Most of us, write as, ' ship in harbour, ship came out of harbour, but sir has done a beautiful analysis about ship came out but is it doing ethical things, Thanks sir.
Sir can we start with the human evolution and how they took risks and came out of comfort zone to invent fire, agriculture, economy etc . And how sailors in the early time had this notion that earth is flat rectangle and if they cross a certain boundary they will fall into a bottomless and borderless sea . However despite stong rooted fear the voyagers took journeys and discovered many new areas. The understanding of earth was developed,new trade routes came to be known to all . The fear was conquered over only when the ships came out of harbour of predetermined ideas and thoughts.
Yes you can start like that. Even in the model answer, the introduction made a reference to earliest homo sapiens in Africa. Flat earth example is ok, but better examples of fears faced by voyagers can be discussed. Rest is good. Also dont restrict only to the metaphorical language. Discuss real world scenarios and concerns also.
Good initiative sir nowadays in UPSC finding English lectures are very difficult providing English lectures will be very useful thank you so much... A humble request provide model answer pdf will be very helpful for self preparation UPSC students
Sir,for ship in harbour question I started with gandhi...leaving his comfortable life nd fight for ppl and became father of nation And in more example I gave USA is blind eye to terrorism in 1990s and it's safe play and later became the victim of terrorism with 9 /11 attack I first case,coming out of safe place made gandhi to be remembered forever and helped ppl And in second case, being at harbour might have provide us short term comfort and safety but in long run it proved to be disastrous.. Then I started with importance of coming out of comfort zones and use various human faculties for greater good rather becoming redundant species on earth...then I gave eaxmplevin multiple spheres like Social RR M ROY ,EC VIDYASAGAR political SESHAN JP NARAYAN economic mm singh and rao duo while introducing reforms despite popular criticism And in international environmental spheres also Then I gave opposite examples of how safe play will be a threat like Britain and France appeasement policy towards germany ....only short term peace....later 2nd we and change in power distribution...and one more example.... Then I wrote limiting factors for ships to come out of harbours like risk aversive attitude,social norms,traditions etc and attitude we have to develop to overcome them and conclusion....is it correct approach sir.... I wrote intro two eg for 2 page Then imp of coming out of comfort zones for 1.5page and supporting arguements for 5 page and opposing 2 examples in 1page and limiting factor and remaking in 2 pages
Approach is good. Examples and content look relevant, and overall it looks fabulous. Dont worry about it and prepare well for the remaining Mains papers.
@@PrashantKaushik I wrote this in actual mains sir.... My doubt is whether inclusion of usa example is relevant??....like if not coming out of harbours that proved to be in disastrous on due course....
@@mounikap8290 Yes it is not as convincing as rest of the arguments. But one weak example doesn't make much difference. Your other examples were interesting and relevant, so dont worry !
Sir,for just because you have option does not mean any of them has to be correct essay, I started with At independence india have various options of secularism like western model of religious neutrality, theocracy type,special previliges to minority religions etc....but despite these options indian has chosen a new model based on SARVA DHARMA sambhava.... Based on suitability ... Then I Explain what is choice How to make choice Then examples where we had gone out of way to explore new choices in various spheres Like in political sphere we have parliament sovereignty and judicial supremacy as predominant models but we choose mix of them In economy,we have socialism capitalism. But we have gone another way In case of nuclear weapons ,we have complete disarmament or to be on par with neighbouring....but we chose to have minimum credible deterrence....and I quote example of development and environment and chose diff path through adoption of EIA etc....doha develop agenda at WTO etc.... Later,I mentioned one example about how we ar forced to go with existing options Like growing relations with us made us to divert from iran and voted against it etc And mentioned the factors limiting out choices like our power,pros and cons of choices,suitability,distribution of power in the society etc....and measure needed to ensure our freedom to choose and conclusion.... Sir,is it correct approach
These examples look fine, and would have been great but provided you had explained them in line of the topic. The only weak point in your assessment possibly remains is - that even the 3rd option which was taken by India according to you, overlooking the existing ones, shouldn't that 3rd option also be called as a choice ? This was a very vague essay and could have been addressed in different ways including the one that you have written. I hope your sentence constructions would have done justice to what you wanted to say and not allowed that weak point to do any harm.
In the exam I wrote this essay from two angles- 1) purpose- every thing in this universe has a purpose. The purpose of ship is to go in deep sea, transport men and material. It is safe in the harbour but that is not what the ship meant for.. ship is useless in harbour.... similarly -purpose of life is life of purpose... life life for others.............purpose of weath....etc etc etc 2) Fight adversity.... leave your safe zone... go into deep sea... fight with high tides.... a child is safer in this mother's lap.... but for growth and dev must venture... gandhi became mahatma when he left his safe harbour... fight for justice indian economy in 1990 left safe harbour..... went beyond hindu rate of growth to become fastest growing economy.... etc etc etc conclusion with--- a jouney of thousand miles start with single step..... roberst frost- woods are lovely dark and deep swami vivekanand ----arise awake and not stop...
Your ideas and interpretations are good and the sequence of thoughts looks well connected. I hope you would have done similar justice to the presentation also. If yes, score should be good. A few counter/ethical/allied dimensions could have served as cherries on the cake.
In this essay we can also give examples of women empowerment....
Thank u sir 🙏
Most of us, write as, ' ship in harbour, ship came out of harbour, but sir has done a beautiful analysis about ship came out but is it doing ethical things,
Thanks sir.
thank you Milind. Yes, ethical discussions give an extra flavour to the essay answers.
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thanks for your feedback.
Sir can we start with the human evolution and how they took risks and came out of comfort zone to invent fire, agriculture, economy etc .
And how sailors in the early time had this notion that earth is flat rectangle and if they cross a certain boundary they will fall into a bottomless and borderless sea . However despite stong rooted fear the voyagers took journeys and discovered many new areas. The understanding of earth was developed,new trade routes came to be known to all . The fear was conquered over only when the ships came out of harbour of predetermined ideas and thoughts.
Yes you can start like that. Even in the model answer, the introduction made a reference to earliest homo sapiens in Africa. Flat earth example is ok, but better examples of fears faced by voyagers can be discussed. Rest is good. Also dont restrict only to the metaphorical language. Discuss real world scenarios and concerns also.
VERY GOOD POINTS OF ESSAY U TAUGHT. VERY VERY HELPFUL . THANKU SO MUCH SIR.
Glad that it was helpful. Thanks.
Sir ,
Your videos are very helpful.
I request you sir pls make some videos which helps for Hindi medium students like me...
Sir please hindi medium ke liye bhi samjhaiye
Good initiative sir nowadays in UPSC finding English lectures are very difficult providing English lectures will be very useful thank you so much... A humble request provide model answer pdf will be very helpful for self preparation UPSC students
Thank you for feedback, and glad that you find these lectures helpful.
Where can we get pdf of this essay
Sir,for ship in harbour question
I started with gandhi...leaving his comfortable life nd fight for ppl and became father of nation
And in more example I gave USA is blind eye to terrorism in 1990s and it's safe play and later became the victim of terrorism with 9 /11 attack
I first case,coming out of safe place made gandhi to be remembered forever and helped ppl
And in second case, being at harbour might have provide us short term comfort and safety but in long run it proved to be disastrous..
Then I started with importance of coming out of comfort zones and use various human faculties for greater good rather becoming redundant species on earth...then I gave eaxmplevin multiple spheres like
Social RR M ROY ,EC VIDYASAGAR
political SESHAN JP NARAYAN
economic mm singh and rao duo while introducing reforms despite popular criticism
And in international environmental spheres also
Then I gave opposite examples of how safe play will be a threat like
Britain and France appeasement policy towards germany ....only short term peace....later 2nd we and change in power distribution...and one more example....
Then I wrote limiting factors for ships to come out of harbours like risk aversive attitude,social norms,traditions etc and attitude we have to develop to overcome them and conclusion....is it correct approach sir....
I wrote intro two eg for 2 page
Then imp of coming out of comfort zones for 1.5page and supporting arguements for 5 page and opposing 2 examples in 1page and limiting factor and remaking in 2 pages
Did you write this essay in mains or for practice ?
Approach is good. Examples and content look relevant, and overall it looks fabulous. Dont worry about it and prepare well for the remaining Mains papers.
@@PrashantKaushik I wrote this in actual mains sir....
My doubt is whether inclusion of usa example is relevant??....like if not coming out of harbours that proved to be in disastrous on due course....
@@mounikap8290 Yes it is not as convincing as rest of the arguments. But one weak example doesn't make much difference. Your other examples were interesting and relevant, so dont worry !
@@PrashantKaushik I wrote in intro sir....
Thank you sir for the reply
Daily hota hai ye ....
Thank you sir
Sir,for just because you have option does not mean any of them has to be correct essay,
I started with
At independence india have various options of secularism like western model of religious neutrality, theocracy type,special previliges to minority religions etc....but despite these options indian has chosen a new model based on SARVA DHARMA sambhava....
Based on suitability ...
Then I
Explain what is choice
How to make choice
Then examples where we had gone out of way to explore new choices in various spheres
Like in political sphere we have parliament sovereignty and judicial supremacy as predominant models but we choose mix of them
In economy,we have socialism capitalism. But we have gone another way
In case of nuclear weapons ,we have complete disarmament or to be on par with neighbouring....but we chose to have minimum credible deterrence....and I quote example of development and environment and chose diff path through adoption of EIA etc....doha develop agenda at WTO etc....
Later,I mentioned one example about how we ar forced to go with existing options
Like growing relations with us made us to divert from iran and voted against it etc
And mentioned the factors limiting out choices like our power,pros and cons of choices,suitability,distribution of power in the society etc....and measure needed to ensure our freedom to choose and conclusion....
Sir,is it correct approach
These examples look fine, and would have been great but provided you had explained them in line of the topic. The only weak point in your assessment possibly remains is - that even the 3rd option which was taken by India according to you, overlooking the existing ones, shouldn't that 3rd option also be called as a choice ? This was a very vague essay and could have been addressed in different ways including the one that you have written. I hope your sentence constructions would have done justice to what you wanted to say and not allowed that weak point to do any harm.
@@PrashantKaushik sir, acc to u whether my content is vague or the topic itself is vague?
@@mounikap8290 Your content is fine. Essay Topic was vague and can be interpreted accross different lines.
@@PrashantKaushik ok thanq sir
In the exam I wrote this essay from two angles-
1) purpose- every thing in this universe has a purpose. The purpose of ship is to go in deep sea, transport men and material.
It is safe in the harbour but that is not what the ship meant for.. ship is useless in harbour....
similarly -purpose of life is life of purpose... life life for others.............purpose of weath....etc etc etc
2) Fight adversity.... leave your safe zone... go into deep sea... fight with high tides....
a child is safer in this mother's lap.... but for growth and dev must venture...
gandhi became mahatma when he left his safe harbour... fight for justice
indian economy in 1990 left safe harbour..... went beyond hindu rate of growth to become fastest growing economy.... etc etc etc
conclusion with--- a jouney of thousand miles start with single step..... roberst frost- woods are lovely dark and deep
swami vivekanand ----arise awake and not stop...
Your ideas and interpretations are good and the sequence of thoughts looks well connected. I hope you would have done similar justice to the presentation also. If yes, score should be good. A few counter/ethical/allied dimensions could have served as cherries on the cake.
kitna marks aaya bro?
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Thank You sir 😊
Welcome Muskan.
16:00 topic of essay in mains 2023😅
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