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I really think we should standardize a small context section at the beginning so people know what you are going for with your beginning chapter. Because there's a few of these I'd like to respond to but I don't really know what they're trying to go for.

Things to know before the story starts This is going to be taking place shortly after the destruction of Starkiller base. They will be thrown into year two of the Clone Wars. I will be using a mix of canon Legends and making things up since we don't have solid numbers for things. The idea behind this is the Supremacy to be basically the backbone behind the first order (it is such a cool ship if you're going to write another part please look into it just a little bit). This is the first time I've ever written something that wasn't for school or a D&D game so I tried my best :). now let's begin Part 1/ Chapter 1 disorder Shortly after Starkiller bases destruction the first order regrouped. Kylo Ren with a bacta patch on his chest and face walks into the main Bridge of the supremacy. As he looks at the captain of the bridge, Captain Maarniks. Kylo Ren says in a angry tone "Captain give me a fleet check in" captain Maarniks hands shaky would respond " Of course we have the full stalked and manned Supremacy, we have managed to create one Super Star Destroyer with 10 Star Destroyers and 20 other support ships, and we also have 150 Star Destroyers and 200 support ships on standby, all these ships are using the basic Loadouts currently. We should be expecting the rest of the fleet to arrive shortly". Kylo Ren would respond smirking now "Good we need to destroy those Rebels for what they did and I need our information officer to get me information on this ray character we clearly don't have the full story. I will be in my quarters disturb me only if something actually important is going on." As he would leave to his quarters to plan. Kylo Ren would open a hologram pod. He would access the old specs for the rebel fleet. He knew the problem he would have there's no doubt if they got the jump on the rebels they could win in a fight it's just how to keep them there. Normally they could bring some interdictors but it would take a little bit for it to activate and the rebels could get away in that time. Then he realized if they could track them through hyperspace then they could get the drop on them after they stop and think they're safe. They're going to have to follow a hyperspace lane all they would have to do is find a way to tell when they stop because they will be following right behind. But before he could explore this idea any further he got a call from the bridge "Sir you might want to come down here and see this I can't quite explain it" As Kylo Ren walked to the bridge he saw what looked like to be a black hole of light enveloping their Fleet. Kylo Ren would quickly say "Get us out of here before it envelops the whole Fleet!" one of the deckhands would say " I can't sir it's pulling us in and jamming are hyperdrive". As the light approached the Supremacy Kylo Ren thought, are the legends about what Luke could do true? Then everything turned white. As they were thrown out of the white light their fleet was scattered. Kylo Ren knew he had to take control of the situation as he would look at Captain Maarniks "What's the status of our Fleet.". Captain Maarniks would look at the screen and then nervously respond " sir a fleet seems to have been scattered by whatever pulled us in, we all are in the same general vicinity but the ships trajectories seem to have been thrown off we already have had one star destroyer hit another.". Kylo Ren would take a half a second to think about what to do "Tell the fleet to get in formation but if they have to get out of it to avoid a collision tell them that is acceptable. Communications officer I want you to be sending a ping to our allies and find out where we are.". Captain Maarniks would respond 5 seconds later "The orders have been relayed to All Star Destroyers and support ships.". But before Kylo Ren could respond with anything one of the deckhands would yell out " one of these star destroyers has lost control of their engines and are about to run into two other ships they don't have enough time to get away, what should we do sir?". Kylo Ren would think about it for 2 seconds "Are our weapons operational and ready to fire?" " Yes sir" "Issue an order to evacuate on that star destroyer then start firing upon it.". After that the ships managed to get in position around the supremacy. After all the ships got in position kylo Ren would ask "How many ships did we lose.". Deck officer Captain Maarniks would respond with " 10 Star Destroyers and 15 support ships.". Kylo Ren would then look at the communications officer "Where are we?" The communications officer nervously glances down and then would say "I'm not quite sure sir we are in a inhabited system but our systems cannot communicate with the HoloNet for some reason.". Kylo Ren looked angry and then would look at the rest of the deck officers "Then what can you tell me about the inhabited system.". One of the officers would respond " The second planet from the star seems to be being defended by old separatist battleships 35 Frigates, 20 Destroyers, and 15 Carriers.". Kylo Ren gave an evil smile and then laughed "Jam their Communications and send the fighters and start moving the fleet towards them. I want this planet to be ours!". And without another word the deck was a hive of practiced perfect movement. The enemy ships tried to put up a fight; they scrambled everything they had but it was only a matter of time before their defenses were destroyed. Things that could be expanded upon from here what planet is this?(I was thinking a planet from the mid or out of rim but nothing of too much importance) How are they going to react to finding out they are back in time? They have the construction yards for the supremacy but how are they going to get fuel(maybe some hit and run tactics to steal some or maybe they take over a Foundry world from the separatist I don't know) Kylo Ren is way out of his depth lightsaber combat wise compared to every other faction how will he have to adjust(training from Darth Maul or Asajj Ventress this is the second year of the Clone Wars where she gets betrayed by Count Dooku?) What will they do with the planet are about to take over?(will they have to change up their tactics after they figure out they are back in time and this is the only planet to their name?) All interesting places to expand the story I will be interested to see where this goes. (This store took so damn long to write lol was really fun though)

Really cool stuff man!

the music drowning out the narration honestly fits with the tone then anakin learned how to go super saiyan

The story begins on the Planet Of Naboo, Where a Trade Federation Blockade is occuring. A Republic Cruiser is entering the Lukerhulk, containing Kermit The Frog, Count Dracula, Bryan Millis, and Mark Renton. The flight was Chaotic. Keep the story going with more Star Wars Actors Other Roles

Part 6

Hey I was already working one of these for the other video it's just taking me a little while cuz I got busy lol

Part 6

Can you do a What if Rahm Kota Died but Shaak Ti Survived The Duel On Felucia and took Rahm Kota’s place as Starkiller’s New Master and took over what was left of Rahm’s Militia?

great stuff like always, I wonder how Anakin will react whe he sees Coruscant overrun by the Empire "cult"

Part 1: "Wheels Of Steel" A heavy metal theme can be heard faintly backstage. The crowd is in suspense, just waiting for their champ to come out and defend her title. The announcer begins to speak. "Good evening, ladies and gentlemen! Get ready for your favorite champ Elaine "wheels of steel" saxon to paint the death bowl with a fresh coat of gore! Let's hear it for the champ!" A loud engine roars to life as saxon rides her hover chopper to the center stage. She stops and raises an extremely muscular arm into the air and begins her rampage as waves of contestants move in to fight her. One by one, they fall by her hand until the blinding light engulfs the champ. Saxon is immediately transported to a small unfamiliar room. "Where am I? Is this someone's room?" Saxon looks around to see many metals and pictures. She can't make out the language, but a dogtag lays adorned atop a battle damaged helmet that says, "Zahv." Saxon also sees a full-length mirror and begins to check her appearance to determine if she is dreaming or not. She, in fact, sees her 7-foot muscular frame and beautiful purple scales. There is also a bit of salad still in her razor-sharp teeth as well. "I get the feeling I shouldn't be here. I don't want to get arrested again. I'll lose my title if I go back to prison." she nervously steps out of the room to be greeted by many unhappy guards Edit: spelling

I can't wait for part 6!!! But if I wake up in an strange ship i would check the computer at first to find out what time is it before i make a move.

I can’t wait for part 6! Subscribed and Liked!

Obi-Wan: Bro wake up, what? Empire? Vader? Order 66? Bro what are you talking about? We're fighting in the clone wars, let go into battle!

Take your time. Quality is far more important. Some of the youtubers I follow upload videos months or YEARS apart. Good content is worth the wait. Vader has learned Sith Lightining! The Jedi are going to have a problem when it turns out that the Sith Master they've been looking for had been replaced by another, far more powerful one. Yet he still has his greatest weakness: crippling fear of losing his loved ones. Anakin's decision to get the hell away is entirely reasonable, given his limited knowledge. If his plan succeeds, he's in for a disappointment when he attempts to set course for Coruscant and the astromech/navicomputer returns no such planet...

3:10 I mean, he's not *completely* wrong in that assumption. The Sith *are* technically a cult..

Star Wars Story with Unique characters: Name: Sith Rebirth Narr: Takes place after Return of the Jedi. Nothing to do with the main characters from the movies. Chapter 1. (page 1) For the recyclers in Star Wars, they always generally did well because of all the scrap ships everywhere after constantly blowing each other up. But change in government is a particularly good time for a certain higher class recycling business that cleaned out buildings....especially in Coruscant. Boorgan and Cress were a partnership that cleaned out unwanted things from evacuated buildings....the best ones the high class and government buildings. This was one of their times. “I'm telling you, Boorgan....we're going to be so rich after this!” Cress boasted on their way back to a building they already started cleaning out the other day. “The last time one of these things happened, I was involved 20 years ago, when we became the empire. It was glorious, I'm telling you. And we're here again!” “Alright, calm down, Cress...don't get your skin wrinkled.” Boorgan told him. “You get too excited you're going to cause unwanted attention. This is our stuff, we don't need competition.” “I get it, I get it. But you have to see some of the stuff I got yesterday from this place. And this is the second day, now. Remember the first dibs rule we got on individual runs. I got something that you're going to lose it if you see it.” Cress boasted. “Yeah, I got a few things myself where I went at that mansion. We'll have to compare later.” Boorgan muttered. “Let's just keep our head in the game and focus on this, now. We can do show and tell later.” “I get it, I get it...” Cress said. “That's why I brought you in the business, Boorgan, I needed someone a little more level-headed than me.” He laughed.

Can we make up a story on "what if Anakin could quicksave" the idea is that being the chosen one he has partial acess to the world between worlds and so he can go back in time to a set point whenever he chooses

Hey take your time, I'm loving this series and I'd rather you take your time to make it good!!

"only to then demonstrate his unlimited power, his unlimited DECEIT" thats such a good line 😂😂

What if the Dragonborn was in One Piece? Prologue Pt. 1 He had done it. Dovahkiin had finally achieved victory over Alduin. All he had to do was wait for his final battle so he could return to Sovngarde to feast forevermore with his predecessors. However, the All-Maker had different plans. "Contact the friend of the Skaal and deliver this message. Your task is not yet complete. There are more foes that must be defeated. Meet me in Sovngarde for your final instructions." Frea jolted up with a look of bewilderment on her face. It had only been a couple of weeks since she and Dovahkiin had spoken with each other. Frea went to the basin in her home to splash some water in her face in order to drive the sleepiness from her eyes. She then sat down at her desk to write what would probably be a very confusing letter to Dovahkiin. Dovahkiin Skaal-Friend The All-Maker wishes to meet you in Sovngarde, where you defeated the World Eater. He says that your task is not yet complete. There are more foes that must be defeated. Beyond that, I do not know what he wants. Make haste. Time is of the essence. Your eternal ally, Frea Frea then sealed the letter with a magic rune that would only release when in Dovahkiin's hands. And with that done, she geared up for the trip to Raven Rock and set out. After three days, she arrived in Raven Rock. Thankfully, Captain Gjalund was there. "Captain Gjalund, I need you to deliver this letter to our mutual friend, Dovahkiin. I'm afraid that time is of the essence," said Frea. "Fear not, we are now headed back to Windhelm, and I shall personally deliver your letter," Gjalund replied. Three Days Later Through the use of messenger hawks, Captain Gjalund found out that Dovahkiin was in Windhelm. "Thank the Nine," he muttered. Dovahkiin Skaal-Friend was a very busy man, leading the Thieves Guild, the Dark Brotherhood, the College of Winterhold, and the Companions. He also had very little time for personal pursuits. However, he was able to devote some of his time to ensuring the continuation of his legacy, and that is what he was doing when he received an urgent knocking on his door. "I'm glad I caught you at home," Gjalund said excitedly. "I have a letter for you from Frea." Dovahkiin instantly knew what was going on. "Here's some gold for you and your crew. Words can not express how much this means to me." Dovahkiin then handed a purse with 5,000 gold coins to Captain Gjalund. As soon as Captain Gjalund left, Dovahkiin called on his acolytes, ordering them to escort the second in command from each of the guilds, from the Dark Brotherhood, Nazir, from the Thieves Guild, Karliah, from the Companions, Aela, and from the College of Winterhold, Tolfdir. When the Lieutenants of each guild arrived at the predetermined meeting spot, Dovahkiin called the meeting to order. "You all knew this day was coming. To Tolfdir, the master wizard of the College of Winterhold, I leave the Archmage's robes, The Black Star, The Staff of Magnus, and the keys to my old quarters Try to integrate the College with the rest of Skyrim and pledge your services to High King Ulfric. To Karliah, I leave the Guild Master's Armor, The Amulet of Articulation, and the key to the Tribute Chest. I also want you to pledge your services to High King Ulfric. Steal from the enemies of Skyrim, especially if they're allied with the Dominion. To Nazir, I leave the Ancient Shrouded Armor, the Blade of Woe, and this task, find the next Listener. Just like the other two, I want you to pledge your services to High King Ulfric. He still has enemies who want him dead. Eliminate those enemies. To Aela, my most trusted ally, I leave Wuuthrad, the Harbinger's Armor, and these quests, build a secondary location in Windhelm and guard High King Ulfric with your lives. I look forward to seeing you all in Sovngarde. May the All-Maker guide each of your steps." Dovahkiin was on his way to Skuldafn when he heard the roars of two more allies, Odahviing and Paarthurnax. As was customary, Dovahkiin and the two dragons greeted each other with the fire breath shout, "Yol Toor Shul!" Causing a fire tornado for a short while. "Drem Yol Lok, Odahviing and Paarthurnax. Why are you here?" Dovahkiin asked. In his semi cryptic manner, Paarthurnax responded, "We are here because you are here. We know that the All-Maker is sending you on your final mission. And we wish to join you." Dovahkiin pondered this for a few moments before responding, "Odahviing can come with me if he wishes, but you have responsibilities here on Tamriel. You must teach the other dragons to live in harmony with men and mer. But if you must come, I will ask the All-Maker to reincarnate your soul where I'm at, wherever that may be." Paarthurnax seemed to be taken aback by the choice of words, but he relented and said, "Su'um Arkh Morah. Breath and Focus Dovahkiin." Soon after, Dovahkiin Skaal-Friend mounted his ally, Odahviing. "Please take me to Skuldafn," he said, and with that, Odahviing took off.

My friend, quality over quantity. I would rather wait between uploads for an amazing story rather than just pumped out drivil

I love the community story idea! I would suggest maybe a different thumbnail b/c I think I saw it and scrolled past it 😢

LET’S GO!!!! Btw you’re really quiet and I have my headphones at 90% Either that or Costa is loud.

Hell yeah I’ve been waiting for this! Keep up the great work!

Don’t apologize for the time taken my friend. Focus on the quality first. Quantity will come with time. This is another good chapter. I look forward to seeing where we go from here.

I watched the vid, I thought it was a great idea. This is the only channel willing to try and have the commenters come up with story ideas. For me, I personally do prefer star wars at a Star Wars channel. But you also offered people could submit their own ideas if they didn't agree with yours. And that was fine, so I tried to submit a chapter 1 for Star Wars with unique characters. But.....my chapter was too long or something, the comment section wouldn't allow me to submit the reply. So....with the comments so limited, I was thinking if you could maybe offer an email system, or a blog, something somewhere to properly place these chapters for you to retrieve, and possibly use in a video on your channel for all to see/hear....maybe that would work better. Otherwise, these chapters people submit might be so small no one will probably be able to grasp the characters being developed in the stories submitted. That is my suggestion. Then when that chapter is mentioned in a vid, people can submit the next chapter. With enough people trying to right the next chapter, maybe it could even develop in competition where people vote for the best 'next chapter', then you turn the winner into a video. This could end up becoming something pretty cool....in my opinion.

I wanted to submit a chapter 1 of my own idea from the Star Wars universe, with unique characters. But it wouldn't let me reply because the chapter was too long. Maybe you could set up an email or something for this experiment that people could submit and you could create videos to read them out or something. Cuz I'm not sure how to submit my chapter.

I found this channel a little while back, but I want to give you feedback on what I think can be improved or how to make it more engaging. Most Star Wars what-if channels are pretty low quality, but I see a lot of potential for you. So here are some suggestions to make you truly stand out more: Your music choices are fairly good, but they tend to be somewhat repetitive. You want that dark undertone given what's happening, but try to give it some variety that adds different elements other than just that dark humming sound. But, there was at least one choice for music that made the scene hard to listen to. The music at the 16:42 mark took away from the scene since it feels like it's not taking itself all that seriously, which is a stark contrast with the rest of the story that you're presenting. Add more voice acting scenes, and work on improving your voice acting. This is an element that many stories try to use. Many use A.I as a crutch, but it comes across as lifeless. You have a pretty deep voice and you speak clearly, so with some work from RUclips for improving your voice acting, I can see you doing very well in that area over time and it would make the engagement so much more interesting. The images tend to be stale; try to give them some life. Perhaps add some movement to the bodies within the image when your characters interact with one another or for scene interactions in your narration rather than just giving movement to the image itself. In regards to views: Try to keep your upload consistent and at least once a week. Nothing kills the views on a channel faster than an inconsistent schedule and videos that only occasionally pop up, and I'd try not to keep *too* long on one story; you can observe the views on each video tending to go downwards, videos that contain many parts for the same story tends to die no matter how good it's. So keep that in mind if it seems disheartening when the views go down over time for a series. But you're an extremely good storyteller, and I love how you keep things (At least to the best of your abilities) realistic with how the characters would really interact with the what-if premise. Many storytellers try not to deviate from Canon to the best of their ability, but that gets dull quite fast. I at least want to see how the galaxy at large changes from these major storyline changes given from the premise. ;)

I love this Channel so much! I missed your last video because ive been working overtime nonstop but i will definitely smash like and comment.

Keep up the good work! I do enjoy your story line. Thank you!

What if Count Dooku *was* General Grevious? Instead of Grevious, Dooku suffers a horrific injury and is forced into the suit originally reserved for Dooku

I've been looking forward to this! My suggestion for what to call the comment-chain storytelling is just "Relay-Storytelling"

I’m so excited! It should be a crime to be this underrated with such splendid ideas and good quality videos. Love it!

I wonder if force healing is going to come into play for the Anakin trapped in Vader's body.

finaly <3 i've been waiting 3 weeks dude <3 hope you'll do more episodes :D

Hey everyone, thank you so much for all your support. Check out the video I was referring to here. Let's make our own story!! ruclips.net/video/3gF5mn3ZSac/видео.html

I don’t want to rush you but seeing the upload pacing of the previous parts being only in the same month. I am kinda curious on what’s taking a longer amount of time. Of course, take all the time you need, a good story must not be rushed.

Part 1: In the Overloading system collection - 5MCD, everything was controlled by the government. From the moment of your birth to the last thought on your deathbed, the Zukherians decided when you would eat, sh*t, and work. I have had enough with this system, and soon this recorder will be the only piece of evidence that these dimensions ever existed. I understand that when this tape is found, I will be made out as the villain who killed the system and murdered so many innocent people for the sake of my justice. I will not regret it at all, looking back at the time I spent in the Glayhite caverns of planet Muhrika, I too often reflect on the cold night’s post teleportation passage working at our local fast food restaurant with my co-workers. I didn’t get to choose my job, the government chose it for me as soon as I turned the age of 16 and got my Zukherian teleportation passage. I was not happy with the choice the government made for me, but I knew if I refused their proposition my family living on planet Puphkeri would be jeopardized. Although I hated it at the time, that job was the best thing that ever happened in my life. Because of that job and the friends I met, I can stand here today and tell you the story of this withered world, and why I am choosing to destroy it.

Everyone, please check out this video I made, its a crazy new idea I have for us working together to make our own story. I think it could be super fun if you guys got involved, it doesn't take that much effort from you and it seems the algorithm really is not pushing it out. ruclips.net/video/3gF5mn3ZSac/видео.htmlsi=t2boOJvdkWc4BT0C

Everyone, please check out this video I made, its a crazy new idea I have for us working together to make our own story. I think it could be super fun if you guys got involved, it doesn't take that much effort from you and it seems the algorithm really is not pushing it out. ruclips.net/video/3gF5mn3ZSac/видео.htmlsi=t2boOJvdkWc4BT0C