Alternate Ending: Move in, read rules, go to bed and wake up alive next morning. The End. I can obey 2 simple rules that apparently my life depends on.
Nice one, keep them coming! I do have a small gripe about the ending, though. The part where she’s on the screen while being dragged under the furniture was a bit confusing. Regardless of my complaints, keep up the great work. You are doing amazing!
@@tanyacollins1709 That was my impression, she was pushed. I also felt that her soul was trapped inside the television screen, while her body is still here. The way the evil entity pushed her things into the closet....& did it gleefully.....made me think it was a trophy for him/it.
Good question ! The original idea was that as long as you respected the rules, the candles are lit. The moment you don't respect them, they blow out. This is why there are also candles next to the rules. While editing, I decided to remove the candle blow out because it felt off.
So was her mind stuck in the tv and her body pulled across the floor? It wasn't great tbh. Considering the actress only had to remember one word she could have put some more effort into saying it believably. I think the very last shot of the cupboard should have been full to the brim with suitcases to suggest this has happened many times before. There should also have been a tenser entrance of the person in the cloak, have the lights go off then flicker briefly and she's sees a silhouette of them, then the lights fully come back and it's no longer there, something like that. I look forward to seeing improvements on your next one.
Hey ! Wow !!! Thanks for your great input ! I just started making shortfilms! I appreciate any constructive feedback! I'll keep posting new content, and I hope you will enjoy it 😊
While I agree about the one word not being said very believably, or at least her facial expression.....the rest was great. I felt her soul was now trapped (hence the note that 'she would never escape' & her body was a trophy of sorts. Perhaps she was the only one who was foolish enough to break the rules.......so far.
I always stay in the apartment 70 and I just couldn't sleep well enough because I have nightmares and needs some sleep and I am doing research and it does freak me out about now my apartment is freak me out about the apartment
Hmmm, tbh, this was kinda lame. It was extremely predictable from the very start, no real build up, no real tension, it was just... bland. Also, what was the point of the cloaked figure's glowing face? Non of this was really making any impact on anything. Maybe for the future projects, try to work with some twists, original ideas (even though that is kinda hard in this saturated market). If this was your first project, it's a nice start, but maybe try to steer away from the classic 'boogieman' going forward? Because that is extremely tired.. I'm just stating my honest, non sugarcoated opinion, sorry if it sounds harsh, it's not meant to be... Best of luck on future projects!
While I agree that she broke ALL the rules too quick, why does the entity's face need a 'point'? Its just how it appears. I frankly LOVED the way it looked; the glowing smirking face was original, & very creepy. The fact that it moved so human-like, as opposed to shifting or gliding, somehow made it even creepier. Nothing wrong with using a classic Baddie....a boogeyman, a demon, all are great starts! I do wish the scene where her soul is trapped in the television had gone a little more dramatically,...but this was really good.
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Not a moment wasted. Move in, break all the rules, the end. Good work.
Good job directing and acting yanick connie did an awsome work to
Nice short movie! Keep them coming
SHE HAD ONE JOB to follow the rules and it was too much for her 🤦🏾♂️🤦🏾♂️🤦🏾♂️🤦🏾♂️
Yeah even in the beginning cause the apartment looked so spooky I was like nope lol
Not that brave either 😅😅😅😅😅
Great script 😊
Really good job. I hope you keep creating horror movies
Thank you so much ! I will regularly create content. I hope you'll enjoy it :D
Alternate Ending: Move in, read rules, go to bed and wake up alive next morning. The End. I can obey 2 simple rules that apparently my life depends on.
Smoking can kill you.
Spoooky
Nice one, keep them coming! I do have a small gripe about the ending, though. The part where she’s on the screen while being dragged under the furniture was a bit confusing.
Regardless of my complaints, keep up the great work. You are doing amazing!
Yeah like how did she fall? Was she pushed?🤔
@@tanyacollins1709 That was my impression, she was pushed. I also felt that her soul was trapped inside the television screen, while her body is still here. The way the evil entity pushed her things into the closet....& did it gleefully.....made me think it was a trophy for him/it.
Sure, she can read, but can she READ?
Doesn't seem like it 😂
Is it really so difficult to follow the rules ?
Wells rule number one was broken that explains why everyone's luggage and shoes are in there
Thank God 🙏 i live a straight edge life style 😂
Ererdt❤
Why was the candle lit up in an empty apartment?
Good question ! The original idea was that as long as you respected the rules, the candles are lit. The moment you don't respect them, they blow out. This is why there are also candles next to the rules. While editing, I decided to remove the candle blow out because it felt off.
So was her mind stuck in the tv and her body pulled across the floor? It wasn't great tbh. Considering the actress only had to remember one word she could have put some more effort into saying it believably. I think the very last shot of the cupboard should have been full to the brim with suitcases to suggest this has happened many times before. There should also have been a tenser entrance of the person in the cloak, have the lights go off then flicker briefly and she's sees a silhouette of them, then the lights fully come back and it's no longer there, something like that.
I look forward to seeing improvements on your next one.
Hey ! Wow !!! Thanks for your great input ! I just started making shortfilms! I appreciate any constructive feedback! I'll keep posting new content, and I hope you will enjoy it 😊
@@morellstudio You took that feedback like a pro, that's a great sign. Good on you, best of luck for the future.
While I agree about the one word not being said very believably, or at least her facial expression.....the rest was great. I felt her soul was now trapped (hence the note that 'she would never escape' & her body was a trophy of sorts. Perhaps she was the only one who was foolish enough to break the rules.......so far.
Bob was here...
hello bob
Closed circuit TV can be hell!
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I always stay in the apartment 70 and I just couldn't sleep well enough because I have nightmares and needs some sleep and I am doing research and it does freak me out about now my apartment is freak me out about the apartment
Hmmm, tbh, this was kinda lame. It was extremely predictable from the very start, no real build up, no real tension, it was just... bland. Also, what was the point of the cloaked figure's glowing face? Non of this was really making any impact on anything.
Maybe for the future projects, try to work with some twists, original ideas (even though that is kinda hard in this saturated market).
If this was your first project, it's a nice start, but maybe try to steer away from the classic 'boogieman' going forward? Because that is extremely tired..
I'm just stating my honest, non sugarcoated opinion, sorry if it sounds harsh, it's not meant to be... Best of luck on future projects!
While I agree that she broke ALL the rules too quick, why does the entity's face need a 'point'? Its just how it appears. I frankly LOVED the way it looked; the glowing smirking face was original, & very creepy. The fact that it moved so human-like, as opposed to shifting or gliding, somehow made it even creepier. Nothing wrong with using a classic Baddie....a boogeyman, a demon, all are great starts! I do wish the scene where her soul is trapped in the television had gone a little more dramatically,...but this was really good.
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