@@Haguynitzan Little bit more feedback if you would like, though I am no expert myself (Just listened to it to see what sounds weird). Harmony sounds a little weird bar 8 with the g natural. The musical idea at bar 15 is nice, though I think it would be interesting if the E moved down along with the top.
@@Haguynitzan No it does not. 8 bars before there's peaceful music, but then a random minor 2nd blasts at the same dynamic as the other notes. It does *not* work well.
@@Haguynitzanyes but avoiding entirely random dissonances like minor 2nds suddenly coming out of nowhere, most people who listen are likely to wince, just take this criticism well and try not to make the same mistake again
This is charming. Are the silent bars at the end a homage to John Cage's 4 minutes 33 seconds? In which case you have perfectly captured the style and mood!
Some pretty nice harmonies, and some pretty weird moments, but ok? In my opinion I think it should have more dynamics, everything is just mp and that is quite disturbing...
have you heard of lore game on roblox? most of the songs in the game are like this one, a little uncanny- simple, but full . the tracks vary between moments, but this sounds like a much sweeter albeit nostalgic piece than the ones in the game. just thought i'd mention it, i like that games track- and i like this song :D, very nice to listen to, good job.
subscribe for more pieces. or dont, i dont really care
This used to be my discord pfp about a month ago and I also compose music
Trying my hardest not to fall asleep to this its so dreamlike
This kinda sounds like an arrangement of smth, sounds familiar. Would be cool as a 3 movement concerto.
Maybe inspired a bit by the start of rach 2, but just as an influence. Anyways thanks for the suggestion(:
@@Haguynitzan Little bit more feedback if you would like, though I am no expert myself (Just listened to it to see what sounds weird). Harmony sounds a little weird bar 8 with the g natural. The musical idea at bar 15 is nice, though I think it would be interesting if the E moved down along with the top.
Second idea is good, but I think the g natural actually works well
@@Haguynitzan No it does not. 8 bars before there's peaceful music, but then a random minor 2nd blasts at the same dynamic as the other notes. It does *not* work well.
0:21 ouch
lol i think the dissonance makes it sound better tho
@@Haguynitzan not really
@@donotapply6202each person is entitled to their own opinion
@@Haguynitzanyes but avoiding entirely random dissonances like minor 2nds suddenly coming out of nowhere, most people who listen are likely to wince, just take this criticism well and try not to make the same mistake again
@@HaguynitzanI think the dissonance makes it sound better
It sounds great!!
@@stickydrummer1.0 thanks(:
This is charming. Are the silent bars at the end a homage to John Cage's 4 minutes 33 seconds? In which case you have perfectly captured the style and mood!
Thanks(: no lmao I just didn’t know how to delete them…
@@Haguynitzan LOL!!!!!
Some pretty nice harmonies, and some pretty weird moments, but ok?
In my opinion I think it should have more dynamics, everything is just mp and that is quite disturbing...
Will add(:
Excellent stuff!
Glad you liked it!
have you heard of lore game on roblox? most of the songs in the game are like this one, a little uncanny- simple, but full . the tracks vary between moments, but this sounds like a much sweeter albeit nostalgic piece than the ones in the game.
just thought i'd mention it, i like that games track- and i like this song :D, very nice to listen to, good job.
i love lore game
@@Iumine me too ^_^