Wow! I thought i was the only one who likes wolves stories. Sometimes i do wish there was real werewolves coz they really knows how to love and cherish their mates.
I enjoyed it. The only thing that really stood out is the rapid change of POV with no break, no notice. Only after a few sentences did i realize that the story was being told from a different person
Ooooh that makes perfect sense! thank you for telling me! A couple others have mentioned the same thing but I now realize I hadn’t really understood what they meant until you phrased it like this ! Thank you!!
I am usually harsh on wolf shifter stories so the fact that I genuinely enjoyed this one is a pretty big deal. I even felt that the end was a little bittersweet because their mating kinda forces Logan to go back on his morals, which were an entire field of green flags!
I love that you enjoyed this story despite usually being harsh on the genre! Big compliment indeed !! ❤️❤️❤️ and yes about Logan! I think it’s because while I do enjoy the fated bond trope and I know it’s a huge part of this genre, I often feel like realistically these bonds could bring in a lot of problems and I love to explore that in my stories. Like here ok she loves him but she’s much younger he can’t just ignore it ‘because bond’!
I know I didn't enjoy the fact that he knew he had a mate and yet he went and cheated on her with another woman. I think males can have some self-control
He isn’t cheating though. He and Kira aren’t together at the time. His whole thing is that he doesn’t want to be forced (or to force her) into a bond which is why he rejected her (and also because of her age). So he is technically free to do what he wants I believe. That said it does sting for Kira for sure!
So glad I found this story. It’s great. I can’t wait to listen to the next one. The voice of the narrator is nice too. 😊 I have listened to Pocket fm recently and honestly some stories do the different voices for each character and it doesn’t work.
Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed!! I did try the different voices for each characters in some of my stories but yeah, i kind of feel like it takes away from the story instead of being more immersive actually!
The wolf he was cursed into didn't look like his wolf, his scent and everything was changed, he did not have multiple wolf syndrome lol, that was a good one tho.
I'm enjoying this storyline & how Kiara's described❤ --Too many of these stories are full of profanity that seems outta place for a traditional society that has a hierarchy.
I totally get that! Personally i don't mind sex scenes and can even really enjoy them but in my opinion they need to serve the plot and move the story along. If it feels like they're just 'there' as a fun bonus then sure why not, but in that case i personally think they should be used sparingly. That's just my personal preference though, some of my friends LOVE them haha! :)
I really enjoyed this book! All have a crazy twist and I'm here for it! I've listed to 3 so far!!!! Going to the next! And I'm letting my girls know and sending them a link lol thank you for the upload!
Sweet, simple, and to the point true love story. Enjoyed it too the end keep it going. Short stories or the best stories leaving you wanting more. Thank you for sharing your talent with us for free.
I don't understand. His packmates don't know how their alpha looks in his wolf form or has he got multiple wolves. Like a "Multiple Wolf Form" syndrome. How can they not recognize their own alpha??
@@lilywritesstuff but that is not mentioned anywhere. Not even in the wish. He was only supposed to lose his humanity and turn to a beast if he didn't mate with the FL. That's what in the fairy tale too. This point is a bit ambiguous!
That’s true ! I don’t show the moment where the wish is made, so I could have mentioned it at the end to clarify that it was part of it! It felt obvious to me (cause yeah why wouldn’t they recognize their alpha otherwise lol) but that’s cause I have to entire story in mind, it’s really not obvious for a reader/listener! My bad!
@@lilywritesstuff I find it really obvious and liked it very much! And well written. There were lots of clues that this probably wasn't his usual appearance. Really ❤ it. Thanx for sharing 😊
I don't know if this counts as feedback but I think the 3rd person monologue is bad for the story. It's confusing to figure out who is talking because sometimes the voices change to indicate it's not one of the main characters talking
@@Shenelle-k3v it absolutely counts thank you for telling me! I actually like it a lot like this to be honest, with a secondary character being the narrator (this allows me to use that same secondary character and narrator in all the stories from this same series, tying it all together in one larger narrative). But that said, others have expressed the same thought as you and you’re right it does complicate things. I do think it can work but it seems I need to work harder to make it clearer if I want to keep using this narrative method! And if I can’t find a way then… I might give up 🥲
Thank you! ❤️ And yes I plan to! 🤗But it won’t be for a little while cause their story will end this series and I want to write some more episodes first!
There isn’t a real order, they’re meant to be standalone with recurring characters (the magician and Iris). But this is the order I wrote them in if that helps: 1. ruclips.net/video/EPV4WT_K0g4/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary 2. ruclips.net/video/5XzmzDHZxMk/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary 3. This one, The Alpha’s rejected mate. Other stories on my channels (Haunted Love, The Vampire Bride, I’m the Villain aren’t part of this same series)
Yes, he's part of a series of standalone stories, but with recurring characters (so him and Iris).here's the link to the full playlist if you'd like (you don't have to listen in any particular order, and you don't need to listen to all of them to follow along) : ruclips.net/p/PLBzQqoG09d9Ka0brtbPWm0Q4MM0JcxaMw&si=8pKf2xb72Y2snpec
Is it possible to read this story? English is not my first language, so I find it a lot easier to understand if I can read the story while listening to your audio :-)
Unfortunately I haven’t published them anywhere else in writing yet ! 😢 I will at some point for sure ! Some videos avec auto generated subtitles but I don’t know how helpful that is… Sorry about that! 😞
I hate when authors write characters stupid. Who knows that this wolf might be special. They have no proof that the wolf did anything to the alpha. Smh
The point of view seemed to switch between the shopkeeper and the lady 'nonwolf' wolf ... it made it hard to know who was speaking and confused the story. It was better than an AI narrator but having heard really great narrators that bring stories to life this one was too monitone sounding. I felt like i was jumping around and not sure who was who for most of it but it had a cute idea/story to it. I think it has potential to be a great story with some tweeking.
The story is part of a series of standalone stories, in which a new character come to see the Magician to make a wish in every episode. So these are not exactly a part 2 but they're part of this series: ruclips.net/video/5XzmzDHZxMk/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary ruclips.net/video/EPV4WT_K0g4/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary
every author have their lore but for me shifters can turn into wolves, amongst other powers like strength etc. And here the heroine is a shifter who can’t shift (kind of like a squib is a wizard who can’t do magic in the Harry Potter franchise). He’s 31 (12 years older than Kira)
@@subasinicole6067 Time is precious so is this worth yours is hard for anyone to answer but if it’s a matter of being worried about the ending it is a happy one 😉
There’s a whole thread about this already in the comment section if you want to check it out for more detail ! But long story short : because his curse makes it impossible.
If you enjoyed it, try this video from the same series:
ruclips.net/video/rhopX33MW5E/видео.html
I'm trying to get to the second one in the series that says it's available. what is the name of it please dear?
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Wow! I thought i was the only one who likes wolves stories. Sometimes i do wish there was real werewolves coz they really knows how to love and cherish their mates.
I enjoyed it. The only thing that really stood out is the rapid change of POV with no break, no notice. Only after a few sentences did i realize that the story was being told from a different person
Ooooh that makes perfect sense! thank you for telling me! A couple others have mentioned the same thing but I now realize I hadn’t really understood what they meant until you phrased it like this ! Thank you!!
@@lilywritesstuff it's not bad. Just confusing and off-putting. I did enjoy the story
This was so well written! Although it is a familiar genre, this story has a lot of originality. 10/10 would recommend!
Thank you so much!! So kind of you to say! ❤️❤️❤️
That was a nice change of pace. Most werewolf books go a cliche path, but it was a nice fairytale story. Very much enjoyed the selection. Thx ❤❤❤
Thank you so much!! ❤️ glad you enjoyed it!! (And yes big fairytale fan over here 😀)
I am usually harsh on wolf shifter stories so the fact that I genuinely enjoyed this one is a pretty big deal. I even felt that the end was a little bittersweet because their mating kinda forces Logan to go back on his morals, which were an entire field of green flags!
I love that you enjoyed this story despite usually being harsh on the genre! Big compliment indeed !! ❤️❤️❤️ and yes about Logan! I think it’s because while I do enjoy the fated bond trope and I know it’s a huge part of this genre, I often feel like realistically these bonds could bring in a lot of problems and I love to explore that in my stories. Like here ok she loves him but she’s much younger he can’t just ignore it ‘because bond’!
@@lilywritesstuff EXACTLY! I'm really looking forward to listening to more of your stuff!
I know I didn't enjoy the fact that he knew he had a mate and yet he went and cheated on her with another woman. I think males can have some self-control
He isn’t cheating though. He and Kira aren’t together at the time. His whole thing is that he doesn’t want to be forced (or to force her) into a bond which is why he rejected her (and also because of her age). So he is technically free to do what he wants I believe. That said it does sting for Kira for sure!
So glad I found this story. It’s great. I can’t wait to listen to the next one. The voice of the narrator is nice too. 😊
I have listened to Pocket fm recently and honestly some stories do the different voices for each character and it doesn’t work.
Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed!! I did try the different voices for each characters in some of my stories but yeah, i kind of feel like it takes away from the story instead of being more immersive actually!
I enjoyed it!!. A different wolf story. Thank you for sharing your talent with us for free, keep writing😊
Thank you very much!! Glad you enjoyed ❤️❤️
Adrian deserved so much better.😩😩
Indeed 🥲
The second one of this series that I've played.. I truly love how short and sweet she made them. Thanks. One to number 3
This is my second time listening to this, and I almost skipped it when I realized I'd heard it before. However, it's got me hooked all over again!
Haha love that!! Thank you ❤️❤️
Is there another??
Iris is in love with Adrian. That’s why she could see the vampires face and didn’t fall for him
@@phillykiki7320 yes! ❤️
The wolf he was cursed into didn't look like his wolf, his scent and everything was changed, he did not have multiple wolf syndrome lol, that was a good one tho.
Love, love, love this series. Anxiously waiting for #3. Thank you for sharing.
Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it!!
I'm enjoying this storyline & how Kiara's described❤
--Too many of these stories are full of profanity that seems outta place for a traditional society that has a hierarchy.
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it ! ❤️❤️
I did a double take. I’m Kiara 😅😂
I liked that this wasn't all "porny." Thank you.
Glad you enjoyed it!! ❤
I agree ,the gratuitous sex scenes are so cringe 😬😵
I totally get that! Personally i don't mind sex scenes and can even really enjoy them but in my opinion they need to serve the plot and move the story along. If it feels like they're just 'there' as a fun bonus then sure why not, but in that case i personally think they should be used sparingly. That's just my personal preference though, some of my friends LOVE them haha! :)
I agree we don't need sex in every other paragraph! Thank you for being considerate of making it a story that ones can enjoy & not skip 1/2 the story😊
I got lost in the story; it's so beautifully written and narrated 😍
Thank you so much!! ❤️
Immensely enjoyed this wetewolf romance especially the lack over bloody gore and battles.😢
Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed !
I NEED, and i mean i neeed a story with Adrien and Iris.
@@lunanight0214 one day I promise ❤️❤️❤️
Great writing I loved it so enjoyable 💯❣️
Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed !! ❤️
I really enjoyed this book! All have a crazy twist and I'm here for it! I've listed to 3 so far!!!! Going to the next! And I'm letting my girls know and sending them a link lol thank you for the upload!
Thank you so much!! That’s kind of you to say! And I love that you enjoyed the twists , they’re what I like to write the most !! ❤️❤️❤️
Sweet, simple, and to the point true love story. Enjoyed it too the end keep it going. Short stories or the best stories leaving you wanting more. Thank you for sharing your talent with us for free.
Thank you so much for your kind words! ❤️
The storyline was good. Enjoyable listen
Loved it ❤
I really loved this, thank you Lily!
My pleasure!! Thank you for watching ! ❤️❤️❤️
I really like it. But now i want to know more about Adrian's story...does he and Iris have a book???😮
I don't understand. His packmates don't know how their alpha looks in his wolf form or has he got multiple wolves. Like a "Multiple Wolf Form" syndrome. How can they not recognize their own alpha??
No they don’t recognize him because of the wish!! Normally he isn’t white and he can communicate with his pack in wolf form!
@@lilywritesstuff but that is not mentioned anywhere. Not even in the wish. He was only supposed to lose his humanity and turn to a beast if he didn't mate with the FL. That's what in the fairy tale too. This point is a bit ambiguous!
That’s true ! I don’t show the moment where the wish is made, so I could have mentioned it at the end to clarify that it was part of it! It felt obvious to me (cause yeah why wouldn’t they recognize their alpha otherwise lol) but that’s cause I have to entire story in mind, it’s really not obvious for a reader/listener! My bad!
@@lilywritesstuff I find it really obvious and liked it very much! And well written. There were lots of clues that this probably wasn't his usual appearance.
Really ❤ it.
Thanx for sharing 😊
Yay glad you enjoyed it and found it clear ! 🤗❤️ I guess it depends from reader to reader then! (Or in our case from listener to listener haha)
Darn good book.😊❤❤❤
Thank you so much ❤️❤️❤️
Love this story Aldo. Thank you!
Yaaay! Glad you enjoyed this one too! ❤️
Great Story
Thank you! Glad you liked it ! ❤️
Love your stories. Amazing work. Keep it up.
Thank you very much! Glad you’re enjoying them ! ❤️
Good story. I enjoyed it thank you
@@marlastevens2996 thank you! glad you enjoyed !! ❤️
Loved the story. ❤
Thank you!! ❤️❤️
Nice one, i love the story
Thank you so much ! 🥰
I enjoyed the story very much and the narration.
@@odalyscorominas5098 thank you so much ! ❤️
I don't know if this counts as feedback but I think the 3rd person monologue is bad for the story. It's confusing to figure out who is talking because sometimes the voices change to indicate it's not one of the main characters talking
@@Shenelle-k3v it absolutely counts thank you for telling me! I actually like it a lot like this to be honest, with a secondary character being the narrator (this allows me to use that same secondary character and narrator in all the stories from this same series, tying it all together in one larger narrative). But that said, others have expressed the same thought as you and you’re right it does complicate things. I do think it can work but it seems I need to work harder to make it clearer if I want to keep using this narrative method! And if I can’t find a way then… I might give up 🥲
Adrian clearly was inspired by Howl! ❤❤❤
@@spriken yes !! One of my fav films of all times ❤️❤️❤️
Can't wait to spend more time in the ARM extended universe 😅
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Thanks for sharing ❤😅
You’re welcome ! Glad you enjoyed it! ❤️
Thanks for sharing I liked the story.
Thank you, glad to hear it! ❤️
1:33:57 what the what? I was not ready.
Are you going to write a special book for Adrian and Iris?
I love all your books 😊
Thank you! ❤️ And yes I plan to! 🤗But it won’t be for a little while cause their story will end this series and I want to write some more episodes first!
@@lilywritesstuffthank you for the reply ❤
My pleasure thank you for your interest! ❤️
@@lilywritesstuff Aaaaaaah omg omg I ship them so hard! I can't wait for Adrian and Iris' story ❤❤❤
@@chioink yaaaay glad to hear it! ❤️
Cute story
Thank you ❤️
Is this story listed on goodreads?
No not yet! I was thinking of listing my stories there but haven’t had the chance yet!
Thanks!
Omg thank you so much ❤️! it’s the first time I’ve ever received a super thanks and I feel like a star 🤩🤩🤩!
Thank you.
@@liezlpiek my pleasure!
Is there a book about iris and Adrian????
No yet! But one day! 😊
Will someone tell me the order.? I want to read in order
There isn’t a real order, they’re meant to be standalone with recurring characters (the magician and Iris). But this is the order I wrote them in if that helps:
1. ruclips.net/video/EPV4WT_K0g4/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary
2. ruclips.net/video/5XzmzDHZxMk/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary
3. This one, The Alpha’s rejected mate.
Other stories on my channels (Haunted Love, The Vampire Bride, I’m the Villain aren’t part of this same series)
What happens to the magician? Is there another story of him somewhere?
Yes, he's part of a series of standalone stories, but with recurring characters (so him and Iris).here's the link to the full playlist if you'd like (you don't have to listen in any particular order, and you don't need to listen to all of them to follow along) : ruclips.net/p/PLBzQqoG09d9Ka0brtbPWm0Q4MM0JcxaMw&si=8pKf2xb72Y2snpec
What do I do now?! Ive already listened to everything!
Ahaha new stories coming soon! ❤️
The price of the spell 😅😅😅😅😅😅
Hahaha 🤣🤣🤣🤣
CHILDREN!!!!!! Jeeeeeeeezam!😅🤣🤣😡💀
Thank you ❤
@@sarahdavis9568 my pleasure ❤️
Does anyone know If this is the full book? It looks short.
No it’s full! I write my stories directly for RUclips so they’re not all novel size !
@@lilywritesstuff thank you for answering! I can't wait to listen
Hope you enjoy 😊
Is it possible to read this story? English is not my first language, so I find it a lot easier to understand if I can read the story while listening to your audio :-)
Unfortunately I haven’t published them anywhere else in writing yet ! 😢 I will at some point for sure ! Some videos avec auto generated subtitles but I don’t know how helpful that is…
Sorry about that! 😞
I hate when authors write characters stupid. Who knows that this wolf might be special. They have no proof that the wolf did anything to the alpha. Smh
@@snl4742 I mean to be fair he’s not part of their pack (or so they think) and attacked them first but you know we authors do love some stupid! 🥲
Thank you for reading but .....why..... its hard to catch on due to the monotone
I didn’t read it lol but noted! Thank you for the feedback !
@lilywritesstuff Thanks for your hard work. Towards the end, it had more emotions.
Your voice is very soft & pleasant, please increase the sound/volumn ❤
Will do!
❤❤❤❤❤🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉 Thank You so very much.😊
@@lilywritesstuff Enjoyed, different twist, please keep writing 🎉🎉🎉🎉🎉❤❤❤❤❤
Poor kira
🥲
She should've left the pack..poor her
Is there more to the story?
There’ll be more from this series (with the magician etc) but no direct sequel if that’s what you mean!
So can anyone tell me the age gap please
12 years!
Is this abridged?
@@whiteeWolf no no this a complete story
The point of view seemed to switch between the shopkeeper and the lady 'nonwolf' wolf ... it made it hard to know who was speaking and confused the story. It was better than an AI narrator but having heard really great narrators that bring stories to life this one was too monitone sounding. I felt like i was jumping around and not sure who was who for most of it but it had a cute idea/story to it. I think it has potential to be a great story with some tweeking.
Thank you for your feedback! ❤️
I like this storyline it gives a delicious twist keep it up I like how it's unlike the others I've heard
@@leolatowers519 thank you!! Glad to hear it ! ❤️
Is there a part 2 of this story??
The story is part of a series of standalone stories, in which a new character come to see the Magician to make a wish in every episode. So these are not exactly a part 2 but they're part of this series:
ruclips.net/video/5XzmzDHZxMk/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary
ruclips.net/video/EPV4WT_K0g4/видео.html&ab_channel=Lily%27sRomanceLibrary
what's the difference between shifters and wolves can't she be a wolf? and i thought he is 20 or does it mean he was 20 when he rescued her
every author have their lore but for me shifters can turn into wolves, amongst other powers like strength etc. And here the heroine is a shifter who can’t shift (kind of like a squib is a wizard who can’t do magic in the Harry Potter franchise).
He’s 31 (12 years older than Kira)
1:48:28 what?😂😂
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Why such the age gap my kid is 18 and im 40. Not cool
That’s a 22 age gap with your kid. Here in the story the age gape is 12 years. And I know couples with that age gap that are very happy 😊
What is the age difference between the two ?
12!
so is this even wroth my time? Dos she ends up with him at end?
@@subasinicole6067 Time is precious so is this worth yours is hard for anyone to answer but if it’s a matter of being worried about the ending it is a happy one 😉
@lilywritesstuff so she ended up with the guy who rejected her first?
No spoilers 😇
So monotone, good thing it's really short
Eh. Not the best story. Doesn’t really flow well. And the narrator isn’t the much of a reader. Inflection in all the wrong places. Not impressed
Sorry you weren’t impressed ! Thanks for checking my story out in any case ! 🙂
I love your response@@lilywritesstuff
Thier alpha , but they cant recognize him. Plus why can't they talk to him telepathically. Contradictory world building
There’s a whole thread about this already in the comment section if you want to check it out for more detail ! But long story short : because his curse makes it impossible.
Thank you❤
My pleasure! ❤️