This story needs a lot of work. I assume this is a first draft? Also a mystery without a murder? And characters that aren’t that intriguing? We need to have a reason to want to wade thru all these cliques. Thanks for trying to entertain tho
I’m afraid this story leaves a lot to be desired. Why you would use Miss Marple as a character is a mystery to me. Unless you’re a genius writer, like Agatha Christie, you are bound to suffer by the comparison.
Piqued, hand on shoulder, repetitive words, use wider vocabulary. Anachronisms candles, courtesies. Develop the characters more rather than repeating what you have already said. Good attempt C-
This story needs a lot of work. I assume this is a first draft? Also a mystery without a murder? And characters that aren’t that intriguing? We need to have a reason to want to wade thru all these cliques. Thanks for trying to entertain tho
@@patriciataylor4954 appreciate your words.
I am working on it….
Something missing, as reading is competent yet it is not very engaging
Don't steal other author's characters. Make up your own!
Not on par with other Miss Marple stories.
This isn’t a Christie story! Don’t bother.
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I’m afraid this story leaves a lot to be desired. Why you would use Miss Marple as a character is a mystery to me. Unless you’re a genius writer, like Agatha Christie, you are bound to suffer by the comparison.
Sent me to sleep.
Piqued, hand on shoulder, repetitive words, use wider vocabulary. Anachronisms candles, courtesies. Develop the characters more rather than repeating what you have already said. Good attempt C-
I appreciate your words and i will work on these mistakes☺️