Here we got a perfect example of where showing doesn't work for me as a substitute for telling. "She slapped her arms to her sides". Without knowing what that replaced, I would have no idea what this is supposed to show me. When I try to imagine it, it just looks silly. This is something that happens on average around once per book I read . I usually get over the first time it happens. You might lose me as a reader if it happens twice.
Watched this and your sex scene and fight scene vids recently and they have seriously changed the way I'm reading and understanding the ~craft~ of books by established authors. I'm now able to spot how good authors use characterization in fight scenes / sex scenes / argument scenes / etc. as a means to drive home the emotion. So helpful!
Love your live edits! Thanks for doing them. They're super insightful and helpful. Your channel is the exact balance of the casual/chill but get it together I need
I need a real-life comparison. What level of escalation would it be when you're picking fights with tall people while being drunk? And then what would be the next step?
10:50 I like it, she's almost nervous to ask instead of just immediately confrontational. It almost feels like shes holding back tears as they tries to ask. Different characterization but probably more realistic.
Yes, I am now. Episode one - My thoughts. You are right. Malcolm was such a low grade villain, that he is a good enemy to start out with, if they're going to escalate the threats gradually. Start very small indeed, then work up to the truly terrible ones in time. I like Wynonna quite a lot already. I'm privately thinking she should be redheaded (don't judge me). Possible problem - From episode one, I found it disturbing that Waverly thinks her idiot boyfriend is worth shooting anyone over! I have to wonder if she's evil or warped. Perhaps she'll prove to be untrustworthy.
I binge watched both seasons that are on Netflix UK. Wow! What a finale! My one and only (small) criticism is that the widow who looks a bit like a spider should have had a better build up as to why she wants to overthrow the demon. Wynonna herself remains my favourite character, but Doc is still identifiable, and Jez gets a point for sort of serving as an audience surrogate, albeit in an odd way.
I’d say think of their maturity level and why it’s like that. Most 9 year olds wouldn’t know much or fully grasp things like sex or relationships etc. If they do think about why they do. What happen to them that has forced them to understand these things? Kids also tend to be very blunt when speaking. They don’t often beat around the bush when speaking unless they are trying to get their words together. So in an argument most likely (depending on the subject) there points won’t be fully logical on an adults end but on there end they sound totally fine. I hope this makes sense.
Im writing a scene where the girl mc is pregnant. She is out with her friends on a day trip because they have just finished college. They just parked the car, when the girl mc sees her friends brother elijah(hes also a vampire)- fighting a bunch of vampires. She goes to help fight the vampires. She ends up geting shot badly. He takes her back to his house. Hoping his sister (is a witch)- could help. Girl mc tells elijah to promise to save her baby not her but they canr save the baby. When she wakes up and finds out she is angry and sad. She cant look at elijah. Idk how to write the tension and argument they are going to have. Please help!
☼ 4:00 dont end up a failure like the writers on supernatural [Googles] *15 SEASONS!! WAIT, IS THIS STILL RUNNING?* holy flying ships. o_0. there is a top *100 worst eps of JUST supernatural!* i bit off more...im in over...even for one of my cmts, there is too much here to cover. im sorry internet. im sorry.
I thought this was a step-by-step guide to writing someone you disagree with a passive-aggressive letter. Obviously, I clicked.
there's an idea
1) I love your intro 2) we stan your writing advice!!!
1) thank u I was wondering how it hit 2) thank u twice
Here we got a perfect example of where showing doesn't work for me as a substitute for telling. "She slapped her arms to her sides". Without knowing what that replaced, I would have no idea what this is supposed to show me. When I try to imagine it, it just looks silly. This is something that happens on average around once per book I read . I usually get over the first time it happens. You might lose me as a reader if it happens twice.
Watched this and your sex scene and fight scene vids recently and they have seriously changed the way I'm reading and understanding the ~craft~ of books by established authors. I'm now able to spot how good authors use characterization in fight scenes / sex scenes / argument scenes / etc. as a means to drive home the emotion. So helpful!
I mean, I gave up on Supernatural years ago too, but if it went on for 15 seasons, they must have been doing *something* right we can learn from.
that makes no sense; it went on for 15 seasons (far too long) because the writers had no idea where they were going anymore
You and Jenna Moreci read my mind with these videos today and yesterday
we actually got together for a "what does R.L. Davennor need" meeting last week
@@HannahLeeKidder I FEEL SEEN
I tend to way overdescribe these sort of things. This was super helpful though
Love your live edits! Thanks for doing them. They're super insightful and helpful. Your channel is the exact balance of the casual/chill but get it together I need
Thanks for watching!
Wynona Earp deserves so much more love than it gets
Wynonna Earp deserves the entire world and more
I got Gloria’s work right after this video... mud is cool... but Bones is the shit! Thanks for the recommendation.
Hell yeh!
This is super helpful and I appreciate the use of ASL counting. XD
I need a real-life comparison.
What level of escalation would it be when you're picking fights with tall people while being drunk?
And then what would be the next step?
knife
i really love that you show written examples in your videos. its a blessing and i appreciate it. your videos are the best :))
10:50 I like it, she's almost nervous to ask instead of just immediately confrontational. It almost feels like shes holding back tears as they tries to ask. Different characterization but probably more realistic.
Extra tip: If you're writing from something personal, don't use the argument just to make the character that represents your ex to be an asshole
Something to share with the class there, Vinny?
@@HannahLeeKidder nooo, I never done that at all
Oh this was right on time for me
Great video. I absolutely love writing argument scenes, personally. 😃💝
Thanks! They're fun
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slorp it up
Using your tips for my haikyu!! Fanfic :D!
okay, but who's watching Wynonna Earp and does anyone wanna talk about it
Yes, I am now. Episode one - My thoughts.
You are right. Malcolm was such a low grade villain, that he is a good enemy to start out with, if they're going to escalate the threats gradually. Start very small indeed, then work up to the truly terrible ones in time.
I like Wynonna quite a lot already. I'm privately thinking she should be redheaded (don't judge me).
Possible problem - From episode one, I found it disturbing that Waverly thinks her idiot boyfriend is worth shooting anyone over! I have to wonder if she's evil or warped. Perhaps she'll prove to be untrustworthy.
Scratch that. Willa is the one with terrible taste, not Waverly. I mean Bobo... Seriously? Ughhhh!
I binge watched both seasons that are on Netflix UK. Wow! What a finale! My one and only (small) criticism is that the widow who looks a bit like a spider should have had a better build up as to why she wants to overthrow the demon.
Wynonna herself remains my favourite character, but Doc is still identifiable, and Jez gets a point for sort of serving as an audience surrogate, albeit in an odd way.
Wynonna Earp is the beeeeest
Thanks, this video was really helpful.
apparently my sun conjure loves you. by which I mean she screams non-stop when she hears your videos. I choose to believe it's a compliment.
oh my god I love her tell her
@@HannahLeeKidder I told her and she made direct eye contact while pooping. I don't know that that those two events were related.
Your video really helped :D
0:12 Best intro on RUclips
Someone should tell cable news folks that they don't have to all be yelling in an argument
this is random but does anyone have tips or thoughts on writing a 9 year old character?
I’d say think of their maturity level and why it’s like that. Most 9 year olds wouldn’t know much or fully grasp things like sex or relationships etc. If they do think about why they do. What happen to them that has forced them to understand these things? Kids also tend to be very blunt when speaking. They don’t often beat around the bush when speaking unless they are trying to get their words together. So in an argument most likely (depending on the subject) there points won’t be fully logical on an adults end but on there end they sound totally fine. I hope this makes sense.
Depends on their maturity and IQ
When's your next live stream ?
Soon as I hit 10k! Share my vids with your friends to expedite the process
Im writing a scene where the girl mc is pregnant. She is out with her friends on a day trip because they have just finished college. They just parked the car, when the girl mc sees her friends brother elijah(hes also a vampire)- fighting a bunch of vampires. She goes to help fight the vampires. She ends up geting shot badly. He takes her back to his house. Hoping his sister (is a witch)- could help. Girl mc tells elijah to promise to save her baby not her but they canr save the baby. When she wakes up and finds out she is angry and sad. She cant look at elijah.
Idk how to write the tension and argument they are going to have. Please help!
i'as jus looking at your eyes😅😅
☼ 4:00 dont end up a failure like the writers on supernatural [Googles] *15 SEASONS!! WAIT, IS THIS STILL RUNNING?* holy flying ships. o_0. there is a top *100 worst eps of JUST supernatural!* i bit off more...im in over...even for one of my cmts, there is too much here to cover. im sorry internet. im sorry.
There ARE bad ways of writing stories. Writing SHIT is a BAD things. Writing GOLD is much preferable.
ok
@@HannahLeeKidder lol how do you always have the perfect response to everything
I'd say, she bit off the end of her question
Wanna be friends?
no
super weird story submission