Growing pains of the new multi-species educational curriculum, I suppose. Plus, if the point of the curriculum is to help species understand each other, giving them a crutch immediately isolates them from the student body. If they have separate classes and separate assignments, the student body will see them as “other” and not a “true” part of the school. Their differences would become an excuse to ostracize them, the opposite of what the school intended. Plus, the students organically helping the slower species catch up via tutoring sessions and study groups helps the student body bond together. It’s not that any species is less or more intelligent; it’s multiple species all coming together to strengthen those who struggle, and support those who excel. If that bonding was forced onto the students by the teachers or school administration, it wouldn’t have the desired effect of unifying the next generation of all these species. So it’s a tricky question! But not impossible to figure out. If the Saurenai failed to find their footing in the school and didn’t get the help they needed, I’m sure the curriculum would have changed to accommodate them.
If this kid is the product of centuries of humanity in a galactic war. YOU KNOW HIS IS HIGHLY TRAINED SINCE BIRTH IN HAND TO HAND COMBAT, We didnt just abandone our War Arts so easily. AND WE NEVER WILL...
You clearly study the blade brother. How nice to find a kindred spirit. I wouldn't attend such a school without my trusted catana and at least a handful of shuriken and kunai!!
@nathanberrigan9839 Ah. So this was just excerpts from all the other videos put into one video. That explains the characters randomly appearing as if we were already introduced to them.
Excellent story! I have heard a few really good narrators and this one as far as I am concerned is number one out of my top five ❤ Great job and thanks!
1:45 Oh gods, I heard the dreaded line "Cooperation and Mutual Understanding" that I heard WAY too many times in those AI generated stories voiced by far too many AI TTS narrators. I mean, okay thematically that's how they would connect for future generations, but that line was so overused in AI-generated stories that I got sick of it. I mean, just one story had the line about 12 times in just the first half, and I couldn't even finish.
Don't get me wrong. There's nothing inherently WRONG with those lines, it's just overused so much in AI-written stories that it gets sickening because the AI can't let go of the phrase and find an alternate means of saying it. They also seem to get stuck with repeating an idea over and over throughout the story, so that's why the lines get parroted back so often. Fortunately the line was only used once here in this story, but I just caution against using those phrases. Getting to the point of them being taboo phrases.
Yes, I also find your voice both exciting and relaxing. Starbound HFY stories give me a reason to turn on my laptop. ^_^ Personal Request: more BarBQ!🍖🥩
The Virexian are a short-lived species. Since they move & function so quickly, they’ve clearly got a very fast resting metabolism. That will prevent them from being drunk or poisoned for a long time, but it also speeds up & shortens their lifespan. The Saurenai are the polar opposite. Long-lived, hampered by poisons/sickness for extended periods of time, & don’t quickly adapt to spontaneous changes.
Interesting observations, I like the thought process, what about accounting for the vast size of the Saurani that might make them less susceptible to being drunk/poisoned and vice versa. Definitely something that will need to be explored…
@@RADIOHFY I didn’t really have the time to explain further, but it’s quite simple: The vast size of the Saurenai necessitates much MORE poison &/or alcohol to affect them. Think of people as opposed to mice. It takes only a relatively little bit of poison to hamper/harm/kill a mouse. Give that same amount to a human & it MIGHT make their stomach grumble a bit, if even that; that’s assuming we’re using a minor “poison” & not something high-level, like VX or another neurotoxin. The Virexians are, obviously, the polar opposite! While the toxin/alcohol will move into & through their system QUICKLY, it also will not take nearly AS MUCH to affect them. Very obvious stuff, really.
@@zeptolocked3023 One of the human readers here sounds suspiciously like a common voice on AI SciFi channels. I analysed it [my profession being linguistics] and finally concluded that what I recognized was what is called American Standard [a.k.a. Educated Midwestern] English. Though there are traces of local or suppressed accent. It can also be called Newsroom standard because it has been spoken by Cronkite, Huntly, Brinkly and most others since. I was surprised on visits to the South and Texas that most of the TV content was this rather than local dialect. According to one of my Linguistics professors this is why regional dialects are fading, especially among the young. My high school teachers spoke like this as well, not AFAIK the local dialect [i.e Pahk the cah in Havahd Yahd].
Imagine what the other kids would think of you as you walk through school whispering to yourself all day, unable to look anyone in the eye while clutching your possessions against you ... yeah. Then when the idiot from a broken home confronts you with their gang of equally messed up 'friends' and tries to assert dominance, you assault them 1st with a sonic device that you're not even sure won't cause lasting damage and likely isn't legal or tested (health and safety 101 ;p) ... and that's when you and your parents went to court. Fun. The kid went to school with a sonic 'taser' made specific to 1 particular species, imagine the geopolitical implications? "Terrans are arming their children against us while making noises about peace" and it just gets worse from there. PS If you raised your child to require a 24/7 crutch to get them through school - you failed.
I donno what school you went into but mine (few decades ago) had iron bars in windows for a reason. Lets just say if we had tasers back then things would get very interesting fast.
Now I remembered what your voice reminds me of! I don't recall the name, but the woman who read the audiobook version of Weber's mainline Honorverse novels that I own, and that's an eminently good thing. :)
There was a video on a far less excellent site, that treated a similar theme, but typically they stepped all over it, made it a Bif! Bam! Pow! adventure without the creativity and sensitivity shown here. Not to mention, this sites excellence in voice acting and story development remain unchallenged!
The author likes words, to an excess. Nicely narrated though, it kept me in the story to just under the midpoint. Kudos to you for making it far better than it is.
If they retain the information they recieve initially, in other words not lower Iq, Just different mental Processes that take longer, they have achieved space flight and such. I dont understand. The bit with the Saurenai, seems like you are saying that longer processing is akin to downs syndrom? They would have never achieved civilation, let alone spaceflight... makes no sense
These are adolescent Saurani that we see in the story. Their adults are highly intelligent. Due to their long lifespans other species might consider them slow learners.
Also about the Saurenai, ancient Giant sauropod who achieved Spaceflight, and decided, lets see how evolution works, and seeded earth 3.8 billion years ago, what do they call those things, Spomatofors? Something like that, earliest sign of multi cellular life. Insects on the other hand live relatively short live lives, Lobster and Crab being 2 that live longer life spans. But they could never develope space flight, or could they?
Excellent narration Larissa. Though the story was meh. Love the new intro, but ending the video at the end of the last syllable is really frakking annoying.
How do mandibles create smirks? I understood their species wouldn't have lips. So, how does that work? Please consider these plot holes and change it accordingly to make it more believable please. I have to wonder if you are having an AI program to compile a story.
You are right, I should have written it as “their mandibles opened in a relaxed fashion indicating their smugness.” Sometimes I’m blazing along and miss these things. I will take it into account.
Na man that ending wasn't cool. The bullies got hits in n all they get in return is a yelling n some pushing. Na dude u get the same that u were going to give.
Ye Gods! This one is worse than a Jeffrey Archer novel. Nope! I've enjoyed many of these, but 6 mins is all I can tolerate of this one. 😮 I'll try the next one 😉
Hmm, I think as we move towards the future most people will have a personal AI. I wouldn’t think of this as a story about a student with an AI companion. This is a story about accepting the differences of others and developing a community of trust and care for each other. 😉
This might be best enjoyed by kids. I’m old and the sci-fi I read as a kid was written by the sci-fi masters. It was meant for adults but luckily I was an excellent reader.
The story makes no sense. Alex is written to seem like the only Terran at the school and thus the target of the bullies then 3/4 though the story Alex has a conversation with other Terran students that we never hear from again until one sentence at the very end. Then all of a sudden a bunch of Terrans show up and "bring their skills" but don't actually do anything except say a couple words. If other Terrans were at the school out tribalism would have kicked in and the Terrans would have immediately cornered the bullies and killed them somewhere, threats to humanity are not allowed to exist, it is primal. So there is no way they would just ignore everything going on all that time. Final verdict: This story is either AI generated, or written by a 3rd grader.
To me its starting to stand out that a lot of these stories just repeat certain things HUmans are un aware of the chaos the bring unknowingly. whit this one.. hes planning its commin, hes panning one final show down one final showdown its comming the last battle its comming,.. atleast 8 inserts of "the final battle" is way to many. especialy in what the last 20 minutes? remove that and this story would be alot better. If the zarthaks or how you write is, is so honourable how is fighting 5 vs 1 honorable? also still fighting on 5 vs 1 you die, also where are the theatchers? and as sad below the other humans? Or is he the only one? And suddenly kreeka is a princess? Lol girl step up a bit earlier next time. force he could not ignore.. yea 60 or more vs what 5? Rather bably written and again, what is going on whit hte theathers no reprimands or anythings for fighting in the school, I thought Hogwarts was badly managed but this is worse realy. Would be nice if the dino people spoke more like treebeard, slow but not stupid.
Way too much exposition. Probably because the author relied on a chatbot and doesn't know how to edit or write. Remember to show, not tell, and realize that chatbots are all but incapable of this. Also many parts of the writing are just extra words that add nothing to the story. For example "Despite Icarus's reassurance, Alex couldn't help but feel out of place." That whole sentence is unnecessary. If you want the reader to know Alex feels out of place use his body language or, better, have him repeatedly act in a way a person does when they feel out of place. "the hallways were deserted...hoping to avoid attention" should be eliminated, replaced with a story element that shows why Alex is trying to avoid attention and the act of him avoiding attention. We don't need to read that he's avoiding attention if we read that he stopped and listened before continuing to the next hallway while whispering the dialogue to his friend. Also eliminate almost every word that tells the reader how someone feels. If we know Alex's lips were tight and that he responded with a growl, we don't need to be told Alex was angry. If Alex is asking his friend how to act to fit in we know he's trying to fit in and we don't need to be told. AI chatbots are not a substitute for learning how to write.
Is there any specific reason you think they used ai chatbot? Just curious as to why you think that. Because the description does say that the story was written by a human (sure, we don't know if they used ai help or not, still though). And to some people those extra bits of information do matter. When I do write things I do tend to be overly detailed, but that's because details matter to me (ripping out details from something, to me, feels like ripping out vital pages in a book and trying to read it after). And when I read I appreciate more details, because I don't have to guess what they were trying to convey. If the only thing I get is "Alex lips were tight, as he growled" or something like that, I feel I could interpret that in more ways than just anger. It could be annoyance, fear, psyching them selves up, make them selves look more dangerous, or what ever else it may be.
Hi there, thank you for your critique. I am indeed human although a fairly new writer. I appreciate the criticism and will definitely take it into account in future works!
A chatbot is prone to repeat the prompt back at you instead of writing a story for it. If you prompt, "Jessica is a new teacher. She is nervous on her first day. 5th grade. Write her entering her classroom" the chatbot might put out, "Jessica nervously entered her fifth grade classroom the first day of class". It might also repeat that sentence several times in paraphrase. Pretty useless, but if you're lazy you can just dice in a few of your own sentences and call it done. The main problem with this is the author fails to turn his exposition/prompt into a story. A human author would do this: Jessica shuffled her bag from right hand to left and back as she stood staring at the grand bricked entrance to Springfield Elementary. "It's one thing to learn how to teach", she thought. As she headed toward what she was sure was the right room she put on her best smile and repeated to herself, "nothing will go wrong. Nothing will go wrong. She found the door marked "Mrs. Sanchez, 5th grade" and, taking a very deep breath, opened it and entered her new career. In the second example you don't need to be told she's nervous: her actions and thoughts are nervous thoughts and actions. You don't need to be told her name or grade directly. It's incorporated into the story and this is much more engaging.
Always good to hear a real and well spoken human voice. Well done.
Did Alex talk to another human at any point ever? Why didn't he have any human friends? Why didn't other humans stand up with tbe bullied kid?
If an entire species was that much slower mentally speaking, then why wouldn't they have special classes designed just for them?
Growing pains of the new multi-species educational curriculum, I suppose. Plus, if the point of the curriculum is to help species understand each other, giving them a crutch immediately isolates them from the student body. If they have separate classes and separate assignments, the student body will see them as “other” and not a “true” part of the school. Their differences would become an excuse to ostracize them, the opposite of what the school intended.
Plus, the students organically helping the slower species catch up via tutoring sessions and study groups helps the student body bond together. It’s not that any species is less or more intelligent; it’s multiple species all coming together to strengthen those who struggle, and support those who excel. If that bonding was forced onto the students by the teachers or school administration, it wouldn’t have the desired effect of unifying the next generation of all these species.
So it’s a tricky question! But not impossible to figure out. If the Saurenai failed to find their footing in the school and didn’t get the help they needed, I’m sure the curriculum would have changed to accommodate them.
It's a story lmao
Because it is a very poorly written story. Probably written by an AI....or a 3rd grader.
@@alexistaylor969 Still at least it's being read by a human which makes it rise to the top of these types of channels.
If this kid is the product of centuries of humanity in a galactic war. YOU KNOW HIS IS HIGHLY TRAINED SINCE BIRTH IN HAND TO HAND COMBAT, We didnt just abandone our War Arts so easily. AND WE NEVER WILL...
You forgot your grammar
@brilliant3645 me too definitely drunken
You clearly study the blade brother. How nice to find a kindred spirit. I wouldn't attend such a school without my trusted catana and at least a handful of shuriken and kunai!!
Good lord....
This feels like a summerry of a much larger story as characters are introduced so abruptly
They are trying to introduce AGGRO SQUIRREL!!!! please, i think many collaboratives need to be had!!!!
It is part of a multi-part story. I read they're going to link them up in playlists.
@nathanberrigan9839 Ah. So this was just excerpts from all the other videos put into one video. That explains the characters randomly appearing as if we were already introduced to them.
I could swear that this voice actress sounds a lit like one that I've heard in a number of animes
...she is a regular narrator on Starbound HFY
Excellent story! I have heard a few really good narrators and this one as far as I am concerned is number one out of my top five ❤
Great job and thanks!
1:45 Oh gods, I heard the dreaded line "Cooperation and Mutual Understanding" that I heard WAY too many times in those AI generated stories voiced by far too many AI TTS narrators. I mean, okay thematically that's how they would connect for future generations, but that line was so overused in AI-generated stories that I got sick of it. I mean, just one story had the line about 12 times in just the first half, and I couldn't even finish.
I feel your pain, I hate "humans fought with tenacity and ingenuity" I think some you words and phrases should be banned from these stories.
And how every pilots " fingers DANCE OVER THE CONTROLS" GRRRRR that's the one that i keep hearing
....and dont forget cacophony!!!! and all the rest of the 'blabidy-blabidy-blah' of the AI written pap
...and 'clicking mandibles'
Don't get me wrong. There's nothing inherently WRONG with those lines, it's just overused so much in AI-written stories that it gets sickening because the AI can't let go of the phrase and find an alternate means of saying it. They also seem to get stuck with repeating an idea over and over throughout the story, so that's why the lines get parroted back so often. Fortunately the line was only used once here in this story, but I just caution against using those phrases. Getting to the point of them being taboo phrases.
Suddenly, a wild Gary Stu appears.
The AI companion reminds me of the character Lyra's Demon in the book trilogy His Dark Materials.
Yes, I also find your voice both exciting and relaxing. Starbound HFY stories give me a reason to turn on my laptop. ^_^
Personal Request: more BarBQ!🍖🥩
The Virexian are a short-lived species. Since they move & function so quickly, they’ve clearly got a very fast resting metabolism. That will prevent them from being drunk or poisoned for a long time, but it also speeds up & shortens their lifespan.
The Saurenai are the polar opposite. Long-lived, hampered by poisons/sickness for extended periods of time, & don’t quickly adapt to spontaneous changes.
Interesting observations, I like the thought process, what about accounting for the vast size of the Saurani that might make them less susceptible to being drunk/poisoned and vice versa. Definitely something that will need to be explored…
@@RADIOHFY
I didn’t really have the time to explain further, but it’s quite simple:
The vast size of the Saurenai necessitates much MORE poison &/or alcohol to affect them. Think of people as opposed to mice. It takes only a relatively little bit of poison to hamper/harm/kill a mouse. Give that same amount to a human & it MIGHT make their stomach grumble a bit, if even that; that’s assuming we’re using a minor “poison” & not something high-level, like VX or another neurotoxin.
The Virexians are, obviously, the polar opposite! While the toxin/alcohol will move into & through their system QUICKLY, it also will not take nearly AS MUCH to affect them.
Very obvious stuff, really.
You have a pleasant voice.
Its ai
@@zeptolocked3023it’s definitely not a.i
This young lady is such a pleasant change from the janky AI that most of these sci-fi channels use
@@zeptolocked3023blud is blind lol
@@zeptolocked3023 One of the human readers here sounds suspiciously like a common voice on AI SciFi channels. I analysed it [my profession being linguistics] and finally concluded that what I recognized was what is called American Standard [a.k.a. Educated Midwestern] English. Though there are traces of local or suppressed accent. It can also be called Newsroom standard because it has been spoken by Cronkite, Huntly, Brinkly and most others since. I was surprised on visits to the South and Texas that most of the TV content was this rather than local dialect. According to one of my Linguistics professors this is why regional dialects are fading, especially among the young. My high school teachers spoke like this as well, not AFAIK the local dialect [i.e Pahk the cah in Havahd Yahd].
I really liked this story! But the up down buttons weren't there for me so....Love you voice ma'am.
That was a good story with a human touch from a very good narrator! Thanks!!
It is doubtful that just one kid would be sent to the school
This feels like it's written by someone who's never lost a fight. I like this story though, it's fun
Imagine what the other kids would think of you as you walk through school whispering to yourself all day, unable to look anyone in the eye while clutching your possessions against you ... yeah. Then when the idiot from a broken home confronts you with their gang of equally messed up 'friends' and tries to assert dominance, you assault them 1st with a sonic device that you're not even sure won't cause lasting damage and likely isn't legal or tested (health and safety 101 ;p) ... and that's when you and your parents went to court. Fun.
The kid went to school with a sonic 'taser' made specific to 1 particular species, imagine the geopolitical implications? "Terrans are arming their children against us while making noises about peace" and it just gets worse from there.
PS If you raised your child to require a 24/7 crutch to get them through school - you failed.
I donno what school you went into but mine (few decades ago) had iron bars in windows for a reason.
Lets just say if we had tasers back then things would get very interesting fast.
Seven words that make algorithms love You.
알고리즘이 당신을 사랑하게 만드는 일곱 단어.
Now I remembered what your voice reminds me of! I don't recall the name, but the woman who read the audiobook version of Weber's mainline Honorverse novels that I own, and that's an eminently good thing. :)
These storys are great
Have to admit i like your voice. Also, I think the description of the first day at school does not need an SF background to ring true.
There was a video on a far less excellent site, that treated a similar theme, but typically they stepped all over it, made it a Bif! Bam! Pow! adventure without the creativity and sensitivity shown here. Not to mention, this sites excellence in voice acting and story development remain unchallenged!
The author likes words, to an excess. Nicely narrated though, it kept me in the story to just under the midpoint. Kudos to you for making it far better than it is.
If they retain the information they recieve initially, in other words not lower Iq, Just different mental Processes that take longer, they have achieved space flight and such. I dont understand. The bit with the Saurenai, seems like you are saying that longer processing is akin to downs syndrom? They would have never achieved civilation, let alone spaceflight... makes no sense
These are adolescent Saurani that we see in the story. Their adults are highly intelligent. Due to their long lifespans other species might consider them slow learners.
@@RADIOHFYthat's a great explanation. Due to their comparably long live, 15 years of ageing for them is a lot "younger" than we are at 15yo
Also about the Saurenai, ancient Giant sauropod who achieved Spaceflight, and decided, lets see how evolution works, and seeded earth 3.8 billion years ago, what do they call those things, Spomatofors? Something like that, earliest sign of multi cellular life. Insects on the other hand live relatively short live lives, Lobster and Crab being 2 that live longer life spans. But they could never develope space flight, or could they?
Excellent narration Larissa. Though the story was meh.
Love the new intro, but ending the video at the end of the last syllable is really frakking annoying.
Terrans, are humans correct?
yeah
Coming from the Latin root word Terr or dirt. I really think starbound should do a prompt for “they called their planet dirt”
cool story
Maybe the real AI was the friends we made along the way...
31:47
How do mandibles create smirks? I understood their species wouldn't have lips. So, how does that work? Please consider these plot holes and change it accordingly to make it more believable please. I have to wonder if you are having an AI program to compile a story.
You are right, I should have written it as “their mandibles opened in a relaxed fashion indicating their smugness.” Sometimes I’m blazing along and miss these things. I will take it into account.
@@RADIOHFY Cool. Thank you!
Finally one I can give a thumbs up to.
The art is ai, but the va are not
Seems like a not so great abriverated eg.
Na man that ending wasn't cool. The bullies got hits in n all they get in return is a yelling n some pushing. Na dude u get the same that u were going to give.
Ye Gods! This one is worse than a Jeffrey Archer novel. Nope!
I've enjoyed many of these, but 6 mins is all I can tolerate of this one. 😮
I'll try the next one 😉
Wow you have an attention span of a gnat how can you watch any movie or a tv show
I had to bail after the dreaded “he let out a breath that he didn’t realize he was holding”. 😂
I feel a collaborative of voice people's is a must have. You guys/gals could reach out and make a network of voices for shorts and fun
A student with an AI companion? So we're just remaking stories now?
Hmm, I think as we move towards the future most people will have a personal AI. I wouldn’t think of this as a story about a student with an AI companion. This is a story about accepting the differences of others and developing a community of trust and care for each other. 😉
A lot of cell phones have AI on them. Personalizing will take a bit, but maybe not very long. @RADIOHFY
There will never be a mistake about this being human intelligence rather than AI excellent job young lady
This might be best enjoyed by kids. I’m old and the sci-fi I read as a kid was written by the sci-fi masters. It was meant for adults but luckily I was an excellent reader.
AI doesn't create new and original stories.
yea yea in Europe ar´thok is called ali or mehmet but same cenario only this dudes do not know honor and alwaysgo in grps against one .....
The story makes no sense. Alex is written to seem like the only Terran at the school and thus the target of the bullies then 3/4 though the story Alex has a conversation with other Terran students that we never hear from again until one sentence at the very end.
Then all of a sudden a bunch of Terrans show up and "bring their skills" but don't actually do anything except say a couple words.
If other Terrans were at the school out tribalism would have kicked in and the Terrans would have immediately cornered the bullies and killed them somewhere, threats to humanity are not allowed to exist, it is primal.
So there is no way they would just ignore everything going on all that time.
Final verdict: This story is either AI generated, or written by a 3rd grader.
To me its starting to stand out that a lot of these stories just repeat certain things HUmans are un aware of the chaos the bring unknowingly. whit this one.. hes planning its commin, hes panning one final show down one final showdown its comming the last battle its comming,.. atleast 8 inserts of "the final battle" is way to many. especialy in what the last 20 minutes? remove that and this story would be alot better. If the zarthaks or how you write is, is so honourable how is fighting 5 vs 1 honorable? also still fighting on 5 vs 1 you die, also where are the theatchers? and as sad below the other humans? Or is he the only one? And suddenly kreeka is a princess? Lol girl step up a bit earlier next time. force he could not ignore.. yea 60 or more vs what 5? Rather bably written and again, what is going on whit hte theathers no reprimands or anythings for fighting in the school, I thought Hogwarts was badly managed but this is worse realy. Would be nice if the dino people spoke more like treebeard, slow but not stupid.
Way too much exposition. Probably because the author relied on a chatbot and doesn't know how to edit or write. Remember to show, not tell, and realize that chatbots are all but incapable of this. Also many parts of the writing are just extra words that add nothing to the story. For example "Despite Icarus's reassurance, Alex couldn't help but feel out of place." That whole sentence is unnecessary. If you want the reader to know Alex feels out of place use his body language or, better, have him repeatedly act in a way a person does when they feel out of place. "the hallways were deserted...hoping to avoid attention" should be eliminated, replaced with a story element that shows why Alex is trying to avoid attention and the act of him avoiding attention. We don't need to read that he's avoiding attention if we read that he stopped and listened before continuing to the next hallway while whispering the dialogue to his friend.
Also eliminate almost every word that tells the reader how someone feels. If we know Alex's lips were tight and that he responded with a growl, we don't need to be told Alex was angry. If Alex is asking his friend how to act to fit in we know he's trying to fit in and we don't need to be told.
AI chatbots are not a substitute for learning how to write.
Is there any specific reason you think they used ai chatbot? Just curious as to why you think that. Because the description does say that the story was written by a human (sure, we don't know if they used ai help or not, still though).
And to some people those extra bits of information do matter. When I do write things I do tend to be overly detailed, but that's because details matter to me (ripping out details from something, to me, feels like ripping out vital pages in a book and trying to read it after). And when I read I appreciate more details, because I don't have to guess what they were trying to convey. If the only thing I get is "Alex lips were tight, as he growled" or something like that, I feel I could interpret that in more ways than just anger. It could be annoyance, fear, psyching them selves up, make them selves look more dangerous, or what ever else it may be.
Hi there, thank you for your critique. I am indeed human although a fairly new writer. I appreciate the criticism and will definitely take it into account in future works!
A chatbot is prone to repeat the prompt back at you instead of writing a story for it. If you prompt, "Jessica is a new teacher. She is nervous on her first day. 5th grade. Write her entering her classroom" the chatbot might put out, "Jessica nervously entered her fifth grade classroom the first day of class". It might also repeat that sentence several times in paraphrase. Pretty useless, but if you're lazy you can just dice in a few of your own sentences and call it done. The main problem with this is the author fails to turn his exposition/prompt into a story. A human author would do this: Jessica shuffled her bag from right hand to left and back as she stood staring at the grand bricked entrance to Springfield Elementary. "It's one thing to learn how to teach", she thought. As she headed toward what she was sure was the right room she put on her best smile and repeated to herself, "nothing will go wrong. Nothing will go wrong. She found the door marked "Mrs. Sanchez, 5th grade" and, taking a very deep breath, opened it and entered her new career.
In the second example you don't need to be told she's nervous: her actions and thoughts are nervous thoughts and actions. You don't need to be told her name or grade directly. It's incorporated into the story and this is much more engaging.
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Unadulterated AI generated garbage not worthy of my attention.