There are too many perspective shifts to keep up with. We're introduced with an ambassador, and then the rough, very rough transition to the council's opinions, and then back to the ambassador for a second. Focus on rewriting these transition points. You're losing your audience. Take this as constructive criticism, as it is intended. You have an interesting idea, but it's not polished into a complete tale. This is an ADHD nightmare.
Thanks for the feedback, i will work on improving transitions and pacing to make future stories more engaging. appreciate your input always striving to get better
The thing I like about this story is that they let you know right up front it's AI crap. At :02 we have a Chen. No more, not hanging around for the other usual token tropes to appear. I'm out.
@novahfy It's not you. I've been reading sci-fi for over fifty years. A lot has changed, like the introduction of this new toy called AI almost everyone is using though it's still in its testing phase, maybe beta by now. And why does it have only a handful of names it continues to recycle through every story? That is my pissed off point. Please, I ask you to give me an original story with original names. A good human narrator precludes the need for AI generated text. I have a degree in English lit. and comp. Reading the AI script is torture. Please, I wish you success but I'm afraid you're handicapping yourself with AI.
Thanks for your comment! In sci-fi, creativity knows no bounds, and giving aliens relatable names adds a unique touch to the story. Appreciate your thoughts!
Be nice.
Until it's time to not be nice.
Then -
Stop being nice.
Very well done 👍
CHEN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Gee.
I had no problem following the story.
Glad to hear you enjoyed it! Thanks for watching
There are too many perspective shifts to keep up with. We're introduced with an ambassador, and then the rough, very rough transition to the council's opinions, and then back to the ambassador for a second.
Focus on rewriting these transition points. You're losing your audience.
Take this as constructive criticism, as it is intended.
You have an interesting idea, but it's not polished into a complete tale. This is an ADHD nightmare.
Thanks for the feedback, i will work on improving transitions and pacing to make future stories more engaging. appreciate your input always striving to get better
Another Chen, another rehashed unoriginal story.
The thing I like about this story is that they let you know right up front it's AI crap. At :02 we have a Chen. No more, not hanging around for the other usual token tropes to appear. I'm out.
Sorry to hear it wasn’t your style, but thanks for giving it a chance!
Dude, fiction, satire and just stupid reality escapism doesn’t need to be woke, you snowflake! Bet you vote Democrat.
@novahfy It's not you. I've been reading sci-fi for over fifty years. A lot has changed, like the introduction of this new toy called AI almost everyone is using though it's still in its testing phase, maybe beta by now. And why does it have only a handful of names it continues to recycle through every story? That is my pissed off point. Please, I ask you to give me an original story with original names. A good human narrator precludes the need for AI generated text. I have a degree in English lit. and comp. Reading the AI script is torture. Please, I wish you success but I'm afraid you're handicapping yourself with AI.
Stupid story. how can aliens have Asian names! especially a Chen name?
Thanks for your comment! In sci-fi, creativity knows no bounds, and giving aliens relatable names adds a unique touch to the story. Appreciate your thoughts!