Now thats what I'm talking about. Great story and totally believable that a symbiotic relationship like this could exist in our future. Keep up the good work.
MORE MAX AND ROKAR!!!!!! GREAT STORYLINE!!! recommend you include an incident where Rokar has to fight his own kind and see his reaction and whether he will betray Max!! Great story!!!!
You storylines are engaging but you miss relevant story elements. I've noticed this twice. Here, you speak of a war dog found on the battlefield. Yet, when the characters engage in direct conflict with the enemy no war dogs are engaged. You failed to either include other war dogs in the fighting (which could have given you the chance to find a female companion) or offer an explanation or question why there weren't any others engaged. In the other story of an assassin targeting an enhanced human, you gave the assassin long talons which he never used in hand to hand combat. Don't give characters traits that you do not intend to use to further the story. A gross lapse in editorial due diligence.
Great boy finds dog story. Except for the note below. Really, a doctor uses 'practised precision'. Most of these stories could be shaved by 30% with the elimination of such useless throwaway phrases. A doctor, by definition, has trained to be a doctor. To practice using knowledge and understand accuracy.
It would be better if it was more like, "the doctors precise hands, delicately..." And other phrases similarly involving training. However those should only be used once in the story, even if used per character. Also repeating phrases like "the tension in the room"
This reminds me of the end of the war in Nam! The US left the German Shepherds that often gave their lives for their masters! The military left them to be butchered by the Vietnamese!
Really, a doctor uses 'practiced precision'. Most of these stories could be shaved by 30% with the elimination of such useless throwaway phrases. A doctor, by definition, has trained to be a doctor. To practice using knowledge and understand accuracy.
Sorry, few things i think i should point out. Firstly, the over exaggerated size of the dog, that seems to adjust with the time of the story. If he's as large as was stated at the beginning, you wouldn't kneel to pet him...ever. Secondly, the dog originally had scales, not fur. A point that made me curious about the story to begin with when it was revealed. For example, scales would allow a tougher hide as well as less wind resistance for running.
Great Story! I'm a dog lover and have always believed a man and his dog is an unstoppable team
Thank you all for a well done engaging story. Will enjoy listening to this again soon.
One of the best stories. Nothing like a good dog.
A solid story, thank you.
I'm just glad that dog made it.❤
Perfect voice for narration. I'm not usually interested in Sci-fi's but this was good. Thank you.
Now thats what I'm talking about. Great story and totally believable that a symbiotic relationship like this could exist in our future. Keep up the good work.
This is officially my favorite story so far. I’m a dog guy so anything with a hero dog’o I’m down for. Great story keep them coming.
Great story. Gotta love a Good Dog. Thank you.
Dogs are often better people than some people I know. Always faithful and unstinting affection.,
Excellent story and very good narration. Thanks much.
Started off with a good story line then devolved off course into unbelievable situations with unbelievable solutions and time lines.
It's fiction duh😮
That was an AMAZING STORY!!
And told so very well!
Thank You so very much!!!
Wish there would be a part-2
I enjoyed this story. Thanks
MORE MAX AND ROKAR!!!!!! GREAT STORYLINE!!! recommend you include an incident where Rokar has to fight his own kind and see his reaction and whether he will betray Max!! Great story!!!!
Great story. Very engaging.
Well done.
Its s good dog story.
Excellent story! Well done!
great reading well done
Thank you for the story!
this was a great story, i enjoyed it a lot. keep up the great work sir
ABSOLUTELY LOVED THIS STORY ❣️❣️❣️❣️
You storylines are engaging but you miss relevant story elements. I've noticed this twice. Here, you speak of a war dog found on the battlefield. Yet, when the characters engage in direct conflict with the enemy no war dogs are engaged. You failed to either include other war dogs in the fighting (which could have given you the chance to find a female companion) or offer an explanation or question why there weren't any others engaged. In the other story of an assassin targeting an enhanced human, you gave the assassin long talons which he never used in hand to hand combat. Don't give characters traits that you do not intend to use to further the story.
A gross lapse in editorial due diligence.
Also took the war dog and made him a service dog then back to war dog. WHAT?
Also took a war dog and made him a service dog and all were worried then back to wardog! What?
Can you please do a story with the doom slayer
I really like the story. Your AI, not so much.
They are asking a medic officer to do a whole lot.
A boy and his dog...
AI narrative sucked but the dog is cool.
Great boy finds dog story. Except for the note below.
Really, a doctor uses 'practised precision'.
Most of these stories could be shaved by 30% with the elimination of such useless throwaway phrases. A doctor, by definition, has trained to be a doctor. To practice using knowledge and understand accuracy.
It would be better if it was more like, "the doctors precise hands, delicately..."
And other phrases similarly involving training. However those should only be used once in the story, even if used per character. Also repeating phrases like "the tension in the room"
This reminds me of the end of the war in Nam!
The US left the German Shepherds that often gave their lives for their masters! The military left them to be butchered by the Vietnamese!
Horses in WWI! US MILITARY higher upside have no heart or empathy. Seems that way forever and forward.
Is the narrator real or a I, the voice is really good, if it is real can you give his name
terrible poor dogs ,cruel fate.
They left over 150 military dogs in the Afghanistan withdrawal too. 😢
Really, a doctor uses 'practiced precision'.
Most of these stories could be shaved by 30% with the elimination of such useless throwaway phrases. A doctor, by definition, has trained to be a doctor. To practice using knowledge and understand accuracy.
Why do you keep repeating your stories.
For some reason the end of this story reminds me of Ukraine and Russia.. Long live Ukraine 🇺🇦
Sorry, few things i think i should point out. Firstly, the over exaggerated size of the dog, that seems to adjust with the time of the story. If he's as large as was stated at the beginning, you wouldn't kneel to pet him...ever. Secondly, the dog originally had scales, not fur. A point that made me curious about the story to begin with when it was revealed. For example, scales would allow a tougher hide as well as less wind resistance for running.
The description said Rokar had scales and fur.