Alrighty here are the judge notes at last! Here we go!: JUDGE NOTES: -Great pacing and atmosphere throughout the video! -Your dialogue writing is on point! You reveal information very organically and you can tell each character has their own personality! Not only that but the emotional manipulation from Catherine is so real and so chilling! That whole scene and Zac’s very sad but real way of convincing himself that Catherine’s words are true is our favorite part of the round! -AMAZING job with the clothes changes on Lillie and Alex! -Music is perfect and on queue all the time! -Our major complaint is that there is an abuse of one character per shot throughout the majority of the round. Or, to phrase it differently, the composition skills could likely be improved on. There were a lot of medium and close ups used throughout the round. We would’ve liked to see different angles, like from the sky, or the ground, or more faraway shots. More profile shots as well! A profile shot with Alex and Zac, for example, would’ve helped better convey the tension and conflict between them. PERSONAL NOTES: -Great transition shots throughout the round! Personal faves are at 5:23-5:25 and showing it slowly become night time during Lillie and Zac’s conversation -Love the use of the TLM TV series as a way to add variety to Lillie’s expressions! -Wonderful job with the color corrections! All the characters look super ingrained into their environment! -3:01, 3:14, 3:42, 4:27, 6:31, 6:34, and 6:35 are all FANTASTIC manips! -One last critique: 3:53 is bit awkward. Besides the fact that the hand’s placement doesn’t match proper anatomy, it takes away from what we should be focusing on. Perhaps an alternative would’ve been to zoom in on the bracelet and blur out Zac with the background Overall, it’s still a fantastic entry! Your writing is honestly amazing and blew us away! It’s very hard to make abuse original and interesting to get invested in, but you did it in the best way possible, PLUS you gave it a chilling realistic touch that helped enriched it all the more. While your editing needs some polishing in a few areas, it’s still amazing and breathtaking to look at! Excellent job and we wish you luck!
Nice Job !!! :D Your whole story is crystal clear. Even with invented characters. (Not actualy Ariel, or Sinbad...). This is what is required of a crossover. Bravo ! I'm waiting for Round 2 !
This is late but I'm gonna comment regardless. You did an amazing job with your round and your video is super creative!! I love seeing how you write Zach and how he is going to progress throughout the rp! He is such an interesting character!
Oh boy. People named Cain never bring any good. *traumatic roleplaying memories* Very good round! Zac's one of my favourites so far! :D ALSO, HOORAY FOR MARY AND THE WITCH'S FLOWER! IT WAS SUCH A GOOD FILM!
You're so good at this, one day maybe you'll teach me... O.o I think you're the best at this thing, it looks really like they are all a the same place... They are some minor imperfections, but who cares? Good job and continue your great work!
Nearly forgot to comment on this and how AMAZING IT IS!! I'm such a sucker for score music and your manips and story were so good! I cant wait to see the next part! 💚💚💚
TheNight130 I would REALLYYYYYYY appreciate if you answered my question. That bracelet that they guy gave Catherine what movie is that from? I have looked through the movies in the description but I can’t find it. I remember seeing it as a kid and it’s driving me crazy so if you could respond that would be amazing thank you
Great story! Awww, poor Zach, he shouldn't be treated that way *cries* . Keep up the good work, I can't wait for the 2nd round. I was also wondering if I could ask you something. I was thinking of writing a Twilight fanfic on what happens after Breaking Dawn Part 2. I've seen you're 'I see fire' series and it's really good! I was thinking, would it be alright with you if I were to include you that series in my story? I'll give you credit, of course.
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Aw it’s sad how he thinks only Catherine loves him but this is really good!
Alrighty here are the judge notes at last! Here we go!:
JUDGE NOTES:
-Great pacing and atmosphere throughout the video!
-Your dialogue writing is on point! You reveal information very organically and you can tell each character has their own personality! Not only that but the emotional manipulation from Catherine is so real and so chilling! That whole scene and Zac’s very sad but real way of convincing himself that Catherine’s words are true is our favorite part of the round!
-AMAZING job with the clothes changes on Lillie and Alex!
-Music is perfect and on queue all the time!
-Our major complaint is that there is an abuse of one character per shot throughout the majority of the round. Or, to phrase it differently, the composition skills could likely be improved on. There were a lot of medium and close ups used throughout the round. We would’ve liked to see different angles, like from the sky, or the ground, or more faraway shots. More profile shots as well! A profile shot with Alex and Zac, for example, would’ve helped better convey the tension and conflict between them.
PERSONAL NOTES:
-Great transition shots throughout the round! Personal faves are at 5:23-5:25 and showing it slowly become night time during Lillie and Zac’s conversation
-Love the use of the TLM TV series as a way to add variety to Lillie’s expressions!
-Wonderful job with the color corrections! All the characters look super ingrained into their environment!
-3:01, 3:14, 3:42, 4:27, 6:31, 6:34, and 6:35 are all FANTASTIC manips!
-One last critique: 3:53 is bit awkward. Besides the fact that the hand’s placement doesn’t match proper anatomy, it takes away from what we should be focusing on. Perhaps an alternative would’ve been to zoom in on the bracelet and blur out Zac with the background
Overall, it’s still a fantastic entry! Your writing is honestly amazing and blew us away! It’s very hard to make abuse original and interesting to get invested in, but you did it in the best way possible, PLUS you gave it a chilling realistic touch that helped enriched it all the more. While your editing needs some polishing in a few areas, it’s still amazing and breathtaking to look at! Excellent job and we wish you luck!
Nice Job !!! :D
Your whole story is crystal clear. Even with invented characters. (Not actualy Ariel, or Sinbad...). This is what is required of a crossover. Bravo !
I'm waiting for Round 2 !
3:53 can't get my mind off of that hand 😂😂😂😂
Midnight Moonbeam Same . I was scrolling to see if anybody else noticed lol
Okay, the blending in this is everything
im so glad i finally watched a fresh new series! im so pumped at the story and look forward to more of it!
Your editing is the best ever!!❤❤❤
So cool, can't wait for part 2!!!
Geez your work is so amazing. Every single time it's captivating and done so well, unbelievable!
This is late but I'm gonna comment regardless. You did an amazing job with your round and your video is super creative!! I love seeing how you write Zach and how he is going to progress throughout the rp! He is such an interesting character!
Oh boy. People named Cain never bring any good. *traumatic roleplaying memories*
Very good round! Zac's one of my favourites so far! :D
ALSO, HOORAY FOR MARY AND THE WITCH'S FLOWER! IT WAS SUCH A GOOD FILM!
All these women around me keep giving me the creeps, the blond one keeps looking at me
Goddamn you are so freaking talented!!
I really hope Zac gets the love he deserves.
I enjoy this very much! CANT WAIT FOR MORE😆❤❤❤❤❤
You're so good at this, one day maybe you'll teach me... O.o I think you're the best at this thing, it looks really like they are all a the same place... They are some minor imperfections, but who cares? Good job and continue your great work!
Nearly forgot to comment on this and how AMAZING IT IS!! I'm such a sucker for score music and your manips and story were so good! I cant wait to see the next part! 💚💚💚
Really enjoying this! ⭐️ Very excellent work on your maskings, especially Sinbad’s! Can’t wait for the next round! 💕
Fantastic ! Can't wait for part 2 !
AAAAAAAH THIS IS SO GOOD!! ❤
It's actually really good, you're talented.
I love it! This idea is amazing!
At 5:59 *”Catherine? The Bitch?”* omfggg I laughed!
This series looks awesome! Can’t wait for more episodes!
You are making me ship Zac and Lillie
This is brilliant
Ooh cool 😍😍😍
I am so sorry mister professional for you being so professional to succeed in this waaayy to good 😍😍
I love it Good job
This is amazing!😱😱😱😱😱
Mejoraré mi inglés sólo para entender estas historias TuT
Por cierto, muy buena la edición ;u; me encanta 💖
When is the next episode coming out??? Love it!!❤❤
Looks great
Aaaaaahhh ♥♥♥ continua, por favor! Coloca casais LGBT também, ta muito perfeito!
All I can say is: W O W 🔥💕
Excellent!
So far so good. Keep it up. ;-)
Wow wow!!!😍❤
Wow haces un buen trabajo!!!!
Eres mejor en esto : D!!
Sweet! Is this a new series??? I can't wait to see what happens. :D
👏👏👏
Ariel saying b*tch is funny to me.
I like Lillie's story.
Apparently, she'd gone through some trauma involving sexual abuse, and blocked it out of her mind, along with everything else.
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wouaaaaaaaaaa! I want the round 2!!!!!!
I love more the story
Wow
TheNight130 I would REALLYYYYYYY appreciate if you answered my question. That bracelet that they guy gave Catherine what movie is that from? I have looked through the movies in the description but I can’t find it. I remember seeing it as a kid and it’s driving me crazy so if you could respond that would be amazing thank you
It's from The Little Mermaid series
TheNight130 OMG YOUR RIGHT THANK YOU
Wonderfull..
Muito legal
Ураааа! ❤️👏👏👏
Amazing
Great story! Awww, poor Zach, he shouldn't be treated that way *cries* . Keep up the good work, I can't wait for the 2nd round.
I was also wondering if I could ask you something. I was thinking of writing a Twilight fanfic on what happens after Breaking Dawn Part 2. I've seen you're 'I see fire' series and it's really good! I was thinking, would it be alright with you if I were to include you that series in my story? I'll give you credit, of course.
Thank you :D And sure!
ДЖОН СМИТ :3
This was TWO YEARS AGO?!
Hermès and Aphrodite? (Hercule)
😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
What is this a crossover of?
What movie is the guy in blue from?
Is the serie "Lost" no ? Version Disney and No Disney ? Sorry for my vocabulary language, I am french.
Are we supposed to watch something before this?
There's a link on the end card to watch the audition, that comes first
Croatoan? That's not good.