This was a bad video. Your character has no charisma and is degrading his potential readership. The editing is poorly done, especially the "animation" on the character himself. Also, did you just give away the first issue story? That seems like a mistake.
He seems like he'd make a good villian honestly. Or even an antagonistic antihero. Like the talk-of-town superhero that gets too big for his britches and steps on the little guys, and puts down the underdog protagonist. Seems like the personality that deserves to get his throne kicked out from under him by a /better/ hero.
Its like you said "I want to make deadpool, but looks like wolverine and has the powers of thor" And you did so, but forgot that, much of the charm of all the arrogance and self-boasting of these characters is HOLLOW, and meant to draw attention to the fact that they all LOATHE themselves. Deadpool wants to kill himself, Logan is a semi immortal who has seen too much of a dark world, and Thor blames himself for his fathers death and Asgarde's fall from grace. You seem to have the talent and artistic skill to make a decent graphic artist, BUT I would highly reccomend you abandon this character, or at least their arrogant persona, because what you've done here is a textbook Mary Sue. I get you were going for a comical narrative of "oh he's a badass but he's also an arrogant dude-bro" but like... people dont /like/ that character. Those are great character traits for a VILLIAN or a minor arc character who the protagonist finds themselves unwillingly paired with. The "brainless-manmore" character is like... well hated by the comic community and the public in general, so unless you were going for more of a Hellboy vibe where the character is well aware that everyone hates him and doesnt care.... eh... still dont because theres a reason Hellboy isnt that popular? Look up "Terrible Writing Advice" on youtube. he does good sarcastic bits on bad writing tropes and narrative habits. I'd pull your ads, save your money, develop your project more, and /THEN/ do a /DEMO/ group. If results are positive, rinse and repeat one more time with feedback, and try rolling out a pilot. but as this stands, this character is not worthy of funding Best of luck, and hope it gets better.
people keep saying comics are dead and i dont think this is proving them wrong
Andy Smith is a great artist.
Holy christ I've seen GoAnimate videos with smoother animations
This was a bad video. Your character has no charisma and is degrading his potential readership. The editing is poorly done, especially the "animation" on the character himself. Also, did you just give away the first issue story? That seems like a mistake.
Or at least, A CRINGY GOD
I can just smell the hubris from this character...
He seems like he'd make a good villian honestly. Or even an antagonistic antihero. Like the talk-of-town superhero that gets too big for his britches and steps on the little guys, and puts down the underdog protagonist. Seems like the personality that deserves to get his throne kicked out from under him by a /better/ hero.
Hubris is the enemy of arete, a key Greek value.
Wow that’s some good facial “”””animation””””
Ego is almost as big as Deadpool's
But I'll check it out
Its like you said "I want to make deadpool, but looks like wolverine and has the powers of thor"
And you did so, but forgot that, much of the charm of all the arrogance and self-boasting of these characters is HOLLOW, and meant to draw attention to the fact that they all LOATHE themselves. Deadpool wants to kill himself, Logan is a semi immortal who has seen too much of a dark world, and Thor blames himself for his fathers death and Asgarde's fall from grace.
You seem to have the talent and artistic skill to make a decent graphic artist, BUT I would highly reccomend you abandon this character, or at least their arrogant persona, because what you've done here is a textbook Mary Sue.
I get you were going for a comical narrative of "oh he's a badass but he's also an arrogant dude-bro" but like... people dont /like/ that character. Those are great character traits for a VILLIAN or a minor arc character who the protagonist finds themselves unwillingly paired with. The "brainless-manmore" character is like... well hated by the comic community and the public in general, so unless you were going for more of a Hellboy vibe where the character is well aware that everyone hates him and doesnt care.... eh... still dont because theres a reason Hellboy isnt that popular?
Look up "Terrible Writing Advice" on youtube. he does good sarcastic bits on bad writing tropes and narrative habits.
I'd pull your ads, save your money, develop your project more, and /THEN/ do a /DEMO/ group. If results are positive, rinse and repeat one more time with feedback, and try rolling out a pilot. but as this stands, this character is not worthy of funding
Best of luck, and hope it gets better.
Be happy you got andy working with you...because this comic is unoriginal and corny as shit...ron rethink your writing bro..its not gonna sell
Artist is talented, story writers are not.
Those muscles are good looking wouldn’t mind being with a demi god like yourself
cringe
If trump was a ripped super hero.
lol