Essay: "Prestidigitation, P R E S . . ." Admissions: "BORING!" *throws away* Essay: "Thinking about working hard, gets me hard." Harvard: "Bro, want a scholarship?"
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
There's a certain convention I've learned after taking an English class that focused a lot on using creative writing. English classes teach us every possible fundamental tool for using English. Creative writing (which would apply to these admissions letters), by nature, breaks those fundamentals up for the sake of narrative flexibility and immersion. Creative writing is a whole different world compared to what most English classes try to prepare you for. For example, no author has a grammatically "perfect" style. Most people that would stick to "proper" English usage would make boring stories. Don't let the technical stuff bog you down. Just understand the advantages to using it in certain situations.
Its high school english. 98% of the time the teachers themselves cant write a decent composition or know what one is. They ask kids to read books, then occasionally assign an essay because they have to, and they are bad cookiecutter essays
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
Its funny im watching this while in university and i didnt have to do any of the shit this guy and others have been telling me i needed to do for the past 3 years. Ofc it isnt harvard or Cambridge but trust me only one semester in and i fully acknowledge that wont matter once you have a couple of years experience under your belt. I learnt one of the most important things to learn other than academics is the art of talking to and charming people. You can get very far with just the way you talk and present yourself.❤ dont stress, live a little.
I put in my grade 3 assessment sheet asking me to draw what I would like to be when I was older on the first page of my essay. I think its part of what got me in to University.
The "good one" is so bad. Unless I know what prestidigitation is and care about it, and spelling a word is meaningless and cliche at this point. Tbh, I'm actually way more interested in the "the thinking about working hard gets me hard" applicant.
Ok. These essays are supposed to distinguish you from a bunch of people by showing your true self. If you're not making full use of that, you're not gonna stand out. It might even hurt your application chances.
Ok but how can I make my essays better? I need serious help because I am in the process of applying for scholarships but I'm afraid that my essays will just be weak and not good enough to even have a chance at being considered.
You actually don’t have a few seconds to catch their attention. Each essay gets read if you meet the requirements. Multiple people read your essay before it gets a decision.
Being too philosophical in your college essay will make you come off as quite obnoxious so try to avoid those topics unless you’re going into philosophy
My college advisor told me not to make puns about Hitler’s mustache, when my college I was aiming for asked who we wished we could dine with in history, but honestly I think it is one of several things of what got me into my college. It certainly stood out. Haha. I am definitely an outlandish girl who had great grades. It certainly would not have worked out for me in this day and age though.
"Prestidigitation. A cantrip that allows minor magical tricks and effects available to bards, sorcerors, warlocks, and wizards at first level. Prestidigitation."
I took a class called career research and decision making and the way they did there essay was exactly how it teaches in that class by doing what they called the sandwich method and it works great
"thinking about working hard, makes me hard" is pretty engaging to his audience might be funny to admission officer but definitely not for "taking u get through it"
My admission letter was less than 3 complete sentences: I’m [insert name]. I would like to come to this school. I was also auto accepted in Tx cause of my HS ranking and I knew that they couldn’t tell me no
My admission essay to a 4 year university was 12 words. “I think I would make a great addition to the tiger community” I was accepted and have since dropped out because I got depressed. Now I’m just depressed, in debt and have no degree. Yay.
Entrance letters, resumes, etc, etc...everyone is forced to right these overblown and forced "exciting" letters with a hook or catch. How about the admissions officers do their due diligence and not be lazy.
Am I going insane? Why is everyone quoting it as “Thinking about working hard, makes me hard” when he clearly said “gets me hard”? Is this some sort of RUclips censorship thing or are all the top comments mishearing it?
“Thinking about working hard, makes me hard”
A true legend made that quote
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YOU are telling ME that "thinking about working hard,makes me hard" DOESNT CAPTURE YOUR ATTENTION
😂
Ayo 😳🤣
they’d get that acceptance letter real fast
Facts 😂😂
That was the best one right there.
“thinking about working hard, makes me hard” is a pretty engaging hook to me
Yeah that hook was solid
yeah that hook hit hard
On god that sticks with me
@@016_ 😳
@@railx2005 That wasn't the only solid thing...
“Thinking about working hard makes me hard”
ACCEPTED
Hey the voice who was speaking the essay was Gohar
I think they are brothers
Yes
@@crypticfairy7930 yeah, he confirmed it in one of his older videos
@@GatikRaj ohh okay I probably haven’t seen that video yet then
@@crypticfairy7930 it didn’t have that many views, I was kinda surprised that it didn’t
Use the most engaging hook of all... "my father made a large donation to this school"
💀
Or “I’m black and disabled”
@@equinox2655you’re accepted
@@equinox2655and mixed with masu mula and gay
@@Messup7654 and identify as an animal
Definitely Gohar khan doing the voice over
I’m pretty sure they are brothers, might be wrong but they have the same last name and look somewhat alike.
@@crypticfairy7930 yeah I’m pretty sure they are brothers/ cousins
@@crypticfairy7930 they are brothers
I love how they stopped every sound so the “Just thinking about working hard makes me hard” would be so clear
“Thinking about working hard, makes me hard”
Is that david goggins?
😂😂😂
"Stay hard”-David goggins
whos gonna carry the boats???
that should be his hook
@@Youneedsomemilk16 people with erectile dysfunction: am i a joke to you???
WHOS GONNA CARRY THE BOATS - david goggins
Essay: "Prestidigitation, P R E S . . ."
Admissions: "BORING!" *throws away*
Essay: "Thinking about working hard, gets me hard."
Harvard: "Bro, want a scholarship?"
😏
Ong aint nobody wanna read some dumb spelling bee shit
@@therickestroller 😳
🥵 @@Ryuisdragon
“Just thinking about working hard gets me hard”
Guess what’s going in my college essay
To be honest if you have at least one prestigious you might not get in out it on there.
It worked, got into SUNY Binghamton
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
@@Trimarkovichwait you actually put it in? If so that’s wild
@@Trimarkovichno way-
My admission's essay started out like this:
She lay their naked screaming...
Can’t even use the correct “there.” Smh 😞
there*
did you get in?
@@Mysterious-Night She got you engaged though so...
What was the essay about
This reminds me of the dumb greentext that talked about "I throw away half of the resumes I get, I dont want unlucky people."
LMAOOOO
I used to do this on essays anyway but High school English class squashed my confidence in it...
Don't Give up..
There's a certain convention I've learned after taking an English class that focused a lot on using creative writing. English classes teach us every possible fundamental tool for using English. Creative writing (which would apply to these admissions letters), by nature, breaks those fundamentals up for the sake of narrative flexibility and immersion. Creative writing is a whole different world compared to what most English classes try to prepare you for. For example, no author has a grammatically "perfect" style. Most people that would stick to "proper" English usage would make boring stories. Don't let the technical stuff bog you down. Just understand the advantages to using it in certain situations.
@@absolootdisaster1060 is there some sort of class or video that can show me an example of that?
Its high school english. 98% of the time the teachers themselves cant write a decent composition or know what one is. They ask kids to read books, then occasionally assign an essay because they have to, and they are bad cookiecutter essays
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
my cousin wrote about why kanye was her favorite rap artist for her harvard essay back in 2016. she was accepted lol
W
Did Harvard revoke the degree or something
Lol
Ok they're so obviously brothers, no cap
yes they are
Romans 10:9 because, if you confess with your mouth that Jesus is Lord and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.1
@askredditstudios8055 Umm look I'm Christian too but I feel like that's kinds irrelevant to the video?
@@notnat2it’s a bot/hacked account
did he say “just thinking about working hard MAKES ME HARD?” Wtf 😂
Goddamn i got you and gohans vids one after another while randomly scrolling
gohar*
Thinking about working hard gets me hard, I was cracking up
“Thinking about working hard makes me hard”💀💀💀
My college essay started with “Humans on this planet are quite interesting.”
did u get in
@@lifeangular62610
Yes
“Just thinking about working hard gets me hard”
Nah this is staged, no one would flip past that one 💀
Honestly the college essay thing makes me
like concept of entrance exam even more.
Score good marks, fullfill the criteria, shut up and give my seat.
The collab we needed
As a Guatemalan just pro tip NEVER start an essay with mission trip to Guatemala
I am from Guate and was going to do that :')
Gohar saying “thinking about hard work makes me hard” may be the best thing I experience this week
Your brother Gohar was definitely the person who dubbed and probably wrote the all of the essays 😊!
The collab I didn't know i needed! How did i see this so late????
“Just thinking about working hard, gets me hard”
This had me laughing so HARD
Picks up last page, it says:
‘Ligma’
And he’s like:
‘What’s ligm…
“There once was a boy.” Was my personal quote for an essay I wrote. It was weird talking about myself in the third person.
Its funny im watching this while in university and i didnt have to do any of the shit this guy and others have been telling me i needed to do for the past 3 years. Ofc it isnt harvard or Cambridge but trust me only one semester in and i fully acknowledge that wont matter once you have a couple of years experience under your belt. I learnt one of the most important things to learn other than academics is the art of talking to and charming people. You can get very far with just the way you talk and present yourself.❤ dont stress, live a little.
Cheer~~~a short piece of writing on a particular subject.😊
Honestly those “personal engaging hooks” are boring to me. They are also just cringe. I would never read the last essay tbh
"Create an engaging hook" they said, "capture their attention" they said, now I'm in federal prison thx man..
“Just thinking about working hard gets me hard” ?
“Just thinking about working hard makes me ha-“ 💀
I put in my grade 3 assessment sheet asking me to draw what I would like to be when I was older on the first page of my essay. I think its part of what got me in to University.
Gohar really going over the voicing
Great explanation 🔥
Not me thinking he was gonna write prestidigitation on the paper 💀
So to get into Harvard have knowledge and be able to create high viewed shorts and TikTok’s and have a min of 100k followers
Yesss being a good narrative writer is an important skill
Dude my college essay was literally about my mission trip to Guatemala
I really like his voice. It's so soothing 😌
The "good one" is so bad. Unless I know what prestidigitation is and care about it, and spelling a word is meaningless and cliche at this point. Tbh, I'm actually way more interested in the "the thinking about working hard gets me hard" applicant.
I swear I heard “working hard gets me har-“
Yep same
My essay : im hungry give me food
What? Thats how much home works we got in goddamn 2nd year highschool
If this is legitimately how college boards read their papers, I feel every single one of them should be fired and exiled from any college campus.
They don't have full days to spend and read 1000 each day.
Ok. These essays are supposed to distinguish you from a bunch of people by showing your true self. If you're not making full use of that, you're not gonna stand out. It might even hurt your application chances.
I'm so glad I don't have to do this in my country 😅
Ok but how can I make my essays better? I need serious help because I am in the process of applying for scholarships but I'm afraid that my essays will just be weak and not good enough to even have a chance at being considered.
If every opening is engaging then none of them are.
“i hate the letter-“ immediate throw away
Honestly up to perception
You actually don’t have a few seconds to catch their attention. Each essay gets read if you meet the requirements. Multiple people read your essay before it gets a decision.
You cant tell me “just think about working hard, makes me hard” isnt a great opener
I already knew that I needed a good hook. My problem is my complete lack of literary skill in crafting engaging hooks
the goal of all life is death sounds like a cool opening
Being too philosophical in your college essay will make you come off as quite obnoxious so try to avoid those topics unless you’re going into philosophy
That's a verifiably terrible opening.
My college advisor told me not to make puns about Hitler’s mustache, when my college I was aiming for asked who we wished we could dine with in history, but honestly I think it is one of several things of what got me into my college. It certainly stood out. Haha. I am definitely an outlandish girl who had great grades. It certainly would not have worked out for me in this day and age though.
"Prestidigitation. A cantrip that allows minor magical tricks and effects available to bards, sorcerors, warlocks, and wizards at first level. Prestidigitation."
if i had to make my admission paper catchy, i bet it would be, “aight bro, ima cut to the chase. read my shit rn boy”
that guy should be fired
I took a class called career research and decision making and the way they did there essay was exactly how it teaches in that class by doing what they called the sandwich method and it works great
This couldn’t have popped up at a better time.
bro literary just said what all my english teachers told me
“I’m a donkey, Shrek.”
But the admissions officer also gets your rest of the profile with the essay too right?
yes
thank you for this tip :)
Plot twist, he wrote "absolute garbage" on the paper
To be honest, I have nothing eventful to write about
If “just thinking about working hard, gets me hard” isn’t engaging enough idk wtf is 😭
This video made me have a good belly laugh
Tbh that opening was more of a beginning to a book rather than an application
It's kinda supposed to be that way
"thinking about working hard, makes me hard" is pretty engaging to his audience might be funny to admission officer but definitely not for "taking u get through it"
I don't know dude, that trip to Guatemala kinda got me hooked
My admission letter was less than 3 complete sentences: I’m [insert name]. I would like to come to this school.
I was also auto accepted in Tx cause of my HS ranking and I knew that they couldn’t tell me no
Damn I wish I won a spelling bee so I could steal that for my essay
This reminds me of that one scene from a Christmas story
Kinda sad you have to rely partialy on your ability to write essays to get to college and not just your exam results
You know what’s crazy is if you in an English class and that last one is your first sentence most teachers would instantly take off points
This is why I'd rather go to a college that requires no essay or not go to college at all, i cannot write essays to save my life
My admission essay to a 4 year university was 12 words. “I think I would make a great addition to the tiger community”
I was accepted and have since dropped out because I got depressed. Now I’m just depressed, in debt and have no degree.
Yay.
When he got to the last one the writer put the reader in there shoes instead of a reporter style essay where you just list what you did
The fact is @Gohar Khan video was right above this video and it was about college essay to lol
My essay began “Ants are pretty stupid”
Best crossover of the 21st century
Bro went to White Castle after this
Everyone Gangsta until they realise that the voice was gohar
Hooks are the most important part of any essay. How kids applying to top schools will forget that I'll never know 💀
doom scrolling as a job
what a nice AD xdxdxd
Entrance letters, resumes, etc, etc...everyone is forced to right these overblown and forced "exciting" letters with a hook or catch. How about the admissions officers do their due diligence and not be lazy.
Aight so mine gotta be the last one
What are you doing Step-Gohar khan !?
Am I going insane? Why is everyone quoting it as “Thinking about working hard, makes me hard” when he clearly said “gets me hard”? Is this some sort of RUclips censorship thing or are all the top comments mishearing it?
This is definitely how they check your essay
Wait is saying, “You, yes you reading this essay let me tell you the time…” is that a smart hook or stupid I’m sorry if it’s a stupid hook
Rhis feels like an ad for quiting smoking or smth
So good collages are a “who’s got a better personality contest to get accepted”?