I'm glad you liked the chapter! I was sweating, not gonna lie! I was worried, to be honest as I don't write a lot of fight scenes, but the motives had already been set, as well as the emotional stakes. It flowed so naturally it almost felt like I was using a cheat code. (Note to Authors: do the character/emotional work in setting up the conflict and the confrontations will fall in line like dominoes) I love that you felt for Damilola. His death hurt me and that was how I knew it mattered. Also, something to mention in future videos, author use of a trope known as "Chekov's Gun". I had spent a fair number of words on the Maot Death-mask being "a thing". Writing this new chapter let me "fire the gun" . I got to show why that character was the way he was and how the mask mattered and it was brutal, unfair, and an ignoble way to die. R.I.P Damilola. Best part is, all of this weighs on the reader as Imyan, our MC, digs the graves in penance for failing his men. Such a huge improvement! I had set very rigid boundaries when I started this story. Your critique gave me the permission I needed to invest in what I knew what was missing.
I really like this, man. Good work as always! Shout out to ContessaDark for taking onboard your criticisms. I like their style and they look like a very promising author :)
I'm glad you liked the chapter! I was sweating, not gonna lie!
I was worried, to be honest as I don't write a lot of fight scenes, but the motives had already been set, as well as the emotional stakes. It flowed so naturally it almost felt like I was using a cheat code. (Note to Authors: do the character/emotional work in setting up the conflict and the confrontations will fall in line like dominoes) I love that you felt for Damilola. His death hurt me and that was how I knew it mattered. Also, something to mention in future videos, author use of a trope known as "Chekov's Gun". I had spent a fair number of words on the Maot Death-mask being "a thing". Writing this new chapter let me "fire the gun" . I got to show why that character was the way he was and how the mask mattered and it was brutal, unfair, and an ignoble way to die. R.I.P Damilola.
Best part is, all of this weighs on the reader as Imyan, our MC, digs the graves in penance for failing his men. Such a huge improvement! I had set very rigid boundaries when I started this story. Your critique gave me the permission I needed to invest in what I knew what was missing.
ContessaDark is a very competent writer with an engaging style. Your criticisms are helping her flesh out her story. Very nice all round :)
It's important to be able to take criticism. Learned it the hard way lmao
I'm about to start writing... I'm tempted to see what a Sami roast is like ROFL
@@paulaunger3061 You can send me a sample and we'll see :D
I really like this, man. Good work as always! Shout out to ContessaDark for taking onboard your criticisms. I like their style and they look like a very promising author :)