How to Improve Your Sentences when Writing | Ask a Bestselling Writer
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- Опубликовано: 6 май 2024
- New York Times-bestselling author Joshua Fields Millburn talks about improving your sentences by knowing when to show and when to tell. Download our free ebook, 15 WAYS TO WRITE BETTER: howtowritebetter.org.
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"Subtract, subtract, subtract." What a minimalist.
I am the Wilson who posed this question one year ago in the How to Write Better course general forum. It was my very first post upon enrolling. Reviewing the blog post I was writing, which prompted the question, I not only agree with JFMs assessment of the one sentence, but the whole thing is just wordy. Hearing my question answered in this podcast was a nice surprise, and I'm looking forward to re-writing the post with this gift of a great first line (plus the vast improvement I've made as a writer since then). Thanks, Joshua!
And yes, the course was worth every penny, and then some.
What an amazing thing words are and how putting them in just the right way can make them into wisdom.
" its not by adding more, its by removing that with the subtractions."
is all about editing, less is more.
I am so glad to find your videos. My story is about how my husband and I are related, and trying to put it on paper is one of the most challenging things I've ever done. Oh, we are related, but not by blood. Your videos are a great inspiration. Thank you
Instead of receiving the Nobel Prize in Literature,
I studied forty videos about elegant sentences.
great video! learned a lot
Interesting. Btw, my mother always said that the word, "got" was the laziest verb in the English language. I Never use that word in conversation and can be seen pausing to recreate my words while eliminating that word. Good advice, I think.
Great reworked sentence! I love it.
I learned something. Thanks
The red corvette as an example of midlife crisis. Just described my ex with his crisis at that age 😅. Can not be better example that this 👌💯
Solid advice. Thank you for sharing this.
Really good advice, thank you for sharing! I will be working through the videos.
Thanks for sharing!
Thank you for sharing such videos, easy to undertsand
I tend to be better at telling than showing; this is a great example of turning a tell into a show. Many thanks!
thank you for making youtube awesome
Good advice - easy to understand!
Thanks Joshua! This advice helps my songwriting.
Thoughts of parenthood, a red convertible and travel were dumped as I faced a certain mid life crisis with weary eyes and weak knees.
Sir how to improve written style
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How could that sentence NOT be improved?
But did parenthood cause the delay or even cancellation of a midlife crises?
The improved versions jump to conclusions.
An outside observer might do that.
The first person narrator is gingerly exploring a range of possibilities. With uncertainty.
Parenthood supercedes the red corvette (a stand-in symbol for a mid-life crisis). So parenthood displaces, replaces or supplants said crisis.
Instead of buying a red corvette, I conceived a child at age 40, implies the child was 40 when it was conceived. Might it be better to say, Instead of buying a red corvette, at age 40 I conceived a child?
Everyone knows it is impossible to have a baby who would be middle-aged at birth. There is no such thing as an old baby; that oxymoron is self-contradictory. Babies by definition are young: newborn. So the implied meaning you describe does not exist. Not a problem.
@@stephenwalker2924 It depends on what genre you're writing. :-)
@@BetterThanNada1 The Curious Case of Benjamin Button?
@@stephenwalker2924 Precisely. :-)