wasnt there a team waiting for him to lead the,....if you do your own editing, read it backwards you will puck up a whole bunch of things,,,,,,, I do...
Stupid AI... must rescue Emily but first, I'll go talk to her father, the admiral, who is watching over her, beside, beer body covered in bandages. WTH?
The brain or have captured and are torturing the guy daughter. Yeah the guy and his daughter are in a room where the super soldier goes in and talks to the father while the daughter is there. And then seconds later, they’re talking to another Doctor Who is giving the soldier ideas on how to retrieve the daughter who is in the medical room with her father? not a very well laid out storie.
Terrible! Proofread your stuff! How can they save Emily when she's in a hospital bed, under human control? Could have been a good story, but for the stupid sloppiness.
Silly Question, but why is this called 'Tortured a Human Girl' instead of just 'Tortured a Human Child' , especially since the girl in the story is 12 years old? In the 'Aliens Killed a Human Child' stories, I've never seen 'Aliens Killed a Human Girl' used as a title, yet the child in question is sometimes a boy and sometimes a girl. However, in the 'Tortured a Human Child' stories, it is always a boy unless you have the title changed to 'Tortured a Human Girl' Why not just keep use the term 'Child' even if the victim is a girl? Know what I mean? My suggestion is either just use 'Child' for both sexes or ' Tortured Human Boy' or ' Tortured Human Girl' depending on the sex. Also, use the AI to recommend names for 'Fictional Alien' Races, so you are not using established, well known T.V/Movie aliens. Also, take some time to skill through the story before posting. Emily is with her father recovering near the beginning, but then suddenly is still in alien captivity.
I think it might be a prompt issue. It's not just Galactic HFY, all the HFY writers seem use 'Girl' , otherwise if the term 'Child' it used, is always a boy. I also noticed the way the story is told between 'Child' and 'Girl' is usually different as well. This is the first ever I've seen a story start out with 'Emily's tortured screams echoed...' with a girl as the victim. SO perhaps he fixed the issue with the prompt.
What happened to his strike team??
How many different ways can you spell Ferengi? I counted six ways…definitely distracts from the story!
wasnt there a team waiting for him to lead the,....if you do your own editing, read it backwards you will puck up a whole bunch of things,,,,,,, I do...
Stupid AI... must rescue Emily but first, I'll go talk to her father, the admiral, who is watching over her, beside, beer body covered in bandages. WTH?
The brain or have captured and are torturing the guy daughter. Yeah the guy and his daughter are in a room where the super soldier goes in and talks to the father while the daughter is there. And then seconds later, they’re talking to another Doctor Who is giving the soldier ideas on how to retrieve the daughter who is in the medical room with her father? not a very well laid out storie.
Terrible! Proofread your stuff! How can they save Emily when she's in a hospital bed, under human control? Could have been a good story, but for the stupid sloppiness.
Too many errors! Preview video before you upload.
Silly Question, but why is this called 'Tortured a Human Girl' instead of just 'Tortured a Human Child' , especially since the girl in the story is 12 years old?
In the 'Aliens Killed a Human Child' stories, I've never seen 'Aliens Killed a Human Girl' used as a title, yet the child in question is sometimes a boy and sometimes a girl.
However, in the 'Tortured a Human Child' stories, it is always a boy unless you have the title changed to 'Tortured a Human Girl'
Why not just keep use the term 'Child' even if the victim is a girl? Know what I mean?
My suggestion is either just use 'Child' for both sexes or ' Tortured Human Boy' or ' Tortured Human Girl' depending on the sex.
Also, use the AI to recommend names for 'Fictional Alien' Races, so you are not using established, well known T.V/Movie aliens.
Also, take some time to skill through the story before posting. Emily is with her father recovering near the beginning, but then suddenly is still in alien captivity.
I think it might be a prompt issue. It's not just Galactic HFY, all the HFY writers seem use 'Girl' , otherwise if the term 'Child' it used, is always a boy. I also noticed the way the story is told between 'Child' and 'Girl' is usually different as well. This is the first ever I've seen a story start out with 'Emily's tortured screams echoed...' with a girl as the victim. SO perhaps he fixed the issue with the prompt.
Please stop killing off the heros!
This was so badly written! 😮😮😮