No need to repeat! Why write it twice? Examiner has read it once, won’t want to read it again! Also, consider time management! If you want to offer evaluation throughout then perhaps focus on limitations.
No, time management might make that hard and also the limitations of the data might be the inconsistency between the figures or what’s missing, for example what data is not included but could help with your decision
You would be surprised with practice. I have seen such answers in not only mock answers in controlled and timed conditions but also when marking for AQA I have seen similar answers. Once you have observed the data, manipulated the data then you are in a position to be as productive in your writing as you can be. Just remember, three paragraphs, consider all the figures, include an overall judgement and at least one limitation of the data.
Hi i did this querstion in a mock and i said the following things but my teacher gave it a 6/10. He did not provide feedback. Would you agreee with his mark. In my exam i get extra time so i mak sure i spend around 30 minutes on this question as i find this question hardere than the next 15 marker. So i dedicate 30 minutes to this: Ive put my essay below- and it would be highly appreciated if you can skim through it as an AQA Examiner and just give me anty feedback you can or a mark you would give it. Thanks a lot!!!!!! ANything tyhat is underlined or has. a line going through it is just an error with my keybboard, so dont think i cxrossed it out. Thanks!! From Extract B it is evident that the uk sector is in decline since 2003 because the index of manufacturing output in 2003 was at around 97.5 and decreased to around 96 in 2015. This therefore shows that the UK manufacturing sector is in decline since 2003. The decline in manufacturing output May have arose due to a loss of productivity of workers in y rate the UK. The uk’s manufacturing sector has around a 20% lower productivity rate than the g7 members and so therefore due to a fall in productivity of manufacturing workers this might help explain the decline in manufacturing output. Furthermore it is known that since 2003- the uk economy has restructured moving away from the manufacturing sector to the tertiary ( service) sector and so perhaps this could explain the decline in manufacturing output. However what is Significant to note is that whilst manufacturing output has declined suggesting that the uk manufacturing ase ctor has declined, one cannot say that it has majorly decline d according to extract b, This is because the Index of manufacturing output 2003 to 2015, only declined by 1 an index of 1.5 , and so one cannot argue that is has declined Massively. Furthermore there has been a recovery for the manufacturing industry for instance after 2008 where manufacturing output fell from an index of 100 to just above 90, towards the end of 2009 there was a recovery period where manufacturing output rose from just above an index of 90 to around 97, where it has remained there until 2015 suggesting that whilst it did decline from 2003-2015, it has also recovered and remained the same. Secondly, ,manufacturing employment has declined between 2003-2015 suggesting that the uk manufacturing industry is indeed in decline and has been in decline. In 2003 employment was just above 36000000 but it has declined to to around 32000000 in 2015. A decline of over 400 thousand workers. Therefore this shows that as demand for UK manufacturing has decreased due to the rise of Chinese manufacturing as it is more desired by the world as it is cheaper, due to derived demand ( demand for uk manufacturing declines) so unemployment in the manufacturing industry rises. However, this data was only carried out until 2015 and so since then the data could have changed. Perhaps a wider variety of years would have been useful to see a bigger trend in unemployment, Moreover, a future forecast would be beneficial to see, ie from 2015 onwards, which could therefore help us predict the future of the uk manufacturing industry, Perhaps it might recover again back to 2003 levels or even further in the future, and so the uk manufacturing industry won’t be in a decline. Furthermore the average annual growth rate in uk manufacturing output in a % has declined from 3.4% between 1949-1973 to 1.1% between 2010- 2015. This suggests that due to a decline by 2.3% in UK manufacturing the manufacturing industry in the uk was in decline. ts might be because of a loss of international demand for uk manufactured goods, evidenced by figure 3’s rise in imports in the uk from 2003-2015 from 239.5 billion to 4.10.7 billion. Therefore due to the fall in the demand for uk manufactured goods ie due to them being less internationally competitve than other countries g/s ie China, the uk’s imports rose increasing the current account deficit between 2003-2015 due to the fall in manufacturing competitiveness, evidenced by trhe fall in the Annual average rate of growth in UK manufacturing output. However whilst it has declined from 1949-2015 , there were periods of growth. Ie between 1974-2007 uk manufacturing on average grew from 0.1-0.9% an increase of 0.8%. And also following the negative growth of -9.4% in 2009, manufacturing greowht on average grew massively to 1.1% between 2010-2015 An increase of 8.3% removing the manufacturing industry from a period of negative growth, This therefore indicates that whilst the uk manufacturing has shrunk on average if we just comparer 1949-2015 ,, thjere were periods of growth as well. Sine it ionkty end wsin 2015- wer don’t know how the uk manufacturing industry is in 2024- or has changed since 2015-2024. Perhaps it has rose from a 1.1%growth rate now and perhaps now it could be even greater than that of 1949. Thereofre this is a limitation of the data provided. Overall based on the evidence provided by extract b. the data supports the idea toa very large extent that the UK manufacturing sector has been in decline since 2003. This because of the fall in the average growth rate in uk manufacturing shown in figure 4, the rise in imports in the uk due to a perhaps loss in Uk manufacturing competitiveness, so less uk produced manufactured goods are exported round the world. Additionally the fall in manufacturing employment, and finally the fall in manufacturing output shown in figure 1. Whilst all this suggests that the uk manufacturing sector is in decline however, extract B could have provided a forecast to the future predicted/expected growth rate or decline rate of the uk manufacturing industry which would be helpful in seeing the future for the Uk’s manufacturing industry. Perhaps in the future it might not be in a decline. Perhaps the uk government could introduce supply side policies to make the manufacturing industry more productive and efficient and thus it might grow in the future. However the evidence clearly supports the idea toa very large extent that the UK manufacturing sector has been in decline since 2003.
I would recommend asking your teacher for feedback. Asking them what they would recommend for you to do to get L3 on this answer and then perhaps share with me their comments.
You’re a goat, not many people have videos like this. Ty
do you have the 15 and 25 marker model answers at all as I have been practicing for my mock tomorrow
thanks for making this video!
Please make some business alevel vids like this it would be truly amazingg!!
I will do before the exam.
@@biz-omics8348 There is like 22 days before my real exams so make them sooon - and please do exam questions pleaseeee
What are the bits in red writing showing for the exemplar 10 marker ?
Evaluative consideration
Can you repeat evaluation points in the final judgement or should they be new evaluation points ?
No need to repeat! Why write it twice? Examiner has read it once, won’t want to read it again! Also, consider time management! If you want to offer evaluation throughout then perhaps focus on limitations.
So you don't have to include a limitation for all 3 of your points?
No, time management might make that hard and also the limitations of the data might be the inconsistency between the figures or what’s missing, for example what data is not included but could help with your decision
I'm not sure how you can do all this in 10 to 15 minutes... It took that long just to explain it
You would be surprised with practice. I have seen such answers in not only mock answers in controlled and timed conditions but also when marking for AQA I have seen similar answers. Once you have observed the data, manipulated the data then you are in a position to be as productive in your writing as you can be. Just remember, three paragraphs, consider all the figures, include an overall judgement and at least one limitation of the data.
Hi i did this querstion in a mock and i said the following things but my teacher gave it a 6/10. He did not provide feedback. Would you agreee with his mark. In my exam i get extra time so i mak sure i spend around 30 minutes on this question as i find this question hardere than the next 15 marker. So i dedicate 30 minutes to this: Ive put my essay below- and it would be highly appreciated if you can skim through it as an AQA Examiner and just give me anty feedback you can or a mark you would give it. Thanks a lot!!!!!! ANything tyhat is underlined or has. a line going through it is just an error with my keybboard, so dont think i cxrossed it out. Thanks!!
From Extract B it is evident that the uk sector is in decline since 2003 because the index of manufacturing output in 2003 was at around 97.5 and decreased to around 96 in 2015. This therefore shows that the UK manufacturing sector is in decline since 2003. The decline in manufacturing output May have arose due to a loss of productivity of workers in y rate the UK. The uk’s manufacturing sector has around a 20% lower productivity rate than the g7 members and so therefore due to a fall in productivity of manufacturing workers this might help explain the decline in manufacturing output. Furthermore it is known that since 2003- the uk economy has restructured moving away from the manufacturing sector to the tertiary ( service) sector and so perhaps this could explain the decline in manufacturing output. However what is Significant to note is that whilst manufacturing output has declined suggesting that the uk manufacturing ase ctor has declined, one cannot say that it has majorly decline d according to extract b, This is because the Index of manufacturing output 2003 to 2015, only declined by 1 an index of 1.5 , and so one cannot argue that is has declined Massively. Furthermore there has been a recovery for the manufacturing industry for instance after 2008 where manufacturing output fell from an index of 100 to just above 90, towards the end of 2009 there was a recovery period where manufacturing output rose from just above an index of 90 to around 97, where it has remained there until 2015 suggesting that whilst it did decline from 2003-2015, it has also recovered and remained the same.
Secondly, ,manufacturing employment has declined between 2003-2015 suggesting that the uk manufacturing industry is indeed in decline and has been in decline. In 2003 employment was just above 36000000 but it has declined to to around 32000000 in 2015. A decline of over 400 thousand workers. Therefore this shows that as demand for UK manufacturing has decreased due to the rise of Chinese manufacturing as it is more desired by the world as it is cheaper, due to derived demand ( demand for uk manufacturing declines) so unemployment in the manufacturing industry rises. However, this data was only carried out until 2015 and so since then the data could have changed. Perhaps a wider variety of years would have been useful to see a bigger trend in unemployment, Moreover, a future forecast would be beneficial to see, ie from 2015 onwards, which could therefore help us predict the future of the uk manufacturing industry, Perhaps it might recover again back to 2003 levels or even further in the future, and so the uk manufacturing industry won’t be in a decline.
Furthermore the average annual growth rate in uk manufacturing output in a % has declined from 3.4% between 1949-1973 to 1.1% between 2010- 2015. This suggests that due to a decline by 2.3% in UK manufacturing the manufacturing industry in the uk was in decline. ts might be because of a loss of international demand for uk manufactured goods, evidenced by figure 3’s rise in imports in the uk from 2003-2015 from 239.5 billion to 4.10.7 billion. Therefore due to the fall in the demand for uk manufactured goods ie due to them being less internationally competitve than other countries g/s ie China, the uk’s imports rose increasing the current account deficit between 2003-2015 due to the fall in manufacturing competitiveness, evidenced by trhe fall in the Annual average rate of growth in UK manufacturing output. However whilst it has declined from 1949-2015 , there were periods of growth. Ie between 1974-2007 uk manufacturing on average grew from 0.1-0.9% an increase of 0.8%. And also following the negative growth of -9.4% in 2009, manufacturing greowht on average grew massively to 1.1% between 2010-2015 An increase of 8.3% removing the manufacturing industry from a period of negative growth, This therefore indicates that whilst the uk manufacturing has shrunk on average if we just comparer 1949-2015 ,, thjere were periods of growth as well. Sine it ionkty end wsin 2015- wer don’t know how the uk manufacturing industry is in 2024- or has changed since 2015-2024. Perhaps it has rose from a 1.1%growth rate now and perhaps now it could be even greater than that of 1949. Thereofre this is a limitation of the data provided.
Overall based on the evidence provided by extract b. the data supports the idea toa very large extent that the UK manufacturing sector has been in decline since 2003. This because of the fall in the average growth rate in uk manufacturing shown in figure 4, the rise in imports in the uk due to a perhaps loss in Uk manufacturing competitiveness, so less uk produced manufactured goods are exported round the world. Additionally the fall in manufacturing employment, and finally the fall in manufacturing output shown in figure 1. Whilst all this suggests that the uk manufacturing sector is in decline however, extract B could have provided a forecast to the future predicted/expected growth rate or decline rate of the uk manufacturing industry which would be helpful in seeing the future for the Uk’s manufacturing industry. Perhaps in the future it might not be in a decline. Perhaps the uk government could introduce supply side policies to make the manufacturing industry more productive and efficient and thus it might grow in the future. However the evidence clearly supports the idea toa very large extent that the UK manufacturing sector has been in decline since 2003.
I would recommend asking your teacher for feedback. Asking them what they would recommend for you to do to get L3 on this answer and then perhaps share with me their comments.