Great story I think his wife was a little unfair to him in the beginning but after the attack on him she realized how dangerous it was for him and everyone got what they wanted he got to dress up when he wanted
I admit that I enjoy these kinds of stories even though I had completed my transition a couple of decades ago. How ever I must be honest, I found the writing in this one to be over simplified, its sounds like it was written by a schoolchild. The sentences are too short and need some embellishment. The text to voice program used is also pretty bad. I could not stay engaged with the story and couldn't watch it until the end. You might want to redo this one.
I think her efforts in writing are for not. Everyone takes a chance putting them selves out there. I myself appreciate the effort as I couldn't come nowhere to hers.
@@auggies The really cool thing about social media is that anyone who has a something to say or a story to tell, can publish it online without having to get the approval of a publisher or editor. The downside of social media is that anyone can put their work up without approval of a publisher or editor. Sometimes the work one presents needs a little work before it is ready to publish. To me, this video feels like a rough draft, a story idea hastily scribbled in a notebook that needs to be developed and refined into the finished story. So, I am suggesting that the creator go back, do a couple of rewrites and have a couple of people read through it and give their feedback. It's hard to take criticism of a work in progress but, believe me, getting some creative feedback will not only help the writer create a better story, but will help the writer to become a better writer overall. I would suggest that the writer simply make the sentences more complex. Use the existing sentences as a guide to what's going on. The weakness of the voice over is the pace. The sentences are too basic and the gaps between sentences have the cadence of reading children's picture book that has short sentences, and then there is a pause between sentences as the page is turned. She may just need to use a different text to voice app to smooth out the cadence. The text to voice app may insert a pause in between line breaks. So instead of putting a line break between every sentence, the sentences should be merged into a single paragraph. When the dialogue switches from one character to the other, the line break will cause a pause between the speakers to separate them. Except when one person, interrupts the other mid-sentence. I write that as a single sentence so that the text to voice app will quickly insert the interruption into the dialogue. Anyway, I think that by picking up the cadence and getting rid of the gaps bewteen sentences would help to pick up the pace a bit. Just my thoughts.
Sounds like a sweet, harmonious relationship. And he is a good cook too!
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Great story I think his wife was a little unfair to him in the beginning but after the attack on him she realized how dangerous it was for him and everyone got what they wanted he got to dress up when he wanted
Happy couple😊
I wish you could get your nails done for 20 bucks . How come the men are always out of work?😮😮❤❤
try and do them yourself lol, the more you do something the better you get at doing it, as they say practice makes perfect lol
I admit that I enjoy these kinds of stories even though I had completed my transition a couple of decades ago. How ever I must be honest, I found the writing in this one to be over simplified, its sounds like it was written by a schoolchild. The sentences are too short and need some embellishment. The text to voice program used is also pretty bad. I could not stay engaged with the story and couldn't watch it until the end. You might want to redo this one.
I think her efforts in writing are for not. Everyone takes a chance putting them selves out there. I myself appreciate the effort as I couldn't come nowhere to hers.
I counted at least six sentences in a row that began with "she." Then a bunch of "he" in a row. Nice storyline but would like to rewrite it.
@@auggies The really cool thing about social media is that anyone who has a something to say or a story to tell, can publish it online without having to get the approval of a publisher or editor. The downside of social media is that anyone can put their work up without approval of a publisher or editor. Sometimes the work one presents needs a little work before it is ready to publish. To me, this video feels like a rough draft, a story idea hastily scribbled in a notebook that needs to be developed and refined into the finished story. So, I am suggesting that the creator go back, do a couple of rewrites and have a couple of people read through it and give their feedback. It's hard to take criticism of a work in progress but, believe me, getting some creative feedback will not only help the writer create a better story, but will help the writer to become a better writer overall.
I would suggest that the writer simply make the sentences more complex. Use the existing sentences as a guide to what's going on.
The weakness of the voice over is the pace. The sentences are too basic and the gaps between sentences have the cadence of reading children's picture book that has short sentences, and then there is a pause between sentences as the page is turned. She may just need to use a different text to voice app to smooth out the cadence. The text to voice app may insert a pause in between line breaks. So instead of putting a line break between every sentence, the sentences should be merged into a single paragraph. When the dialogue switches from one character to the other, the line break will cause a pause between the speakers to separate them. Except when one person, interrupts the other mid-sentence. I write that as a single sentence so that the text to voice app will quickly insert the interruption into the dialogue. Anyway, I think that by picking up the cadence and getting rid of the gaps bewteen sentences would help to pick up the pace a bit. Just my thoughts.
@@jimbrown8313 I hope the creator will listen to these suggestions and do a rewrite. I would like to see a second draft.