gently brushed against the beach. It was time to return to the sweet fluffy bed like sand on the beach after a long day. Does it sound better now ?
The lavender sheet of candyfloss floated close above my head. Its distinctly refreshing scent spread around me as the wind whooshed everywhere. The white, pearl-like sun peeked from behind the fluffy cloud adapting the early morning view.
Great effort! Thanks for sharing.
this took me way longer than it should have, this is a short scene out of context that i decided to make up
Snaked strands dangled from a rip-ridden cloak as it waved in the rubble and dust, revealing a rusted buckle. Dotting the leather,
grains of sand tumbled in the breeze, and resided in the crevices of a severed shirt. Buried beneath rested a grave conclusion - a burning crimson stain, pulsating with unsatisfied vengeance. But it was too late to turn back, as the traveller’s pair of embracing pupils could do nothing except stare into the solemn sunset shades one last time and disseminate their final essence before descending into slumber.
A cloak of clouds covered the sky Over that a plethora of birds were chirping..The sounds of shore's and bird's chirping hits together made a peaceful music.the cool wind blowing hited my face .The veiw calmed me as like I'm setting in heaven.
The beach stretched out for miles and a man stood, his feet buried in the cold sand. He held a hand up above his face so he could see since the sun blinded him.
He lived on the beach and the morning light got into his windows. That was why he went outside in the first place.
The wind blew gustily as he stared up at the clouds passing, he felt raindrop on his finger and he stared at his finger then pinched it with his thumb on the same hand and felt that it was in fact a drop of rain.
Should’ve said the morning sun seeped through his glass windows despite the floral lace curtains
The chill breeze brushed through my skin , as I stood on the glistening sand . The water still and calm , reflecting perfectly the scenery before my eyes , the sun disappearing into the sea , painting the evening sky in a a beautiful tint of pink , orange and yellow .
The beautiful blue endlessly stretched across the sky. Rays of golden-pink sunrise peeked through the clouds. The magnificent clear waters spread across the sea, reflecting the colors of the sky. As i stood on the dark black wooden dock, the wind silently whistled as i felt the salty air blow on my face. The peaceful sound of the waves crashing serenaded me into a calm state. As i rested my arm on the sandy balcony, i stared into the misty distance, enjoying the heavenly view.
OE OF THE BEST VIDEOS I SAW IN RECENT TIMES. Mind Blowing. Good work 👏👏👏
Very Good! Great formula that helped me organize all the thoughts. When I want to start a description exercise, I freeze and can't think of where to start. This is a big help. Thanks!
The long wooden dock stretched into the ocean leading to a small fisherman’s house. Surrounded by a cloudy grey blue sky, the smell of salt and seaweed floated from a gentle breeze. The mirror like water reflected the same grey blue sentiment above.
Great effort! Thanks for sharing!
I am in Grade 6 I had my test tommorow but your video helped me a lot to understand the descriptive writing
I have another descriptive writing {I really like this one}
The compelling ceiling of the once occupied castle, caught the attention of tourists visiting the spectacular location.
The sandstone walls which were implanted with the most magnificent architecture and designs threw out the spine- chilling secrets of the glorious fortress. Windows splattered out the bashful sun's golden rays onto the dancing statues sandstone bodies. The tiled floors were composed of the different shades of ginger leaves. The sky and the chalky clouds stood still even though the impatient wind moaned against them. Other sorts of beautiful architecture filled the painted scenery and the charming tangerine trees stood with their brown companions. But what kind of appalling secrets could the chalky castle have been hiding?...
The wind whispered softly through my ears, as if hushing me with a lullaby. I stood there, entranced by the soundless sky, its majestic lapis blue dotted with patchy grey clouds. In the distance, a hut-like house perched on the silky ocean, connected by a sturdy, well-built bridge. As I pondered what secrets the solitary hut held, a wave surged through the caramel-soft sand, brushing against my toes. The sand glistened under the sun, and the air was rich with the scent of coconut.
Here's mine
As I walk through the enchanted forest, I am greeted with the fresh smell of scented flowers. Their bright colours glow in the sunlight.
Chirping birds happily dance around in the sky as the trees waves their arms in excitement.
Then I saw a bright blue water and the golden sand. I can smell the fresh air. When I went swimming in their I can taste the salty Water.
It really helped, yesterday the topic had started in class, and ma'am had given hw to write about an event, the video was helpful !!
best english teacher ever .......
Thanks, I needed this because I have an essay and I have to write about an event. Also the words required is at least 500.
This helps so much thanks I love reading thank you
This is the best video that helped me with descriptive writing. Thank you sooooooooooooooooooo much ❤❤👏
Glad it helped! If you've got anything to share I'd love to read it.
@@EasyTeachingNet my teacher gave homework. So I can share it with you 🙂
Ok here is it
Title: A visit at the forest
It was a wonderful Sunday. Grandma and Mom decided to take me and my brother John to the Forest. We were excited to hear so, we packed our bags and went on the bus. After a long trip we reached at the forest. I can hear the beautiful sinigning of the birds while walking. We went on and saw a tree with BIG JUICY apples so we picked some and taste. The apples were super sweet. After that we reached to a lake and we felt the water smoothly passing by our hands. And guess what, we saw beautiful deers. For a while we saw a beautiful waterfall, it was so beautiful that we took pictures. It was the last of our tour so went back home. I couldn't wait to tell my friends about the visit to the forest.
Good work. I like that you included multiple senses. Your writing took me right into the forest!
Swift wind picked up every strand of hair planted in my head as I walked towards the lonely cabin that sat at the end of the long rickety bridge. With the angry waters so far down and the mist barely making it possible to see, I felt so small. The thunder booming in my ears, a ringing sound lingering in my ears as the my face dampened from the rain.
Great writing!
The soft rays of sunshine shined brightly on our faces , the clear puffy clouds floated in tranquility . The sky was mesmerizing with hints of purple , pink and dark blue . The smell of salt in the air and the sound of flowing water . A long wooden bridge reached upto the secluded rickety guesthouse with tiled roofs and bamboo walls . Faraway , a heap of hills and lush meadows could be seen . It was a perfect place of peace and calm.
The sapphire blue sea howled, almost like it was calling me. My feet buried themselves in the soft, grainy sand as I slowly reached the reflective ocean. The smell of salt consumed my nose and the now disappearing sun made the sea turn an orangey colour. In the distance I heard the menacing creak of the dock swaying. Above the clouds birds squeaked, begging for food. A small crimson crab snapped it hands at me then scurried of back into the yellow sand.
That was all I could think of but I think its alot more descriptive then what I normally do so thanks for this video! ♡
Well done!
PROPS TO THIS PERSON FOR TEACHING US VERY WELL AND PAYING ATTENTION TO EVERY COMMENT U DESERVE MORE SUBS NAD VEIW 😊😊🎉🎉🎉🎉
It was fabulous tomorrow I have an writing exam and this helped
Thank you I finally understand I couldn't understand how much I try Its very easy to your way of saying it
I am new to your video but its so useful and I am grateful. Thanks from UK
Thank you so much for the clear teaching.
Thank you so much tomorrow I have English exam u save my mark u are great.Thank you once more
7:36 "is easy..." Nah mate, it is quite time consuming. As a non-native English speaker, it is quite challenging to pick the precise and most fitting verbs and adjectives.
Thank you sure a clear and concise video. From a teacher in Malaysia.
Glad it was helpful!
"I despise you." The last few words my daughter yelled at me. Occasionally do these words perpetually overwhelm my mind and body. When these words ring through my mind, I calmly embark on a journey to place that holds sentimental value to me... the pier where she last laughed joyously.
The moment I arrive, the picturesque view subdues all my negative emotions. The soft sound of the miniscule waves overlapping one another produced by the ocean is enough to dampen the sound of the haunting phrase in my mind. The soft veil of clouds that gently drift above my in the peach sky remind me of the man I used to be. A man who was overflowing with potential but too conceited to recognise what was truly important.
My note: Im going to be honest, i kind of gave up because i feel unconfident in my ability to convey theses images. Regardless, this was my attempt. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated.
Humongous canopy of dark brown tree branches hung over the tangerine looking swing below it with satisfying greens and raindrops coming from it , looking out towards the beautiful colours of violet, magentas blues merged together creating a enormous colourful landscape, so satisfactory
There’s a mistake when you wrote (hited) it needs to be (hit)
Here's mine
Not great
The cool breeze of the evening ruffled my hair. The seagulls were flying elegantly with their white wings spread out like an eagle . The fresh smell of the blue ocean made me ecstatic and as I walked on the coarse sand , I enjoyed the orange sunset.
This was awesome! I love how interactive it is. Really helps in terms of practicing.
The lucious blue berry sky reflected upon the grey and blue waters. The rickety,old pier meandered along the tranquil waters stretching to the fisherman's shack. You can taste the salt water in the air. The calm winds brushed through my hair softly. I could hear all the birds singing melodius tunes in the trees. The salt water in the air was most refreshing.
Thanks for sharing your description. It's great!
Thanks
DESCRIBING CHRISTMAS:
The fire’s lambent light stole away the velvet-black shadows dancing on the wall.Thyme-filled turkeys sizzled on the oven foil.An angel was perched on top of the tree, glittering with its flash-silver lustre.
I love your videos literally they help me ALOTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I CANT BELIVE YOUR EXPLANATION
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORKKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!😃😃😃😃😃😃
Thanks!
Thanks I’m having a term exam tomorrow that’s why I’m watching and you helped me aLot thanks
thank you. this is the best video about descriptive writing in youtube
A calm and rainbow was almost covered by majority of purplish clouds in which create a blissful and lovely picture on sight. A long, extension of bridge which stretched from the base of the moist, sandy beach to the end of the fisherman's house. Though it was a long extent, it would be a challenge for wanderers walk on the thin, wooden planks with dull colours when they stamble across while they view the lovely mother nature of the atmosphere. A glimpse of fisherman's house could be seen on the reflective pond of water. Through the pond, a light blue sea is seemingly endless that as if it was an illusion.
Diamond lugged her body past the weathered brown door to her home. Her cat, Mr. fuzzy, peaked from under the creaky rocking chair perched in the living room. She mumbled a greeting to her furry companion sighing in exhaustion as she tiredly hung her pink winter coat. After a long day of school she wanted nothing more than to sleep the rest of the day away, lulled by the warmth of her bed. Unfortunately, the heavy book bag resting on her shoulders said otherwise.
She dropped her book bag near the front door when the smell of freshly baked chocolate chip cookies wafted through the air. Her eyes fluttered close and she took a deep breath, inhaling the sweet aroma filling the air.
“Hey baby. How was school?” Her mother asked rousing her from her daze.
“Horrible. But after I eat some cookies I think I’ll feel better.” Diamond answered.
Her mom laughed in amusement her brown skin crinkling around her eyes.
“Okay miss thang. Let’s get you some cookies to help you feel better, and while you eat you can tell me all about your bad day.” Her mom told her heading back into the kitchen.
“Yes!” Diamond cheered following her mom into the kitchen.
She already felt much better.
Amazing!!😮
Great writing!
super
I love it I- it is amazing i never herd a n intriting short im MY life
At 2 in the morning I come walking out to the beach I feel the Cool Breeze blowing on my face as water flows towards me it feels so cold I walk deeper into the water as I walk I stop a nice smile towards the Sun as I catch the birds singing I smile and I look back to my house that is 200 away from me
I love the way you teach, you taught me a lot with this video
Glad to hear that!
The salty smell of the ocean filled the air. Swishing past the palm leaves, the wind grazed through the sky. A coconut dropped to the ground with a loud clunk. Creaking on its hinges, the dock majestically stood against the bright night. Sand flew in the wind right when a fish with silver scales jumped and turned in the air. A sandcastle was in view far away. The deserted beach lay quietly in the night until the sun peeked its rays from behind the clouds.
I like how your imagination added the palm trees. That was unexpected. I also found the juxtaposition of a dock that creaked on its hinges but standing majestically to be compelling.
Bravo!! Easy teaching indeed.
The most important things is that you have full of vocabulary 😌
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html
I exhaled a deep breath while I laid on my cotton blanket that my grandma knitted for me in the third grade. The crunchy sand felt cool underneath me. The gray and blue skies mirrored my current mood. Why did my boyfriend have to end things with me? My eyes closed and I laid back against the blanket. The seagulls squawked to each other engaged in a conversation that I wish I could understand. The smell of the salt water gave me some relief because I felt the tears form at my eyes. I shouldn't have fallen in love with someone who I wasn't supposed to be with.
Great effort!
Thankyou so much.
It’s really helpful. I learned a lot from this
I'm glad to hear that!
Its so useful to learn and good😇🦄🔮😀
Thanks a lot for the video, i really like the way you explained it, i followed your guidelines the day after i watched this for a test, and i got a sweet 5/5 . Really helped, thanks bro
Great to hear and well on your test!
The huge mountains stretched along the straight line as if they were sleeping giants . The smooth flowing river down the valley was glittering as if it was twinkling sapphire . The great and soothing smell of blooming pinkish Lilly created an atmosphere of love and peace . The small droplets coming from the sky touching the wet soil gave out a nice faded smell of soil .
The gray sky filled with clouds moved past quickly as the wind blew them away. The sunset on the horizen was peaceful as the birds retreated to their nests. The lone cottage stood in the water, some distance away from the coast. Connected by a wooden bridge which cracked with each gust of wind. The waves going through the wooden pillars holding the brighe afloat were strong, making the bridge shake with each ram. It seemed as though the whole world was quite except for the ocean and the birds
Don't think you would be reading but still hear me out
In the evening filled with bluish glow. I walked towards my family cottage with a millions of thoughts rushing through my head only to freeze by strangely melodious humming of the shore. I stood their drifted away from my actual path. The cold breeze piercing through my skin along the soft tickling glow I cold hear the lonely sea calling for me.
Plz rate it and help me by giving some improvement advices
Thank u soo much this helped me improve on my discriptive writing✨ ❤❤❤✨✌
Thanks! This was super helpful and professionally-made 😊
Jutting from the hushed coastline, a lonely shack balances on glassy water. The air is thick with a briny breeze that pierces the surrounding stillness. Lumbering clouds roll into infinity as the sun raises her sleepy head.
Here's mine:
Beneath the puffy clouds, the azure, aquatic, atarxy ocean floated and drifted on the golden, honey-comb sand. A rickety, wooden pier grasped out into the mouth of the sea and reflected in the mirror-like water. The gentle breeze brushed across my face as my feet started to sink into the vast pile of beautiful sand.
Tip: Try not to repeat words too much. For example, "sand". Try and replace the second appearance of "sand" with something like "gleaming grains" or smth
The wooden bridge creaking and moaning whilst you were marching, the sound of your bags and weapons rustling with every step, the weeping of separated children, the smashing of the waves against hard wood and metal, and the way you kissed me for the last time, I can still recall how everything that had happened. Even now, my throat felt hoarse as the salt in the air accumulated and the withdrawn tears trickled, my chest weighed me down and suffocated me while my arms stretched out to grab nothing. I still remember how I felt as I watched you, how i broke down, and how i pleaded, how I watched you leave me, and how you were snatched from me as the boat escaped from my view, leaving only the glass-like indigo waves, the dark looming clouds, and only the breeze to hold me.
I felt gratitude as this helpful video has helped me with my tough exam tommorow.
Good luck!
@@EasyTeachingNet Thank You!
I'm years late but still going to put mine in the comments, I'm doing my GCSE's this year so if anyone has any feedback that would be so useful! (in an exam I would write more but for now I just did a short passage). Great, helpful video! :)
Beckoning me hypnotically, like the voice of a soft singing siren, the hazy water called out for me. As the sun began to fall further and further from my grasp, colours began to merge. The evening sky whistled in a saccharine, serene tone, strips of ashy grey clouds wrestled with the blotches of soulless purples and blues. Tickling my nose, the cold, crisp air penetrated my senses. Squelches of wet, sludgy, sand squirmed beneath my feet, the bitter wind laughed at my lonesomeness. As I lugged myself along the long, rickety, wooden pier, it were although even the warped wood couldn't bare my company - trembling as if it were going to break. I sat, my feet dangling into the chilling water - at that moment, staring into the mirror- like water, I realised I really was the epitome of lonely. Glacial tears fell from My face as the sinister sky spat as me.
I really like 'sinister sky'. Thanks for sharing!
@@EasyTeachingNet thank you so much!!! :)
It was a peacefull but gloomy morning, I watched as the gentle waves lapped against the wooden post. The grey and blue clouds slowly drifted across the sky as the calm winds blew. Staring at a wooden log floating across the water, I stretched out my arms as I took in the tranquility of the seaside.
This is very very helpful thank you so much :)
Thank you sir for helping us!!!
The clouds hovered quietly like a duvet on the salty sea. Leaving colours stripped off from the brittle wooden struts. A shack from the rims of the bay secluded and afloat filled with echoes of despair.
I like 'echoes of despair'!
The outstretched clouds cruised across the sky, sailing slowly like boats on a calm sea. Caught in a picture-esque moment, the roaring sea was overcome by a gradual stillness. Under the great blue sky and over the quiet, deep sea, stood an old wooden house with two broken windows and a missing door. The windows creaked slowly as the gentle winter air whispered sweet nothings. The path leading up to the house was missing planks of wood in multiple places. A plank dangling on one end from the path, holding on for dear life, succumbed to a strong gale and was inevitably castaway to the warm embrace of the Pacific with a splash. The tranquility of the moment was finally broken as a single seagull flew by, wailing for it's flock. The squaking of the seagull was immediately followed by a wave that noisily crashed against the sand. The serenity that had momentarily settled over the dock could never last for long. The waves washed away footsteps and initials written with merry fingers as Helios finally dragged his chariot across the sky, leaving nothing but clouds and murkiness behind.
would really appreciate constructive criticism or any feedback if youre still reading 🫶
I like it! Your use of personification in your description of the dangling plank was clever and effective. Thanks for sharing.
thank you so much for this video!
here's mine, didn't really follow the picture dot to dot, that's something I should work on.
There’s the beach. The gentle prickling of my skin from the winds thrashing through the sky; solace. The squawking flocks of birds seems lost in silence. The thin clusters of fabrics beneath the ominous void above, is mirrored with the scattered sparkles of whites below; dancing and chanting sirens on the wave. The infinite expanse of azure waters filled with suffocated packs of purple-blue crimson flowers, panting.. grasping…, destined to never resurface on the shore. The warm sand spilled out of the feathered grass embraced in moments.
I’m devoured by the embracing womb, my eyes unable to escape the entranced abyss of the echoing Scarlet sun; staring at me. Her muted howls syncing over my pulsing fragile heart; listening, bum.. bum…
I like your writing- it's very emotive!
He starts to walk across the old wooden planks built throughout the dock and to the pier, the flowing of the cool breeze of the wind blew into his hair, as it flungs to the side covering the face. He looks throughout the clouds above, deeply concealing the beautiful yellow-golden glowing hue of the sun that would’ve illuminated around the vast blue ocean and the grey clouds. Let me know how my sentence is! Thank you
I like how you have used imagery to help immerse the reader in the scene! Thanks for sharing ⭐
@@EasyTeachingNet is there anything I should work on?
Be careful to not change tense. Most of your writing is in present tense ('starts to walk', 'he looks', etc), but a couple of times you switch to past ('the wind blew', 'as it flung').
@@EasyTeachingNet so I shouldn’t change my tense too often?
There are times when a different tense can be used, but it's generally best to stick to the same tense. To take your example, you're describing a scene from a single time period, but you're using different tenses to do so (present and past). Maintaining consistent tense helps readers follow the timeline of your story.
This is awesome. I know i have some ideas but you just blew my mind with this explanation. Thank you so much
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html
This is perfect! Exactly what I was looking for, I can't thank you enough.
Great to hear!
ruclips.net/video/fWRuXw8fMCc/видео.html