Back in High School, I wanted to become a filmmaker, I looked up all film school of the country (France) and it was really expansive, at least too much for me, so i didn't even try, thinking you couldn't do anything without going to film school. Now ten years later i'm diving back in that passion, and realizing I never heard about someone who went to film school, and had a good experience about it! Feel free to share the pros and cons that you encountered in film school i'm very curious about your experiences!
@@rhaegosnow1133 I can't say Film School is useless, but it's not necessary. Cinematography is an art. Everyone has a different path. A piece of paper will not tell you are a good storyteller, your work will do. A lot of directors and people who make the entire world of cinematography a living doesn't have a film school career. In fact, if we think the movie pioneers didn't go to any school, because they didn't exist. To name a few directors: Michel Gondry, Christopher Nolan, Agnés Varda, Julie Tamor, Billy Wilder, Akira Kurosawa, Frank Capra, Kubrick, Terry Gilliam, Herzog, Almodovar, James Cameron, Tarantino, David Sandberg and Robert Rodriguez (you should search some videos of him talking about cinematography) Now imagine if this people who born in a era where the information and movies was so exclusive could do it, why we don't now that information is almost everywhere? Talking about my experience in my film school, here in Argentina it's public (I mean almost free) I realize the best thing in a film school it's the people and connections you get there, friends that I would never met staying in my bedroom all day. I learn something, yes of course, but because of me, in the end of everything it's you learning by doing, making mistakes, staying curious and keep doing. I had a lot of classmates who finished the career but they are doing nothing. Some people doesn't even know how to grab a camera or edit a simple video but it's not the school's fault. Also I will say a lot of film schools are very classic, they are not updated to this era, they will teach you only one way to make cinematography and this era is demonstrating that Cinematography can be applied to almost everything because it's an art, not only an industry. Hope this helps, sorry if I have a bad english, it's not my first language.
You’re also missing the “rich parents” part. So many filmmakers have trust funds to purchase equipment and attend film school, etc. They don’t need investors because they have daddy McMansion
While you meet people try doing animation, if you can’t draw maybe try stop motion. You can do it by yourself, even though it is a LOT of work. If you get really, really creative on how to built the set and puppets for stop motion you can even do it in a very low budget.
The typographer is important! Its a metaphor showing how he struggles to assemble words and statements. He's literally building them letter by letter and he's surrounded by repeated characters! It feels very fitting that he's a typographer
It’s fitting, yet it’s stylistic. It isn’t an element that changes his actions or his beliefs within the story. It’s nice to know and it’s a nice stylistic element. But I don’t consider it “core story.” The story could work if he had a different profession. It’s just nice that he is a typographer. Hopefully that makes sense.
@@TylerMowery Yeah I understand that I guess. I have heard from others that every aspect of a movie should in some way revolve around the central idea of it. So in that way it's important that his job represent his central struggle. If he was a barista 'just because', then it would be a waste of run time. But with his job is typography, it makes his struggle tangible in a new way to the audience, even if it's subconscious. I agree it doesn't contribute to the progressing the story. But it's important for building out the universe.
@Doneandgone We don´t know that He doesn´t know that. Maybe he knows and that´s the reason why he is learning Sign Language, even if the short makes us believe that he is learning it to overcome his speaking limitations.
Video Breakdown *Myths:* 0:53 Myth 1: Short Films are too short to be meaningful and dramatic 1:07 Myth 2: there isn't enough time to set up the story 1:35 Myth 3: Stunning cinematography, witty dialogue, and cool concepts will create a good short film even if the story isn't good. 2:20 Stutterer *Structure* 1. 3:11 Finding an Idea (find a concept) 2. 3:36 Building our main character and what they believe (one character will usually push the story more than anyone else, what does the character want, what do they believe, and what is their conflict) Build a philosophical conflict 3. 5:52 Building other characters in the story that also have their own problems 4. 7:32 Narrative Structure 5.7:48 Fundamental Elements of Structure 7:56 Story Circle 12:14 Crafting an ending 14:04 Analysis of the film 17:57 important: (no one will care about simple external obstacles they only care about how your characters beliefs come into conflict in the story so now we go to another scene) 20:15 Climax of the film 21:08 Why Stutterer is a great short film (fantastic short film since it has a strong philosophical conflict good structure and an ending that works perfectly) *NOTES:* a short film needs: - philosophical dilemmas - ethical dilemmas - moral dilemmas *good dramas have characters that* - *a character struggling with their own beliefs as they come into contact with the world* *One of the biggest important elements of a good drama is that characters action must be challenged characters heading towards what they want or getting what they want should always come at a cost this keeps the conflict heightened* hope this helped!
I always say that film schools need to teach this. They give us everything about how to make feature films, but we don't have the money nor the time to make them. SO TEACH HOW TO MAKE SHORT FILMS, at least how to write them, as you did
Find a college or university that does creative digital media, it covers short film production and general camera use for all kinds of scenes, and photography too. Also some include advertising and promotion for them when on no or low budget. Very helpful, if your in the UK, Swindon college does a great course on it.
Dude, you can find everything there is to know nowadays without school. Learn to be independent and figure stuff out. You’re not gonna make it in the industry if you aren’t able to hustle and figure things out yourself or if you don’t have any natural talent or common sense.
I just googled your name and saw some of the info on your short film - well done! I can see from the synopsis how you were influenced by this video and by Stutterer, and you took those concepts and used them to tell your own story. That's really cool. I'd love to see Fat Jessie some time (I just googled it and the results were a lot of Pokemon fetish drawings so I had to get out of there). Congratulations on making your movie!
Half of it is bullshit. And people that want to write won't look on youtube for it, they'll write. He is literally talking about things that a writer doesn't think of. A writer writes and the story going to unfold from his thoughts. That's all. NO WRITER going to think about things, that this guy is talking about. Writing is not something you can learn. And it's a sudden thing. I didn't write anything new for a few months now. But for example once I had a thought about a shot where the paper boat goes down a river and then things come into your mind and I ended up with a boy who lost his brother and still playing with him in his imagination. I'll not talk about how the paperboat comes here but it plays an important part and it is currently in production. What you MUST learn are the rules. Know the f... differences between a shooting and a spec script and don't mix them up. See tons of amateurs with their trash and nobody going to read their "script" as mistakes pop out and you KNOW that it's already bad! Someone who can't write a script properly CAN'T write a good story. They think they can and what they write is good but that's just the Dunning-Kruger effect..
This is priceless information (no doubt about it!), but most people are not interested in creating stories. Generally speaking, the majority of folks are rather more keen on witnessing and enjoying them....
I never thought I would ever write my own short film by myself but I finally did it! I wrote the whole thing on my own and can’t wait to film my scary movie with some friends this summer and share with y’all!
I've been trying to write a graphic novel script for about 5 years, together with my brother. It's a hard process especially now that we don't live in the same house anymore and have day jobs and studying that comes first. we were mostly missing the very important middle part of the story, but I really think you flipped a switch in my head thanks to your this video and the one about writing conflict. I guess it finally clicked. I'm gonna present my ideas to him tomorrow, but no matter what my brother thinks of what I just thought off, at least we now have a conflict that we can adjust until we both like it and an actual plot that we can base it off! Thank you so much!
@@wonderstorms4030 Yeah, we discussed it a bit. our story has three main characters, each with a different goal, but initially they also had different enemies and different conflicts, which made it three different stories, and that's not what we wanted. So basically we changed the story so that the opponent of one character became the main antagonist, but that their actions would create a different conflict for each character to deal with. My brother was still a bit hesitant about rewriting a lot of his characters, but he agreed that something needed to change and that my ideas do in fact solve the issues we were having. We're still looking into if we can keep more of his writing (since I already do 90% of the writing, It's a bit unbalanced to change his writing into mine too), but at least we aren't stuck anymore!
I went to film school as a movie manager/producer, this was one of the greatest story breakdown, we as small independent creators are easily discouraged when in comes to bringing ideas to life, as it asks to write films with very low to no budget comparing to the blockbusters we study and breakdown in school. This is a great reminder that a great story; doesn't a big budget, but a good sense of writting. Thanks very helpful !
Tyler, man, you did it again. Great essay! I have been thinking of writing a short film these days, and then bam! Here's the perfect video to help my mind get clear.
I've been wanting to write short films ever since I was 15, and Curfew came out and won the Oscars, and I was just mesmerized by how insanely good the writing was, I wanted to be able to do it myself so badly. Thanks for this video! Brings me one step closer.
Never wrote a Story or Short Film; but after listening to this Video, The Inspiration and Motivation is Strong! Your Method of Teaching is hands down the Best I've heard thus far. Thanks for this Exceptional Video!
writing screenplays & scripts can help improve on dialogue & experimenting in different writing mediums can help you in ways you don’t always realize. go for it!
OMG I LOVE STUTTERER. One of my all-time favourite short films. Thanks so much for this video. This will be very helpful for writing short stories too.
I've never made a movie or even wrote one before in my LIFE!!!! But I have a very very abstract mind topped with brilliant movie ideas just lovely ideas I've never thought about it because I don't know how to this video helped thanks a lot
You should probably start writing. I wouldn’t start with your dream movies, I’d start with other stuff you come up with, and just start writing. Trust me it helps a lot to just get into the motion of writing.
In my film studies course, I have to write a screenplay for a short film, but the teacher hasn't really explained to us how to even begin doing that, so this video helped a lot!
The great quality of this essay is how it focuses on the inner plot. Most other resources seem to mostly emphasize the outer. This has me thinking about how the two inform one another. Excellently delivered.
Out of all the guides, essays, interviews, breakdowns, how-to’s, etc., this is the video that have taught me the most! This is a super effective way to teach how to write! I would like to see more videos like this one if you have examples of films where they might have had a different approach/process/method for writing the film. Like maybe it was an aestethic or something Else that was the starting idea, so how would you then go about from there, etc. You are a really really great teacher!
I love how every character shown has some level of depth to them, even if not having the same amount of screen time as Greenwood. Man, I love this video so much. It was very informative. Thanks a lot.
I will attempt to my first short film in a few weeks from now. I am taking just a bit of a different approach to the circle formula and see if it'll work out. Good luck to those of you starting off or doing other films! Much love!
This is an incredibly clear and articulate break down of what it means to tell a story. Thank you so much for putting in your energy to share. Truly grateful : )
I have a vision in my head of how my first short film will look like. I have been struggling to let it out because the process was not clear to me before watching the video. I was confused because I wanted to start “building” step 20 without starting on step 1 or really step ‘0’ really. This framework seems to be the key for my particular situation so I am going to give it a try. I work in analytics and I have no video/film experience whatsoever. This video is pure gold. Thank you for sharing the content with humanity.
I gone through many story writing class..so many short film tips..and I have learnt so much more in this 22 minutes then anything else. Thank you my brother.
I'm in a 48 hour film competition over the weekend (and writing is not my strong suit). I've been watching your videos all week. Thanks so much for all the tips, dude!
This was sooooo much more comprehensive than following the older models that binds & constrains you to have actions take place within so many pages. Thank you for this wonderful intro to writing a short film 🐯
This is invaluable information! Writing is by far the most important part of a film, and I’ve always struggled with trying to write something so short.
You have no idea how much I needed the algorithm to randomly suggest this video right now. Trying to get my filmmaking vibe back and just can't make any scripts work despite once being the top graded writer at film school. Thank you for uploading this.
The work that goes into ur videos is genuinely inspiring. I’m constantly looking for new channels dissecting my favourite thing (film) and i get so happy when I find gems like ur channel
I'm thrilled that this video made it to my feed. Clear and concise explanations. I'll be studying your other videos, as I've been grappling with a story for 14years that I can't shrug off. Subbed.
Story circle for tragedies: character -> desire and fatal flaw -> new environment -> rising action -> attempt to achieve goal/achieve it -> change of fortune & character self awareness -> character is broken
I rarely comment, but 3 minutes in and this is one of the best essays on the internet about writing short films. I knew this was going to be insightful when you mentioned people who usually write long-form narratives thinking they have to abandon all story principles when writing shorts. As much as I've fought against doing this, I seem to do it every time. It's so hard to find great short films that you engage you from the first beat. They usually have indulgently long introductions or characters with vague motives. Might be a bit premature of me to comment after 3 mins, but looking forward to the rest of the video. Cheers man!
@@TylerMowery It did! Haha. Really loved how you returned to the philosophical issues at the end. This is so crucial. I find that we're all so concerned with "how" to write something, we forget that "what" we choose to write about is a make-or-break prerequisite. I don't think stories have any innate value - it's how they riff off of and connect with real human questions and patterns of thought & emotion. Like stories are an extension of our fears and desires. My mind's racing! Cheers for an awesome vid!
I’m an airline pilot who’s been parked up months due covid. Just been told I’m being parked up for 2 years with a recall due no work. It’s all I’ve known for 20 years. I’ve always loved film and aspired to do it, beit for a pastime or to make some money. I’m finally starting, got a camera, a comp and NLE (which massively confuses me). It might just stop me going insane from the stress about my aviation career whilst sitting in limbo. I need to do something, maybe creativity will help.
im writing a book atm but there’s a part of the story that i’m leaving out for the most part bc it could truly be its own story. i had the idea to make that little story within a story into a short film. im super paranoid about story theft so i wont add any details lol, but this story within a story can be removed from the book without it affected the story. but its such a cool concept that i figured, “hey, im a highly visual person. lets make this tiny story a short film!” So thanks for this video, it was truly needed.
Thanks for the vid! There’s only one problem I see with your analysis. Ellie hadn’t already conquered her self-doubt. In fact, that’s another reason they chatted so long without meeting. If she was the opposite of Greenwood, contrasting his inner conflict, she would have already revealed she was deaf. However, this obviously would have ruined the story. So, it’s actually about two characters with the same inner conflict, both taking a chance, and changing in the end for the better.
The single most valuable video I have watched about storytelling ... You have far exceeded my expectations, you have a wonderful ability of teaching complex concepts in an easy to understand way. Thank you!
I must have watched this video 20 times by now to write my script. I'm still not done but have come so far. Grateful for the helpful resource. Thank you :)
This was SO GOOD. I learned so much just from this video and you put words to things I understood about story and made it so much clearer. I was having a crappy moment before finding your video and I feel a lot more equipped to carry through with my idea cause of you. Thanks for the hours of effort you put into this bro 🙏🏻
Two years ago, I was inspired by the short subject film "Stille Dorst" (High Tide), a Dutch film with English subtitles. It amazed me that in the span of 22 minutes, this powerful short could convey so much emotion and communicate to the audience the terror of being who you are when you live in a world geared to reject and revile a person. The actors were superb, the writing was tight, and the cinematography was both simple yet reflective of this two character drama. I knew (after this little short knocked the literal stuffing out of me emotionally) that I wanted to take my considerable writing prowess and create a short of my own. Mine will be like nothing anyone has ever seen; and to my knowledge, no one has ever attempted on film. That could be a double-edged sword, I know. I also realize that writing creatively vs developing a solid script are two completely differrent creatures. Then I happened upon this video. You've, in a matter of that magical 22 minutes (there must be something in that 11 x 2 magic...LOL) explained to me exactly what needs to go where, and how to develop it. THANK YOU! Whatever is borne from my effort basically will be decreed by The Fates at this juncture. I have a long way to go getting a 5 minute short from paper into production. Knowing that I have zero budget is daunting. I seem to remember a couple of dudes a few years back making a very interesting little film using CGI that was leaps and bounds beyond what any studio at that time had produced. They had an airplane landing on a highway, and then using the main character's truck bed as the front wheel to compensate for the lack of said equipment due to mechanical failure. It was tight, well-thought out writing, gripping, and that ending was wholly unexpected. These fledgling filmmakers did this on a virtually nothing budget. With that small bit of cash, they created a vignette that looked as if it had cost a few hundred thousand dollars when the finished product hit the web. At the time, that realism in CGI tech was nowhere near developed enough to create that realistic a model. With that in mind, they managed to not only pull it off; but create an action-packed yet humorous short story masterpiece. There is no reason anyone with the talent and imagination cannot put together a short subject film that could shine among some of these fantastic cinematic moments (I learned tonight that "Whiplash" started off as a short subject film...and that was quite a surprise to me as the feature length film was so well done. I really had zero idea that it was a small film that grew into what it became...which was mindbogglingly excellent). With video support from people like yourself; you're putting the basics into the hands of creators. For that...I want to thank you. Wish me luck! If you see something out there on the web that looks like nothing you've ever seen before, hopefully; you'll see my name in the credits...LOL. Thank you. I'm grateful to have this as a resource. It made a difference.
this actually helped a lot since my professor for my short film class is only using formats that seem to apply better for feature length films than short films.
This is not just an explainer, but a beautifully elaborated video on the concept. Thank you for making this video mate, as a beginner filmmaker, I needed it very much.
wow! Tyler this is amazing. I watch a lot of youtube videos don't know why I never came across your channel. For few months I was learning everything about filmmaking, so it feels as if universe was conspiring to recommend your video to me.
Also, one thing I noticed in the short film. It's about a date. There are some topics you will see so much in short films that you will get tired of them. Both in films and in scripts. Dates are overdone. Some of the best short films are about dates for sure because they create short and to the point drama, but they are in fact overdone. Unless you can make it great it will just disappear among the thousands of movies about the same topic. I often see people just write in some gags in a date and call it a day. Please don't. Unless it's so funny that I laugh or smile all the way you need to make it funnier. Some other topics I try to avoid are: waking up in the morning as the first scene, drug abuse as the main topic, LGBT, suicide, depression, one single apartment room only, lead that doesn't talk, mystery that is not clear from page 1. You may think that you have a great idea in one of these topics, but I see 99 overdone ideas in these topics for every 1 good idea. And chances are if you don't even know what topics are overdone you probably need to read 100-200 screenplays and watch as many short films. You will see what works and doesn't work.
The most important click was made to get here. I looked at 22 minutes and said could it be any good but man you just blew me away. Thanks from Lagos, Nigeria.
This is a great video and a great explanation of the structure, however in this particular example of a short film Greenwood doesn't earn anything or change his beliefs. He gets an easy way out. He doesn't have to work hard to accept his stutter, he doesn't even need to do anything about it - he gets a perfect, easy solution and can continue hiding his stutter problem for the rest of his life, as his girlfriend won't even know. The only proactive move he's made in this film is agree to go on a date, but it's not enough for a powerful dramatic story and, most importantly, he doesn't change as a character. I like your approach though, thanks for posting!
He sees a different way of engaging with the world by seeing that Ellie is not ashamed of her deafness. She models a different way of being that he can learn from, a new possibility in the way he relates to himself which, by turn, may open up a new way of relating to the external world.
Thanks for this, I really needed it, I've been on and off practices and courses for script / screen writing and watching this from your perspective gave life to my ideas...
To anyone who is watching this ( like me ) who wants to start a short film or write one. I pray it because successful and If you already have one I would love to see it! You got this writer! Keep going
Im a young teen who have been in love into writting essays & paragraphs. I hate taking pictures on my phone bcs I cant find the feeling and emotions on a picture on a phone. So I bought instax,fujifilms cam, polaroids, etc. And you can definitely feel the emotions innit. Plus one of my hobby is editing videos so if I put my love for writting,photography, and video editing Im positive I can make a whole short film. Not just any film a film thatsss full of emotions and feelings.
definitely subbed - best video on writing short films I've ever seen. pretty funny that i only discovered the story circle format about an hour ago! thank you for clarifying it and providing great examples of each step. It's already helped quite a bit
@@TylerMowery you're welcome! I'm looking forward to watching your other videos. I've just finished outlining my circle - thanks for making this easier and more fun
I can’t believe how helpful this was. I wrote a short film that I knew was missing something, just couldn’t pinpoint what it was. Thanks to you, I was able to identify it. Got a lot rewriting to do.
MAN I WILL FOREVER BE GRATEFUL TO YOU FOR MAKING THIS i am currently writing a shorty story for animation and i was stuck for sooooo longgg cuz everything felt off and i didnt know why THIS VIDEO HELPED IMMENSLEY with that, So THANK YOU!!
In Stutterers Story Circle point 5-7 (Tyler) is basically synonymous. Point 8 is not proactive, but merely an observation, which is basically OK, but not pushing dramatic boundaries. The Karthasis is also morally pretty questionable, bcoz the subtext is literally: "Disabled people can only engegage among their peers", which is a weak message (in Se7en the st is: "The world is not a fine place, but worth fighting for"). An ironic plot device (designing principle) would have been if the Love Interest was a successful TED Speaker i.e. Also the Father figure could have been used to more potential not by reflecting the Love Interests believe (accept urself) but to be the one who discourages the stutterer by reminding him how he failed each time he tried to overcome his obstacle, which makes for a more nuanced moral web. But all in all, an inspiring video essay.
I am glad to see this comment. Everyone else is gushing about how great the story is but to me it is lazy writing. . the solution is Ta Da the girl is deaf? Where is the struggle the stutterer had to mount? The girl was not honest for she did not reveal she was deaf at the beginning. I would have had stutterer fall in love at the beginning with a girl who is an excellent speaker so he does all he can to overcome his impediment. tension rises as each thing he tries fails until he forces himself to try the impossible, a debate which turns out to be against a rival who also wants the girl on a topic he cares deeply enough to give it his all. At first he is losing but then he reaches deep inside and remembers the childhood trauma that caused his stuttering and he forces himself to break thru the protective cocoon his stuttering was to win the debate and the love he thought was at the center of his being, but now he has grown to a new level of self understanding and he gains a higher degree of confidence and freedom from self doubt.
Also I would have the father be ashamed of his son thus becoming another obstacle to overcome and when the stutterer wins, he apologizes for not being a better influence...missed opportunity for drama, forgiveness and redemption
This video is gold. I was supposed to make a short film a while ago but I couldn't work up the courage to even start writing. I didn't know how to break it down. Now this is wjat I needed. Thank you.
Thank you so much for making this! Been following your videos regularly and revisiting them often to improve my work. Please continue doing great work!
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This whole presentation was an awesome short film.
MAN....tHANK YOU SO MUCH BRO
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I learned more in this 22 min. video than in my 3 years (not finished) on Film School
My film school experience was similar.
@@TylerMowery mine as well
Back in High School, I wanted to become a filmmaker, I looked up all film school of the country (France) and it was really expansive, at least too much for me, so i didn't even try, thinking you couldn't do anything without going to film school. Now ten years later i'm diving back in that passion, and realizing I never heard about someone who went to film school, and had a good experience about it! Feel free to share the pros and cons that you encountered in film school i'm very curious about your experiences!
@@rhaegosnow1133 I can't say Film School is useless, but it's not necessary. Cinematography is an art. Everyone has a different path. A piece of paper will not tell you are a good storyteller, your work will do. A lot of directors and people who make the entire world of cinematography a living doesn't have a film school career. In fact, if we think the movie pioneers didn't go to any school, because they didn't exist. To name a few directors: Michel Gondry, Christopher Nolan, Agnés Varda, Julie Tamor, Billy Wilder, Akira Kurosawa, Frank Capra, Kubrick, Terry Gilliam, Herzog, Almodovar, James Cameron, Tarantino, David Sandberg and Robert Rodriguez (you should search some videos of him talking about cinematography)
Now imagine if this people who born in a era where the information and movies was so exclusive could do it, why we don't now that information is almost everywhere?
Talking about my experience in my film school, here in Argentina it's public (I mean almost free) I realize the best thing in a film school it's the people and connections you get there, friends that I would never met staying in my bedroom all day. I learn something, yes of course, but because of me, in the end of everything it's you learning by doing, making mistakes, staying curious and keep doing. I had a lot of classmates who finished the career but they are doing nothing. Some people doesn't even know how to grab a camera or edit a simple video but it's not the school's fault. Also I will say a lot of film schools are very classic, they are not updated to this era, they will teach you only one way to make cinematography and this era is demonstrating that Cinematography can be applied to almost everything because it's an art, not only an industry.
Hope this helps, sorry if I have a bad english, it's not my first language.
search this video: Robert Rodriguez on digital filmmaking
My issue is wanting to become a filmmaker but not having ANY friends or contacts who are also into filmmaking or even acting for that matter. :/
iam in your team lets go
You’re also missing the “rich parents” part. So many filmmakers have trust funds to purchase equipment and attend film school, etc. They don’t need investors because they have daddy McMansion
@@mugiikari1641 TRUUE, but thats when you "start a business" and go ham on tax write-offs.
While you meet people try doing animation, if you can’t draw maybe try stop motion. You can do it by yourself, even though it is a LOT of work. If you get really, really creative on how to built the set and puppets for stop motion you can even do it in a very low budget.
Maybe starting a film support group of like minded people would be a good idea...if so I'm all in! 😊
The typographer is important! Its a metaphor showing how he struggles to assemble words and statements. He's literally building them letter by letter and he's surrounded by repeated characters! It feels very fitting that he's a typographer
It’s fitting, yet it’s stylistic. It isn’t an element that changes his actions or his beliefs within the story. It’s nice to know and it’s a nice stylistic element. But I don’t consider it “core story.” The story could work if he had a different profession. It’s just nice that he is a typographer. Hopefully that makes sense.
@@TylerMowery Yeah I understand that I guess. I have heard from others that every aspect of a movie should in some way revolve around the central idea of it. So in that way it's important that his job represent his central struggle. If he was a barista 'just because', then it would be a waste of run time. But with his job is typography, it makes his struggle tangible in a new way to the audience, even if it's subconscious. I agree it doesn't contribute to the progressing the story. But it's important for building out the universe.
that's a good point!
Doneandgone that’s a very good question at the end
@Doneandgone We don´t know that He doesn´t know that. Maybe he knows and that´s the reason why he is learning Sign Language, even if the short makes us believe that he is learning it to overcome his speaking limitations.
Video Breakdown
*Myths:*
0:53 Myth 1: Short Films are too short to be meaningful and dramatic
1:07 Myth 2: there isn't enough time to set up the story
1:35 Myth 3: Stunning cinematography, witty dialogue, and cool concepts will create a good short film even if the story isn't good.
2:20 Stutterer
*Structure*
1. 3:11 Finding an Idea (find a concept)
2. 3:36 Building our main character and what they believe (one character will usually push the story more than anyone else, what does the character want, what do they believe, and what is their conflict)
Build a philosophical conflict
3. 5:52 Building other characters in the story that also have their own problems
4. 7:32 Narrative Structure
5.7:48 Fundamental Elements of Structure
7:56 Story Circle
12:14 Crafting an ending
14:04 Analysis of the film
17:57 important: (no one will care about simple external obstacles they only care about how your characters beliefs come into conflict in the story so now we go to another scene)
20:15 Climax of the film
21:08 Why Stutterer is a great short film
(fantastic short film since it has a strong philosophical conflict good structure and an ending that works perfectly)
*NOTES:*
a short film needs:
- philosophical dilemmas
- ethical dilemmas
- moral dilemmas
*good dramas have characters that*
- *a character struggling with their own beliefs as they come into contact with the world*
*One of the biggest important elements of a good drama is that characters action must be challenged characters heading towards what they want or getting what they want should always come at a cost this keeps the conflict heightened*
hope this helped!
Thank you!
literally thank you
Thank you so much it helped!❤
I love you
THANK YOU SO MUCH!!
Thanks for giving Stutterer some recognition, it really deserves it.
Yes! It’s a beautiful short.
I thoroughly enjoyed the Stutterer!! Well written story that hooked me in immediately
I mean, it did win an Academy Award!
it won the oscar, it got the recognition it deserved
Where I can find ?
I'm a actor I've done a lot of short flim work gonna start writing and acting in my own movies.
good luck with that!
Goodluck!
Jonathan coleman I LOVE THIS
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Watched this video for the same reasons. Good luck friend 🤞🏽#createyourownopportunities
I always say that film schools need to teach this. They give us everything about how to make feature films, but we don't have the money nor the time to make them. SO TEACH HOW TO MAKE SHORT FILMS, at least how to write them, as you did
Yea I agree!
Find a college or university that does creative digital media, it covers short film production and general camera use for all kinds of scenes, and photography too. Also some include advertising and promotion for them when on no or low budget. Very helpful, if your in the UK, Swindon college does a great course on it.
Dude, you can find everything there is to know nowadays without school. Learn to be independent and figure stuff out. You’re not gonna make it in the industry if you aren’t able to hustle and figure things out yourself or if you don’t have any natural talent or common sense.
@@lairsansen4579 You're exactly right. Getting the gig is all about proving what you're capable of.
666 likes i will like your comment later
I’m a high school student who has an interest in screenwriting and film making. This was a great video and I feel inspired to start writing.
Go for it, Michael!!
Did you make it
Thanks for this, the explanation made the short film even more beautiful than if I had just watched it
I used your method to create my short film!! It came out great and has already been accepted into festivals!! Thank you
I just googled your name and saw some of the info on your short film - well done! I can see from the synopsis how you were influenced by this video and by Stutterer, and you took those concepts and used them to tell your own story. That's really cool. I'd love to see Fat Jessie some time (I just googled it and the results were a lot of Pokemon fetish drawings so I had to get out of there). Congratulations on making your movie!
How does this not have so many more views!?
I'm Wondering myself
Are you kidding this has THOUSANDS of views, ya can’t have EVERYONE being famous from short films otherwise famous people aren’t so special anymore
Because Joseph Campbell exists and there are hundreds of other extremely similar videos discussing his writings.
Half of it is bullshit. And people that want to write won't look on youtube for it, they'll write. He is literally talking about things that a writer doesn't think of. A writer writes and the story going to unfold from his thoughts. That's all. NO WRITER going to think about things, that this guy is talking about. Writing is not something you can learn.
And it's a sudden thing. I didn't write anything new for a few months now. But for example once I had a thought about a shot where the paper boat goes down a river and then things come into your mind and I ended up with a boy who lost his brother and still playing with him in his imagination. I'll not talk about how the paperboat comes here but it plays an important part and it is currently in production.
What you MUST learn are the rules. Know the f... differences between a shooting and a spec script and don't mix them up. See tons of amateurs with their trash and nobody going to read their "script" as mistakes pop out and you KNOW that it's already bad! Someone who can't write a script properly CAN'T write a good story. They think they can and what they write is good but that's just the Dunning-Kruger effect..
This is priceless information (no doubt about it!), but most people are not interested in creating stories. Generally speaking, the majority of folks are rather more keen on witnessing and enjoying them....
I never thought I would ever write my own short film by myself but I finally did it! I wrote the whole thing on my own and can’t wait to film my scary movie with some friends this summer and share with y’all!
how did it go?
thanks man. Writing my first short story (game) & your videos have been a lot of help.
Glad to hear!
Cool!
You are not cut out for this man , you should choose a blue collar job.
@@laalig2989 get over yourself and your biases bro. 🤦♂️Haters like you only regress society.
Ey, didn't expect to see Jabrils here. Way cool!
Bro watching this not only did I learn loads but experienced the emotions of the short bringing me near tears
I've been trying to write a graphic novel script for about 5 years, together with my brother. It's a hard process especially now that we don't live in the same house anymore and have day jobs and studying that comes first. we were mostly missing the very important middle part of the story, but I really think you flipped a switch in my head thanks to your this video and the one about writing conflict. I guess it finally clicked.
I'm gonna present my ideas to him tomorrow, but no matter what my brother thinks of what I just thought off, at least we now have a conflict that we can adjust until we both like it and an actual plot that we can base it off! Thank you so much!
That’s awesome! That’s probably the biggest goal of the videos. To help writers get unstuck. Not to give them formulas to live by.
im really curious as to how he reacted to your ideas, mind updating us?
@@wonderstorms4030 Yeah, we discussed it a bit. our story has three main characters, each with a different goal, but initially they also had different enemies and different conflicts, which made it three different stories, and that's not what we wanted. So basically we changed the story so that the opponent of one character became the main antagonist, but that their actions would create a different conflict for each character to deal with. My brother was still a bit hesitant about rewriting a lot of his characters, but he agreed that something needed to change and that my ideas do in fact solve the issues we were having. We're still looking into if we can keep more of his writing (since I already do 90% of the writing, It's a bit unbalanced to change his writing into mine too), but at least we aren't stuck anymore!
Osanne Art what have you named your story?
Osanne Art Cool story idea!
I went to film school as a movie manager/producer, this was one of the greatest story breakdown, we as small independent creators are easily discouraged when in comes to bringing ideas to life, as it asks to write films with very low to no budget comparing to the blockbusters we study and breakdown in school. This is a great reminder that a great story; doesn't a big budget, but a good sense of writting.
Thanks very helpful !
Tyler, man, you did it again. Great essay! I have been thinking of writing a short film these days, and then bam! Here's the perfect video to help my mind get clear.
Glad to hear it’s helpful!
how’s the short film coming along?
I've been wanting to write short films ever since I was 15, and Curfew came out and won the Oscars, and I was just mesmerized by how insanely good the writing was, I wanted to be able to do it myself so badly. Thanks for this video! Brings me one step closer.
Literally the best video I've seen on writing a short film
That’s awesome to hear! Thanks so much!
Never wrote a Story or Short Film; but after listening to this Video, The Inspiration and Motivation is Strong! Your Method of Teaching is hands down the Best I've heard thus far. Thanks for this Exceptional Video!
Thanks for the kind words!
as an experimenting novelist, this is really useful and shows a really interesting way I can write
Glad to hear it!
writing screenplays & scripts can help improve on dialogue & experimenting in different writing mediums can help you in ways you don’t always realize. go for it!
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wow the story circle makes me able to exactly break down movies like sound of metal. incredibly simple yet so complex
OMG I LOVE STUTTERER. One of my all-time favourite short films. Thanks so much for this video. This will be very helpful for writing short stories too.
Hi Noelle, are you able to tell me where you saw Stutterer? The link in the description no longer works. Thanks so much :)
Same here! It's such a great film.
:)
I've never made a movie or even wrote one before in my LIFE!!!! But I have a very very abstract mind topped with brilliant movie ideas just lovely ideas I've never thought about it because I don't know how to this video helped thanks a lot
Glad it was helpful!
Bos Marley what are some of your ideas?
You should probably start writing. I wouldn’t start with your dream movies, I’d start with other stuff you come up with, and just start writing. Trust me it helps a lot to just get into the motion of writing.
In my film studies course, I have to write a screenplay for a short film, but the teacher hasn't really explained to us how to even begin doing that, so this video helped a lot!
The great quality of this essay is how it focuses on the inner plot. Most other resources seem to mostly emphasize the outer. This has me thinking about how the two inform one another. Excellently delivered.
The Stutterer actors on House of the Dragon playing Larys! He made it!
Out of all the guides, essays, interviews, breakdowns, how-to’s, etc., this is the video that have taught me the most!
This is a super effective way to teach how to write! I would like to see more videos like this one if you have examples of films where they might have had a different approach/process/method for writing the film. Like maybe it was an aestethic or something Else that was the starting idea, so how would you then go about from there, etc.
You are a really really great teacher!
I love how every character shown has some level of depth to them, even if not having the same amount of screen time as Greenwood.
Man, I love this video so much. It was very informative. Thanks a lot.
I literally wrote everything that felt so important to me to know on my notebook this video is honestly just incredible.
Being a Filmmaker 🎞️ has always been my major Dream. Thanks for this lesson 🙏..
I will attempt to my first short film in a few weeks from now. I am taking just a bit of a different approach to the circle formula and see if it'll work out.
Good luck to those of you starting off or doing other films! Much love!
I want to know if you did it ?
This is an incredibly clear and articulate break down of what it means to tell a story. Thank you so much for putting in your energy to share. Truly grateful : )
I have a vision in my head of how my first short film will look like. I have been struggling to let it out because the process was not clear to me before watching the video. I was confused because I wanted to start “building” step 20 without starting on step 1 or really step ‘0’ really. This framework seems to be the key for my particular situation so I am going to give it a try. I work in analytics and I have no video/film experience whatsoever. This video is pure gold. Thank you for sharing the content with humanity.
I gone through many story writing class..so many short film tips..and I have learnt so much more in this 22 minutes then anything else. Thank you my brother.
I'm in a 48 hour film competition over the weekend (and writing is not my strong suit). I've been watching your videos all week. Thanks so much for all the tips, dude!
This just saved me thousands of dollars in 22 mins🙏🏾
This was sooooo much more comprehensive than following the older models that binds & constrains you to have actions take place within so many pages. Thank you for this wonderful intro to writing a short film 🐯
Omg, this Video really helped me, to fix my short film script, now i am finally on the right path
This is invaluable information! Writing is by far the most important part of a film, and I’ve always struggled with trying to write something so short.
My Filmmaking 1 professor is assigning us to watch this video for homework. You are making an impact!
The colour in the short film is so beautiful.
You have no idea how much I needed the algorithm to randomly suggest this video right now. Trying to get my filmmaking vibe back and just can't make any scripts work despite once being the top graded writer at film school. Thank you for uploading this.
The work that goes into ur videos is genuinely inspiring. I’m constantly looking for new channels dissecting my favourite thing (film) and i get so happy when I find gems like ur channel
Glad you’re enjoying the videos!
it is one of my favorite short films. Thanks for analyzing it.
I'm thrilled that this video made it to my feed. Clear and concise explanations. I'll be studying your other videos, as I've been grappling with a story for 14years that I can't shrug off. Subbed.
This is what I wanted for writing my first shot film. This is mind-blowing analysis... Hats off to you. You earned a student!
this is one of the best videos i have seen on youtube. its teaching but in a way i stay exited and most important.....Awake.
So thankyou :)
Great video! Congrats!
Story circle for tragedies:
character -> desire and fatal flaw -> new environment -> rising action -> attempt to achieve goal/achieve it -> change of fortune & character self awareness -> character is broken
I rarely comment, but 3 minutes in and this is one of the best essays on the internet about writing short films. I knew this was going to be insightful when you mentioned people who usually write long-form narratives thinking they have to abandon all story principles when writing shorts. As much as I've fought against doing this, I seem to do it every time. It's so hard to find great short films that you engage you from the first beat. They usually have indulgently long introductions or characters with vague motives. Might be a bit premature of me to comment after 3 mins, but looking forward to the rest of the video. Cheers man!
Hopefully the rest of the video lived up to the hype!
@@TylerMowery It did! Haha. Really loved how you returned to the philosophical issues at the end. This is so crucial. I find that we're all so concerned with "how" to write something, we forget that "what" we choose to write about is a make-or-break prerequisite. I don't think stories have any innate value - it's how they riff off of and connect with real human questions and patterns of thought & emotion. Like stories are an extension of our fears and desires. My mind's racing!
Cheers for an awesome vid!
I have watched this video about 50 times already and i love every second of it.
Im tryna be an engineer, but filmmaking and movies always had my eye
Mr Azza do both
Use that engineer money to make movies
i'm a writer, i want to turn my short stories into short movies, contact me if you are interested
I feel you! Film making has always been my passion but engineering gives you a more stable job. It'a hard to choose.
I’m an airline pilot who’s been parked up months due covid. Just been told I’m being parked up for 2 years with a recall due no work. It’s all I’ve known for 20 years. I’ve always loved film and aspired to do it, beit for a pastime or to make some money. I’m finally starting, got a camera, a comp and NLE (which massively confuses me). It might just stop me going insane from the stress about my aviation career whilst sitting in limbo. I need to do something, maybe creativity will help.
I really love the breakdown of this video and now I think I love to write more short films
im writing a book atm but there’s a part of the story that i’m leaving out for the most part bc it could truly be its own story. i had the idea to make that little story within a story into a short film. im super paranoid about story theft so i wont add any details lol, but this story within a story can be removed from the book without it affected the story. but its such a cool concept that i figured, “hey, im a highly visual person. lets make this tiny story a short film!” So thanks for this video, it was truly needed.
good luck! hope it goes well
yourdailysquishedbanana thank you so much!
Do you stutter too?
This is my first video to watch about short movies screenwriting and I feel very lucky, Thank you so much!
Thanks for the vid! There’s only one problem I see with your analysis. Ellie hadn’t already conquered her self-doubt. In fact, that’s another reason they chatted so long without meeting. If she was the opposite of Greenwood, contrasting his inner conflict, she would have already revealed she was deaf. However, this obviously would have ruined the story. So, it’s actually about two characters with the same inner conflict, both taking a chance, and changing in the end for the better.
The single most valuable video I have watched about storytelling ...
You have far exceeded my expectations, you have a wonderful ability of teaching complex concepts in an easy to understand way. Thank you!
This video was immensely helpful. I've been stuck on trying to write a new script/story for a long time now and didn't know where to start. Thank you!
I must have watched this video 20 times by now to write my script. I'm still not done but have come so far. Grateful for the helpful resource. Thank you :)
This was SO GOOD. I learned so much just from this video and you put words to things I understood about story and made it so much clearer. I was having a crappy moment before finding your video and I feel a lot more equipped to carry through with my idea cause of you. Thanks for the hours of effort you put into this bro 🙏🏻
I’m glad it was helpful!!
Currently working on my film for college applications and couldn't be more thankful for finding this video. Thanks!
Hi.Your teaching just saved my script.
You've presented a detailed analysis of a process, most of the major filmmakers fail to explain in simple language. Thank you Tyler.
I have learned so much and I am going to apply this to my passion and love for film making
Two years ago, I was inspired by the short subject film "Stille Dorst" (High Tide), a Dutch film with English subtitles. It amazed me that in the span of 22 minutes, this powerful short could convey so much emotion and communicate to the audience the terror of being who you are when you live in a world geared to reject and revile a person. The actors were superb, the writing was tight, and the cinematography was both simple yet reflective of this two character drama.
I knew (after this little short knocked the literal stuffing out of me emotionally) that I wanted to take my considerable writing prowess and create a short of my own.
Mine will be like nothing anyone has ever seen; and to my knowledge, no one has ever attempted on film. That could be a double-edged sword, I know. I also realize that writing creatively vs developing a solid script are two completely differrent creatures.
Then I happened upon this video.
You've, in a matter of that magical 22 minutes (there must be something in that 11 x 2 magic...LOL) explained to me exactly what needs to go where, and how to develop it. THANK YOU!
Whatever is borne from my effort basically will be decreed by The Fates at this juncture. I have a long way to go getting a 5 minute short from paper into production. Knowing that I have zero budget is daunting. I seem to remember a couple of dudes a few years back making a very interesting little film using CGI that was leaps and bounds beyond what any studio at that time had produced. They had an airplane landing on a highway, and then using the main character's truck bed as the front wheel to compensate for the lack of said equipment due to mechanical failure.
It was tight, well-thought out writing, gripping, and that ending was wholly unexpected. These fledgling filmmakers did this on a virtually nothing budget. With that small bit of cash, they created a vignette that looked as if it had cost a few hundred thousand dollars when the finished product hit the web. At the time, that realism in CGI tech was nowhere near developed enough to create that realistic a model. With that in mind, they managed to not only pull it off; but create an action-packed yet humorous short story masterpiece.
There is no reason anyone with the talent and imagination cannot put together a short subject film that could shine among some of these fantastic cinematic moments (I learned tonight that "Whiplash" started off as a short subject film...and that was quite a surprise to me as the feature length film was so well done. I really had zero idea that it was a small film that grew into what it became...which was mindbogglingly excellent).
With video support from people like yourself; you're putting the basics into the hands of creators. For that...I want to thank you.
Wish me luck! If you see something out there on the web that looks like nothing you've ever seen before, hopefully; you'll see my name in the credits...LOL.
Thank you. I'm grateful to have this as a resource. It made a difference.
Who else thought that that was Eric Bana on the thumbnail?
Great vid btw, really helped.
Glad to hear it!
I decided to go into short filmmaking this morning and the universe sent this ! Who says miracles don't happen?
How is that going? I decided to get into it the day before yesterday and I found this. LOL God gets us all right where we need to be. eh?
This is an amazing video!!! I´ve read a lot of books about screenplay but no one ever had explained it to me that way! congrats!! keep the good work
Glad it was helpful!
This was like a masterclass for free jeez, you’re amazing
this actually helped a lot since my professor for my short film class is only using formats that seem to apply better for feature length films than short films.
This is not just an explainer, but a beautifully elaborated video on the concept. Thank you for making this video mate, as a beginner filmmaker, I needed it very much.
wow! Tyler this is amazing. I watch a lot of youtube videos don't know why I never came across your channel. For few months I was learning everything about filmmaking, so it feels as if universe was conspiring to recommend your video to me.
I’m glad you’re enjoying my videos!
This might be my favorite randomly recommended video ever! Great content!
Also, one thing I noticed in the short film. It's about a date. There are some topics you will see so much in short films that you will get tired of them. Both in films and in scripts. Dates are overdone. Some of the best short films are about dates for sure because they create short and to the point drama, but they are in fact overdone. Unless you can make it great it will just disappear among the thousands of movies about the same topic. I often see people just write in some gags in a date and call it a day. Please don't. Unless it's so funny that I laugh or smile all the way you need to make it funnier.
Some other topics I try to avoid are: waking up in the morning as the first scene, drug abuse as the main topic, LGBT, suicide, depression, one single apartment room only, lead that doesn't talk, mystery that is not clear from page 1. You may think that you have a great idea in one of these topics, but I see 99 overdone ideas in these topics for every 1 good idea. And chances are if you don't even know what topics are overdone you probably need to read 100-200 screenplays and watch as many short films. You will see what works and doesn't work.
Yea there’s definitely a lot of overdone short film topics
The most important click was made to get here. I looked at 22 minutes and said could it be any good but man you just blew me away. Thanks from Lagos, Nigeria.
This was really helpful and informative! I got a lot out of it - thanks for creating it!
THANK YOU SO SO SO SO SO SO much i was so confused on how to do it but now it became clear for me thanks alot
Your video popped up on my feed, turns out you are real helpful in screenwriting. Great job, man. Subbed.
I've been watching several videos about writing. This is by far the most helpful video. Thanks so much for making it.
Extremely grateful for this Video!
This is a great video and a great explanation of the structure, however in this particular example of a short film Greenwood doesn't earn anything or change his beliefs. He gets an easy way out. He doesn't have to work hard to accept his stutter, he doesn't even need to do anything about it - he gets a perfect, easy solution and can continue hiding his stutter problem for the rest of his life, as his girlfriend won't even know. The only proactive move he's made in this film is agree to go on a date, but it's not enough for a powerful dramatic story and, most importantly, he doesn't change as a character.
I like your approach though, thanks for posting!
He sees a different way of engaging with the world by seeing that Ellie is not ashamed of her deafness. She models a different way of being that he can learn from, a new possibility in the way he relates to himself which, by turn, may open up a new way of relating to the external world.
I want to like this video more than once! Thanks, man really great. So many ideas going round in my head already.
I totally relate to all these tips, so enthralled in this vid. Coming back for much much more. Toronto Canada
Glad it was helpful!
Thanks for this, I really needed it, I've been on and off practices and courses for script / screen writing and watching this from your perspective gave life to my ideas...
Thank you Tyler, this was great. Forever grateful 🙏🏽. Can't wait to tune in to more of your work!
Glad it was helpful!
To anyone who is watching this ( like me ) who wants to start a short film or write one. I pray it because successful and If you already have one I would love to see it! You got this writer! Keep going
This is the most brilliant video I have seen today! I always learn a new concept with every watch! Thank you
Thanks for the kind words!
Im a young teen who have been in love into writting essays & paragraphs. I hate taking pictures on my phone bcs I cant find the feeling and emotions on a picture on a phone. So I bought instax,fujifilms cam, polaroids, etc. And you can definitely feel the emotions innit. Plus one of my hobby is editing videos so if I put my love for writting,photography, and video editing Im positive I can make a whole short film. Not just any film a film thatsss full of emotions and feelings.
love the video. please make more!!! thank you for the great content!
looks like you're Seriously Here To TEACH. thank you so much for the authentic and practical lesson !
definitely subbed - best video on writing short films I've ever seen. pretty funny that i only discovered the story circle format about an hour ago! thank you for clarifying it and providing great examples of each step. It's already helped quite a bit
Thanks for the kind words!
@@TylerMowery you're welcome! I'm looking forward to watching your other videos. I've just finished outlining my circle - thanks for making this easier and more fun
I can’t believe how helpful this was. I wrote a short film that I knew was missing something, just couldn’t pinpoint what it was. Thanks to you, I was able to identify it. Got a lot rewriting to do.
Wow, this is very helpful. Definitely will check out the FB Group. Thank you.
MAN I WILL FOREVER BE GRATEFUL TO YOU FOR MAKING THIS i am currently writing a shorty story for animation and i was stuck for sooooo longgg cuz everything felt off and i didnt know why THIS VIDEO HELPED IMMENSLEY with that, So THANK YOU!!
In Stutterers Story Circle point 5-7 (Tyler) is basically synonymous. Point 8 is not proactive, but merely an observation, which is basically OK, but not pushing dramatic boundaries. The Karthasis is also morally pretty questionable, bcoz the subtext is literally: "Disabled people can only engegage among their peers", which is a weak message (in Se7en the st is: "The world is not a fine place, but worth fighting for"). An ironic plot device (designing principle) would have been if the Love Interest was a successful TED Speaker i.e. Also the Father figure could have been used to more potential not by reflecting the Love Interests believe (accept urself) but to be the one who discourages the stutterer by reminding him how he failed each time he tried to overcome his obstacle, which makes for a more nuanced moral web. But all in all, an inspiring video essay.
I am glad to see this comment. Everyone else is gushing about how great the story is but to me it is lazy writing. . the solution is Ta Da the girl is deaf? Where is the struggle the stutterer had to mount? The girl was not honest for she did not reveal she was deaf at the beginning. I would have had stutterer fall in love at the beginning with a girl who is an excellent speaker so he does all he can to overcome his impediment. tension rises as each thing he tries fails until he forces himself to try the impossible, a debate which turns out to be against a rival who also wants the girl on a topic he cares deeply enough to give it his all. At first he is losing but then he reaches deep inside and remembers the childhood trauma that caused his stuttering and he forces himself to break thru the protective cocoon his stuttering was to win the debate and the love he thought was at the center of his being, but now he has grown to a new level of self understanding and he gains a higher degree of confidence and freedom from self doubt.
Also I would have the father be ashamed of his son thus becoming another obstacle to overcome and when the stutterer wins, he apologizes for not being a better influence...missed opportunity for drama, forgiveness and redemption
@@davidlyttle1919 one hundred percent right.
@@davidlyttle1919 There are those two types of successful writers: One who's a working writer and the other who teaches writing theories.
Yeah not a huge fan of the problematic implication of the resolution of this short film.
This video is gold. I was supposed to make a short film a while ago but I couldn't work up the courage to even start writing. I didn't know how to break it down. Now this is wjat I needed. Thank you.
Thank you so much for making this! Been following your videos regularly and revisiting them often to improve my work. Please continue doing great work!
Thanks for watching! I’m glad they are helpful!
what in the black magic was this break down absolutely astonish and how crystal clear u made such a complex subject